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Hi! I'm Katrina and I am not J.K. Rowling (just to avoid any confusion there).

I've been writing on MNFF since about 2010, but up until a few months ago had not written anything for quite some time. So I am trying to get back into writing, and have quite a few stories percolating in my head, but I just need to find the time to write them.

I basically only write one-shots (I have one three chaptered story), and they're usually character explorations and snapshots rather than long plots, but I've written about a variety of characters, so hopefully there's something you'll enjoy. I like experimenting a bit with form too.

Anyway if you have stumbled here by accident, I do hope you enjoy something.
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Variations on a Theme by Ravencorgi
Rated: 6th-7th Years [Reviews - 5]

Summary: In which Ginny makes a cake, Draco makes a public spectacle of himself, James gives Harry dubious life lessons, and Gideon saves the world, one case of gastrointestinal distress at a time.

Categories: General Fics Genre: Warnings: Strong Profanity

Word count: 4941 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
05/13/09 Updated: 05/29/09


Reviewer: The_Real_Hermione Signed
Date: 08/20/10 Title: Chapter 1: Variations on a (Party) Theme

I liked how it was just little fragments about parties with the ramifications of war in mind... there was also a good balance of mildly depressing ones and warm and fuzzy ones.

The only one that didn't quite sit right with me was the one about Harry and Ginny being invited to parties... I'm not exactly sure why but it didn't quite seem to fit to me.

I liked that the fragments didn't happen in chronological order - I think it was good that they weren't connected by time or character, just by theme.

Great story though!

 

Oblivion by Nitwit Blubber Oddment Tweak x
Rated: 3rd-5th Years [Reviews - 14]

Summary: Past Featured StoryAlice Longbottom lives in a terrifying world; a world surrounded by darkness and unknowingness. Occasionally, these rare moments occur where the fog is lifted and everything just makes sense. At least, until she is once again thrust into devastating oblivion.

Can now be found on Audiofictions - Episode 126!

Categories: General Fics Genre: Warnings: Mental Disorders

Word count: 1965 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
05/25/09 Updated: 06/02/09


Reviewer: The_Real_Hermione Signed
Date: 08/20/10 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

It was a good, albeit sad, story. I felt like I was inside Alice's head and it was interesting to show things from her muddle perspective. I've written a similar kind of story but from Neville's perspective. Anyway, it was a great read, and the last line really summed it up.

 

Calculate Your Dragons by greennotebook
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 3]

Summary: When Bill Weasley needs to get away from England and the stress of rebuilding his family after Fred’s death, Fleur willingly goes with him to Charlie’s Romanian dragon reservation. She wants nothing to do with the actual dragons, however. All too aware of the dangers associated with giant flying lizards, Fleur lives by advice her father jokingly quotes from JRR Tolkien: “It does not do to leave a live dragon out of your calculations, if you live near him.” Can Fleur show Bill that she can handle dragons? More importantly, can she show him why her dragon-facing capabilities don’t matter?

This is greennotebook of Hufflepuff House writing for the Third Task of the Triwizard Tournament.

Categories: General Fics Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 4779 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
06/09/09 Updated: 06/11/09


Reviewer: The_Real_Hermione Signed
Date: 08/20/10 Title: Chapter 1: Dragons

Nice story :). I loved the Tolkien quotes, they tied in really well, and the way Fleur used that as a mantra was great too.

I liked that you had Bill falling apart - from the books he seems to be a strong character, but it shows that after the war everyone breaks at some point. You also created the tension really well between Bill and Fleur.

I found the ending a little cliched, but it was also sweet and nicely rounded off the story.

 

Trine by DeadManSeven
Rated: 3rd-5th Years [Reviews - 1]

Summary: One and one and one is three. Draco - Pansy - Blaise.

Categories: General Fics Genre: Warnings: Sexual Situations

Word count: 1835 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
06/22/09 Updated: 06/27/09


Reviewer: The_Real_Hermione Signed
Date: 08/18/10 Title: Chapter 1: Trine

I liked it, especially that it didn't work out 'perfectly' as that would have been very unrealistic. I thought you wrote the characters well too, and wasn't surprised that Draco was the first to be unhappy with this arrangement. It was also a nice way of explaining Draco's marriage to Astoria, not Pansy.

