Hello! My name is Claire, and I'm a college sophomore in Texas. I've been reading fanfiction forever but I am a new member. My favorite types of stories are Marauders Era and Next-Generation. ((:
I guess 189 reviews says it all, but too funny!! I rarely find humorous writing I actually find funny, but this was awesome (:
I am only on chapter 3, but I just wanted to say that I LOVE this story and so much hope you haven't abandoned it. It's funny, the characters (especially Molly) are brilliant and everything flows so well that I really feel like I'm reading a Potter book again. Wonderful! -abovelevel
Awwww I love it! I love that they all have boy names and that Emma and Tyrone are actually happy in their own, kind of twisted way. I love Haley and Wolfie. I REALLY love Anatoly and his "special friend" and his Asian baby, and I didn't even ever really like him in PP. I'm so sad it's over, because I have been reading these forever, but I love that it ended so perfectly. I friended all of them on facebook! Even after what JK has said, somewhere in my mind, this is still part of my Next-Gen canon :)
Author's Response: Thank you so much! Yeah, Tyrone wanted all the girls to have really prissy old-fashioned girly names, and Emma wanted them to have tomboyish names, so they compromised and gave them all girly names and unisex nicknames. I felt like I needed to write this epilogue because I hate it when stories just end with couples getting together, without showing anything of their relationship. ANd of course, people as weird as Emma and Tyrone can't have a normal 'happily ever after!' I'm really happy that you like Anatoly's ending, because I'd never planned on including him in the epilogue until I had a dream that he adopted a baby named Ringo Supernova, and so I was like, 'I have to put him in here!' Also because when we last saw him, he was head-over-heels for Haley's husband, and that's just sad. I feel sad that this stuff's over, too, because I was twelve when I invented these characters, and I'm nineteen now. I totally keep forgetting that JK Rowling invented a real Next-Gen bunch... to me, it'll always be these wacky people!
Ahhhh too good. I've never been able to make it through the real P&P, but I'm tempted to try it now. Though I doubt it could be better than Emma's version. Emma is seriously awesome and I'm glad Tyrone is still wearing her down AND that they're both starting to grow up! Very sweet and yet still very...them. I'm still a little sad Haley didn't end up with Vladislav (I always loved him for some reason), but I can't wait to find out what happens with B.C. (:
Author's Response: I say go ahead and watch the *movie* version of P&P with Keira Knightley if you're intrigued but didn't love the book. Jane Austen movies are awesome! I love Vladislav, too... he DOES make a cameo appearance later in the story, though!
Far and away the best characterization of Remus I have read in a fanfiction -- so very touching and sad and really brings home an issue I have always struggled with: why did Remus and Sirius suspect each other of being the traitor? Obviously, the Marauder's weren't as tight as they all wanted to imagine they were, or if they were, then that was torn away by the war. I liked the imagine of "Sirius couldnt be torn away from James and Remus couldn't be torn away from Lily." I think that also shows how Peter could have ended feeling the outsider and fallen to old Voldy.
I've been slowly reading through this over my winter break and I it's basically making me HATE myself, because I'm starting to sympathise with a little Nazi boy. The past few chapters, I've seriously found myself feeling bad for Dieter, because he it so genuinely confused as to why the "sub-humans" are allowed in the school. It's like, even though it's terrible, you can't help but pity his ignorance. And just the way he talks about his Hans and his mother, it makes him just an ordinary kid...until he starts talking about his beloved Fuhrer.
It is obvious you've worked very hard on this and clearly you've done a great job. Can't wait to read more.
Trick or Treat!
3. She clicks on her mouse and swipes her wand;
Some stories go up, and some stories are gone.
Stories of her own? Why, she has plenty!
Fewer than one-hundred, but far more than twenty.
Oh, goodness, this is just so good except for the fact that I want to bonk Lily over the head on account of slimy, slimy Rich! You've done such a good job with this - I especially love the Martha, Mary, Remus and Sirius dynamics. Very exciting turn of events with Sonia, I can't wait to see what Lily and Peter think :)
Author's Response: OH, thank you so much. I'm glad you like Martha and Mary as they've turned up in another few fics of mine. I'm also rather fond of Sonia even though James is obviously meant to be with Lily - hee hee. OH, don;t write off Rich yet. Slimy but ... I will say no more. Thanks again ~Carole~
Great job! I was blown away just by the idea behind this story because as interesting as it is to consider, there's no reason that it isn't plausible. I loved your characterization of Molly and her interactions with her family and even young Bellatrix was well done - as much as I would like to imagine so, she probably wasn't an evil, bloodthirsty maniac when she was eleven. I also enjoyed the very salient point you bring up about the Sorting Hat and the state of the Houses, especially during the war(s). Bringing it forward to the past was the perfect way to do that. I don't know what made me click on this story, but I'm very glad I did. -abovelevel
Author's Response: Thank you very much for reading and reviewing. I loved writing this story, and find it a little sad that it doesn't get more reads, but then I get lovely reviews from people like you that make me happy. Thanks again. ~Carole~
What a nice way to start my Tuesday morning! This one-shot was a wonderful mix of fluffy H/G and interesting tidbits about the Auror Office and Quidditch training.
