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The Logic Problem by Vorona

Rated: 1st-2nd Years • 6 Reviews
Summary: Summary: In a detention with Professor Snape during her sixth year, Hermione learns an important lesson about the use of logic against Dark wizards. But will Snape learn something even more important from her? Half-Blood Prince compliant.
Reviewer: CoolCatElly Signed
Date: 11/22/10 Title: Chapter 1: (one shot)

Hi there Spew Buddy!!

Well, I have to say you have an amazing insight into Snape’s character, and you write him perfectly, something not many fanfiction authors can do. Saying that, Hermione was also amazingly characterised. I think one of the aspects I loved most of this story was how effortless and natural the dialogue between them sounded.
You start building tension and creating atmosphere straight from the start. Hermione’s tentative approach; the gloom and fumes in the room; that heavy moment when “he simply stared at her”. It was lovely to read, and set up the tension very well indeed.

The way Snape was trying to help Hermione fight the war while at the same time staying snide and mean was great. I love how in the same speech he can insult her and take points from Gryffindor and also want to help her in the coming battle. His only redeeming quality in this series is the fact that because of his love for Lily, he will do whatever it takes to save Harry and help him win. And so, bringing Hermione into it is perfect since she is part of the trio.

I was very curious to see the riddle. Of course, I didn’t have any of the background as to what you based this fic on, but it was intriguing nonetheless. Ah, it was an old trick. Like that riddle about “A plane crashes on the border of x and y country. Where are the survivors buried?” Of course, the survivors aren’t buried anywhere. I can completely see Hermione not thinking about wizards not having letterboxes. Snape’s evaluation of Hermione’s mind is so very true – we can see clearly in Deathly Hallows that he mind is very closed to certain concepts.

Oh wow, what a twist with Hermione revealing the secret of the HBP book! I didn’t see that coming at all. And Snape then telling Hermione she had to stop Harry from using the book. It was so in character, yet another example of Snape looking out for Harry without Harry being aware of it.

Well, what a lovely little one-shot that was. I really enjoyed reading it! It could have easily happened in canon, and that’s the biggest compliment I can give.


Much love

Your Spew Buddy

Author's Response: Oh, I'm so glad you liked it. I spent a lot of time on it, but some parts -- like Snape's dialogue -- came very easily to me. I am glad you think both Hermione and Snape are in character. Thank you once again for the wonderful review. It made me very happy!

The Beast Within by La_Rubinita

Rated: Professors • 405 Reviews
Summary: Werewolves. Vampires. Spies. Secret societies. Love. Magic. Animagi. Prophecies. Ancient goddesses. Sacrifice. More than just the Wizarding world hangs in the balance. Will two unlikely partners have what it takes? D/Hr AU after HBP.
Reviewer: IzzyMisha Signed
Date: 12/27/09 Title: Chapter 1: The Hunt

Wow!! I'm impressed!! This fic was recommended to me by the author of And aversion to change and the resilient, and I have to say I agree, it looks really compelling. Well written, good characterization, canon (always good) and its so long! yay!

Author's Response: Thanks!

Reviewer: IzzyMisha Signed
Date: 12/27/09 Title: Chapter 4: Letterbox

haha I loved the inner voices arguing! Brilliant

From Afar by Roxy Black

Rated: 1st-2nd Years • 19 Reviews
Summary: A collection of short poems written by the characters of the Potterverse.
Reviewer: IzzyMisha Signed
Date: 02/21/10 Title: Chapter 1: James' Poem

Oo, that gave me goosebumps. Lovely. This -->

Her wand made of willow - her robes, deepest black,
Her heart a possession of which I do lack.

Was my fave part. That was so sweet, almost bitter-sweet in a way. Jame's character really came through. Loved it


Reviewer: IzzyMisha Signed
Date: 02/21/10 Title: Chapter 2: Luna's Poem

oh wow, that's your best by far!I loved it! Its so sweet and innocent and so very...Luna!
I liked how it flowed in a sing-song way :-D
Its cute, I think I'll favourite this now so I can find it again.

When Worlds Collide by jenny b

Rated: 6th-7th Years • 256 Reviews Past Featured Story

Rose was a Weasley. She never gave Scorpius Malfoy a second glance. They were sworn enemies, even though they’d barely even spoken to each other. But sometimes all it takes for love to blossom is a Potions lesson, a few snide remarks and a dropped book.

Two people. Two entirely different worlds that are suddenly intertwined.

Reviewer: CoolCatElly Signed
Date: 09/10/10 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter One: The Book That Changed Everything

Well, for a ... 15 year old? This story is superbly well written. Very funny, and generally an entertaining read.

