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Hi! I'm Katrina and I am not J.K. Rowling (just to avoid any confusion there).

I've been writing on MNFF since about 2010, but up until a few months ago had not written anything for quite some time. So I am trying to get back into writing, and have quite a few stories percolating in my head, but I just need to find the time to write them.

I basically only write one-shots (I have one three chaptered story), and they're usually character explorations and snapshots rather than long plots, but I've written about a variety of characters, so hopefully there's something you'll enjoy. I like experimenting a bit with form too.

Anyway if you have stumbled here by accident, I do hope you enjoy something.
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Against My Better Judgement by Inclination
Rated: 3rd-5th Years [Reviews - 6]

Summary: Snapshots looking at the last year in the life of Remus Lupin.

Categories: General Fics Genre: Warnings: Character Death, Violence

Word count: 3652 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
08/17/10 Updated: 08/19/10


Reviewer: The_Real_Hermione Signed
Date: 08/20/10 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

It was a really great story, I liked how you got into Remus' and Tonks' characters. I think at the start there were a few tense mix-ups... it seemed like you had the odd sentence in the past tense, but it was still good. I liked the present tense too.

Just two small things. I thought Remus called her Dora in the books, though I'm not really sure on that. Also, Ted Tonks wasn't mentioned until his death... I thought this was a bit strange, but nothing major.

I especially love the last line :).

Author's Response: Thankyou, I'm glad you enjoyed it... I had always thought that Remus had called her Tonks - I'm pretty sure he calls her that to Harry & Co, but I could be wrong. And I didn't put Ted Tonks into there... because he was in hiding whislt Remus was staying at their house! Yes, that's my story, and I'm going to stick to it! (I just competely forgot about it... I'm not really overly-interested in him as a character. Oooops.) And I'm especially glad you liked the last line, I wasn't sure whether to cut it or not, so I'm glad you think it works!

 

Seedling by the fetal positon
Rated: 3rd-5th Years [Reviews - 6]

Summary: Past Featured StoryDuring the bitter weeks of December 1935, young Tom Riddle found shelter in a hidden alcove and in a strange boy who surprisingly liked him. The boy was compassionate, curious, and far too optimistic, and he had unexpectedly shown up on the street one cold day when Tom was feeling lonely. His name was Harry, and if Tom could ever call someone a friend, it would have to be him.

Categories: Historical Genre: Warnings: Mental Disorders, Mild Profanity, Violence

Word count: 8892 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
08/18/10 Updated: 08/21/10


Reviewer: The_Real_Hermione Signed
Date: 08/28/10 Title: Chapter 1: Seedling

I loved this story - your descriptions were really great and detailed. I loved your interpretation of Tom's character and the way you brought Harry in... it was a great explanation for how Tom ended up as Voldemort. Usually I don't read dark fics... but I think I'll check out your other ones!

Author's Response: Thanks a lot! I'm glad you enjoyed it. It was really fun to write, and exploring Tom's character was an interesting journey. :) I hope you enjoy my other (and older, eek!) stories.

 

A Dance by Niamara
Rated: 3rd-5th Years [Reviews - 9]

Summary: "He laughed nervously, running a hand through his hair again. “What I'm trying to say is... Dance with me?"" Lily/James.

Categories: James/Lily Genre: Warnings: Mild Profanity

Word count: 7500 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
08/22/10 Updated: 08/24/10


Reviewer: The_Real_Hermione Signed
Date: 08/28/10 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

I really enjoyed this, it was a nice sweet story. I'm glad you didn't try to tackle hate to love all in a one-shot. I liked that they were friends first and it also seems logical how tentative they were. Well done!

Author's Response: Thank you! I'm glad you thought their levels of apprehension were logical. I debated for a long time how awkward I should make their encounter after the night's events, and it's good to hear that I settled on the right amount! :) Cheers. --Nia x

 

The Eyes of a Tortured Soul by ThestralSong13
Rated: 3rd-5th Years [Reviews - 4]

Summary: This is my response to a rather haunting still shot of Draco Malfoy. I am also going off of HBP for time and place.

Categories: Poetry Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 219 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
08/22/10 Updated: 08/24/10


Reviewer: The_Real_Hermione Signed
Date: 08/28/10 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

I liked it. I found it a little repetitive though having "the eyes of a tortured soul" at the end of almost every stanza. I liked how your rhyme scheme change from stanza to stanza - it gave the poem an uncertain feel which fitted. I also loved the line "He sits, then he stands" - really summed up the restlessness/confusion etc. So great poem!

Author's Response: Thank you! I used the repetitiveness as a way to tie it all together, but I'm glad to hear your opinion. Thanks again and I'm glad you like it! ~Thestral

 

Being by Rosehh
Rated: 3rd-5th Years [Reviews - 4]

Summary: There was always the possibility that he'd created a monster.

But they couldn't be sure.

Not until now. Sexual situations warning is for description of childbirth.

