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Hi! I'm Katrina and I am not J.K. Rowling (just to avoid any confusion there).

I've been writing on MNFF since about 2010, but up until a few months ago had not written anything for quite some time. So I am trying to get back into writing, and have quite a few stories percolating in my head, but I just need to find the time to write them.

I basically only write one-shots (I have one three chaptered story), and they're usually character explorations and snapshots rather than long plots, but I've written about a variety of characters, so hopefully there's something you'll enjoy. I like experimenting a bit with form too.

Anyway if you have stumbled here by accident, I do hope you enjoy something.
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Tales of the Battle by Northumbrian
Rated: 6th-7th Years [Reviews - 284]

Summary:
Over fifty people died at the Battle of Hogwarts. There are dozens of stories of loss, betrayal, heroism and sacrifice. These are some of those stories.

Nominated for: Best General (Chaptered) story – Quicksilver Quills 2011


Categories: General Fics Genre: Warnings: Mild Profanity, Violence

Word count: 49415 Chapters: 25 Completed: Yes
Published:
08/28/10 Updated: 03/31/11


Reviewer: The_Real_Hermione Signed
Date: 04/10/11 Title: Chapter 24: Paperwork

Hello again,

Broken Flint: Very interesting. I'm really glad you wrote a story which shows what the 'bad guys' did after the battle. I think your characterisation of Millicent is very interesting... and it certainly fit her to carve Marcus' initials into her skin... and yet, despite her seeming to be 'bad', it was obvious that she cared about Marcus, which somehow seems to redeem her a bit, at least in my perspective.

Ouroboros: What a perfectly manipulative Narcissa. That was so realistic - at one point you wrote something about how Lucius adopted a bored/aloof look that he wore so well or something, it really shows how the only thing the Malfoys seem to be good at is acting. You've made them seem so interesting in this, I'd love to see your take on how they're holding up a few years down the track. Particularly Draco.

Paperwork: It's funny how sometimes seeing the pain and loss in the world can lead us to rediscover what's important... This story was one of my favourites from the series. Finding the killer didn’t stop her victims from being dead. That's just so true. I imagine it would be extremely difficult to be 'professionally detached' when you're dealing with dead people, who, as you point out, are all someone's daughter or son, or friend, or brother or sister.

Anyway, I'm rather curious to see how you'll tie everything up in the last story... I suspect you'll hear from me again soon. Sofar everything has been well-written, well-characterised, poignant, true to canon... fantastic.

~Katrina

Author's Response:
Katrina

Broken Flint was my chance to create a few minor villains (apart from Goyle, the others are little more than names). Bigoted Mudblood-hating racists can love people (just not Mudbloods). This chapter gave me four villains (including Colin’s killer) for Harry and co. to chase in other stories. I don’t believe that Millicent is as stupid as many people think, she simply knows when to get physical.

I hate stories featuring nice, redeemed, and contrite Malfoys. They are great villains, and stories need great villains. Draco was never witty, simply cruel and Narcissa needs to keep him quiet. Harry, Ron, Hermione and Ginny should never be certain whether the Malfoys have changed, or are merely pretending they have changed. It worked for the Malfoy’s after the first war.

Paperwork underwent several rewrites (the final version had a “happy” ending because the original was simply too bleak). Whether Auror Al (don’t call him Spider) Webb reappears in my other stories is something I haven’t decided.
Neil

 
Reviewer: The_Real_Hermione Signed
Date: 04/10/11 Title: Chapter 25: Index

And thus it ends...

I have to say, I wondered how you would be able to tie this amazing set of stories together and od them all justice... and you certainly didn't disappoint. I think there's a nice pattern to it that the first story was about Madam Pomfrey and the last about Madam Pince. I think the amazing thing about this is that you really stuck to her character in canon (as in when she talks about the students ruining books etc.), and yet you made her... compassionate? I suppose that's the right word.

You ask some interesting questions in this... like Is one tragedy less than another simply because there are fewer corpses? Or is it greater because several of the victims were teenagers? I suppose there's not really an answer to it. You're just highlighting how there is so little need for death, how pointless it is.