I have to say, I never really thought about the Potter and Weasley invasion in Hogwarts in next-gen. 11 of them!?! That's insane.

Your now-converted-to-next-gen fan

Reviewer: CoolCatElly Signed
Date: 09/10/10 Title: Chapter 2: Chapter Two: Of Quidditch And A Certain Slytherin

Another cute chapter :-D

It all seems very puppy-loveish at the moment, I wonder if that will change later on?

Your Still-reading-at-midnight fa

Reviewer: CoolCatElly Signed
Date: 09/10/10 Title: Chapter 3: Chapter Three: Hogsmeade Can Be More Interesting Than You’d Expect


That was cute! Nice and fluffy

Reviewer: CoolCatElly Signed
Date: 09/10/10 Title: Chapter 4: Chapter Four: You're Dating Who?

Love it!

Your yes-I-give-up-now-and-am-going-to-bed fan

"I Want To Go Home." by coolh5000

Rated: 1st-2nd Years • 33 Reviews Past Featured Story
Summary: “But I want to go home,” whispered the girl. “I don’t want to fight anymore”
DH p558

Not everyone who fought in the Battle of Hogwarts wanted to be there, and not everyone survived. This is the story of one of those people.
Reviewer: IzzyMisha Signed
Date: 03/27/10 Title: Chapter 1: "I Want To Go Home."

Wow Hannah I loved that! The sequences where she was running around were very well written - my eyes were straining from trying to read too quickly! You write angst very well, and I'll forgive you for the horribly sad ending because I loved it so much. I'll never look at that line in DH the same way.



What You Mean To Me by Roxy Black

Rated: 1st-2nd Years • 7 Reviews
Summary: A short, ambiguous poem. Take from it what you wish.
Reviewer: IzzyMisha Signed
Date: 02/21/10 Title: Chapter 1: What you mean...

Awww, I loved that. It had so much raw emotion. This was my favourite bit:

Tears pricking,
Mind racing,
Heart breaking.

I love it because I know that feeling...

Stunning, can't wait to read more of your work.


Reflection by Nitwit Blubber Oddment Tweak x

Rated: 3rd-5th Years • 66 Reviews
Summary: Nearly every witch and wizard in the magical community suffered in the aftermath of the Great Battle of Hogwarts, including Draco Malfoy. He’s no longer the cocky, arrogant, slick-haired Prince of Slytherin, but a haunted, vulnerable young man. Finally free of his father and the Dark Lord’s clutches, he revels in his new found independence. The wizarding society is broken and rebuilding, and Draco returns to Hogwarts to repeat his seventh year. Newly appointed as Head-Boy, it seems Draco has changed. But has he changed enough to accept Hermione Granger as Head-Girl?

Chapter Seven is up! Leave a review :D

Reviewer: IzzyMisha Signed
Date: 01/19/10 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

You know....I think I have read this fic before...after all there're very few Dramione's I havn't read. Anyways, I loved the start with the mirror! I always find Narcissa/Draco dialog a bit of hard to read to be honest, just because so many people portray their relationship so differently - not having much canon to base it on. What I thin you did really well was show how much Narcissa loves her son, something we do know from canon :-). I think this is great for a first Dramione, but your writing has matured a lot from this fic to "Oblivion." Just one super tiny little thing ->
"unfortunately succeeding to make me miserable." I would have changed to unfortunately succeeded in making me miserable. haha. Love you, love the fic, xoxoxoxox

Author's Response: Aww, thank you, Elene, darling! Yes, I agree - the Narcissa/Draco family relationship is a difficult one to get right, and I'm glad you think I did it well! Oh, God, yeah, I definitely think my writing's improved since starting this - though most of these chapters aren't Beta-ed LOL. Thanks for the review, my dear, and the advice :) xxx

Your Son by MerrryD

Rated: 1st-2nd Years • 12 Reviews

It wasn’t that he didn’t love Astoria – he did.

He just wasn’t sure he could love a child.

Draco Malfoy was never one for fathering. Little kids disgusted him; babies horrified him. And yet, Astoria is pregnant. As it comes down to the final hours, he is torn between his love for his wife and his contempt for a small blonde one. Is Draco a man of his head or his heart?

For Joanna.

Reviewer: CoolCatElly Signed
Date: 01/25/11 Title: Chapter 1: Your Son

Hi there Mere!

What a lovely story. I always enjoy reading birth and wedding scenes – they’re full of emotion and tension, whether good or bad. Draco is one of my favourite characters to write, and getting him right in fanfiction is really had to do. I think you did a fantastic job with his character, as well as just cooking up a really engaging scenario.