Categories: Remus/Tonks Genre: Warnings: Sexual Situations

Word count: 1088 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
08/26/10 Updated: 08/29/10


Reviewer: The_Real_Hermione Signed
Date: 09/05/10 Title: Chapter 1: Scared?

I really liked how you set up the story and Remus' feelings of confusion - I thought you could have honed in a bit more on his feelings of guilt though. To be honest, I found the last paragrah a bit of a let-down... it doesn't really sum up Remus' feelings or how they've changed, or his love for his family no matter what. Your title was nice, perhaps you could have put something about that in the last line?

Overall I enjoyed it though :). A creative idea.

Author's Response: Thanks for the review! Yeah, I know what you mean about the ending. I was having difficulty ending it, and I still go back and re-write it, and each time I still don't feel satisfied with it. I'll change it when I can find something better!

 

Swimming Lessons by WeasleyMom
Rated: 3rd-5th Years [Reviews - 46]

Summary: Past Featured StorySix weeks after the battle, Hermione puts on a bathing suit for the first time in nearly a year... scars are revealed as painful memories rise to the surface yet again.

I almost submitted this under dark/angst, but at the end of the day, I see it as Ron/Hermione. *shrug* Also, a gazillion thanks to my awesometastic beta Natalie, and to both Neil and Carole for helping me with all things British. :D

I'm thrilled to announce that this story was nominated for a 2011 Quicksilver Quill in the category Best Canon Romance. YAY!

Categories: Ron/Hermione Genre: Warnings: Sexual Situations, Violence

Word count: 1715 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
08/26/10 Updated: 08/29/10


Reviewer: The_Real_Hermione Signed
Date: 09/05/10 Title: Chapter 1: one-shot

This was a really nice insight into Hermione's character, and written really nicely. You touched on some great ideas, like 'Why do we always think there is so much time?' and 'I never stop trying to see'. Also it was great that when Ron looks at the scars he says they're barely noticeable - it touches on the idea that fears are bigger in our minds than they are when you bring them out into reality. I also loved how going swimming is so intricately important to Ron and Hermione's relationship, and to Hermione overcoming her hardships. 'I fight the memory of the smell of that carpet, of Ron screaming my name from the confines of his own hell. Of brothers kneeling over the lost one in a corridor at Hogwarts,' is a nice line, especially adding in the smell. The ending was really sweet but perfect for your story. Only one teeny little criticism - your paragraph about Hermione's vanity was a bit repetitive I found, maybe you could have cut some of the sentences. But otherwise a really great fic!

Author's Response: Hi there. Thanks so much for reading and taking the time to leave a review. They are always so very helpful. I'm glad you liked the story... those are some of my favorite lines as well. I didn't mean to convey that swimming is important to their relationship, though. More like, it's just something they do at the Burrow, and now it has become kind of a hump she is going to have to get over, and so he helps her. Does that make sense? You are right that it is important to her overcoming this, though. I'm big on smell for setting the tone of a scene. Perhaps I have an overly sensitive sniffer ;) but many of my memories are triggered by smells. Another person actually commented on that "vanity" paragraph when this fic was in its drabble form, so I know that rubs a few the wrong way. I will look at it again, but am just rather attached to it. None of the sentences can be cut, but perhaps I could reword a few things there. We'll see. Thanks again for taking the time to leave such a thorough review. I really appreciate it.

 

Tales of the Battle by Northumbrian
Rated: 6th-7th Years [Reviews - 274]

Summary:
Over fifty people died at the Battle of Hogwarts. There are dozens of stories of loss, betrayal, heroism and sacrifice. These are some of those stories.

Nominated for: Best General (Chaptered) story – Quicksilver Quills 2011


Categories: General Fics Genre: Warnings: Mild Profanity, Violence

Word count: 49415 Chapters: 25 Completed: Yes
Published:
08/28/10 Updated: 03/31/11


Reviewer: The_Real_Hermione Signed
Date: 03/31/11 Title: Chapter 7: Ernest Endeavours

I've finally got around to reading this - I've been planning to for quite a while. Firstly, I think it's a great concept and that you've really thought it out well - all the different plots link up with each other (and all your other stories) really well and you don't make any mistakes there.

I really loved "The Calm Before" - what an interesting idea to give Madam Pomfrey a perspective. You portrayed her so well, and you wrote that sense of a fear of the future and not knowing what's going to happen so well that I almost felt nervous.

"Galleon" - I liked the idea of getting inside Cho's head and I think you did it very well, though somehow it wasn't quite as compelling as the first story... but still very good. Near the end, when she thought something about how Harry was intense and difficult to like, in my head I was wondering 'now I wonder what Ginny would say about that?'

"Great to be Back" - wonderfully Luna. Seeming to be a little eccentric and flighty, and yet having all the right values underneath. I think she's a very difficult character not to caricature and I think you did a great job (also loved Ginny's description of Terry - very Ginny).

"Protheroe's Perspective" - now this was something completely different! I loved her characterisation and how you made her unique and different. The ending was bittersweet, as in a sense I felt happy that she was alive, but it brought back the loss of Tonks and Colin. I think it was very realistic that Polly often had thoughts about the children and how she didn't think they'd be capable (particularly about Colin).

