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Real name: Lovisa
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Hi! I'm 20-year-old Lovisa from Sweden. I've been a Harry Potter fan since my dad read me the first book when I was eight. I used to make my own HP-related lyrics to songs and sing them to myself during lunch breaks, while longing for the night when I would get to listen to the next chapter.

My love for the books was renewed at eleven when I couldn't wait for OotP to be released in Swedish and got through it in English (although with a with a dictionary at hand). The translation of the books is really horrible and reading them in English made me realise even more how good they are. I haven't even read book 6 and 7 in Swedish. The HP books also have a huge part in my love for the English language.

I used to write other fiction when I was younger but other things got in the way and now I've just started writing fanfiction, hoping to get my imagination and inspiration back. Studying classical music, I have a lot of free time on my hands when I should be practising ...
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A Certain Slant of Light by Hatusu
Rated: Professors [Reviews - 61]

Summary: Past Featured Story

At age fifteen, Regulus Black became sole heir to the largest fortune in Wizarding London. At sixteen, his abnormal intelligence won him entry into the most notorious cult of Dark wizards on earth. At seventeen he made a mistake – one that he would never be able to take back – and his entire world came crashing down.

Enter London, 1979. The story of a boy who managed to defy Voldemort at the height of his regime. But what price did he have to pay?

Categories: Dark/Angsty Fics Genre: Warnings: Abuse, Character Death, Mental Disorders, Non-Consensual Sex, Strong Profanity, Substance Abuse, Violence

Word count: 65364 Chapters: 10 Completed: No
Published:
01/11/09 Updated: 11/15/09


Reviewer: LollyLovesick Signed
Date: 03/08/11 Title: Chapter 10: A Certain Slant of Light

I just finsihed reading this after a marathon of several hours. I really don't know what to say. This was completly breathtaking. This is exactly what I've always wanted to write. "Epic" just doesn't seem enough to describe this.

After my entire circle of friends "broke up" with me two weeks before graduation last year, this really hit home. Redemption, and how noone can despise you as much as yourself. OK, I'm rambling. But thank you for sharing this. I cried. Your way with words is so amazing and as a physics nerd the incorporation of it made it even more beautiful to me.

Seriously, this review is absolutely terrible, sorry about that.

Please, please, please, write another story!

 

Before I Forget by hestiajones
Rated: 6th-7th Years [Reviews - 9]

Summary: Sometimes, the visions are mere flickers “ hazy and muddled. Sometimes, their clarity shakes me out of the limbo. But I’m always sure it is him I see.

I’d have loved to tell you the whole story, but you see, I cannot remember much of it.



Thanks to Kara (Karaley Dargen) for her wonderful beta-ness. :) And Carole (Equinox Chick) for 'Warwick'. ;)

DISCLAIMER: Everyone/everything you recognise immediately belongs to J.K.Rowling. However, the first names of the Death Eaters (except the main characters) aren't canon. The pairing, of course, is mine.

Categories: Same-Sex Pairings Genre: Warnings: Abuse, Character Death, Mental Disorders, Sexual Situations, Strong Profanity, Substance Abuse, Violence

Word count: 6754 Chapters: 2 Completed: No
Published:
08/05/10 Updated: 04/27/11


Reviewer: LollyLovesick Signed
Date: 04/30/11 Title: Chapter 2: Vow

Wow. This is the sort of story that I'm always looking for and sometimes - in vain - try to write myself.

You seem to be able to describe anything perfectly: tenderness, longing, hopelessness, jealousy, heatedness and the cold yet intense relations between the different Death Eaters.

This goes straight into my favourites. I'll be impatiently waiting for the next chapter.

Author's Response: Hey there!

Thanks for all the compliments! :) I'm happy to know you liked it, and I hope to update it regularly.

~Natalie

 

Summary: It's the end of an era, a hero is dead.
But what to write on a grave?

Categories: Dark/Angsty Fics Genre: Warnings: Character Death

Word count: 1131 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
03/23/11 Updated: 03/26/11


Reviewer: LollyLovesick Signed
Date: 04/19/11 Title: Chapter 1: An Epitaph - Harry James Potter

Ok, so once I'd read the Snape Epitaph I just had to read this one as well.

