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Hi! I'm Katrina and I am not J.K. Rowling (just to avoid any confusion there).

I've been writing on MNFF since about 2010, but up until a few months ago had not written anything for quite some time. So I am trying to get back into writing, and have quite a few stories percolating in my head, but I just need to find the time to write them.

I basically only write one-shots (I have one three chaptered story), and they're usually character explorations and snapshots rather than long plots, but I've written about a variety of characters, so hopefully there's something you'll enjoy. I like experimenting a bit with form too.

Anyway if you have stumbled here by accident, I do hope you enjoy something.
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Someone To Watch Over Me by MagEd
Rated: 6th-7th Years [Reviews - 1663]

Summary: Past Featured Story2009 QSQ Awards Winner for Best Chaptered Canon Romance

Before the chosen one was ever born, his parents had to meet, fall in love, and defy Voldemort three times. Easier said than done. Things were never easy for Harry Potter's parents, but it gets a whole lot harder when Death Eaters kidnap Lily. This is the story of Lily and James, the trials they face, and how James finally wins Lily's heart. (pre-Deathly Hallows)

*Completed*

“I’ll always protect you.”

Categories: James/Lily Genre: Warnings: Book 7 Disregarded

Word count: 185106 Chapters: 34 Completed: Yes
Published:
09/17/06 Updated: 01/16/09


Reviewer: The_Real_Hermione Signed
Date: 08/29/10 Title: Chapter 34: The Epilogue

WOW This fic is really amazing. I actually read it a while ago but only recently made an account so I've only got to review it now. I'd say it's the best chaptered fic I've ever read - the story was captivating from the start and Emmeline was a great character. Your idea of the maze and the running and all that was really creative and the way you revealed what actually happened through those memory sequences was really engaging (I always had to keep reading). I liked the way every time things got too good for the characters, something bad happened, especially with Ted turning out to be a Death Eater. I also loved how you put humour in there - like Lily and Sirius stuck in the broom cupboard at the beginning. I can't pick a favourite bit because the whole thing was amazing!!

Author's Response: Thank you so much! I'm glad you liked everything Lily was faced with and found it engaging -- I was afraid some people would find the memories uninteresting in favour of events in the present. :) And I'm so happy you liked Emmeline; I ended up becoming very endeared to her, so I like to hear that readers like her, too! Thanks again for coming back to review when you got an account :)

 

Outward and In by Aldawen
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 3]

Summary: The future is looking bright for Dorcas Meadowes.

Categories: General Fics Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 1217 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
03/12/07 Updated: 03/17/07


Reviewer: The_Real_Hermione Signed
Date: 04/10/11 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Hello,

This was a great insight into your interpretation of a character whose only really mentioned in canon, as well as a great coming-of-age story. You really nailed the emotions she would be feeling - a little bit of sadness at leaving, but mostly the excitement of entering into the world.

Just a small nitpick - you wrote but the like the Gryffindor she was - you should cut out the first 'the' (as in "But like the Gryffindor she was").

I liked the idea of the mirror, and how it reflects the change she has gone through and will go through. The ending, with the line As she walked out of her childhood, it seemed the world held nothing if not opportunity for Dorcas Meadowes. was a great way of finishing the story.

~Katrina

 

All Night Long by Grace has Victory
Rated: 3rd-5th Years [Reviews - 44]

Summary: How does a friendship begin? Ginny Weasley, about to begin her second year at Hogwarts, is very distrustful of Hermione Granger. Having to share a room with her at The Leaky Cauldron will require the courage of Godric Gryffindor himself.

Categories: General Fics Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 8377 Chapters: 4 Completed: Yes
Published:
04/15/07 Updated: 05/06/07


Reviewer: The_Real_Hermione Signed
Date: 03/05/11 Title: Chapter 4: Patience and Potions

Hi Grace has Victory,

So, having been extremely impressed with "Magic in my Tree", I thought I'd have a look at some of your other stuff.

Firstly - great characterisation. I think your take on Ginny is very interesting, as we see her more as the popular girl in canon, but for the whole diary fiasco to happen, she must have been quite shy when she started at school. I see her as the kind of person who takes a while to feel comfortable in her own skin around new people, and I think you did a great job of her. Also a great idea that she feels guilty about the people who were Petrified.

Now to Hermione - spot on with her. Her tactlessness at the beginning was great, and I loved how she'd read up books on boys and when they'd notice girls (in actual fact she was about 6 months or so out with Ron). The only thing is, I'm not so sure if she'd by so secure about Ron - I think that kind of thing might be the sort of thing that undoes her. But I guess that's up for interpretation. I did like the point you made that she would probably lose him at some point - which sort of happened, because I'd say he figured out that he liked her around fourth year and later there was the whole Lavender thing... Also I loved how she beat herself up so much for misjudging Lockhart, after all, Hermione hates making a mistake. This line - “Yes, but I like being irritated by Ron. If you like men who go quiet and moody when they’re supposed to be talking, you’re welcome to Harry!” was so perfect!!! I saw in some of your responses to reviews that you said you were quite like Hermione - I think I'm a bit the same lol (my penname is such for a reason).