With quill in hand, I recorded the night’s events. Nothing? A waste of time? I do not think so. I am no Healer, no Auror and no warrior. I did what I could, what I do best. I really loved this line, and I think it really shows how death affects everyone around it. So even though Irma wasn't in danger herself, she still had to cope with the death surrounding her and try and deal with it. And she did all she could to help.

The idea of destroying books is repugnant. It goes against everything I have been taught, everything I believe. Books lift the brume of ignorance. But perhaps the loss forever of these books would be condign, an appropriate threnody for the fallen.
'Not at all,' I tell her.
Somehow that is just the perfect ending for this whole story... I guess there's something about burning those books which suggests cleansing or healing, allowing for rebirth... kind of like a phoenix.

Anyway, I'm so glad I decided to read Tales of the Battle, it's been a fantastic read.

~Katrina

Author's Response: So good you reviewed it twice? ;-D -N-

 
Reviewer: The_Real_Hermione Signed
Date: 04/10/11 Title: Chapter 25: Index

And thus it ends...

I have to say, I wondered how you would be able to tie this amazing set of stories together and od them all justice... and you certainly didn't disappoint. I think there's a nice pattern to it that the first story was about Madam Pomfrey and the last about Madam Pince. I think the amazing thing about this is that you really stuck to her character in canon (as in when she talks about the students ruining books etc.), and yet you made her... compassionate? I suppose that's the right word.

You ask some interesting questions in this... like Is one tragedy less than another simply because there are fewer corpses? Or is it greater because several of the victims were teenagers? I suppose there's not really an answer to it. You're just highlighting how there is so little need for death, how pointless it is.

With quill in hand, I recorded the night’s events. Nothing? A waste of time? I do not think so. I am no Healer, no Auror and no warrior. I did what I could, what I do best. I really loved this line, and I think it really shows how death affects everyone around it. So even though Irma wasn't in danger herself, she still had to cope with the death surrounding her and try and deal with it. And she did all she could to help.

The idea of destroying books is repugnant. It goes against everything I have been taught, everything I believe. Books lift the brume of ignorance. But perhaps the loss forever of these books would be condign, an appropriate threnody for the fallen.
'Not at all,' I tell her.
Somehow that is just the perfect ending for this whole story... I guess there's something about burning those books which suggests cleansing or healing, allowing for rebirth... kind of like a phoenix.

Anyway, I'm so glad I decided to read Tales of the Battle, it's been a fantastic read.

~Katrina

Author's Response:
Katrina

I wasn’t certain how I was going to finish this myself (for a while Paperwork was going to be the final chapter). Eventually, I decided to reread the stories. I got no further than “The Calm Before”. The second I read it, I knew it had to be Madam Pince, and this story flowed very quickly from that decision.

Possibly it’s because I’m a fan of Terry Pratchett, but I believe that being the Librarian in a magical library is a potentially dangerous job. I’ve tried to show Madam Pince as very well-read and rather detached.

Thanks for all of your reviews. Every one of them interesting and thought provoking.
Neil

 

All That I've Got by J Raven
Rated: 3rd-5th Years [Reviews - 13]

Summary:

Tom Riddle was always the perfect student, right?

Wrong

There was one spell he never could get right

A spell that required the one thing he couldn’t have

A happy memory

It’s hard to be the best when what you need is just out of reach



Categories: Dark/Angsty Fics Genre: Warnings: Abuse, Violence

Word count: 2633 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
09/08/10 Updated: 09/08/10


Reviewer: The_Real_Hermione Signed
Date: 09/09/10 Title: Chapter 1: Everyone Else Has A Memory

Great story, especially for your first go! Tom's character was portrayed very nicely, and you showed his inner conflict well. The idea for the story was creative.

Instead of saying 'FLASHBACK', perhaps you could just put it in italics? (To me it was quite obvious that it was a flashback, and having that written there sort of ruined the flow a bit).