Author's Response: Poor Draco - he has so much on his mind already, and then he has Pansy bothering him with some kind of open relationship nonsense. It's no real surprise he didn't end up with her, in the end.

I had a fun time finding the voice of the characters - silent Blaise, moody Draco, and Pansy who is a bad person but is incapable of thinking of herself as such. The justifications and internal reasonings made by people who aren't the heroes are more interesting to write, I find.

Thanks for reviewing! Glad you enjoyed the story.

 

Summary: The night Sirius leaves for good, nothing is thrown, nothing breaks, and the front door doesn’t slam shut like you’ve always imagined it would. Regulus remembers the night his brother ran away.

Categories: General Fics Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 1078 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
06/22/09 Updated: 06/22/09


Reviewer: The_Real_Hermione Signed
Date: 08/18/10 Title: Chapter 1: Leaving

Great story! A different view of Sirius leaving... I've read stories where there's lots of shouting etc. I liked how you developed Regulus' and Sirius' relationship, and I thought the last line summed it up really well.

 

Dead and Gone by Karaley Dargen, padfootsgirl1981
Rated: 3rd-5th Years [Reviews - 10]

Summary: After the First War, wizards and witches everywhere were celebrating. But there were still losses, and deaths to be mourned; and in the end, there were more similarities between the good and the bad guys than one might like to think.

Molly Weasley had two brothers, who fought Voldemort and paid with their lives. She always thought that all what happened was horrible, but she never thought it would happen to her own family. And now, people everywhere are celebrating, and hardly anyone thinks of all the heroes that died anymore.

Avery was a Death Eater. He watched many people suffer and die, and never cared - until his friends die for Voldemort’s cause. And now, people everywhere are celebrating, and no one thinks of all the brave and good men the other side had lost.

This is padfootsgirl1981 of Hufflepuff and Karaley Dargen of Gryffindor submitting for the Interhouse Co-Op Challenge in the Great Hall.

Categories: General Fics Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 1894 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
06/28/09 Updated: 06/28/09


Reviewer: The_Real_Hermione Signed
Date: 08/18/10 Title: Chapter 1: Dead and Gone

I really liked it, a nice way of showing that no matter what they do, people are people. Your characterisation of Molly was really good - her confusion between joy and sadness but eventually her overwhelming desire to protect her children.

I liked the last line about "The meek shall inherit the Earth", although I would have enjoyed you exploring that a bit more. But great story!

 

Hogwarts, Reunited by ProfPosky, Cheshlin
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 10]

Summary: Teachers and students returned to Hogwarts the September after the battle to suspicion and prejudice. What can they do to pull all the houses together as a single Hogwarts, rather than separate houses under one roof?

This story is an entry in the Cooperative Challenge for June of 2009 by Cheshlin of Slytherin and ProfPosky of Gryffindor.

Categories: General Fics Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 8950 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
06/28/09 Updated: 06/28/09


Reviewer: The_Real_Hermione Signed
Date: 08/15/10 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

I enjoyed this fic, it was a hopeful way to look at the mess left in the wizarding world at the end of DH. I liked how Draco had changed, but not too much and that Pansy was still just the same.

Just a few times you seemed to repeat people's thoughts or ideas and it interrupted the flow a little.

The idea of Hagrid becoming Head of Gryffindor was sweet, althought I thought a little unrealistic, but it worked in your story.

I also thought it was a bit strange that Astoria didn't know why everyone avoided Malfoy... when all the other students understood this. Especially with Daphne being in Malfoy's year...

Overall though I really enjoyed it.

Author's Response: Thank you so much for the review! This fic was a contest entry that we wrote together. It was my first time writing with another person, so that probably accounts for any glitchiness. Cheshlin is an awesome person to write with! I have actually been a head of house in a school that was not a boarding school. I know Hagrid is nothing like Minerva, but with her there to coach him along I am not sure he couldn't do it. Good point about Astoria. I am so glad you enjoyed it! I hope you will check out other fics Cheshlin and I have written individually!

