Hi! I'm Katrina and I am not J.K. Rowling (just to avoid any confusion there).
I've been writing on MNFF since about 2010, but up until a few months ago had not written anything for quite some time. So I am trying to get back into writing, and have quite a few stories percolating in my head, but I just need to find the time to write them.
I basically only write one-shots (I have one three chaptered story), and they're usually character explorations and snapshots rather than long plots, but I've written about a variety of characters, so hopefully there's something you'll enjoy. I like experimenting a bit with form too.
Anyway if you have stumbled here by accident, I do hope you enjoy something.
Summary: Andromeda slides between the lines of war.
This was beautifully written - somewhere between poetry and prose with a touch of post-modernism. I liked how you created Andromeda's character and didn't go into explanations of how betrayed she felt by her family, but just showed it through her actions.
I liked the way that in a way she should feel happy, but she doesn't really. The scene where she and Ted have moved into a flat, as there's so much happiness there (the peace of her garden, the cat called Fluffy), but still a letter from Narcissa can mar it.
Anyway, you've already got a series of long reviews and I pretty much agree with all of them, so I'll leave it here. Great fic!!!
Summary: On a night soon after Voldemort's destruction, Charlie tells Ginny the legend of Luceafărul. But is it her story as well?
This was really beautiful, I loved the Romanian story and the interactions between Ginny and Charlie and Ginny and Harry. Your use of imagery was really good, I could completely imagine the setting and the tension. The characterisation of all three main characters was great, too, and I thought the dialogue between Ginny and Harry at the end was very fitting.
There were just a few things at the beginning that didn't quite seem to flow. and the girl who sorrowed on the sofa - can you actually use sorrow as a verb this way? It didn't sound quite right to me... though I may be wrong.
Also Her home was habited by the haunting dead - I would say inhabited instead of habited.
But other than that your writing was absolutely beautiful.
Summary: "There are many stories between the lines." - Jo Rowling, about the Black Family Tree.Cedrella's goal all her life has been to be the perfect Black. She has impeccable manners, commands respect, is always composed, and has never had a friend in her life. But Cedrella has a secret that is about to get a lot more complicated… Septimus is the youngest of seven Weasley brothers. His dearest wish for his seventh year at Hogwarts is to meet the mystery girl he once saw dancing in the Owlery in the dead of night… This story is a romance, but it is also a story about family, owls, and what it feels like to know you are worth something.
I just had to review this because you quoted AVPM at the beginning... well actually that's not the only reason, this is a great story.
You show the context of this story well - as far as I can figure out from the family tree, it's the early/mid 1930's, but you show the way the Purebloods are trying to hang onto something which is really going out of fashion here... if that makes sense. As in, their balls are as formal as what you'd expect in a Jane Austen novel, not something set just before the beginning of World War 2. Which I think is very realistic, because even in canon the Purebloods try to hang on to their old-fashioned society.
Cedrella is an interesting heroine - I wonder what her thoughts are on muggleborns. Because you've shown here that the whole idea of marriage and Pureblood society repels her, but I'm looking forward to seeing her reaction to muggleborns at Hogwarts.
And Charis is very sweet and lovely, but I have this feeling she's going to turn into a trophy wife for some rich Pureblood (Caspar Crouch actually). Their relationship is a little how I imagine Sirius and Regulus to be, though obviously their personalities are very different.
Anyway. That was a bit off topic. Great start for a story :).
Summary: Because Tracey Davies wants nothing to do with her brother Roger, she avoids Ravenclaw House. But will she survive in Slytheirn? And is survival even what matters?
I just read this fic straight through... (I really should have been doing other things, but I was totally hooked!) I loved how you took such a minor canon character and created your characterisation of Tracey. I love how you show that everything she does is completely defined by what Roger does - it sort of makes me think of Regulus Black and the way he is forced to be everything that Sirius wasn't... in the same way, Tracey wanted to be everything Roger wasn't, but for the opposite reason. If that makes any sense :P. Anyway, you summed it up really well at some point when Tracey couldn't decide what to spend her money on or what her career would be because she would have to see what Roger did first, to rebel against it. I'm glad she finally learnt to be her own person at the end. It's terrible how her insecurities drove her to the point where her own family (symbolised by Susan) no longer trusted her.