'Professor Merrythought gave him a look that was far too calculating for Tom’s liking. Did she suspect? Could she tell he had nothing happy to remember?' this line seemed a little out of character for the Professor - for the rest of the fic she seems to believe Tom is a fantastic student... it seems like more the kind of thing Dumbledore would think had he been there.

But anyway, they're just small things and it was a really great story, I hope you write more!

Author's Response: Thanks so much for the review, I've made a few changes where you suggested them. You’re right about it seeming too much like Dumbledore, so I’ve changed it to a couple of Ravenclaws. Your help is greatly appreciated :) Jess

 

Summary:

All Teddy Lupin had ever wanted was to be the kind of man his godfather was. He even followed in Harry's footsteps and became an Auror.

Harry wanted nothing more than to be the father that Teddy would never have, but work and obligations always seemed to get in the way. Before he knew it, Teddy was all grown up. How had he missed all those precious moments? He knew he had to make up for it somehow.

After all, they had all the time in the world, right?

 

This fic WON a 2011 Quicksilver Quill Award: Best Post-Hogwarts Story



Categories: Post-Hogwarts Genre: Warnings: Character Death, Mild Profanity, Violence

Word count: 6160 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
09/15/10 Updated: 09/19/10


Reviewer: The_Real_Hermione Signed
Date: 09/20/10 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

You really had me hooked in this fic! My favourite parts were the opening bits where you explored character and showed the small things that Harry had missed out on in Teddy's life etc. I have to admit, I wasn't expecting the ending but it fitted in well with how you set it up.

Somehow the last bit of writing didn't quite work for me. I liked the bit with Draco, but the next three paragraphs seemed a little excessive. Perhaps you could have written that shorter and still finished with "But not just then...". But that's just a personal opinion.

I also would have liked to have known a little more about how Teddy managed to find Harry, but maybe that wouldn't have worked because after his death it seems kind of insignificant... so I'm not sure about whether that would have worked or not.

I think the best thing was your characters, who you created very believably and explored nicely. Well done!

Author's Response:

Ah, I see you've got past the righteous anger bit where you want to strangle me for killing off poor ickle Teddy. :D

What I really wanted was to paint a picture of Teddy that showed him trying to figure out how to be a man whilst Harry simultaneously struggled with being a father figure. Perhaps Teddy would have been better off not wanting to be like Harry, but most children love their dads despite their flaws. I seem to be in teh minority of people who consider Harry one of the more flawed characters in the Potterverse. He is brave and all that, but he makes poor judgment calls and judges people constantly. But Teddy doesn't learn these things because Harry isn't around as much. Instead, he falls in love with the ideal Harry that everyone talks about -- the saviour.

How Teddy found Harry? I just sort of glossed over it because I figured it would be more of a given. Knowing that anyone wanting to abduct Harry would be a friggin idiot to stay in the building, the next logical step would have been to look outside, where he saw Harry, Yaxley,and Rowle in the distance, also allowing him time to formulate his plan. 

And the last bit...I know it all seems a bit wooden, but it was supposed to be. Harry was supposed to be in this trance-like shock where it really hasn't sunk in yet that his godson was dead and he was responsible (or at least he feels he is). He really had thought that he could go back to life after defeating Voldemort, and teh destruction of this illusion takes some time to process. 

Also, there was an ulteriour motive to including Ginny. In my story The Vindication of James Potter, I sort of cannibalised Harry and Ginny's marriage, citing earlier examples of their problems. This was the start of that, when he told her what and who had got Teddy killed. Most of my readers from that story read my other ones as well, so I like to put in little nuggets to ring some bells for them so they can say, "Oh, now I get it."

Thanks for the review and reading my obnoxiously long response. Have a lovely day!

~Jess

 

What Lies Behind by C_A_Campbell
Rated: 6th-7th Years [Reviews - 28]

Summary: Past Featured StoryWinner of the 2011 QSQ Award for Best Dark/Angsty One-shot! It is true what they say about your life flashing before your eyes just before you die. As Theodore Nott, Death Eater like his father before him, stands on the battlefield in what is surely Hogwarts and his final hours, he remembers all that lays behind him: his father, the Dark Lord, the one girl he ever loved, and the thing he has forced himself to forget.

