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Hi! I'm Katrina and I am not J.K. Rowling (just to avoid any confusion there).

I've been writing on MNFF since about 2010, but up until a few months ago had not written anything for quite some time. So I am trying to get back into writing, and have quite a few stories percolating in my head, but I just need to find the time to write them.

I basically only write one-shots (I have one three chaptered story), and they're usually character explorations and snapshots rather than long plots, but I've written about a variety of characters, so hopefully there's something you'll enjoy. I like experimenting a bit with form too.

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Tales of the Battle by Northumbrian
Rated: 6th-7th Years [Reviews - 274]

Summary:
Over fifty people died at the Battle of Hogwarts. There are dozens of stories of loss, betrayal, heroism and sacrifice. These are some of those stories.

Nominated for: Best General (Chaptered) story – Quicksilver Quills 2011


Categories: General Fics Genre: Warnings: Mild Profanity, Violence

Word count: 49415 Chapters: 25 Completed: Yes
Published:
08/28/10 Updated: 03/31/11


Reviewer: The_Real_Hermione Signed
Date: 03/31/11 Title: Chapter 12: Epiphany and Fall

Yes I know, this is my second review on this story today... but I just adore your characterisation of Lavender, so I had to drop you another review. But I'll go back to Chapter 8, as that's what I got upto last time.

"Abbot Ails" - I really liked how you showed a grown-up Hannah - after all, the last time we see her in canon is basically HBP when she's devastated about her mother, and you really showed a more mature and stronger woman. I thought it was really interesting that when talking about the twins, she differentiated between them. It was a nice touch, as people don't seem to do that very often.

"Justin Time" - firstly, great pun in the title. I really enjoyed Justin in this, particularly how you explored his guilt about Colin with the comparison to how Colin had stopped Dennis.

"Voldemort doesn't play Quidditch" - this one made me laugh, but it was also very effective as a battle story. I like how you switch text types sometimes (eg the letters from Augusta and this). It gives a nice variety in the story. I think it was fantastic what you did her, showing that Voldemort really affected everyone and everything through the example of Quidditch. A great way to connect Oliver as well.

"Waning Moon" - the end of this one was just completely heart-breaking, and even in such a short space, you really made me like Mark (although this could also be because I've read "Moon"). So once again I find myself praising your characterisation....

And finally, "Epiphany and Fall". Well, as previously stated, I really adore this story. You develop Lavender so much beyond the flirty girl we see in HBP and you've just given her a fantastic story. I loved the idea that she enjoys her time with Susan because Susan is honest and real, where everyone else doesn't treat her normally. I love the idea that Lavender wants to "fight her own battles" so to speak and not have others fawning over her, it shows real Gryffindor spirit. I hope you write more fics which include Lavender, I think she's one of your best characters (though they're all really good!)

~Katrina

Author's Response:
Katrina, thanks for these too.

This Hannah is the Hannah who worked in the Cauldron in “Fred and George’s Busy Day” and she’s very familiar with the twins, and the resistance. Justin isn’t the only one with a punning title; the Greene King brewery (in Bury St Edmunds) brew Abbot Ale. Justin’s chapter once again dealt with Colin’s death. As I think about it, I realise that many of these stories revolve around Colin’s death.

I had the idea for a “Lee Jordan interviews” story way back when I wrote Grave Days. This particular story would have been much more grim had I written it as it happened, the interview allowed me to give an overview.

Mark will reappear in other stories (rather like other of my original characters) and this story was easy for me to write, as I knew the story (though I hadn’t written it) when I wrote Moon.

Lavender proves (I hope) that it’s possible to be brave and honourable, and obsessed with boys and clothes. Lavender and Susan will appear in “M.I.T.: Muggle Interface Team and I have four other Lavender stories in the planning stages. “Moons” will be set in 2010 (Lavender is 30), “Down” will be set more than a year before “Bare”, “Exsanguination” is set before “Moon” and “Dinner” is set immediately after “Moon”. I like the idea of giving my Lavender stories one word titles, but it will be some time before they arrive.

-N-

 
Reviewer: The_Real_Hermione Signed
Date: 04/09/11 Title: Chapter 16: Cornered

Hi Neil,

So here's a long overdue review for this fic.

Seamus Awake: I really enjoyed seeing Seamus' perspective on his relationship with Lavender... and I sort of felt a bit bad for him about it, too. I liked his thoughts about Neville and your Luna was really good in this fic. I think this story was a nice reminder that Seamus belongs in Gryffindor, as obviously when the DA first forms, he's not in it and as a reader sometimes you forget that he fought in the final battle.