 

Moments by ahattab33
Rated: 3rd-5th Years [Reviews - 29]

Summary:

Have you ever thought about those moments that really defined your life? The ones that were pivotal, life-altering? They can be as obvious as your wedding day, as defining as the birth of your child...or as small as a moment in time, as subtle as a glance between one person and another.

The greatest moments of our lives can sometimes be the shortest and simplest of them all.

A missing moment from the Half-Blood Prince and part of the "Moments" series.



Categories: Harry/Ginny Genre: Warnings: Sexual Situations

Word count: 1469 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
06/30/09 Updated: 07/04/09


Reviewer: The_Real_Hermione Signed
Date: 03/18/11 Title: Chapter 1: Moments

Simply beautiful! Personally I love fics in second person, but when they're not written well sometimes they don't work so well, but this was just so effective, I can't imagine this story from any other perspective.

Your characterisation of Harry and Ginny was just perfect... I could see this scene happening in my mind's eye and it worked so well.

I also loved that the last line of dialogue was the only speech you used in the fic - it showed that Harry and Ginny know each other so well that they don't particularly have to talk to enjoy each other. And it really added to the "moment".

Anyway, beautiful fic!

~Katrina

Author's Response: OMG I didn't realize I had never responded to this!! I know a lot of people are hesitant about 2nd POV, myself being one of them, and I haven't written anything else in it since- this just started in that and seemed so natural for some reason. So, thank you! I love H/G myself, so I'm glad that you think my characterization was good! I wrote everything in the beginning just to get to that last part. :) Thanks for the read/review! ~Amanda

 

I'll Pick You Up by MagEd
Rated: 6th-7th Years [Reviews - 362]

Summary: Past Featured Story“Guilt brings people together. It’s a takes one to know one type thing.”

James Potter has always been a spoiled, arrogant, lazy show-off. When he enters his final year at Hogwarts School, he’s Head Boy . . . and he’s still a spoiled, arrogant, lazy, show-off. But because of that terrible summer, he’s also guilt-ridden.

Lily Evans has always been a self-righteous, impatient, temperamental know-it-all. When she begins her last year at Hogwarts, she’s Head Girl . . . and still a self-righteous, impatient, temperamental know-it-all. But the first night back — and the murder that takes the entire school by surprise — leave her guilt-ridden as well.

With the darkness that’s surrounding the Wizarding world slowly seeping, at long last, onto the grounds of Hogwarts and into the lives of James Potter and Lily Evans, what comes next?

*Completed*

Categories: James/Lily Genre: Warnings: Character Death, Sexual Situations

Word count: 138022 Chapters: 22 Completed: Yes
Published:
07/07/09 Updated: 09/04/10


Reviewer: The_Real_Hermione Signed
Date: 09/08/10 Title: Chapter 22: Epilogue

Great story - nice mixture of romance, mystery and angst. I have to say that after reading the first chapter I wasn't really into this story, but things picked up pretty quickly from there so I got really into it.

To be honest, all the smoking and getting drunk annoyed me initially (with the smoking I had to remind myself that this was set in the 70's, not now!), but that is quite possibly because I'm a goody-two-shoes and quite naive and don't like to think that characters I like would do that...

James was more egotistical than I expected, but in a way it worked nicely in this fic to lighten the mood. You certainly kept everyone completely in the characters you created for them - both canon characters and OC's. I liked your portrayal of Regulus and of Grace and their story, and Sirius' actions at the end were very believable. It was a nice touch that Grace came around in the end (as in stopped saying that Jilly deserved what she got etc.). You created Jilly's presence very nicely, although she was dead for most of the story she was one of the more prominent characters.

You're very good at finding a balance between humour and darkness, I've found this in your other stories too, and it definitely made me want to keep reading.

Rosier using the Imperius Curse on Lily was very effective - quite different to the usual Cruciatus Curse - and also a very painful scene to read.

The way the chapter titles fitted together was also very creative.

All in all, it probably wasn't my favourite of your fics (I can't exactly pinpoint the reason) but it was still very nicely written and a great story!