But you remember, don't you, Theodore?

Please tell me you remember me.


Categories: Dark/Angsty Fics Genre: Warnings: Abuse, Character Death, Mild Profanity, Violence

Word count: 9871 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
09/15/10 Updated: 09/17/10


Reviewer: The_Real_Hermione Signed
Date: 09/18/10 Title: Chapter 1: Do you remember?

Great fic! I was really impressed by your depiction of Theodore, it was really insightful and interesting, especially your ideas about masks and how he became a mirror. I liked the way it jumped between past and present, and nicely summed up everything. I think a couple of times you wrote 'anyways' instead of 'anyway', which ruined the flow a little for me. That's a really small criticism though, otherwise it was fantastic!

Author's Response: I'm glad you liked it, especially my characterization of Theodore. I apologize for my anyways thing. Unfortunately, that's the way I say it so I forget it's not the proper way. I'm glad you liked it anyways though.

 

It's All You Need by leftrightmiddle
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 2]

Summary: A great man once said that it is our choices, far more than our abilities that reflect who we truly are. One of our greatest tools in life is the power of choice. A story of stability, choice and what it means to love. Of how leaving behind what is easy means walking out into what is unknown.



Andromeda Black needs to make her final decision.

Categories: General Fics Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 1402 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
09/16/10 Updated: 09/17/10


Reviewer: The_Real_Hermione Signed
Date: 09/17/10 Title: Chapter 1: Choices

I thought it was an interesting story and nicely written. It annoyed me a little that you used "anyways" instead of "anyway", it added a colloquial sound to the story which to me didn't really fit.

Also I never had the impression that purebloods actually believed that Muggles stole their magic... I thought that was just the story they put out. I always thought they wanted to make themselves feel better and so they had to find someone to bully, and that's why they picked on Muggleborns and Muggles. Anyway, I guess that's just a different interpretation.

Author's Response: Thank you! Oops...thanks for pointing that out. That's a really good interpretation of it, and I think that purebloods are just so filled with pride that they can't admit that they do pick on Muggleborns and Muggles to make themselves feel better, what you said. But I also think that after all those years putting that story out, they just started to believe it themselves. And this fueled their hatred even more, to keep this story in the back of their minds. But that's just what I think, and someone else may have something completely different to say. Thank you so much for your review! Have an amazing day bri

 

This is the Last Song by MagEd
Rated: 6th-7th Years [Reviews - 23]

Summary: "I hate to be the bearer of bad news — but this is war, Evans, and war isn't a big barrel of laughs."

Ten steps to growing up, told in ten moments from the first war. *Two-shot*

Categories: James/Lily Genre: Warnings: Character Death, Mild Profanity, Sexual Situations, Substance Abuse

Word count: 11290 Chapters: 2 Completed: Yes
Published:
09/20/10 Updated: 09/24/10


Reviewer: The_Real_Hermione Signed
Date: 11/27/10 Title: Chapter 2: Chapter 2

Once again, this was wonderfully written. I loved how you showed James and Lily's transformation from eager high school graduates to the family they are at the end, who have experienced a lot of hardship and pain together.

I loved the bit at the Prewett's funeral, especially the meeting with Molly. It was so sad, especially because we know that James and Lily only lived another year and a half. I loved your line "Maybe he and your — your baby, maybe they can play together. They'll be at Hogwarts together, after all.". Cute, but written well enough that it wasn't cliched, it just added to the story really well.

So yeah... I pretty much loved everything. As per usual, your characterisations of James and Lily were lovely. I really loved all your Lily/James work :) it's always great. Then again I pretty much love all your fics...

Author's Response: Thanks very much! I'm glad you liked that the scene with Molly! The whole story made me a little sad--I think that's why I tend to avoid fics with baby!Harry because James and Lily are always so close to death at the point, and I'm far too attached to fictional characters to handle it! :)

 

Lady by armagod679
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 8]

Summary: There are certain indispensable rules in the house of Black. You must stick with purebloods. You must disdain Muggles. You must keep up decorum at all times. You must show off your magic. You must appear to be a lady so a good pureblood boy will want to marry you.