"The Confession of Augusta Longbottom" - you just nailed her character so well. Just the whole idea of the letters and her confession, and that she couldn't face up to telling Neville in person was just so her. I also liked the sense that life had moved on from the battle, as (at least sofar) the rest of the stories are in the thick of the pain and death.

"Good Bones" - I liked Susan, particularly the way she admired her aunt and liked to figure out where words came from (just on that note - as far as I know, "vol" in French is a noun, so it means "flight", not "flees". It also means "theft", which I think is rather interesting, as it's almost like Voldemort is stealing himself from death... and I'm rambling here, back to the review.) I think Susan had a sort of understated bravery; she didn't openly defy the Carrows as the likes of Neville did, but there was something about her, determined to fight for good.

"Ernest Endeavours". I'm sorry to say I didn't enjoy this as much as the others. I know Ernie is pompous, I just never saw him, well, quite like this. I felt sad at the ending, as I was hoping that in this story, Ernie would see his own prejudice... anyway, having said that, you still wrote him well and created empathy for him, particularly when Hannah and Justin come in and he suddenly feels inferior. Personally that's why I've always thought he was pompous - because he wanted to prove something. Anyway, even though I didn't like Ernie so much, this was still well written.

So basically the main thing I really love about this is your spot on characterisations and the variety of perspectives and different ways of looking at the same event. Great work.

~Katrina

Author's Response:
Thanks for the comprehensive review of the first seven chapters. I’ll try to respond to all of your comments.

The original versions of these stories were not written in the order they now appear, but flitted back and forth across the battle. I think that Protheroe’s Perspective was the first one I wrote. My original plan was for a “hospital” chapter midway through the battle. But Madam Pomfrey wanted to make sure that she was ready for anything, and I wanted to try to make readers worry about what might happen.

Cho was one of the first DA members to arrive. I simply had to know why, and “Galleon” was the result.

Luna is extremely difficult for me to get right, so I use her sparingly. Here are, I hope, several places in this story (notably her unasked question to Terry) where she would appear barmy to outsiders, but it all makes sense inside her head. I enjoyed this so much that there’s a Terry/Luna story later (Worn Out Boot, of course) and I toyed with the idea of making them a couple.

Polly Protheroe, Muggle-born Goth Auror was a rather eccentric creation, but she allowed me to present an outsiders view of the DA, and to provide a bit more background on “my” Colin. She appears (briefly) in “It Takes Two”.

I’ve been fascinated by epistolary fiction ever since I read Dracula. Most fanfic sites ban it, so “The Confession of Augusta Longbottom” was my way of sneaking a letter-based story in. The fact that I named (and calculated birthdays) for Neville and Hannah’s kids just for this story says a lot about me.

The Susan I now write about grew from this story. Sensible, serious and rather severe, possibly even a bit repressed, her character is becoming more fixed in my mind. I think that she’s a thinker and a planner. She won’t rush into things.

Ernie is interesting, I didn’t want to make everyone perfect, but I gave poor Ernie more flaws than most. He means well, he really does, and he works hard too. I’m quite happy for you sympathise with him, but not to like him much. He is (vaguely) based on someone I worked with (who was NOT racist).

-N-

 
Reviewer: The_Real_Hermione Signed
Date: 03/31/11 Title: Chapter 12: Epiphany and Fall

Yes I know, this is my second review on this story today... but I just adore your characterisation of Lavender, so I had to drop you another review. But I'll go back to Chapter 8, as that's what I got upto last time.

"Abbot Ails" - I really liked how you showed a grown-up Hannah - after all, the last time we see her in canon is basically HBP when she's devastated about her mother, and you really showed a more mature and stronger woman. I thought it was really interesting that when talking about the twins, she differentiated between them. It was a nice touch, as people don't seem to do that very often.

"Justin Time" - firstly, great pun in the title. I really enjoyed Justin in this, particularly how you explored his guilt about Colin with the comparison to how Colin had stopped Dennis.

"Voldemort doesn't play Quidditch" - this one made me laugh, but it was also very effective as a battle story. I like how you switch text types sometimes (eg the letters from Augusta and this). It gives a nice variety in the story. I think it was fantastic what you did her, showing that Voldemort really affected everyone and everything through the example of Quidditch. A great way to connect Oliver as well.

"Waning Moon" - the end of this one was just completely heart-breaking, and even in such a short space, you really made me like Mark (although this could also be because I've read "Moon"). So once again I find myself praising your characterisation....

And finally, "Epiphany and Fall". Well, as previously stated, I really adore this story. You develop Lavender so much beyond the flirty girl we see in HBP and you've just given her a fantastic story. I loved the idea that she enjoys her time with Susan because Susan is honest and real, where everyone else doesn't treat her normally. I love the idea that Lavender wants to "fight her own battles" so to speak and not have others fawning over her, it shows real Gryffindor spirit. I hope you write more fics which include Lavender, I think she's one of your best characters (though they're all really good!)