Author's Response: Thank you! I absolutely detest smoking, but I honestly think they would have in the 1970s. I'm glad you liked the story despite that and the drinking and that. And I'm glad you liked the characters, even if James was a little egotistical. I really wanted to do right by all the characters in this story. And I'm so happy you liked Jilly's character -- I wanted to give readers an idea of her characters and give her a presence in the story, but I wasn't sure that could be very well accomplished if she were dead for the whole story! I'm glad you liked her :)

 

After Breakfast by Northumbrian
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 29]

Summary: After the Wedding comes the reception. Once the guests are greeted and seated, the meal is served, the Wedding Breakfast.

After breakfast? The speeches.

Categories: Ron/Hermione AND Harry/Ginny Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 4712 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
07/13/09 Updated: 07/17/09


Reviewer: The_Real_Hermione Signed
Date: 03/17/11 Title: Chapter 1: After Breakfast

Your perfect grasp of JKR's characters continues to astound me - this one-shot was funny, well-written and just perfectly characterised.

Using Harry as your narrator worked really well, and I think you captured his voice perfectly. I loved the details - especially people, like Hermione's Uncle George, or the conversations other people were having (eg Katie, Demelza and Colin) - it really set up the scene of a wedding in my head and made it so realistic. If you'd told the story from Ron or Hermione's point of view, I think it would have been slightly limited as they wouldn't have been as aware as Harry, who wants to make sure everything runs smoothly.

I liked your Ginny in this too, particularly her behaviour with Steve, and I thought this was a great description of her - "famously fiery fiancée". Love the alliteration.

The idea that Hermione has to remind Ron of whom he's meant to thank was very in character.

I also loved Harry's speech - not only was it humorous, but it really showed how well Ron and Hermione fit together, and particularly showed up Ron's good qualities, which I liked, as a lot of people in fanfiction say that Hermione's too good for Ron, which I personally don't think is true, it's just that Ron's better characteristics seem to often be overlooked. (Oh dear, that was a long sentence.) Here's an example of what I mean - ‘Ron is my best friend; he’s brave, generous, clever and funny. He’s right more often than he thinks he is. He’s certainly right more often than Hermione thinks he is.’. What a great line!

Anyway... I could praise this fic for a long time, but I'll leave it here.

~Katrina

Author's Response: you’re right, Ron and Hermione would have been in a whirl, although Harry was (I hope) panicking a little about his speech too.

I’ve always assumed that Ginny will instinctively defend Harry, even when he’s wrong (at least in public). Ron was dealing with a Muggle wedding, although the room doesn’t really have much to do, there is a list of people he should thank.

I tried to make Harry tease, praise, and make fun of both Ron and Hermione, while avoiding any mention of magic. If Hermione is too good for Ron, then I suspect that she’d

 

Escape by inspirations
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 6]

Summary:

‘What do you want, Sev?’

‘I want you to walk with me.’



Categories: Severus/Lily Genre: Warnings: Abuse, Mild Profanity, Violence

Word count: 2218 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
07/26/09 Updated: 08/03/09


Reviewer: The_Real_Hermione Signed
Date: 11/05/10 Title: Chapter 1: Escape

Your writing is really impressive - the imagery was perfect and you captured Severus' home life really well. Your characterisations of Lily and Severus were great too, and despite the fic being from Severus' point of view I could understand where Lily was coming from too.

Just one line bugged me a bit, right near the beginning you said "Hm. The sun will never shine when my Dad's around". I thought the "Hm" sort of ruined the flow a bit.

But it was a great fic, the tension was really well shown and your imagery was perfect.

Author's Response: Thank you so much! I will take a look at that line if I get a moment, too :) xx

 

Sunday Lunch with The Malfoys by hestiajones
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 7]

Summary: A one-shot fic where Teddy Lupin goes to The Younger Malfoys to have lunch with them for the first time. A lot of hope for the future hangs on the success of this lunch. Read to find out what happens. ;-)

Nominated for a Quicksilver Quills in the Best Post-Hogwarts Fic category. Thank you Ari!

