Hi! I'm Katrina and I am not J.K. Rowling (just to avoid any confusion there).
I've been writing on MNFF since about 2010, but up until a few months ago had not written anything for quite some time. So I am trying to get back into writing, and have quite a few stories percolating in my head, but I just need to find the time to write them.
I basically only write one-shots (I have one three chaptered story), and they're usually character explorations and snapshots rather than long plots, but I've written about a variety of characters, so hopefully there's something you'll enjoy. I like experimenting a bit with form too.
Anyway if you have stumbled here by accident, I do hope you enjoy something.
Summary: The Second Wizarding War is at its peak. What does it look like to an observant seven-year-old Muggle boy?
I really liked this idea and you wrote it really well. Filtering everything through the mind of a 5-year-old was a really good idea and really effective. I have a few small things to say - firstly, I really loved how initially you referred to wizards as "it" instead of "he", but then when the Death Eater came into the boy's house, you changed and calle him "he". I liked the way you objectified wizards, so this seemed a bit strange to me. Also, you've used the word 'unexplainable' and whilst I think that's now an accepted word, it's meant to be inexplicable... but that's nothing major. Early on in the story you also wrote "I've another one before, as well..." - you're missing 'seen'.
Anyway, it was written really well and it was very haunting and effective. I loved the bluntness of your character - "Daddy cried for a long time, because Mummy and Emma werent asleep. They were dead." So yeah, great fic :)
Author's Response: Sorry about the mistakes -- I'll change them now! :D
Summary: The Triwizard Tournament is happening at Hogwarts School of Witchcraft and Wizardry this year. After having just lost the Quidditch World Cup, Viktor Krum heads to England with high hopes of winning the tournament and regaining what he views as his lost glory. But while there, he meets someone special, and suddenly, always being the victor doesn't seem quite as important anymore.
A Hermione/Viktor story.
This looks like it's going to be really interesting! I like how you've set Viktor's character up - especially with the part about how he hates people who only care about him for his fame, which is explore nicely through Simone. It makes it really believable that things could work out between Hermione and him, because she understands fame from beings friends with Harry.
I thought it was a bit strange that you wrote "My goodness, Viktor, you are very vet!" . Presumably at home Viktor and his mother would speak Bulgarian, not accented English, so perhaps you could have written "My goodness, Viktor, you are very wet," his mother said in Bulgarian.
Anway, it's a really promising start and I like the way you've explored Viktor so far :).
Author's Response: Thank you! And yeah, you're write about the what his mother said. Thanks for the tip, and I'll go change that. :)
Summary: Lily Evans is having a bad day. When she decides to take a sip of Felix Felicis, things turn out quite different than she anticipates--for both her and James Potter.
Once again your portrayal of Lily and James was great and I liked the unconventional way you used to get them together.
I wasn't so sure about how you seemed to portray Lily's relationship with her friends... from what is known in canon, she seems like she'd be the loyal type who'd share everything with them and the way she just flippantly left them seemed a bit strange... but that's just my interpretation.
Anyway, I really enjoyed it, it was nicely written and your characters were great :).
Author's Response: Thank you for the review! I'm glad you enjoyed this take on it all. I find it amusing that you are picking on Lily and not any number of things I would have pegged, lol! ;) I see your point, but I would like to point out Lily wasn't being flippant when she left them: she was in a terrible, rotten mood. She didn't want to hang out with them, and they hardly noticed her lag behind. I can recall times when I didn't want to hang out with people, and I can recall times where I did just leave. As for her sharing everything, that's possible, but we don't know that for sure. And again - this thing with James is something she's not sure about, so maybe she didn't feel ready to talk with her friends about it. Or maybe she did off the page. ;) So that's where I'm coming from on Lily. I'm glad that little bit didn't distract from the rest of it - thanks so much for the review! I really appreciate your lovely compliments! ~Gina :)
Andromeda Black was never as sweet or quiet as her little sister, nor as clever and bold as her older sister. Andromeda was never anything in particular. She certainly never imagined that she would someday betray her family.
Andromeda is just herself. And for Ted, that's enough.
Character Exploration Fic.
