Hey, guys. I'm working on Sacrifice, and to get it up soon. Go [URL=http://www.fanfiction.mugglenet.com/forum/showthread.php?t=1490]here[/URL] and review my prophecy, so I can get Sacrifice up faster! :D
Hey, first time reviewer here. This is an awesome story, and I can't wait for you to update! But it's really sad that they killed Eliza...
This is adorable! I hope you keep going with it, though it's AU now HBP's come out. You have a wonderful, amazing talent! I could never do an entire paragraph in verse, let alone 3 chapters! 10 all the way!
A pretty good start, but you could use some work on your writing. I'm imagining a good story, but you need to connect some sentences and work on the vocab a little. I'm not putting down you're story, but just giving you constructive critism.
Hey, I like your story. it shows personality and creativity and all that other stuff. When it gets POSTED [hem, hem, MuggleNet okayer people], you can read and review and I will be very happy. Also, go to ewonline.net and go to fandom then fan fiction to read my old story, Hermione's Love. It's a HR/R//H//D fic.
This was touching, ina word. I love how everything's in pronouns, so it seems a lot less personal to the reader.
I really, really love that he finally comes out and says what both of them are thinking, and she acknowledges it. And I love this: "...and he realizes with a start that, for all their past encounters, this can’t be called anything but the first time they’ve been together."
Hey, I personally love this whole plot. And basing it on 'She's A Rebel'? You obviously wrote it just for me, right?
Author's Response: Oh, of course I wrote it just for you. I sat at my computer, at a loss for ideas, and then I thought, "What would B_Bootyful want to read...?" And voila! ::wink:: Thanks a bunch for the review!
This is a good story, bu it's not spactacular. The plot line is well worn, but you add descriptiveness to it, which makes the sotry better. On the flip side, though, everything seems to be happening very, very fast. You might put some Harry POV in here, soon, if you don't have a plan worked out.
Okay, I'm dying for the next chapter! I can see this is going to be very funny, and I'm ecstatic to read more!
This has got to be the most convincing D/Hr fic I've ever read! I love how you lace the plot into HP6, so that it makes sense. You even put the dialouge in it! I'm so happy it's not over!
I kind of agree with VioletHairPixie. Please don't make this into another aweful fanfic that goes like this: "One date." "That's all!"..."Wow, I never stopped loving you, Draco." "Me niether, Hermione." Blech. Ew. And you were doing so well!! Try to make it original, for me, okay?
Wow. That was awesome. Despite some spelling errors, that might have been one of the best stories I've ever read here on MMNF. You made everything make sense, and is just waaaay coool, maaan.
Author's Response: Thank you so much for your review. I really tried to make the fic look like something that could have happened in the story.
Oh, my gosh. That was so sad. I'm in tears, kind of, but man, that was an excellent story. Your words actually made me believe that you were there, watching them, just like Lily and James. Congratulations.
That was powerful. I always wondered if one twin would overcome the other, and you have just confirmed I am not alone.
Author's Response: I think it would be very interesting if one twin turned on the other, but I guess the question is, which one would it be. I really couldn't decide myself, so for this story I left it opened to the reader.
This is one of the best one-shots I've ever read, by far. No cliches, all original stuff.
And the cafe plan? Pure brilliance.
Author's Response: Thank you very much, B_Bootyful!
Dear Mrs Evans:
A marvelous story told in letters. The Potter children are quite a handful for poor Mrs Potter. I rather think she needs a vacation.
Great story! I love how you took the two sides of the story (friendship and formal) and stuck them together. You've captured the characters perfectly, as well.
PS: Have you read a story about a naked quiddtch match instated by Fred and George? That's similar to this.
Author's Response: Thanks so much for your kind review! I\'m really glad you liked it. (As for the kids being a handful, I don\'t imagine there\'s much Ginny can\'t handle!!! She probably could use a vacation though.) I haven\'t read the other story-I\'ll have to look it up. Thanks- Daisy
Oh, if only you had seen my face when I realised she wasn't pregnant with Harry, but with a second child! I've never thought about that before: Could Lily have been pregnant when she was murdered? Oh, it just brings tears to my eyes.
Again, you're amazingly talented. And creative, too! You obviously thought outside the box on this one.
The thing that brought it all home? The fact that James and Lily had absolutely no idea their baby would never be born. Usually in stories with them in their later years, they have a "feeling" that "something"'s going to happen. I love how they're just innocent, unsuspecting parents in your story.
Sad, very sad. So Susan Bones killed a pregnant Ginny?
I think you meant this to bring tears to peoples' eyes, but it got kind of confusing because of all the commas. If you took them out (no commas in poetry are needed) it would make more sense, I think.
Author's Response: Thanks, I\'ll have a look at those pesky commas!
After I read Caducus, I went to your author's page, and this looked cute. And see what I find!
I can't remember what movie that is, but I know I love it. :D That makes sense, doesn't it?
I also love how you can capture raw emtions with your words. That's what separates a good writer from a great one. Guess what category you fall in?
I just want to tell you that I did not blink teh entire time it took me to that. I couldn't. If I did, I might have opened my eyes and found that there was Harry, standing in front of me, and there was Voldemort, cowering in fear before his most hated enemy. It felt as though I were there. I could feel the hate, smell the air, sense the slowing of time.
You have a gift. This is the best hate-related story I've ever read. Good job. I hope to read more from you.
That was wonderful. You've taken the grief of losing a loved one and not only put it into words emmaculately, but created a sense that your readers are in the room with Ginny, watching tearfully as she attempts to escape her past.
You certainly have a gift for emotions.
Author's Response: Thank you! I\'m quite speechless. This review was very thoughtful, and made my day! I\'m glad you liked it, and thanks for the review!