Hi! I'm Olivia. :)
I like to dance (ballet), read, write, draw, travel, and obsess over my wardrobe, and do my homework! (Yeah, I'm a nerd!) For music my taste is differs, though I think some of my favorites include: Lady GaGa, the Beatles, Bow Wow Wow, Katy Perry...and the soundtrack from "Chicago". I also like Greek/Roman mythology and history in general. :)
Another wonderful story. It reminded me a lot of "I Would Give You Violets", but this one really did make me cry. They're both about fragile characters who have everything to lose. :) Your writing style is so wonderful, I can't even believe it. The way Luna recalls both the dead and the living is very powerful and also sad. (Again, the parentheses are the best) I love love love love this part:
"She is beginning to fit into the castle as well; not all of it, but she finds Luna-sized places here and there, and she has more people to smile at now... "
This story almost made me cry :) It is so beautifully, beautifully written. Alice's mind is portrayed almost magically. The sentences in the parentheses are, for me, the best. My favorite part is definitely:
"Once (when all the world was colored in brightness, and the rising of the sun in the morning meant a new day) she planted a garden with the man she loved best in the world... As her child grew within her body she knelt on the cool earth of the garden and promised her son that there would be a world (shining, golden bright) for him to live in."
That's probably everyone's favorite part. This part is also undescribably lovely:
"There are pictures of her dancing, with flowers in her hair. (Here, at least, she will smile forever.) Her son walks through the old house (the house his mother thought would be haunted by their very happiness) and into the garden in the back."
Wonderful story!! My favorite parts of this chapter would have to be "It's called pride. We all have a little too much of it." For some reason, I just really liked that line. And then, of course "Pie good." was a winner as well. I like Marty. She's a little creeperish, but she has an interesting character. I also like your take on Remus, he's very original. I like how Marty is discovering the more negative parts of the marauders now. Good job! ~Olivia :)
Author's Response: Thanks, I'm glad you're enjoyed it! I like Marty a lot too, out of all my original characters she has definitely remained one of my favourites. =)
Ok, so I already left a review but now I feel like I should give a more in-depth one now that I'm done with the story.
First off, great job! You're a wonderful, wonderful writer. At times the story was hilarious, other times depressing. Your take on all of the characters is original, but still true to the few traits JK Rowling has provided us with.
Well, honestly I have to say that I liked the exchanges between James and Luanne the best. If you ever come back to writing fanfics, you need to have something about them in there. I swear, whenever I need to laugh I'll just find the chapter with James and Keith Robertson in it and read it.
I also really liked how Marty developed as a character. You could slowly see how she was coming out of her shell, and becoming more comfortable with herself and the Marauders. (Remus's thing about the pumpkin juice was hilarious).
Again, amazing job! ~Olivia
Author's Response: Again, thank you for a brilliant review! I'm really glad you enjoyed the story and everything I was trying to do with it, always makes a writer happy! =) Coincidentally, you may be interested to know that I am currently posting a short sequel to this fic, the first chapter of which was put up last week - so if you want to read more, then that is currently happening! You'll be unique in that most people read this when it came out a couple of years ago, so I hope you enjoy it (if you decide to read it of course). Thanks again for a great review!
All I can say is: AMAZING. The dialogue is real, and so are the relationships. I think you could make it a bit easier to tell who's talking/narrating- especially with Fabian and Gideon. I loved how you really showed the camaraderie between the Order members, especially at the wedding. I adore, adore, adore your writing style. PLEASE update soon!
Trick or Treat!
3. She clicks on her mouse and swipes her wand;
Some stories go up, and some stories are gone.
Stories of her own? Why, she has plenty!
Fewer than one-hundred, but far more than twenty.
Wonderful story! :) All of the characters are incredibly believable, none of them are onesided or cliche. (e.g. Horribly conceited James and Sirius, useless Peter, etc.) I really like your writing style and the way you develop the plot. I love the idea with Sonia! Can't wait until the next chapter. :):)
Author's Response: Thank you very much. I'm glad you enjoy the story because I do love writing it. ~Carole~
Alright, I have to admit, the reason I read this story was because of the title. I'm really into Artemis and Greek Mythology in general. (I would have chosen her as my pen name, but there were just too many Artemises already). I loved, loved, loved how you incorporated Greek Mythology into your story, I've been thinking of doing something like this for a while now. However, don't you think Lily would be a bit old for D'Aulaire's Book of Greek Myths? It's basically a picture book; I was already too old for it in Fifth Grade. Also, it was published in/around 1992. A better candidate could have been Bulfinch's Greek and Roman Mythology, though I'm not sure when that was released. Loved the idea of Lily as Artemis, they do have a lot of similarities. ~Olivia
This was amazing. :) (I started laughing so hard my sister asked me if I had asthma) Both Harry and Hermione were very well done and in character. I feel like if you didn't know this was about them, you could still figure it out by reading their responses to each other. The fact that there was only dialogue was really what made the story so good, because all of the information you got about the surroundings, etc. was directly from the characters. The part about Kreacher was great, and you tied up the end very nicely. The entire thing was just very, very hilarious. :) ~Olivia!
