My Name - Sophie
My age - 13
My birthday - 26th September 1992
Looks - long brown hair (now with blonde streaks!!), blue-green eyes
Fav books - Soooooo many!! Love soooo many lol some Im addicted to atm would be the secret diary series :P:P Romance AND mystery AND drama!! plus theyre teenagers!! yay!!
I am totally in lust with - Ooooh wouldn't you all like to know :P:P
Fav colour - purple
I Live - Australia
Fav HP Book - Half Blood Prince
Least Favorite HP Book- Order of the Pheonix... admit it, we were all thinking it...It sucked to the bone. Like Harry needed to take a chill pill, Ron didnt do anything to deserve the Head Boy badge, and he shouldn't have started playing Quidditch if he had stage fright... Cho and Harry win the worst couple of the year award, I mean could they have BEEN any frostier with each other? Luna scared me... Sirius died weirdly.
Favourite FF Ships -
Lily and James (but only when the info is right, I am not very tolerant of stories that include Voldemort hunting them down because of the profecy when they are only 17)
James Potter is my absolute favourite character, and I refuse to hear anything bad about him. So there, Snape.
I luv harry potter, thats all there is 2 it!! Please Read my first fan fic; Forever Yours, about Lily and James!! Also, when you get bored with that ( by the way.... PLEASE DONT!!!) I strongly advse youto look in my favourite stories section,and read A Very Harry Christmas : One of my All time favourite stories!!
By the way, MY STORY IS OPEN TO PUBLIC!!!!
I've never felt happier!!!
hey! good chapter, I'd watch out for the whole I need so and so reviews, because if a mod finds that you will get a warning, then the chapter will be deleted or if you put it in the queue like that, not accepted, it happened to me as well :( it was good writing, though the books say that Voldemort had risen to power alot earlier than that, i would definately give you the page, but the books are at my mums house, so i cant im sorry!! over all, very good! update soon!
Author's Response: Thanks for the heads up! I already edited that part. I know that Voldemort rose to power a lot earlier, but I needed it later for my plot. I'm glad you liked this chapter, and thanks for your review!
THANKYOU!!! Finally, another story that Lily doesn't hate James in!! :D YOu don't know what a relief that is!! Fantastic story, can't wait for an update, really good start!! Keep going!! You're doing a great job!
Author's Response: Thank you so much for your review! It helps a lot that someone likes my story!
What's happening: It's their seventh year. James is desperate to get Lily, and, at the Hogwarts Express, promises to never ask her out again, and offers that the two become friends. When Lily accepts, James's spirits soar, but since she doesn't like him that way, and he can't ask her out, how will he ever have her for his own?
A special thanks to my sister Kitty and my best friend Emilea for listening to my ideas and reading the story in its entirety! Couldn't have done it without them!
And thanks to my new beta, Emily/LaneTechFreshie! You've been great!
Happy reading! :)
Ohhhhh, "I'm in love with james Potter!" what a cute way to start a story and end a chapter!! :) update soon you should you should :)
Author's Response: yay! thanks a lot! didn't know how my first was gonna be! thanks bunches!
hehe I love this story soooo much, I just love it...Id like to see how this turns out! But how on earth would ducking help them escape a werewolf? lol update soon!
Author's Response: Well, you'll just have to find out! Thanks for the review, you rock!
Hey! I liked that chapter, it was really cute. I like the way that Lily decided to trust Sirius with that information, and he was "serious" about it, unlike his label, which is a crazy, loopy sugar high kid. I relly liked the whole thing so far, even if Lily's mind works straaanngggeee. lol
Author's Response: lol too! yeah, this chapter was definitely fun, and you'll see how it works in the next chapter, which is in queue and being approved! yay!
that was a pretty good start. The only thing, you may want to qrite it that way, so dont take this to heart, only it siunded as James was a little OTT full of himself, if ya know what Im saying. I mean, is that healthy ? lol update soon :)
good start to a story, I think. If you really want some constructive critism, there is only a single thing that I can point out. Loyalty is one of the Hufflepuff virtues, and while many Gryffindors may be loyal as well as brave, they wouldnt be sorted into Gryffindor because of their loyalty. Apart from that, a great start and I can't wait to read more!
Oh wow, that was such really great writing!! I loved the entire thing, you really made the characters come alive, as if they were real people sitting down having a convo!! I don't usually stray far from the Lily and james section in Romance, but I decided to come have a quick look over here, and i'm glad I did! I hope you write many, many more stories!! I'll definitely read them!! :)
Author's Response: Thanks so much, Sophie!! Now I'm always gonna remember you as my first reviewer!! :) I'm so glad you actually enjoyed it, it was a slapdash thing at first and I was certain nobody but me would get it. Thank you so much!
hey wow this is a really gr8 story! you should totally keep it up! I love the way Lily and James seemed to get along, and how you made Lily be sarcastic instead of seriously scary lol keep it up, as far as I couls see there was only one mistake, and it's a really common one! Just Lily said Mom, when British people call and pronounce it Mum just thought I'd mention it! totally great story!! :D
Author's Response: thank you so much! i am so happy you liked it, i am definitely keeping up with it! i guess i made lily a bit sarcastic cause i'm very sarcastic myself. thanks also for pointing out the "mom" vs. "mum" thing, i'm american, so it was helpful! in fact, i'm changing it to mum right now...
i liked the story too, but to add onto the last review while you did most in continuous tense, you wrote things like said and whispered in past tense. if you stick with present tense you need to change them to says and whispers and things like that :P soz just helping out! continue
Author's Response: I didn't mean to write in the continuous tense but I did when I wrote it out on paper and I meant to change it too.