A great deal of the mood of the narrative came from your focus on descriptions, especially physical ones like describing body language. The focus on the senses, both visual and auditory really created a great deal of atmosphere and really pulled the reader into the scene. You chose to start off without a general background introduction, and let the scene speak for itself. Apart from instantly creating a bit of mystery (why exactly was Draco sitting on a chair when his wife was inside?), it created that anticipation that Draco himself was feeling, waiting and waiting. I think the emotions he was feeling came across very well through the reader seeing his fingers winding together etc. I loved the onomatopoeia of the clock ticking; I was almost holding my breath with each beat.

I just wanted to pick out this line: “Another infinite timeless, soundless space.” I was a little confused reading this. Did you mean, “Another infinite, timeless, soundless space”? I think it would sound better if you cut “infinite” out from there, because the phrasing is just a bit awkward, and infinite and timeless seem synonymous really.

The repetition of this in the “slaps” late on when Draco is pacing the waiting room was a very nice touch, and this time the pacing was much quicker, with his thoughts in turmoil. There’s a definite quickening in pace and increase in action through to the end of the piece, which kept it from becoming monotonous or dragging.

 I also love the language and the description you used throughout. The “bold, merciless black numbers” stood out for me especially, since I know that feeling of being in a tense situation where even ordinary things around you tend to take on a bit of your mood. In this case the black numbers took on a threatening character. I also love the way Draco is focusing on all these minor details, you usually wouldn’t think about. This just really shows that you don’t need to describe every though running through a character’s mind for the reader to understand them. Draco is distracted and agitated and confused, and this really came across.

I loved the term “IRMW” too; was very creative and I really enjoyed reading the whole scene of the arrival with all the Healers scuttling around. The birthing scene was also very well written. From the descriptions of Astoria’s appearance, Draco’s escalating emotions, and then to cool and collected Healers, you portrayed it all very well.

I also loved that bit where you described all the lists – of names, and colours and shops. That’s probably how I would respond to something like that, and I can imagine any guy, not just Draco, feeling very far out of their comfort zone.

Looking at the characters themselves:

I have to admit that I was a little taken aback by Draco’s first thoughts. After following him through several tense moments, the words “stupid baby” didn’t quite fit right to me personally. I thought that he was in the waiting room as a nervous father, worried about his wife and how the delivery was going. Hearing suck bland negativity was a bit shocking. However, later on when he went on to explain that he “wasn’t ready for that kind of permanence. That kind of dedication,” I understood it much better. I think that you painted a very good picture of Draco caught in a characteristic display of cowardice. He had been spoiled all his life, and then hopefully had some sense knocked into him after everything they went through in the battle, but the moment that things seem to be going well in his life he goes back to that self-centred attitude. Things were good as they were, they were safe and comfortable the way they were. A baby was going to ruin it all for him. I felt like slapping him at that point and telling him to just grow up and face life head-on. (Do you ever feel that way, like you want to smack a fictional character?)

Another thing which must have been going round and round his head was of course the fact that “A child could grow up and become a copy of himself.” This was a great point, and part of me wishes that this line of thought was explored a bit more in the story. He then goes back into the pit of self pity (so life isn’t fair, get a grip...) which was again very in character. I do feel that Astoria was responsible for the majority of the change we see at the end though. The Healer’s line of “his son” might have made him realise that he was missing a piece of himself coming into the world, but I wish somehow that there was a bit more reason behind the change. It would have been nice to see Draco take that thought of being scared of his son turning into a copy of himself and turn it around, think that he had the chance to be to his child what his own father wasn’t to him. To think about the opportunity, the “miracle” as Astoria said, that has happened to him. That being said, maybe that’s the real tragedy in this story. The fact that at the end of the day, the last thought which drives Draco to say “Yes” was that it was “for her”.

 His love for Astoria came through very clearly, and it broke my heart in the end when he thought that she should have been drawing his blood and not her own. Even though we didn’t see too much of her, I really enjoyed the way you characterized Astoria. I couldn’t help but think that she was much too good for Draco.

The Healer to me was interesting... I’m not sure she was needed really – she was a very rude and forward, I don’t think someone who’s in a professional career would go off on someone like that. After all, they must be used to extreme emotions when people are giving birth. I’m just assuming she was quite young and had a bit of a temper. I can’t help but feel like she was a bit of a “deux ex machina” character though – suddenly there just when Draco needed someone to tell him exactly what she told him. Would she even have time to stand there and lecture Draco when she’s supposed to be assisting the woman actually giving birth? What might have been a good idea is to have used Astoria’s mother, or even Narcissa. Have one of them rush in and find Draco just hanging around outside and give him a talking to. That would seem much more believable, and might also have a bigger impact than some random woman saying the same words. Speaking of - is there a reason none of the Malfoy or Greengrass family showed up for the baby’s birth? They could just Floo over instantly, couldn’t they?