I loved how you mixed in normal elements of human life - namely jealousy - with something 'big' like the war, because in the end, Tracey was easy to relate to. Being in the shadow of an older sibling isn't exactly unique... look at Ron!
Though what Tracy did was despicable (I mean the way she sucked up to the Slytherins and pretended to agree with them), I'm glad that she finally discovered herself, because she was really better than that (although, isn't everyone, when you finally hear their story? Malfoy, admittedly, was a coward, but had he not been born into a purebloodmanic family, would he have been different? Crabbe and Goyle aren't particularly intelligent, but was that their fault? Most of the Slytherin kids seem to become the way they are 'by default', because of the way their parents are etc.) Anyway... that was a long tangent.
I loved how Tracey ended up valuing Cecilia in the end, and how she felt ashamed for only wanting to be her friend to be in the 'pecking order'. (That whole idea was also extremely realistic). And I loved Theo - not the brave/rebellious 'Sirius' type, just the silent dissident. All in all, I think you did fantastic characterisation of all the Slytherin kids. Also I liked the alienation that Tracey feels from the rest of the school - and the "Potter lovers" - because of being in Slytherin.
The beginning of the whole fic set the mood so perfectly for what was coming up, and how from then on, Tracey would always feel hard done by, even when people didn't mean to spite her.
Sorry about this exceedingly long and rambly review... main point is BRILLIANT STORY as usual :).
Author's Response: Thanks for liking this story so much and for taking the time to tell me so! It's a risky theme - the unsympathetic protagonist - and I know most MuggleNet fans are here to read about the Trio. As you say, Tracey is not at all nice, but there is a reason for her malice. ~ Thank you too for saying that stupid people can't help it. They can't. Crabbe and Goyle are not nice, but were they capable of seeing beyond their families' values? At least Tracey and Theo had brains on their side, so you would hope they could think their way out of Slytherin. Let's face it, Ron had sibling troubles, but he didn't turn to crime, did he? ~ People who over-react to misfortune can set themselves on a very deviant path - witness Regulus Black! - so thank you for caring whether Tracey would be redeemed. I love your long and rambly reviews! GhV
Summary: No one needed to die to go to heaven. It was a truth, and Merope Gaunt knew it.
THANKS to the amazing AMANDA (ahattab33) for beta-ing this. You were scintillating. ;)
This is hestiajones of Hufflepuff writing for Watching the Mirror final one-shot. This story has just been nominated for QSQs in Best Dark/Angsty and Best History. :D
DISCLAIMER: I am not J.K.Rowling.
Why does this only have four reviews??? Like pretty much everything of yours I've read so far, Natalie, this is amazing. I think you did a great job of Merope's characterisation, but I really loved where you went with Tom. The way he was sometimes cruel and very arrogant and how we got to see that it's not only his looks which his son inherited from him.
I loved the idea of Merope hating green and the way that carried throughout the story. I also though the way you fragmented it was great, and in each fragment we saw a gradual change.
One last thing - I loved how you connected her with Tom the barman - especially as in the books, Tom (junior) dislikes the fact that he has such a common name... it was just a really great way of tying everything in together.
Author's Response: First thing, thank you for catching that error in my other fic A Tale of Six Perspectives. Forgot to mention it in my response. >.>
Ron Weasley is staying at Shell Cottage during the Christmas of 1997. These are the thoughts and feelings that occupy him.This is ahattab33 of Hufflepuff, and this is for the "Watching the Mirror" class on the MNFF Beta Boards.
You really captured Ron so well in this fic. He never really talks a huge amount about what he went through at Shell Cottage, and I think you imagined it perfectly.
