Amy (can I call you Amy?) - you are one of mu favouritiest authors in the world (not only FF!)
I read this all on one go (like I always seem to do with your fics!). It's 11pm now, and I have school tomorrow, but I couldn't stop.
I - love - your - Sirius - so - frickin' - much
As a friend, of course. Sirius gets Lola, not me. I get James, thanks.
Anyway, the fic. Teary moments:
"I love you, Sirius Black! I love you I love you I love -" (or whatever variation it was, I can't be bothered sifting through the chapters)
*Wipes away tears* - absolutely GORGEOUS, Lola/Sirius is.
And the final scene, where they snogged. Didn't even try to stop the tears at that point. They're still on my face, actually.
How come I never like fics with OCs except yours?
Remember my amazingly long review of The Cause? And your ever-so-kind reply? Well, I would absolutely love to read the sequel of TC. I don't give a damn if it's a "different style", you hear me?
E-mail it to Midnight.Storm.email@example.com even if it's completely un-post-able. I'd read anything you wrote, Amy.
Have a nice life!
PS. If I were a boy, I would SO be Marty Price's boyfriend. I cannot get over how brilliant that OC is. Why she hasn't won a QSQ ...
Author's Response: Thank you for another incredibly sweet review! I'm so glad you enjoy my stories, my life has changed so much since I wrote them that it feels kind of surreal to think people are still reading and enjoying them - but surreal in a good way! I'll admit that as one my earliest fics, this one isn't exactly one of my favourites, but I'm happy you liked it anyway! As far as the sequel goes, I think I might try uploading it here eventually, but you will have to bear with me as there is so much going on that it can be hard to find the time - but thank you for having some kind of faith in me I guess, I just hope it will be worth it!
That. Was. Amazing.
So, I'm not a huge fan of the trio-y/next gen kinda stuff. I'm a Marauder girl. But, well, I've read all your marauder stuff. So I decided to read Don't Mind The Puddles which is (*sob*) unfinished. So I ventured over to this QSQ winner.
BUT YOU INCLUDED THE MARAUDERS ANYWAY!!!!!!!!
I don't think I've cried so hard for a year, reading chapter 22. It was all so cute and sad and sweet and adorable and touching and heart-wrenching. I read the 'goodbye' scene six times in a row. So beautiful :'(
And yeah, I read this all in one go,
Author's Response: Wow, thanks so, so much! I'm so glad you liked it! And, haha, I couldn't help but include the Marauders! They're my favorite! :)
This was really sweet! The characters were portrayed perfectly, and the whole piece was really lighthearted.
It wasn't overly fluffy, it was simply enjoyable to read. There were some very funny lines mixed in there too, such as James's "I promise, Lily, I’m not . . . you know, or —”. I also found Sirius's reaction exceptionally funny.
Just a couple nitpicks (sorry!). "Her Muggle alarm clock hadn't gone off." I'm pretty sure that in GoF, Hermione informs us that electronics don't work at Hogwarts because all the magic messes with their systems. And there's just a typo where Lily says: "Come o,n Potter." I assume it's meant to be "Come on, Potter."
This was a very cute piece -- well done!
I read this all in one go -- it was brilliant! A really, really well written fic.
In general, I "hmm" at fics with OCs as main characters, but not this time! Marty was so likeable, what with her way of speaking the truth, however awkward it might have been. Having her as a stalkerish girl with a clipboard who simply wanted to make a difference was such a sweet, sweet thing.
Remus was also portrayed nicely, too. No longer a bookworm with a chocolate fetish, eh? One of my favourite things about your Remus was when he didn't stop James and Sirius being arseholes to Snape -- the way you wrote it was canon to the letter.
James was great. Him as the 'father figure' to Luanne was hilarious. Also liked your Peter, mainly because he existed -- you didn't cut him out like so many authors do. Sirius was good too, but I think there was a splash of OOCness when he arrived at the Potters, just because I see him as the person who would tell the others what had happened, but try to pass it off as casual. Maybe I'm just swayed by too much fanfiction. You can ignore that comment :P
Lily was great, and, as a huge L/J shipper, I liked watching her relationship with James develop. I would love to read a sequel about Marty trying to get the two together, but, reading the comments below, I see you've told others that won't be happening *sigh*
As a Ravenclaw of the Beta Boards, I totally got the turnips joke! Turnips forever, eh?