Chapter 3 was the kind of comedy slightly reminiscent of Shakespeare with the dramatic irony and misconceptions, because it's so obvious to the reader that Hermione's talking about Ron, but Ginny just plays in to her fears so easily. Also I loved the Molly/Arthur story and the last line was great, as that's what happens with Ginny and Harry in the end.

So, all in all, a perfect missing moment which shows the beginning of this friendship. Great idea!!

~Katrina

Author's Response: Dear Katrina, ~ Yes, I'm sure Ginny does come out of her shell, and fast, once she has shed Tom Riddle, but critics have complained that her reaction at the end of CoS was self-centred and irresponsible. I don't think JKR meant to portray her that way, so I decided to give her some sense of morality. As you've noticed yourself, she wasn't comfortable around Harry, so perhaps she was vulnerable to RIddle in the first place because she wasn't comfortable around her peers at school. ~ Hermione, at not quite 14, would be a girl who didn't know her own naivety. I think at that early stage she just took it for granted that she and Ron would end up together, because it was common sense, and it was a huge shock later on when he didn't invite her to the Yule Ball. Whatever mistakes Ron made, Hermione needed to accept that people do make mistakes (even champion chess-players may have trouble with real life!) and perhaps face up to why Ron would think twice about committing himself to a woman with her claws out. ~ Thank you for taking so much interest in this old story. I am so flattered that anyone is still reading it! GhV

 

Time To Fly by KASK
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 7]

Summary: Salazar is leaving. But before he goes, he pays Helga one last visit. And as much as she wants him to stay, it's time for him to fly.

Categories: Historical Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 1488 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
06/02/07 Updated: 06/10/07


Reviewer: The_Real_Hermione Signed
Date: 03/27/11 Title: Chapter 1: Time To Fly

Excellent writing! Somehow I'd always imagined that Rowena and Salazar would be together, as I see that a Ravenclaw's thirst for knowledge wouldn't mind the sly, ambitious ways of a Slytherin as much as a loyal Hufflepuff. Having said that, I think you showed a beautiful romance here and you really made Helga/Salazar work. The end was so heart-breaking for her, and yet I'm glad that she understood Salazar well enough to know he no longer belonged at Hogwarts. In a way I wish you had gone more into why he was leaving, because I think it would have added something to this fic. But it was still a fantastic fic.

~Katrina

 

Stop Me From Trying by the fetal positon
Rated: 3rd-5th Years [Reviews - 6]

Summary: Sirius was always right, no matter what. This time shouldn't have been any different; but a memory, just one memory, was enough to stop him from reaching the land across from the treacherous island of Azkaban.

Categories: Dark/Angsty Fics Genre: Warnings: Alternate Universe, Slash

Word count: 1893 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
07/03/07 Updated: 07/06/07


Reviewer: The_Real_Hermione Signed
Date: 08/29/10 Title: Chapter 1: Stop Me From Trying

Nice story once again! The song lyrics were really fitting, especially the last line of the second one "What have I become?" - really fits Sirius' situation. It was nicely written (although I have to say I liked your descriptions/imagery in Seedling better) and explored Sirius' character and his guilt really well. It showed how the jokey Marauder Sirius became the Sirius of the books (if you take it that he didn't die) really clearly. Personally I'm not much of a fan of James/Sirius, but it was well-written and enjoyable anyway. Also, the fact that James had an on-the-side affair with Sirius seemed a little unbelievable to me... I'd always imagined James so desperately in love with Lily that he'd do nothing to jeopardise their relationship, but I guess you've just got a different interpretation... after all not that much is known about James and Lily from the books. So yeah, very enjoyable and dark read.

Author's Response: Yes, I do love Breaking Benjamin. :) Since this story was written about two years before Seedling, my writing style wasn't the same and so the description would seem different; but I'm glad that you still liked it despite the simplicity. I have to agree with you about the believability of James and Sirius... I don't think it would happen either, but I do think it would be interesting, and I'm just a sucker for slash. ;) Thanks again!

 

Summary: Yet another musical twisted by yours truly, it's the tale of Voldemort's life set to the tune of my Les Miserables soundtrack!



The real musical of Les Miserables was created by Claude-Michel Schönberg, Herbert Kretzmer, and Alain Boublil.



There is some violence and it really is not a silly musical-- there are a few funny parts, but there are some pretty sad or intense bits. AND LOTS OF PEOPLE DIE. And there are some cannibalism-happy bits with Fenrir, including a whole song called "Man Eat Man." Beware.