I loved how you tied canon ideas in such as Ron had finally understood how a person could feel so many things at once. - which is an idea from OotP. The way you brought that into this fic was beautiful.
Anyway... I just absolutely loved this fic, great job!
Author's Response: :D Thank you! I adore DH Ron so so so much, and I feel like THIS time, and the locket scene, are huge turning points in his character. That part about "feeling so many things at once" seemed to fit right in. If only poor Hermione knew! :) Thank you so much for the read/review! ~Amanda
Summary: The whoosh of a speeding Bludger was followed by the scream of a female voice.
Slytherin Chaser Armis Berkley was knocked off her broom, and she fell through the air.
James Potter, Gryffindor Chaser, gripped his broom and sped towards the falling body, even though he knew he’d never reach her in time.
Severus Snape blanched. Berkley always pestered him in the common room, asking him to help her with Charms homework.
Sirius Orion Black jumped up from his seat as the rest of the spectators did. A single obscene curse escaped his lips.
Peter Pettigrew prayed. Dear God, please don’t…no…no…
Lily Evans gasped as an odd monotonous sound rang in her ears.
Remus John Lupin shuddered involuntarily. DUMBLEDORE!
This is hestiajones of Hufflepuff writing for the final in the MWPP class on the Beta Boards. This story has just been nominated for a QSQ in the Best Marauder Era category. :D Thanks!
DISCLAIMER: So not J.K.Rowling.
I absolutely loved this fic... the summary was fantastic and it made me really interested straightaway in how all the characters would respond. Even just in that beginning bit, you did a great job of exploring their characters and showing the differences between them. It was also interesting, as all 6 of these characters are very clearly linked to death in the books.
Just a small nitpick – at the beginning when everyone’s at lunch in the Great Hall, you’ve written: “I thought she was going to-” croaked Peter.
“Yeah,” said Sirius. “I too.”. What Sirius says should be either “me too” or “I did too”.
Anyway. James’ part. Fantastic characterisation and you can really see elements of Harry in his ‘never-give-up’ attitude and the way he blames himself for other people’s misfortunes. I think for James this is a real moment of finding out what he’s made of, and of realising what he wants to do with his life. It links well to the fact that he joined the OoTP later on. He would try, and that was it. - this really summed his part up for me, and again I think it links to his decision later, because there was no guarantee of success or even of helping anyone at all, but all they could do was try.
Severus – once again, amazing characterisation. I think his part is possibly my favourite in this fic. I loved the idea that he and Evan and the others were struggling to get an audience with Voldemort... somehow it made them all just a little more human. Severus’ attitude towards the others was also great – condescending and believing that he knows better than them. I think this is ironic, because presumably he joined that group to want to feel accepted. His resolution at the end is frightening, especially considering he is only 16 at this point, but also very IC.
Sirius – I liked how you made him want to have all his friends together, as it shows how much he relies on them due to his lack of family. I smiled at his comments on Armis – how he didn’t dislike her because she gave him a laugh. he’d love to be… laughing merrily at death’s ugly face.
Yes, that was how he pictured it. Laughing. Full of life. Like a paradox. - that is sooooo Sirius and really perfect to finish his part off with.
Peter – I thought you painted an interesting Peter and honestly would have liked to have seen a bit more of him. I liked how you expressed that thinking about someone else dying really only threatened him because it made him face that one day he, too, would die, and this terrified him. It really sets up what becomes of him later.
Lily – how did you come up with the idea of linking what we see of her on the swing through Snape’s memory to a near death experience and her first encounter with magic? Brilliant!! I also loved her need to die for a purpose, which is of course what she does in the end. I liked the comparison of her character as a child and a teenager verging on adulthood as well – there was something reckless about her as a child which seems to come out in Harry as well.
Remus – I think this one was perhaps a little short as well or something... I loved his revelation at the end, about the value of life, and I think that nicely tied up the whole story, but somehow I think perhaps your Remus wasn’t as original as I felt the other characters were or something. I don’t know, he was still really good though.