For me the strength in this truly was really how well and easily it flowed. Though you jumped between Harry and Ginny's minds, it felt natural and as a reader, I could settle into their different thoughts quickly and logically. In paticular, I think you really got into Harry's thoughts, as Ginny's husband and as a future Dad. Now, I don't know much about parenthood, but I have a feeling that you do, haha.
The Auror I.D. cards were brilliant - what a perfect idea and how magical it seems, yet also technological if that makes sense. It was interesting seeing some characters we already know, as well as the hierarchy of positions. When Harry said he "wished Neville was there" I had to smile and the knot on the tree was a great connection to canon HP.
I liked the scene at Ginny's Quidditch practice a lot - I think this was the part where you reflect Ginny's thoughts the best:
"The girls laugh at me, but I don’t pay them any attention. Why is he here? Has something happened? Is someone hurt?" - I see this as really reflective of, as her Coach said, the changing priorities between a professional athlete, one who is wholly dedicated to the sport and team, and someone who is becoming a wife and mother, someone who in those roles must put family first. I know this is just one small thing, but it really brought that point home for me.
In the scene at the beach, I was surprised Ginny wasn't more suspect of Harry's sudden baby talk. I suppose she had no reason to be, but through the rest of the scenes, she certainly seemed to have an instinct for when "something" was up.
I like the discussion of the names as well...it made me happy to see that Lily and James were Ginny's suggestions - everyone always says Harry "obviously" picked them, but I feel like Ginny would have seen how much it would mean to Harry and would want to do it too. This conversation feels very real to me, when they discuss the "last Potters" and "last Weasleys" and joke about what genders they want.
The end was a great surprise to me as well as Ginny, I imagine. I would so love to hear what kind of talk they had when they got home, but it was a very sweet place to end. The inclusion of Teddy was a good home-run for the "family" themes running throughout and he just sounds so awfully cute.
Anyways, well, that's all from me. I cannot believe this story only has two reviews, I think it's wonderful.
Thank you for such a lovely review of this much read (but little reviewed) story.
I was a little nervous about switching the point of view through the story, so I’m pleased that you think it feels natural. I will admit that Harry’s thoughts on parenthood do bear a certain similarity to my own.
I’ve given a lot of thought to the Auror Office, and it helps that my stories all follow one future history. Even though the Aurors and Quidditch players are no more than names here, I know the ages and at least some background information about most of them. (For example, Auror Polly Protheroe gets her own chapter in Tales of the Battle.)
As for the names, personally, I think that Molly and Arthur would have been on Ginny’s list, too, but that Percy “bagged” both of them the moment Audrey got pregnant.
I’ll look at the beach scene again, as I was hoping to imply that Ginny’s suspicions about Harry’s motives were eased by his discussion about the parents of the injured Aurors, that it was this aspect of parenthood which he hadn’t considered.
Now it has three reviews, thanks.
It also has two sequels: First Sight, and Sleepless Night. N
First off all, this is a truly beautiful poem. It flows easily on a simple read and upon a second, there is a lot to uncover.
The connection between the beginning stanza and ending lines is interesting - how you match the "shard of glass" and the "debris" at the end. I think this really brings the poem together and shows how Draco is "falling apart" in a sense.
The sound repetitions throughout your third stanza (where you describe the various scenes from Draco's time with Voldemort) are very strong and help build the intensity and movement of your poem; I in paticular like "a friend consumed by fire, a monstrous face." I am not, actually, entirely sure of what you were personally referring to there, but I like the way that it can have multiple connotations; anything from Greyback, to his parents, to someone he sees get killed in the Final Battle, even to himself. Adding "a haunted home" was perfect for the last line - it is truly "haunting" how it just hangs on the end there, the 'h' repetition appropriately breathy, almost ghostlike itself.
If you do read these comments, what was your meaning behind "white and excruciating?" I like all the other juxtapositions of color and feeling, but I was not sure what you meant by that. I like your word choice here - as I read the build from cold to treacherous I could really imagine someone saying that, feeling that. The word "vivid" - a very different use of the word here from what most people do, but how fitting; of course it all must have been.