Author's Response: Thanks so much :) I'm glad people are still reading this fic and enjoying it!
You just lie there before me, before my canvas, while I immortalise your being - while I give your life purpose - through colour and shape. People are going to look back on this work and say, “She was important.” They will say that you had a life with meaning.
Is your life meaningful, my dear?
Here sits an artist. Before him, his subject. Where will this piece of art take them? And where have they been before? For in the future lies the past and in the past there lies no future. Follow them on their journey through time and paint, through canvas and passion.
An entry by the opaleye of Slytherin to the Lofty Learning One-Shot Challenges: The Science of Portraiture
Amazing! :) It's rare to find a story as intricate and well-written as this one. The narration is spectacular, because even before you know what he did to Narcissa, you get a sense that there's something's not right in his mind; that he's not wholly sane.
You did a great job of explaining the people and the circumstances even before the facts were actually stated. One of the best examples is, of course:
"... I will not smell your fragrance, but a rusty scent, instead. What do you think?"
I wasn't actually clever enough to put ALL the pieces together from the start, but reading the ending made a lot of the words make more sense.
Again, WONDERFUL story!
Author's Response: Hi Olivia! Wow, this review was a surprise. I have to say that although this fic is one of my favourites that I've written, it's one of my least read so thank you very much for popping by and leaving this review. I really tried to set up a sinister yet sensual atmosphere from the very beginning so I'm glad you liked it. And even though you didn't pick up on the clues until the end, I like that you were able to go back and appreciate them once you knew the full story. Again, thanks so much for the read and lovely review! Julia.
This is honestly one of the most amazing stories I've ever read. It was touching in an odd way, and for some reason I almost felt like crying at the end. I've always held a lot of sympathy for Regulus, and this story brought that out. I really, really liked how you characterized him, and how he felt like an actual person and not just a character. I also liked how you portrayed Lily- and Sirius. Great Job! ~Olivia
I love this story! Your characters are very believable. I really like how you portrayed Astoria. She's a really strong person. I think Draco has definitely met his match in her :) I also liked the big contrast between the two sisters. One is very weak-willed and the other very determined. Keep up the good work!
Hey, I loved this! I thought it was interesting the way you started off the story, with the Order picture. The characters I think were characterized well, especially Snape. My only criticism is small: I somehow don't think that there would be a fifth male Gryffindor in that year. Wouldn't he be friends with the Marauders? They always seemed to me to be very accepting and outgoing. Unless there was a good reason for it, I don't think James would've picked, say, Peter as a friend over Sam Trent, who would seem to fit much better into their group. Of course, maybe Sam wouldn't WANT to hang out with them, but it would be great if you gave more detail on that situation in the story. Other than that, great job! and keep writing! ~Olivia
Author's Response: Sam is one of those guys that always seems to get along better with female friends - I'm sure you know the type! But it will be explored a little more later on :) Thanks for your review! I hope you stick with me (I'm absolutely AWFUL about quick story updates!)
Great story :) You have an amazing writing style I also really like your characterization of all the different characters. I loved the part where the Marauders made the "Girl Language" list!! Haha, I also enjoyed the end of this chapter. :) Please continue! ~Olivia
Author's Response: Wow, thanks! :D
All I can say is, wonderful! Ginny's emotions and thoughts are beautifully written, and very realistic. Although she's one of the main character's, you really don't know all that much about Ginny. She's always kind of in the background, the way I see it. This really made me feel like I was in her head, which is great.
My favorite part would have to be:
"Then she carefully put Ron, Harry, and Hermione back into a little box in her mind, locked it up tight, and buried it where she would not stumble upon it again anytime soon."
Good job! ~Olivia
Author's Response: Thank you so much. I struggled a lot with this story, and to be honest, I still don't know how satisfied I am with it. But I am so glad you connected with it and thought it was realistic for her character. I wanted to explore what might cause her to break down, since she is so famous (even more so in fanfic) for never crying. Thanks again--I appreciate the review!
This is a great story! The historical detail is incredible, and you make it flow well with the writing. I really like the subject; it has an original historical and geographical setting. Although it's not that uncommon, I liked how you used the twins-separated-as-children theme.