~Katrina

Author's Response:
Katrina, thanks for these too.

This Hannah is the Hannah who worked in the Cauldron in “Fred and George’s Busy Day” and she’s very familiar with the twins, and the resistance. Justin isn’t the only one with a punning title; the Greene King brewery (in Bury St Edmunds) brew Abbot Ale. Justin’s chapter once again dealt with Colin’s death. As I think about it, I realise that many of these stories revolve around Colin’s death.

I had the idea for a “Lee Jordan interviews” story way back when I wrote Grave Days. This particular story would have been much more grim had I written it as it happened, the interview allowed me to give an overview.

Mark will reappear in other stories (rather like other of my original characters) and this story was easy for me to write, as I knew the story (though I hadn’t written it) when I wrote Moon.

Lavender proves (I hope) that it’s possible to be brave and honourable, and obsessed with boys and clothes. Lavender and Susan will appear in “M.I.T.: Muggle Interface Team and I have four other Lavender stories in the planning stages. “Moons” will be set in 2010 (Lavender is 30), “Down” will be set more than a year before “Bare”, “Exsanguination” is set before “Moon” and “Dinner” is set immediately after “Moon”. I like the idea of giving my Lavender stories one word titles, but it will be some time before they arrive.

-N-

 
Reviewer: The_Real_Hermione Signed
Date: 04/09/11 Title: Chapter 16: Cornered

Hi Neil,

So here's a long overdue review for this fic.

Seamus Awake: I really enjoyed seeing Seamus' perspective on his relationship with Lavender... and I sort of felt a bit bad for him about it, too. I liked his thoughts about Neville and your Luna was really good in this fic. I think this story was a nice reminder that Seamus belongs in Gryffindor, as obviously when the DA first forms, he's not in it and as a reader sometimes you forget that he fought in the final battle.

Bad Faith: I think your Draco was realistic... throughout the whole story, just doing anything and everything to save himself. I liked the way he kept saying "I'm on your side..." to people from both sides. Although I did sort of feel a bit sorry for him...

Die Dumb: This one has me a bit divided... I had never really imagined Goyle to be as stupid as you show him... it almost feels like he's mentally disabled somehow in this. Which I suppose is a really interesting take on the situation. I really liked the way you developed his character through this, and how he had been using Malfoy as much as Malfoy had been using him. Very interesting. But yeah, I'd never really imagined him like this.

Cornered: I think this is one of the most poignant fics of the series. That last line... I really wasn't expecting it, and it was just so heartbreaking for Michael. I think you just showed how scarred he was from that session of torture. I really don't know what else to say about this one... except that I just loved it. Fantastic writing.

Well, you'll probably hear from me again soon after I've read the next few chapters. I am really enjoying this fic, it's fantastic.

~Katrina

Author's Response:
Katarina

Seamus’ was one of the hardest stories for me to write, for some reason his character took a long time for me to find. Luna, of course, had to appear as, of course, did Ernie. JKR gave us Ernie, Luna and Seamus in the Battle, and they struck me as an odd trio.

Thanks, I know that a lot of girls like Draco, but he’s one of those who would bribe his way onto a lifeboat on the Titanic. I’m glad, however that you felt sorry for him.

I read every tiny think I could find about Goyle before I wrote Die Dumb. He has virtually no dialogue, and it seems that he was the lowest of the three. Crabbe was the one who did most of the talking. I don’t think that he’s mentally disabled, just a not very clever sadist. I think he stuck with Draco because he likes hurting people. It’s the only thing he’s good at.

I wanted to write a story about mental scarring. We know that Michael was tortured, and we know what happened to Neville’s parents. Those two facts combined to make this story arrive in my head almost fully formed.

Thanks for the reviews.

Neil

 
Reviewer: The_Real_Hermione Signed
Date: 04/10/11 Title: Chapter 20: Son of the Air

Hello again,

Here comes my next review of this fic.

Worn Out Boot: This was a great fic of self-discovery for Terry, I thought. You made him such a likeable character, and I loved how he became sure of himself and decided to become an Auror at the end. Luna seems to appear in a number of your stories, and you always write her so well. It's typical of her to know/believe that Voldemort's lying about Harry, and that her optimism is catching to Terry.

Falling Angel: Wonderful characterisation again. It definitely throws a new light on Fred... I liked how you distinguished between the two twins in this and made them different people. I also liked Angelina's realisation about Tony. The ending was sad... I guess that's always the thing when someone dies, you see all the lost opportunities rather than the opportunities you took.

Parents: I think Lavender's parents were very typical here, particularly in how they blamed Harry. After all, when bad things happen people always want to blame someone else. And, although they came across as cowardly, I suppose parents always worry about their children. I think this was a very realistic story.

Son of the Air: Wow, this one really impressed me. I love fics in second person, but the idea to use Buckbeak as a focalising character is just fantastic. The detached way of telling the story and the way the scene is described really shows how pointless killing is and really shows up humanity. Definitely one of your more poignant stories from this series. I loved the ending, too. There's something great about Buckbeak getting revenge...