So all in all... great fic... sorry for the long rambling review, it ended up being a lot longer than I expected.
Author's Response: I love long and rambling reviews! Especially when they contain detailed analysis and crit. :) You're one hell of a reviewer, and I've reached that point in my fanficcing life when I'm looking forward to hearing from you about everything that I write. Lol!
Summary: It took four Christmases for Andromeda Black and Ted Tonks to get together.
Thanks to my wonderful beta, Sarah (Sapphire at Dawn) for her wonderful edits and for catching all the Americanism, and to Greenius (greennotebook) for her help. This one-shot is dedicated to Amanda (ahattab33), who taught me that romance is pretty much an essential part of one’s life, and of one’s writing. This is my Christmas gift for you, twin.
DISCLAIMER: Definitely not J.K.Rowling.
I loved this fic :). Yes I know it was written about a year ago, but I've recently discovered your author page and am loving everything you've written =D. This was probably one of the best Ted/Andromeda fics I've read - you perfectly balanced humour and seriousness. I could see bits of Tonks (as in Nymphadora) in both of them and thought they were really IC. Bellatrix was great too.
Just one small thing - when I was reading the First Christmas, I found it a bit difficult to figure out exactly what Ted and Andromeda's relationship was at that point - you indicated from their dialogue that they're sort of 'acquaintances', but then Andromeda's playful behaviour indicates that they're a bit closer than that... I just couldn't quite make it out. But from then on it was amazing :).
Author's Response: Getting a review for this story is exciting!
Summary: One shot featuring James Potter, star Chaser of Gryffindor Quidditch Team, in action.
Submitted for James Week in MWPP Class at the Boards.
DISCLAIMER: Not J.K.Rowling
Firstly, I thought your James was great - ridiculously stubborn and never one to let a team down. It was an interesting choice to not even mention Lily... I liked seeing James in his own right without his obsession with her. The other Marauders were good too, and a little bit of Quidditch always adds something to a story. Good job! :)
Author's Response: That was a personal challenge – writing a James-fic devoid of Lily. I wanted to see how it’d do, but – haha! Not sure if it was a success. ; )
Summary: After his recklessness leads to a savage attack on someone he loves, Teddy Lupin sets off on a quest to discover a black unicorn.
The black unicorn is reputed to have magical healing properties.
The black unicorn could be Lily Potter’s only chance of a future.
The black unicorn, he is told, does not exist.
But Teddy is not alone in believing in the animal. Backed by the Scamanders, he travels across three continents in search of a myth, all the while aware that he’s following in his mother’s footsteps.
I am Equinox Chick from Hufflepuff and this is my entry in Round 8 of The Gauntlet.
Disclaimer: I'm not JK Rowling. I doubt that shocks anyone.
I loved this fic, it was a great idea and written really well. I liked how it was a sort of "coming-of-age" for Teddy, and especially liked the part when Luna was saying not anyone could have found the black unicorn... it reminded me of the Mirror of Erised in Philosopher's Stone. The way you jumped around in time was very effective, especially at the beginning it got me right in. I also loved how in the end it somehow became about his parents... as well as Lily and Harry.
The only small thing is that I didn't really like Victoire in this... I think maybe she could have featured a bit more than just an argument, to give an insight into what their relationship had been/normally was? I'm not sure really... it just seemed to be missing a bit.
But great fic anyway, I really loved it!
Author's Response: Mmm, I agree with you, actually. She should have featured more. The trouble was that I was writing a fic for the Gauntlet based on various prompts and it was a tight schedule. If I rewrote, I would have had him going to Egypt to see her or something, but I didn't think of that at the time. Thank you for the review. It's always nice when an old fic gets read and reviewed. ~Carole~
In times of peace, tales of strife and angst tend to fall out of favor with the masses, but stories of happy endings and the concept of everything turning out all right don’t often make for good reading. There are rare occasions, though, when both can be met with equal accord and form a bond in the written word.