The capitalization of "His," placed with the words "cursed" and "salvation" gives an interesting religious undertone to this stanza. It shows the strange devotion the DEs have to their "Lord" and how, once you have been there, there is really no way to go back.
The back and forth in the last stanza - between the joy of the new world and a hero and the death of a son and then Draco's own shame again - is quick, but I think it works. After all, that's how it is in real war, isn't it? Everything happening at once, and a mix of all these feelings that you can't quite seperate from each other.
Well, I think I've said enough! I'm studying poetry in English right now so I'm in proper poetry-reviewing mood and after reading this, I wanted to share what I thought. It really seems you put a lot of work into this poem and, in my opinion, it paid off
Author's Response: Hello Claire!
A night of paperwork, coffee, and burning the midnight oil... it wasn't an unfamiliar occurrence. But add in a minor slip-up and a mistaken potion, and events were sure to take an interesting turn.
This story was nominated for a 2011 Quicksilver Quill Award: Best Non-Canon Romance
HAHAHA! Oh my gosh, I think I'm laughing too hard to leave a proper review, but ahhh this was too funny.
"This product has been specially designed for the safety of both parties. It is only activated by a specific pheromone, which solely comes from pre-existing sexual attraction to prevent unlawful use on unwilling participants."
That was too, too funny. And just the whole situation with the Mary-Kay like party at the beginning and Hermione being the one who didn't even want to use the potion in the first place...
Well, the potion was designed to only work for people who are already attracted, kind of like reverse Amortentia, so I just wanted that little seed of true Harmony in there, but also for it to continue being canon compliant, because I didn't want either of them to tell and for it to be their little secret, so to speak.
The end part wasn't even in the original draft, but I had already had to explain to quite a few people about the nature of the potion, mainly its failsafe, so I decided when I posted the story here to add that last bit just for clarification.
I'm glad you enjoyed the story, and thanks for the review. By the way, you have just completed the first level of being a Ravenclaw House Elf. Fourth Class for you. Now, three more to go! :D
Only the girl he loved hasn’t been lost to death like his father. She’s still walking and breathing and living in her parents’ house in Ottery St. Catchpole. She hasn’t spoken to him since Christmas Eve last year. She blames him for what she’s lost.
All of this means that for him, Christmas isn’t all that merry and bright this year. He doesn’t plan on celebrating it at all. But when his father appears as a ghost in his room on Christmas Eve, he’s swept along on a journey that may just change things for the better.
Cyril has been nominated for Best OC in the 2011 Quicksilver Quills awards. =D
Hello Minna!! I think you've done an excellent job with this so far :) The relationship and dialogue between Cyril and his dad was very well done and probably my favorite thing about this piece - even though we don't know them very well, it feels like we really know their relationship already. Just the natural way they interact is really well done.
In the second chapter, I like how you include a variety of memories instead of just one. The only comment I would make is that I would love to see more of Cyril and Sarah and what exactly happened when they broke up. That was kind of confusing but I assume you will address it later.
Though you included a lot of information, the pacing was good and you didn't drag on with too many details, yet I got a good idea of the mood of each scene. It was brave of you to go with an OC for this challenge but I think it's going well, and I like the scene at the Yule ball and how it fits in with canon - cute detail!!
Can't wait to keep reading!
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Author's Response: Hi, Claire. =) It's good to hear I did well with Cyril and Dirk - their relationship is kind of central to Cyril's journey, so I'm glad I wrote them well. With regards to what happened with Cyril and Sarah - I did try to fit it in somehow after I saw this review, but it didn't manage it. I think Sarah was just sad and angry and lashed out at Cyril. Um - I didn't exactly have it planned though. Maybe someday I'll write it, if only so I know. =) Haha - another thing that's nice to hear is that the details didn't drag it down. I always worry about that because I always feel this need to include the details I have. -rolls eyes at self- I also kind of want to yell "But Cyril's not an OC!" because technically he's not (Dirk's sons are mentioned once in the book xD We weren't allowed OCs for the challenge but I often use minor, minor characters and call it good) but for all intents and purposes he is an OC. What can I say, I like doing something outside the usual suspects. =) The Yule Ball scene was fun, too, though I had trouble writing it in a way that wouldn't just reiterate what we got from canon. Thank you so much for reading and reviewing, Claire!
A war had raged; everyone had felt alone and afraid at some point. And when it was over, most people went back to business as usual, but two of those haunted souls found respite from the most unlikely of sources.
After all, who doesn't need a little bit of catharsis?