I'm looking forward to the last 5 chapters!!

~Katrina

Author's Response:
Katarina

JKR says that Kingsley recruits Harry, Ron and Neville to the Auror Office. I wanted to add a Hufflepuff and a Ravenclaw DA member. The Hufflepuff was easy (I couldn’t imagine Ernie or Justin and I definitely didn’t want Hannah). I considered Padma as the Ravenclaw, but I finally decided on Terry, who is no more than a name in canon. Terry appeared in Luna’s chapter, so I returned the favour (and I liked them so much I considered making them a couple.

Both Angelina/George and Angelina/Fred are canon. That seemed very weird to me, so I wanted to explore it. Really her relationship with Fred was short, It was there in GoF, but not in OotP. This is my explanation, and a reason why in my stories it will be a few years before they finally get together.

I loved writing Parents. Don and Carmine are in a very difficult position. He could lose everything whatever he does, so doing nothing seems to be the best option. It is cowardice, but it’s also an attempt to protect the family.

I’m a strictly canon writer, I reread the Battle chapters dozens of times and wrote copious notes. I missed something. This chapter isn’t canon :( Hagrid fights Macnair in the great hall just before the face-off with Voldemort. But I liked writing this little experiment in second person, though it wasn’t easy, so it’s staying unchanged as my only AU story.

Neil

 
Reviewer: The_Real_Hermione Signed
Date: 04/10/11 Title: Chapter 21: Snakeslayer

Neville is one of my favourite characters, so I just had to leave a review after this story, too... (I think it's my fifth review on Tales of the Battle).

You really are incredible at taking what JKR gives us in canon and recreating her characters with your own additions. Neville was just perfect in this. I liked the comparisons you drew between him and Harry, because really I see them as very similar. Neither thinks they're particularly brave, but when it comes down to it, they find something inside themselves. I suppose in a way it is because both of them have lead such a damaged childhood and are fighting the people who caused them to lose their parents.

I liked the constant reminder of "Kill the snake", particularly as it tied in with the title. It shows that Neville has a focus, despite the chaos surrounding him during the battle.

I loved the ending... in so few words you managed to convey such an important idea. Particularly the line "I have no idea how Harry copes with this". I guess this is another way in which Neville is similar to Harry and has to go through many of the same things, even though he goes through them later than Harry.

I think it's interesting that Neville kills a Horcrux... I think there's a link between the people who killed the Horcruxes - Harry, Dumbledore, Ron, Hermione, Neville... and then there's Crabbe, who doesn't seem to quite fit, but I suppose it's fitting that someone from Voldemort's side actually killed a Horcrux. Anyway, I think that just highlights the connection between Neville and Harry, which we of course see in OotP as well. And I'm really rambling here...

Absolutely loved your characterisation of Neville!

~Katrina

(Oh and by the way referring to your last response - I doubt anyone will notice that you made a canon error with Macnair... it's hardly an important part of the Battle...)

Author's Response:
Katrina

Neville, it seems to me, is one of JKR’s finest creations. He, like Ginny and Luna, is always there in the background. In the early books she uses him as comic relief, although even then he’s prepared to stand up for himself, sometimes foolishly (I seem to remember him taking on Crabbe and Goyle in a fist fight). Like Ron, when his second-hand wand is broken and he gets a new one, he becomes more adept magically. Neville is probably one of the bravest of the Gryffindors, recklessly so sometimes. Towards the end of the Battle, it’s possible to sum up his contribution very easily. Harry gave him a job, kill the snake, he did it. I’m certain that, like Harry, Neville will have no idea how to cope with suddenly being famous.

Thanks

Neil

ps Macnair bothers me, but not enough to delete this chapter, as I like my version of events, and it isn’t exactly a major change.

 
Reviewer: The_Real_Hermione Signed
Date: 04/10/11 Title: Chapter 24: Paperwork

Hello again,

Broken Flint: Very interesting. I'm really glad you wrote a story which shows what the 'bad guys' did after the battle. I think your characterisation of Millicent is very interesting... and it certainly fit her to carve Marcus' initials into her skin... and yet, despite her seeming to be 'bad', it was obvious that she cared about Marcus, which somehow seems to redeem her a bit, at least in my perspective.

Ouroboros: What a perfectly manipulative Narcissa. That was so realistic - at one point you wrote something about how Lucius adopted a bored/aloof look that he wore so well or something, it really shows how the only thing the Malfoys seem to be good at is acting. You've made them seem so interesting in this, I'd love to see your take on how they're holding up a few years down the track. Particularly Draco.

Paperwork: It's funny how sometimes seeing the pain and loss in the world can lead us to rediscover what's important... This story was one of my favourites from the series. Finding the killer didn’t stop her victims from being dead. That's just so true. I imagine it would be extremely difficult to be 'professionally detached' when you're dealing with dead people, who, as you point out, are all someone's daughter or son, or friend, or brother or sister.