It's a different tone, obviously, and I really like this one as well. Like in the other one, the humour is very, very good. It's just so Ron (who spoke of Merlin's saggy Y-fronts and the backsides of baboons) to express himself like that. And despite the fact that my fics are all high and mighty angst, the humour is probably what I love the most about HP.

I love the image of him sending up a spark in front of all the people (they've got to be many) who've come to Harry's funeral. It would've made me tear up if I didn't have to keep my coolness in front of my dorm mates ;)

Again, brilliant work. The only criticism I have this time is the constant reference to Hermione being so up-tight. Although, again, this is my own issues; I've been told so many times that I "am" Hermione, and I definitely don't want to be percieved as the strict one.

I'll be watching you as an author!

Author's Response: I'm glad you liked both of these fics enough to review both of them, thank you for that. I'll apologize in advance for the fact I'm probably going to give you a really, really, really long response again. Sorry. No, that's a lie. I'm enjoying responding to your reviews. I have to admit to you, that most of my other fics are much more dark and angsty than this series, like your fics too. These have been the only fics that I feel I have managed to successfully insert jokes into. I'm touched that I nearly made you cry, I admit I was sobbing when I wrote it (When asked about it by family, I was too sad to lie. I'm not allowed to mention HP to them anymore...) and I'm glad that a) I'm not the only sap in the world, and that b) my writing was good enough to make you feel that sad. I like your criticism, I didn't mean for Hermione to come across in this manner. l, like you, am often referred to as a 'Hermione' (although I'm pretty sure I'm more of a Luna), and it does get on my wick. Hermione isn't uptight, I just think that she has strong views on certain issues, the way that people are treated being one of them. Honestly think about it, if someone you knew and loved had an epitaph of 'the time he got so drunk he wet himself made me lol', would you be happy? I'd guess no, most people wouldn't be, that's where Hermione stands. I do know that Hermione is mentioned rather a lot in Ron's mind, but I can't imagine Ron not thinking about Hermione a lot. By this time, they are obviously married, with children, and presumably have a happy marriage (possibly resembling that of Arthur and Molly's). I can see in my mind's eye Hermione's voice actually becoming Ron's conscience. Throughout the books, she does tend to act as conscience for he and Harry. Because Ron loves Hermione so much it's her opinion that matters most to him, so whatever he writes must be as good, if not better than whatever Hermione would write. In essence, Hermione isn't uptight, or strict, she's just caring and has a working conscience. Much thanks for the review :)

 

Summary: Severus Snape is dead, but who is to write the epitaph for his tombstone, and what is there to say?

Categories: Dark/Angsty Fics Genre: Warnings: Character Death, Mild Profanity, Strong Profanity, Violence

Word count: 1238 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
04/12/11 Updated: 04/19/11


Reviewer: LollyLovesick Signed
Date: 04/19/11 Title: Chapter 1: An Epitaph - Severus Tobias Snape

Ooh, nice one!
At the beginning, with the memories of Snape's good deeds during Harry's years, I thought it was gonna be a bit too sentimental, therefore I was really glad you made Harry think that the Malfoys actually cared (in contrast to him). Harry DID hate Snape. Snape WAS very unlikeable (which is why I'm a bit skeptical to Hermione liking him... He was rather awful to her, wasn't he?). Also, in my mind, Snape wouldn't have been Draco's godfather. I sort of see Lucius as thinking of Snape as "beneath him". But that's just my interpretation, I don't think there's any canon evidence for that so just ignore me :)

Anyway, this carried a good sense of humour throughout, which made it feel very alive (and very "Harry"). My favourite line was probably: "Evans-Lover? No. Ew. That would just be too gross." That made me chuckle.

Sorry if I sound critical, I actually really, really liked this. And I think Narcissa's right; he would have like his Epitaph. Good work!

