Hello. I probably won't be posting any stories for a while, because I'm hard at work writing them.
I won't post them until they are completed because I've learned through experience that I cannot function with my writing process visible for all to see.
I haven't been on this site in a while, and it's...telling...how age and life in general can alter your perspectives. I find many of my old reviews and what-not kind of weird and pretentious now, so if you're reading something I wrote and finding yourself shaking your head at how stupid it is, know that I probably am too.
I'm sorry if I annoyed and/or offended anyone.
Just want to say that this site is amazing. The writers here taught me what fanfic could be and never to lower my standards.
This is sooooo sad. When I finished it I was bawling. A little far-fetched, perhaps, but very much in character.This is just so beautiful and sad, and probably my favorite story on Mugglenet. The fact that its Narcissa's own fault that she lost her love is what makes it all the more tragic...So sad, you can see Milton and Narcissa together, if she had just made up her mind and went for it, but...no. And then this story really reaches out to the emotions because it's so easy to find yourself in Narcissa, and you wonder if you would have done the same as her. It really speaks to the hesitant and weak part in all of us that craves security. And then when you think about who Narcissa becomes later, then its just even sadder. Its how the little choices can shape the entire course of our lives...When I read it the first time, tears were running down my face by the end of the story, and even on the fifth or sixth time I get a lump in my throat. Great job, and thanks for such a well-written and heartbreaking story!
oh, I just have to gush some more about this story. I've already covered Narcissa's characterization, so I'll do Milton and Lucius now.
Milton- poor guy! He never saw her again. Very great original character, and seems like someone who could overcome the racial barriers and get Narcissa to go out with him... It's so sad for him, too, because he loved her, and believed in her, but she wouldn't believe in herself.
Lucius-very true to character, and I can picture him acting just like this. The fancy gifts, and the jealousy. And this line "You're allowed to be nervous."
You've hit the nail on the head. He certainly would say something like this. It reveals so much about his character, even when being nice he shows his arrogance in giving Narcissa "permission" to feel something.
It's Christmas time in magic land! A look at the Christmas celebrated in two very different households.
[poem. two very different homes]
cute! I know I'd rather be a Weasley...
Cute and funny, and the OC's were believable. It possibly could have been even better if you had included the Slytherins' reactions to being magic-less, or Filch's! (to everyone else losing theirs)
Author's Response: Thank you for the review and comment! The story was written quite hastily, I admit, so I didn't really give it the time it would have needed to become perfect. Maybe I'll work on it again in the future, taking into consideration what you suggested.
awesome, flows perfectly, very vivid, poignant, and true.
you succeeded in capturing the feeling of "snow-hushed" nicely. Very sad, and yet calm at the same time. Seems to provide a good picture of the grief after the final battle.
beautiful! I'm almost in tears, this is a perfect poem for Snape, whose unrequited love for Lily is surely the most beautiful in all of fiction.
kind of cutesy but interesting...I like Claudia. This Bellatrix being alive thing is intrigueing me too...Did she make a horcrux?
Author's Response: Interesting, but no. Bellatrix just didn't get killed by Molly Weasley in the Battle of Hogwarts. Thanks for reviewing, I hope to get the next chapter up very soon!
Draco is given a choice, but the freedom to choose is no longer his. Threatened into obedience, he must find a way out of mess after mess without getting himself and his family killed.
awesome, creepy, and sad,...I really hope you continue it. Very believable action and characterizations.
Author's Response: I plan on continuing this, but By Firelight is my writing priority. :) Thanks for your compliments!
Anything you recognise does not belong to me, but to JKR or 'Plain White T's'
love it! I love this song already and this is a sweet version that reflects how Harry feels about Ginny.
When he realises the deadly plan set before him by Dumbledore, Harry's heart goes through an incredible journey to find calm in the eye of the storm.
This sonnet won The Diamond Challenge on the Poetry Anyone forum. The prompt that inspired it was 'Loyalty'.
This poem was nominated for a 2010 Quicksilver Quill Award - Best Poem
beautiful! conjures up the emotions of that scene nicely, and flows great.
I'm glad you liked it. It was so difficult to write with the required metre of a sonnet and still have that poignant content befitting that scene in the book. I'm glad it's come across as well as it has, because I really enjoyed writing it. It was a good challenge.
Thanks for reviewing, and happy reading. :D
interesting to see Ginny's perspective. I'm glad you aren't making their relationship just picture-perfect after the war like many fics do, but are portraying them more honestly. Ginny might be perfect for Harry, but is she a perfect person? No. I am looking forward to more and hope to see how they resolve this. One thing that's kind of confusing to me is Dean and Luna. I think it was definitely hinted at in Harry Potter and the Deathly Hallows that Dean liked Luna, but does Luna like him back? Luna seems to me like she might not want a boyfriend, like she wouldn't know what to do with one. So how does Dean get Luna to go out with him?Then again, I have not read Grave Days, is it explained there? Will we see any more of them in this fic? When does Rolf enter the picture? Will any of it be from Ron, Hermione, or Harry's point of view? Well, I guess I'm done with questions and am looking forward to more of this.