Anyway, I'm rather curious to see how you'll tie everything up in the last story... I suspect you'll hear from me again soon. Sofar everything has been well-written, well-characterised, poignant, true to canon... fantastic.

~Katrina

Author's Response:
Katrina

Broken Flint was my chance to create a few minor villains (apart from Goyle, the others are little more than names). Bigoted Mudblood-hating racists can love people (just not Mudbloods). This chapter gave me four villains (including Colin’s killer) for Harry and co. to chase in other stories. I don’t believe that Millicent is as stupid as many people think, she simply knows when to get physical.

I hate stories featuring nice, redeemed, and contrite Malfoys. They are great villains, and stories need great villains. Draco was never witty, simply cruel and Narcissa needs to keep him quiet. Harry, Ron, Hermione and Ginny should never be certain whether the Malfoys have changed, or are merely pretending they have changed. It worked for the Malfoy’s after the first war.

Paperwork underwent several rewrites (the final version had a “happy” ending because the original was simply too bleak). Whether Auror Al (don’t call him Spider) Webb reappears in my other stories is something I haven’t decided.
Neil

 
Reviewer: The_Real_Hermione Signed
Date: 04/10/11 Title: Chapter 25: Index

And thus it ends...

I have to say, I wondered how you would be able to tie this amazing set of stories together and od them all justice... and you certainly didn't disappoint. I think there's a nice pattern to it that the first story was about Madam Pomfrey and the last about Madam Pince. I think the amazing thing about this is that you really stuck to her character in canon (as in when she talks about the students ruining books etc.), and yet you made her... compassionate? I suppose that's the right word.

You ask some interesting questions in this... like Is one tragedy less than another simply because there are fewer corpses? Or is it greater because several of the victims were teenagers? I suppose there's not really an answer to it. You're just highlighting how there is so little need for death, how pointless it is.

With quill in hand, I recorded the night’s events. Nothing? A waste of time? I do not think so. I am no Healer, no Auror and no warrior. I did what I could, what I do best. I really loved this line, and I think it really shows how death affects everyone around it. So even though Irma wasn't in danger herself, she still had to cope with the death surrounding her and try and deal with it. And she did all she could to help.

The idea of destroying books is repugnant. It goes against everything I have been taught, everything I believe. Books lift the brume of ignorance. But perhaps the loss forever of these books would be condign, an appropriate threnody for the fallen.
'Not at all,' I tell her.
Somehow that is just the perfect ending for this whole story... I guess there's something about burning those books which suggests cleansing or healing, allowing for rebirth... kind of like a phoenix.

Anyway, I'm so glad I decided to read Tales of the Battle, it's been a fantastic read.

~Katrina

Author's Response: So good you reviewed it twice? ;-D -N-

 
Reviewer: The_Real_Hermione Signed
Date: 04/10/11 Title: Chapter 25: Index

And thus it ends...

I have to say, I wondered how you would be able to tie this amazing set of stories together and od them all justice... and you certainly didn't disappoint. I think there's a nice pattern to it that the first story was about Madam Pomfrey and the last about Madam Pince. I think the amazing thing about this is that you really stuck to her character in canon (as in when she talks about the students ruining books etc.), and yet you made her... compassionate? I suppose that's the right word.

You ask some interesting questions in this... like Is one tragedy less than another simply because there are fewer corpses? Or is it greater because several of the victims were teenagers? I suppose there's not really an answer to it. You're just highlighting how there is so little need for death, how pointless it is.

With quill in hand, I recorded the night’s events. Nothing? A waste of time? I do not think so. I am no Healer, no Auror and no warrior. I did what I could, what I do best. I really loved this line, and I think it really shows how death affects everyone around it. So even though Irma wasn't in danger herself, she still had to cope with the death surrounding her and try and deal with it. And she did all she could to help.

The idea of destroying books is repugnant. It goes against everything I have been taught, everything I believe. Books lift the brume of ignorance. But perhaps the loss forever of these books would be condign, an appropriate threnody for the fallen.
'Not at all,' I tell her.
Somehow that is just the perfect ending for this whole story... I guess there's something about burning those books which suggests cleansing or healing, allowing for rebirth... kind of like a phoenix.

Anyway, I'm so glad I decided to read Tales of the Battle, it's been a fantastic read.

~Katrina

Author's Response:
Katrina

I wasn’t certain how I was going to finish this myself (for a while Paperwork was going to be the final chapter). Eventually, I decided to reread the stories. I got no further than “The Calm Before”. The second I read it, I knew it had to be Madam Pince, and this story flowed very quickly from that decision.

Possibly it’s because I’m a fan of Terry Pratchett, but I believe that being the Librarian in a magical library is a potentially dangerous job. I’ve tried to show Madam Pince as very well-read and rather detached.

Thanks for all of your reviews. Every one of them interesting and thought provoking.
Neil

 

He Left by h_vic
Rated: 3rd-5th Years [Reviews - 7]

Summary: Past Featured StoryHe left. Katie Bell has moved on; she loves someone else, but it's not enough – she can't let go of him. When they meet for a drink one night, it can only bring back memories and pain.

