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Hi! I'm Katrina and I am not J.K. Rowling (just to avoid any confusion there).

I've been writing on MNFF since about 2010, but up until a few months ago had not written anything for quite some time. So I am trying to get back into writing, and have quite a few stories percolating in my head, but I just need to find the time to write them.

I basically only write one-shots (I have one three chaptered story), and they're usually character explorations and snapshots rather than long plots, but I've written about a variety of characters, so hopefully there's something you'll enjoy. I like experimenting a bit with form too.

Anyway if you have stumbled here by accident, I do hope you enjoy something.
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Lady by armagod679
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 8]

Summary: There are certain indispensable rules in the house of Black. You must stick with purebloods. You must disdain Muggles. You must keep up decorum at all times. You must show off your magic. You must appear to be a lady so a good pureblood boy will want to marry you.

Categories: General Fics Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 1552 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
09/26/10 Updated: 09/27/10


Reviewer: The_Real_Hermione Signed
Date: 10/30/10 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

I really enjoyed this fic - you captured boh Bella and Cissy perfectly. I loved the repetition of the opening and the ending - it has a nice circular effect, that evil will keep going on and on.

One of my favourite lines was "Aunt Walburga has removed her." - It was the perfect line for Bella.

The small canon problems - with ages etc. - didn't bother me much, as this is a fic about character and I thought it was done nicely.

Author's Response: Thank you!

 

Summary: The seven women who loved Ron Weasley.

Categories: General Fics Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 6323 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
10/10/10 Updated: 10/10/10


Reviewer: The_Real_Hermione Signed
Date: 10/16/10 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Once again it was very impressive and nicely written. It's great you wrote something about Ron, as his good qualities are often overlooked. I was surprised by your inclusion of Angelina initially, but it fitted. I liked how your tone changed for each section, especially for Luna's part. Can't wait for the next one!!

Author's Response: Thank you! Yes, it seems Ron doesn't get as much attention as a lot of characters. I'm glad you liked this, even if it surprised you a little. And I do try to change the tone to match the different voices -- I'm happy it worked and you appreciated it!

 

Catchphrase by Cinderella Angelina
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 6]

Summary: Percy Weasley meets Penelope Clearwater.

Categories: Other Pairing Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 1009 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
10/12/10 Updated: 10/12/10


Reviewer: The_Real_Hermione Signed
Date: 10/16/10 Title: Chapter 1: Catchphrase

My first thought was excellent characterisation of Percy - you made him fit JK's Percy and yet put him in a nicer light than he was often seen in the books. In a way, I would have preferred it if the title was "What a coincidence" rather than "Catchphrase", but that's just my personal opinion.

But it was a great fic, definitely short and sweet :).

 

Summary:

After it was all said and done, Harry wanted a sandwich. However, Ron knew that what he wanted was far deeper and complex and maddening and insufferable. But could Hermione ever forgive him for leaving her behind? Could he ever forgive himself?

 

This story was nominated for a 2011 Quicksilver Quill Award: Best Canon Romance.



Categories: Ron/Hermione Genre: Warnings: Mild Profanity

Word count: 1377 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
10/16/10 Updated: 10/18/10


Reviewer: The_Real_Hermione Signed
Date: 02/24/11 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

This was really sweet! I think you characterised them both really well - particularly the tension at the beginning, and I loved how Ron finally plucked up his courage and explained to her what had really gone on in his mind. It shows a side of Ron that people sometimes ignore and really showed why he belongs in Gryffindor.

The idea about Hermione's middle name was perfect for this, I think, because it shows how much further Ron and Hermione can go together. Plus it was really sweet.

I loved the change in Ron throughout the fic, and the last paragraph was just perfect!!

Sometimes I found your narration a little clunky... I don't know, I don't really have examples so I'm probably not being particularly useful here... I guess I just didn't like it as much as the rest of the fic.

Oh also, I loved the idea that Harry just wanted a sandwich!! That gave away so much about his character/your interpretation of his character in just a sentence.

So yeah... I really enjoyed this, great work!!

