I'm a chick in business. I heartily enjoy reading/watching the Harry Potter series and reading fan-fiction.
If I were put into a House, honestly, it wouldn't be Gryffindor or Hufflepuff. ;)
Well, that's a little tidbit. Anyways, I'm off to seek this letter of mine...
This is one of my favorite fics because it's nice to read something about the Dursleys.
My favorite part of this installment was in the wee-beginning where there was much anticipation and the Dursleys were in hiding...that made me read chapter after chapter in one sitting.
It's nice how you captured the essence of Vernon and Petunia, and I also liked Dudley's inquisitive side.
The only thing is that I feel the last few chapters in particular have too much in them...Dudley's a wizard now? Well that's very interesting but wouldn't he have been proclaimed a Squib early on? We can see Dudley's change from the beginning to this point, but I feel that his changes are too big...does he really need an improvement every chapter? If so, will he be the Wizarding World's next hero in the next chapter?
I honestly don't mean to appear like I'm bashing you, really. This is a brilliant story and and certainly has me gripped to it...I just feel that the last few chapters have got me gripped because I have to see how the story ends; I don't feel same the spark of anticipation I felt when the Dursleys were in hiding.
This is a beautiful tale of Rita.
I admired the writing style, and especially the tone that just anticipates Rita's demise (or could be interpreted as her success of entrance into her field, regardless of what her reputation is).
I like how you incorporated her of having beetles as friends, as it symbolizes that in a sense, Rita is her own friend since her Animagus is a beetle.
I also like the bit of Bertha Jorkins and how it captures her "big mouth" that Sirius quoted her of having in GOF.
In several instances I found myself pitying Rita, with all her shortcomings and all. It's exceptionally good that you can elicit that response from readers...to make readers feel sorry for the lady who called Dumbledore a "dingbat".
The one aspect I didn't quite like was that Ramona Rosier was Thornton's former mistress. I anticipated it when you mentioned that she "returned from France", but I felt that for Henry to marry her would be too big of a scandal. I think it would have been sufficient enough of a scandal for Henry to wed Margaret's sister-in-law if he hoped to become closer to Margaret. I felt that with all the other scandals, this one nearly tipped it to the soap-story side. On the contrary, the scandal does elicit a larger impact and further contributes to depicting Rita as a more meddlesome woman.
Good job. Incidentally, I came back to this site to read a bit, and I forgot my previous account's information. This was the story that made me want to write back.
Author's Response: Hello!
Holy Movie Canon, Batman! This fic won the 2011 Quicksilver Quill Award for Best Chaptered Humor Story. Thanks so, so much!
Perhaps you can do something with Harry's reputation of being the "Chosen One".
In the sixth movie (perhaps 7th?), Harry haughtily says, "Maybe it's because I'm the Chosen One" or something like that...I think it was regarding the scene when he had a bunch of admirers (Romilda Vane and her cronies, perhaps).
Well, regardless, it was off-characterization from Harry in the book. Maybe you could take that idea, and have Harry suddenly wonder why he's saying that? If it makes sense, heh.
Anyways, good job.
Author's Response: That is actually not a bad idea... I will stick it in my head and see what comes of it. ;) I'm glad you liked the story. I have started the next chapter, so hopefully it won't be too long now. Thanks for reading and taking the time to review... I appreciate it!
I really liked this story. It was entertaining, descriptive, and the characterization was well done.
I liked how you captured the essence of the season, apart from many of the stories here, I could actually picture it without trying too hard.
I also appreciated the slightly ignorant and rambunctious disposition of Bagman.
Just one thing, Wood got accepted into Puddlemere United before Christmas. At the World Cup, Wood saw Harry there and told him of his success.
Hehe, I have no idea what possessed me to put Ludo freaking Bagman in the fic, but I needed a distraction for Oliver, and that's what came out. However, when I thought about it, he was the perfect offset for Oliver's seriousness.
What I wanted to do was paint a more realistic picture of the athletic world and how difficult it is to catch that big break. Sometimes, it really is about who you know in the business and getting the inside edge over the next guy who has the same relative skill level.
And about the thing with already having signed, I realised this after I already wrote the story. Having already finished it, I didn't think just that minor detail warranted an AU tag, since it's a relative minor detail. I do applaud you on your observation skills though, hehe.