Categories: Poetry Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 9355 Chapters: 2 Completed: Yes
Published:
10/11/07 Updated: 10/31/07


Reviewer: The_Real_Hermione Signed
Date: 04/09/11 Title: Chapter 2: Act 2

Hello,

Another fantastic musical spoof... Once again I am totally amazed at how you managed to fit your own lyrics into these songs...

I really liked the comparison you drew between Merope and Fantine, I'd never really thought about it before, but they are actually quite similar.

I loved "Scars" (Stars), it was funny and yet you really got into Voldemort's head in that one.

Your portrayal of Snape was really interesting too, I'm glad he had a reasonably big part because I think he's quite important.

Another thing - loved that you put Peeves' song in! That was really clever.

So anyway, once again I have no constructive criticism... this was simply amazing and I could completely imagine it all in my head. Great work :).

~Katrina

 

Summary: Past Featured StoryFred is dead.

But that's just the beginning! Because one of George's ears is up in heaven, and the other is down on earth...

Oh, the possibilities!

Written for the Next Great Adventure challenge on the MNFF beta boards. I am Schmerg_The_Impaler of Hufflepuff House.
Twice nominated for Best Post-Hogwarts Story in the 2008 Quicksilver Quills Awards!

Categories: Post-Hogwarts Genre: Warnings: Character Death

Word count: 9446 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
10/29/07 Updated: 10/31/07


Reviewer: The_Real_Hermione Signed
Date: 04/09/11 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter One and Only

This is just simply beautiful. You write humour fantastically (eg "In your underwear drawer") and yet at the same time, this piece was poignant and thought-provoking. I imagine that it would be like this for Fred if he were in heaven and able to watch George grow up and mature and not really be able to understand him anymore, when they've always completely understood each other. I liked your ideas about how the dead shouldn't communicate with the living, and how Fred tried to have the best of both worlds, as in communicate with George and yet be able to be in heaven as well.

Another point on the humour - I just loved this line “God,” he muttered, wide-eyed.
“What about him?” chirped Fred. “I can talk to him right now for you, if you like.”
That really made me smile. I also loved all your references to Muggles (eg John Lennon, Martin Luther King), it added to the humour.

Interesting that you chose Horatio as George's middle name - as he is the one who stays alive at the end of Hamlet. (I also loved Diptheria and Nazi as middle names.)

A little nitpick - in this line His voice was absolutely infested with sarcasm, and there were little grains of sarcasm threatening to crawl over the edge. you seem to repeat yourself a bit.

Also, I suppose you know now that George married Angelina and had two children: Fred and Roxanne. I'm interested - did you purposefully change this or didn't you know at the time you wrote the story? Because I could understand you choosing not to, particularly with your references about George not marrying Fred's ex and not calling his son Fred because he could communicate with him in his head... Anyway, I'm rambling.

Also, Albus Severs is the middle Potter child, not the youngest (Lily Luna is two years younger).

Anyway, once again your creativity and humour amazes me. Even just this idea by itself is intriguing and so creative. Your characters were interesting, and your characterisation of canon characters spot on. I think you did a good job of showing a mature George, who was still the George we knew in canon.

Anyway, absolutely loved this fic, you are really a fantastic writer!

~Katrina

Author's Response: Oh wow, Katrina, thank you so much! This is one of the most detailed reviews I've had in a long time. It's funny, I never thought about that with the name 'Horatio,' but that's so true. And really interesting. 'Horatio' is kind of my go-to middle name for slightly quirky characters... I wrote a play about cross-dressing pirates where the main character's name is Aubrey Horatio Love. And interestingly enough, I wrote this story only two days after DH came out, so JK Rowling hadn't said yet who George ended up marrying... it's funny that he DID end up marrying Fred's ex. Though it never actually says Fred and Angelina dated, just that they went to the ball together... And I have no idea why I thought Al was the youngest. You're right, that clearly makes no sense!

 

The Last Goodbye by KASK
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 21]

Summary: Lily Evans is getting married, or so Severus Snape has heard. There is only one way to verify it -- see Lily.

Categories: Marauder Era Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 1930 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
11/03/07 Updated: 11/08/07


Reviewer: The_Real_Hermione Signed
Date: 03/25/11 Title: Chapter 1: The Last Goodbye

Hello,

I've been reading a couple of your stories today and I just had to leave a review for this one. It was just beautiful. Spot on characterisation for Lily and Severus.

I liked the idea that Lily wasn't frightened by Severus, and that she could read him when anyone else would find him unreadable. I think that shows the two-way connection that once existed between them. Her coldness and yet underlying emotion were perfectly executed.