Categories: Next Generation Genre: Warnings: Mild Profanity

Word count: 6318 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
08/03/09 Updated: 08/12/09


Reviewer: The_Real_Hermione Signed
Date: 10/18/10 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1: Sunday Lunch with The Malfoys

I really liked this fic - the balance of old Draco/new Draco was perfect, and I liked the way Astoria was changing him. It was nice to see him trying so hard, but still slipping up and feeling awkward easily.

Scorpius was also very nice - very mature for his age, especially in the way that he never asked for more than what he had, and seemed satisfied with that (eg when Teddy asked him how many people play Quidditch there, and he didn't mind that there were only 3 of them).

Astoria was portrayed very nicely as well. It was nice how you portrayed her being able to see straight through Draco's old ways/awkwardness.

Also, the setting as something so commonplace was perfect, as it was an event that would quite possibly change all their lives.

I really enjoyed it :)!

Author's Response: Hello!



This was my first one-shot. Actually, it was the first fanfic I ever wrote with 'seriousness'. I'm somewhat nervous about it. It feels so good to hear that you liked so many things about it. :D Thanks for reading and reviewing!



~Natalie

 

The Waiting Game by Equinox Chick
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 20]

Summary: The waiting room at St Mungo's is a dreary place. Ginny knows it better than many people, for she spends her days there waiting -- and hoping.

This is Equinox Chick from Hufflepuff writing for the extra credit One Floo over the Fwoopers Nest category in the Bookbasilisk Summer Challenge.

I would like to thank Apurva (DracoGurlFurever) for beta'ing this for me and making some great suggestions.

I am not JK Rowling - I doubt that shocks you.

Categories: Dark/Angsty Fics Genre: Warnings: Mental Disorders

Word count: 1950 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
08/07/09 Updated: 08/07/09


Reviewer: The_Real_Hermione Signed
Date: 01/18/11 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

This was so sad and beautifully written. I think you really grasped the tragedy of Alzheimer's so well. It was all the more poignant that you wrote about the Weasley family, who are so close. It's so devastating.

I loved the line "Lucky Fred, who never had to witness this." - I think that really showed how emotional and painful this is for the family.

I also liked that Ginny wasn't remembering things as well as she used to... it provided a nice comparison.

Anyway, you tackled a challenging topic really well and this was great.

Author's Response: Thank you very much. Ginny was basically me in that fic so perhaps wasn't that well characterised, but I wanted this awful thing to happen to a close family because if it had been Lucius, for instance, no one would have been that upset. Thanks again ~Carole~

 

Twilit Confessions by ahattab33
Rated: 3rd-5th Years [Reviews - 25]

Summary:

After returning from Australia with the Grangers, Ron realises the moment to make some important confessions to Hermione has come.

Inspired by the Ludo song, "Streetlights." A part of the "Moments" series.

Categories: Ron/Hermione Genre: Warnings: Sexual Situations

Word count: 2696 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
08/14/09 Updated: 08/25/09


Reviewer: The_Real_Hermione Signed
Date: 03/18/11 Title: Chapter 1: Streetlights

Hello again,

Another fantastic story! I hadn't heard this song before, so I youtubed it and listened to it - the mood really fits the song.

I think you captured a fantastic moment here, and your characterisation of Ron was wonderful. I think it is important that he told Hermione all that at some point - I mean about Lavender and the Horcrux - and this was a great time to tell it.

I wasn't so sure about Hermione's response to Ron talking about Viktor - in a way, it seems IC for her to want to take Veritaserum to prove that she's telling the truth, but at the same time, I think she would be telling Ron that it was years ago and it's not relevant... so yeah, I just wasn't sure about that.

Also, when Ron asks Hermione out, she responds by apologising - I assume this is because she left it for a few minutes before she answered and Ron got nervous or something... but perhaps you could put another line in there about Ron going stiff or something? It just wasn't entirely clear.