The first sentence in the Charles Dickens classic, A Tale of Two Cities, simply states that ‘It was the best of times; it was the worst of times.’ An anonymous writer sent in a letter to Roxanne Weasley’s weekly featurette in the Daily Prophet, telling the story of his father’s murder and his journey to recovery, which seemed to be the incarnation of that very line. Sometimes, it takes a loss for one to truly appreciate what one has in life and even in death.
So I've been gradually making my way through your author page, and eventually I came across this. I think this was really beautiful and had such a great message. There are so many beautiful lines in this, for example regret is much like a potent spice; a little bit keeps us honest, but too much makes everything taste bitter - that's just so perfectly written and so true. This line - I’d like to say that grief will always be a constant companion of mine, but unlike its first vestiges in my life, I no longer allow it to hold dominion over me, to dictate how I live my life. really summed this fic up so well and so beautifully.
I liked the anonymity of the author - even though I could tell that it was Scorpius writing it, somehow not naming him made it a universal story, something for everyone to identify with. The cantankerous uncle sounded a little like Ron, so I'm not quite sure who Scorpius' wife is then - perhaps Lily or Dominique? Anyway, it's not particularly importnat I don't think, for the reason I've just stated.
So, a beautifully written fic with great characterisation and an interesting and important message. Good job :).
I've been of two minds about this story. The challenge for which it was written really didn't call for this type of letter/narrative, so this was my... third(?) go round with it. Originally, there was far more story and less of the 'article', which gave far more background into the story, but it was after this (finally validated) version that I gave up and settled on this. I like the message that I tried to instill in it, and you're correct in assuming that the anonymity was meant to make this a universal concept rather than a single-character story. Scorpius just seemed like a prime candidate to lose his father early, since Draco wasn't exactly in the business of making friends for himself.
I'm happy that you like this story and what it was meant to convey. Again, I love your reviews and look forward to your next visit. :D
When left to their own devices, teenagers manufacture all sorts of ways of getting in trouble. In this case, the trouble is of a completely different breed—mischief under the influence.
Unbeknownst to the flock of Weasley/Potter adolescents, though, the cider from the press at the Burrow is not quite as fresh as they think. While most of them realize that the beverage was suspect, a certain cousin does not, leading to antics, shenanigans, and embarrassments, all on a whole new level.
Oooh, I loved the last line. Somehow it really sums up the whole story, which was a nice mixture of well-written, interesting plot and characterisation and just plain funny. Great characterisation of everyone involved - I loved the part about how Rose and Hugo bicker, just reminded me a little of their parents haha. I also liked how you turned this into a growing up story, particularly for James and Albus (and Rose a bit as well) - it meant that even in such a short story you showed great character development.
I almost felt a little sad for Harry at the end, with the whole thing about his boys growing up, but then you brought in that fantastic last line and I thought that he's still going to have to watch them go through a whole lot more before that time arrives.
Anyway... I think this review has been a rather less sensical (I know that's not a word... though I really think it should be) than normal, sorry about that... But great story!
Just one thing - I wonder, how long would Harry be able to keep the secret from Ginny? I think she would be too aware of how her sons are to not be suspicious, and I can't imagine Harry being able to lie to her that well... I would imagine he'd be a little like Arthur is with Molly.
I'm glad you liked this, because it's probably the first one-shot I'd ever written that I really liked a lot. If you haven't guessed, a little bit of personal experiece went into the making of this story (except I was nine, which is far less appropriate, lol). To the developing young teenage, alcohol is oh, so potent, especially when the cider was made to be alcoholic, not accidentally so. Plus, I make a living off of torturing Albus. :D
My views on Harry's parenting skills are a bit different than normal. He's not always 'there', since his job is demanding of his time and concentration, so when he is around his kids, he wants to make sure they don't see him as the parent who only swoops in here and there to lay down the law. Plus, I think he would understand how embarrassing this would be for Al and feel bad for him. Heck, I felt bad for his as I wrote this, so I couldn't risk his mum's wrath. :P Whether or not she remains in the dark is yet to be seen, hehe.