And Severus - just so typical of him to visit her after all that time because he hated the truth that she was going to marry James. I loved how he continuously thought of how James got it all - I think it's quite ironic, as Severus could have had a lot more if he had really wanted it enough - but he chose something else. I also think there's a kind of arrogance about him, in how he thinks that Lily should have been his, which is very characteristic and nicely written.

Anyway, fantastic job :).

~Katrina

 

Only Her, Always Her by solemnlyswear_x
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 17]

Summary: Past Featured StorySeverus Snape had been brewing potions since he was eleven, and had never found one he hated more than Amortentia.

When Severus finds Amorentia brewing in Slughorn's classroom, he thinks of someone he didn't need a potion to remember.

Categories: General Fics Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 1408 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
12/13/07 Updated: 12/16/07


Reviewer: The_Real_Hermione Signed
Date: 12/06/10 Title: Chapter 1: Only Her, Always Her

*Sigh* Severus/Lily fics are always so sad. I reallly liked your concept - it was really original to use Amortentia like that. All the sensory imagery really added to the settings as well... I could almost smell those things. I also liked how the three memories were nicely spaced out and captured their relationship really well.

I thought it was an interesting idea, to have Lily forgive Snape, but perhaps something you could have explored a little more. It does seem unlikely to me that Lily would be fighting in the order and still talking to Severus, even if only occasionally, when she knew (or could guess fairly accurately) that he was a Death Eater.

The song added beautifully as well - and it's such an amazing and powerful song too. It really added to your fic.

The last line of the story was really great too... it sort of summed everything up really well.

Author's Response: Thanks for the review! I've actually considered editing the part where Lily forgives Snape, since I agree with you on that point. We'll see, though. Part of me really does like the idea of her at least being civil, although it's unlikely, given canon and all. Anyway, thanks again!

 

Her Father's Girl by KASK
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 19]

Summary: Ron makes mistakes. He loses his way and drifts off path. But he always fixes it. Coming home on Christmas Eve, he hopes this will be the same. But will Hermione forgive him? Can Rose?

I am kask of Slytherin for the ' Winter's Tales: By The Fireside' prompt.

Categories: Post-Hogwarts Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 3688 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
01/12/08 Updated: 01/22/08


Reviewer: The_Real_Hermione Signed
Date: 03/27/11 Title: Chapter 1: Her Father's Girl

All I can say is heart-breakingly beautiful. You start off showing such a vulnerable side of Hermione - that she's still a hopeless romantic despite what love has done to her, and on a second reading I got a sense even then that she still loved Ron.

Just the whole idea for the plot was great and also very realistic. At the beginning I had a sense that Hermione was only really living for her children and no longer for herself, and that Ron brought life back to her.

It has definitely intrigued me... I wonder under what circumstances it was that Ron actually left? I think it's a realistic thing for him to do - he does have a temper and make spur-of-the-moment decisions, but I like the idea that he always makes up for it in the end.

The relationship between Rose and Hugo was drawn beautifully - the teasing but underneath the pride and admiration was not cliched, but realistic.

I think it's an interesting idea that Rose broke off her engagement with Scorpius for her father - I think we often see examples of people who break away from their families for love (eg Andromeda) and don't mind too much because they didn't agree with their family, but I think it's interesting that Rose thought her father was more important than the man she loved.

So all in all, I've fallen in love with this fic, you've just done a fantastic job.

~Katrina

 

Hopelessly Devoted by saveginny417
Rated: 3rd-5th Years [Reviews - 23]

Summary: There are some people that get everything they want from life. There are some people who don't. This is the story of two of those unfortunate people who didn't.

Categories: Ron/Hermione Genre: Warnings: Book 7 Disregarded, Character Death

Word count: 1508 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
01/13/08 Updated: 01/23/08


Reviewer: The_Real_Hermione Signed
Date: 04/10/11 Title: Chapter 1: One-Shot

Wow! Now this was something I wasn't expecting at all...

I think you really managed to stay true to their characters as much as you could within the parameters of the story. As in, personally I can't see this scene occurring (and since DH came out we know it doesn't), but I think you made it work. Just how Ron acted - his attempt at humour and trying to talk to her normally at the beginning was so in character.

The dialogue between Ron and Hermione was perfectly written and paced, in fact all your writing was vivid and really showed all the emotions the characters experienced.

His deed done, Ron pocketed his wand and raised his hood once more. Before departing, however, he glanced over his shoulder and whispered three words to the settling dust and lifeless wreckage in the sitting room behind him.

“I love you.”
Wow, what a beautiful way to end a story. Very impressive.

So even though I think the scene is a little unbelievable, I think you wrote this so well that you made it work.

~Katrina

 

Mother by dragonwings
Rated: 6th-7th Years [Reviews - 7]

Summary: The dying confessions of Azkaban are often left unheard. But one grey night, cold and alone in Azkaban, Sirius listens and finds the chill in the air is nothing compared to the one in his heart.