Speaking of the Beta Boards, I read this fic because Equinox Chick recommended it in the Marauder Era Recommendations. Kudos to her!
This was so, so well done! Pussycat123, my dear, you will go far.
Before I finish this ridiculously long review, I'm just wondering: what happens, in the end, to Remus/Marty? Please, please, please don't say Marty dies, or anything!
Author's Response: Aw, this is such a beautifully heart-warming review, thank you so much, really - you picked up on so many of the things I was trying to achieve, which always makes me happy, so I'm really glad you enjoyed it. Now, as for sequels and what happens next... the truth is I HAVE actually written something, set after they leave Hogwarts, but I've been unsure about putting it up for several reasons - it's been a long time since I wrote this, so I always imagined that a lot of people had moved on, and it's also very different in tone and style, which does make me unsure of how people will respond. But it's there, waiting, and your review has actually encouraged me to just go for it - so maybe keep your eyes peeled and something might turn up?
Hi, Equinox Chick
Trying not to sound like some ridiculous fangirl, but ...
ZOMG ZOMG ZOMG that was AMAZING!!
Everybody was perfectly IC - especially Sirius. You did a great job with your husband (yeah, I read your bio).
Ah, Peter. We all hate him, don't we? But this fic was ... wow! I even felt slightly sorry for him a couple of times! My favourite scene was when Sirius discovered that Peter'd lost the MM; I'd always pictured it was James who lost it (for some reason), but Peter losing it fitted much better.
Y'know those 'I severed my hand', 'I put my wand behind my back', 'I ran into the sewer' thingos? They were a really clever thing to put in, and they were kind of creepy, too. Except that when I read the first one I was like 'huh? what just happened?' because I am like Goyle in the brains department. But I totally got it once I reached the second one :P
Author's Response: Aww, thank you! This is probably one of my favourite fics that I've written because I really wanted to write a Peter centric story, and I experimented with First Person and present tense - so I'm pleased you liked the story. I don't know why I thought Peter had lost the map, but i thought it would have to be him or Sirius, cause I have a feeling Remus would have told Harry if James or he had lost it. (Unsure why, but there you go)
Thank you very much again for the review. ~Carole~
Oh my God, this is amazing. I keep getting teary-eyed, recovering, and then getting teary-eyed again. Let out a little moan of despair when James was telling Sirius that Peter couldn't have betrayed them - so sad. As Kara has already said Sirius's characterisation it spot on.
This is an AMAZINGLY BRILLIANT fic. You must update, or I may die. Well, maybe not, but I need to know what happens next. Can't wait for the third marauder to be discovered by Lily, James, and Sirius (and I'm not talking about Peter)!
You better not have left this as a WIP. If you have, well, just PM me about what was going to happen anyway. I must find out!
Author's Response: Wow, thanks for the review, Annie. I'm glad you like it. It's acually finished and posted completely on another site, but because I wrote it a long time ago it needs improving, and getting round to the editing isn't something I'm motivated to do very often! But you've pushed me on to open the word document, so an update may come soon. Thanks again! Sarah x
Despite your Chapter End Note, I did not find this piece too fluffy. There was a nice balance between the fluff, the memories, and the happy ending.
The part about Harry only drawing himself as his family was really touching, and contributed to the great ending. Good job on that front.
It was also a clever idea. I haven't read any other fics on here about Harry and hid primary school life -- the whole general idea was a clever one.
It was really sweet when Janie described Harry as "cute in a dorky way." That's one of my favourite lines.
This was a really great story, one of my favourites on Mugglenet. Theres nothing I can name that is wrong with this fic.
Really, really nicely done.