I liked how you explored Andromeda's character in a slightly different way to what I've read before, with the whole "father's daughter" and "mother's daughter" idea. It was really effective. I have to say, the first few bits were my favourites, because it shows that Andromeda is like any other girl and just wants to please her parents. I also liked how you explored Bella's descent into madness/insanity.
Just one small thing - you've written Bella never has a probably spitting at Muggle-borns... - I presume you mean 'problem' not 'probably'?
Anyway, this was a sweet story and I really enjoyed it. Oh and I don't think I've said yet... the idea of doing snapshots across her life was a really good idea, it really showed how she changed gradually, not all at once. Great job, especially for your first fic!!
Author's Response: I'm so glad you liked it :) I really like Andromeda because to me, she really does seem like a normal girl who was somewhat 'stuck in the middle.' She didn't really know where she belonged and felt I guess...alienated in a sense. I think that's something we all go through, but for her the stakes were much higher. Gradually, as you said, she had to adjust in a way that fit her, not her Mum or Dad or whomever else. Thanks for the feedback and for spotting that mis-type. I'll need to go in and fix those. But anyways, thanks for reading and reviewing!!
Alone, disgusting, adrift between life and death...
This is Tom Riddle's penance for his lack of remorse.
Hello Jess, yes it's me again...
This is a fantastic poem. (As usual.) It really shows that scene in King's Cross so well... I loved the ending - That which you reviled has become your realitly, / For you are Death. That just really shows what Voldemort has become, and how in life what you fear most and try to escape will always come back to haunt you.
I think you did a great job here, as I think it's very hard to capture someone who is so completely inhuman. I think it's easier to write Tom Riddle (I've done that before), because at least there's a speck of humanity in there...
Anyway, I'm getting off topic here... the point is I think you've done a really good job with this.
I will freely admit that I was in a very, very pissy mood when I wrote this. What I wanted was to focus on someone/thing that was more pathetic than I felt at the time (It's a long, long story, and no, it wasn't as big a deal as I made it out to be, lol. I was being very melodramatic at the time.) And really, what is more pitiful than that scrap of afterlife that had become Tom Riddle/Voldemort? He spent his entire existence instilling fear of him and of his name, and in the end, it created his own demise. No one sympathised with him; only pity, if even that, remained. The kicker was that he did it to himself by being too thick to realise that there are simply things he doesn't understand, and that pretending things he doesn't understand don't exist doesn't make it so.
And now I've got off track, but thanks for stopping in. I know poetry isn't your thing, and really, it's not mine, either, but I'm glad you enjoyed it and got the point.
Summary: Christmas for the Marauders has always been a riotous affair. They stay at Hogwarts to wreak havoc on the staff and the Slytherins alike. But in 1977 things are different. James is now Head Boy and has become alarmingly responsible, leaving Sirius and Remus with the choice of going home with Peter or behaving.
The third choice - finding somewhere else to celebrate - does not occur to them until Remus discovers that the landlady of the Three Broomsticks is facing a very lonely Christmas.
A big thank you to Elene (coolcatelly) for beta'ing this fic despite an evil computer virus.
Thanks also to the AIM crew for not letting me hit delete.
Disclaimer: I am not JK Rowling. Her lawyers agree, so please don't confuse us.
This is Equinox Chick of Hufflepuff and this is my entry for the Great Hall Christmas Challenge - prompt 1 ~Christmas Past~
Your characterisation of all the Marauders was fantastic!! The interactions between Sirius, Remus and James were great, and Peter's absence not seeming to ruin their fun was great too. Especially considering James was off with Lily, it nicely demonstrated the way the Marauders gradually break down.
The idea of Remus/Rosmerta was really different, and I loved the character you made for her. She fit who she becomes later in canon, but you gave her something new as well. Remus' self-doubt was also written well.
Just one comment - James and Lily seemed to get together very suddenly. I know this was only back story, and so wasn't so important, but it seemed a little strange that even the Marauders didn't know. Although then again... it would be sort of typical of Lily to keep things a secret... so I guess that's just your interpretation.
Anyway, great fic!!
Author's Response: Thank you. Ah, well, the implication was that they'd been skirting around each other all term, and the Marauders knew James was up to something but was just waiting for him to come clean. There's references to him not wanting the others there that Christmas, and also Lily 'avoiding his eye' which are supposed to imply that they've been seeing each other in secret. Thanks for the review. I am glad you liked the story. ~Carole~
Summary: “Do you trust me, Alice?”
