Really sweet! You should write a sequel.
It was wonderful! I read your story when you were first writing it and i couldn't believe it when you added an epilogue. It was great, i really enjoyed it, thanks for posting it!
I really like this story! My favorite thing is how you manage to follow the books so well while making it something new. I really feel like i am reading a sequel!
Author's Response: Oh, wow, thanks so much for the compliment! It's very flattering^_^... I'm really glad you liked it! And originally in my draft I had begun the first chapter like, "The train rounded the corner and Albus caught a last fleeting glance of his father and blah blah blah" like I'm starting off from the epilogue... but then people told me not to do it, So I gave an introductory paragraph :P. Anyway, thanks a lot for reading, and I hope you come back for more! :)--Nadia
This is great! I am having so much fun reading this story. The one thing that i would suggest is to work on the bit when they talk to Scorpius i think it is a bit to abrupt. Also i really like your idea of having other countries (maybe it is just because i am an american :-) but i always wished the US was mentioned and i love the name)
Author's Response: Wow, thanks! I'll keep in mind about the Scorpius thing too... I'll try to work on those bits. And about the different countries... I'm Bangladeshi :P. I always wondered how it'd be if Bangladesh was mentioned somewhere, so this thing just popped into my head. I needed another country, and America came into my head first and as we already knew about Salem, I decided to write it. Glad you like the name! Anyway, thanks for the review and I hope you come back for more! --Nadia
I really like this story. I think that it is a very good idea and i like how closely you follow what happens in the books without changing things. The one thing i would like to comment on though is that i don't think that Ginny would be content staying at home and not working. She seems like such an independant person that it doesn't seem like her to be a house wife. Also she makes a point in the books (end of seventh) of hating to be left behind so i feel like she would have put up more of a fight. Also i thought you did a good job of staying true to harry with him thinking it must be his fault but i think the others (especially Ron) would have yelled at him more telling him he was being ridiculous. Please write more soon! I want to know who put his name in the goblet!
Author's Response: Thanks so much for the review! I'm glad you liked the story. And Ginny doesn't stay at home, JKR said that once she retired from playing Quidditch, she worked as a reporter for the sports page for the Daily Prophet :). But you're right, I should have made Ron yell at him a bit more :P. I'll keep that in mind the next time Harry blames himself ;) lol. Thanks a lot for the comments, I really appreciate it! More coming soon! --Nadia
I liked the idea of having the apprentice be hopeless, it helped to have the scene be similar but not the copy of the one from book 4. Please update soon!
Author's Response: I liked writing Ms Woodenstick :P. I wanted to have something totally different, because I don't want this to be an exact copy of GOF, so I decided to give her instead of Ollivander. I'm glad it worked :). Thanks for the review! :D --Nadia
Once agian i liked it a lot i just had one suggestion. It seemed wierd to me that Nearly Headless Nick was calling them "kids" it think he is too formal for that.
Author's Response: Aww, thanks again! I'll go change the "kids" thing right now, ok? And once again, thank a bunch for your lovely reviews and feedback :) They mean a lot to me!
I really liked it! It seemed a lot like how i imagined James to act the way he did, that was a good idea. I think that you could have added a bit more about the other people's reactions though.
Author's Response: Thanks so much! I'll see what I can do about the people :)
I liked it a lot! The one thing i would say is that it does seem a bit impractical that Albus would be able to compete as only a first year. Also it got confusing with all the teacher's names all talking trying to figure out who was who. I am however really enjoying the idea of a US school competing (I am an American and i always wished JK Rowling would add American characters to the wizarding world)
Author's Response: Thanks for the review, and I'm glad you liked it!:) And yeah, I know its kinda odd for Al to compete like this... though it kinda makes things more interesting :P. As for the teachers' names-- I'll give a list of who teacher what in the next chapter, ok? :) And by the way, I'm Bangladeshi ;). That's why I gave Bangladesh as one of the other countries competing. I wanted the last one to have a culture I knew about and was in a different continent as well, so the first thing that came into my head was the US :P. Anyway, thanks a lot for the review, and I hope you'll come back for the next chapter! --Nadia
Itâ€™s not just any 1st of September. The Philosopher Stone is hidden at Hogwarts, The Boy Who Lived is about to board the Express for the first time. Itâ€™s not the best September for something unexpected to happen, for something impossible. Or someone.
This story is not AU, but it focuses on the original character, her plot, her friends, her loves :)
Rating and Warning only for later chapters.
I really enjoy reading this story. I like how Cyble manages to make friends with people in all the different houses (I always wished that would happen more in the Harry Potter books). I also really liked your tales! Did you leave the part when Malfoy calls Hermione a mudblood in book two out on purpose or did Cyble just not hear about that?