Author's Response: Firstly, let me thank you for the review - I hadn't realized it had already been posted, hence screamed like a little girl at a real review! I'm glad you picked up on the fact that a canonical Harry just can't be positive about Severus. Throughout the books he ignores evidence that Severus is a good guy, preferring to let his emotions rule his head. I'm glad for the criticism of Hermione's view of Severus, though I would ask you to prepare for my defense! In all of the books, Hermione is widely recognized as the only member of the trio to call the Potions Master 'Professor', in fact, she defends him on several occasions. I take this as Hermione's innate respect for people in positions of authority, and shows her (albeit limited) trust in the man. I can almost hear you screaming at me for my wording already 'But you said that Hermione liked Snape!'. Actually, I didn't say that. Harry said that. Harry is, after all, a teenage boy. And teenage boys tend to jump to conclusions. In my mind, he feels that to respect someone, you have to like them. After all - who does Harry dislike and respect? Nobody. Also, when looking through the books, I have noticed that Hermione is referred to as 'Miss Granger' by our esteemed Potions Master, a stark contrast to 'Potter' and 'Weasley'. Perhaps he had some underlying respect for her too? I have to admit though, I do agree with you that Lucius Malfoy would most likely think of Snape as beneath him. After all, he is a Pure-blood supremacist, and Snape is a half-blood. However, I choose to think that Snape may have been in high regards with Voldemort at the time of Draco's birth, and Lucius wished to lean on this reputation. I can't imagine Harry being straight-laced, so yes, it had to be a little bit funny. I'm glad I made you laugh, there's nothing better than knowing you can control people's emotions (Mua ha ha ha ha!). Don't sweat about it being critical - it's much more fun to have to defend myself than just to say 'Yay, thanks.'. I'm glad you agree with his Epitaph, it took me absolutely weeks to come up with the perfect words for him.

 

One Last Run by Gmariam
Rated: 6th-7th Years [Reviews - 7]

Summary: As his relationship with Lily Evans picks up, James is forced to confront an equally important bond with one of his best friends and the future they face together.

Categories: Same-Sex Pairings Genre: Warnings: Sexual Situations, Slash

Word count: 1761 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
04/17/11 Updated: 04/17/11


Reviewer: LollyLovesick Signed
Date: 04/18/11 Title: Chapter 1: One-Shot

I loved this, it was beautiful. I espacially loved the image of the winter forest with the frozennstreams and such,,, the words came alive and I could see it all very clearly. Beautiful work.

Author's Response: Thank you so much! I'm glad you had such a strong visual image, I usually do as well when I write and am just glad to know it's come across on screen. I'm glad you enjoyed this story. Thank you so much for reading it and for the lovely review - I really appreciate it! ~Gina :)

 

The Half-Blood Prince Rhapsody by Virgil
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 5]

Summary: This is a "Potter Parody" of the musical masterpiece, "Bohemian Rhapsody" - originally written and performed by Queen. It tells the story of Severus Snape's life, love, and ultimately, his demise.

Categories: Poetry Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 398 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
05/07/11 Updated: 05/13/11


Reviewer: LollyLovesick Signed
Date: 05/14/11 Title: Chapter 1: The Half-Blood Prince Rhapsody

This is genius. Really. I'll be singing SECTUMSEMPRA, sectumsepra, SECTUMSEMPRA, crucio, IMPERIO-OO-OO-OO the whole day.

Author's Response: Haha, thank you :) That's actually the first part that I wrote - I went back and did the verses afterward. ~Virgil

 

Flicker and Fail by xxbabewithbrainsxx
Rated: 6th-7th Years [Reviews - 11]

Summary:

I know I have a fickle heart,

And a bitterness

And a wandering eye

And a heaviness

In my head...

But don’t you remember?

Don’t you remember?

The reason you loved me before

Baby, please remember me once more...

Leanne Starr watches Katie Bell anxiously as she awakens at last, six months after she was cursed in Hogsmeade. She is waiting for that spark of recognition to flicker in Katie’s eyes. But that spark never appears, and Katie just doesn’t remember her.

This story was written for the wonderful and fabulous Alex/welshdevondragon, my alpha-beta, who also happens to be a wicked writer, super mod and also my first ever friend on MNFF :D

:D :D :D This story has been nominated for a 2012 Quicksilver Quill Award: Best Same-Sex Pairing. Thank you!



Categories: Femmeslash Genre: Warnings: Character Death, Sexual Situations, Strong Profanity, Substance Abuse, Violence

Word count: 16013 Chapters: 3 Completed: Yes
Published:
02/25/12 Updated: 04/10/12


Reviewer: LollyLovesick Signed
Date: 04/16/12 Title: Chapter 1: When Will I See You Again?