After all this strange talk of magic, and wizards, and schools I’ve never heard of, and invisible worlds? I bite my lip. I want, so badly, to say that I trust him. It would have been true up until last night.
I look him in the eyes. I almost think I can see his soul there.
Still holding my hand, he steps forward. I close my eyes and allow him to tug me along.
A Muggle bride's thoughts about her Wizarding groom and the journey that has brought them to this day.
Very sweet :). Wizard/Muggle interactions are really interesting to explore, and I thought you did this pretty well. It was interesting to see events and then hear Alice's voice in between, definitely a different way of writing. My only criticism is that I would have liked more - for example more detail on how Alice fell in love with Albus and a bit more about her character. Also perhaps you could have explored why Hugo is working in a Muggle establishment... or maybe not, it mightn't have really fitted in the story. Anyway, it was nicely written, and I had to laugh at Al and Alice together. Definitely a good read :).
Author's Response: Thanks! I'm glad you enjoyed it. Like I said in reply to an earlier review, this was pretty much a drabble that got out of hand. I suppose the snippet-like quality of a drabble came over into this one-shot. In a drabble, you really can't explain very much of anything...
I'm glad you thought Al and Alice were funny together. I thought it was rather funny too. =)
Thanks for reading!
Hermione deals with the past and learns to move forward during the unforgettable Christmas of 1999 in Australia.
Written for the 'Of Christmases' Past, Present and Future Challenge' in the Great Hall on the Forums, Prompt #3. Thanks!
Thanks also to my very helpful beta-reader, Bookworm!
I thought this was an interesting idea and you wrote it really emotionally - I loved the part where Hermione confessed to Ron what she'd been doing, as well as the ending. I also thought you had a good grasp on the characters of Ron and Hermione and your dialogue was good.
I would have liked a few more details, such as how long Ron and Hermione had been in Australia and where they were in Australia - I assumed it was meant to be Sydney or Melbourne because you said Kowari Square was the biggest wizarding market place in the country. Also I think you could have focussed more on the heat and the humidity (unless this was set in the dessert- which would be unlikely as hardly anyone lives there - it's usually very humid at Christmas) and how it was so drastically different to England - I know you touched on this, but I thought perhaps yo ucould have explored it more.
Also, I found the ending quite rushed - from when Hermione confessed to Ron until the end, I felt like I barely understood what had happened and suddenly the story was over. I would have liked to have seen a bit more between Ron and Hermione and a fuller explanation or something.
Anyway... I hope this long-winded review makes some kind of sense. I really enjoyed this fic :).
Author's Response: Hey thanks for reviewing!! :) I agree the end was rather quick - I spent a lot of time trying to decide what to add and take out, so I definitely understand where you're coming from. In the end, I decided I liked it how it is haha...a more quick moment compared to the long deliberation preceding... but yeah, feedback is appreciated! Anyways, thanks for coming by and for all your comments! They will definitely be helpful for any future stories I write.
Sirius Black spends his last Christmas at Grimmauld Place.
This is Gmariam of Ravenclaw writing for the Great Hall Christmas Challenge, Prompt One.
Beautiful! Your characterisation of Sirius was spot on - I can imagine him wanting to make the most of riling his family, particularly as he knows he won't be there to suffer the consequences.
His conversation with Regulus was sad - in a way I felt like hitting Regulus for so calmly accepting what his famil told him, but at the same time I sort of felt for him - the way you characterised him, it seemed that underneath he didn't agree with his family, but belonging somewhere was more important to him.
Bellatrix was deliciously cruel, though perhaps not quite as mad as we see her in canon. In fact, all the relatives were portrayed realistically - I liked the bit where Sirius sees his father raise an eyebrow the way he does. It was nice to see some similarity between Sirius and his family.
This is, in my humble opinion, the best line in this story: "Christmas at the Black house, he thought. It was like watching both a comedy and a tragedy at the same time." That's just so spot on, because the extreme lengths the Blacks go to and the way Sirius can rile them is comedic, yet it's tragic to know that this is his family.