"Grey was the colour of moonlight tainted by the darkness of Azkaban and the stench of Dementors. Never white, it nearly blended into the walls, selfishly keeping its tranquil peace to itself.



Azkaban needed some peace. "



This is dragonwings of Gryffindor writing for the Colors of Loss Challenge!


Categories: One-Shot Challenge Submissions Genre: Warnings: Character Death

Word count: 1378 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
01/31/08 Updated: 02/04/08


Reviewer: The_Real_Hermione Signed
Date: 10/04/10 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

A very well-written, haunting tale! Sirius' characterisation was perfect and the way you showed his mind as bordering on insanity was great. The imagery was powerful - especially comparing the woman to a rat in a cage, which connects nicely to Peter.

I didn't really like the last line in this fic... I think it would have ended better without it. I understand that you were trying to creat a circular effect by having the last line be the same as the first, but somehow it didn't sum up your story so well.

But that's just a small thing, I loved this fic :)!

 

Summary: It's another spoof by Schmerg_The_Impaler!

This time, it's "Wicked," by Stephen Schwartz, remodeled to tell the story of Voldemort's life!

I also have spoofs of Les Miserables, Phantom of the Opera, Sgt. Pepper's Lonely Hearts Club Band, and High School Musical on my profile, if anyone would care to read.

Categories: Poetry Genre: Warnings: Violence

Word count: 6682 Chapters: 2 Completed: No
Published:
03/18/08 Updated: 03/29/08


Reviewer: The_Real_Hermione Signed
Date: 04/08/11 Title: Chapter 2: Act 2

WOOOOOWW!! I think this might be one of the most creative and funny things I've ever read... ever. I'm a massive Wicked fan, so I was singing along with all the songs in my head, I even listened to a few, and your lyrics just fit so perfectly. The other impressive thing is how you've managed to stick so well to canon and fit Voldy's whole story into the songs... I also like how some of the songs have some of the original lyrics in them, it brings it back to the songs.

The whole thing was funny, but I think "Dancing with Death" and "Voldemort" might be my favourite songs. Absolute hilarity.

Another thing that made me laugh - at the beginning, you've put Kingsley in Glinda's position, which is quite funny if you listen to the actual recording and imagine Kingsley and her Glinda's voice. Anyway, I'm rambling.

So usually in a review I would give a bit of constructive criticism and suggest things that could be improved... but I have nothing to say about this. It's just absolutely amazing. I'm heading off very soon to read some of your other fics. I expect you'll hear from me soon haha.

~Katrina

 

Freedom by Calico
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 3]

Summary: “Grindelvald killed many people, my grandfather, for instance.”
- Viktor Krum, Deathly Hallows p. 148
Viktor's grandfather resists the torments of Nurmengard for as long as he can after he sacrifices himself to save his muggleborn wife and their son. Can he escape Grindelwald's prison, or will he find freedom of another kind?
Inspired by "The Song of the Partisans" by Hersh Glik.

Categories: Dark/Angsty Fics Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 1017 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
04/27/08 Updated: 05/04/08


Reviewer: The_Real_Hermione Signed
Date: 02/15/11 Title: Chapter 1: The Meaning of our Fate

I can't believe this fic only has two reviews! Firstly, I think your idea is really interesting and original - I don't think I even particularly picked up on that comment from Viktor when reading the books.

I loved the ending - bittersweet is the best word I can think of to describe it.

Your use of language was what really stuck out to me, though. Your descriptions and imagery were beautiful and your dialogue perfect to illustrate all the characters.

I feel Aneta’s parting kiss on my cheek, hasty and eternal - I really loved this part, it really showed their relationship in just a few words.

So over all... great fic and beautifully written!

 

Hearthlinks by Grace has Victory
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 31]

Summary:

Growing up with two stepfamilies, Sally-Anne Perks has all the usual family problems in triplicate. Now her stepmother wants to prevent her attending the Yule Ball. Will this ruin Sally-Anne’s chances of winning her prince? And who has stolen her magic shoe?

This is a response to a challenge to retell a traditional fairy tale with a Hogwarts setting. You might consider that I put a twist in the ending… or you might not.



Categories: Other Pairing Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 48449 Chapters: 14 Completed: Yes
Published:
07/28/08 Updated: 09/05/08


Reviewer: The_Real_Hermione Signed
Date: 03/07/11 Title: Chapter 14: Happily Ever After

Once again, this was fantastic. I really do love your writing!! It's quite ironic that I like this fic so much, as I said that these characters were my least favourite in "Magic in my Tree", but I think you gave them so much more depth here and it was very interesting.