~Katrina

Author's Response:

I will let you in on a little secret: I don't like Ron. If I knew him in person, I'd not like him at all. That being said, I decided that it was worth the challenge to portray him in a positive light and make my own hypothesis of what happened in post-sandwich Hogwarts. In about 70 minutes' worth of work, this is what came out. That might account for the 'clunk' in the narrative, since I really didn't, um, edit it past a quick punctuation sweep. Busted, hehe.

Anyway, I was pleased with how it came out, but most importantly, it made the birthday girl happy. I'm glad that you liked it, and thank you for taking the time to write such a nice review.

~Jess

 

Stay With Me by Sagen
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 3]

Summary: Andromeda knows that Ted loves her, but does she love him? Is five months really long enough to know that you love somebody?

She’s running out of time to answer, and with news of their relationship spreading, she soon finds herself having to make the hardest choice of all. This is a sequel to my Boy Oh Boy.

Categories: Other Pairing Genre: Warnings: Mild Profanity, Violence

Word count: 3936 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
10/19/10 Updated: 10/25/10


Reviewer: The_Real_Hermione Signed
Date: 10/29/10 Title: Chapter 1: Stay With Me

I'm glad you added a sequel to Boy oh Boy, I felt like it needed some more at the end of that. This was a sweet story and I really liked it, however there were a few small grammatical mistakes (eg "I was be disowned" instead of I would be disowned) and in some cases I thought you over-wrote Andromeda's thoughts, when to the reader they were obvious by her actions.

But otherwise it was sweet and nicely written. Great fic :).

Author's Response: I'm glad you liked it! Thanks for the comments.

 

Stop Signs by leftrightmiddle
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 9]

Summary: It's been one month since the Final Battle, and George is still trying to cope with the death of his brother. He's refusing to talk to anyone, so it comes as a surprise to the both of them when he accepts Angelina's invitation for coffee. During that fateful conversation, George learns that the funny thing about stop signs is that they're also start signs.

Categories: Post-Hogwarts Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 1119 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
10/23/10 Updated: 10/31/10


Reviewer: The_Real_Hermione Signed
Date: 11/04/10 Title: Chapter 1: Stop and Start

In general I enjoyed this fic - it was short but sweet and a nice exploration of this analogy.

I think I would have liked it more if you had added a bit more darkness into it - perhaps George could have resisted Angelina a bit more or something. I think my favourite part of this fic was actually the first bit - and Angelina's outburst is really good.

There were times when it felt like you were over-writing a bit, or writing things that you could have shown through dialogue or actions - for example, "It wasn't always easy to go forward. There was still a fear of getting hurt, but you had to make that leap to move on" - I feel like you could just show this through George's reaction to Angelina.

It also seemed a bit cliched in the way that George changed so quickly...

Anyway, I enjoyed it, this is just things I thought which might help your writing. Good job :)

Author's Response: Wow, thanks so much for that, and taking time to review! I will definetly keep this in mind when I write in the future, I find you a very helpful reviewer. Have a great day! -bri

 

Juggling by Equinox Chick
Rated: 3rd-5th Years [Reviews - 19]

Summary: Lily Evans wasn’t the only Gryffindor with a childhood friend. Whilst she was meeting the boy who would introduce her to the magical world, someone else was learning how to mix with Muggles.

This is not, however, a story about Lily Evans. This is a tale about James Potter and the Muggle girl that he never quite forgot.

This story is for Natalie (hestiajones) who makes me laugh more than most people and has been a very supportive friend, despite our separate continents. Happy Birthday, mate!

I’m indebted to Gina (Gmariam) who kindly offered to beta this short one-shot, and then didn’t complain when it mushroomed into a chaptered fic.

Because of an archive gliitch, this fic has been temporarily put down a rating. the content remains the same and it is still a 6th-7th. You have been warned.

Disclaimer: I am not JK Rowling. If I had been, then Sirius, Remus, James, Lily and Tonks would not have died. Peter, however would have died in an icky manner

OMMPP! Juggling won 2 QSQ's for Best Chaptered Marauder and Dita won Best Original Character. Seriously pleased and shocked here. Thank you.

The chapter titles are all from Keane songs.

