Lily. Underage. Amateur everything.
I think, slowly, I'm remembering how to write.
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If you're looking for a read, start here ;) Of my fics, Relativity, Self-Entitlement (And Perfection), Hungry Shadows, and Cartoon Heart are 2013 QSQ nominees, and the Runaway Kite, Ancora Perfetto Imperfetto, The Taste of You, and Droobles Blowing Gum are 2012 QSQ nominees.
Enjoy, and you're always welcome to drop me a line...
Summary: As Sirius walks amidst the rubble of Lily and Jamesís house that fateful night, he reflects on their relationship over the years. Siriusís POV.
This was so sad...
Summary: "Some mistakes are too much fun to make just once."
After Lily Evans, Head Girl of Hogwarts, starts a food-fight with James Potter, Head Boy of Hogwarts, they are both given detention for the rest of the year, and are assigned a 'detention journal', which the staff say will help to settle their 'overwhelming and disturbing differences'. We have come across Lily's journal; her take on why the whole affair ever started, her intriguing relationship with one ‘supreme git of the galaxy’, the extents to which she will go for revenge and where it will lead her...
"And if for some unknown reason you come across this, Potter, and the paragraph above does not manage to penetrate your unusually thick head and convince you of my stupendous dislike of you, I hope the following sentence helps: I HATE YOU!"
You deserve NO REVIEWS.
Unless you update soon.
Author's Response: I have updated! I'm sorry it took so long :/
Summary: And there he was. The one boy she could not stand. His messy, jet black hair was ruffled and untidy and his glasses were sitting crooked on his nose. James Potter was here. With Lily. And all her Muggle friends. At a Muggle ski resort. Could things possibly be worse? Oh yeah, Sirius Black is there, too.
Reviews are definitely not my thing, which is why I've only done one other one, but I just had to comment on this story. The relationship between James and Lily is progressing really well. Please try to update soon. :) Generally my rule for fics is 'don't read them unless they're finished so you don't get stuck at a cliffie' but I just had to read this one since I've heard it's really good. ^_^
Author's Response: I'm really relieved that you think the L/J relationship is progressing well because I was actually super worried that this chapter was a little too rushed... So yay :D Thank you so much for deciding to review! It really does mean a lot! And you've heard this story is good? Aw, that's so cool! Thanks for such a lovely review and I will try to get the next chapter written as quickly as I can!!
Summary: Rita Skeeter is an infamous journalist whose "savage quill has punctured many inflated reputations." But was she always like the annoying pest who Harry knows? What about her story? How did she become the Rita Skeeter we all love to hate?
This is hestiajones of Hufflepuff House writing for the Untold Story Challenge. It won the challenge, and has been nominated recently for a QSQ in Best General category. :D
Thanks to Fresca (Colores) for betaing! You really helped me give the story a coherent whole. And to Carole (Equinox Chick) too, for the “revenge against the ex” tip. :D
DISCLAIMER: All characters and premises belong to J.K.Rowling. However, the Corner brothers, Simon Rosier and the Thorntons are mine. ;)
Did you know that this was the very first fic I EVER read (fanfic, haha). And I'm SOO glad I did because it like inspired me to make an account and write.
I heart this. I think think think it might be my favourite of yours (maybe tied with Lacuna Mentis.) I love your characterisation of Rita, and all your OCs are really great.
I liked the way that you described how Rita became Rita--she's one of those characters that Jo just says "okay, she's this way, deal," but I loved your back story. I hated Margaret :D
This was just a great read :) I was looking through my reviews, and then realised I hadn't reviewed this story, and then I went to go read it again, and it was just as fabulous as I remembered :) This is going to sound really melodramatic but this story is really probably what inspired me to make an account here.
Author's Response: Hello! :)
Scorpius had never looked forward to anything the way he looked forward to leaving Hogwarts with Rose. He planned a holiday with no friends, no family, and nothing to do but be together—until a tampered Portkey changed their destination.
After reading Our Little Secret, I was intrigued to discover what you had planned in Lost.