Anyway, I hope you don't feel like this was a negative review - I actually think this is a fantastic story, there were just a few little things. Well done!! :)

~Katrina

Author's Response: Thank you for the read/review! The song is fabulous, and I'm just tickled pink you listened to it. You brought up two points several other people brought up, and I've explained them in response to other reviews (1- the Viktor Krum thing is Hermione misunderstanding what Ron is leading up to, but I still think I just wrote it badly and it seems like she's overreacting (and she might be...I need to re-read it), and 2- you are spot on in that Hermione apologizing is because she didn't answer right away, but I don't think the entire end scene is entirely in character anyway). I think I need to consider a re-write of a couple of things, so thank you for bringing them up! But- I am glad you enjoyed the story, and I am really glad you enjoyed the song, too! Thank you very very much for the read/review! It is much appreciated! So sorry for the late reply, by the way! ~Amanda

 

Flying Over Memories by sorrow_of_severus
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 7]

Summary: Harry has lost so many people he loved throughout his life, most recently his best friends since childhood and his wife of many decades. Now a tired old man, he never expected that his life would begin again, so to speak, when his granddaughter tries to convince him to replace his owl.

Categories: Next Generation Genre: Warnings: Character Death

Word count: 2034 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
08/17/09 Updated: 08/25/09


Reviewer: The_Real_Hermione Signed
Date: 10/18/10 Title: Chapter 1: Flying Over Memories

This was a really sweet story, I loved it. A nice idea to have his granddaughter help him get over something like this. It was also sad, having him the last to be alive of his friends, but effective in this story. Good job!

 

For I am a Mother by hestiajones
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 11]

Summary: Voldemort and the Death Eaters are waiting for Harry Potter in the clearing. Among those present is a woman, Narcissa Malfoy, who is considering her family’s fate. Then, Harry Potter comes and the Dark Lord casts the Killing Curse...yet, Harry, as Narcissa finds out, is not dead. Why does she decide to lie for him?

Categories: Dark/Angsty Fics Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 1217 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
08/23/09 Updated: 08/28/09


Reviewer: The_Real_Hermione Signed
Date: 02/07/11 Title: Chapter 1: For I am a Mother

I can't believe how you managed to create so much of Narcissa's character in this short story! It was a very interesting fic, as with the same dialoge as in DH, you have created a story that is almost entirely different from the original.

I think it was great that you achieved to humanise Narcissa - in canon we see nothing good of her, and yet here it is obvious that she truly cares for Draco more than herself.

I also liked your characterisations of Lucius and Bella - in just a few sentences you really managed to capture them.

I really loved the line How much longer do I have to wait? How much longer till I learn of my son’s fate?, because it just had that bit of rhyme and rhythm which really added to your prose writing. I also loved hearing Narcissa's thoughts throughout, and that you wrote in present tense.

But when I reach him, I am irresistibly reminded of Draco. I thought this line was great too - it shows Narcissa's desperation when she is reminded of her "perfect Pureblood" son when she sees the ultimate blood traitor Harry. I also thought that it created an interesting connection between the two boys, and reminded me of the fact that Harry is motherless...

Anyway, this was yet another fantastic fic from you... I don't know where you get all the ideas from!! Beautifully written and great characterisation!

Author's Response: Hellloooo! :D

This was one of my earliest fics. In fact, I'm pretty sure this was the third complete fanfic I'd ever written and published. When I'd first started, I used to write the Malfoys and Blacks more often than the other characters. I don't know why - I don't even like them or call myself fans of them, except Sirius. This isn't important, though.

I've always found Narcissa more fascinating than both Bellatrix and Andromeda. This scene in Dh, especially, is where we see her love and strength; to me, it seemed like a great moment to write because I wanted to go into what she was thinking.

A friend of mine - ToBeOrNotToBeAGryffindor- calls my style 'poetic junk'. :D It's weird that my poems have very prosaic language and almost never has rhymes, while my prose - not all of it, of course - tends to have rhymes and rhythms and flowery language. For this fic, it was an approach I used deliberately. It is packed full of emotion and fear and excitement, and in Narcissa's case, urgency, too. I wanted it almost to sound like a prayer.

Thank you - I wish I knew your name so that I could mention it in my thanks - for all the reviews you have given me these past weeks. They have added a lot of joy to my days.

~Natalie

 

Hermione's Christmas Gift by DivineQuill
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 4]

Summary: It’s almost Christmas time and a certain Ronald Weasley is having trouble finding his other half the perfect Christmas present. Even with some help from his best friend, can Ron find a gift that’s right for Hermione? Set during the Christmas after the Epilogue takes place in the seventh book.