Categories: Other Pairing Genre: Warnings: Mild Profanity, Sexual Situations, Violence

Word count: 16283 Chapters: 3 Completed: Yes
Published:
10/29/10 Updated: 11/13/10


Reviewer: The_Real_Hermione Signed
Date: 12/03/10 Title: Chapter 3: Chapter 3 - Somewhere Only We Know

This was so heartbreaking to read. I liked your depiction of James especially, and your reasoning behind him asking Lily out was nice (it is nice not to see him moping over her once in a while).

Dita was a great character too. I liked the way you paralleled the idea juggling worlds in Dita and James. The first chapter was great too - especially the first time they met.

Anyway, I could ramble a lot about how much I enjoyed all of this. Your writing was beautiful throughout, and that last bit with Remus was just so sad and yet so beautiful...

Author's Response: Aww, thank you very much. I enjoyed writing this, although I never thought I'd like writing James with anyone but LIly. I agree that it gets a bit tiresome seeing him only thinking about Lily. Thanks again ~Carole~

 

Summary: A look at moments of Ron and Hermione's life through the years. The narrative alternates between their two POV.

For those of us that wonder what Ron and Hermione's life would be like through the years.

Categories: Ron/Hermione Genre: Warnings: Character Death, Mild Profanity

Word count: 8162 Chapters: 3 Completed: Yes
Published:
11/01/10 Updated: 11/24/10


Reviewer: The_Real_Hermione Signed
Date: 11/26/10 Title: Chapter 3: Chapter Three: The Golden Years

This was such a cute fanfic... I loved your characterisations of Ron and Hermione, they were beautiful. The fic was sort of sad in a good way... not quite bittersweet though... especially the last chapter, when everyone was getting old and dying, but you know that they'd lived happy long lives and it was really their time. I liked how in the first chapter and the beginning of the second, you showed them looking forward to life after the war, and in the later bits looking back over memories. It captured that funny thing about humans - that we're always looking either forwards or backwards.

I loved how people who died in the war - especially Fred - were present throughout your story, it showed that they were never forgotten which was really sweet.

Just one little typo I just picked up - you've written "It's sounds more morbid then it really is." It should be "It sounds more morbid than it really is."

Anyway, this whole fic was really cute and written so well, I loved it :).

Author's Response: Thank you! Yes I wanted to try to capture everything you mentioned so I'm glad you loved it haha. And thanks for the edit! I must have reread that line a million times and my eye just skipped over that typo haha. Thanks for noticing and for the wonderful comments!

 

Forever Entwined by lucca4
Rated: 3rd-5th Years [Reviews - 17]

Summary:

“Love and hate are such strong words, they also cause so much pain.”

From the first time Rose Weasley saw Scorpius Malfoy on the Hogwarts Express, she knew they were fated to be enemies. At least, that was the plan. But as the years went on, she found that it was easier said than done. The gap between who she was and who her family wanted her to be was always widening. Her life becomes a tangled web of mistakes and regrets as she finds herself drawn to the one boy she was told to hate, until finally she makes a choice. A choice that might have just lost her the only one who had always been there for her…

Categories: Next Generation Genre: Warnings: Sexual Situations, Strong Profanity

Word count: 4091 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
11/02/10 Updated: 11/07/10


Reviewer: The_Real_Hermione Signed
Date: 01/03/11 Title: Chapter 1: Forever Entwined

I really liked how you developed Rose's character... I think that's the best thing about this fic. Showing all the small scenes over her years at Hogwarts was perfect, it really showed her growing up and changing, but still staying the same. I thought Scorpius would have been more angry or hurt or something at the end, though. Rather than just kissing her, perhaps they would have argued or something first? Otherwise I thought you did a really good job of him.

So yeah, great story, I enjoyed it a lot :).

Author's Response: Thanks so much for reviewing! I'm glad you liked Rose's characterI'll probably write more of her later simply because I feel like I got to know her so well after writing her through the years. With Scorpius's reactionhe sees that Rose is truly remorseful, and that she's really worried that she's too late, and doesn't want to hurt her or push her away when she's finally opening up to him. Afterward they'll probably have a more serious discussion. Thanks again, so much! xx Ariana

 

Excruciatingly Painful by xxbabewithbrainsxx
Rated: 3rd-5th Years [Reviews - 9]

Summary: In Harry Potter and the Deathly Hallows, five men deal with remorse, yet in completely different ways. It affects the soul, mentality and even the body. This poem explores the way these five men cope with wrong actions and the guilt that follows it.