Soraya,

I had a five hour train journey yesterday so I was really glad to have something to do and of course I'll review this (but be warned, my reviews are in no way SPEW worthy, they're kind of crap actually :P)


I enjoyed this very much. It is definitely not the usual type of fic that I choose to read (not femmeslash per se but the style) so that I felt compelled to continue is a very very good thing (thank you, I needed new influences, getting so bored with my own taste).

What I think was especially well done is the way you reminded me of falling in love for the first time. The physical pain, and pleasure, it is to be near the one you love who doesn't have a clue and is just way too close... Reading this, I remembered all that (I sound like a really old lady) and needed to know more... That fact that Leanne is in love with a girl who is also her best friend complicates things even more and that's probably why I love slash- it's one thing to be in love with someone who doesn't know, but to see that person with the opposite sex knowing that she will NEVER reciprocate your feelings because that is just not how that person ticks.... that's devastating.

Okay, I'm going to stop rambling now and read the next chapters and hopefully I'll return with something that is more like a review and less like a stream of conciousness type of thing......

Lovisa

Author's Response: Hello, Lovisa! Firstly, thank you so, so much for reviewing this. You have saved me! :D

Your review is not crap! Really, it isn't. Even if it were a one-liner, I would be happy :) Seriously. And it's nice to know that, despite the style not being your thing (is it the non-linear-ness, by any chance?), you still seemed to like it and read on anyway. That makes me very happy.

I love the idea of best friends (regardless of gender -- for example, I'm a closet James/Sirius shipper, lol, but I also believe Teddy and Victoire grew up as best friends) falling in love, though it is sad when one friend is completely oblivious, or else brushes it off the way Katie did.

Thank you so mcuh for the review, Lovisa! I will definitely have to repay the favour sometime (probably after my exams, though). Ta lotsly!

~Soraya~

 
Reviewer: LollyLovesick Signed
Date: 05/03/12 Title: Chapter 3: The Reason You Loved Me Before

Okay, when reading the beginning of this chapter, I copy-pasted several passages that made me go "aww" but I had to stop about halfway-through because they were just too many. This was just beautiful, Soraya, really. I'm not sure what else I can say; I enjoyed this. It makes me want to write femmeslash. Well done. (And I almost became a bit a teary-eyed at the end :))

Author's Response: Yayy, thank you so much! It means so much to me that you liked it, and that you wanted to go "aww" so often, lol. I'm so glad you enjoyed reading it (and though I'm not entirely sure what to say to you being nearly teary, I shall take it as a compliment :)). Thank you for the lovely review. <3

~Soraya~

 
Reviewer: LollyLovesick Signed
Date: 04/18/12 Title: Chapter 2: A Fickle Heart

Okay, so I've just finished the second chapter and now I feel a bit confused. I do love the way you're taking this-- adding a bit more complications, parents with substance abuse and all that but at the same time I feel it's a bit sudden... No, sudden is not the right word because you do explain that Katie and Leanne haven't seen each other in a while.. but I feel it's perhaps a bit much? I know it's supposed to shock Leanne how Katie and her mother have changed but perhaps just the fact that Mary has a drug problem is enough?

Also, I do have a bit of an issue with Katie's mother doing heroin. Of course, it's hard to explain this thoroughly within the story because it's perhaps not Katie's favourite topic to discuss... But I think it would have been a bit more believable to have Mary do prescription drugs for anxiety of something like that. Those drugs are very addictive and to me they're a little more plausible for a 40 something (?) year old woman to come by and get addicted to at least if she's never done drugs before... I would probably have mentioned Mary having had a taste for alcohol or something in the past- but that's just me (terrible grammar there, sorry). On the other hand, Katie does address the fact that society (like me) doesn't really expect people like Mary to become heroin addicts.

