oooo... this is an interesting start. very intriguing.
1) for the awesome story, i'm totally hooked. a boggart to reveal to michelle that she's a witch! her fevered response to it, snape's curt tone..... you wrote it very nicely. i am curious though; why did amanda and snape disappear? to go to greenhouse 4 while michelle was in greenhouse 3?
2) very quick updates. i have never seen a story get updated so quickly! i'm loving it!
thanks and keep up the good work! love your writing~
Author's Response: 1) That is indeed why they disappeared. :) 2) I have the first eleven chapters written and posted on FFN. I regret to say that my updates will inevitably slow down once the already-finished chapters are posted.
After being hit squarely in the chest by Molly Weasley at the end of Harry Potter and the Deathly Hallows, Bellatrix Lestrange wakes up lost and bewildered. A victim of the little-understood Bebitched Curse, she is transported through space and time to the ultimate gated community in a sunny climate. The people around her seem to possess an uncanny knowledge of the world she left behind, but none of them can work magic. Worst of all, she herself seems to be turning into a Squib. As she struggles to find her place among the very people she most despises, Bella slowly realizes that a land which reveres the magical world learns to work it own brand of magic.
Come join Bella in her voyage of self-discovery and social commentary. The Muggle world may never be the same.
genius! the reactions of the people around there were on the dot- i know i will do that if i met "bella" in the theme park. will you make bella venture out of hogwarts and hogsmeade and into other parts of the park? i would love to see bella encounter a dinosaur =p
Author's Response: Thanks for the warm praise! I’m thrilled you’re enjoying my take on Bella’s tribulations. Her horizons will definitely be expanded in the next act and she won’t be too happy about having to reshuffle her view of reality.
Considering how many ferocious creatures Voldemort’s been courting, Bella might not be as perturbed by a close meeting with a dinosaur as you would think. I can just imagine her commenting that they were “the result of a hopelessly moronic Muggle breeding program that had turned a majestic dragon into a cumbersome land-bound beast and robbed it of its incendiary capabilities. No wonder the creature she encountered was surly and short-tempered.”
this is so sweet and sad.
Author's Response: Thanks!b
fits percy well. very nice. =)
this is awesome. i think that draco might opt for cigar rather than cigarettes - only coz he seems like the kind of guy who will opt for "high-class". it's also slightly weird how hermione recognizes the brand immediately, but beyond that - awesome. very well written. the final part where she appeals to him was poignant, as well as ending the story with "Obliviate!". very nice.
Author's Response: I did consider using cigars instead of cigarettes but he's a teenager and I didn't see him running around with cigars while trying to fix the cabinet. I did choose a brand of cigarettes that is considered high-class. Also, let's just say that Hermione recognized it 'cause her father smokes or something inanely similar to that. Lol. Thanks for reviewing!
this is so so so sad =((( i'd like you to know that i rarely cry, but this was so moving that i cried. a big part of ginny died with harry, right? i find the use of the second-person perspective oddly apt. maybe it's just in my twisted mind, but i think ginny stopped being herself when harry turned all fragmented due to that spell. =(( i was reading the notebook today, and there was an element that echoed with this story (alzheimer's), but this was so much sadder. brilliantly written, but oh so sad! ='(
Author's Response: Thank you so much for the lovely review. It is sad, I know. I always sort of thought Harry wouldn't survive the seventh book. He did, but there had to have been consequences. This was one of them, and possibly the worst. I'm glad you liked the second person POV, since it just came to me like that and had to be that way. Thanks again for the review, I really appreciate it! *hands over tissues* ~Gina :)
The scene with Narcissa made my heart drop. It is very touching~
Author's Response: Thank you. He does love him mum after all. ~Carole~
This story was inspired by something Neville said in passing. “…And then Michael Corner went and got caught releasing a first year they’d [the Carrows] chained up, and they tortured him pretty badly…”
This is the untold tale of an unsung hero: Michael Corner.
i would like to have a "like" button to push a hundred times. this is very well written, and you did a good job in making filch humane =)
Author's Response: Thank you! I'm glad you liked it so much. I am flattered that you think it well written. And Filch... Filch needed to show that he wasn't a soul-less vegetable sometime. No one ever seems to consider what Filch's reaction to the Carrow's regime at Hogwarts was.
Thanks for reading! And for reviewing!!
while the ghost of christmas is a much used topic, i find your choice of ghost to be very cool. no one can be as terse and no-nonsense as snape. and i love your choice of memories. i'm waiting for the next chapters! =D
Author's Response: Thank you! The ghost of Christmas idea is actually part of the prompt on the forums for this challenge, but the idea to use Snape was mine. I'm glad you like it! ~LiLu
brilliant. absolutely brilliant =D
i don't like the idea of draco killing his wife, but this story is very intriguing. keep writing please!
Lily Evans is pretty, intelligent, vivacious… and accused of murder. James Potter is privileged, arrogant, and conceited… and her best chance at avoiding Azkaban. If only he wasn’t convinced of her guilt.