By the way, I'm not J K Rowling. I doubt you're surprised. All reviews receive a response!

Categories: Poetry Genre: Warnings: Character Death

Word count: 439 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
11/03/10 Updated: 11/06/10


Reviewer: The_Real_Hermione Signed
Date: 01/06/11 Title: Chapter 1: Remorse

This was a really interesting idea, to link all these different characters together. Your five different definitions of it were very interesting and appropriate, and it was easy to tell which characters you were writing about (though I thought Ron's paragraph was Severus for a bit... it's a pity he wasn't in here in a way, because he certainly feels a lot of remorse). Anyway, I'm not usually a massive poetry fan so I can't really comment on the structure/rhyming etc., but it did seem to flow well. Your word choice was great too, really appropriate (I almost laughed when you used "wormed" in Peter's stanza). I also liked how you brought the title into the last stanza. So anyway... sorry this isn't a particularly great review... but great poem!

Author's Response: Thanks for another one of your lovely reviews! I'm really chuffed you like my poem. It's the only one on my story list which has less than five reviews, sadly. Still, I'm happy you reviewed it and told me what you think. I don't know how on earth it got into my head, the whole concept of it, but I'm glad it did because--without trying to sound arrogant or anything--I did like my poem. I don't know--am I allowed to like it? I'm not sure. Anyway, you're completely right; Snape should've been there, but I'll admit that I completely shut him out simply because I hate him, despite what he did for Harry and everything. I don't know, maybe I'm like Harry, in that I don't care what he's done, he's still an overgrown bat :P I'm glad you liked my word choice and that you thought it flowed--that's usually a problem with poems for me. And...you almost laughed when I said "wormed"? Well, it wasn't exactly my intention but I did think it was appropriate given his name. And this entire thing really started when--I remember now--I read in DH about how putting your soul back together would be excruciatingly painful. That day I was thinking a hell of a lot about souls and how painful it would be to tear it apart, let alone put it back together, and I think that's where it came from. As for the title, I only decided it after I wrote the last stanza, so it was really just coincidence :P Thank you ever so much for your reviews, all of them. This one IS a particularly great review, don't worry. ~Soraya~

 

Apathy by inspirations
Rated: 3rd-5th Years [Reviews - 4]

Summary:

Voldemort has won. Harry Potter has been beaten.

This is what happened to the side who lost.


Categories: Dark/Angsty Fics Genre: Warnings: Alternate Universe, Character Death, Mental Disorders, Violence

Word count: 1448 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
11/05/10 Updated: 11/05/10


Reviewer: The_Real_Hermione Signed
Date: 11/05/10 Title: Chapter 1: Apathy

This was really well written. I thought it was interesting to look at it from Draco's perspective, rather than one of the Weasley's or someone like that. He has that different position of having supported Voldemort but now suffering just as everyone else under his regime.

Especially your description of Hermione at the end was chilling. - "all he could think was that it was as if somebody had gouged them out of her sockets with sharp fingernails, leaving behind only two nasty, bloody hollows" - that's a very powerful line.

Author's Response: Thank you! I've never written a story from Draco's pov before, so I'm pleased you like it :) xx

 

All Alone by savvy33
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 11]

Summary: She left him. Two years later, he still hasn't picked up the pieces and moved on.

Categories: Ron/Hermione Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 989 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
11/08/10 Updated: 11/11/10


Reviewer: The_Real_Hermione Signed
Date: 11/11/10 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

I think it was a good setting for this story, but to be honest I think both Ron and Hermione were a bit OOC, especially Ron. From his behaviour in HBP, when he feels like Hermione doesn't like him/hates him, he throws himself into partying etc (for example his relationship with Lavender). Therefore I think it might work better if he was dancing with some nameless pretty girl when he remembered Hermione breaking up with him or something like that.

Hermione seemed a little over the top... although I guess she could get like that if that scenario was just the last straw.

I thought it was written fairly well though, and you did manage to convey Ron's pain/anger/loss.

Author's Response: Thank you so much for the review! I appreciate you taking the time to leave one.