Meh, I sound really negative, but I did enjoy this chapter a lot! Your descriptions for example are vivid and really puts the reader in the moment- I could picture Katie and her Mum very clearly and almost smell them. You do a fantastic job with that and it's also interesting to see how the Leanne/Katie dynamic has changed now that the "power balance" (don't know what else to call it in English) between them has changed. I'm just picky about drug stories because I've read and experienced way too much about it. Drugs are my "thing" (that sounds bad- I've never done any) and I've been obsessed/fascinated/disgusted with drugs and addiction since I was eleven. Basically, I know too much about it.

In conclusion; I'm really intrigued by how you have turned this story around- it was not at all what I was expecting. I look forward to the next chapter and your writing is really well done. The only objection I have is about the extent of the misery- I think it could have worked and perhaps have been a little more believable to moderate it a little. But again, this is a good story (it's definitely not crap as you said!)

Now I feel really mean, but again, I really enjoy this story! Don't hate me!

(Oh, and about what I wrote in my last review about "style"; what I meant was that I usually read verrrryyyy introspective dark Death Eater stuff- usually in first person. I want to read other stuff but the archives are so vast and I don't know where to begin so most of the time I end up reading those kinds of stories. Simply put, what I meant was that I was glad I started reading this. I should really learn to express myself better- I attribute that to the fact that it's been a while since I studied English and spoke it regularly.)

Author's Response: Thank youuuuuu for such a wonderful and detailed review. I very much appreciate it.

You're right in that it seems a bit sudden. I kind of did intend for it to be sudden, for the very reason you said, because Katie and Leanne haven't seen each other/don't know much about what's going on in the other's household anymore. I did do all the research I could, but, um, as you can imagine, all of it, pretty much, was from the internet (and that was difficult as it was). That sounds like an excuse, eeeep. What I mean is that if there are any inaccuracies, then it's entirely my fault and I really shouldn't have tried going into unknown territory. The thing is, though, the whole story's written from Leanne's POV, not Katie's, and therefore, the main focus isn't on Katie's family, but on Leanne as a character and what she goes through. I'm quite OCDish with changing POVs, especially when it's only once (I somehow don't think it would work that way :S) and I was actually thinking of doing a follow-up where the whole drugs thing is explored in a lot more depth, but I'm very much a binge-writer, unfortunately. I get sudden bursts of inspiration and then whole periods when I don't write anything >.< So I don't know, but I do want to cover it more thoroughly.

I like the idea of Mary starting on prescription drugs, actually. I understand it's a really sensitive topic and obviously one of interest to you -- I might take a second look at it and edit, because the last thing I want to do is offend anyone (and I hope I haven't :S).

On the upside, I am glad you're still enjoying it (I think so, anyway, lol). Description has never been my strong point -- dialogue is more my thing, I think -- so it's nice to know you thought I did a good job with that. And I completely understand what you mean by power balance. I think it's really interesting you pointed that out, actually, considering one of Alex's prompts was power, and another was money. I'm glad you picked up on that, because it was something I wanted to put across in the story :) Oh, and I know they are both rather angsty at this point, but... let's just say you might be pleasantly surprised if you read the third chapter.

I quite like first person, but I can't write it anymore :-/ It can be very well done, like in Thin Red Lines, for example (and Alex's other Lucy stuff). I know what you mean about the archives being so vast -- I feel like that myself sometimes, which is why I usually just review my flist and people I know are active on the boards/archives.

Thanks again for the in-depth review. You really got me thinking, Lovisa! And, FWIW, if I didn't know English wasn't your first language, I never would have guessed. You shouldn't be so apologetic!

~Soraya~

 

Shadows Deep by Equinox Chick
Rated: Professors [Reviews - 17]

Summary: Behind the walls of Hogwarts, deep in the shadows, lurk the secrets of the Founders. Of one mind, at first, their legacy came close to crashing down when two locked horns.

With Helga Hufflepuff determined to disband the Houses and admit anyone, Salazar knows he has to keep the other two on side. But Godric is distracted ... and soon Salazar is, too.

Disclaimer: I am not JK Rowling and I'm not as old as the Founders.

I am, however, Equinox Chick and this is my entry into the School of Mischief Challenge for the Great Hall.

Thank you Natatatatatatatattatatattatatat (hestiajones) for beta'ing this and to Karador (Karaley Dargen) for letting me moan when it collapsed on me.

Winner of the Best Chaptered SSP award in the 2012 QSQ's. Yippeeeee!