So all in all, loved the fic :)
Author's Response: Wow, thank you so much for the review, Katrina! I'm so glad you enjoyed the story. I'm especially glad you thought Sirius was okay, because at one point I lamented being able to write him. But I guess I just can't write that particularly story, since it's still unfinished on my laptop and this one was a quick and fun write. I'm not sure about Regulus, but I do like to think that they were brothers and that there would have been some sort of relationship between them. Hee hee, your favorite line is different than mine, but I'm glad that one stood out too! I wrote this story just so Sirius could say "Happy Christmas, b****." Isn't that crazy? One can only imagine what Azkaban did to Bellatrix in terms of really driving her over the edge. Thanks again for the review, I really appreciate it! ~Gina :)
A war had raged; everyone had felt alone and afraid at some point. And when it was over, most people went back to business as usual, but two of those haunted souls found respite from the most unlikely of sources.
After all, who doesn't need a little bit of catharsis?
I really loved this fic! It's an unlikely pairing, but I really loved how you wrote it and drew these two characters together. Initially forged out of mutual need, this thing of theirs, it had been like dittany on both their souls after a year in hell, but it had outlived its purpose long before. - This was really beautifully written and really summed it up for me. I loved your exploration of Draco post-war, and the line Without a word, they entered the only establishment in town that would have him. really showed that well. Somehow it really succinctly demonstrated the wizarding world's lack of acceptance of Draco. Also the beginning scene seemed very IC for Draco, I could imagine him doing that.
I don't really have any criticism - because I thought this was amazing - except that I would have liked more. Perhaps more of the interactions between Draco and Katie, also perhaps you could have dealt with the cursed necklace a bit more. Personally I would have liked to have seen more of Katie, eg why she never married - was it because of Draco, after all those years? Or maybe you could have shown her interacting with her friends or something... I don't know, because I can see that at the same time this fic is meant to be centred on Draco and Katie.
Anyway, I think I'm rambling here... I hope this made sense. I really loved this fic though :).
I'm glad you liked the story and wasn't thinking, "That crazy bint... what's she on?" What I wanted from this story was the idea that sometimes, people can be not so much friends but more like allies. We all have that one person with whom we share a lot of our secrets, and that person isn't always our own best friend. I sort of wanted that here, in the context that this relationship was never going to go anywhere further and it had always had an expiration date. To me, Katie didn't marry because she somehow thought that some miracle could happen and Draco might consider her, if just for a second, so she had to be available. However, by the time he was off the market, she had moved on past her desire to be with anyone. It's a myth that everyone wants to be in a relationship, because I myself have seen otherwise. That's where Katie ended up.
As for more interaction... well, those are their secrets. They wouldn't tell them to anyone else, so why would they share them with complete strangers like us? ^_^
Thanks for the review, and I'm glad you enjoyed the story.
In the midst of the war, the Marauders and Lily have joined the Order, resolute in their decision to fight for justice. But times are hard, and soon, even the strongest of loyalties begin to wear thin.
This is lucca4 of Gryffindor writing for the final in the MWPP class on the Beta Boards.
Nominated for a 2011 QSQ - Best Marauder era Story
Fantastic, brilliant, amazing story. I think it was really good the way you showed the Marauders falling apart, and yet throughout there was a sense of what had been. The individual scenes with each of the Marauders were so well-written, and just so perfectly in character. Remus seemed tired and sick of what life had dealt him, thought still resolute. Sirius was witty and always had a comeback ready, and yet even he couldn't be arrogant about this situation (I loved the last line in that part, about how he couldn't protect his friends.) Peter was lonely and I think you did something interesting here, as he seems to feel betrayed by the others, as they treat Lily like one of them etc. It's a nice parallel with what happens later. Lily's doubt was really great - obviously, as a reader, we knew she would make the choice to fight, but it was interesting to see her thought processes, which would be entirely realistic.
The way you tied everything in with the last bit about there being a traitor was great too - particularly as the first people to be 'accused' were Remus and Sirius, and Peter wasn't even mentioned.
Your writing was just perfect in this story. I particularly loved your dialogue, which is always hard to write - it showed so much character.
I also think the concept for this story was very good, as it shows how love and friendship can break down when doubt comes into play, particularly when it's caused by a war like this. I think for this reason that my favourite part was the interaction between Sirius and Remus, because of all the characters, I think they're the least trusting of each other, and it really shows how this lack of trust comes between their friendship.