Author's Response: Hi, Midnight Storm! I'm glad you didn't find it too fluffy. I was actually looking for a fic that dealt even a little with Harry's primary school days, and when I couldn't find one (although I'm sure they're around) I wrote this instead. I'm happy you like it so much :)
Hello again, Lise :)
I really liked this one. Admittedly, I went through about a quarter of the fic thinking it was Harry's second person, not Hermione's (fail by me).
It was a lovely, flowing piece with good description (something I myself seem unable to pull off). Everybody seems to have a different interpretation of how Hermione returned to her parents, and I like this one.
My only issue is that Hermione Apparates from London to Aus. I'm pretty sure that Voldemort says/thinks that some distances are too far to Apparate, and Australia is quite far from England.
I hope to read more from you soon!
x Annie x
Author's Response: The difficulty to decipher who the character is is a mistake on my part. I'm glad that you liked it though! Also, this fic was written some time ago, so I didn't really realise the technicalities back then. Thanks for the review! ~ Lise x :)
Well, it's me, Annie. I'm chatting with you on AIM right this second ha ha.
I don't really like AU. I mean, I'll read it, but I don't search for it. What I do like, though, is an AU fic where one thing changes, which then changes everything else.
It did move a little to fast for my liking, and I think you could have fleshed out the whole Fred/Angelina concept before the rather abrupt ending. In saying that, though, I'll add that I did like the ending, but it was a bit "they had kids and lived happily ever after", if you know what I mean. A bit of George would have been nice, too, but maybe that's just because I've always secretly been a George fangirl, I reckon.
Well, I'm off to review your other fic now. Adios!
Author's Response: I completely agree with everything you have said. I wrote this fic -ages- ago, so I'm not very pleased with it right now. I often consider going back and rewriting it but I haven't got to it yet. Thanks for the review~ ~ Lise x :)
Hey Soraya[sp?]. I loved this! Felt so sorry for R&Hr, they soooo didn't deserve that. Just one semi-minor nitpick: everyone on the Holyhead Harpies name should start with G.
... that made no sense at all. Let me copy/paste from the wiki: With the exception of Valmai Morgan, all known members of the team have either first or last names that begin with the letter 'G'.
Yeah, so that's Ginny and Gwenog. I s'pose you could change Adams to Graham or whatever.
Author's Response: Hi Annie! I'm glad you loved this. I needed something to break up the story a bit so I thought I'd insert the R&Hr thing. That's my explanation as to why Harry and Ginny had three children and R&Hr only had two. As for the names-beginning-with-G issue, I'm afraid I can't be bothered to change it. I'm just too lazy and A Different Kind Of Magic is my first ever fic on MNFF, so I'm going to just focus on Checkmate (which you'd better be reading...or else...I'll cry!) Anyway, if you want to read the sequel, it's called A Different Kind Of Magic 2: Parenthood. Thanks for your review, Annie, and I hope to see another of your reviews again soon! ~Soraya~
Twenty-two words reduced me to tears.
You have left me speechless.
Author's Response: I'm very glad you liked it so much. :)
What utter fabulousness.
So I've been hanging out at your Author Page for the last hour or so, and everything I've read so far has been favourited!
I love how Dita worked out how arrogant James was, without even seeing it happen. And the final scene with Remus was amazing, too - even if I did get a little teary.
The best thing, however, was how you managed to intertwine racism into the prejudice of Muggleborns. James was SO cute and innocent when he asked her if Paki was her name. The innocence of children (especially wizarding ones).
x Annie x
Author's Response: Thank you very much for the review. I admit to getting a little teary myself at the last scene. ~Carole~
This story was inspired by something Neville said in passing. “…And then Michael Corner went and got caught releasing a first year they’d [the Carrows] chained up, and they tortured him pretty badly…”
This is the untold tale of an unsung hero: Michael Corner.
This was a very good D/A, especially if it's your first one. It was nice being able to see Michael in a different light, and not just as Ginny's ex-boyfriend.
But in regards to the layout, I think the start dragged on a bit too much, and the 'action' scenes were a bit too short.
As for Filch, I think he was a little OOC when he showed mercy. But then again, we don't know what he thought of the Carrows, so it really isn't my place to tell you he was OOC!
The portrayal of Amycus was great. Really creepy, just as he is in canon.