Categories: Historical Genre: Warnings: Sexual Situations, Slash

Word count: 12235 Chapters: 4 Completed: Yes
Published:
04/06/12 Updated: 04/16/12


Reviewer: LollyLovesick Signed
Date: 04/07/12 Title: Chapter 1: The Bait

Yay, medieval slash!;)

That was a great opening, you really draw the reader in from the first sentence. I honestly don't find anything wrong with this, you seem very comfortable with this style. I really love the dynamics you portrayed between the founders and like the previous reviewer, I hope to see more of that in the next chapter-s.

I wouldn't really change anything about it, though I might have given a bit more punch to Salazar's reaction to Godric's sudden engagement. If they had been lovers, I think Salazar would perhaps be a bit more shaken/upset by the news? It's very Slytherin to go right to the scheming though, so maybe I'm just not Slytherin enough.

I'm very much looking forward to the next chapter!

Author's Response: Thank you so much for the review; it made my day. I think my unease stems from the fact that I know very little about medieval Scotland and also I am having to write virtual OCs. But the story took hold - ha ha.

Regarding Salazar's reaction to the news. I hope it becomes clearer in the next chapters, but it's not so much an attachment he feels to Godric more that he knows how to manipulate him by using sex because Godric is more repressed, having this 'chivalry and parfait knight' image to live up to. His reaction is telling because although he flees the room and stumbles on the steps, he immediately starts plotting when he sees Aodhan.

Thank you very much, again. ~Carole~

 

A Pair of Thick, Woollen Socks by hestiajones
Rated: 3rd-5th Years [Reviews - 8]

Summary: "What do you see when you look in the Mirror?" Harry asked him.

This is hestiajones of Hufflepuff House writing for the Rosmerta's Mini-Gauntlet at TTB. These words are not my own - they are J.K.Rowling's property - but they are from my heart flown :3

Categories: General Fics Genre: Warnings: Character Death

Word count: 2688 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
05/13/12 Updated: 05/13/12


Reviewer: LollyLovesick Signed
Date: 05/14/12 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

I knew this was going to be great, because I loved all your drabbles for the mini Gauntlet, but I didn't expect to tear up AGAIN, when reading the ending- Ariana slurping her soup and Albus trying be a parent and plan a birthday and then she just wants stupid socks and arghh, it's just too sad. Too well done. Gah, this entire one-shot is fantastic, but that part is painful, in a good way. Well done.

Author's Response: Such high praise! :) Thanks for reading and reviewing! ~Natalie

 

The Last Time by welshdevondragon
Rated: 3rd-5th Years [Reviews - 2]

Summary:

And just as that celestial body worked its way across the sky, somehow she and Godric had moved closer together, without either really knowing how or why, just as neither were really sure who kissed who first.


Originally written for the HP Couples Mix'n'Match Activity at the SBBC with the pairing Lancelot/Guinevere.

Categories: Historical Genre: Warnings: Sexual Situations

Word count: 1033 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
05/13/12 Updated: 05/13/12


Reviewer: LollyLovesick Signed
Date: 05/14/12 Title: Chapter 1: One-Shot

Gah! I'd almost finished writing a review for this and then I managed to push the back button. I'll try to remember most of what I'd written.

Wow, Alex, that was just beautiful. The only only criticism I have is that I wish it was longer, but on the other hand, that might be a compliment. I actually think the length is one of this story's main strengths. You manage to say so much in so few words, which I think is the most admirable ability in a writer. And the point a story about two lover's last time together would be kind of lost if it was a 10k-word-monster-of-a-fic.

The style suits you so well. The lyrical prose feels almost like poetry. I really love how you connect every moment to something physical. Don't know if that makes any sense but what I'm referring to is, for example; "She’d said, “Your wife,” as she helped pull his shirt over his head." You use that kind of writing a lost and it's beautiful.

I don't know what more to say.


I absolutely LOVE this;

"The darkness meant she was more aware of the sound of Godric’s deep, heavy breathing, more aware of his earthy warm scent. So different to Salazar, with whom she sometimes felt the need to place her hand on his chest to check he was still alive, his breathing was that quiet, and he always smelt of the exotic oils he had shipped all the way from Arabia."