I loved how all three girls dealt with - and avoided - their situation in different ways - Sally-Anne just found a job which needed doing, or rather which made her feel like she was needed, Ella-Jane avoided going home and still pretended to be rebellious and Molly-Rose read. I really loved it when Sally-Anne has her realisation that a lot of this has been about here - after all, there's something strange in human nature that we want to be needed, particularly if there's a situation where we can hold a family together or something.

In the earlier chapters, you spend a lot of time describing Sally-Anne's hardships at home and her difficulties at her father's house - I wondered if perhaps you could include her having fun with her friends at school or something to provide contrast. Also I was interested in the relationships between the five of them, and I know you developed them a bit with the DA and all that, but I sitll felt like they could have had more presence.

I loved Terry, and I think it's very interesting and fitting that he and Sally don't have a "happily ever after" or even become friends again. You made him a really interesting character in this, and I really liked him.

Coming to Cressida and Flavian - it seems that Flavian is lazy and prefers to pretend that reality doesn't exist because it's more comfortable for him, but I do wonder why he married Cressida. Was it her money? And why did Cressida marry him? After all, he wasn't rich and had to associate with Muggles in his profession... As for Cressida, I wonder why she is so mean to the Perks' - I understand her forcing Sally-Anne to do all the housework/cooking/looking after Xavier, as she's too lazy to do it herself, but why all the extra? She seemed a little like the Dursley's, but I'd always assumed that they treated Harry the way they did out of previous spite towards Lily, fear of magic, fear of a loss of their reputation etc. Anyway, just wondered about those things.

I was very intrigued by the character of Jeremy. I know one of the chapters in "Magic in my Tree" is from his perspective, but I'd love it if you had time to write a whole story about him and how he assimilates with the magical world and the kind of feelings that that brings.

I think one of the most interesting things about your writing is perspective, as all your fics seem to be compliant with each other. For example, in "Dagger of Doubt", we see a different side of Cecilia - lazy and gossipy, yes, but caring in the end.

I think it is so fitting that Sally-Anne ended up working in cleaning products!! So appropriate.

Another question - Ella-Jane was in Gryffindor and seemed like the rebellious type - why didn't she join the DA? She was in the same year as Dennis Creevey, wasn't she?, and he was a member (though there is the canon error that he went to Hogsmeade for the first meeting despite his being a second-year...).

I love the detail you give to minor characters, such as Aunt Odette, and also how in this chapter you explained everyone's futures. You're very creative at coming up with jobs! Often people, when talking about professions, say Auror, Healer, or vaguely 'working at the Ministry', and I loved how you expanded on the other things which would be required by the wizarding world to make it self-sufficient.

I also think it's interesting that you cover religion in this fic, without presenting a biased opinion about it at all. I think that's very clever, as our own opinions often come through in our writing, and I wouldn't be able to tell at the end of this what you personally believe, just that you are open-minde to others' beliefs.

One last comment - I love that Sally-Anne and her family chose to fight in the end, it was a great end to the story.

~Katrina

P.S. By the way, how did Cecilia end up with Stan?