Just a little thing I picked up one: watch your tenses. When Draco thought back to the earlier scene with Astoria in the back for the emergency vehicle, sometimes you left off a “had”, jumping a little from past to the past perfect tense.

Anyway, Thanks for a lovely story! You did a fab job with the characters and the whole concept, and the critique is just me being picky. The best thing about this story was that I felt really sucked into the scene, and I connected to Draco and could empathise with what he was feeling. Really well done on this!




Author's Response: Wow, what an incredible review! Thanks Elene! To be honest, the Healer was a bit of "deux es machina" character. But I actually do have this pretty vivid picture of her in my mind--someone young, maybe just out of school or Healer training with all these romantic ideals about life, who now that she's actually seeing a bit of life has had them all crashing down. She's tired and frustrated and Draco--a physical embodiment of some of her crushed ideals--just happened to be there. Hmm. I may have just formed a plot bunny . . . As for a reason why their parents weren't there, well, um, I forgot about them? Gah, thank you again for this lovely review! (and, yes, I feel like slapping fictional characters a lot) <3Mere

Lavender, blue - A Gryffindor true by Equinox Chick

Rated: Professors • 113 Reviews Past Featured Story
Summary: When Lavender Brown returns to Hogwarts for her seventh year, she knows things will be hard. Professor Dumbledore’s death has scared everybody, and with her Muggle-born mother in hiding, she makes a promise to her father to stay safe.

But to stay safe she must ignore her instincts and turn her back on her friends.

This is a Lavender Brown/Blaise Zabini story, but also concerns that last year at Hogwarts when the Trio were a'hunting Horcruxes.

Thank you to Laura (bookofsecrets) and Terri (mudbloodproud) for beta'ing the first chapter, Alyssa (Harry4lif) for the second and Emma (Amortentia x) for taking over the reins. And Natalie for the last chapter.

Disclaimer: I am not JK Rowling. I doubt that surprises anyone.

This story won the 2010 QSQ for Best Chaptered Non-Canon Romance. Thank you to everyone who nominated, appreciated and judged.

ATTENTION: Because of prissy glitch on the archive, stories with a rating about 3rd-5th cannot be read. I have lowered the rating to enable access, but the content remains the same. This is a PROFESSORS rated fic. Read at your own discretion - the sexual situations warning is there for a reason.
Reviewer: IzzyMisha Signed
Date: 01/24/10 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1 Promises to keep

Oh wow Carole! I've heard so many raving reviews about this story that I thought I should check it out. (Emma's been recommending it on a daily basis!)
I agree that your characterization of Lavender is perfect. It stuck to canon really well too. I think it's very interesting reading about what happened during the 7th year at Hogwarts, only, was Malfoy there? I thought he didn't return? -confused- Anyway, I loved Zabini, and there's a lot of chemistry between them already. I also enjoyed your portrayal of Ginny and Neville - you write canon characters very well. If I had to add a little critique, it would be that the dialog seems a little too mature sometimes. You wrote the colloquial language well, but two phrases I though sounded odd were "for the fourth time of asking," and "You must get out of here." Just my opinion.
Thanks for a great chapter, I really enjoyed that!


Author's Response: Thanks Elene, I'm pleased you enjoyed the fic. This one surprised me as to how hooked I got into writing it when initailly it was supposed to be a small one shot about Lavender written for class.

Draco - he does go back to Hogwarts. Narcissa says that b'he's home for Easter' so he must have been at school before then.

I take your point about the language (I'm no longer a teen unfortunately). However, I do see Blaise as someone who has mixed more with adults and has no close friendships, so I think his language is more 'adult/old fashioned' than say Lavender's.

Thank you for the review ~Carole~

Reviewer: IzzyMisha Signed
Date: 01/24/10 Title: Chapter 2: Chapter 2 - He will not see me stopping here

Wow, I didn't expect something like that to happen so soon! Once again, I think your writing is nearly perfect. I still have some tiny issues with the diction in your dialog. This might just be in my head, but it seemed at times to shift rater abruptly from overly formal to very crude/slangy.

“Do you realise you’ve been staring at my brother’s Quidditch poster all this while"

I don't like the "all this while," it sounds a bit odd. Maybe "the whole time
" or a more common expression?