Categories: Post-Hogwarts Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 4009 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
08/26/09 Updated: 09/01/09


Reviewer: The_Real_Hermione Signed
Date: 04/10/11 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

I really enjoyed this story... I think mostly because your characterisation of the trio and Ginny was fantastic. I liked the sort of tonge-in-cheek style you wrote in, which started off in the first paragraph - It was nearly Christmas and Ron still hadn’t gotten a present for Hermione. Naturally, this made him very anxious, but instead of getting up and actually doing something about it, he instead chose to vent his feelings of frustration by pacing nervously back and forth across Harry and Ginny’s sitting room... Great start! I loved the idea of the story - it was typical of Ron, but also very sweet and really showed the relationships between the trio.

I wonder how Hermione managed to get approval for the car... I suppose defeating the evillest (I'm pretty surethat's not a word...) wizard of all time gives you some influence.

Just a few things - it's Armando Dippet, not Dippit, and Hugo is two years younger than Rose, so if she's in her first year, he wouldn't be going to Hogwarts for another year and a half. They're just small things though, they didn't detract from the story.

Your writing flowed well and your dialoge was excellent - you could tell immediately which character had spoken.

~Katrina

 

Educating Rita by KarasAunty
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 25]

Summary: Past Featured Story

One formidable Longbottom grandmother and two mischievous Weasley twins teach Rita Skeeter a very public lesson...

UK English, canon ish , humour.



Categories: Humor Fics Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 3971 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
09/01/09 Updated: 09/06/09


Reviewer: The_Real_Hermione Signed
Date: 02/09/11 Title: Chapter 1: Educating Rita

That was absolutely hilarious!! I don't know where you got the idea from... but it was completely genius! Firstly, your characterisation of Mrs Longbottom was spot on. Her inner monologue about Diagon Alley boarding up and her pride in Neville was exactly how I would imagine her acting.

Fred and George were also characterised well, and I loved how your use of humour flowed naturally and wasn't at all forced or clunky. "Diarrita Skeeter" really made me laugh.

Which brings me to my next point - you portrayed Rita Skeeter very well and showed a slight change from in the books - she's not quite as cool, calm and collected and more likely to go off on rants about Harry. Which I thought was very in character for her.

I liked that despite the humour in this fic that you kept reality into it... especially this line It seemed her grandson was finally living up to the Longbottom name., which reminded me of the fact that up until this point, Augusta had never really valued Neville. You also managed to bring in an underlying feeling of conflict going on outside, and gave the feeling that whilst the Weasley's shop might be a refuge, there is danger and fear outside (which was demonstrated humourously by the vendor at the beginning).

So basically... I really loved this and how your humour was clever and yet the story remained entirely realistic. Great writing and characterisation!!

Author's Response:

Wow, what a brilliantly detailed and very welcome review. I'm chuffed to bits you enjoyed 'Educating Rita' so much and speak so highly of it. This was the first time I'd written any of these four characters, so I was a bit nervous about it - but I just knew that a story about the unlikely partnership of stern Augusta and carefree prankstrs George and Fred could work out well, given the right situation. She is so fabulously stalwartd, old school and stiff-upper-lip, and the two lads are so gregarious and effervescent ... Poor Rita. I almost feel sorry for her.

Almost ...

Glad you had so much fun reading 'Educating Rita'.

 M ;)

 

Becoming Rita by hestiajones
Rated: 3rd-5th Years [Reviews - 22]

Summary: Past Featured StoryRita Skeeter is an infamous journalist whose "savage quill has punctured many inflated reputations." But was she always like the annoying pest who Harry knows? What about her story? How did she become the Rita Skeeter we all love to hate?