With a war looming in the background and evil slowly seeping into the wizarding world, seven years of secrets unravel, and two very different people find themselves caught up in a battle against privilege, intolerance, and greed.
But even in the darkness, and even in the despair, there is still friendship, and love, and hope.
i like your writing style =) the way you ended your chapter is very powerful.
Author's Response: Thanks! I hope you continue to enjoy the story.
damn. how many times have i heard people saying that Harry Potter is Satanic? you hit the nail on the head alright. awesome story.
Author's Response: I wonder how many of those people have read Deathly Hallows? It isn't exactly a subtle or hidden message...
It was the worst news a father could receive: his son was marrying his worst enemy's daughter.
But for Draco Malfoy, being in the role of the reasonable parent was in itself a debacle as he tried to make the best of a bad situation. But when circumstances forced him to spend more time than he ever cared to with the most irritating Mudblood on the planet, he constantly questioned his sanity, as well as that of his son.
However, Draco might have come to realise that things change, as well as people. Is Hermione Granger Weasley the mad bint he remembered, or were they both a little different this time around?
This story has been nominated for a 2011 Quicksilver Quill Award: Best Non-Canon Romance.
This story has also been nominated for a 2014 Quicksilver Quill Award: Best Humour Story.
happy birthday elene! =)
story's fabulous, and i can't wait to read the next chapter!
Author's Response: The next installment should be up either later today or early tomorrow. The birthday girl eagerly awaits. :D
It was going to happen eventually: Oliver Wood had to retire. But when the decision was made for him, he allowed himself to be tricked into grooming his replacement. However, coaching proved to be a completely different animal, especially when the untried and unbridled Roxanne Weasley pushed his limits every step of the way.
This story was nominated for a 2011 Quicksilver Quill Award: Best Non-Canon Romance.
happy birthday carole~!
Author's Response: Message sent. :)
this story is getting more and more delightful. i wish that albus had stepped in and stopped matthew before tom went overboard, because then at least amy would still like tom. argh. but you hit the nail right on the head with aberforth's analysis of albus: "This moment, you want nothing more than to prove that he is a murderer in making." i like how you make albus begin to see his prejudices and favoritism. i guess even the best of wizards have flaws. great chapter as usual, and i look forward to reading more =)
Author's Response: Hi again! It's great to hear that you're liking the characterisation of Albus. I hope he stays true to form in the coming chapters and doesn't end up sappy! I hope to update soon! Thank you for telling me what you thought of the chapter :)
ooooh this explains every question i had in the previous chapter! again, i think you understand dumbledore's character very well. of course castle albus would take time to research the oddities before acting. excellent characterization again! i am very amused, by the way, by the deference albus gives to castle albus.
p/s- thanks for the clarification about aloysius v alastor~! having abraxas malfoy as a kid in this chapter also helped with putting the timeline you are working with in context. =)
Author's Response: We shall have to see how quickly the deference becomes exasperation and indignation. Albus might be older, but he is still very prone to sulking when things don't go his way...discreetly, of course! It's great to hear that you liked the chapter. I hope you continue to enjoy the rest of it too. re: p/s - my fault! I had sent poor Albus tumbling into a strange timeline and didn't have the good sense to put a short note about the relative age of characters. Sorry if that muddled things.
albus seems a little different, but it's really nice to see him more human. i like your characterization of the young tom riddle a lot. he seems pretty adult every now and then, but i really like it anyway. please continue writing! i look forward to updates! =)
Author's Response: Thank you for reading and talking, Littlewolf! I hope that the characterisations hold true to the plot in the coming chapters and that you will enjoy them too! Updated now :)
Another great chapter! The plot is thickening and things are definitely getting very interesting... Moody and Bode's responses were so hostile! Granted, Tom almost killed Ollivander and speaks Parseltongue, but they had immediate hatred rather than surprise. I don't like Bode already. And while I usually hate/fear snakes, I feel bad for Hero T.T
Thick emotions: very fitting.
Castle Albus seems too aloof and too unconcerned for Aberforth. Did you write him to be still too young and much less wise about the world? How can the great proponent of "love" be so unloving towards his brother? =(( Still, the "lemon drops?" suggestion at the end was 100% in character and super awesome.
Great chapter again =) Little nitpick: unless that Moody is not Mad-Eye Moody, his first name is actually Alastor.
Author's Response: Hey, hello! I'm glad that you liked the chapter :) I'm glad that the lemon-drops suggestion at the end of the chapter works! I've been trying to delineate the characters of Castle Albus and old Albus in the coming chapters and I hope that works... I am not too fond of snakes myself. Ranks right next to frogs in my book. Aloysius is Alastor's Dad :) I was thinking that Alastor (Mad-Eye) might be at school around the same time as Tom Riddle. I'm too sure about Alastor's canon age, though.