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Snowflakes by The_Dream_Team

Rated: 3rd-5th Years •
Summary: And there he was. The one boy she could not stand. His messy, jet black hair was ruffled and untidy and his glasses were sitting crooked on his nose. James Potter was here. With Lily. And all her Muggle friends. At a Muggle ski resort. Could things possibly be worse? Oh yeah, Sirius Black is there, too.
Reviewer: RavenclawAspirant Signed
Date: 01/29/11 Title: Chapter 16: Chapter 16: The Cabin

It was really good. There was one thing that kind of snapped me out of the story though and that was Lily's reaction to the story. It just didn't seem probable that they would sit and joke after hearing about that. What about the ministry of magic wouldn't underage magic register? Please update soon!

Author's Response: I was actually really nervous about putting up this chapter because Lily's reaction was rushed, but then the chapter wouldn't have been finished for a while and I feel horrible when I don't update quickly... My characterization unfortunately isn't the best... And I'm really glad you brought up the ministry! Don't worry, the whole underage magic thing will be explained in later chapters! Thanks for reading and taking the time to review! I really appreciate it :)

Reviewer: RavenclawAspirant Signed
Date: 09/17/10 Title: Chapter 13: Chapter 13: The Ahurewa Forest

I really liked it! I really liked how it turned out Lupin didn't know but i think that at the end Lily was ok with it a bit too quickly.

Author's Response: Yeah, I thought that Remus seemed a bit too responsible to know exactly what was going on... As for Lily, I was thinking the same thing, but I wanted to get the story moving a little more quickly. Thanks so much for reading and reviewing! It means a lot =]

Reviewer: RavenclawAspirant Signed
Date: 06/30/10 Title: Chapter 11: Chapter 11: The Death Eater's Request

I liked the chapter. I only have two things to suggest the first is just that when towards the beginning Lily is speaking with James about her muggle friends there is no mention of where they are because before the muggle friends were close by in the room so it doesn't make sense that they wouldn't hear, the second is the the scene in which the death eater kidnaps her seems a little forced. why would he suddenly choose to take her in the middle of a restaurant? wouldn't people notice? also wouldn't Lily fight back? I always though of her as being really brave and clever. I really like the story though and i have a lot of fun reading it. I especially like all the jokes about Sirius not knowing muggle stuff. One more thing that is just because i am an American not English are chips french fries and crisps chips or am i confused?

Author's Response: Wow, thanks for such a long review! For the first scene you mentioned, I think Lily's friends had left the kitchen to greet Sirius and James, so they would be out of the room when Lily and Sirius were talking. I guess I should include more details like that to make it more clear! For the scene with the Death Eater, I think he had been following them for a while, trying to find a way to get to James, so when Lily bumped into him, he thought she would be good bait. And I was actually thinking while I wrote this part that Lily should be stronger and fight back more, but I had the DE just point his wand at her instead. Also, she didn't have her own wand at the time, so she probably didn't want to start a fist fight. And yeah, chips are french fries and crisps are chips! I'm glad you liked the chapter, and I love writing Sirius' Muggle confusions, so I'm happy you like reading them! Thanks again for such a long, lovely review! =]

Reviewer: RavenclawAspirant Signed
Date: 08/03/10 Title: Chapter 12: Chapter 12: The Letter

I like that you are having Lupin come (he was always my favorite) but i think that it is a bit improbable that he would agree and be let to go to a muggle ski resort (wouldn't the ministry, dumbledore and his parents want specifics before they just let him go somewhere?). I like the thing about movies though...are we going to get to hear about sirius's first movie? :-)

Author's Response: I've always really liked Lupin, too! Yes, it is improbable, but I promise, it's a bit justified. Unfortunately, the movie isn't really dwelled upon... but I think I might go and edit a bit because a lot of people want to see Sirius and James' thoughts on movies! Thanks so much for reading and reviewing, it really means a lot =] And keep an eye out for chapter thirteen!

The Arcane ScoRA and the Blood Pact by OliveOil_Med

Rated: 1st-2nd Years •
Summary: Albus, Rose, and Scorpius about to return Hogwarts when the Daily Prophet is splattered with headlines of Alarice Dugan, Maddox's mother, proclaiming the exhistance of the Arcane ScoRA and tell the world about the Blood Pact she has made with her son to find justice for her son. Now, all the wizarding world is focused on these three second-years' and their every waking moment.