This is hestiajones of Hufflepuff House writing for the Untold Story Challenge. It won the challenge, and has been nominated recently for a QSQ in Best General category. :D



Thanks to Fresca (Colores) for betaing! You really helped me give the story a coherent whole. And to Carole (Equinox Chick) too, for the “revenge against the ex” tip. :D



DISCLAIMER: All characters and premises belong to J.K.Rowling. However, the Corner brothers, Simon Rosier and the Thorntons are mine. ;)

Categories: Dark/Angsty Fics Genre: Warnings: Mild Profanity, Sexual Situations, Substance Abuse, Violence

Word count: 9987 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
10/13/09 Updated: 10/17/09


Reviewer: The_Real_Hermione Signed
Date: 02/04/11 Title: Chapter 1: Becoming Rita

I think I read this a while ago and forgot to leave a review... anyway, I absolutely loved this. The short fragments perfectly demonstrated the way Rita changed - I liked how in each one, she became slightly more like the Rita we know in canon. I really liked how you drew on the idea that most evil/nastiness comes from a fundamental insecurity and the joy to finally feel worth something. Your past for Rita made her such a believable character, and one we could identify with and pity, even at the end when she had become such a monster.

At the end, I was left with a sad sense of "what could have been" between Rita and Nathan, which you constructed really well. Of all the characters, I felt bad for him the most. Althought I guess you intended it that way...

The love quadrangle (I guess that's what you call it) between Rita, Henry, Margaret and Simon was a perfect backdrop and catalyst for this story, and I really liked your characters. Henry especially wasn't quite as conventional as I'd initially expected him to be.

Anyway... I'm going on a bit here, but I think this is a truly exceptional story, it's very original and believable and written so well.

Author's Response: Hello there! :)

Nathan was supposed to be...yeah, the person one must feel bad for. I have been asked before by a friend, if Rita had stuck with him, would she have still gone bad? That is complex, because I feel Nathan couldn't have made her happy; he seems the ideal person as he loved her, but Rita has so much to compensate for. Coming back on topic, yes, I very much intended it that way. :)

It's always wonderful to hear from readers that they liked my OCs. I do work hard at making them sound believable (and making sure they don't go the Sue/Stu road eep!), so thank you for telling me that. In fact, thank you for your entire review! It was an amazing thing to read. :D

~Natalie

 

The Hunt by Liandrin
Rated: 6th-7th Years [Reviews - 8]

Summary: It was a subtle game he played, stealthily hunting down his prey, but he was good at it - that is until he came upon the lioness. On that fateful day, the tables would be turned. The conqueror would become the conquered; the hunter would become the prey.

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A sophisticated crack!fic. ^_~

Categories: Humor Fics, Draco/Ginny Genre: Warnings: Sexual Situations

Word count: 3932 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
10/14/09 Updated: 10/14/09


Reviewer: The_Real_Hermione Signed
Date: 11/25/10 Title: Chapter 1: The Hunt

Hilarious!! Your caricature of Draco was very amusing, but I loved how Ginny beat him in the end! I loved it when Draco was telling himself off for getting obsessed with Ginny, but also just his general arrogance was very amusing and the way you wrote it was perfect.

I have to say, I'm not a huge fan of this pairing (that's why I haven't read a lot of your stories, even though I think you write very well), but this certainly gave me a laugh and it was well-written.

I was wondering at what point this was set... because if it's while Harry's hunting Horcruxes, that year at Hogwarts was pretty dark and I can hardly see this situation occurring. But then again, it doesn't really matter, it's AU by having Draco and Ginny paired already, and it was an amusing read :).

Author's Response: Thank you. ^^ This was one of those fics that just wrote itself. I wrote it for a friend in under two hours, and I have to say it's one of my favourite DG fics I've written, even though it's crack! Lol. You got to love Ginny in this, being the dominant one, and I plan on writing a companion fic to this, from Ginny's PoV. Maybe I'll include Harry. Hehe.

Yes, everyone asks what Harry was doing during this. Lol. Since it's a crack!fic, I figure Harry is just off adventuring somewhere. If it was a true crack!fic, however, Harry would probably be an evil git. That's the one thing I dislike about DG fic nowadays: they tend to write Harry as evil or uncaring. I just like the boy to be clueless when it comes to women. ^_~

Thank you so much for reading and reviewing. It's nice to get non-DG fans to read my work. I promise more non-DG fiction in the future. ^_^

~Lia

 
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