Summary: Harry Potter plunges headlong into a Pensieve and discovers the shocking reason exactly why Albus Dumbledore trusted Severus Snape
Really good chapter! And an interesting bit by Hermione at the end. I too, think that there is a lot more to the 'why Dumbledore trusts Snape' theory than it seems and this appears to be a really well thought out theory....and quite probably too..hmm lol Off to read the next chappy!
Author's Response: Thank you for keeping up with me!
This is my absolute \"pet theory\", and I believe I can back this up with canon from all six books *and* interviews with Jo. :P If you\'re interested in hearing the debate, hit me over on my LJ. :)
Is this finished? I hope not...*hopes to see some kind of Harry/Snape reconciliation* Though I think I'm hoping too much there!
Some really good ideas here though, I like the way Harry is getting facts from the portrait, though knowing DD he'd probably speak in riddles more and get Harry to think for himself!
Hope you keep writing anyway! :)
Author's Response: I just uploaded chapters 3 and 4, which are a combined chapter on MNFF due to length requirements. But after the end of chpater 4, this particular story is over. ;)
However, never fear, I am actually writing a MUCH longer WIP which has most of the original scene (Snape at GH) from Snape\'s POV. Although it is nearly indistinguishable. I\'m a dork. :P \"Trust\" is basically an AU of a chapter of my own fic, how\'s that?! haha
You have a very strong point about Dumbledore, however, he was fairly straightforward in HBP. I think he gave up on Harry thinking for himself, since Harry seems to do so little of that sometimes. *sigh*
Thanks so much for reading and reviewing!
*has a rather strange story*
I came across this whilst browsing the Slyth master ficlist, and thought I'd read it... got to the end of chapter 1 and experienced the weirdest sense of deja vu. Went to the reviews for C1 and C2 to find 2 reviews by myself from yonks ago..lol
Just as before, I really like this story, and this theory; especially that little memory about "Pier".
I don't think I'd read the last chapter(s) but I think C4 is probably my favourite out of the lot. I really like the way that you've sort of brought Snape and Harry together; and yet at the same time emphasised their differences. I also like the little bits of dry humour here and there, they seemed both appropriate and funny!
Does this have a sequel?
Author's Response: Heh. I\'m glad you liked the story. I liked the \"Pier\" thing, too - and Snape totally didn\'t catch it. :P There\'s not a sequel, per se, but this snippet will be told from Snape\'s POV in my Epic WIP O\' Doom (tm). This is actually an AU offshoot of my own WIP (how much of a dork am *I*?) because in the \"regular\" story, they don\'t actually meet up.
Summary: Sometimes letting go can take all of what a person has...and then some.
ouch...:( You've created powerful image here, and in a way I'm kind of glad that they didn't end up together. I love the idea of Tonks + Remus scratched into the wood as well...A really well written one-shot. I'll check out the song too!
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*waves sheepishly at Chloe* I’m so sorry! I should have reviewed this *ages* ago! *hides*
This first chapter was fantastic; I love your characterisation of Draco – you’ve portrayed his views about Dumbledore and confusion of events that have happened, really clearly and well.
The fool had sweetened up his words, confusing him. He would have done it. He just needed more time.
I like his tone here, as if he’s trying to convince himself that he WOULD have done it, though I think deep down even Draco probably realises that he wouldn’t have. I think that this part is extremely IC and ties in so well with the bit we know in HBP where Draco is convincing himself (on the tower) that he has Dumbledore at his mercy and is a ‘killer’.
The face of Bellatrix Lestrange stared back at Draco, eyes clouded over with death. This line is so deadly – it’s almost as if Bellatrix herself represents death; which in a way, I suppose she does! The context that its positioned really gives eeriness to the scene. Well done.
I loved the way that Draco thought “Bloody Hell” on being nearly-avadaed. It made me laugh and it sounds like the cynical sort of thing that he’d say.
I must be the luckiest person alive, thought Draco. He hit a butterfly with that curse and not me. Play dead, play dead, play dead.