Hello! I think the best part of this is the beginning...it read well and I could imagine it happening. I like the title a lot...I think it really brought together the main point of the piece. As you said it was like a 'dittany' on their should, but it could never have been. I don't honestly think they could have ended up together in the long term, though I wonder if they had any physical connection or if it was more of a mutual need thing.
The sections of text, so to speak, were short, and at some points it felt a little jumpy, but I think that's more of a personal opinion thing. Overall, I really enjoyed this - it brought together two unexpected characters in a way I could respect and even like.
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Hello there, fellow Sprout!
Sometime, you should challenge yourself to put together two unlikely characters and make yourself believe in it. There's something gratifying in turning the impossible into the possible.
Were Draco and Katie ever a 'thing'? In this story, no. I would venture to say that they'd both considered it, but nothing ever came of it because they considered their standing relationship of more importance.
I know it was a bit jumpy, as it was written originally in drabble form. I've actually added to the prior format to alleviate as much of that as possible. What I really wanted, though, was for the beginning to paint a picture of possibilities and to show that idea slowly unravel over time, when that need for atonement and catharsis isn't enough to keep them going.
I'm glad you found the fic plausible. I wasn't going for shippiness so much as strange allies, so that went okay. :D
This is SO CUTE!!!!!! Yikes, normally I don't even bother reading James/Lily, but I'm so glad I read this - it was just so cute and real. James was so earnest it actually managed to show some of his redeeming traits, which I know he must have had.
And it was really just SO CUTE! :D
Author's Response: Thank you so much! I'm glad you stopped to read a J/L - they're not all bad. ;) I really appreciate you reading this and am glad you found something redeeming in one of my favorite characters. Thanks for the lovely review! ~Gina :)
It’s Christmas 1998, but Susan Bones doesn’t feel like celebrating. The loss of both her best friend and her favorite aunt have created wounds that might never heal. But with the help from a most unlikely person, she may be able mend what has broken, and gain a little Christmas spirit as well.
This story is for Gen/Sagen for the Gryffindor Christmas Craziness Secret Swap! Have a wonderful Christmas, Gen!
What a creative idea for a couple!! My favorite part of this was definitely the beginning - I am very intrigued about Susan and Ernie's relationship, and the parts about how she felt more and more lonely but she couldn't be around anyone were very realistic. And the way she felt she was the only one ... You did excellently.
The part with Susan and Theo was very cute, but either it felt a little rushed, or I wish you had just gone on a little more... I don't know I just felt both of gem might have been more hesitant in opening up right away. However, I do like the dynamic you've given them, so I think you should really just continue this :)
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Author's Response: Thank you for taking the time to review! I'm glad you liked them as a couple… this was for a Gryffindor Christmas Swap, so I didn't really come up with the idea myself. And it makes me so happy to see that you liked Susan :). I agree, I think I should/could have put more time into Susan and Theo's relationship…I might start a chaptered fic about them, we'll see. Thanks again for reviewing! xx Ariana
Ahhhhh gosh so cute, but so sad considering what happens to Charity!!! Geez I like to imagine he would have tried to come look for her later...and if only she had gone to America! I love how you characterize Charity here...she is so very relatable, at least to me, in the way she thinks, it really felt like I could understand her even though it was third person.
Great job and very unique take on the prompt.
Author's Response: Thank you very much, Claire. I'm glad you liked the story. It was fun to write although bittersweet because we know what happens to her. ~Carole~
Wonderful! Lily was so hilariously naughty in this and the normally-cool Sirius's reactions were priceless. I knew Lily was up to something, but it was just all the more funny that they were ALL in on it, especially when Sirius thought his friends had forgotten about them. This is exactly how I imagined the Marauders. Great job! :) -abovelevel
Author's Response: Thank you so much for the great review! I'm glad you enjoyed this story, it was a lot of fun to write! I really appreciate the compliment about the Marauders, since they can be tricky - too much or too litte and they just don't work. Thanks again! ~Gina :)
And now sheâ€™s pregnant.
Oh, I do hope you go on with this!! I think Dominique is a very relatable character so far and I like how you've decided to highlight one of the Next-Gen characters that we don't hear as much about. I will definitely be looking out for updates.
Great first chapter!
Author's Response: Thanks! After a massive break, I'm back and I'm going to post chapters up as much as I can!
Really really funny! Please keep writing and and I will be looking out for updates. You have a great premise here and I cant wait to see where it goes.
I can't tell you how excited I am that Alexandra is back! I've been reading your blog all summer and semester and the first chapter was just as fast-paced and interesting as I could have hoped. See you on Monday!