Bad Faith: I think your Draco was realistic... throughout the whole story, just doing anything and everything to save himself. I liked the way he kept saying "I'm on your side..." to people from both sides. Although I did sort of feel a bit sorry for him...

Die Dumb: This one has me a bit divided... I had never really imagined Goyle to be as stupid as you show him... it almost feels like he's mentally disabled somehow in this. Which I suppose is a really interesting take on the situation. I really liked the way you developed his character through this, and how he had been using Malfoy as much as Malfoy had been using him. Very interesting. But yeah, I'd never really imagined him like this.

Cornered: I think this is one of the most poignant fics of the series. That last line... I really wasn't expecting it, and it was just so heartbreaking for Michael. I think you just showed how scarred he was from that session of torture. I really don't know what else to say about this one... except that I just loved it. Fantastic writing.

Well, you'll probably hear from me again soon after I've read the next few chapters. I am really enjoying this fic, it's fantastic.

~Katrina

Author's Response:
Katarina

Seamus’ was one of the hardest stories for me to write, for some reason his character took a long time for me to find. Luna, of course, had to appear as, of course, did Ernie. JKR gave us Ernie, Luna and Seamus in the Battle, and they struck me as an odd trio.

Thanks, I know that a lot of girls like Draco, but he’s one of those who would bribe his way onto a lifeboat on the Titanic. I’m glad, however that you felt sorry for him.

I read every tiny think I could find about Goyle before I wrote Die Dumb. He has virtually no dialogue, and it seems that he was the lowest of the three. Crabbe was the one who did most of the talking. I don’t think that he’s mentally disabled, just a not very clever sadist. I think he stuck with Draco because he likes hurting people. It’s the only thing he’s good at.

I wanted to write a story about mental scarring. We know that Michael was tortured, and we know what happened to Neville’s parents. Those two facts combined to make this story arrive in my head almost fully formed.

Thanks for the reviews.

Neil

 
Reviewer: The_Real_Hermione Signed
Date: 04/10/11 Title: Chapter 20: Son of the Air

Hello again,

Here comes my next review of this fic.

Worn Out Boot: This was a great fic of self-discovery for Terry, I thought. You made him such a likeable character, and I loved how he became sure of himself and decided to become an Auror at the end. Luna seems to appear in a number of your stories, and you always write her so well. It's typical of her to know/believe that Voldemort's lying about Harry, and that her optimism is catching to Terry.

Falling Angel: Wonderful characterisation again. It definitely throws a new light on Fred... I liked how you distinguished between the two twins in this and made them different people. I also liked Angelina's realisation about Tony. The ending was sad... I guess that's always the thing when someone dies, you see all the lost opportunities rather than the opportunities you took.

Parents: I think Lavender's parents were very typical here, particularly in how they blamed Harry. After all, when bad things happen people always want to blame someone else. And, although they came across as cowardly, I suppose parents always worry about their children. I think this was a very realistic story.

Son of the Air: Wow, this one really impressed me. I love fics in second person, but the idea to use Buckbeak as a focalising character is just fantastic. The detached way of telling the story and the way the scene is described really shows how pointless killing is and really shows up humanity. Definitely one of your more poignant stories from this series. I loved the ending, too. There's something great about Buckbeak getting revenge...

I'm looking forward to the last 5 chapters!!

~Katrina

Author's Response:
Katarina

JKR says that Kingsley recruits Harry, Ron and Neville to the Auror Office. I wanted to add a Hufflepuff and a Ravenclaw DA member. The Hufflepuff was easy (I couldn’t imagine Ernie or Justin and I definitely didn’t want Hannah). I considered Padma as the Ravenclaw, but I finally decided on Terry, who is no more than a name in canon. Terry appeared in Luna’s chapter, so I returned the favour (and I liked them so much I considered making them a couple.

Both Angelina/George and Angelina/Fred are canon. That seemed very weird to me, so I wanted to explore it. Really her relationship with Fred was short, It was there in GoF, but not in OotP. This is my explanation, and a reason why in my stories it will be a few years before they finally get together.

I loved writing Parents. Don and Carmine are in a very difficult position. He could lose everything whatever he does, so doing nothing seems to be the best option. It is cowardice, but it’s also an attempt to protect the family.

I’m a strictly canon writer, I reread the Battle chapters dozens of times and wrote copious notes. I missed something. This chapter isn’t canon :( Hagrid fights Macnair in the great hall just before the face-off with Voldemort. But I liked writing this little experiment in second person, though it wasn’t easy, so it’s staying unchanged as my only AU story.

