Lily Evans is not the sort of girl who would normally be found writing in a diary. Yet, when she starts, she finds that the easiest way to overcome all the obstacles in life is to let her emotions out onto paper.
I really liked this first chapter! It introduced Lily perfectly, telling us everything we needed to know without rambling on. I think you've portrayed her very realistically and it would make J.K. Rowling proud. I'll definitely be reading the rest of the story and can't wait to see what Lily writes about. Well done on writing such a good first chapter, this story definitely has potential! :D
~The Maraudette :P