Thanks for not wiping out the entire team. I'd hace killed far too many trees (by kleenexing, of course)
Great chapter. I think it's the best so far. Really. But then again, every new chapter I read leaves me with the same idea.... Me hearts Oliver.
Author's Response: Thanks for the review. This one arrived from another of the questions I had when reading DH. Oliver was there! Why? Four years out of school, never a member of the DA. How and why did he go to Hogwarts. I hope that this answers my questions using Oliver's own reasoning. -N-
Liked it. Seems very akin to the Pomfrey I have in mind. Specially fond of the Carrow, loathing parts. Prince's touch was interesting too. I could very much picture the both of them gossiping the night away, in happier circumstances.
Liked it. Yup. Liked it quite much. Gone keep reading.
Author's Response: Thanks for the review. Poppy Pomfrey’s job is to patch up injured children, the Carrows seemed to delight in hurting children. They were never going to be friends. N
Hehehe... Luuuuvly. ;) Now, you nearly made me like Cho at the begining. Quite an impressive feat, since I don't hold her in a very high steem.
But the first thing that came to my mind when she jumped to Marietta's defence (yet again) was: "Cho, darling. You're a Ravenclaw. Smart, remember? The loyal ones are the Puffs!" Thankfully, she came to her senses later. After Marietta behaved like a total beatch... Better later than never, I guess.
Good, good. Quite good.Again quite like it! ^.^
Author's Response: You only nearly liked Cho? I’ve failed )-; Cho seems to get a lot of grief for no reason other than she’s emotional. She turned up to fight, she was one of the first to do so. I’m rather fond of her. -N-
Gotta love your Loopy Loony Luna... Snif. It must be my hormones or something... But I have to admit you got my eyes all... moisty.
People cry when they're sad. Making people sad is a bad thing. If you made me cry, does that make you a bad writer? *wink* I loved the way you got into Loony's mind and made it oh, so logical and understanable and... right. Oh, and go Terry go!!
Now, I'm going to go on reading. I hope I don't get all emotional... again.
Author's Response: This attempt to get into Luna’s brain was one of the most difficult things to write. I chose not to have her ask Terry the question: “What’s it like, to be able to loom?” Perhaps I should have, it’s the sort of odd remark that makes Luna loony. -N-
Alright, if you've read my previous review. I'm moving you from bad writer to evil writer...
I get it, war is bad, war is sad, war means people die. I like this Goth Polly character of yours. Quite a spunky lassie, isn't she? ^.^
Author's Response: Polly Protheroe, Muggle-born Goth Auror arrived in my brain almost exactly the way she is in this story and demanded to have her tale told. I didn't dare say no! -N-
Pheeeew... I am ashamed to admit I glad I did not get emotional over this chapter...
I rather enjoyed the thougth of a father-of-two Neville. A loving Hannah. A daughter peeved by annoying pet-names, dating Hugo Weasley, no less. ^.^
Oh, and he DID deserve it. He was stunned. I know it makes me sound like an evil, unsensitive git. But he did deserve it!
Author's Response: After four first person stories I thought that I’d change the mix a little with this one. I put it here because (logically) Augusta’s story follows Polly’s. However, technically, this is the last story as it is set in the year 2028. I understand, does anyone else? Lestrange probably did deserve to die. But Augusta would regret her actions. -N-
*snorts* Your Susan is so cool! I like how she seems so cold, calmed, steeled against a world that's crumbling down all around her.
I particularly like your clever, VERY clever views on DADA. (the troll detail on Polly's chapter, the thing on indirect attacks)
Author's Response: Susan (or “The Ice Maiden” as she will be called in Chapter 12: Epiphany and Fall) always struck me as a bit of a loner. We rarely see her, and when we do it’s clear that she stands apart from “The Hufflepuff Trio” of Ernie, Hannah and Justin, who are usually together. The indirect attacks referenced here (and in Polly’s chapter) show that, aged eleven, Ron showed natural talent as an Auror. -N-
Awh... Poor Ernie... Deep down don't we all wish the same?
He did have that way of being a good guy but still annoyingly obnoxious, didn't he?
Author's Response: Trying to keep Ernie annoying and rather pompous while also making him a worrier and a hero was interesting. I could not write this in the first person, because his self-image is so much better than the truth. -N-
Tom Riddle was always the perfect student, right?