Neil

 
Reviewer: The_Real_Hermione Signed
Date: 04/10/11 Title: Chapter 21: Snakeslayer

Neville is one of my favourite characters, so I just had to leave a review after this story, too... (I think it's my fifth review on Tales of the Battle).

You really are incredible at taking what JKR gives us in canon and recreating her characters with your own additions. Neville was just perfect in this. I liked the comparisons you drew between him and Harry, because really I see them as very similar. Neither thinks they're particularly brave, but when it comes down to it, they find something inside themselves. I suppose in a way it is because both of them have lead such a damaged childhood and are fighting the people who caused them to lose their parents.

I liked the constant reminder of "Kill the snake", particularly as it tied in with the title. It shows that Neville has a focus, despite the chaos surrounding him during the battle.

I loved the ending... in so few words you managed to convey such an important idea. Particularly the line "I have no idea how Harry copes with this". I guess this is another way in which Neville is similar to Harry and has to go through many of the same things, even though he goes through them later than Harry.

I think it's interesting that Neville kills a Horcrux... I think there's a link between the people who killed the Horcruxes - Harry, Dumbledore, Ron, Hermione, Neville... and then there's Crabbe, who doesn't seem to quite fit, but I suppose it's fitting that someone from Voldemort's side actually killed a Horcrux. Anyway, I think that just highlights the connection between Neville and Harry, which we of course see in OotP as well. And I'm really rambling here...

Absolutely loved your characterisation of Neville!

~Katrina

(Oh and by the way referring to your last response - I doubt anyone will notice that you made a canon error with Macnair... it's hardly an important part of the Battle...)

Author's Response:
Katrina

Neville, it seems to me, is one of JKR’s finest creations. He, like Ginny and Luna, is always there in the background. In the early books she uses him as comic relief, although even then he’s prepared to stand up for himself, sometimes foolishly (I seem to remember him taking on Crabbe and Goyle in a fist fight). Like Ron, when his second-hand wand is broken and he gets a new one, he becomes more adept magically. Neville is probably one of the bravest of the Gryffindors, recklessly so sometimes. Towards the end of the Battle, it’s possible to sum up his contribution very easily. Harry gave him a job, kill the snake, he did it. I’m certain that, like Harry, Neville will have no idea how to cope with suddenly being famous.

Thanks

Neil

ps Macnair bothers me, but not enough to delete this chapter, as I like my version of events, and it isn’t exactly a major change.

 
Reviewer: The_Real_Hermione Signed
Date: 04/10/11 Title: Chapter 24: Paperwork

Hello again,

Broken Flint: Very interesting. I'm really glad you wrote a story which shows what the 'bad guys' did after the battle. I think your characterisation of Millicent is very interesting... and it certainly fit her to carve Marcus' initials into her skin... and yet, despite her seeming to be 'bad', it was obvious that she cared about Marcus, which somehow seems to redeem her a bit, at least in my perspective.

Ouroboros: What a perfectly manipulative Narcissa. That was so realistic - at one point you wrote something about how Lucius adopted a bored/aloof look that he wore so well or something, it really shows how the only thing the Malfoys seem to be good at is acting. You've made them seem so interesting in this, I'd love to see your take on how they're holding up a few years down the track. Particularly Draco.

Paperwork: It's funny how sometimes seeing the pain and loss in the world can lead us to rediscover what's important... This story was one of my favourites from the series. Finding the killer didn’t stop her victims from being dead. That's just so true. I imagine it would be extremely difficult to be 'professionally detached' when you're dealing with dead people, who, as you point out, are all someone's daughter or son, or friend, or brother or sister.

Anyway, I'm rather curious to see how you'll tie everything up in the last story... I suspect you'll hear from me again soon. Sofar everything has been well-written, well-characterised, poignant, true to canon... fantastic.

~Katrina

Author's Response:
Katrina

Broken Flint was my chance to create a few minor villains (apart from Goyle, the others are little more than names). Bigoted Mudblood-hating racists can love people (just not Mudbloods). This chapter gave me four villains (including Colin’s killer) for Harry and co. to chase in other stories. I don’t believe that Millicent is as stupid as many people think, she simply knows when to get physical.

I hate stories featuring nice, redeemed, and contrite Malfoys. They are great villains, and stories need great villains. Draco was never witty, simply cruel and Narcissa needs to keep him quiet. Harry, Ron, Hermione and Ginny should never be certain whether the Malfoys have changed, or are merely pretending they have changed. It worked for the Malfoy’s after the first war.