Staying under the radar should prove simple enough, but between receiving strange gifts of great magical power followed by perfect oppurtunities to use them, it is proving quite difficult. Now it seems like just a matter of time before the Arcane ScoRA first and most important rule is broken, and the secret organization comes crumbling down.
Reviewer: RavenclawAspirant Signed
Date: 01/14/11 Title: Chapter 4: Chapter 4 The Weasley Quidditch Training Gauntlet

I like the story, but i thought that the idea that the Weasley's would ever put a child through that was wrong. Wizard or not breaking the bones of a child and denying them sleep for three days is not like them at all it is really cruel. Mr and Mrs. Weasley would not allow it and neither would Harry or Ginny, no matter how much they care about Quidditch. They would play in the orchard for fun not to torment. I still think it is a good story and i like the idea of the previous one with the magical creatures.

Author's Response: Well, everyone sees the wizarding world differently.

Reviewer: RavenclawAspirant Signed
Date: 08/16/10 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1 Finger Prick

I was so happy to see you were writing a sequel! I like it although i think that there might have been an editing problem because there are sentences every now and then that look like they had the ends cut of.

Author's Response: Hmm, a problem with the sentences? I'll have to look into it.

Reviewer: RavenclawAspirant Signed
Date: 08/16/10 Title: Chapter 2: Chapter 2 Preparing for the Second Year

I really liked this chapter! I only had one thing i was wondering about: what job does Ginny have? Does she work at the ministry too? She didn't seem the type to be a stay at home mom to me (not that there is something wrong with stay at home moms just that Ginny didn't seem like one)

Author's Response: Well, according to interviews with J.K, Ginny played for the Holyhead Harpies for a while, but then retired to become a Quidditch reporter for the Daily Prophet. Ginny's work as a reporter will be a big issue in the next chapter, and I promise that it's coming!

George by Lunalovespudding

Rated: 1st-2nd Years •
Summary: George Weasley is lying on his bed, thinking, when something happens that could change his life.
Reviewer: RavenclawAspirant Signed
Date: 06/07/10 Title: Chapter 1: Prologue

I liked it. There is just one small thing which is that I don't think that it is very like George to say that Mad-Eye might be called by some paranoid. That seems too formal for him.

Author's Response: You're right, but I think that after Fred died, some of the humor and carelessness left him.

A Fireside Chat by Quillwork1313

Rated: 3rd-5th Years •
Summary: Excerpt from chapter 2:

Suddenly, he heard a rustling, cracking noise. His eyes snapped open, and he saw a young man sitting to his right, prodding the fire with a stick. For a moment, he thought it was Ron and he opened his mouth to ask him how he had snuck up on him. But just then, the man turned his head toward him, and it was not Ron.

George jumped up, startled so fiercely that he drew his wand, pointing it at the last of his brothers he had expected to see.
Reviewer: RavenclawAspirant Signed
Date: 08/25/10 Title: Chapter 1: An Inspiration

I really liked your story idea. The one comment i have is that Harry seems kind of out of character.

Author's Response: Thank you so much. I'm glad you found something I could work on. I'm happy to receive advice so I can make this story as believable as I can.

Bit of a Nasty Shock by hestiajones

Rated: 1st-2nd Years •
Summary: ‘I’m half and half,’ said Seamus. ‘Me dad’s a Muggle. Mam didn’t tell him she was a witch ’til after they were married. Bit of a nasty shock for him.’

You'd love to hear this story, wouldn't you?

Thanks to Emma (Amortentia_x) for the Irishpick! :D And I am not J.K.Rowling, though they all belong to her.

Nominated for a QSQ in the Best Humour category.
Reviewer: RavenclawAspirant Signed
Date: 08/14/10 Title: Chapter 1: Some witches do know how to bewitch!

It was very funny! ;-) I liked how you made it sound like a old fairy tale.

Author's Response: YAY! Thanks!


Taking Direction by WeasleyMom

Rated: 3rd-5th Years •
Summary: What if the characters in the Harry Potter films were portrayed”not by actors”but by the book versions of themselves, as created by Rowling? How might things unfold on that set? What would the characters think of the changes made from the stories they’d already lived out… to the ones written for the script?