Categories: Other Pairing Genre: Warnings: Character Death, Mild Profanity, Sexual Situations, Substance Abuse

Word count: 1053 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
09/06/10 Updated: 09/12/10


Reviewer: The_Real_Hermione Signed
Date: 09/12/10 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

This was a really creative idea for a fic, and written really nicely. It was great that you didn't mention who it was til the end, it kept the mystery up. I was almost in tears at the end. '"Or perhaps that should be one of two of a kind – or maybe I'm just a half?" he amends.' - this line was my favourite in the fic, great writing! Fred wasn't... quite how I imagined him from the books, but his character wasn't bad and I"m sorry I can't really pinpoint what didn't sit right. Great story!

Author's Response: Thanks for the lovely review. I'm glad the emotion of this story came through for you. I think I know what you mean about Fred - it was a hard line to tread to try and capture 'Fred' but at the same time keep a little mystery as to his identity until the end, so perhaps I did miss the mark a little. Plus, it's a much more serious conversation than he's ever involved with in canon so I had to extrapolate a little with the characterisation.

 

All That I've Got by J Raven
Rated: 3rd-5th Years [Reviews - 12]

Summary:

Tom Riddle was always the perfect student, right?

Wrong

There was one spell he never could get right

A spell that required the one thing he couldn’t have

A happy memory

It’s hard to be the best when what you need is just out of reach



Categories: Dark/Angsty Fics Genre: Warnings: Abuse, Violence

Word count: 2633 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
09/08/10 Updated: 09/08/10


Reviewer: The_Real_Hermione Signed
Date: 09/09/10 Title: Chapter 1: Everyone Else Has A Memory

Great story, especially for your first go! Tom's character was portrayed very nicely, and you showed his inner conflict well. The idea for the story was creative.

Instead of saying 'FLASHBACK', perhaps you could just put it in italics? (To me it was quite obvious that it was a flashback, and having that written there sort of ruined the flow a bit).

'Professor Merrythought gave him a look that was far too calculating for Tom’s liking. Did she suspect? Could she tell he had nothing happy to remember?' this line seemed a little out of character for the Professor - for the rest of the fic she seems to believe Tom is a fantastic student... it seems like more the kind of thing Dumbledore would think had he been there.

But anyway, they're just small things and it was a really great story, I hope you write more!

Author's Response: Thanks so much for the review, I've made a few changes where you suggested them. You’re right about it seeming too much like Dumbledore, so I’ve changed it to a couple of Ravenclaws. Your help is greatly appreciated :) Jess

 

Summary:

All Teddy Lupin had ever wanted was to be the kind of man his godfather was. He even followed in Harry's footsteps and became an Auror.

Harry wanted nothing more than to be the father that Teddy would never have, but work and obligations always seemed to get in the way. Before he knew it, Teddy was all grown up. How had he missed all those precious moments? He knew he had to make up for it somehow.

After all, they had all the time in the world, right?

 

This fic WON a 2011 Quicksilver Quill Award: Best Post-Hogwarts Story



Categories: Post-Hogwarts Genre: Warnings: Character Death, Mild Profanity, Violence

Word count: 6160 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
09/15/10 Updated: 09/19/10


Reviewer: The_Real_Hermione Signed
Date: 09/20/10 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

You really had me hooked in this fic! My favourite parts were the opening bits where you explored character and showed the small things that Harry had missed out on in Teddy's life etc. I have to admit, I wasn't expecting the ending but it fitted in well with how you set it up.

Somehow the last bit of writing didn't quite work for me. I liked the bit with Draco, but the next three paragraphs seemed a little excessive. Perhaps you could have written that shorter and still finished with "But not just then...". But that's just a personal opinion.

I also would have liked to have known a little more about how Teddy managed to find Harry, but maybe that wouldn't have worked because after his death it seems kind of insignificant... so I'm not sure about whether that would have worked or not.

I think the best thing was your characters, who you created very believably and explored nicely. Well done!

Author's Response:

Ah, I see you've got past the righteous anger bit where you want to strangle me for killing off poor ickle Teddy. :D

What I really wanted was to paint a picture of Teddy that showed him trying to figure out how to be a man whilst Harry simultaneously struggled with being a father figure. Perhaps Teddy would have been better off not wanting to be like Harry, but most children love their dads despite their flaws. I seem to be in teh minority of people who consider Harry one of the more flawed characters in the Potterverse. He is brave and all that, but he makes poor judgment calls and judges people constantly. But Teddy doesn't learn these things because Harry isn't around as much. Instead, he falls in love with the ideal Harry that everyone talks about -- the saviour.

How Teddy found Harry? I just sort of glossed over it because I figured it would be more of a given. Knowing that anyone wanting to abduct Harry would be a friggin idiot to stay in the building, the next logical step would have been to look outside, where he saw Harry, Yaxley,and Rowle in the distance, also allowing him time to formulate his plan. 