Paperwork underwent several rewrites (the final version had a “happy” ending because the original was simply too bleak). Whether Auror Al (don’t call him Spider) Webb reappears in my other stories is something I haven’t decided.
Neil

 
Reviewer: The_Real_Hermione Signed
Date: 04/10/11 Title: Chapter 25: Index

And thus it ends...

I have to say, I wondered how you would be able to tie this amazing set of stories together and od them all justice... and you certainly didn't disappoint. I think there's a nice pattern to it that the first story was about Madam Pomfrey and the last about Madam Pince. I think the amazing thing about this is that you really stuck to her character in canon (as in when she talks about the students ruining books etc.), and yet you made her... compassionate? I suppose that's the right word.

You ask some interesting questions in this... like Is one tragedy less than another simply because there are fewer corpses? Or is it greater because several of the victims were teenagers? I suppose there's not really an answer to it. You're just highlighting how there is so little need for death, how pointless it is.

With quill in hand, I recorded the night’s events. Nothing? A waste of time? I do not think so. I am no Healer, no Auror and no warrior. I did what I could, what I do best. I really loved this line, and I think it really shows how death affects everyone around it. So even though Irma wasn't in danger herself, she still had to cope with the death surrounding her and try and deal with it. And she did all she could to help.

The idea of destroying books is repugnant. It goes against everything I have been taught, everything I believe. Books lift the brume of ignorance. But perhaps the loss forever of these books would be condign, an appropriate threnody for the fallen.
'Not at all,' I tell her.
Somehow that is just the perfect ending for this whole story... I guess there's something about burning those books which suggests cleansing or healing, allowing for rebirth... kind of like a phoenix.

Anyway, I'm so glad I decided to read Tales of the Battle, it's been a fantastic read.

~Katrina

Author's Response: So good you reviewed it twice? ;-D -N-

 
Reviewer: The_Real_Hermione Signed
Date: 04/10/11 Title: Chapter 25: Index

And thus it ends...

I have to say, I wondered how you would be able to tie this amazing set of stories together and od them all justice... and you certainly didn't disappoint. I think there's a nice pattern to it that the first story was about Madam Pomfrey and the last about Madam Pince. I think the amazing thing about this is that you really stuck to her character in canon (as in when she talks about the students ruining books etc.), and yet you made her... compassionate? I suppose that's the right word.

You ask some interesting questions in this... like Is one tragedy less than another simply because there are fewer corpses? Or is it greater because several of the victims were teenagers? I suppose there's not really an answer to it. You're just highlighting how there is so little need for death, how pointless it is.

With quill in hand, I recorded the night’s events. Nothing? A waste of time? I do not think so. I am no Healer, no Auror and no warrior. I did what I could, what I do best. I really loved this line, and I think it really shows how death affects everyone around it. So even though Irma wasn't in danger herself, she still had to cope with the death surrounding her and try and deal with it. And she did all she could to help.

The idea of destroying books is repugnant. It goes against everything I have been taught, everything I believe. Books lift the brume of ignorance. But perhaps the loss forever of these books would be condign, an appropriate threnody for the fallen.
'Not at all,' I tell her.
Somehow that is just the perfect ending for this whole story... I guess there's something about burning those books which suggests cleansing or healing, allowing for rebirth... kind of like a phoenix.

Anyway, I'm so glad I decided to read Tales of the Battle, it's been a fantastic read.

~Katrina

Author's Response:
Katrina

I wasn’t certain how I was going to finish this myself (for a while Paperwork was going to be the final chapter). Eventually, I decided to reread the stories. I got no further than “The Calm Before”. The second I read it, I knew it had to be Madam Pince, and this story flowed very quickly from that decision.

Possibly it’s because I’m a fan of Terry Pratchett, but I believe that being the Librarian in a magical library is a potentially dangerous job. I’ve tried to show Madam Pince as very well-read and rather detached.

Thanks for all of your reviews. Every one of them interesting and thought provoking.
Neil

 

All That I've Got by J Raven
Rated: 3rd-5th Years [Reviews - 13]

Summary:

Tom Riddle was always the perfect student, right?

Wrong

There was one spell he never could get right

A spell that required the one thing he couldn’t have

A happy memory

It’s hard to be the best when what you need is just out of reach



Categories: Dark/Angsty Fics Genre: Warnings: Abuse, Violence

Word count: 2633 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
09/08/10 Updated: 09/08/10


Reviewer: The_Real_Hermione Signed
Date: 09/09/10 Title: Chapter 1: Everyone Else Has A Memory

Great story, especially for your first go! Tom's character was portrayed very nicely, and you showed his inner conflict well. The idea for the story was creative.