 

Summary: A sequel, of sorts, to A Different Kind Of Magic. Ginny’s being dragged along by Teddy to see his and his grandma's new house. What could possibly go wrong?

Well, when Ginny’s heavily pregnant and Teddy full of five-year-old energy…the answer to that is…everything.

The rating is purely due to Ginny's choice of language, and rest assured it is very brief. All reviews receive a reply!

Categories: Harry/Ginny Genre: Warnings: Strong Profanity

Word count: 5737 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
11/13/10 Updated: 11/23/10


Reviewer: The_Real_Hermione Signed
Date: 01/05/11 Title: Chapter 1: The Dad Who Lived

After reading the "prequel" for want of a better word to this, I decided to check this fic out, and I'm glad I did. It was great! (Possibly better than the first one... but that was great too...). The way you intertwined the two different story lines was very effective. You have great plot ideas which make this kind of story really unique!

My favourite line was "Forget the Boy Who Lived. Harry was the Dad Who Lived." It simultaneously made me laugh and go 'aww'. Plus it was perfect for Harry's character.

Just one small thing - I would have liked it if you went into more detail about the issues between Ginny and Andromeda. I don't know, I was just curious after you made some comment about it.

Anyway, it was great how you tied two story lines down to really simple things, like love, and made them connect to your title as well. Great job!!

Author's Response: Yeah, I have to agree with you that this one is better than the last one--I guess that shows how my writing has improved and evolved over the years...Thank you for saying that I have great plot ideas. My favourite line is the same as yours--God knows how I came up with that. And I do plan to have some sort of follow-up about the issues with Andromeda and Ginny and Narcissa and everyone. Just not at the moment because I'm currently working on Checkmate, my WIP. Thanks for another one of your lovely reviews and I hope to see you in my inbox again soon. ~Soraya~

 

Sibling Rivalry by Phoenixsong7611
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 5]

Summary: While waiting for news from the battle at Hogwarts, Andromeda mulls over her relationship with her sisters. Will it ever be right again?

Categories: General Fics Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 1300 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
11/13/10 Updated: 11/15/10


Reviewer: The_Real_Hermione Signed
Date: 11/17/10 Title: Chapter 1: Kill no Birds with One Stone

I thought this was a great idea for a story and you explored this idea fairly well - especially considering it's your first fic :).

However, I did find your writing a little clunky at times. I think I would have preferred the flashback to have come earlier, and then you wouldn't have had to describe Narcissa's and Bellatrix's characters so much, you could have just shown them through that.

In general you seemed to tell the reader what was happening, rather than showing it. Lines like this one - "Her thoughts turned again to her sisters." - seemed a little superfluous, as without it, it still would have been clear that Andromeda's mind had returned to her sisters.

I liked the way you kept referring to the clock ticking by and Andromeda's anxiety for her family, but I would have liked it if you'd tied in her 'new family' as more of a contrast to her 'old family'. Also, the ending seemed a little strange to me - it didn't particularly seem to conclude your ideas.

Anyway I hope you don't take my review to be negative, that's not the intention, I just think you've got a great idea here which could be even better :).

Author's Response: Thank you so much for your review! I agree, this could have been better. I could have spent more time on it, honestly, but summer break had quite drained my perfectionist nature. Do you think there is room for another Battle of Hogwarts fic? I have been thinking of doing one...and I am sorry about my not replying for so long.

 

Mourning by armagod679
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 1]

Summary: Andromeda feels the grief of losing her daughter, but she does not cry. Not yet.

Categories: General Fics Genre: Warnings: Character Death

Word count: 1121 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
11/13/10 Updated: 11/15/10


Reviewer: The_Real_Hermione Signed
Date: 11/17/10 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

I enjoyed this fic - I thought you got into Andromeda's character really well. It was a great moment to place the story, and I liked your idea that she's more in shock and can't cry yet, but when Harry comes and takes responsibility away from her (by taking Teddy) that she can finally let go.

Unfortunately, I didn't quite like your Harry - I know he's only in the fic for a few lines, but some of his dialogue didn't quite sit right with me. I would have imagined him to have been more nervous when he arrived and not quite so good at saying what he meant. But maybe that's just my interpretation of him. I did like the last line thought, and how it connected to the beginning and brought Harry and Andromeda together nicely.

