teeheehee...this is really good! Hope you write more equally amusing stuff! :p
Author's Response: I\'m working on writing more but I don\'t know if I\'ll have any more comedies for a while. The other ones seem to be going off in other directions. Glad you liked this one! Thanks much- Daisy
This poem is wonderfully written; really powerful and emotional. It brings across its message well. *sniff* Well done :)
Wow! A really original idea, and you've told the story really well! *awws for Harry and Ginny* I love the fluff most of all!
It's strange that it took Dave so long to catch on about Molly being Ginny..the clues were rather obvious :p Though then again, he was in shock...
A great story!
Author's Response: Yeah, the clues were really obvious, but if I was in that position, I don\'t think I\'d believe it either. I\'d be absolutely certain that it was all a prank of some sort, so I had to make him a little slow to believe. Anyway, thank you for the kind review. I love fluff too, by the way!
Wow! Great first chapter! I love where this is going, and it was a really great idea to bring in Luna's mum too...keep going and update soon!
*squees* *huggles* *sprays HURRAH mist* :D
I really like the little details that you've added to this, especially the ending. I felt that Peter's character was a lot more realistic, and the whole situation even more 'anger-filled' and 'fiery' (pun unintended lol) than before.
Keep up the good work!!! :D
*comes in and apologises to everyone as she takes so long to beta*
*keeps fingers and toes crossed*
Woo Hurrah for Pondering!! Great chapter...
Can't wait to beta more :p
Your crazy beta Suzie xox
Author's Response: Thanks for your help. :)
*fingers crossed* please please please...
Author's Response: *crosses her fingers and chants in time*
...and so do I... *ponders to Pondering about her beta skills*
Yay it's up! I love the second part of this chapter, the mysterious imagery is really good! *looks forward to next chapter...*
Author's Response: Glad you liked the second part. :) I love writing about the veil, it\'s easier to write, than say, battle scenes, hehe.
Awww this is such a cute fic. I only really understod it right at the end, but it was so beautiful all the way through. I loved the descirption you but in, it created a really soft and calming atmosphere. And the best parts were th 'for what its worth...' *sniff*
Wow... congratulations on being nominated for QSQs...and I think you really deserve it!
The story so far is incredibly chilling and draws the reader in more and more with every development.
I like the way that you have moved the plot along, as well as slowly allowing the reader to find out more about what has happened to the Trio etc.
A couple of nitpicks... about 3/4 way through: “What the hell are doing, Potter?”
I think "you" should be between the 'are' and 'doing'.
Another thing, be careful about Americanisms in the text, especially spelling. British spellings should be things like "colour" instead of color. You can set the dictionary to British Spelling if you are typing using Word.
Update soon, this is looking really good! :D
And sadly, I do not ship Voldemort/Harry.
*disappointed pout* Oh.....lol
I loved this fic! Very original and very funny, especially the bits about Voldemort's birthday presents! A great humor fic.
Author's Response: Thank you! I think my muse was drunk when she came up with this one!
Omigosh! I LOVED 'Message in a bottle'...and hadn't realised that there was a prequel at all! *feels stupid*
Tis is a great 'starting' chapter. I like the way that Petunia is portrayed, she still seems moderately nice in this, though you've foreshadowed the growing distance between her and Lily very well. I also like Malfoy's character a lot; exactly an older Draco!
And *confuzzled slightly* I've seen this in a lot of fics, is Remus' father ACTUALLY a healer in canon do we know?
Author's Response: I\'m glad that you found my sequel :). I had totally forgotten that I had said that Mr. Lupin was a healer, and actually contradicted myself later on, so I have changed him to just plain \'Mr.\' And anyway, the great thing about fanfic is that if Rowling doesn\'t tell us what profession a person has, we can make it up! So the Lupins and the Potters and anyone else we want to add can be whoever we want them to.... to some extent.
I am LOVING Sirius! The way that he is written is great!!!