It sets everything up perfectly and it's use so evocative. I can feel, just like Helga does, how different the two of them are.

This is, in my opinion, one of the best pieces of writing of yours I've read.

Just beautiful.

 

The Girl with Dreams by Equinox Chick
Rated: 6th-7th Years [Reviews - 7]

Summary: She was a girl with dreams in her head. Dreams that people said would come to nothing.

He was a boy with brains to spare. But quiet so no one knew.

Orla Quirke and Stewart Ackerley. Two Ravenclaws with nothing in common except their house.

In their fourth year, everything changed.

This is a birthday present for the wonderful, lovely, amazing Alex (welshdevondragon) who has been a superb friend over the past year (and I hope for many more).

Disclaimer: I am not JK Rowling, but my Spag Bol is sublime.


(Note about the warnings. They are a precaution only.)

Categories: Other Pairing Genre: Warnings: Character Death, Non-Consensual Sex, Sexual Situations

Word count: 1989 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
06/10/12 Updated: 06/10/12


Reviewer: LollyLovesick Signed
Date: 06/10/12 Title: Chapter 1: Orla and Stewart

Oh. My. Gooooodddd.

That was just fantastic. Tiny moments of canon fleshed out to become that... Wow.

Your use of language and symbolism in this was just breathtaking. Thestrals as a symbol for grief/freedom, a thestral's wings/wishing to grow your own/feelings wingclipped, being a Ravenclaw/flying higher than any eagle... I could go on and on. Just beautiful.

I also loved the repetion of "Orla and Stewart/Stewart and Orla", it made this entire piece feel almost like poem with its cyclical structure.

But I didn't want him to die! That was evil! I mean, I guess they were doomed but still. Did Orla ever recover? Please, tell me she did. Pleeease?

I'm now going to read it again.

Author's Response: Thank you! You, know when I first started writing this, I had a very definite rhythm in my head which kept drumming at me and it was going to be more of a prose poem rather than a story. But as the plot developed (what little of the plot there is) I had to scarifice certain lines because it became too 'narrated' and not a 'read' story. (not sure this makes sense.) I had two or three lines, for instance, referring to 'that bitch Bellatrix' , but it was too rhythmic - sort of - ha ha.

Anyway, that's a long winded reply. OOOH, does Orla recover? I don't know. I think she will because she kept her dreams around her for too long and one day they'll find their wings again.

Yeah, sorry about Stewart. I admit when I wrote the last section of lines I actually came over a bit tearfil. I hate killing people and unhappy endings, but Alex is DeathLex - *sigh*

Thanks again ~Carole~

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The Weird Sisters - B-Sides and Rarities, Vol. 2 by ToBeOrNotToBeAGryffindor 1st-2nd Years
The Weird Sisters are back for an encore. Ten more tracks from your MNFF authors.
Severus's Prince by DestinyMoonStar Professors
What does Severus Snape do when a one night stand turns into a baby boy? ...
Other Lives and Dimensions and Finally a Love Story by MoRoCcAnAnDpRoUd Professors
The year is 1977, and the Wizarding World is in turmoil, but it doesn't really...
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Oread, Walking by Seren
Cedric was just as odd as Hermione, because he liked to walk. Cedric/Hermione
The Effect of Gamma Rays on Two Terrifically Trapped Gryffindors. by Fenixaze 3rd-5th Years
From the "Stuck where for the weekend?" Challenge on Portkey.org ... Our two...
Drunk on Him by armagod679 Professors
For me, he was an obsession, a burning obsession, one that I could never let...
A Broken Hallelujah by epiphany212 Professors
You have always loved the chase. The pursuit of Quaffles and dragons have carried...
In the Hufflepuff Way by 1000timesingoldenink 3rd-5th Years
Did anybody really appreciate Hannah's mum?Because Mrs. Abbott was a heroine...
And Now... by Oregonian 3rd-5th Years
Moments after the death of Voldemort, Harry gazes at the corpse of the Dark...
The Weird Sisters - B-Sides and Rarities, Vol. 1 by minnabird 1st-2nd Years
Welcome back to another rousing round of rambunctious rock!However, a new act...
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