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Summary: It's Harry Potter's first year at Hogwarts School of Witchcraft and Wizardry. But his little sister, Kata Potter, still has a year to go. She's still in Little Whinging. And nothing is the same. Her brother is gone, her friends have changed, and she's been told to trust no one. All Kata has left is an assignment from her teacher: find and catalog the twenty things that make her world go 'round. Maybe Kata's too young for the magic, but she's going to have her own adventures... adventures that will take her from Little Whinging to London, a police station, the back of a train, a stage with a bright light... and maybe even to Hogwarts itself.

Twenty Things is a story about finding yourself, your friends, your secrets, and your past, and hacking it all into some sort of future.

Categories: Alternate Universe Genre: Warnings: Abuse, Alternate Universe, Strong Profanity, Violence

Word count: 73838 Chapters: 12 Completed: No
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01/20/09 Updated: 01/29/12


Reviewer: Maggie Bee Signed
Date: 04/30/10 Title: Chapter 8: Things That Happen When I Swallow Peanuts and Read Letters

I love you! (I thought I should get my declaration out of the way before I start the serious process of reviewing.
Thank you for the gift that is this chapter - and I'm sorry your year hasn't been so great.
On to the chapter! In fact, I read it last night, but I figured I needed a night to digest and give you a (semi-) coherent review.
I loved the insight in to Mr Mendota - who is by far one of my favourite characters ever. His determination to know Kata makes a lot more sense now, and I swear my heart broke at the end when he just... crumpled. Every chapter, I swear, just draws me in more - with those little things about Kata and her personality and why she is the way she is (the peanut thing is GENIUS by the way, and very her, if that makes any sense) and the people who do care about her even when she can't see it.
I love Jeremy - the whole "swearing to be cool" thing at that age is so real, and I'm pretty impressed that you put it in. Well, I'll be honest, I'm impressed with the whole thing, but I really do love Jeremy. I like the idea that Kata does have friends (unlike Harry, because of the whole Dudley thang), or at least friend, who'l come to see her in the rain and bring her potato-noodle casserole and tell her she's full of bullshit when she needs them to. She needs a Jeremy, definitely.
I'm almost sad that Kata wasn't in the Winter Exhibition -just because she would have been amazing (at raising and closing the curtain? hmm...). But her sleeping through the day (and then getting up and charging off to turn up anyway) is, obviously, so much better. "Invincibility was drawn around me like a winter coat" - that pretty much sums her up, hmm? A little deluded, but brave as hell.
And the change in Harry's handwriting affecting her that badly was just so... sweet, I suppose. I love how close they are (not in a "tell each other everything" way, but in a "we have no one else, and I'm going to be a part of your life, dammit" way) and how much she misses him, but is jealous of him too (because, she's not exactly a saint is she? Who wouldn't be jealous?).
So thank you for this chapter, and for ALREADY HAVING STARTED THE NEXT! (Thanks. Seriously)
And I'm glad I could, um, help spur you on? Well, if you ever need positive reinforcement that this story is amazing (as is your writing) and that people love it, I'm your man. Or girl. Whatever.
Maggie.
(By the way, sorry about how long these reviews are. I just get all “rambly” when it comes to this. I’ll work on it.)

Author's Response: I did it! Gah. After six months, I finally got the chapter up. So, thanks for being my first reviwer, and basically dissecting my chapter to complement me on EVERYTHING. It's a great thing though, totally great. Every writer needs it. Your descripton of Kata and Harry is VERY accurate. They don't do the whole heart-to-heart brother and sister thing, but I would say they're closer than most siblings. Obviously, he's very protective, and as a result underestimates her-- which, of course, annoys her to no end. She's also extremely jealous of him now, understandably. But he's probably more of a best friend than either Jilly or Jeremy. Speakin' of OCs.... Mr. Mendota! God, I love this guy. He's fun to write, and I'm glad you like him so much. I didn't mean to make him so tragic, but I worry that people will question his relationahip with Kata if I don't give him a back story. Lastly, I just have to say that you're right: Kata's curtain skills WOULD have made an amazing addition to the Winter Exhibiton. She can't ast, she can't sing, but she can close a curtain like no other. :) So... yeah. You're amazing for reviewing me, thanks so much! Expect a chapter in a few weeks, and I mean it this time! Hahaha... you'll finally get to see what happened in Kata's summer. Yu know how she is normally? Imagine that in Diagon Alley. I suddenly feel evil.... ~*Eva*~

 
Reviewer: Maggie Bee Signed
Date: 04/15/10 Title: Chapter 7: More Complicated Feelings I SERIOUSLY Could Have Done Without

Well, hello again! So I have become an official story-stalker - there has been so much re-reading of these chapters done, so much begging (in my head of course) that one day I would switch on my computer and find another chapter that I have declared myself officialy insane. Grr. GRRR, I say.
So, finally I gave up - I got myself an account on mugglenet SOLELY FOR THE PURPOSE OF REVIEWING YOUR STORY! If that doesn't inspire you to update (or think I'm a lunatic) then I am lost.
Anyway - on to your story, in all its wonderful, crazy, quirky magnificence. I still love Kata, in fact I love all your characters, even ones that have been in it for a grand total of five seconds, because they all seem so alive, so right in their ridiculousness.
You're funny too - very. (I'm sure everyone loves to be complimented, so I'm just going to heap praises on you - hopefully some of it will work) I love Kata's voice, and Mr Mendota (and his artsy wife named Cinnamon) and Kata's discovery that skipping isn't all it's cracked up to be - in fact I can see her finding out a LOT of things aren't all they're cracked up to be, if this ever continues (hint. hint - sorry I'll stop with the "update!" thing. I'll try for a more subtle way. Maybe I could write "etadpu" in unexpected places? Brainwash you somehow? It would probably be less annoying than my straight forward complaining, huh?)
And now I have to go (because it's quarter past midnight and that's way too late to be worrying about anything fanfiction related) but be sure that I will be by to harangue you with reviews as soon as I can.
Bye - and thanks, for making it all the way through this (probably boring and faintly unpleasant) review, and for writing the genius that is Kata - a Harry's sister who is neither a twin nor a brainless twit! Huzzah!
Your ever faithful minion
Maggie

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