This fic is a series of one-shots, posted as chapters, each from the perspective of a different character who is dealing with the changes occurring between the book and the script.


Holy Movie Canon, Batman! This fic won the 2011 Quicksilver Quill Award for Best Chaptered Humor Story. Thanks so, so much!


Reviewer: RavenclawAspirant Signed
Date: 08/23/10 Title: Chapter 1: Jazz Hands

I thought it was great! brilliant idea! I am very excited to hear what Dumbledore thinks.....

Author's Response: Oh, but Dumbledore is so difficult to write well. I must get some tutoring or something. So glad you liked it... thanks for the review!

Reviewer: RavenclawAspirant Signed
Date: 10/09/10 Title: Chapter 2: Babe Magnet

Very funny! I like it. The only thing is that there isn't really a good transition from the first to the second....but i don't mind because it think it is is hilarious!

Author's Response: I'm so glad you think it's funny! I know what you mean about the transitions, but it will continue to be that way. That's why I mentioned in the summary that this fic will really read like a series of very short one-shots... and yet it made sense to keep them together... so... it is what it is. Glad you liked it! Thanks for the review!

Stars Apart by Willow Rosenberg

Rated: 3rd-5th Years •
Summary: The sequel to “Trickster”: The Marauders return to Hogwarts for their seventh and final year. Lily and James juggle more responsibility than ever, and James learns that convincing Lily to go on an actual date with him is harder than he would have imagined. Remus frets about post-Hogwarts life while Peter drifts even further from his friends. But when Sirius discovers a group of fourth-years who are bound and determined to steal the Marauders’ title of Greatest Hogwarts Troublemakers he wages war, rallying his friends so they can maintain their legacy. Meanwhile, outside the castle grounds, Voldemort is gathering supporters in unending preparation for a much darker battle…

and this is the wonder that's keeping the stars apart
i carry your heart(i carry it in my heart)

-E. E. Cummings

September 2012: HEY guess what I couldn't wait, and the third installment, "World Enough," is UP NOW under James/Lily. Or just under my name. Or at this link: http://fanfiction.mugglenet.com/viewstory.php?sid=92131. Yay! :D

Reviewer: RavenclawAspirant Signed
Date: 12/29/10 Title: Chapter 10: Better than Revenge

I really liked the idea of having her catch the snitch! the only thing i would suggest would be to put in something about what the teachers would do in response to this because it doesn't seem likely that they wouldn't notice bludgers in the great hall. Great story!

Author's Response: oh, no worries, they did ;) this was another one of those chapters that just got a little too long, so the next one picks up in exactly the same place. but thanks!!

Reviewer: RavenclawAspirant Signed
Date: 07/21/11 Title: Chapter 18: Schisms

This was a GREAT chapter! I was literally laughing out loud for all of when they were fighting.

Reviewer: RavenclawAspirant Signed
Date: 01/04/11 Title: Chapter 11: Subterfuge

GREAT IDEA! i can't wait for the next chapter. This should be very entertaining.

Reviewer: RavenclawAspirant Signed
Date: 08/24/11 Title: Chapter 21: Come What May

I really liked this chapter! I love how you write conversations that are really and unforced between the characters. My only note would be that the conversation where they get the story from Sirius was a bit choppy and hard to follow. But i really like the story and enjoyed the chapter!!!

Reviewer: RavenclawAspirant Signed
Date: 02/18/11 Title: Chapter 14: Gravity

Great chapter! i was very pleasantly suprised when it was Leda who saved her i was expecting it to be the cliched boy saves girl thing. The only thing i would suggest it that is seems a bit improbable that there wouldn't be any teachers to meet them at the train and that they would sit their kissing when there was fighting going on. But I really like it! Please update soon!

Reviewer: RavenclawAspirant Signed
Date: 01/29/11 Title: Chapter 13: Beautiful Disaster

Great chapter! please update soon!

Reviewer: RavenclawAspirant Signed
Date: 10/01/10 Title: Chapter 1: Way Back Home

Yay a sequel! Good idea with the sister's talking but i think that it was a bit rushed with them suddenly being friendly.

Reviewer: RavenclawAspirant Signed
Date: 10/27/10 Title: Chapter 4: Crash Into You

I love it! Please update again soon i want to hear who is behind these!

Author's Response: asap! almost done with the next chapter :) glad you like it!!