Ginny (and Harry) will continue to misunderstand and upset each other occasionally. The Dean and Luna on/off not sure if it’s a relationship will continue in the background but you won’t see much of it. It isn’t really explained in Grave Days, though Dean and Luna do appear and Dean does try.
The "Hogsmeade" section will be all from Ginny’s pov. The next Chapters (the Gryffindor/Slytheri Quidditch game) are from Harry’s and both Hermione and Ron will get their turn.
I have some (rather strange) plans for Rolf Scamander. Luna marries Rolf “much later in life” according to JKR and you won’t meet him in Aurors and Schoolgirls, or its sequel.
Narcissa has called him an interfering grandfather. Lucius is not sure he deserves that.
cute! how funny, it really reads like Lucius wrote it, he he I'm cracking up. So this refers to a situation in a story you wrote that involves Scorpius falling for Rose, and Lucius doing something to "interfere"? Just might have to read it. :)
Author's Response: That's a lovely compliment! I "am" Lucius when I write his pov, and it's loads of fun. Makes me wish I had a pimp cane, hehheh. I hope you will break down and read Our Little Secret (completed!) and the sequel. I think you'd enjoy Lucius' characterization, and Scorpius' too. :)
I love this story! It is really good so far and shows a lot of potential. Song Feng is a memorable character, and it is really fascinating reading about the wizarding world in China. Zhu-Ge Liang and his wife are really cool, too. I can't wait to find out what happens next! (though don't be afraid to take as much time as you need with a great story like this!) This story's plot, characters, and setting are just addictingly awesome, and from the way it's going, could become one of my favorite BOOKS. (Not just fan fiction)
Thanks for writing this, and keep up the good work!
great! keep it up! love this story!
cool poems. Remus's are my favorite, probably because he's my favorite marauder. I love the chocolate poem and can relate. Looking forward to seeing Sirius's! However, in several places it seems like a word is missing. Maybe you could double-check them again for typos?
what happens next? Can't wait to find out. This story is really interesting and vivid, and seems in character. The only thing is I'm unsure if Luna and Harry would just go under the veil like that, knowing that apparently the veil is Death...But I think when you're close to the veil, you kind of stop thinking straight so I guess it could make sense.
intrigueing. Please write more!
Sometimes very sweet and moving, sometimes funny...I loved Hermione going back to face her fears, her thoughts on Ron and placing the picture of Dobby. Some of the humor seemed kind of forced...and I thought the Malfoys were not characterized as best as possible, ok, I'm biased because my fic portrays them slightly differently. I can see them going in many possible directions after the war, and this fic's portrayal of them was definetely better than some I've seen. A slight canon error is that when a wizard dies, their spells are undone, so Draco would no longer have a Dark Mark now that Voldemort is dead, I think. Blaise Zabini was mostly believable, but I would keep in mind that he has said he "wouldn't touch a blood traitor no matter how pretty she was" so having him constantly trying to flirt with Hermione, the Muggle-born, could do with more explanation. I wouldn't classify it as a Ron/Hermione romance, but as a General Fic or a Post-Hogwarts. Overall, writing canon-compliant fan fiction about major canon characters is a very difficult and delicate art and this is one of the best I've seen. Unfortunately, that's not saying much.
SPOILERS FOR PEOPLE WHO READ REVIEWS BEFORE READING THE STORY...
What Hermione's "diary" turned out to be was funny, and more than that, the introduction of the new magical object seemed believeable and likely to fit in canon. I agree with you, Hermione would not keep a diary.
I will probably read more of your work in future.
Author's Response: I was happy with my characterisation of Draco, changed only slightly since the battle. Narcissa barely appeared. I’m not one of those people who believe that Draco will suddenly change into a nice person after the battle. In the epilogue Harry and Draco acknowledge each other, but they are hardly friends. If you have any specific characterisation comments, please make them. We could argue whether the Dark Mark would disappear or not. Is it simply a spell, or is it a curse-scar too? I could easily make an argument for the latter. It may be invisible (as was Snapes for many years) but Ithink that it would still be there. The “wouldn’t touch a blood-traitor” Blaise was the son of a very wealthy woman. This Blaise is a penniless orphan. I find writing canon-compliant fan fiction about major characters. I usually write about the major characters and I rarely get criticism about canon issues. (I bet they start now, though). (-: N
I'm sorry, I should have clarified what I meant a little better in the last review. I also do not think that Draco or either of the other Malfoys are likely to automatically transform into nice people after the battle. I thought their characterizations were good, actually. When I meant that I could see them going in different directions, I mean that there is much to ponder on their fate, and your depiction, while being good, was not the only possible depiction.
Author's Response: Thanks for the clarification. I agree. There are many ways for the Malfoy’s to go. I see Lucius as bitter, twisted and unable to come to terms with the fact that following Voldemort brought ruin to his family. N