Another little nitpick - you've written "Therefore, she was considerably unsurprised to see Harry Potter..." - the considerably unsurprised seems a little awkward to me, perhaps something like 'not at all surprised' would have worked better?

Anyway, in general I did like this fic and how you showed Andromeda.

Author's Response: Thank you for the lovely review. I've never been very good with Harry for some reason-- that's why I don't write about him very often. Thank you for writing in!

 

Hopelessness by FlightOfSong
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 4]

Summary: When Ron listened to Hermione's screams from down in the cellar of Malfoy Manor, what was going through his mind?

Categories: Poetry Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 119 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
11/14/10 Updated: 11/16/10


Reviewer: The_Real_Hermione Signed
Date: 12/29/10 Title: Chapter 1: Hopelessness

I'm not usually a massive reader/fan of poetry, but this summary looked interesting so I checked it out. I really liked the first stanza; it really embodied that horrible and disturbing scene for me. Especially the end - "Knife to her throat / Blood on her skin". Chilling.

I also loved the last two lines - they really delved into Ron's character and ended it really nicely.

I have to say, I thought your choice of words were sometimes a little strange - for example, using the word "mirthless" didn't quite fit for me. I would use that word only if there was a situation that was supposed to be funny, and the character didn't find it so, or if a character laughs but without mirth (it often makes me think of the way Voldemort laugh).

However some of your words were great, like "abyss" (that is just a wonderful word and perfect here).

The beginning of the second stanza also sums up Ron's character, I like how you have him defending that it was her, not him, who was being tortured. If that makes sense.

So all in all, a nice, chilling poem. Oh and the title was great too and really ties in with the last line.

 

Shattered by Gmariam
Rated: 3rd-5th Years [Reviews - 19]

Summary: Past Featured StoryThe Boy Who Lived discovers that he may not have escaped the Final Battle unscathed after all.

Categories: Dark/Angsty Fics Genre: Warnings: Alternate Universe, Character Death, Epilogue? What Epilogue?, Mental Disorders

Word count: 2864 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
11/21/10 Updated: 11/21/10


Reviewer: The_Real_Hermione Signed
Date: 11/22/10 Title: Chapter 1: Shattered

This was really sad, but really well written. I love how you used second person - it made me feel really involved in the story, as if I was personally experiencing this. Using Ginny as your focalising character was also a nice touch, and that last line really sent chills down my spine.

I loved how you played with the reader's emotions - right until the end you make it seem like there's some hope, especially when Hermione finds something in a book, and then in the end it is heartbreaking.

I loved the spell as well - what an original and dark idea! And I loved the irony as well, that Harry's soul ends up fracturing into tiny pieces - almost as if he inadvertantly echoes Voldemort.

The only really tiny thing I didn't like so much was the opening paragraph. I can see that you were trying to give a sense of the setting, but it didn't draw me in so much. Sorry I can't really think of how you could have done it better... and anyway, by the end I'd almost forgotten about it because the rest was so amazing!!

One more thing - I really loved how Ginny's character came through, and how you showed her 'shattering' (for want of a better word) throughout the fic.

Author's Response: Wow, thank you for such an amazing first review! I really appreciate it. I'm glad you enjoyed the second person pov - I know a lot of readers don't, but it just came out that way. I find it heartbreaking as well. It was interesting to explore a 'what if?' for that Final Battle, especially since I really thought Harry might die at the time the last book was released. I don't know where I got the idea for the spell, but you are exactly right about how it mirrors Voldemort. It's bitter irony, something JKR didn't touch on much. I'm glad you kept reading in spite of the opening paragraph - I can see how it's a bit different than the rest of the story - thanks again for the lovely review!! ~Gina :)

 

I'll Miss You by Quill And Ink
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 11]

Summary: September first was not a day Hermione was looking forward to. As she boards the train, she
must say goodbye to those she loves.

Categories: Ron/Hermione Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 1203 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
11/22/10 Updated: 11/24/10


Reviewer: The_Real_Hermione Signed
Date: 11/25/10 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

I loved how you created such a sweet moment between Ron and Hermione - it would be a really hard good-bye for them, after living so closely together for seven years. I liked the parallel to the traditional 'first-year getting on the train' scenario, talking about the letters etc., it made it very cute.

