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Scenes from Shell Cottage by WeasleyMom
Rated: 3rd-5th Years [Reviews - 128]

Summary: This fic is a series of missing moments from the time H/R&H were at Shell Cottage, beginning immediately after they Disapparated from Malfoy Manor. JKR shows us what was going on with Harry, but this is my version of what could have happened with Ron and Hermione after one of the most emotional/disturbing events in the entire series.

UPDATED June 2010 When I first wrote this fic, I didn't know what a beta reader was, and frankly, it showed. Thanks so much to Natalie for helping me polish this up and make it more readable. Thanks also to both Julia and Carole, whose helpful comments in the review section allowed me to make some much-needed corrections during the rewrite. I would love to know what you think ~ reviews are very much appreciated!

This was nominated in the 2010 Quicksilver Quill Awards for Best Canon Romance.

Categories: Ron/Hermione Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 17189 Chapters: 7 Completed: Yes
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09/03/09 Updated: 11/23/09


Reviewer: AllyLovesHP Signed
Date: 12/08/09 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Needless to say, I created an account just so I could leave a review for this story. I've read a lot of fan fiction, and I have to say that this story is up there with the ones I enjoyed the most. Speaking as someone who has taken creative writing courses, I have to say you have wonderful prose! What I liked is that this is a fiction that doesn't just tell a new spin on a favourite story, but also does so very poetically. You are very talented. I thought you stayed very consistent with the characters, which is important with fan fiction. I also loved the line about Hermione not seeing Harry because he always stood next to Ron. My fave part, however was the way in which Ron first told Hermione how he felt. "I should have asked you to the Yule Ball." Such a typical Ron thing to say, a way to avoid what he has to say until he can find a way to say the words, and it was also so definitive of their relationship over the years, all starting with that one incident. It was perfectly fitting of Ron and Hermione! I loved the entire story of course...it made me want to re-read Deathly Hallows again! I hope you continue to write.

-AllyLovesHP

Author's Response: Thank you so much for taking the time to register and leave this review. You really made my day. I think it is so cool that you liked the Yule Ball line. No one has really mentioned that, but it was really the first line I had for those last three chapters (originally this fic was only going to lead up to the point where Ron went out to help Harry dig), and the reason I started thinking about what it might be like if they had gotten together at Shell Cottage... who would have initiated it and what might have been said. And that line just kept coming back to me. I'm so glad you enjoyed the story, and I will certainly keep writing. Definitely reread Deathly Hallows... it is my favorite! Thanks again!

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