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Hi! I'm Katrina and I am not J.K. Rowling (just to avoid any confusion there).

I've been writing on MNFF since about 2010, but up until a few months ago had not written anything for quite some time. So I am trying to get back into writing, and have quite a few stories percolating in my head, but I just need to find the time to write them.

I basically only write one-shots (I have one three chaptered story), and they're usually character explorations and snapshots rather than long plots, but I've written about a variety of characters, so hopefully there's something you'll enjoy. I like experimenting a bit with form too.

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Scenes After a War by psijupiter
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 8]

Summary: Past Featured StoryThis is how Harry lives with himself, after.

Categories: Post-Hogwarts Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 7083 Chapters: 6 Completed: Yes
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10/08/13 Updated: 11/05/13


Reviewer: The_Real_Hermione Signed
Date: 11/05/13 Title: Chapter 6: The Forbidden Forest

This is a really interesting story. I really liked the fragmentary style of it and the way you showed Harry through these moments, though I'm not quite sure what I think about this being in anti-chronological order; I'm not sure if it adds anything exactly. It's not that I dislike it, I'm just not quite sure what effect it adds. I did like how even though you are in one moment you are aware of other points in time, particularly in this last chapter when the sections in brackets refer to the future, I think that's really effective in showing the overall effect of the war on Harry.

I think I liked the first chapter the best, it was very understated but Harry's past was simultaneously at the forefront. I also liked how it brought out more trauma from his neglectful childhood, particularly in connection with his own children. And yet Harry doesn't talk about it (as he rarely does in canon) so it is just constantly there. I liked how you played this out throughout the story, particularly in the scene with Petunia, and that was one (of the many) moments that made me tear up.

I also liked the chapter (the second I think?) when you referred to that compromise in Harry and Ginny's relationship. I think you showed their relationship really well; it wasn't disastrous or perfect as a lot of people seem to describe it in canon, it felt real given the lives the two of them have led.

I think you're right, the "all is well" at the end of the series isn't quite satisfying given the trauma many of the characters suffer. I liked how Harry could still appear fairly normal on the outside but those darknesses and shadows were constantly hovering in the corners.

I found the comparison between the Voldemort-baby and Harry's own children pretty disturbing and I'd certainly never thought of them as similar, but as you say in the fic, I guess that was a part of Harry and his children are.

I liked the ambiguity in this final chapter about what actually happened with Voldemort's body, it really shows Harry's mental state. I also liked how you explored Voldemort as a human/non-human through his body.

The story as a whole is a little confusing and ambiguous, I do understand that this is sort of the point, but I wonder if you could have drawn things out a bit more. I'm not quite sure about the ending; I get the idea that Ron and Hermione are feeling happy and Harry isn't really, but I found that last line didn't tie in exactly to the whole story. Maybe I just don't really get it.

Anyway I did really like this story. Your writing is incredibly effective and as I've said I was moved to tears a few times. I really like your exploration of Harry's inner psychology and I think it works really well with canon, I guess I'd just like you to draw it out more. But really really great work, I hope you get more reviews for this it really deserves it!
~Katrina

Author's Response: Thank you for your lovely review! I really struggled trying to balance this story, particuarly the line between the ureal/fragmentedness and having the story still feel coherent. The points you've brought up are definitely the parts I was aware of being weaker! I think this is a fic I will probably come back to in a few years when I'm a but less attached to it and do a rewrite, but I'm glad you enjoyed it even so. :)

 
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