Instead of saying 'FLASHBACK', perhaps you could just put it in italics? (To me it was quite obvious that it was a flashback, and having that written there sort of ruined the flow a bit).

'Professor Merrythought gave him a look that was far too calculating for Tom’s liking. Did she suspect? Could she tell he had nothing happy to remember?' this line seemed a little out of character for the Professor - for the rest of the fic she seems to believe Tom is a fantastic student... it seems like more the kind of thing Dumbledore would think had he been there.

But anyway, they're just small things and it was a really great story, I hope you write more!

Author's Response: Thanks so much for the review, I've made a few changes where you suggested them. You’re right about it seeming too much like Dumbledore, so I’ve changed it to a couple of Ravenclaws. Your help is greatly appreciated :) Jess

 

Summary:

All Teddy Lupin had ever wanted was to be the kind of man his godfather was. He even followed in Harry's footsteps and became an Auror.

Harry wanted nothing more than to be the father that Teddy would never have, but work and obligations always seemed to get in the way. Before he knew it, Teddy was all grown up. How had he missed all those precious moments? He knew he had to make up for it somehow.

After all, they had all the time in the world, right?

 

This fic WON a 2011 Quicksilver Quill Award: Best Post-Hogwarts Story



Categories: Post-Hogwarts Genre: Warnings: Character Death, Mild Profanity, Violence

Word count: 6160 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
09/15/10 Updated: 09/19/10


Reviewer: The_Real_Hermione Signed
Date: 09/20/10 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

You really had me hooked in this fic! My favourite parts were the opening bits where you explored character and showed the small things that Harry had missed out on in Teddy's life etc. I have to admit, I wasn't expecting the ending but it fitted in well with how you set it up.

Somehow the last bit of writing didn't quite work for me. I liked the bit with Draco, but the next three paragraphs seemed a little excessive. Perhaps you could have written that shorter and still finished with "But not just then...". But that's just a personal opinion.

I also would have liked to have known a little more about how Teddy managed to find Harry, but maybe that wouldn't have worked because after his death it seems kind of insignificant... so I'm not sure about whether that would have worked or not.

I think the best thing was your characters, who you created very believably and explored nicely. Well done!

Author's Response:

Ah, I see you've got past the righteous anger bit where you want to strangle me for killing off poor ickle Teddy. :D

What I really wanted was to paint a picture of Teddy that showed him trying to figure out how to be a man whilst Harry simultaneously struggled with being a father figure. Perhaps Teddy would have been better off not wanting to be like Harry, but most children love their dads despite their flaws. I seem to be in teh minority of people who consider Harry one of the more flawed characters in the Potterverse. He is brave and all that, but he makes poor judgment calls and judges people constantly. But Teddy doesn't learn these things because Harry isn't around as much. Instead, he falls in love with the ideal Harry that everyone talks about -- the saviour.

How Teddy found Harry? I just sort of glossed over it because I figured it would be more of a given. Knowing that anyone wanting to abduct Harry would be a friggin idiot to stay in the building, the next logical step would have been to look outside, where he saw Harry, Yaxley,and Rowle in the distance, also allowing him time to formulate his plan. 

And the last bit...I know it all seems a bit wooden, but it was supposed to be. Harry was supposed to be in this trance-like shock where it really hasn't sunk in yet that his godson was dead and he was responsible (or at least he feels he is). He really had thought that he could go back to life after defeating Voldemort, and teh destruction of this illusion takes some time to process. 

Also, there was an ulteriour motive to including Ginny. In my story The Vindication of James Potter, I sort of cannibalised Harry and Ginny's marriage, citing earlier examples of their problems. This was the start of that, when he told her what and who had got Teddy killed. Most of my readers from that story read my other ones as well, so I like to put in little nuggets to ring some bells for them so they can say, "Oh, now I get it."

Thanks for the review and reading my obnoxiously long response. Have a lovely day!

~Jess

 

What Lies Behind by C_A_Campbell
Rated: 6th-7th Years [Reviews - 28]

Summary: Past Featured StoryWinner of the 2011 QSQ Award for Best Dark/Angsty One-shot! It is true what they say about your life flashing before your eyes just before you die. As Theodore Nott, Death Eater like his father before him, stands on the battlefield in what is surely Hogwarts and his final hours, he remembers all that lays behind him: his father, the Dark Lord, the one girl he ever loved, and the thing he has forced himself to forget.

But you remember, don't you, Theodore?

Please tell me you remember me.


Categories: Dark/Angsty Fics Genre: Warnings: Abuse, Character Death, Mild Profanity, Violence

Word count: 9871 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
09/15/10 Updated: 09/17/10


Reviewer: The_Real_Hermione Signed
Date: 09/18/10 Title: Chapter 1: Do you remember?