And I have to say, that I was impressed. The writing was strong as well as the dialogue (that's the one I have problems with), and the only problems that I had with the story were little nit-picky things of mine. I'm looking forward to continuing this story and am really happy I started this with the first ten chapters already finished. :)
Author's Response: I'm happy you're reading, period! ^_^ Chapter eleven took a horribly long time to write, and might still get tweaked a bit here and there, but it's finally posted. If you ever want to share nit-picky things privately, my email's on my author page, and I'd love to hear from you. Thank you for being so encouraging!
Just as good as always, even though the wait was making me wonder if you would ever continue! I can't wait to figure out what's going to happen next!
I'll do my best to only make the wait a couple of weeks, not a month, but I'll always continue. I've never left a story incomplete and I never will. Readers (and the characters!) deserve better.
Summary: 2010 QSQ Awards Winner for Best Alternate Universe
Sometimes, late at night, when she lies safely in her dormitory bed, she allows herself to think not of Dean, or her friends, or her brothers, or her schoolwork, or the war that's slowly destroying the wizarding world. Instead she thinks of Harry and if things could have been different.
In five different worlds that could have been but weren't, there are five different ways Harry and Ginny could be Harry and Ginny. Circumstances change, but they always find each other in the end. *one-shot*
This made me cry...
Author's Response: Thank you, I think!
Summary: Iris Dursley is your average eleven-year old. Except her father won't tell her anything about his childhood. Except for the fact that she turned out the lights without touching them.
One day, her father sees a name on her class list, and the whole story comes out. What will happen when Iris enters the Wizarding World?
Disclaimer: I am about as likely to own Harry Potter in the next century as I am likely to own a house on Pluto. (in other words, not remotely likely.)
Omg! You should totally continue this? Well you got me...
Author's Response: I'm having some trouble with the plot from here-on-out... But I do really want to continue, and I'm glad you like it.
Summary: What if the characters in the Harry Potter films were portrayed‚Ä”not by actors‚Ä”but by the book versions of themselves, as created by Rowling? How might things unfold on that set? What would the characters think of the changes made from the stories they‚Äôd already lived out‚Ä¶ to the ones written for the script?
This fic is a series of one-shots, posted as chapters, each from the perspective of a different character who is dealing with the changes occurring between the book and the script.
Holy Movie Canon, Batman! This fic won the 2011 Quicksilver Quill Award for Best Chaptered Humor Story. Thanks so, so much!
Lori. Put down everything else you are doing and write another chapter of this right now. As one of the judges for Humour, I think I have the right to say that THIS. IS. AMAZING. And maybe go and gush about how awesome it is everywhere. And it has been almost a YEAR since you updated. That is too long.
Author's Response: LOL! Your review has made my morning. Yay--thank you so much, and that much MORE since you were on the judging panel. I give you my word that I have been working on the next chapter of this, so it truly shouldn't be too much longer. I was thrilled to see this story had won, so thank you again SO much. I'm so glad you all enjoyed it. We all need a way to work through our movie frustrations, don't we? ;)
Summary: The sequel to ‚ÄúTrickster‚ÄĚ: The Marauders return to Hogwarts for their seventh and final year. Lily and James juggle more responsibility than ever, and James learns that convincing Lily to go on an actual date with him is harder than he would have imagined. Remus frets about post-Hogwarts life while Peter drifts even further from his friends. But when Sirius discovers a group of fourth-years who are bound and determined to steal the Marauders‚Äô title of Greatest Hogwarts Troublemakers he wages war, rallying his friends so they can maintain their legacy. Meanwhile, outside the castle grounds, Voldemort is gathering supporters in unending preparation for a much darker battle‚Ä¶
and this is the wonder that's keeping the stars apart
i carry your heart(i carry it in my heart)
-E. E. Cummings
September 2012: HEY guess what I couldn't wait, and the third installment, "World Enough," is UP NOW under James/Lily. Or just under my name. Or at this link: http://fanfiction.mugglenet.com/viewstory.php?sid=92131. Yay! :D
Aww!! Finally?? I love this story so much and the only reason I haven't reviewed is because I wanted to get to the next chapter faster. This was great! Please try to post quickly!