So, great story, I really loved it :).
Author's Response: Oh! Thank you for this lovely review! This is my least favorite part about the Marauder-era, the part where their friendship begins to unravel and they all start to grow apart a little. I'm so happy you thought the characterization was all right. I struggled with that before, I think, and that's why I decided to take the class, so I'm glad it showed! But what I keep forgetting to mention, and what I think helped me just as much as the class, was the fact that Jess beta'd this story so well and gave such perfect advice as to how to make this story work. Without her, this story would not be remotely intelligible. Thanks again! xx Ariana
It’s Christmas 1998, but Susan Bones doesn’t feel like celebrating. The loss of both her best friend and her favorite aunt have created wounds that might never heal. But with the help from a most unlikely person, she may be able mend what has broken, and gain a little Christmas spirit as well.
This story is for Gen/Sagen for the Gryffindor Christmas Craziness Secret Swap! Have a wonderful Christmas, Gen!
I loved the ending! So sweet! I was worried for a while that you weren't going to get them together... Anyway, it was a really different pairing and I loved how you drew them together. I especially liked how you explored Theodore's emotions about his father's death, and how in the end you let both characters be able to move on.
Author's Response: Ooh, thank you for this absolutely lovely review! I was unsure how to write this couple at first, as I never really pictured them together, but I'm glad you liked it and thought it worked :). Thanks so much for taking the time to review! xx
For over four years, Dean Thomas had been sending his polite regrets to his mum, begging off of coming home for Christmas. But when he sensed discord in the most recent letter from his Muggle family, he decided that he needed to stop making excuses and start counting his blessings.
What he found when he got there, however, proved to be more than just a simple family gathering.
This story was nominated for a 2011 Quicksilver Quill Award: Best Post-Hogwarts Story
Hi Jess, Hello again, Katrina! Have I ever mentioned how much I love your reviews? 'Cause I doand so do a lot of my MNFF friends. Keep up the amazing work, because reviews like yours is what keeps us going, pumping out fic after fic. The one thing I wanted from this fic is for someone to read it and think, "Hey, this could be my friend or my neighbour or someone I don't even know who I passed on the street." There is something humanising about not knowing fully who you are and where you came from, and I really wanted the reader to empathise with Dean in this respect. This could be any family going through it, and without the magic, it could be so universal a mini-crisis. Thanks for stopping in, and I'm glad you liked the story. It gave me fits, so it's nice to know my repeated headdesking paid off. ~Jess
Fantastic story!! I was so into it by the end that I wanted to hear more... your characters were fascinating in that they were really just normal people dealing with normal things. You drew them very realistically. I particularly liked your attention to detail with Dean with things like his smoking and the way he counted everything - they made him seem real rather than just a character on a page.
The various plots - of Dean's father and Connie etc - tied in so well with what Dean was going through and really added to this story... and even though it's nearly 10 000 words, it didn't feel long at all!
Just a small nitpick - in the third paragraph (which starts Even there, on the calm, peaceful beach that spoke to him...), I think you should have written it in pluperfect, ie "peaceful beach that had spoken to him" etc, because this story is written in past tense and you're telling an event before that. If that makes sense. Anyway, it didn't detract from the story at all... I'm just a bit of a freak when it comes to grammar sometimes.
Anyway, this was a great fic, really well written, with great characters and great attention to detail that almost made me believe that somewhere this was actually happening.
Hello again, Katrina! Have I ever mentioned how much I love your reviews? 'Cause I doand so do a lot of my MNFF friends. Keep up the amazing work, because reviews like yours is what keeps us going, pumping out fic after fic.
The one thing I wanted from this fic is for someone to read it and think, "Hey, this could be my friend or my neighbour or someone I don't even know who I passed on the street." There is something humanising about not knowing fully who you are and where you came from, and I really wanted the reader to empathise with Dean in this respect. This could be any family going through it, and without the magic, it could be so universal a mini-crisis.
Thanks for stopping in, and I'm glad you liked the story. It gave me fits, so it's nice to know my repeated headdesking paid off.