Great fic! I was really impressed by your depiction of Theodore, it was really insightful and interesting, especially your ideas about masks and how he became a mirror. I liked the way it jumped between past and present, and nicely summed up everything. I think a couple of times you wrote 'anyways' instead of 'anyway', which ruined the flow a little for me. That's a really small criticism though, otherwise it was fantastic!

Author's Response: I'm glad you liked it, especially my characterization of Theodore. I apologize for my anyways thing. Unfortunately, that's the way I say it so I forget it's not the proper way. I'm glad you liked it anyways though.

 

It's All You Need by leftrightmiddle
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 2]

Summary: A great man once said that it is our choices, far more than our abilities that reflect who we truly are. One of our greatest tools in life is the power of choice. A story of stability, choice and what it means to love. Of how leaving behind what is easy means walking out into what is unknown.



Andromeda Black needs to make her final decision.

Categories: General Fics Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 1402 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
09/16/10 Updated: 09/17/10


Reviewer: The_Real_Hermione Signed
Date: 09/17/10 Title: Chapter 1: Choices

I thought it was an interesting story and nicely written. It annoyed me a little that you used "anyways" instead of "anyway", it added a colloquial sound to the story which to me didn't really fit.

Also I never had the impression that purebloods actually believed that Muggles stole their magic... I thought that was just the story they put out. I always thought they wanted to make themselves feel better and so they had to find someone to bully, and that's why they picked on Muggleborns and Muggles. Anyway, I guess that's just a different interpretation.

Author's Response: Thank you! Oops...thanks for pointing that out. That's a really good interpretation of it, and I think that purebloods are just so filled with pride that they can't admit that they do pick on Muggleborns and Muggles to make themselves feel better, what you said. But I also think that after all those years putting that story out, they just started to believe it themselves. And this fueled their hatred even more, to keep this story in the back of their minds. But that's just what I think, and someone else may have something completely different to say. Thank you so much for your review! Have an amazing day bri

 

This is the Last Song by MagEd
Rated: 6th-7th Years [Reviews - 23]

Summary: "I hate to be the bearer of bad news — but this is war, Evans, and war isn't a big barrel of laughs."

Ten steps to growing up, told in ten moments from the first war. *Two-shot*

Categories: James/Lily Genre: Warnings: Character Death, Mild Profanity, Sexual Situations, Substance Abuse

Word count: 11290 Chapters: 2 Completed: Yes
Published:
09/20/10 Updated: 09/24/10


Reviewer: The_Real_Hermione Signed
Date: 11/27/10 Title: Chapter 2: Chapter 2

Once again, this was wonderfully written. I loved how you showed James and Lily's transformation from eager high school graduates to the family they are at the end, who have experienced a lot of hardship and pain together.

I loved the bit at the Prewett's funeral, especially the meeting with Molly. It was so sad, especially because we know that James and Lily only lived another year and a half. I loved your line "Maybe he and your — your baby, maybe they can play together. They'll be at Hogwarts together, after all.". Cute, but written well enough that it wasn't cliched, it just added to the story really well.

So yeah... I pretty much loved everything. As per usual, your characterisations of James and Lily were lovely. I really loved all your Lily/James work :) it's always great. Then again I pretty much love all your fics...

Author's Response: Thanks very much! I'm glad you liked that the scene with Molly! The whole story made me a little sad--I think that's why I tend to avoid fics with baby!Harry because James and Lily are always so close to death at the point, and I'm far too attached to fictional characters to handle it! :)

 

Lady by armagod679
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 8]

Summary: There are certain indispensable rules in the house of Black. You must stick with purebloods. You must disdain Muggles. You must keep up decorum at all times. You must show off your magic. You must appear to be a lady so a good pureblood boy will want to marry you.

Categories: General Fics Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 1552 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
09/26/10 Updated: 09/27/10


Reviewer: The_Real_Hermione Signed
Date: 10/30/10 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

I really enjoyed this fic - you captured boh Bella and Cissy perfectly. I loved the repetition of the opening and the ending - it has a nice circular effect, that evil will keep going on and on.

One of my favourite lines was "Aunt Walburga has removed her." - It was the perfect line for Bella.

The small canon problems - with ages etc. - didn't bother me much, as this is a fic about character and I thought it was done nicely.

Author's Response: Thank you!

 

Summary: The seven women who loved Ron Weasley.

