Hello. I probably won't be posting any stories for a while, because I'm hard at work writing them.
I won't post them until they are completed because I've learned through experience that I cannot function with my writing process visible for all to see.
I haven't been on this site in a while, and it's...telling...how age and life in general can alter your perspectives. I find many of my old reviews and what-not kind of weird and pretentious now, so if you're reading something I wrote and finding yourself shaking your head at how stupid it is, know that I probably am too.
I'm sorry if I annoyed and/or offended anyone.
Just want to say that this site is amazing. The writers here taught me what fanfic could be and never to lower my standards.
This is great. One of my favorite favorites. Canon-compliant, too. I love both Narcissa and Lupin, and you managed to portray them both very believably. That's saying a lot, as I am picky about the characterizations, especially my favorite characters. This made me laugh a whole bunch. The only reason why your story isn't as r&r'd as it should be is that it's been a while since it was published--stories like this one remind me of why it's worth it to dig through the archives, and not just look at the recent list. I also like how it makes fun of parent-teacher correspondence in the school systems; there were so many times in school when the silliness implicit in so much of it really struck me. Overall, a great story, and I can hardly think of anything to criticize. Maybe the inclusion of the Greengrasses as a "prominent family", because we don't really see barely any of them in the books, but that's just my personal opinion. I'm gonna send my mother a link to this, I know she'd enjoy it. She probably won't review, unless I can convince her to get an account here...;) A great story! Thanks for doing such a good job with it!
This is great! One of my favorites of my favorites. Everybody who's read Harry Potter should read this, it's that good. This was chilling in a subtle way, and I enjoy that quality in fiction, especially in short stories. The first time I read this, I could see it as Lucius and Draco, but reading it again I don't think it's them. I've been forced to think very very hard about the Malfoys as I'm writing a fanfic about them, and I think that while being a Death Eater was extremely important to Lucius, he was also not the type to talk about it very much, especially to his son. I think this is about the Notts--I find them pretty interesting and unexplored characters, especially after J.K. Rowling said that Theodore is the son of an elderly widowed Death Eater. I picture them as being if possible, more serious and snotty than the Malfoys, but less ostentatious. Thanks for a thought-provoking story!
Author's Response: You think someone is more snotty than the Malfoys! Wow, that's pretty impressive. Thanks for the very kind review. :)
awesome! Utterly hilarious... Potter-related humor is my favorite kind.
creepy, sad, and in character...maybe since we now know Andromeda didn't die we can interpret it as some sort of illusion Voldemort gave her?
Amazing! It's a rhyming ballad, not heavy, but who says everything has to be? My only quibble is that Peter turns into a rat, not a mouse. Maybe its a typo.
Author's Response: Thanks! I guess I didn't really think about a mouse being different from a rat. I'll check out that typo.
I want to see what the Marauders desire!
Fascinating! Very believable and captivating depiction of the Wizarding world under Grindelwald. I loved the dark ironic humor of the "Mudblood" and the "Untermensch" feeling exactly the same contempt and loathing towards each other, and the mysterious and suspenseful parts didn't fail to capture my attention.I also being the history buff that I am, loved this story in that department, too. In the words of JRR. Tolkien, I love history, rather real or feigned. Isn't it interesting how the wizarding world paralels our own in subtle ways even as it colides with it? I am definitely looking forward to more, but have a few small (hopefully constructive) comments to make. One is that there is a lot of German in this story. It does add to the atmosphere, but maybe including a translation right where it occurs instead of at the end would be a good idea. The time the guys were talking outside the Polish magic headquarters and about to disapparate, I didn't notice you're handy little asterik, and after making some guesses about a countdown, zipped over to Google translator, and in addition to decipherating the conversation, got distracted with the urge to waste time seeing what some phrases were in a gazilion different languages... So, needless to say, it interrupted the flow of the story. The only other thing is I'm not really sure where this story is headed. For the last, I don't know, few chapters maybe it seems to be dragging a little bit. Don't get me wrong, that duel with Karkaroff had me on the edge of my seat, it's just that the school stuff and the fueding seems to be carrying on a bit too long. I might feel differently if there was any character I could root for, but Dieter is a brat-albeit a fascinating character of a brat- and my ability to identify with him has gone down after he's gone completely psycho about going after Karkaroff. So far Ernst is really the only really likeable character in a positive way, to me. I hope Dieter has some sort of come-uppance and changes his ways.The teachers are all really good. Professor Schmidt subtly remind us of the differences between Hogwarts and Durmstrang. And Professor Simonov is just the cheesecake with ice cream on top and chocolate gushing down the sides, though I think my opinion might be different if I was his student. With both Muggle and Wizarding Germany in the grasp of fanatical dictatorships, this is a lot to hope for, but I still hope Dieter gets some sort of come-uppance and changes his ways. I wishyou the best of good fortune with the rest of this story, and I will await updates.