This idea was simply – wow – amazing. Using something as tiny as a butterfly as the example emphasises just how lucky Draco is. I like how Draco at first tries to move/get up, but then realises what has happened. The repetition of ‘play’ dead, I felt, was very effective. It almost sounded like a mantra that Draco was whispering in his head to calm himself down, breathe slowly, lie still, play dead etc.
Anyway, fantastic first chapter!
Ooh this was quite a surprising chapter to read – very different from the last one, but I suppose it keeps the suspense going about Draco. I love the flashbacks here, they’re all very relevant (as insights into how events link into the story), very realistic and very vivid.
The descriptions of Harry are rather shocking, but no less than how we’d expect Harry to react really. After a while Harry got so worried he started to avoid life. He stayed up well into the night working on the tiniest of leads, barely ate, and adopted a melancholy, far away disposition.
This part about Harry avoiding ‘life’ sums it all up really. It sounds like Harry is doing absolutely everything that he possibly can to win the war, but in doing so he is losing touch a bit with reality. The part after this, comparing Harry to a ghost, was chilling.
Did you hear me? Harry gave up Quidditch,” said Ron, enunciating every syllable
Your ‘comparisons’, like the one about the butterfly in chapter 1, are wonderful. This line really brought home exactly how much Harry had changed. Even at Hogwarts he always made time for Quidditch. Quidditch was his passion and something that kept him sane. Giving up Quidditch really allows us to see how desperate Harry is. Wow.
That said, I also like the way that some things haven’t changed (or don’t seem to have changed…) For example, Luna seems just as ‘random’ as she was before, which is a good thing! It’s nice to keep some lightheartedness here as well – I wonder where Luna is taking Hermione…hmm.
“He won’t die. Not before he sees the truth.”
Wow. That line – wow. I’m not sure if it’s hopeful or not, but it says a lot. It’s not ensuring that Harry won’t die or anything, so Hermione isn’t ensuing any false hope, but she’s ensuring that Ginny will have another chance with Harry. And I hope that she’s right.
This fic is fantastic so far, very intriguing and I’m really looking forward to reading more. *hopes that the writer’s block will go away soon*
Summary: Professor Granger deals with a pair of students who have inherited a knack for trouble...
teeheehee...this is really good! Hope you write more equally amusing stuff! :p
Author's Response: I\'m working on writing more but I don\'t know if I\'ll have any more comedies for a while. The other ones seem to be going off in other directions. Glad you liked this one! Thanks much- Daisy
Summary: Sighing, Padma put down her quill. She stared down at the last stanza. There was no one to read it, but the truth had been told.
And now she could be laid to rest.
This poem is wonderfully written; really powerful and emotional. It brings across its message well. *sniff* Well done :)
Summary: This was written for Rob Matthews of Hufflepuff House for the Covert Cupid Valentine's Day Fic Exchange. Hagrid has a very special Birthday present for Madame Maxime.
Wow, Amanda! I don’t think I’ve ever read a Hagrid/Maxime story before but this one really works. I like the characterisation of them both, and I think that you’ve written the dialect of both characters in a very realistic way.
One of my favourite things about this story is the way that it does not focus simply on one event – Madam Maxime’s birthday, but also mentions other things/events that are happening. The context of the story is kept correct and consistent; I like the way that their size is constantly being referred to, such as with Hagrid squeezing out of the fireplace, the table set out for what seems to be six people, and of course, the table breaking at the end!
It didn’t matter that it was July and that it was downright cold outside.
I like the way that this paragraph contrasts to the rest of the story. It’s effective in that it reminds us of the setting, and that the war is still not over. By Hagrid stating that he knows this, and wants to forget it for a day, it makes the whole situation much sweeter and shows how hard he has tried for her birthday, and how caring he is.
“I wrote yeh an acoustic poem, to tell yeh what I think of yeh.”
I thought that this line was really nice! The idea of the ‘acoustic’ poem is very sweet and just like Hagrid to get them mixed up. The poem itself is lovely, the rhyme is simple and perfect for something that Hagrid would say. However my one criticism about this section is that for me, Hagrid didn’t seem as anxious as I would have expected. There is a degree of hope that Olympe would like the poem, but we don’t really see this reciprocated in his actions – I didn’t feel that he was nervous or embarrassed enough about the poem. Just a thought. :)
Several hours later, a very dishevelled Hagrid stood in the doorway of the small parlour, blushing furiously as he tried to explain to Tom exactly how the table had broken.
