Hi there! Since you found my profile, let me tell you three things:
One, I don't come onto Mugglenet that often.
Two, I only read fanfiction stories because I'm too wrapped up in my own world to write any.
Three, I've got an original (?) story in the works, which is why I'm not writing any fanfiction. Hopefully this story will become a series (or several series!). But, uh, I haven't been too dedicated to the one I'm writing now...I just come up with plot ideas and other stuff for the other stories in the series...stories for the future...
Well, well, well. I never would have expected it to be Teddy, Fred and Victoire in this story! I really expected it to be Draco and someone else in this story, but NO! It's Fred and Teddy.
That was quite of a shock. I was practically exclaiming in surprise when I found out Teddy was in this story, then I (quite literally) screamed, "WHAT?" when Fred's name came up. Um, apart from that, it was surprisingly good; the story, I mean. The title of this story really matches the content in this story.
Well done (for writing a pretty good story and having the ability to make me scream my head off in surprise).
This is seriously the most brilliant femmslash story I have ever read-no joke. The characterisations were absolutely brilliant and everyone was believable. I tend to avoid most femmslash fics in this fandom because they're all such random pairings that I'm like, "is that really possible? Canonically?"
The symbolism in this story-wow. I've really gotten into symbolism recently and I found, that after reading this time and time again, that there is so much significant symbols in the story: from Dom wanting a change (her hairstyle and her relationship with Lakshmi, plus the bravery of wanting that change and going, "yeah, maybe there's a chance"), to being cut (by Lakshmi saying that she would have replied to Clearwater's letter, and having her hair cut) to the final part of the story where she's "cutting the truth out", per say, by destroying her room and lying to Victoire about why she did so. That bravery has been cut down because of what happened at Diagon Alley. Is she wondering whether, if she hadn't gone to get her hair cut, would she have had her heart broken (cut)? And Victoire's final line about how it's just hair and it'll grow back (!). The symbolism behind it. Poor Dom's probably wishing that her feelings were that easy to deal with. Sad, but a BRILLIANT story! I am now officially jealous.
Author's Response: Heyy! This is an awesome review. :D I'm thrilled to hear you liked it more than the others (and I think there're a lot of good stuff out there ;) ). Yes, I got a bit carried away with the symbolism in this fic. And poor Dom will soon get another girl, I promise! <33
Oh that was great. That was a really good story. I'm surprised that it was Hugo instead of Rose with Scorpius like I expected. Of course, you never mentioned Scorpius's name, but who else would have blond hair and be a Malfoy in the next generation? Very well written out-I commend you.
Author's Response: Who else? :) Thank you for your review. I am happy you liked it. It was a bit tricky to write.
They cannot keep doing this; it is only a matter of whose resolve will break first. They may have grown distant, their friendship may never mend, but something else has begun. Similarly to the sultry dance so reminiscent of their stolen kisses, drifting apart is only the beginning.
Disclaimer: I am not JK Rowling and I definitely don't own her world.
Winner for 2011 QSQ - Best Same Sex Pairing, along with Equinox Chick's Monochrome, one of the most beautiful stories on this site. Thank you immensely for nominating/voting!
Huge, huge thank you to Natalie/hestiajones for beta-ing this.
Wow! This is truly amazing. I just found this after a long stint away from MuggleNet and I have to say that this is wonderful! There were several things I noticed that I particularly enjoyed (please be patient while I run through all of them):
The first paragraph and the last. The first one felt as though it was the story told in only a few words, the story of which is explained in the rest of the story. The last paragraph is great as it sort-of resolves. I always did like the sort-of resolutions, because they are so realistic and not 'Mary Sue' as I've liked to dub them. Don't get me wrong, I love happy endings (way) more than the next person, but the sort-of solved endings are the most realistic and will therefore always have a special place in my heart. Well done for excellent execution.
The sexual tension throughout the story is another wonderful part of the story. I could just feel the tension building and building and building and it was a great feeling. It made me really connect with the characters and think about what it would be like if I were in their shoes. The sexual tension was even better than it normally is because it doesn't culminate in sex and confession and yadda yadda yadda. Instead it becomes resolved, but not resolved enough: they just keep on at that tango of theirs. Fantastic.
The tango metaphor. Yes, it really does take two to tango and you have seriously proven it here. The appearance of the 'tango' is enough so that it really becomes engrained into our minds but not so much that it dominates the story. I also love how you ended the story with the quick (their first kiss), quick (their second kiss), slow (their third kiss) of their 'tango'.
The Parvati and Lavender that you have depicted here are incredibly realistic and believable, including their thoughts on the relationship that is slowly but surely on the collision force and how they both thought they'd end up straight and with a husband and kids. The alternating views remove the exclaimations of, "What about the other person's POV?" Their stories of what they thought about what has happened are surprisingly similar, yet so different. I really treasure that.
So pretty much, all I wanted to say was that this was a stunning story, keep writing and that you totally deserved that win for the QuickSilver Quills!
Author's Response: Okay, here is where I try to think of a semi-adequate response for such a lovely, heart-warming review. Thank you so much for taking the time to tell me what you thought of the story; it means a lot to me.
I'm glad you liked the sort-of resolved ending…they're my favorite way to end a story, because having everything happy and neat and tidy is so right that it feels wrong. And then the chemistry between Lavender and Parvati…this was my first slash fic and I was so worried I wouldn't get it 'right,' so it makes me very happy to hear that you thought it worked! The tango metaphor was part of a prompt from the drabble challenge this originated from, and I rather liked the idea of a relationship being like a dance.
I can't thank you enough for leaving this gorgeous review :). It made me smile. xx Ariana