Arabella is a normal girl, from a normal wizarding family. A worry is constantly sitting on her stomach, though, and soon that worry has to be confirmed.
*Profanity minor, and one incident only*
A truly great story, and definitely one of my favorites of my favorites. I find the concept of Squibs fascinating but sad. Your story captures somewhat how I feel about reading Harry Potter and being a Muggle. ;) I thought it was appalling how Arabella's parents treated her, but I give them credit for trying. Knowing many wizarding families, it could have been much worse though. I feel the same way toward mistreatment of Squib children that I do about mistreatment of disabled children in real life--the ultimate failure in empathy. I think you are a good writer (at least in this fic, I don't think I've read any of your others, but I probably will.) and this story really is full of great emotion and imagery. I really like much fanfiction about minor or unexplored characters that makes sense for the story's world and yours is one of the best examples of that I've read. The only thing in it that I remember not liking is Arabella's nickname "Bella." There are worse names, but to me Bella will probably always be the name of two certain characters I highly dislike, one because she's a b****, the other because she's a an utterly unrealistic idiot who gets everything she wants. (Guess which one Rowling didn't create?) Though I admit the movie "Bella" was okay...Sorry if my rambling is annoying. I would highly like it if you expanded this and wrote a sequel. That would be awesome!! Have a wonderful day! :)
Moment I read this I started laughing really loud...My family looks at me wierd...I call my sister over to show her, and we sing it together, barely getting the words out because we're laughing so hard. this was like rictusempra or something, complete hilarity...I love Potterized versions of classic songs.
Author's Response: Glad you enjoyed it.
I'm letting all my friends (Harry Potter liking or not) know about this on Facebook...this is just too classicly funny.
Author's Response: Haha. Thanks
Winner of the 2010 QSQ for Best Canon Romance!
The best thing about this fic is the characterizations-you've taken what J.K.R. has given us and filled in the blanks beautifully. Remus, Sirius, Peter, Severus, and of course, Lily and James are all written exactly as one would imagine the people who will become the ones we know later in the books. I've only read a few Marauder Era stories, but this is by far the best. The style of the writing is reminiscent of J.K.R.'s herself. Neither the comedy nor the romance is overdone, and the story makes you love Lily and James more.
I hate to criticize it at all, but I think (I could be wrong) that the "werewolf prank" happened before the "levitating Snape" incident. I hope not, because you've really well happening in the order you did.
Author's Response: you know, i wondered about that, but there are so many conflicting sources about when the werewolf thing happened--i've seen fifth and sixth year, sirius was 16, it's all over the place. i just kinda went for it in the end. but i'm glad you enjoyed it, thank you so much!!
Da da da dum, snap! snap!
A poem inspired by the Addams Family theme song.
Author's Response: I had a lot of fun writing it so I'm glad you had fun reading it. Thanks! :)
Love it! very emotional and surely what Narcissa felt.
Author's Response: Thanks! :)
beautiful and in character. I love Cho, I really do. (But I'm very glad she and Harry did not end up together)
Author's Response: Thank you very much! I like Cho as well and enjoyed writing this for her. She gets a bad rep in fanfiction. But like you, I don't think she and Harry worked well together at all. They're much better off with other people! Again, thanks for reading and reviewing!
perfect! So good! Captures exactly what it means to be a Death Eater, and it is so well-written, the poem rolls off your tongue,...great job.
Author's Response: I appreciate the review. Hopefully soon I'll have more works for you to enjoy. (:
sweet! like it
I love snape and this poem!
Author's Response: Thank you! I love Snape, too :) Peace, Virgil
This is sooooo sad. When I finished it I was bawling. A little far-fetched, perhaps, but very much in character.This is just so beautiful and sad, and probably my favorite story on Mugglenet. The fact that its Narcissa's own fault that she lost her love is what makes it all the more tragic...So sad, you can see Milton and Narcissa together, if she had just made up her mind and went for it, but...no. And then this story really reaches out to the emotions because it's so easy to find yourself in Narcissa, and you wonder if you would have done the same as her. It really speaks to the hesitant and weak part in all of us that craves security. And then when you think about who Narcissa becomes later, then its just even sadder. Its how the little choices can shape the entire course of our lives...When I read it the first time, tears were running down my face by the end of the story, and even on the fifth or sixth time I get a lump in my throat. Great job, and thanks for such a well-written and heartbreaking story!
oh, I just have to gush some more about this story. I've already covered Narcissa's characterization, so I'll do Milton and Lucius now.
Milton- poor guy! He never saw her again. Very great original character, and seems like someone who could overcome the racial barriers and get Narcissa to go out with him... It's so sad for him, too, because he loved her, and believed in her, but she wouldn't believe in herself.
Lucius-very true to character, and I can picture him acting just like this. The fancy gifts, and the jealousy. And this line "You're allowed to be nervous."
You've hit the nail on the head. He certainly would say something like this. It reveals so much about his character, even when being nice he shows his arrogance in giving Narcissa "permission" to feel something.