Just one tiny nitpick: In the fifth paragraph from the bottom you've written Room of Requirement. But then you've written it again, in the second paragraph from the bottom, as room of requirement. I suggest you choose one or the other. My copy of DH has it capitalised.
Your desciption is excellent. "A spider crawled past on the floor by his feet, just a shade darker than the darkness that surrounded him" -- that sentence, and others, were really evocative.
I also really liked the ending. This final sentance -- "A lone tear slid down his face" -- tied it all together perfectly.
All in all, a great D/A. You really pushed tesion and anxiety into this fic. I hope you continue to write D/As, because you're awfully good at them!
Author's Response: Hey! Thanks for reading. Yeah, the beginning does drag a bit, but originally that bit was a drabble by itself; it wasn't supposed to have any real action stuff. The rest was added on to make it a one-shot.
As for Filch... let's agree to disagree. I think Filch is much more complex than what we see in the books.
I will take care of the Room/room thing momentarily, thanks for pointing that out!
I'm glad you liked it overall. Thank you so much for your helpful review!
This was great! Really, really nice to read.
However, I suggest you put the disclaimer of "pages 675 and 676..." bit in the chapter notes so the story flows a bit better, if you get what I mean.
Also, I think it's "dorm-mates"not "housemates." "Housemates" makes it sound a bit like Big Brother!
The last sentence -- goodness, I could have died laughing at that! Really really funny sentence that really clinched it all together. Brilliant!
Author's Response: Thanks for the pointers! Your absolutely right. And thanks so much! I was trying to figure out how to end it, and that idea just popped into my head! I'm glad someone laughed!
He he he - I love this! My face oneshot on teh site! :)
Gina has said everything I wanted to say, so yeah ...
The ending is exactly like one of my drabbles ha ha. Great minds think alike (LOL JK I'm as dumb as a post and you're, well, not.)
Uh, this is about the stupidest review I've ever written. I guess I'll just say: I LOVE IT!
Author's Response: Thank you :) Great minds do think alike; we both did the same theme for the Brawl in the TTB last week as well. Spooky! Thanks for the review, and for favouriting. Sarah x
Ooh, this was something different! Usually anything Lily/not-James makes me squirm (and Lily/Seerus makes me puke), but this was great!
I love a jealous Lily, and you pulled her off wonderfully! James and Sirius were also brilliantly IC. Characterizations were spot on.
Onto the style:
I have never read anything like this before. It definitely worked for the start, though I'm not sure about how it went with the wedding scene. I found the dialogue-only style made the reading jerky, which fitted with the bickering, jealousy etc, but not so much with the end. (Just my opinion, ignore if you want)
The American Exchange Student. As soon as I read that, the blonde-haired, blue-eyed girl was wearing a Mary Sue t-shirt. Know what I did the , gmariam? I laughed at the computer screen. God, I love a Mary Sue that Lily Evans hates.Still wondering about her second name - care to share?
I think I would have preferred it of you'd finished with a Lily/Sirius convo after Lily and James were together, rather than at the wedding, though I'm not sure why.
Just re-read the comment. Honestly, all I do is complain, don't I? Sorry about that -- but I really did love this fic!
Loved the whole 'break-up' scene, great job there. LOL'd at the 'restricted section' innuendo, too. Wait -- was that mean't to be innuendo? Or am I just sick-minded? Either way, it was funny.
Really good job, really unique, and you've made me consider maybe reading some more Lily/non-James fics.