Categories: General Fics Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 6323 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
10/10/10 Updated: 10/10/10


Reviewer: The_Real_Hermione Signed
Date: 10/16/10 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Once again it was very impressive and nicely written. It's great you wrote something about Ron, as his good qualities are often overlooked. I was surprised by your inclusion of Angelina initially, but it fitted. I liked how your tone changed for each section, especially for Luna's part. Can't wait for the next one!!

Author's Response: Thank you! Yes, it seems Ron doesn't get as much attention as a lot of characters. I'm glad you liked this, even if it surprised you a little. And I do try to change the tone to match the different voices -- I'm happy it worked and you appreciated it!

 

Catchphrase by Cinderella Angelina
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 6]

Summary: Percy Weasley meets Penelope Clearwater.

Categories: Other Pairing Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 1009 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
10/12/10 Updated: 10/12/10


Reviewer: The_Real_Hermione Signed
Date: 10/16/10 Title: Chapter 1: Catchphrase

My first thought was excellent characterisation of Percy - you made him fit JK's Percy and yet put him in a nicer light than he was often seen in the books. In a way, I would have preferred it if the title was "What a coincidence" rather than "Catchphrase", but that's just my personal opinion.

But it was a great fic, definitely short and sweet :).

 

Summary:

After it was all said and done, Harry wanted a sandwich. However, Ron knew that what he wanted was far deeper and complex and maddening and insufferable. But could Hermione ever forgive him for leaving her behind? Could he ever forgive himself?

 

This story was nominated for a 2011 Quicksilver Quill Award: Best Canon Romance.



Categories: Ron/Hermione Genre: Warnings: Mild Profanity

Word count: 1377 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
10/16/10 Updated: 10/18/10


Reviewer: The_Real_Hermione Signed
Date: 02/24/11 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

This was really sweet! I think you characterised them both really well - particularly the tension at the beginning, and I loved how Ron finally plucked up his courage and explained to her what had really gone on in his mind. It shows a side of Ron that people sometimes ignore and really showed why he belongs in Gryffindor.

The idea about Hermione's middle name was perfect for this, I think, because it shows how much further Ron and Hermione can go together. Plus it was really sweet.

I loved the change in Ron throughout the fic, and the last paragraph was just perfect!!

Sometimes I found your narration a little clunky... I don't know, I don't really have examples so I'm probably not being particularly useful here... I guess I just didn't like it as much as the rest of the fic.

Oh also, I loved the idea that Harry just wanted a sandwich!! That gave away so much about his character/your interpretation of his character in just a sentence.

So yeah... I really enjoyed this, great work!!

~Katrina

Author's Response:

I will let you in on a little secret: I don't like Ron. If I knew him in person, I'd not like him at all. That being said, I decided that it was worth the challenge to portray him in a positive light and make my own hypothesis of what happened in post-sandwich Hogwarts. In about 70 minutes' worth of work, this is what came out. That might account for the 'clunk' in the narrative, since I really didn't, um, edit it past a quick punctuation sweep. Busted, hehe.

Anyway, I was pleased with how it came out, but most importantly, it made the birthday girl happy. I'm glad that you liked it, and thank you for taking the time to write such a nice review.

~Jess

 

Stay With Me by Sagen
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 3]

Summary: Andromeda knows that Ted loves her, but does she love him? Is five months really long enough to know that you love somebody?

She’s running out of time to answer, and with news of their relationship spreading, she soon finds herself having to make the hardest choice of all. This is a sequel to my Boy Oh Boy.

Categories: Other Pairing Genre: Warnings: Mild Profanity, Violence

Word count: 3936 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
10/19/10 Updated: 10/25/10


Reviewer: The_Real_Hermione Signed
Date: 10/29/10 Title: Chapter 1: Stay With Me

I'm glad you added a sequel to Boy oh Boy, I felt like it needed some more at the end of that. This was a sweet story and I really liked it, however there were a few small grammatical mistakes (eg "I was be disowned" instead of I would be disowned) and in some cases I thought you over-wrote Andromeda's thoughts, when to the reader they were obvious by her actions.

But otherwise it was sweet and nicely written. Great fic :).

Author's Response: I'm glad you liked it! Thanks for the comments.

 

Stop Signs by leftrightmiddle
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 9]

Summary: It's been one month since the Final Battle, and George is still trying to cope with the death of his brother. He's refusing to talk to anyone, so it comes as a surprise to the both of them when he accepts Angelina's invitation for coffee. During that fateful conversation, George learns that the funny thing about stop signs is that they're also start signs.