To be honest, having Ginny and Molly arguing seemed a little strange to me, especially over Harry. I think to Molly, it would have been fairly obvious that they'd get together, and considering how much she likes Harry, she would actually be quite happy. It seems strange that she is happy with Ron and Hermione being together, but not Harry and Ginny.

I also thought it was a pity that there was hardly any reference to the war - perhaps something about how many people would be missing or something. I think that might have added to the bittersweet feeling in this story.

I thought you did write it very nicely though, both Ron and Hermione seemed very IC and I loved the nervousness yet excitement they both seem to feel. Well done.

Author's Response: Thank you so much! Like I said below, it would have mainly been the fact that nobody told Molly that would have been argued about. I did contemplate putting in a moment of thought upon Fred, and I now regret not. I'm really glad you stopped by to let your opinion. Thanks for advice and words of encouragement!

 

Unbeatable by armagod679
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 3]

Summary: You're unbeatable, Jimmy. You're unbeatable and don't you forget it. Some day, you'll play for the great teams of Britain. That was what Jimmy Peakes's father had always told him. Now Jimmy has to prove it, not only to his team captain, but to the girl he likes, and to himself.

Categories: General Fics Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 1708 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
11/26/10 Updated: 11/26/10


Reviewer: The_Real_Hermione Signed
Date: 11/26/10 Title: Chapter 1: Jimmy

So bitter sweet! I totally wasn't expecting his Dad to die... it was very sad. You wrote that bit nicely - there was no description of lots of tears and pain and all that, just some nice dialogue. I loved the way each vignette was interspersed with conversations with his Dad. It was also really interesting to show the Quidditch team from someone else's point of view, and how Ron affected them all. Your sense of character is great - I had a nice picture of Jimmy, his Dad, Ritchie and Demelza, which was a great achievement in such a short fic!!

Author's Response: Thank you very much! It suddenly occurred to me that we really don't know anything about the new kids in book six, and I thought they deserved a story. I'm glad you liked it!

 

Mercy by hogwartsbookworm
Rated: 3rd-5th Years [Reviews - 12]

Summary: If you knew that the consequence of doing the right thing might be torture, or even death, would you still do it?

This story was inspired by something Neville said in passing. “…And then Michael Corner went and got caught releasing a first year they’d [the Carrows] chained up, and they tortured him pretty badly…”

This is the untold tale of an unsung hero: Michael Corner.

Categories: Dark/Angsty Fics Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 1758 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
11/27/10 Updated: 11/28/10


Reviewer: The_Real_Hermione Signed
Date: 11/29/10 Title: Chapter 1: Choices

This was a really nice depiction of Michael Corner and filled him out a bit more than the books do, your characterisation was lovely. I wasn't too sure about Filch... I thought it was great, showing another side to him, but the Filch from the books was in a way quite one-dimensional so I just wonder whether or not it's believable. But then again, you made it work and it worked really effectively for the suspense of your story. And it makes you think, too, about how often the bad people get cold feet...

Anyway, back to your story, it was very well-written. I have to say, I found the beginning bit dragged on just a little too long... perhaps you could have interspersed some of that with the action?

Also I loved the irony of Mercy's name, very well picked for her character and as a title.

Just one other small thing - I'm not sure if you really need the last sentence... somehow I think it's more effective without it, but that's just my humble opinion.

Anyway, sorry I'm rambling on here... it was a very moving/haunting story and you managed to deal with some quite heavy themes without melodrama and I really loved it :).

Author's Response: Thank you! I agree with everything you said: I wasn't sure Filch would do that either, but I decided he needed something to redeem him; the beginning does drag a bit, since it is all internal pondering, but that part, the internal pondering, is the drabble that the rest of the one shot was built off of; I enjoyed the irony of Mercy's name as well; and it could do without the last sentence, but somehow, I rather like that line, so... I don't know that I shall part with it.

I love rambles! Don't worry about it. I'm glad you thought it moving/haunting. That's what I was going for.

Thanks for reading and reviewing!

 
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