Categories: General Fics Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 1552 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
09/26/10 Updated: 09/27/10


Reviewer: The_Real_Hermione Signed
Date: 10/30/10 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

I really enjoyed this fic - you captured boh Bella and Cissy perfectly. I loved the repetition of the opening and the ending - it has a nice circular effect, that evil will keep going on and on.

One of my favourite lines was "Aunt Walburga has removed her." - It was the perfect line for Bella.

The small canon problems - with ages etc. - didn't bother me much, as this is a fic about character and I thought it was done nicely.

Author's Response: Thank you!

 

Summary: The seven women who loved Ron Weasley.

Categories: General Fics Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 6323 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
10/10/10 Updated: 10/10/10


Reviewer: The_Real_Hermione Signed
Date: 10/16/10 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Once again it was very impressive and nicely written. It's great you wrote something about Ron, as his good qualities are often overlooked. I was surprised by your inclusion of Angelina initially, but it fitted. I liked how your tone changed for each section, especially for Luna's part. Can't wait for the next one!!

Author's Response: Thank you! Yes, it seems Ron doesn't get as much attention as a lot of characters. I'm glad you liked this, even if it surprised you a little. And I do try to change the tone to match the different voices -- I'm happy it worked and you appreciated it!

 

Catchphrase by Cinderella Angelina
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 6]

Summary: Percy Weasley meets Penelope Clearwater.

Categories: Other Pairing Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 1009 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
10/12/10 Updated: 10/12/10


Reviewer: The_Real_Hermione Signed
Date: 10/16/10 Title: Chapter 1: Catchphrase

My first thought was excellent characterisation of Percy - you made him fit JK's Percy and yet put him in a nicer light than he was often seen in the books. In a way, I would have preferred it if the title was "What a coincidence" rather than "Catchphrase", but that's just my personal opinion.

But it was a great fic, definitely short and sweet :).

 

Summary:

After it was all said and done, Harry wanted a sandwich. However, Ron knew that what he wanted was far deeper and complex and maddening and insufferable. But could Hermione ever forgive him for leaving her behind? Could he ever forgive himself?

 

This story was nominated for a 2011 Quicksilver Quill Award: Best Canon Romance.



Categories: Ron/Hermione Genre: Warnings: Mild Profanity

Word count: 1377 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
10/16/10 Updated: 10/18/10


Reviewer: The_Real_Hermione Signed
Date: 02/24/11 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

This was really sweet! I think you characterised them both really well - particularly the tension at the beginning, and I loved how Ron finally plucked up his courage and explained to her what had really gone on in his mind. It shows a side of Ron that people sometimes ignore and really showed why he belongs in Gryffindor.

The idea about Hermione's middle name was perfect for this, I think, because it shows how much further Ron and Hermione can go together. Plus it was really sweet.

I loved the change in Ron throughout the fic, and the last paragraph was just perfect!!

Sometimes I found your narration a little clunky... I don't know, I don't really have examples so I'm probably not being particularly useful here... I guess I just didn't like it as much as the rest of the fic.

Oh also, I loved the idea that Harry just wanted a sandwich!! That gave away so much about his character/your interpretation of his character in just a sentence.

So yeah... I really enjoyed this, great work!!

~Katrina

Author's Response:

I will let you in on a little secret: I don't like Ron. If I knew him in person, I'd not like him at all. That being said, I decided that it was worth the challenge to portray him in a positive light and make my own hypothesis of what happened in post-sandwich Hogwarts. In about 70 minutes' worth of work, this is what came out. That might account for the 'clunk' in the narrative, since I really didn't, um, edit it past a quick punctuation sweep. Busted, hehe.

Anyway, I was pleased with how it came out, but most importantly, it made the birthday girl happy. I'm glad that you liked it, and thank you for taking the time to write such a nice review.