Thanks for your brilliant reviews. They always make my day (and my f-list loves hearing from you, as well!), so thank you much! Eventually, you'll run out of stories to read, though. lol
Summary: : Remembering the forgotten ice-cream man of Diagon Alley.
This is hestiajones of Hufflepuff writing for the Stirring prompt of the Winter Snows Challenge at the beta boards
Thanks to Elene (CoolCatElly) for beta-ing this. And Jess (ToBeOrNotToBeAGryffindor) and Carole(Equinox Chick), where would I be without your help?
Disclaimer: This is not J.K.Rowling. However, this is someone who wishes she was J.K.Rowling.
Wow!!! This was such a bittersweet story... especially that last line, I was almost in tears. I loved how the article was personal but always stuck to its form. Andrew was a great character, I loved how much of him we got to see through this and how he shared his own life lessons.
And then of course Florean himself, who was characterised wonderfully. It's a pity we get such a small glimpse of him in canon, and you've created such a lovely story for him, I'm sure JKR would be proud :).
Basically I agree with what everyone else has said on this reviews page... this was an amazing fic (and original too), written beautifully and which leaves you thinking when you're finished about its ideas.
Author's Response: Florean, the ice-cream man. I was so shocked to learn in HBP that the Death eaters had taken him. But then, I came across JKR’s article, and voila! I had a story to tell.
Summary: Black daughters are born and raised to marry wealthy pureblood wizards, but Andromeda broke all the rules. This is the story of why, how and when she fell in love with the man she defied traditions for.
This is hestiajones of Hufflepuff writing for the February Challenge - Forbidden Love. And AHEM! It won the fisrt place. ;)
Many thanks to Apurva (DracoGurlFurever) for her quick and excellent work, and also to Bine luinrina for her patience. Plus, I am not J.K.Rowling. *sigh*
Hi Natalie! I think this is my favourite of your Ted/Andromeda fics... I can't say why exactly, but everything about this was just perfect. The dream (or nightmare) at the beginning was the perfect way to start and I loved the contrast you set up between being bound by that sort of marriage as opposed to being "free" with Ted.
Your Andromeda was great and fleshed out really well - I think she's really interesting because she's not as overtly against her family as Sirius and in this fic her temper and arrogance (at times) really fitted with the way she would have grown up. Ted was fantastic, too. (I can really imagine him as Father Christmas lol.)
I also loved your dialogue and the present tense worked really well. So in general I just loved all of it, great job!
Author's Response: Hello Katrina!
During the trip to Godric's Hollow, Hermione, through the course of events, comes to realize that her friendship with Harry had become so much more to her - but not to him. This pain, this disconcerting feeling, however, had nothing to do with Horcruxes.
Let me begin by saying that in general I dislike non-canon pairings, as I think JKR knows best when it comes to her own characters... so when I saw the summary for this, as well as knowing your love of Harmony, I was a little dubious and thought I'd give it a go.
Having said that, I thought this was a fantastic story and you really made sure that Hermione and Harry remained in character throughout the fic. I think it's interesting that you picked up on that line in DH (I mean "You've been shouting and moaning and... things") and decided to write a whole fic about it. It's actually quite believable, particularly as Harry's delirious and thinks that Hermione is Ginny, as I think it's quite clear in canon that Harry never felt anything for Hermione. But you do raise the question that she perhaps may have had these feelings for him, particularly when Ron had abandoned them.
I think the best moment in this fic was when Harry said "Ginny" - you captured Hermione's feelings so well and it was just heart-breaking... even for someone who doesn't think Harry and Hermione should be together anyway!
Anyway, I hope you can make something coherent out of this rather long review... the point is, well done for making a non Harmony shipper enjoy a Harmony story.