Author's Response: Yeah! I finally changed it! I fixed chapters one and two! Take that my horrible grammer!
That was a good first chapter, I like the way that it started somewhere in the term instead of at the very beginning. James didn't seem to be a bigheaded prick, more of a mischievous teenager, which was good. I liked Sirius and James's interraction with each other, though I just have to ask, Am I right in guessing that you like Sirius more than James? I just had to ask that! It will be interesting to see how you will bring the other Marauders into this, and how you will portray their personalities. I just have to point out one thing: I'm pretty sure that Filch wasn't around yet, because in the fourth book, when Harry is meeting the Weasleys before the 3rd task, Mrs Weasley mentions about how She and Mr Weasley had been out for a nighttime stroll, and Apollyn Pringle, the school caretaker, had caught Mr Weasley, and punished him so badly that he "still has the marks" that was what I remember off the top of my head, so if it isnt word for word sorry, but considering the weasleys and the potters sr seem to be firly close in age, I'd guess that AP was the caretaker. That's all! keep it up!
Author's Response: Thank you! ANd yes, I do like Sirius a bit more:) I know that he wasn't the caretaker, but I couldn't find the page where it said who was, so I just kept it to filch.
Hey! excellent new approach to the Lily/James thing! I'm always up for something new and fresh to read, not to mention write lol Oh wait, that sounded as if I plan to copy yours lol no I would never do that, I just meant I am not a fan of cliches either! hehe I'm going to give this a ten because It was very well written, and it wasn't like most of the other fanfictions about them!
Author's Response: Thanks so much! I'm so glad that you like my approach, don't worry I never thought you meant you would copy it! Cliches are really annoying, aren't they? =)
OK...interesting, I love how you ended the chapter! But, Im trying to vhange all of my reviews to include constructive critism, so don't take any of thisto heart please!! Ok, number one, pretty obvious. First year arent allowed brooms, so James wouldnt have a shooting star or anything like that. second, you wrote Hymn, was a pureblood wizard, who was very close to her parents. Hymn is a girl, so she'd be a witch...like the name though! last, I'm not going to hold this against you, but it seems to me that on this site it's becoming a little too common for James and Lily to start out friends... I'm not blaming it on you, don't worry, it's just that it won't be special before long, and it makes stories like mine seem cliche... Update soon, liking it so far!
Ok, i'm torn in this case. The writing itself is fantastic, with alot of detail, and it really draws you in. The only thing is, it would do so much better with more original materiel, because while the writing is excellent, the plot itself is seeming like a clone Lily/james story. You know, as in James asks Lily out, she turns him down while comparing him to various creatures, it all starts out with James dreaming about kissing Lily and is woken up by his friends... Still very good writing though!
Author's Response: Thanks for your review! I will bear in mind your criticsim because, hopefully, I will be able to write a better story.
Im being the first reviewer alot lately, I love it :) I know two names very well from reviewing, one was my first ever reviewer, and the other was the first ever person to put me on her favs list, and now we're penpals lol ok, I know, nothing to do with the story. Right, loved the story, it was excellent, it was really long, which was good, because i know how hard it can be to keep the story flowing! Go James for standing up for himself!! :) Lily was a little Lilyish, lol sorry but I hate that Lily when she gets like that, she's so dramatic. sexually assulting her, for goodness sake, he was about to kiss her, not well you know lol. Don't worry, you're not losing points for that, because Many people write Lily like that, and who am i to say if that's right or wrong, like how I don't like it when people make snide comments on how I don't write Lily as an overdramatic untrusting thing in my story, when there is no proof, quite the opposite, that she is like that. doing it again, arent I? sorry, 10/10!
Author's Response: Ooh, long reviews! I really like long reviews! I never thought of it as very good, so thanks for giving it a ten. It was interesting for me to write James, because I usually write Lily. The thing is, I sort of think of myself as like the Lily in OotP, and I'm kinda overdramatic, so I think she has to overdramatic for the sake of the character. She's a very strong character, but I would not want to be her best friend. Thanks for the review!
Ok, time for some constructive critism lol Sorry, but it just seemed a little rushed, like one second she loves Craig, the next hes drunk and kisses another girl, Lily gets "heartbroken" and nicks off to kiss James Potter. It just, sort of, sounded like she was doing that to make herself feel better as opposed to actually being in love with him. Good writing style though. :)
Author's Response: ok thank you, i'll keep that in mind for my next one
HEEYY!!! hihihi omg im sorry it took me so long to review, but i have been so busy, what with school and stuff ya know? I'm so proud of you! I just reread it, and it hasd improved so much since the draft I helped you with, it's the little things that count you know? I'm glad that you took some of my advice to heart, it really turned out good, as I said! thanks for the thanks in you account :P hope that you write more, and omce again, congrats!
Author's Response: You know I had to give you props for all the help! I totally understand the school thing so no problem there... It did get better- didnt it... anyway thanks for the good review Im glad you liked it!
aawwwwwwww that was really cute!
Author's Response: thanks! =D
aawwwwwwww that was really cute!
Author's Response: Thank you! =D
hey! another great chapter, with excellent description, and great plot!! I really hope you keep going, and dont start getting lazy like me lol Um...yeah it was very good, and I like how you are dragging out the story!I love the name Tammi!
Author's Response: Thanks, harry_potter_star!! I was so totally excited to go onto my computer after a long, frustrating day and find a review! I actually will only be dragging out first year and seventh, because first year you are being introduced to all the characters, and seventh is when the REAL romance starts...but the way things are going, I might just end up with 50 chapters or so. WITHOUT dragging out each year. So we'll just have to wait and see, I guess.~rivers of gold :)