I can't believe I haven't reviewed this yet, but I haven't. I've been reading it for a really long time (I clicked on it when I saw your name, Willow and Tara forever, lol, Buffy rules!) and enjoying every moment of it! So Sirius might have a crush on Annabelle? Errg, I don't like Annabelle, she annoys me (she annoys all the marauders, come to think of it) but I think if they did have a relationship it would probably work really well as long as she changed a little and things. Anyway, I'll try to keep reviewing (as long as you try to keep updating!) I really, really love this story!
Summary: The Boy Who Lived discovers that he may not have escaped the Final Battle unscathed after all.
Hey Gina ,
This story was so many things. You could say that it was heartbreaking, which it was, or beautiful, which is also was. I hate the idea of this, but at the same time, it‚Äôs brilliant and I love it. It‚Äôs absolutely excruciating to think of Harry dying this way and I think Ginny was a perfect perspective to tell it from.
At the beginning of the story I thought it was told from Ron‚Äôs POV, because even though Ginny was his wife, I think Ron knew him better than Ginny did at that point in time, since Ron really knew what he was feeling and going through. I thought the second person tense was done really well; it really got you into Ginny‚Äôs mind, and I think you really needed to have that in order to really understand what Ginny was going through.
I also thought the present tense was done well. I kind of think that if you had told it in past tense, it would have seemed like Ginny was reflecting on what happened and feeling kind of hollow afterwards, if you could say that. But since it was told in present tense, you saw everything the moment it was happening, which made it a lot more heartbreaking.
I thought this was just a really interesting outlook on Harry‚Ä”you rarely see him weak, or even sick at all, and even though I know this wasn‚Äôt a character study, it almost felt like one (and I mean that as a highest compliment!) In a story such as this, you really have to nail the characterisation, and you did so. I don‚Äôt think it‚Äôs a coincidence that this is related to Alzheimer‚Äôs disease either, because I always feel like that happens to the person you would least expect it to, and that definitely occurred with Harry.
I did think it was a little odd that you made up a spell, but not bad. A lot of the time when people make up spells (especially that lovely contraceptive charm) they have no good reason for it other than the fact that it exists, and I liked that Ginny didn‚Äôt believe in it at first.
I loved this line: Your father watches over the family, trying to stay strong, but it is hard; you have already lost so much, and now you are all losing Harry. I did think it was interesting that Arthur was really the one watching over them. He was a wonderful man, but he wasn‚Äôt the one to stay as strong as he could; you definitely saw Arthur‚Äôs weak spots.
The ending of this was satisfying in a way, but in an awful way. I feel a little happy for Harry that he got put out of his misery (imagine going through that!) but also terrified for Ginny. I loved the last few words: he is gone‚Ä”shattered. And so are you. I hate to think what Ginny would go through after Harry‚Äôs death.
Anyway, this was just a really fulfilling story, and I‚Äôm glad I clicked on it while perusing the archives, because it was a wonderful, if heartbreaking, read.
Author's Response: Lily - a very belated thank you for the amazing, lovely, wonderful review! I'm so glad you enjoyed the story! And I totally get the "I hated the idea of it/loved it" feeling because I remember feeling sort of the same way when I was done with it. Kind of like - what have I done? What did I just write?? But it just flew from my fingers, I remember that. I'm glad the spell didn't put you off too much. I happen to like inventing cool spells, lol. And there needed to be a pretty powerful spell for this to happen. The present tense was definitely intended to make it more immediate, more intense - the second person surprised me, though. And again, I'm glad it didn't put you off too much. Yes, the end is heartbreaking. Think how close it could have been to happening - no Harry! No James, Albus, and Lily! Eep! I don't tend to explore major AU much, but this was one I couldn't resist. Thanks again for reviewing, it made my day when I read it (and I've read it so many times since!) ~Gina :)
Summary: It's three in the morning and one nightmare just melts into another.
This was really good. But I have a bunch of nitpickers.
A: They use the word 'Nightmare' a TON!!!!
B: Neville said his bunny slippers were stupid, but then he said he was grateful for them.