When it comes to non-canon, I tend to prefer ships that aren't really established as non canon, such as minor character pairings. I don't actually go against canon all that often, actually. What I do enjoy, however, is building pockets of non-canon within the bounds of canon and make someone reassess what they know about established events. Harry will never, ever know what he said and did as he was thrashing around in the tent, snake venom pumping through him. I see that as my cue to make something up to satisfy my ebil desires. :D
I'm glad you enjoy the story, even with its non-canonness. I really thought it was appropriate that Hermione kissed Harry before Ron, since Ron was always so paranoid about them anyway. Muahahahaha!
Summary: The seven men who loved Hermione Granger.
This is a really sweet fic and a great idea. Nice the way they're sort of chronological, and end with Hermione/Ron. I liked Neville's part, it was especially sweet, and you had some really great insight in Harry's part about Hermione always caring for him. I liked the story line in Hugo's part too. Great idea, and really well-written too!
Author's Response: Thank you so much! I did try to make it some what chronological, so I'm glad you noticed and appreciated it! :)
Summary: The seven men who loved Ginny Weasley.
Another really great "character study"! Ron's part was my favourite - you conveyed his character so well in that excerpt. Albus' part was a close second, you used the little bit shown about him in the Epilogue of DH and created a really believable character.
Author's Response: Thank you! I'm glad Ron's character came through in his section and you liked it!
Summary: The seven women who loved Harry Potter.
A really really sweet story! You pinpointed really well what is so endearing about Harry, especially in Hermione's part. It's a pity you couldn't do Luna, that would've been really interesting, but I agree that all the ones you did were important too. Great story!
Author's Response: Thanks very much! Luna definitely would have been a good one to do, but I'm glad you liked the ones I chose! :)
All I ever wanted to do was fit in and be normal. I wanted friends, a nice boy, marriage and kids, the usual stuff. It wasn’t much to hope for.
Fighting a war can leave scars, and you can't always hide them.
This is Northumbrian of Ravenclaw writing for the Madam Pomfrey One-Shot Triathlon - Round Two: Minor Canon Characters, Prompt 1 (encounter with a mythical creature).
I thought you had a really new and different take on Lavender here and it was really interesting. I also liked that you didn't announce who she was at the beginning - it worked better to build your version of her character and then say who it was. I think what made her most endearing to me reading this was that she had done bad things, but she hated herself for it and wanted to change.It really added something to her character. I also loved the present tense (in general I like writing in present tense too) - it made me feel like I was in Lavender's head and going through everything with her.
All the characters were written well and I liked your attention to detail when it came to them (for example how Harry only looks at Ginny lustfully - I thought that was very IC).
I could go on praising this fic... I thought everything about it was believable and well-written, and I liked that it ended kind of sadly but with a bit of hope.
Thanks for the review.
This story was my first real attempt to push myself. As I’ve (probably) said, writing a story from the perspective of a woman (who is naked for most of the story) on the morning after a one night stand, is a dangerous thing for a bloke to do. Especially as most readers here appear to be female. I was fairly confident that I would not descend into fanboy fantasy, but even so, this was a risk (I’m especially grateful to HestiaJones for her beta input).
As for the ending, well, perhaps you should read my story, Moon, too.
Everything was beautiful, and Hannah felt calmer than she had all day; she felt all of the unsettled thoughts beginning to find their places in her frazzled mind.
I loved this fic - it had a nice balance of Neville/Hannah romance and overcoming their losses from the war. I liked that you included a few laughs (like when Hannah's Dad interrupted them), because it balanced the sadness.
I loved that in the end they were able to overcome their grief and yet still remember their parents. A nicely written fic, and it really showed that Neville and Hannah belong together - before JKR said that he ended up with Hannah, I'd loosely thought Neville and Luna would be together, but your fic makes Neville and Hannah seem perfect.
Author's Response: I completely agree with you--I used to lean toward the Neville/Luna pairing as well. But after I started giving it some more thought, and considered their tragic connection, I fell in love with the idea of Neville and Hannah. It also appeals to me because (in my canon, anyway) they didn't get together at Hogwarts, but later. So glad you enjoyed this. Thanks for taking the time to leave a review. :)