~Jess

 

Stay With Me by Sagen
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 3]

Summary: Andromeda knows that Ted loves her, but does she love him? Is five months really long enough to know that you love somebody?

She’s running out of time to answer, and with news of their relationship spreading, she soon finds herself having to make the hardest choice of all. This is a sequel to my Boy Oh Boy.

Categories: Other Pairing Genre: Warnings: Mild Profanity, Violence

Word count: 3936 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
10/19/10 Updated: 10/25/10


Reviewer: The_Real_Hermione Signed
Date: 10/29/10 Title: Chapter 1: Stay With Me

I'm glad you added a sequel to Boy oh Boy, I felt like it needed some more at the end of that. This was a sweet story and I really liked it, however there were a few small grammatical mistakes (eg "I was be disowned" instead of I would be disowned) and in some cases I thought you over-wrote Andromeda's thoughts, when to the reader they were obvious by her actions.

But otherwise it was sweet and nicely written. Great fic :).

Author's Response: I'm glad you liked it! Thanks for the comments.

 

Stop Signs by leftrightmiddle
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 9]

Summary: It's been one month since the Final Battle, and George is still trying to cope with the death of his brother. He's refusing to talk to anyone, so it comes as a surprise to the both of them when he accepts Angelina's invitation for coffee. During that fateful conversation, George learns that the funny thing about stop signs is that they're also start signs.

Categories: Post-Hogwarts Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 1119 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
10/23/10 Updated: 10/31/10


Reviewer: The_Real_Hermione Signed
Date: 11/04/10 Title: Chapter 1: Stop and Start

In general I enjoyed this fic - it was short but sweet and a nice exploration of this analogy.

I think I would have liked it more if you had added a bit more darkness into it - perhaps George could have resisted Angelina a bit more or something. I think my favourite part of this fic was actually the first bit - and Angelina's outburst is really good.

There were times when it felt like you were over-writing a bit, or writing things that you could have shown through dialogue or actions - for example, "It wasn't always easy to go forward. There was still a fear of getting hurt, but you had to make that leap to move on" - I feel like you could just show this through George's reaction to Angelina.

It also seemed a bit cliched in the way that George changed so quickly...

Anyway, I enjoyed it, this is just things I thought which might help your writing. Good job :)

Author's Response: Wow, thanks so much for that, and taking time to review! I will definetly keep this in mind when I write in the future, I find you a very helpful reviewer. Have a great day! -bri

 

Juggling by Equinox Chick
Rated: 3rd-5th Years [Reviews - 19]

Summary: Lily Evans wasn’t the only Gryffindor with a childhood friend. Whilst she was meeting the boy who would introduce her to the magical world, someone else was learning how to mix with Muggles.

This is not, however, a story about Lily Evans. This is a tale about James Potter and the Muggle girl that he never quite forgot.

This story is for Natalie (hestiajones) who makes me laugh more than most people and has been a very supportive friend, despite our separate continents. Happy Birthday, mate!

I’m indebted to Gina (Gmariam) who kindly offered to beta this short one-shot, and then didn’t complain when it mushroomed into a chaptered fic.

Because of an archive gliitch, this fic has been temporarily put down a rating. the content remains the same and it is still a 6th-7th. You have been warned.

Disclaimer: I am not JK Rowling. If I had been, then Sirius, Remus, James, Lily and Tonks would not have died. Peter, however would have died in an icky manner

OMMPP! Juggling won 2 QSQ's for Best Chaptered Marauder and Dita won Best Original Character. Seriously pleased and shocked here. Thank you.

The chapter titles are all from Keane songs.

Categories: Other Pairing Genre: Warnings: Mild Profanity, Sexual Situations, Violence

Word count: 16283 Chapters: 3 Completed: Yes
Published:
10/29/10 Updated: 11/13/10


Reviewer: The_Real_Hermione Signed
Date: 12/03/10 Title: Chapter 3: Chapter 3 - Somewhere Only We Know

This was so heartbreaking to read. I liked your depiction of James especially, and your reasoning behind him asking Lily out was nice (it is nice not to see him moping over her once in a while).