Author's Response: Dear Katrina, ~ Thanks for such a staggeringly long and detailed review of this old story. I’m so flattered that you’ve thought up so many and such pertinent questions. It’s a sure sign of your involvement and identification. ~ It’s interesting that you’ve suggested padding out the early chapters. Although I wanted to explore the relationships among the Hufflepuffs, I thought most readers wouldn’t be interested in that, and I deliberately raced ahead to the Yule Ball. But several people have commented that I raced too fast and that they would have been interested. So perhaps I will go back and write those chapters after all. I began a vignette from Sally-Anne’s second year in which the Hufflepuffs all send valentines to Gilderoy Lockhart. The other Puffs do indeed deserve more presence. ~ And a whole story about Jeremy? I hadn’t thought of that, although his wife is such an interesting character that the story of their courtship might well be worth telling. It sounds as if the MimT episode makes most sense to someone who already knows the characters from Hearthlinks. I’ll bear that in mind: perhaps the MimT setting was too complicated to translate well to a short story. ~ Sally-Anne never really found out why her father married Cressida, but I do know the backstory. Albert found out about Cressida’s Squib grandfather (Marius Black) and made her home-life unbearable. Cressida didn’t have the courage to leave without having somewhere to go, so she was pretty well looking for an affair, and Flavian was easy to seduce. She would have liked to marry money, but of course there aren’t so many wealthy wizards around, so she had to settle for a man who was good-looking and weak-willed. Albert (whose father is the Diagon Alley fishmonger – quite a working-class family before Albert is promoted at the Ministry) found out and threw her out. Her parents made sympathetic noises but made it clear they had no spare money to help her, so Cressida’s only hope was to work hard on Flavian to abandon his family. He recognised that Cressida would be a vindictive and implacable ex-lover, while Julia would be a relatively compliant one, and that marriage to Julia would become somewhat uncomfortable once she knew about the affair, so being phenomenally lazy, he decided to move in with Cressida. She didn’t have money or similar to tempt him, but he probably was attracted to the dramatic temperament, and she took more care with her looks than Julia did. ~ Why, apart from plot requirements, is Cressida such a wicked stepmother? She is a person who generally lacks empathy; she is very insecure and she feels better about the world when she has made some weaker person feel even worse than she does. Over and above this, I think her stepdaughters are a particular threat because they are possible rivals for Flavian’s love. She has to make sure they don’t become too close to their father, so she carries tales about them before they can carry tales about her. She can usually set it up so that the tales are more or less true, e.g. SOMEONE painted those walls on their first evening together, and of course the guilty parties are going to lie. ~ Yes, I’m afraid I played the birth-order stereotypes with a vengeance: the firstborns are hyper-responsible (except Ursula, who is simply bossy); the second-borns are rebels; the thirdborn withdraws from the cruel world. ~ Cecilia is always somewhat in Ursula’s shadow. She is shallow and spiteful but she probably doesn’t hate Sally-Anne as much as she seems to – she’s just absorbing the general atmosphere of the family because she doesn’t bother thinking for herself. The fact that in her final scene she wants to confide in Sally-Anne rather than in Ursula is rather telling. (She has already chewed off Tracey’s ears about it, of course.) To be honest, I haven’t yet asked Cecilia how she met Stan; I suppose anyone who rides the Knight Bus can meet him easily enough. I’ve always seen him as a pure-blood, and I thought she’d be happier with someone without too many brains. ~ I think Ella-Jane would have liked to join the D.A. but she had no-one to invite her. She wasn’t close friends with Ginny or Colin (who were a year older) or Dennis (who was actually a year younger). I did once write a short about how he sneaked out to Hogsmeade to attend that meeting illegally. I couldn’t post it here, though, because its effect depended on complex formatting that Mugglenet won’t do. ~ Sally-Anne had to fight in the end, otherwise she wouldn’t truly have repented of her limited approach to life. She had made “family first” an excuse for “family only” – even when the family had problems she couldn’t possibly fix, when the family didn’t need her time and the D.A. did, when “helping” the family was a disguise for the need to be needed, and when her basic motive was her utter terror of having anything to do with Voldemort. Once she had recognised all this, it was only natural that she should take action (she certainly isn’t lazy!), and that her mother, having similar faults, should improve herself in a similar way. ~ I’m very interested in your remark that the religious themes weren’t “biased” because I actually thought I told the story rather blatantly from my own perspective of right and wrong. For the record, my personal beliefs are in my user-name, and they are rather clearly propagated in the other story by Lucy Boot. Of course, being respectful of other people’s beliefs is a part of my own belief, but I think it’s possible to respect people and still say they are wrong. Sally-Anne’s mistake (from my point of view) is to assume that she’s pretty good and can be proud of herself, and therefore God ought to be proud of her too. She’s completely blind to the reality that nobody is good by God’s standards, not even people who are obviously better than their stepmothers, and we all ought to spend a little time saying sorry. Notice that when Anthony reads the Bible, she’s very uncomfortable with the subject of personal sin; she only likes the “nice” passages. Terry, on the other hand, laps it up; he doesn’t mind being reminded that he’s done things that need forgiving because he is so confident that God has already forgiven him. He said as much to Blaise at the Yule Ball, but of course neither Blaise nor Sally-Anne could process that remark at the time. ~ Some readers have criticised Terry for not telling Sally-Anne why he was breaking up with her; but, of course, he was under a magically-binding contract not to mention the D.A. to anyone. An older boy might have managed it more tactfully; Terry is only fifteen. I’m glad you liked him anyway! ~ Yes, I do try to be realistic about wizarding careers. There needs to be enough secondary industry to support the economy. Hogwarts, St Mungo’s and the Ministry are all supported by the wizarding taxpayer, and while Gringotts is probably a primary source of capital, there needs to be trade and industry too. So if my characters are entering the tertiary sector, they need to have a very good reason. ~ Thanks for reading and thanks for writing, ~ GhV

 

Visits From Fred by mudbloodproud
Rated: 3rd-5th Years [Reviews - 61]

Summary: Fred Weasley’s death left a hole in everyone’s hearts. Fred is given the chance to visit his family to help them with their grief. Follow his visits to each of his family members.

Categories: Post-Hogwarts Genre: Warnings: Character Death, Mild Profanity

Word count: 21658 Chapters: 12 Completed: Yes
Published:
12/20/08 Updated: 12/22/09


Reviewer: The_Real_Hermione Signed
Date: 04/15/11 Title: Chapter 1: I Can Touch the Sky

I think this is a really interesting idea. I really enjoyed this chapter, and I'm looking forward to the next ones. Your characterisation of Arthur was very good - I think it's very believable that he would think that he has to be strong for his family's sake, rather than just being himself, which is what they really need.