Then also two little ones:

“What do you think it’s to be used for?”

Rather - "What do you think they'll use it for?"

"tie in with some information Hannah gleaned"

Maybe - "It makes sense considering what Hannah overheard in detention the other day"

They just seem a little too formal for a discussion between 16/17 year olds. I'm in quite a posh boarding school, and, reading these out loud, I just couldn't imagine people my age talking like that.

“Oh, Lavender Brown, that wasn’t the only reason"

Here I wouldn't have included the "Oh, Lavender Brown," bit. Also, because you mention that he muttered it, I could imagine him just quietly muttering "that wasn’t the only reason" and then going in for the kiss.

These are really very minor things, feel free to agree/ignore them. It's very good, very well written, and I enjoyed every line!

Author's Response: Ah, you've caught the early chapters before the magnificent Emma took over the beta'ing. Yeah, the language is a bit off for teenagers although I'd leave the slangy/colloquial bits in because it's how I imagine they sound. 'Gleaned' does sound wrong to my ears now. (I should get you to proof my OF - set in a boarding school but in the 80's). Ta for reviewing. ~Carole~

Reviewer: IzzyMisha Signed
Date: 01/24/10 Title: Chapter 3: Chapter 3 - The woods are lovely, dark and deep

Oh, just read your feedback on the first chapter. I understand what you mean about Blaise's dialog being a bit more old-fashioned. No more language related comments from now on! I loved the Lavender/ Parvati relationship, it seemed very real. Sigh. I've always been a Draco fangirl, but you're slowly converting me to Blaise. I do hope Draco features more at some point...but I guess this isn't a Dramione :-P

"Hogwarts grapevine. Snape can stop a lot, but gossip in the girls’ toilets goes on"

That made me laugh - very funny.

I like the way you include canon events into the story, and that action with Hagrid's flight was so well written. Kudos to you! You have some serious romance writing skills as well, I'm currently having butterflies and dreaming about Blaise :-P Thanks for that!


Author's Response: No no, carry on commenting on the language - it's all good crit! Umm, not a lot of Draco ... well not in a Dramione type fangirly way - he is in one or two more I think *frowns to self as can't remember* Ahh, Blaise... I dream of him too.... (don't tell Sirius or Remus that though!). Thanks again and glad you're enjoying the story (wait for the Restricted Section bit - ha ha)

Reviewer: IzzyMisha Signed
Date: 01/24/10 Title: Chapter 4: Chapter 4 - Stopping by Woods

Oh what an ending! I did not see that one coming. I love how strong Lavender is being, unwilling to give up on defending her mother. haha, I've forgotten her crush on Firenze, its nice to see him back. Loved that chapter, I can see Emma's influence... xxxx

Author's Response: I think girls always love horses don't they? Ha ha.

Reviewer: IzzyMisha Signed
Date: 01/24/10 Title: Chapter 5: Chapter 5 - Between the Woods and the Frozen Lake

Isn't it..."whole school was" and not the "whole school were"? I mean its a single entity...

Anyways, I enjoyed that, I like the little subplots with Neville and Seamus, and I like how honest Blaise was with Lavender. Yay for Snape rescuing the class. I'm starting to look forward to the final battle now, you are going to write that, right? :-D

Author's Response: Mmm, you're probably right. Was always sounds odd to me, but it is an entity like team *ponders stupid English Language* The Battle is being written now - that's the trouble. I'm having to write canon that's actually in the book and it's haaaaaaard! Thank you for all your reviews this afternoon, it's kinda inspired me to get oin and type the rest up.

Reviewer: IzzyMisha Signed
Date: 01/24/10 Title: Chapter 7: Chapter 7 - What if?

Again, Iove these endings! What will he say? When will she see Blaise again? How long till Harry shows up? Is it a boy or a girl? :-P

haha so she is actually pregnant? How will this all turn out then...Ahh now I have to wait for another chapter!

Oh, and I liked Daphne...she's cool.

Author's Response: Ah Daphne ... yeah she's cool. And yes, she is pregnant. I think Emma screamed at me at that point heh heh. Harry shows up very very soon. It is the end of April after all.

Reviewer: IzzyMisha Signed
Date: 01/24/10 Title: Chapter 6: Chapter 6 - Restrictions

I love these endings! Ugh, from now on I'll never see Crabbe the same way...he creeps me out. Really nice plot twist with the sugar in the contraceptive potion. And I want some of that chocolate NOW!! Not much more to say really xxx

Author's Response: I loathe Crabbe so much too. Urghhh! Oh, yes ... the chocolate *sigh* - that might have to reappear.