Dita was a great character too. I liked the way you paralleled the idea juggling worlds in Dita and James. The first chapter was great too - especially the first time they met.

Anyway, I could ramble a lot about how much I enjoyed all of this. Your writing was beautiful throughout, and that last bit with Remus was just so sad and yet so beautiful...

Author's Response: Aww, thank you very much. I enjoyed writing this, although I never thought I'd like writing James with anyone but LIly. I agree that it gets a bit tiresome seeing him only thinking about Lily. Thanks again ~Carole~

 

Summary: A look at moments of Ron and Hermione's life through the years. The narrative alternates between their two POV.

For those of us that wonder what Ron and Hermione's life would be like through the years.

Categories: Ron/Hermione Genre: Warnings: Character Death, Mild Profanity

Word count: 8162 Chapters: 3 Completed: Yes
Published:
11/01/10 Updated: 11/24/10


Reviewer: The_Real_Hermione Signed
Date: 11/26/10 Title: Chapter 3: Chapter Three: The Golden Years

This was such a cute fanfic... I loved your characterisations of Ron and Hermione, they were beautiful. The fic was sort of sad in a good way... not quite bittersweet though... especially the last chapter, when everyone was getting old and dying, but you know that they'd lived happy long lives and it was really their time. I liked how in the first chapter and the beginning of the second, you showed them looking forward to life after the war, and in the later bits looking back over memories. It captured that funny thing about humans - that we're always looking either forwards or backwards.

I loved how people who died in the war - especially Fred - were present throughout your story, it showed that they were never forgotten which was really sweet.

Just one little typo I just picked up - you've written "It's sounds more morbid then it really is." It should be "It sounds more morbid than it really is."

Anyway, this whole fic was really cute and written so well, I loved it :).

Author's Response: Thank you! Yes I wanted to try to capture everything you mentioned so I'm glad you loved it haha. And thanks for the edit! I must have reread that line a million times and my eye just skipped over that typo haha. Thanks for noticing and for the wonderful comments!

 

Forever Entwined by lucca4
Rated: 3rd-5th Years [Reviews - 17]

Summary:

“Love and hate are such strong words, they also cause so much pain.”

From the first time Rose Weasley saw Scorpius Malfoy on the Hogwarts Express, she knew they were fated to be enemies. At least, that was the plan. But as the years went on, she found that it was easier said than done. The gap between who she was and who her family wanted her to be was always widening. Her life becomes a tangled web of mistakes and regrets as she finds herself drawn to the one boy she was told to hate, until finally she makes a choice. A choice that might have just lost her the only one who had always been there for her…

Categories: Next Generation Genre: Warnings: Sexual Situations, Strong Profanity

Word count: 4091 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
11/02/10 Updated: 11/07/10


Reviewer: The_Real_Hermione Signed
Date: 01/03/11 Title: Chapter 1: Forever Entwined

I really liked how you developed Rose's character... I think that's the best thing about this fic. Showing all the small scenes over her years at Hogwarts was perfect, it really showed her growing up and changing, but still staying the same. I thought Scorpius would have been more angry or hurt or something at the end, though. Rather than just kissing her, perhaps they would have argued or something first? Otherwise I thought you did a really good job of him.

So yeah, great story, I enjoyed it a lot :).

Author's Response: Thanks so much for reviewing! I'm glad you liked Rose's character…I'll probably write more of her later simply because I feel like I got to know her so well after writing her through the years. With Scorpius's reaction…he sees that Rose is truly remorseful, and that she's really worried that she's too late, and doesn't want to hurt her or push her away when she's finally opening up to him. Afterward they'll probably have a more serious discussion. Thanks again, so much! xx Ariana

 

Excruciatingly Painful by xxbabewithbrainsxx
Rated: 3rd-5th Years [Reviews - 9]

Summary: In Harry Potter and the Deathly Hallows, five men deal with remorse, yet in completely different ways. It affects the soul, mentality and even the body. This poem explores the way these five men cope with wrong actions and the guilt that follows it.