Summary: The Yule Ball of 1994 is a hugely exciting time for all the teenage witches at Hogwarts, but for the Muggle Studies teacher, Charity Burbage, it looks to be a depressing time. With the only available wizard the sour Severus Snape, she has no chance of finding a partner. And when Septima Vector informs her that The Weird Sisters are booked to play, Charity's mind becomes a blur. It had been six years since she last saw Myron. And in those six years, he's become a star.
Will Myron Wagtail remember Charity?
And does she want him to?
I am Equinox Chick from Hufflepuff and this is my entry in the Great Hall Christmas Challenge (prompt 2)
If you've read Mere Wisps of Light, then you'll know that Charity Burbage was very reticent about her Yule Ball romance when talking to Draco. This is why. The stories are linked, but it is not essential to read one to understand the other.
Disclaimer: All the characters mentioned in this fic are the creation of JK Rowling, with the exception of Gerard Bonbon who is my own creation.
The song, Teenage Witch, isn't real, but I'm guessing that Simon Cowell would like me to join his songwriting team.
Finally, thank you very much to Natalie (hestiajones) for beta'ing this story. I owe you so much!
This was really unique, firstly, and also really well written. I loved how you explored Charity's character - her loneliness, her feelings of how she'd aged - it made a lot of sense and you depicted her really well in this short snapshot. I also thought the ending was great - you didn't go for the fluffy happily-ever-after, but it still had a nice conclusion.
I also loved the song... I assume you wrote the lyrics? It was really fitting and brought the story together really well. I also loved how you made small references to canon characters, such as the fourth-year Gryffindors or Fred, George and Angelina, which seemed very fitting for a teacher.
So yeah... I really loved this fic. I don't think I've read a lot of your stories, although I've seen your name around before, so I'll probably be back writing more reviews soon, if this is anything to go by.
Just a small typo I noticed, near the end you've written "A one night stand, a moments pleasure..." when it should say "a moment's pleasure".
Anyway, great fic!!
Author's Response: Thank you for the review (and for pointing out the typo which I shall fix forthwith). This is a companion piece to one I wrote called Mere Wisps of Light which is about Draco really, but features Charity. I did write the lyrics, but that was relatively simple because I only had to write that one verse.
Thanks again for the review and I'm pleased you enjoyed the story. ~Carole~
Summary: Teddy Lupin decides to dress up as Father Christmas and surprise his family at the Burrow. Before returning to the party, he receives his own visit, as well as an enigmatic gift that may or may not decide his future.
This is Gmariam of Ravenclaw writing for the Great Hall Christmas Challenge, Prompt Three.
I really enjoyed this fic! I know it was written a while ago, but I was on your author page and it caught my eye. The ending was quite unexpected!
There were a lot of things I liked about this. Firstly, I loved your Teddy. There was a lot of Remus' giving nature and Tonks' creativity and bubbliness in him, yet he remained his own person. I loved the excitement you showed in the fic too, and Teddy's enthusiasm was almost catching.
Great job with Harry's kids too, I loved Lily particularly - she's at that wonderful stage where anything is believeable. Albus acted like a typical middle child - wanting to be 'grown up' like his older brother, but still wanting to share in the fun of toys like his little sister. And I just loved the dialogue between James and Teddy - you almost had me convinced there!
Just a little note - one time you wrote "Domonique" when it should be "Dominique".
I loved the idea that you made Father Christmas real in this fic, particularly as you started out with Teddy pretending. It was a nice twist to the fic. And I can totally imagine Teddy becoming a future Father Christmas; he's so selfless and sweet.
I think something else I loved about this is that you showed the Potter/Weasley clan having fun together. To be honest, I get a little bit sick of the stories in which their family is falling apart - I mean, I know it's not realistic that they live 'happily ever after', but I'm sure there were moments like this when everyone was perfectly happy.
Anyway, I will refrain from going on too much... loved the story :)
Author's Response: Thanks so much Katrina! I'm so glad you enjoyed this story. This is not the first time I've written about Father Christmas as a wizard, because I quite like the idea. I'm glad you enjoyed the fluff factor, since it is a bit fluffy but yes, there are a number of stories out there where the next generation does fall apart. It makes for good drama, I think. No worries, I have a plot bunny that tortures them too, lol. ;) Thanks so much for reading this holiday story and leaving such a lovely review! ~Gina :)
The irony does not escape Severus Snape as he seeks to gain the favour of the Dark Lord on, of all nights, Christmas. The spectres of days dead and gone spur him on to complete his mission, but can the fond memories stop him from committing an unspeakable act?