C: Seamus's and Neville's injuries have to have happened over time. They didn't get them all in the first three months.
But I still liked the story!! Nice idea!
Author's Response: Thank you for writing in. A: It's the title. It was just on my mind. B: Sure, they're dumb, but stupid things can be comforting. C: Some injuries heal, they get new ones. Thanks again! I'm glad you liked it. Julie
Nominated for Best Poem in the 2011 Quicksilver Quill Awards
This was really awesome. I'm not surprised it won first place. It (kind of lamely) inspired me. To do something heroic.
What that's gonna be, I don't know yet.
Author's Response: Right on, sister/brother. =)
Actually it's kind of fantastic to hear I inspire that kind of urge in someone - although please don't get hurt. Or arrested. Because then I'd have that on my conscience. ;)
Summary: Lily Evans believes in one thing more than she has ever believed in anything before: she will fight against Voldemort if it's the last thing she ever does. But when she goes into her sixth year at Hogwarts, she finds herself abandoned by her friends for this belief. Lily begins to believe she'll be on her own forever. Then James Potter comes into the picture.
James is still the odd, rather arrogant boy he was a year ago, but this is changing. Before Lily realizes it, she's gotten caught up in Marauder madness. But James is still James, and Lily's still Lily, and she can't give up old hatred easily. One day, she's going to get angry. One day, it's all going to end. Again.
I'm a little confused, but please continue so I'm not.
Author's Response: Yeah, the first chapter's pretty weird. It's just an odd way to introduce everything that's going to happen later.
Summary: Gideon and Fabian Prewett struggle to balance their lives and the demands of the Order of the Phoenix, and life throws everything off kilter in this equation.
First off, I don't think I've ever seen a story like this before. Not like I've been on MNFF for too long, but I have read a lot of stories and this one is definitely original, at least so far. Not saying there's nothing else on Gideon and Fabian, but this is a brand new plot at least in the first chapter. I congratulate you for being original and writing such a juicy and enjoyable chapter for me to review on.
However, there are many things about this chapter that could have been better. You tend to focus on narrative instead of dialogue, and it makes it a little hard to follow. For example, when Gideon is talking to Aunt Muriel, she says,
"She’s your whore, boy,” said the old lady, not deterred in the least by being singled out, “and you don’t even see it. No, you love her, don’t you?”
This could have been very well brought into a bantering segment between Muriel and Gideon. However instead of inciting dialogue you went into great detail about Muriel being the matriarch of the family. You also interrupt dialogue with phrases. For example:
“She slid on something, tripped, I think, and hit the concrete hard when we got back to the shed,” said Arthur, nodding. He handed her a glass of water. “She just fell.”
You make the dialogue sound choppy and indirect by interrupting. You could easily have waited to say that Arthur handed Emmeline a glass of water.
Don't get me wrong, I think that this story has great potential. I also, however, believe that there is a lot to be done to improve it. I look forward to seeing the next chapter!
Author's Response: Lily, The two points that you point out here have me taking different views. Not to be defensive, no, but to explain my process. Okay, if I had pointed out that Aunt Muriel was indeed the matriarch and was entitled to a raving opinion, whatís the point of standing there bickering with her when itís simply going to fall to deaf ears? Why bicker back and forth like teenagers to egg her on when their grown? As a negotiator, Gideon would know how to read people, yes? So why have pointless dialogue just to have it? That is why I paired that as narration. And the reaction from Arthur would have been choppy and disconnected, I think, because he was surprised that she had fallen and lost the child. Especially for a man who bred child after child with success, seeing a woman just loose one would knock him off balance. Donít you think? People, and characters, can do actions whilst they speak. The last part was indeed supposed to come off as incoherent; I hope that makes sense now. Iím floored that you think this is an original piece and I hope you stay with it. Thanks for the review. Sorry for the slow response. -Jenn
Summary: This is a story about (mostly) the Marauders and their 5th-7th years at Hogwarts. Snape dwells on his withering friendship with Lily, James decides that he is in love, and Sirius gets involved with a new girl, and for the first time finds himself with more on his mind than mischief-making with his friends and Quidditch. And that's only the beginning.
