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Summary: A poem about a character seeing something very unexpected within themself. Not a long poem, but hopefully worth the read. It does not really pertain to one character alone, but if you can guess which one I had in mind I will certainly offer you my congratulations!

Categories: Poetry Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 158 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
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12/13/05 Updated: 12/13/05


Reviewer: Dirk Lance Signed
Date: 09/23/10 Title: Chapter 1: A Misshaped Dream

Hi, I notice that you've followed a Swap Quatrain structure in the first 4 stanzas...but you've not done so in the last one. Any reason for that? I'm just curious because it seems to be flowing so beautifully, but then the last one doesn't follow the structure.

Was it done intentionally to bring in the Mirror of Erised? I also notice that the rhyme structure has been changed in the last paragraph, from AABB to ACAA...which breaks the pattern.

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