Author's Response: Hi Midnight Storm! Thank you so much for the detailed review! I really appreciate it. I'm glad you enjoyed it. I'm shocked it's got you thinking of Lily with anyone else but James. For the record, I am a rabid J/L shipper - check my author's page, lol - but for all sorts of reasons, this popped out instead. At first, it was supposed to be about that American exchange student making Lily jealous, which sort of happened, but then Lily hooked up with Sirius and their story took over. I'm glad you laughed rather than cringed, since the American exchange student is totally tongue-in-cheek, by the way. One of those random AIM conversations, plus I was hoping to submit it for a cliche challenge in the TB. But again, the story went elsewhere. Ha ha! Really good point about the dialogue working for the banter, but maybe not for the more serious conversation at the end. I can see that. Sometimes I just get carried away with the banter, since it's so fun! And although I wrote this over the summer, I've been sitting on it because I just couldn't figure out how to end it. I thought about ending it with a J/L scene, but wanted to keep it Lily and Sirius to fit with the rest of the story. I jumped ahead to show that Lily and James did end up together, and Sirius was quite happy about it. Thanks again for the lovely review! ~Gina :)
Lily Evans is pretty, intelligent, vivacious… and accused of murder. James Potter is privileged, arrogant, and conceited… and her best chance at avoiding Azkaban. If only he wasn’t convinced of her guilt.
With a war looming in the background and evil slowly seeping into the wizarding world, seven years of secrets unravel, and two very different people find themselves caught up in a battle against privilege, intolerance, and greed.
But even in the darkness, and even in the despair, there is still friendship, and love, and hope.
AU - ewwwww!
But this one is WOW. Bloody amazing stuff Dawnie, seriously. Dying for an update here!
Author's Response: Thanks! I'm glad you're sticking with it even though it is AU. I used to have an aversion to AU, too, but then I decided to try writing it... I guess that changed my mind. And hopefully the story will have enough elements from the books that it won't feel so AU.
Merlin's pants, Gina, I love your stuff. Can I just say, I thought it was really clever when you put in that line about Peter 'being clever when he was needed' or whatever it was. Totally alluding to his I-can-betray-my-best-friends-with-nobody-realising-ness.
Man, I wish my Valentine's days were as interesting as Lily's and James's XD
Author's Response: Hi Annie! Oh, thank you so much for the lovely review! I'm so glad you caught the line about Peter because that was totally my intention. I wish I had Valentine's Days like that too, although one year this guy covered my locker in spoons, which was sort of fun. ;) Thanks so much for reading, I hope you enjoy the rest! ~Gina :)
â€śYou and I, we'll be young forever!â€ť *
After a long, interesting, sweltering summer the Marauders are back for their sixth year, and they feel as though their teenage lives have only just begun.
James has been pursuing Lily for years, and he sure as hell isn't going to give up now. Sirius might actually be falling in love (though of course that can't be possible, can it?), and Remus is struggling with problems in his own family. Meanwhile, Peter has to decide how much worth he can put on friends who he will never live up to. And then there's Lily Evans, a girl who's starting to fall for the very man she swore not to. Diana McKinnon, her best friend, keeps finding herself staring at a certain grey-eyed Gryffindor, even though every piece of logic she has tells her that he's trouble.
But even though there's the looming danger of NEWTs, pranks, oily Slytherins, and physical education, a much bigger problem has presented itself. The Marauders' sixteen-year-old world isn't the safe place it used to be. There are rumors of danger and dark magic throughout the school, and of a powerful dark wizard named Voldemort. The Gryffindor sixth years have to decide where their true allegiances lie and how much they are willing to sacrifice for a war that seems impossible to win.
*Title and quote taken from the lyrics of Katy Perry's summer hit Teenage Dream.
Note 3/26: Ok guys so I know that I haven't updated in forever, but I promise I'll finish the story! I'm struggling with some stuff, but hang in there, I haven't forgotten.
Lots and lots and lots of love, Olivia
I'm still here. D; I messaged you on the Beta Forums and responded to your review but i dunno if you got it so I'll try here as well. :D
My old e-mail terminated itself without my knowing, my current one is firstname.lastname@example.org if you haven't given up on me ...
Love and infinite apologies xxxxx
Author's Response: Omg! I thought I'd sent you an email ages ago, but I checked my sentbox and I don't think it ever went through! I've emailed you now though. :) yes, of course, I'd love to still work with you!
Congratulations on validation! Maybe I wasn't such a bad beta after all ...
Author's Response: No worries! You are, as I said in the Author's Note, awesomely awesome. :) :) Thanks so much. Again, you rock. I'm almost done with Chapter Four! ~Olivia <3 P.S. Did I mention you're terribly amazing?