There was one spell he never could get right
A spell that required the one thing he couldnâ€™t have
A happy memory
Itâ€™s hard to be the best when what you need is just out of reach
Quite impressive and highly suitable of Tom Riddle to cheat right in front of everyone. Of COURSE he never managed to cast a patronus! The looser!
Author's Response: Well, I wouldn’t call him a loser, but I love that you have an opinion! Thanks for reviewing, and also for being the first response ever :) you made me very happy Jess
Interesting! Poor thing. Seems like she had not had it easy. I do hope to see how did things go so bad and hope that it does work out for her in the end
Author's Response: Thanks for the review! Verity has definitely not had it easy. Thank you. ~O
Growing up fully immersed in the early sixteenth century English aristocracy, all Anne Boleyn ever wanted was the chance to make her own choices. When she is suddenly thrust into the magical world of wizards and witches, her life is forever altered.
The seventh son of a seventh son sifts through papers on his desk in the Headmaster’s Office. His cousin, the six son of a six son, toils in the shadows bring his brethren down. They both know that the support of Anne Boleyn will be essential.
This is the tale of Anne Boleyn, her efforts to preserve justice in the face of adversity, and her influence on society that continues to this day.
At the beginning of this tale, one may wish to note that Anne has five fingers on her right hand.
Everything is not what it seems.This story is down for revisions. You can still read the prologue, though.
Love, love, love! The chapter and Anne. She seems a very likeable young girl.
I can not help but wonder soo much about what she's going to run into medieval Hogwarts!!!
Will she be able to play Quidditch? She seems like the type that would enjoy soaring through the sky!!
Oh, oh, oh and will she be able to train Rowan into sending mail?
Gosh! So many questions so much curiosity!!! Keep the updates coming soon and I'll keep the luuuuuuv coming!! ^.^
Author's Response: Your questions will be answered in time :) I'll update soon, although there may be a lull in November, as I will be participating in National Novel Writing Month. Peace, Virgil
I've heard of the Malleus! Seems like someone did quite a bit of research!!
I like very much historical novels and mixing that up with Potterverse, seems simply custom made for me!! LOL!
This mystery hooded figure seems to be portrayed as the bad guy, yet he is supporting the "good" cause, apparently... I mean, witches secret less innocent muggles get torched, right?
There's also the fact that Septimus, a Gryffindor, seems to be an awful bad Headmaster and uses the M-word freely.
I like the way you're heading with the setting. Seems it's going to be a huge mystery with a lot of scheeming and not knowing who's really the good or bad guy of the story. Me likes that. ^.^
Keep the good work!
PS: didn't the seventh son of a seventh son become a werewolf?
Author's Response: Thanks for reviewing! I'm glad you appreciate my research :) it's a lot more effort than I thought it would be - I have a newfound respect for historical novelists! The mystery hooded figure could be a good guy or a bad guy, and that depends which side you're on. As for use of the m-word, I don't think it would be quite as taboo as it is in Harry's time. Kind of like the n-word in early America. The seventh son of a seventh son isn't a werewolf, or at least not in this fic. In different cultures and religions, there are different superstitions as to what the seventh son of a seventh son might be. I've read several fantasies in which the seventh son of a seventh son has exceptional magical powers. Peace, Virgil
Well, I'm smiling back at the box.
As usual, I like this story very much. I am comfortably adjusting my "modern" mind to this Hogwarts and time you're setting. I appreciated that little by little, we see differences. The treatment of children (we see it in evil, evil prof. Granger) Anne's ancient ideas on "proper" female behaviour (my heart goes out to Lizzie in that matter) views on pureblod manias and the use of the M-word...
Like like like!! Keep the great work!
Author's Response: Thank you so much! I'm glad my subtleties are noticed by someone... but then again, that means they aren't really subtleties... you know what I mean. Thanks for the review! :) -Virgil
Interesting to see a bit more of Ane. Her book of lists seems rather interesting!!!
I liked the cahpter very much. I'm veeeeeeeeeeeeeeery curious as to her father's motives. I suspect they may not be the very best ones, hum?