I liked how you centred on the clock at the beginning... it was something really original, I'd certainly never thought of what would happen to the clock.

The anecdote about the sky was beautiful, and it tied in so well with the title and the last line, which made this story feel complete.

Looking forward to the next chapters.

~Katrina

 
Reviewer: The_Real_Hermione Signed
Date: 04/15/11 Title: Chapter 12: The Christmas Gnome

Hello, it's me again... So now I've finished this story, and I really enjoyed it. It was perfect that Arthur was the first person he visited, and Molly the last. There was a nice fluidity. I liked how each scene was different and original and how you really picked up on each of their characters. Particularly Harry - he always does tend to think that everything's his fault. You wrote Fred really well, and I loved that he used a different tactic to help each of his family move on. I liked that you included Hermione, too, because their relationship was less developed than the rest, even Harry, because Fred and George had more to do with Harry I think than Hermione. I really liked that chapter.

The penultimate chapter was also lovely - I smiled at all the family announcements coming out at the same time, and it was nice that Fred could sort of be with the family.

And this chapter was great - I loved that you picked up on the gnome thing and used that. And I enjoyed reading who each of the grandchildren "take after". I'd never thought about the fact that there's the right number...

Anyway, this was a great read. Oh one last thing - I thought it was interesting too that you explored Fred's feelings of unhappiness about being separated from his fmaily, too.

~Katrina

 

Living in Twilight by solemnlyswear_x
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 6]

Summary: After battling the Death Eaters in the Department of Mysteries, Harry isn't the only one who struggles with the aftermath. Neville, too, has difficulties with what's happened, and finds himself talking to Luna for support. Set at the end of OotP.

Categories: General Fics Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 1649 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
12/22/08 Updated: 12/29/08


Reviewer: The_Real_Hermione Signed
Date: 01/03/11 Title: Chapter 1: Living in Twilight

Your characterisation of Luna was amazing... just enough of her weirdness but still that sweet side of her which really helps Neville feel better. Neville was very good too, and I liked how you showed the beginning of how he changed in DH. I really loved how you wrote this too - especially how it was mostly dialogue-driven, and you wrote the dialogue really well. Great story!!

 

Imagining by KASK
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 12]

Summary: Dominique has always loved Teddy. The only problem? So has her sister...

Categories: Other Pairing Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 2706 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
01/01/09 Updated: 01/10/09


Reviewer: The_Real_Hermione Signed
Date: 03/25/11 Title: Chapter 1: Imagining

This was really fantastic - it's always interesting reading different interpretations of the Next Generation, as everyone interprets them differently. I really enjoyed your interpretation of Dominique and Victoire and their relationship as sisters. I think it must have been hard being Dominique particularly as she looked so much like Victoire, but was so different in personality, because everyone expected her to be another Victoire. If she had looked a bit different then it might not have been so hard.

I loved the references to her being an author and her having a good imagination, and how you tied it in with the title and the last line, but I thought it was such a good idea and would have liked to have seen it come up more throughout the story.

I loved the idea that Bill knew what was going on in Dominique's mind - in the little we see of him in canon, he did always seem perceptive.

The conversation between Teddy and Dominique was beautiful, and I was really glad that she was finally able to let go of him after that.

Just out of curiosity, have you written a fic about what happens in Paris?

~Katrina

 

Mud In His Eyes by the fetal positon
Rated: 6th-7th Years [Reviews - 2]

Summary: Gravely wounded by a stray curse, Harry lies beneath the battle and waits, because he can't do much else.

'Voldemort is there, standing above him. He takes them to a different place, a different time.'

Categories: Dark/Angsty Fics Genre: Warnings: Alternate Universe, Character Death, Strong Profanity, Violence

Word count: 3608 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
02/16/09 Updated: 03/01/09


Reviewer: The_Real_Hermione Signed
Date: 08/29/10 Title: Chapter 1: Mud In His Eyes

Nice story :). Very dark and a little confusing but really nicely written. I liked the repetition of the opening at the end... it gave your fic a circular feel to it. It seems you like mental problems/disorders :P (I've read Seeding as well), but you wrote it really effectively which is pretty hard, often people mess that kind of thing up I find. Good job!

Author's Response: (Gah, I responded to this once but it didn't post it.) Thanks for reading! To be honest, the "circular" ending hadn't even occurred to me until I was approaching the ending; I don't normally outline my one-shots (Seedling was the exact same). All that I'd known about this one when I started it was that Harry had "a hole in his stomach" and it was the Final Battle. So it's nice to know that it still came together to make a decent story. :) And yes, I do enjoy psychological stories! Thanks again!

 
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