Categories: Post-Hogwarts Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 1119 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
10/23/10 Updated: 10/31/10


Reviewer: The_Real_Hermione Signed
Date: 11/04/10 Title: Chapter 1: Stop and Start

In general I enjoyed this fic - it was short but sweet and a nice exploration of this analogy.

I think I would have liked it more if you had added a bit more darkness into it - perhaps George could have resisted Angelina a bit more or something. I think my favourite part of this fic was actually the first bit - and Angelina's outburst is really good.

There were times when it felt like you were over-writing a bit, or writing things that you could have shown through dialogue or actions - for example, "It wasn't always easy to go forward. There was still a fear of getting hurt, but you had to make that leap to move on" - I feel like you could just show this through George's reaction to Angelina.

It also seemed a bit cliched in the way that George changed so quickly...

Anyway, I enjoyed it, this is just things I thought which might help your writing. Good job :)

Author's Response: Wow, thanks so much for that, and taking time to review! I will definetly keep this in mind when I write in the future, I find you a very helpful reviewer. Have a great day! -bri

 

Juggling by Equinox Chick
Rated: 3rd-5th Years [Reviews - 19]

Summary: Lily Evans wasn’t the only Gryffindor with a childhood friend. Whilst she was meeting the boy who would introduce her to the magical world, someone else was learning how to mix with Muggles.

This is not, however, a story about Lily Evans. This is a tale about James Potter and the Muggle girl that he never quite forgot.

This story is for Natalie (hestiajones) who makes me laugh more than most people and has been a very supportive friend, despite our separate continents. Happy Birthday, mate!

I’m indebted to Gina (Gmariam) who kindly offered to beta this short one-shot, and then didn’t complain when it mushroomed into a chaptered fic.

Because of an archive gliitch, this fic has been temporarily put down a rating. the content remains the same and it is still a 6th-7th. You have been warned.

Disclaimer: I am not JK Rowling. If I had been, then Sirius, Remus, James, Lily and Tonks would not have died. Peter, however would have died in an icky manner

OMMPP! Juggling won 2 QSQ's for Best Chaptered Marauder and Dita won Best Original Character. Seriously pleased and shocked here. Thank you.

The chapter titles are all from Keane songs.

Categories: Other Pairing Genre: Warnings: Mild Profanity, Sexual Situations, Violence

Word count: 16283 Chapters: 3 Completed: Yes
Published:
10/29/10 Updated: 11/13/10


Reviewer: The_Real_Hermione Signed
Date: 12/03/10 Title: Chapter 3: Chapter 3 - Somewhere Only We Know

This was so heartbreaking to read. I liked your depiction of James especially, and your reasoning behind him asking Lily out was nice (it is nice not to see him moping over her once in a while).

Dita was a great character too. I liked the way you paralleled the idea juggling worlds in Dita and James. The first chapter was great too - especially the first time they met.

Anyway, I could ramble a lot about how much I enjoyed all of this. Your writing was beautiful throughout, and that last bit with Remus was just so sad and yet so beautiful...

Author's Response: Aww, thank you very much. I enjoyed writing this, although I never thought I'd like writing James with anyone but LIly. I agree that it gets a bit tiresome seeing him only thinking about Lily. Thanks again ~Carole~

 

Summary: A look at moments of Ron and Hermione's life through the years. The narrative alternates between their two POV.

For those of us that wonder what Ron and Hermione's life would be like through the years.

Categories: Ron/Hermione Genre: Warnings: Character Death, Mild Profanity

Word count: 8162 Chapters: 3 Completed: Yes
Published:
11/01/10 Updated: 11/24/10


Reviewer: The_Real_Hermione Signed
Date: 11/26/10 Title: Chapter 3: Chapter Three: The Golden Years

This was such a cute fanfic... I loved your characterisations of Ron and Hermione, they were beautiful. The fic was sort of sad in a good way... not quite bittersweet though... especially the last chapter, when everyone was getting old and dying, but you know that they'd lived happy long lives and it was really their time. I liked how in the first chapter and the beginning of the second, you showed them looking forward to life after the war, and in the later bits looking back over memories. It captured that funny thing about humans - that we're always looking either forwards or backwards.

I loved how people who died in the war - especially Fred - were present throughout your story, it showed that they were never forgotten which was really sweet.

Just one little typo I just picked up - you've written "It's sounds more morbid then it really is." It should be "It sounds more morbid than it really is."

Anyway, this whole fic was really cute and written so well, I loved it :).

Author's Response: Thank you! Yes I wanted to try to capture everything you mentioned so I'm glad you loved it haha. And thanks for the edit! I must have reread that line a million times and my eye just skipped over that typo haha. Thanks for noticing and for the wonderful comments!

 
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