Author's Response: Thank you! Yes, her father's motives may be... questionable, although by no means malicious. Stay tuned - the next chapter should be up in a week or two! Peace, Virgil
LOL! I sure do like this version of Bella. Evil, all right. But yet rebellious! Lovely.
And she's bound to meet someone else with Mum's issues. Nice!
I'd like to see where this goes.
Author's Response: Thank you so much, Kaiserin!! You're my very first reviewer on MNFF to my very first story. I've had fun writing this and I look forward to a lot more fun with the next chapters. I anticipate this story will be from 25-30 chapters. And, you betcha--Bella is going to meet someone else with Mum's issues:D I'm really excited about this story and I love it!! (Of course, I know where it's going.) There's going to be a lot of romance and a lot of angst. I mean, Bella can't help but have angst can she? Something made her the deadliest and most evil witch ever. I hope to have the next chapter up within two weeks. So, let's say we meet again in a couple of weeks. Deal?
So.... Gage, uh?
I have a question. When you say Indian origins... you mean he's a Native, an aborigin. Not that he's from India, right?
I mean, with the eagle feather and everything... But at first I was a bit intrigued.
It's funny because this Gabriel seems to be a total opposite of Bella. Muggle and nice, easy-going and non scheeming. So, yes, the opposite.
I foresee a LOT of angst. I was a bit skeptical of fics that tried to explain how rotten-to-the-core characters became so. (like Voldy, for instance) then Belledeg came along and now you seem to be taking it upon yourself to to carry on with her legacy.
I think that the Bella you portrayed has all the potencial of tragically becoming the Bellatric we hate and fear. But with the setting you're laying out, you might just get us to bond with her and understand her fall.
I googled up the dog breed. Wow. Impressive!
Keep the good work!
Author's Response: Yes, Gabriel is a Native American character from South Dakota. He is actually an enrolled Ojibwe but practices many of the Lakota traditions since he spent most of his life with his mother in South Dakota. His best friends, that we meet in a couple of chapters, are Lakota from South Dakota. And how do I know that? Well, he's my character, of course:D In many ways, he is the opposite of Bella, but they do say that opposites attract. You can't blame Bella, in her rebellious stage, who falls for a very handsome Yank from the States who is probably the worst sort of Muggle imagineable to her family:P There's going to be so much angst--I can't tell you how many tiimes I've cried over this story already. But there will be a lot of chuckles too, I hope, kind of like real life. Keep in mind that many of the scenes you will read about in this story are based on things that actually have happened. I see Bella as being a very powerful and intelligent woman who is hurt and betrayed so wrongly and horribly that her slight mental illness (that wouldn't even be noticeable otherwise) comes to the forefront and she becomes, tragically, Voldemort's very powerful and cruel puppet. I actually owned Jacob, the Great Pyrenees once as well as Sampson, the Newfoundland. Thanks for your thoughtful review. I hope I've answered some of your questions and that you'll check back in a couple of weeks for Chapter 3, where Gabe and Bella meet. See you next time.
^.^ Liked it! Good nicely scheemed way to get our heroes (more like hero and anti-heroine) tomeet. I wonder where will all this lead...
- Your excited and impatient reader, Kay.
Author's Response: Hello again. It took about 12 days for this chapter to get validated and that was without any corrections. I'm kind of busy at work but I hope to get Chapter 4 in line in a couple of days:D I'm glad you found this one. That Bella is quite the schemer. It's kind of funny in a way. Bella wasn't too impressed before she met Gabe. As I recall, she called him a "fairy git" and thought he was trying to overcompensate for something. Then she became kind of obsessed with his art. After she stalked him for a while she decided to meet him. You can't stop a crazy woman with a plan:D Now you know I can't tell you where this is going:P I kind of know but I could change my mind. I won't say anything more right now. Thank you so much for the review. See you next time.
Poor, poor Hermione...
And, sorry, but either my math fails or it took Ron about two weeks to get a replacement for Hermione AND introduce her as a date to his family!?!?!?
Not to mention waltz his new catch under Hermione's nose without so much as a heads up!! I can't help but say... Ron's a bit prick-ish for my taste. He never was the brightest tool in the shed, but I liked him a bit better to expect something so low from him.
As for Draco... I'm pretty sure helping with that splinching will do some good to whatever is growing between them.