This story has been nominated for a 2011 Quicksilver Quill Award: Best Marauder Era Story.
Wow!! This was so good... Your characterisation of Severus was really good, and I liked that you showed a really loathsome side to him (so often people write Snape pity stories, and while they're not necessarily bad, it was nice to see another side of him, which must have existed). First person was perfect for this story, because it is very introspective and very much about Snape's entire character, not just this short part of his life.
I thought your portrayal of Voldemort was also very interesting. I liked the fact that he respected Snape's abilities and didn't probe fully into his mind when he possibly coud have. I think that really sets up the relationship that we see in HBP and DH.
So yeah... I can't think of anything bad to say, this was soooo amazing!!!
I will tell you, writing an entire story inside Snape's head is daunting. Writing his mannerisms and dialogue is difficult enough, but to think as he thinks was a complete bear. I'm just happy I finished it on time, because it turned out to be even more challenging than I'd projected. I'm glad you enjoyed that aspect of it.
To me, Voldemort was the prototypical spawn of Slytherin. Yes, he values blood purity, loyalty, and cunning, but he also admires excellence and skill. He is also the consummate manipulator, making his subjects bend to his will and conform to his agenda without them even realising it, and few ever do (namely Regulus). It was interesting to work with a mind like that.
I'm glad you enjoyed the story, and thanks for reading/reviewing. :D
Summary: Oliver Wood was living on another planet from the way he'd planned his life after Hogwarts to turn out, virtually homeless and definitely penniless, but when he finds himself pulling pints at The Three Broomsticks on Christmas Day, a visitor comes and reminds him of how much different things could have been.
Great story!! Firstly, I think you did an amazing job of Ludo's character - everything he did/said could have come straight out of canon. I also thought your Oliver was great - it seemed very IC that he wouldn't have thought of any other path in life other than Quidditch and that things might come crashing down if that didn't work out.
Once again, your writing was really good. I absolutely loved the first line - it gave such a sense of character, setting and mood really efficiently.
From reading the summary, I sort of expected a romance kind of story (especially knowing that you're fond of Katie/Oliver), so it was really different to write what you did.
I think, with all the sports that are in the peak of their seasons at this time of year, I was sort of inspired by that and how so many college football players bank on their all-encompassing 'Communications' major instead of taking real classes to build a career, fooling themselves into thinking that they wlll make it big. I sort of had Oliver pegged as that type, more concerned with Quaffles than study. This was just a 'it could have happened' type deal. I'm glad you enjoyed it.
Thanks as always for reading and reviewing,
Nearly eighty years have passed since the Battle of Hogwarts, yet Padma Patil cannot banish the string of tragic memories from her mind. A part of her still holds onto them as a way to see the faces of those she has lost once more.
Her memories tell the story of a young woman too afraid to fight against Voldemort’s regime. Throughout her final year at Hogwarts, Padma had been forced to choose between defying the Death Eaters and keeping her loved ones safe. Her decision is one that will ultimately haunt her for the rest of her life.
Nominated for a 2011 QSQ - Best Dark/Angsty Story
I am lucca4 of Gryffindor and this is my final for the Missing Moments class on the MNFF Beta Boards.
** indicates a line taken directly from Harry Potter and the Deathly Hallows pages 659-660
This was a really interesting story. Your characterisation of Padma was really great - from what little we see of her in the books, she really fitted that and you added to her. I really liked the perspective - as in, not wanting to fight, just wanting to survive - as we don't see that in canon ever really (it's not as if Harry was every not going to fight...). Anyway. The ending was beautifully sad. I also liked how you didn't make the romance the centre of this story, but instead used it to develop her character more and that sort of thing. It was definitely an interesting twist to have Padma end up blind, I thought that was very interesting.
Just a query about your opening - you talk about her remembering the "golden years of her past", and even though you then go on to explain that they often cause her pain, it didn't really sit quite right with me...
Anyway, great fic, it was a good portrayal of a different perspective! And also very tragic, especially the part that Padma never managed to move on.