Kim Hae-won is an interesting character, and I like her enthusiasm about finding the dragon scales. I can't wait to find out her reaction to learning that she is a witch!
Like "Immunity" said, I was attracted to story because the banner showed two Asian girls... not a common sight on a website where most people are British. Yeah, and also, keep writing! (even if you don't get the reviews you deserve) Great Job! ~Olivia
Author's Response: Wow, I'm glad people are liking this story, and the reviews I do get are highly appriciated. On another note, the chapter introducing Young-jae in North Korea has finally been posted. That is going to be quite entertaining, I thinks!
Great job! I really liked the idea you came up with- I've always wondered about this topic. Your characterization was amazing. I particularly liked "Rapture". Lavender has always been one of my favorite characters. I was also interested in the fact that she was a ballerina. I dance, too and I always thought that it would be really hard for me to give up ballet if I went to Hogwarts. Again, amazing job! ~Olivia
Author's Response: Dear Proserpina, I've always seen Lavender as a little girl who had dancing lessons, but somehow I don't think she had the long-term self-discipline to become a professional ballerina. I think many aspirations would be incompatible with Hogwarts, and the characters do have to choose. (Just like real life, really!) The characterisations are one of the best things about JKR's own writing, so thank you so much for telling me that I can do it too! GhV
Wonderful, wonderful story! Usually, I don't read stories with "Mental Disorders" that often, but this one is really amazing. Lily is a heart-wrenchingly sad character. I guess they sort of all are. I liked how you portrayed James, he's very believable. I know that it's mainly a story about James and Lily, but I think that you should add more about the other Marauders. They're a huge part of his life, so I think they should also play a bigger part in Lily and James' story as well. (Though I did like how Sirius and Remus showed up to save the day!!!) Again, great story! ~Olivia
Author's Response: Thanks so much! Yes, I was worried that warning would scare people away, but it seemed needed. I'm glad you are enjoying it. I have to admit, though, that I don't think there will be much more of the others. I envisioned this as being a series of scenes between James and Lily and hadn't even planned on Snape appearing. I do hope you enjoy the rest. Thank you so much for the review, I appreciate it! ~Gina :)
Nominated for Best Poem in the 2011 Quicksilver Quill Awards
Inspiring poem! :) My favorite verse would have to be the one about the dementors. Also, great job on the rhyming! The repetition also lends the verses a nice flow. ~Olivia
Author's Response: Thank you! I'm glad you like the one about the dementors - that one gave me some trouble. Rhyming is a pain, but generally worth it, and I am in love with repetition as a poetic device, so I'm glad you liked them.
Even the jubilance of a Quidditch Cup could become taxing on Percy's nerves, but it seemed almost cruel when he couldn't even take a shower in peace, despite it being well after midnight.
Driven out of his own dorm and to the prefects' bathroom that he scarcely ever visits, Percy finds that the room hadn't yet been vacated by its prior occupant.
Great story! Your writing is great, and your characterization is better. I can totally see Oliver being gay, as well as Percy (even though he marries Audrey). The scene in the bathroom was awkward in a hilarious way. Again, wonderful job! ~Olivia
I'm glad you enjoyed the story. Normally, I ship Katie/Oliver, but he's such a fun character to write that I put him in whatever pairing strikes my fancy. :)
The bathroom was supposed to be one of those things that, if asked to describe what happened, it would be a series of 'er's and 'um's and 'well's. No way to properly articulate what was going on, lol. I'm glad you appreciated Percy's discomfort and confusion.
If you only knew
I'm hanging by a thread,
The web I spin for you.
If you only knew
I'd sacrifice my beating
Heart before I'd lose you.
If I drown tonight, bring me
Back to life.
Breathe your breath in me;
The only thing that I still believe
In is you.
If you only knew...
They weren't sure, but they might have loved one another all along. Some avenues were always meant to be explored.
Although I'm not really into Harry/Hermiones, I really liked this one. You made their relationships with other people (Ron, Ginny) seem real and not just...random, I guess. I liked the discussion about "soul mates" and what that entails and what that means. Again, great job, and I loved the ending. ~Olivia
I think everyone does a lot of soul searching in the hours leading up to a monumental occasion, be it marriage or graduation or whatever. It only makes sense that one of them get cold feet. I wanted this to be a bit of a reality check for both of them, especially Harry. I believe it is possible to be in love with two people at once, and I think he just didn't think about that possibility until Hermione was breaking up in front of him.
Thanks for reviewing, and I'm glad you enjoyed the story, despite it not being your cup of tea. :)