And the last bit...I know it all seems a bit wooden, but it was supposed to be. Harry was supposed to be in this trance-like shock where it really hasn't sunk in yet that his godson was dead and he was responsible (or at least he feels he is). He really had thought that he could go back to life after defeating Voldemort, and teh destruction of this illusion takes some time to process. 

Also, there was an ulteriour motive to including Ginny. In my story The Vindication of James Potter, I sort of cannibalised Harry and Ginny's marriage, citing earlier examples of their problems. This was the start of that, when he told her what and who had got Teddy killed. Most of my readers from that story read my other ones as well, so I like to put in little nuggets to ring some bells for them so they can say, "Oh, now I get it."

Thanks for the review and reading my obnoxiously long response. Have a lovely day!

~Jess

 

What Lies Behind by C_A_Campbell
Rated: 6th-7th Years [Reviews - 28]

Summary: Past Featured StoryWinner of the 2011 QSQ Award for Best Dark/Angsty One-shot! It is true what they say about your life flashing before your eyes just before you die. As Theodore Nott, Death Eater like his father before him, stands on the battlefield in what is surely Hogwarts and his final hours, he remembers all that lays behind him: his father, the Dark Lord, the one girl he ever loved, and the thing he has forced himself to forget.

But you remember, don't you, Theodore?

Please tell me you remember me.


Categories: Dark/Angsty Fics Genre: Warnings: Abuse, Character Death, Mild Profanity, Violence

Word count: 9871 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
09/15/10 Updated: 09/17/10


Reviewer: The_Real_Hermione Signed
Date: 09/18/10 Title: Chapter 1: Do you remember?

Great fic! I was really impressed by your depiction of Theodore, it was really insightful and interesting, especially your ideas about masks and how he became a mirror. I liked the way it jumped between past and present, and nicely summed up everything. I think a couple of times you wrote 'anyways' instead of 'anyway', which ruined the flow a little for me. That's a really small criticism though, otherwise it was fantastic!

Author's Response: I'm glad you liked it, especially my characterization of Theodore. I apologize for my anyways thing. Unfortunately, that's the way I say it so I forget it's not the proper way. I'm glad you liked it anyways though.

 

It's All You Need by leftrightmiddle
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 2]

Summary: A great man once said that it is our choices, far more than our abilities that reflect who we truly are. One of our greatest tools in life is the power of choice. A story of stability, choice and what it means to love. Of how leaving behind what is easy means walking out into what is unknown.



Andromeda Black needs to make her final decision.

Categories: General Fics Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 1402 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
09/16/10 Updated: 09/17/10


Reviewer: The_Real_Hermione Signed
Date: 09/17/10 Title: Chapter 1: Choices

I thought it was an interesting story and nicely written. It annoyed me a little that you used "anyways" instead of "anyway", it added a colloquial sound to the story which to me didn't really fit.

Also I never had the impression that purebloods actually believed that Muggles stole their magic... I thought that was just the story they put out. I always thought they wanted to make themselves feel better and so they had to find someone to bully, and that's why they picked on Muggleborns and Muggles. Anyway, I guess that's just a different interpretation.

Author's Response: Thank you! Oops...thanks for pointing that out. That's a really good interpretation of it, and I think that purebloods are just so filled with pride that they can't admit that they do pick on Muggleborns and Muggles to make themselves feel better, what you said. But I also think that after all those years putting that story out, they just started to believe it themselves. And this fueled their hatred even more, to keep this story in the back of their minds. But that's just what I think, and someone else may have something completely different to say. Thank you so much for your review! Have an amazing day bri

 

This is the Last Song by MagEd
Rated: 6th-7th Years [Reviews - 23]

Summary: "I hate to be the bearer of bad news — but this is war, Evans, and war isn't a big barrel of laughs."

Ten steps to growing up, told in ten moments from the first war. *Two-shot*

Categories: James/Lily Genre: Warnings: Character Death, Mild Profanity, Sexual Situations, Substance Abuse

Word count: 11290 Chapters: 2 Completed: Yes
Published:
09/20/10 Updated: 09/24/10


Reviewer: The_Real_Hermione Signed
Date: 11/27/10 Title: Chapter 2: Chapter 2

Once again, this was wonderfully written. I loved how you showed James and Lily's transformation from eager high school graduates to the family they are at the end, who have experienced a lot of hardship and pain together.

I loved the bit at the Prewett's funeral, especially the meeting with Molly. It was so sad, especially because we know that James and Lily only lived another year and a half. I loved your line "Maybe he and your — your baby, maybe they can play together. They'll be at Hogwarts together, after all.". Cute, but written well enough that it wasn't cliched, it just added to the story really well.

So yeah... I pretty much loved everything. As per usual, your characterisations of James and Lily were lovely. I really loved all your Lily/James work :) it's always great. Then again I pretty much love all your fics...

Author's Response: Thanks very much! I'm glad you liked that the scene with Molly! The whole story made me a little sad--I think that's why I tend to avoid fics with baby!Harry because James and Lily are always so close to death at the point, and I'm far too attached to fictional characters to handle it! :)

 
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