"Love is unexplainable. There are no words for it. You can’t express why you feel so. It just happens," James said. "“Don’t you think that if I had the choice I would have chosen to love someone who didn’t hate me in return?”
“No,” Sirius said simply.
“You’re right.” James said, sighing. “I’m so screwed up, Padfoot.”
The drama-filled romantic tale of Lily and James's mysterious but unfortunate tale. It started with love and ended with death. It makes you wonder about the things they tried to live for. Pre-HBP
Everythings good. Cept' Lily.....hit Snape. Totally out of character.
This is just....wow. Its so...bland? I'm not sure what the right word is. Its just so un-original. They always have James and Lily get together. Then break up. Then get back together. And the wording in the dialogue is.....a bit more formal than it should(I mean that no one expect someone to talk like that in casual everyday life)(Unless of course said person is a snob.) be. But still correct. Good spelling & Grammar.
Within the Marauder band of Merry Men, Sirius is the dashing Will Scarlet. Seventh year, his goal is not to rob the rich, but to help poor Robin woo Maid Lily, avoid sermons from Friar Moony, aid a rat in need, and win the love of a fair lady.
Nominated for a Quicksilver Quill for Best Romance- Non Canon.
*Chapter 30 is 'To Be Loved'*
This is going to be good. Its blatantly obvious.
Author's Response: Thank you! I love your pen name. You're not an ex-rapper from the 80's, are you? :D
Good grammar and spelling. Your writing is good,if a bit difficult for me to read.
Author's Response: Thank you! Difficult to read as in small print on the site?
Author's Response: Thank you so much for taking the time to review! When a story's complete, it's easy to just read straight through, so I appreciate your comments . . . especially when you like the story, hehheh.
I support James/Lily.....and Snape/Bottomless pit of loneliness.
Author's Response: Not a Snape fan? I won't push my Snape/OC fic, then. :D
*Shudders* She was a witch for a reason.
Author's Response: And if she hadn't been one Walburga would still have been "witchy". Spelled with a b. :P
Good writing,Grammar,and spelling.
Author's Response: Thanks! My first fan fic (on another site with no mods, heh) has dialogue formatting errors I still facepalm over. One day I might even edit them. :D
Ugh,I hate alchohol.
Author's Response: I like brandy in fruitcake, wine in pasta sauce, etc, etc, but drowing sorrows with the stuff doesn't seem a good idea to me, either.
Good writing! I love how you add humor in moments that are a bit intense. Nothing wrong with your spelling ,grammar,etc.
Author's Response: Thank you! Life is like that, humor lightening the mood, whether it's heavy or intense. Sometimes it's out of place, like at funerals, church, or after you've been pulled over for speeding, but mostly it's a good thing. :)
Good story,God-awful ending.
Author's Response: Too romantic, ending on Valentine's Day? I'm glad you enjoyed the story, but you might want to skip the all-romance one shot A Charmed Life and go straight to the Romance/Angst one shot about Sirius' escape from Azkaban, Far Away for Far too Long . (Story links inserted into titles, just in case. ;)
Summary: Lily Evans is confident yet unsure of her future. Who needs a boyfriend anyway when you've got awesome friends? But when James Potter finds a way into her mind and heart, slowly but surely, Lily finds what she missed in life. Love, loathing, friendships, and hardships are all components of this epic tale.
This looks like it might be good. Good writing,Spelling,and grammar!
When Emily put her dress on,I beleive the colour you were thinking about is Navy Blue
Good story,writing,spelling,and grammar!
Good writing adn stuff. Honestly,I think you did a good job. By most other authors this would've been a boring chapter. You made it........bearable.
Good writing,spelling,and grammar.
Hehe,one akward car ride,eh?
Good chapter! But...er.....setting Lily up with her cousin? Seriously,can you say fucked up?
Good writing,Story,spelling,and grammar.