Author's Response: Thanks so much for taking the time to read and review this story :). I'm glad you thought Padma was alright, and that you didn't think the ending was too horribly sad. As horrible as it sounds, I think that part was the easiest for me to write. About the opening…the "golden years" that Padma remembers cause her pain because although they symbolize everything wonderful that happened in her life, they are also a reminder that everything has changed, and she has lost everything of meaning to her. Again, thanks so much for this review! xx Ariana
Summary: James Potter's 'aquaintance' with Lily Evans has been somewhat turbulent, but as things get a little smoother between the pair during their seventh year, James looks back at their beginnings.
This is for the Gryffindor Christmas Craziness swap. Merry Christmas, Andi!
I thought this was a really sweet one-shot... I was so into it, I sort of wished that it was longer!
Some of my favourite things about it were that James' attraction to Lily happened gradually and wasn't simply a physical thing, and that they were actually 'friends' of sorts when they were younger. I think that's quite realistic.
I also liked how you delved into James' character - the idea that he only really became arrogant after a Quidditch victory at the end of fourth year and then exacerbated the effect by trying to impress Lily, and then having it become a habit which he could hide behind was nice and unique. You've shown a mature side to James, without making him at all out of character.
I also liked that it was Lily who gave James a kiss on the cheek, and that at that point James didn't suddenly sweep her into a big romantic kiss... somehow it's much sweeter and more realistic this way. And I think it shows their emotional/mental connection, rather than just the physical side, which a lot of fanfictions tend to get caught up in.
So anyway, this was a nice fluffy one-shot but also with some nice characterisation and something a bit different. Oh yeah, good job with the other Marauders too!
Author's Response: Wow, thanks so much for the review! You've picked up on everything I hoped to convey, which is really great. I'm currently writing a chaptered fic that carries on where the first part of this fic left off and continues throughout their fifth year, which hopefully will explore the deteriation of their relationship a bit more, so it does continue. Sort of! Once, again, thank you so much for reviewing. Sarah x
Summary: Lily didn't believe people could change. When she is finally broken out of her way of thinking when she sees change before her eyes, how can she let a certain boy know that she understands? Does he even still like her? ... Or is it too little, too late? *One-Shot*
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This was a very sweet story, and I thought you did a pretty good job of characterising Lily and James, especially Lily. I liked how it took her longer to mature than James, because she's always thought she was the mature one.
I also thought that having their best friends start dating was a good idea, however I would have liked to have seen more of Lily and Pilar's relationship. Although the narrator explained that their differences had never caused them a problem, it seemed to me that Pilar irritated Lily a bit and they didn't seem really close.
I also thought the last sentence was a little superfluous - I know it tied back in with the title and the main idea, but you had already made that point through James' dialogue, and I would have preferred the previous line as the last one (although that's just my opinion!).
I liked that Lily overheard Lacey and Alice's conversation, that was a great plot device, but Alice didn't sit quite right with me. I know she never appears in canon (well at least, not properly), but as she was Neville's mum, this kind of gossipy side didn't quite fit, I thought. But obviously it's possible that she matured a bit later or something.
So anyway, great job, especially for your first fic :).
Author's Response: Do you know, the points you bring up are things I considered; Pilar didn't irritate Lily because she was very sweet, and Lily was fond of her, an almost mothering tendency I'd gleaned about Lily's character. However, you're right, Pilar did annoy LIly a little. I did think the story was long enough without putting additional scenes with Pilar and Lily, though. I had so many issues deciding on the last line! You're quite right, the second last would have worked quite as well. I went with the one I had because it tied back to the title, although you're right, it does sound superfluous seeing as it is in James' dialogue. I was trying to feature an Alice that was a teenaged girl, so yes she was a little bit gossipy, although I tried to counter that by making her seem like she was genuinely happy for her friend. Lacey was supposed to be rather dislikeable, but if Alice was as nice and loyal as I pictured her, she wouldn't spot that. Since Lily had always seemed to hate James, Alice wouldn't have thought it was hurting her. Lacey was jealous of James' attention on Lily, so she would have had a vindictive pleasure that James might be interested in Lacey and not Lily. Thank you for your review, it's quite helpful ! It is my first fic after all, so I'm glad you think I did a good job. -Maddy