I love this ending; it’s clever, it’s class, it’s simply awesome. I really like the humour in this and the way that it makes the ending very tasteful.
Fantastic story! The characterisation and atmosphere is great and you’ve done a good job with the difficult speech styles and tones. :)
Summary: Dave Jensen thought Harry Potter was just a fun story - that is, until he found out that his best friend was a witch. Join Dave as he learns her true identity and helps her to stop running from her past.
This is a semi-fluffy, and really quite silly (hey, that rhymed!) one-shot.
Wow! A really original idea, and you've told the story really well! *awws for Harry and Ginny* I love the fluff most of all!
It's strange that it took Dave so long to catch on about Molly being Ginny..the clues were rather obvious :p Though then again, he was in shock...
A great story!
Author's Response: Yeah, the clues were really obvious, but if I was in that position, I don\'t think I\'d believe it either. I\'d be absolutely certain that it was all a prank of some sort, so I had to make him a little slow to believe. Anyway, thank you for the kind review. I love fluff too, by the way!
Summary: When Sirius passes through the veil, he ends up in the Realm of Dreams. He manages to wake up. But when he wakes up, it’s the 30th of October 1981. The past fourteen years have never happened. He has a chance. Will it all be for naught?
Note: The word count for the story is incorrect, it should read around 21096 words. I arrived at this amount by adding the word count for the individual chapters together.
Wow! Great first chapter! I love where this is going, and it was a really great idea to bring in Luna's mum too...keep going and update soon!
*squees* *huggles* *sprays HURRAH mist* :D
I really like the little details that you've added to this, especially the ending. I felt that Peter's character was a lot more realistic, and the whole situation even more 'anger-filled' and 'fiery' (pun unintended lol) than before.
Keep up the good work!!! :D
*comes in and apologises to everyone as she takes so long to beta*
*keeps fingers and toes crossed*
Woo Hurrah for Pondering!! Great chapter...
Can't wait to beta more :p
Your crazy beta Suzie xox
Author's Response: Thanks for your help. :)
*fingers crossed* please please please...
Author's Response: *crosses her fingers and chants in time*
...and so do I... *ponders to Pondering about her beta skills*
Yay it's up! I love the second part of this chapter, the mysterious imagery is really good! *looks forward to next chapter...*
Author's Response: Glad you liked the second part. :) I love writing about the veil, it\'s easier to write, than say, battle scenes, hehe.
Summary: Three meetings, two people, one place. The girl and the boy, together and apart. Nothing lasts forever, but at least she remembers when it felt like eternity, when the days were soft, the nights of dark and their love, forever [Lily/James AU]
Nominee for Best Alternate Universe in the Quicksilver Quills!
Awww this is such a cute fic. I only really understod it right at the end, but it was so beautiful all the way through. I loved the descirption you but in, it created a really soft and calming atmosphere. And the best parts were th 'for what its worth...' *sniff*
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Wow... congratulations on being nominated for QSQs...and I think you really deserve it!
The story so far is incredibly chilling and draws the reader in more and more with every development.
I like the way that you have moved the plot along, as well as slowly allowing the reader to find out more about what has happened to the Trio etc.
A couple of nitpicks... about 3/4 way through: “What the hell are doing, Potter?”
I think "you" should be between the 'are' and 'doing'.
Another thing, be careful about Americanisms in the text, especially spelling. British spellings should be things like "colour" instead of color. You can set the dictionary to British Spelling if you are typing using Word.
Update soon, this is looking really good! :D
Summary: It's Voldemort's birthday and Harry and Hermione have been invited to his birthday party. As the festivities commence, Voldemort makes a new friend. But things aren't always as they seem, for someone else has a plan that could make this Voldemort's worst birthday ever.
And sadly, I do not ship Voldemort/Harry.
*disappointed pout* Oh.....lol
I loved this fic! Very original and very funny, especially the bits about Voldemort's birthday presents! A great humor fic.
Author's Response: Thank you! I think my muse was drunk when she came up with this one!