Author's Response: Thanks for your review. Well, Cybele doesn't know Hermione or anybody from her bacth at that point of the story... but above all, Cybele has a very sellective memory when it comes to Malfoy; lucky him ;)
Thank you for answering my last review. It is really fun to be able to read something and ask questions about it and get answers in return (I always wished that were true of all books....sigh). I liked this chapter but i felt as you put at the end it was a bit fast and a lot was thrown at you at once. Just a suggestion but what if you had her go to freds and carolines funerals? THat would allow for a short break in the pace and would make Cybele more human. I also would have liked to see more of what she did in the battle because with all of her abilities you would think that she would be able to make a real impact and it would be cool if maybe in a flashback or something we heard about what she did in that year with Caroline because it seems like so much could have happened then. I really liked how you had the follow up of them saying that if she was needed just call her (a lot of stories have that but never use it). One last suggestion: I think it would be helpful to have someone end up traveling with her or at least talk about people she meets in her travels because then you get to hear about the others too and the story doesn't just become about Cybele (not that there is something wrong with Cybele just that at least for me hearing about the same character without anyone else around can get a bit boring and i like the other characters). I just want to say though that i really like your story, think you're a great writer and i hope the next chapter comes soon!
Author's Response: Thanks for this long review :) And I'm again afraid that you are right... I'm not too satisfied with my last chapters, because I leap forward in time a lot and though I will get all the lose ends together (I hope); I realize it must not be very satisfying to read. I'll try to follow your advice and add on some more to my last chapters, maybe even one more chapter. As a matter of fact, I think your idea of having Cybele go to the funerals gave me an idea... So if next chapter comes after some time, well, consider the delay is your "fault" ;) Looking forward to your opinion on it!
I liked it but i was suprised that Cybele didn't want to stay and help. Doesn't she want to fight voldemort? and also doesn't caroline? She seems so selfless that it is hard to imagine that she would just leave when her friends need her most in order to do something for herself.
Author's Response: Thanks and you are right: I will try to explain and make that clearer in future chapters. Beside her strong desire to discover the truth about herself, Cybele also feels sincerly useless in the wizarding world, as her training to fight magic with Snape was a failure. She's afraid she would be a burden to the magical world more than help. As for Caroline, well she's a very faithful friend and seeing that all of the other friends of Cybele were giving her up, she felt she had to be the one to stay beside her.
Winner of the 2010 QSQ for Best Canon Romance!
This is a great chapter! I love the ending joke about owing his first born :-)
I like how you make Snape seem like a actual person without changing his personality to be nicer.
I really liked this chapter! It was great idea to write about when James saves Snape, it was almost like i was reading a missing part of one of the Harry Potter books. :-)
I loved this chapter! I especially liked how you added in how Snape and Peter felt. PLEASE do a sequel!!!
What about Dandelion's mother?
I liked it a lot! I am so glad you are writing again. The one thing i would suggest is that it doesn't seem probable how much they are able to just slip away from her friends for long periods of time. Maybe they could find a magical way to talk together?
Author's Response: I'm glad I'm writing, too! Yeah, I agree withe the sneaking away from the Muggle friends thing... I know I would get suspicious, but you'll see a bit of that in the next chapter! I would have them use a spell or something, but they're underage, so they can't do magic... Anyway, thanks so much for reading and reviewing!
I loved the end part when they kissed! i thought that was very well done. The only thing i have to comment on is that the situation still seems a bit impractical to me. I mean in the books with underage magic the ministry contacted within minutes. I still really like it though. Also thank you for responding to my posts it is nice to have my questions answered i wish all books i read could have that!
Author's Response: I'm glad that you liked the ending! And yes, the underage magic thing is definitely something to look out for, it will be explained in a few chapters! Don't worry :) And I love responding to reviews! And I agree, it's awesome to be able to get feedback from authors. Have you ever heard of John Green or the Vlogbrothers? They are a youtube channel and John is an author and he has a really close connection with his readers. I would really check them out! Anyway, thanks so much for reading and reviewing!
I really enjoy the story but i had one suggestion. Bellatrix seemed a little too tame, i mean if she can avoid members of the Order of the Pheonix and Dumbledore then it is a little hard to believe she could be held off by just the three of them especially with tons of other deatheaters around her. Also i feel like she would be use stronger language than "meathead". But it is really good and i think you are a great writer.
Author's Response: Yeah, Bellatrix is pretty powerful, but at this point she's only 24 years old, so maybe she's just not as powerful yet... At least I'm going to go with that ;) As for the tons of other Death Eaters... yup. James, Sirius, and Lily just have really good battle skills in this story :D And I'm glad you like my writing! Thanks so much for reading and your awesome (and helpful!) reviews!