By the way, I'm not J K Rowling. I doubt you're surprised. All reviews receive a response!

Categories: Poetry Genre: Warnings: Character Death

Word count: 439 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
11/03/10 Updated: 11/06/10


Reviewer: The_Real_Hermione Signed
Date: 01/06/11 Title: Chapter 1: Remorse

This was a really interesting idea, to link all these different characters together. Your five different definitions of it were very interesting and appropriate, and it was easy to tell which characters you were writing about (though I thought Ron's paragraph was Severus for a bit... it's a pity he wasn't in here in a way, because he certainly feels a lot of remorse). Anyway, I'm not usually a massive poetry fan so I can't really comment on the structure/rhyming etc., but it did seem to flow well. Your word choice was great too, really appropriate (I almost laughed when you used "wormed" in Peter's stanza). I also liked how you brought the title into the last stanza. So anyway... sorry this isn't a particularly great review... but great poem!

Author's Response: Thanks for another one of your lovely reviews! I'm really chuffed you like my poem. It's the only one on my story list which has less than five reviews, sadly. Still, I'm happy you reviewed it and told me what you think. I don't know how on earth it got into my head, the whole concept of it, but I'm glad it did because--without trying to sound arrogant or anything--I did like my poem. I don't know--am I allowed to like it? I'm not sure. Anyway, you're completely right; Snape should've been there, but I'll admit that I completely shut him out simply because I hate him, despite what he did for Harry and everything. I don't know, maybe I'm like Harry, in that I don't care what he's done, he's still an overgrown bat :P I'm glad you liked my word choice and that you thought it flowed--that's usually a problem with poems for me. And...you almost laughed when I said "wormed"? Well, it wasn't exactly my intention but I did think it was appropriate given his name. And this entire thing really started when--I remember now--I read in DH about how putting your soul back together would be excruciatingly painful. That day I was thinking a hell of a lot about souls and how painful it would be to tear it apart, let alone put it back together, and I think that's where it came from. As for the title, I only decided it after I wrote the last stanza, so it was really just coincidence :P Thank you ever so much for your reviews, all of them. This one IS a particularly great review, don't worry. ~Soraya~

 

Apathy by inspirations
Rated: 3rd-5th Years [Reviews - 4]

Summary:

Voldemort has won. Harry Potter has been beaten.

This is what happened to the side who lost.


Categories: Dark/Angsty Fics Genre: Warnings: Alternate Universe, Character Death, Mental Disorders, Violence

Word count: 1448 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
11/05/10 Updated: 11/05/10


Reviewer: The_Real_Hermione Signed
Date: 11/05/10 Title: Chapter 1: Apathy

This was really well written. I thought it was interesting to look at it from Draco's perspective, rather than one of the Weasley's or someone like that. He has that different position of having supported Voldemort but now suffering just as everyone else under his regime.

Especially your description of Hermione at the end was chilling. - "all he could think was that it was as if somebody had gouged them out of her sockets with sharp fingernails, leaving behind only two nasty, bloody hollows" - that's a very powerful line.

Author's Response: Thank you! I've never written a story from Draco's pov before, so I'm pleased you like it :) xx

 

All Alone by savvy33
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 11]

Summary: She left him. Two years later, he still hasn't picked up the pieces and moved on.

Categories: Ron/Hermione Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 989 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
11/08/10 Updated: 11/11/10


Reviewer: The_Real_Hermione Signed
Date: 11/11/10 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

I think it was a good setting for this story, but to be honest I think both Ron and Hermione were a bit OOC, especially Ron. From his behaviour in HBP, when he feels like Hermione doesn't like him/hates him, he throws himself into partying etc (for example his relationship with Lavender). Therefore I think it might work better if he was dancing with some nameless pretty girl when he remembered Hermione breaking up with him or something like that.

Hermione seemed a little over the top... although I guess she could get like that if that scenario was just the last straw.

I thought it was written fairly well though, and you did manage to convey Ron's pain/anger/loss.

Author's Response: Thank you so much for the review! I appreciate you taking the time to leave one.

 
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