Reviews are encouraged, but be generous as this is my first Fan-fic on Mugglenet.
Yay! A Marauder Story! These are definitely my favorites. Please tell me it will be a nice long one. This chapter was a little lacking in plot, but it was just a prologue, and it gave me a nice little cliffie at the end to enjoy. I love cliffies. They can make my least favorite characters die in my imagination. Okay, well, I've gone on far too long, so please continue and tell me it will be a nice long story just to make me happy! Oh, yeah, I forgot in the midst of all my rambling: I really did enjoy the chapter.
Okay, have a nice day and all. Don't forget to update!
Author's Response: AHH! I'm so excited for my first review on this story, and a nice one at that! Yes, I think it will be a long story. I already have a few chapters written, and lots of ideas for more! Thank you, thank you, thank you for the wonderful review!!
If you only knew
I'm hanging by a thread,
The web I spin for you.
If you only knew
I'd sacrifice my beating
Heart before I'd lose you.
If I drown tonight, bring me
Back to life.
Breathe your breath in me;
The only thing that I still believe
In is you.
If you only knew...
They weren't sure, but they might have loved one another all along. Some avenues were always meant to be explored.
So, me being me, I was hunting down your list of fics looking for Wild Card. And then I see one with the title "If You Only Knew," and I was like, oh my goodness, Shinedown! (Their album has been on repeat on my iPod for the last week because I got it for Christmas xD) So I clicked on it, even though I don't really ship H/Hr anymore.
And you're ze SPEW queen, so I shouldn't give you a *flail this was so good* review. And so I shall try not to.
But oh my goodness, Jess, this was just fabulous. I loved the talk about soul mates, although I would have thought that Harry would believe in them. And I liked how this was still pretty much canon, not a Harry-and-Hermione-go-run-off-into-the-sunset fic. Although I hated that Ron and Hermione broke up.
I do agree with what Harry thought, though, I never saw any romantic spark between Harry and Hermione. At all. Once I thought about it, that's what made me stop shipping Harmony.
But even though I don't ship Harmony, this was still a fabulous fic. And Shinedown is still equally fabulous xD
I'm a very finicky Harmony shipper. I have to see the possibility, see the plausibility, and, if at all possible, see it fit into canon. To me, the mark of good non-canon pairings and canon-contradictory pairings is to make them feel like they could/should have happened. While this probably isn't my best work, I don't doubt for a minute that either Harry or Hermione contemplated what life would be like if they had chosen differently. In the end, I don't think they would've changed their minds, but if circumstances had changed just a bit — a thought acted upon, a yearning not pushed out of the mind — there might've been something there.
Anyway, thank you for the review. This story, while read a lot, felt a bit unloved review-wise, so it's nice to know that people are still reading it. :D
Summary: Nobody thought that it would ever happen to them. The cold hand of death crept up on all of them before their very eyes and tore the their best friends away from them. Eight friends, united in a common cause, driven apart by a common enemy.
Now, the remaining six friends must find the truth, and each other to unite together once more.
One was murdered
The other branded a traitor
Two try to move on
another ran away
and one's body was never found...
Join them as they try to piece together their lives after that fateful Halloween night. *(Having some trouble with this site and my story, however it can be found on another fanfic site)
Liked the story, looked like it will be a good one for me to wait for updates hungrily. I do suggest you find a beta to fix some little spelling and grammer problems, but the plot *however much there isn't yet* seems like it'll be a good one.
During the second war, many must leave their homes and run for their lives. What must they feel, forced to hide from a government that hates their very existence?Nominated for Best Poem in the 2011 Quicksilver Quill Awards.
Love it! The 'chorus' line told in italics is my favorite part. You have a good ear for meter and rhyme, but the rhyming doesn't make the poem sound stupid. It makes it even better!
Author's Response: The chorus was fun to work with. And I love rhyming - it's one of my favorite things to do with poetry. (Well, that's a lie. I hate it while I'm doing it because it's a pain in the butt. But I like the results. ;) ). Thanks for your review!