I'm not sure about James, he's made out to be a bit 'Slytherin'ish isn't he? I wonder why that is... *goes to read more*
Author's Response: I\'m glad you like Sirius! I like to think of him as a very playful guy so that\'s the point I want to get across. ....As to James. I am basing this story a little bit off of Pride and Prejudice. So if you know that story it will help out a bit. James is a snooty brat at the beginning and he thinks that just because he is a Potter he should get special treatment. He does not however look down on muggleblood. I wanted to convey a distinct difference between James\' view and those of a Slytherin, which is why I added Peter\'s comments (not that he is a Slytherin, but his questions showed what James meant.) Anyway, if you\'ve seen/read Pride and Prejudice you should know that everyone hates Darcy at the beginning because he is being a total snob.... but if you aren\'t madly in love with him by the end there is something seriously wrong with you :)
Great end to the chapter! :) And I really like Alice, I wonder which house you're going to put her in!
Am curious about Mcgonagall too, how come James knows her?
Author's Response: As to Alice, I suppose you have that figured out already. The whole McGonagall thing is nothing really special. She just visited James\' parents at the manor so she has met James and Sirius on several occasions.
Well done in being nominated for QSQs! :)
I really like the way that the two parts of this poe interact. It's almost like reading a double poem. The underlying situation passes gradually and yet is noticeable. The last lines in particular are really effective.
This is an interesting way of portraying Snape, and I really enjoyed reading it. :)
Author's Response: Thank you very much! I am quite anxious for the winners to be announced in the coming weeks. I am so glad you enjoyed reading this. My favorite part was coming up with the underlying emotions. Choosing the right words to go along with the actions in the stanzas was difficult at times. Thanks for taking the time to review! I appreciate it!
That was amazing. I love the twist that you've put into the conventional Godric's Hollow scene, and it's worked so well. :)
This is an extremely well written one-shot, and I really like your characterisation of Sara! It's good to see things from her point of view now, as after reading Amortentia, I wasn't quite sure what to make of her!
The way you have begun and ended the story by describing Sara's association to the streets, works really well; it seems almost poetic the way that she is born there, and at the very end, returns.
I also like the way that you have written about Tom's emotions in this. The part where he expresses that night time is the only time that he can truly behave the way he wants, works very well and his anguish is extremely realistic!
Love your writing style, and this is an extremely powerful story. Well done!
Author's Response: Thanks. I\'ve often been critisized on my writing style much before, and I\'m glad you liked it. I also enjoy this fic as I think it\'s one of my best. Thanks for the review!
Wow! That was such an unusual but intriguing story! I only felt that I understood the concept of the Thestral right at the end, but I like the idea that Thestrals are derived somewhat from mythological creature such as the Pegasi. It gives them a more solid background, and in a way I feel as if I can understand their nature better.
I love the description and imagery in this story. It’s fantastic and extremely vivid – you’ve done a great job in setting the scene and also in picturing the horses.
We assumed that she found her end under the white foam on the breaking waves around our island.
This was such an intense line. I could really see in my mind the image of the waves lapping the shore, perhaps with shadows in the water.
Characterisation in this story was fab. Did you have a particular person in mind for Thais’ father? The first person perspective made events seem so realistic; it allowed us to see so many insights into Thais’ life, and that of her father.
I knew why Alkaios detested father, but I could only guess why father was able to keep him here. He had to know something about Alkaios’ past or some other secret this kind man was too ashamed of to tell me
This tells us straight away what sort of person the father is – he seems very nasty and manipulative, and from the references to drunkenness, I can see that he probably has quite a volatile temper too. I like the way that you add in repeated references to her father’s character, which builds up to give a powerful ending.
Apollo’s entry was a bit sudden but well timed. I’m slightly surprised that Thais didn’t question him or respond in any way. Was there no time perhaps?
“Photios is my creation and he must stay in this form to remind everyone what cruelty can cause. You, you’ll be free at last.” I wonder what he means by that last part. Does he mean that Thais is free from her father’s ‘tyranny’ over her/the household?
I love the ending of this story. They have white eyes and their skeletal bodies are as black as the night, a memory of the fateful night when Photios became the monster he is now. Though Thestrals, as we know in canon, are not really ‘bad’ creatures as such, I can understand why Thais calls him a ‘monster’. See Photios and the other Thestrals must indeed remind her of what ‘cruelty can cause’, and take her back to the time that Photios became this way. This part was just – wow.
Great story, *loves*