Me likes very much this story and how you're setting it up. And making our heroine and nemesis slooooowly creep towards each other.
I particularly like the fact that Hermione seems to be trying to fix Draco... Trying to save him. I think that's a female trait, we've got a week spot for bad guys and lost cases... It's like nursing a puppy. We can't say no to that! I like tha fact that this story keeps holding on that. On any other case, I suspect Hermione would turn her back on Malfoy, but he really needs her so badly, and she's the only one that can help right now.
And on the other hand, he seems to be living up to her expectations and playing good guy. Let's hope he keeps it up!
I'm puzzled about that detail you added about Daphne and Blaise there... Is that cannon or something particular to this story??
Oh, one more detail... Verity... you should be ashamed of yourself! I know I'm provably taking Hermione's side too much, here. But c'mon! Accepting a formal presentation to family, in plain sight of a former girl, 2 weeks post break-up is not a nice move. And Verity must have known Hermione would be there!! She can't be nice!
Author's Response: Okay, I don't want to say too much, but keep reading because ... aghh, I can't say, but basically this is written from Hermione and Draco's POV so it's their perceptions rather than ... (I'll leave it there). JK Rowling said that some Slytherins came back to fight, which was partly why Imade the comment about Daphne and Blaise coming back (I didn't mean to imply they were married by the way, which I realise may come across). I have also written another fic about Blaise which talks about the battle and two of his girlfriends.
Snif... snif... snif.
:'( So very deeply, truly SAD.
I get it, happy for Ron and Hermione... But I'd have liked to have a Dramione ending. You had constructed such a lovable redeemable Draco there... So, SAD!!! Very very sad...
It almost seems like Hermione went back together with Ron just because... Stupid 'meant-to-be-love-of-her-life'. Not liking destiny right now.
I can't help but feel it was so real, so plausible. Do you know psycology? Your characters and their reactions are impeccable. I loved that of this story. I often find myself thinking "who wouldn't have reacted like that!?" The only answer I can come up with is "a zombie". Honest.
Oh, you had me laughing out loud when the discussion got heated. The Patil, Brown, Potter jab Draco did was too funny!
Once again (you're probably bored to hear it by now, if not, shame on you fellow readers!) great story!!
PS: can you be swayed into writing an alternate ending? *wink*wink*wink* Really? Pretty please?
Author's Response: Oh... alternate ending ... not sure. I was sorely tempted to have them running off together, but I couldn't see it lasting, and Hermione's too sensible for him. I don't study psychology, btw, I just read a lot so I s'pose I work out reactions from that. I'm glad you enjoyed the story, and appreciate your support and reviews. Hmm, epilogue, perhaps? ~Carole~
Hello there... I've found a great story! And I like many things of it...
This chapter in particular was quite ambiguous. Who's Hermione going to choose? Will she give Ron another chance? Will she stay with Draco? How will Draco react to her revelation? You have me sitting on the edge of mu seat!
I liked the fact that Hermione did not see it coming... The second she made the relation to the place Harry took Ginny to celebrate, I just knew Ronald was not coming clean, but trying to win her back.
As in to now, Death Eater past and everything, I'm on Team Draco (twilight pun intended) he might be the bad guy, but he's trying to make things right, and doing a pretty good job as it is. I guess it all depends on his reaction to this lunch, uh? The suspence is killing me!!
As for Ron, I can very much relate to Hermione's feelings. He did muck things up pretty badly. First "let's see someone else", then showing up with Verity (it really did NOT take a genious to see the results of that one Ron!) And, I think Hermione is being quite right to point to the fact that he keeps doing the same thing. Walking away, instead of facing the stormy skies together...
You've created a highly pausible Ron. A wonderful Draco. An amazying Hermione. And put them in a highly believable place. Great characters, perfect time, un-improvable place. Hands down, the best Ron/Hermione/Draco I've had the pleasure of reading. And I'm a Dramione junkie, so I've had my share!!
Hope to get my next Shrouds fix soon!! ^.^
Author's Response: Thank you, thank you, thank you. I really wanted this to be plausible because I find so many non-canon pairings don't ring true, so I'm pleased that you find it believable. The next chapter should be up next week ... but it's the last (unless I write an epilogue which is possible) Thanks again ~Carole~