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Forever Yours by welshdevondragon

Rated: 1st-2nd Years •
Remember the time when we stole the whole day?
And nobody knows it, we took it away,
And it will be forever mine,
And it will be forever yours

Autumn 1981. Lily thinks about love, life and time.

Song-fic based on 'Forever Yours' by Alex Day
Reviewer: lucca4 Signed
Date: 12/24/11 Title: Chapter 1: One-shot

Alex this was beautiful. I loved it, because in only about 3000 words it described the relationship between Lily and James better than a cheesy 30 chapter fic. I loved it because they had problems with James hating to be cooped up and knowing that their lives now had to revolve solely around their son when they hadn't even really lived yet - but you could tell that in the end these problems weren't going to break them.

The song fit so well with the story and because I haven't heard the whole thing through I had no idea it was a friendship song. I also thought the second person made the song work especially well and it gave the story the feeling that this was a private exchange between Lily and James which just made it so much more intimate.

Speeeeeaking of intimate, here is the part of the story that I think shows your immense talent as a writer: there wasn't sex but there WAS sex. This is a 1st-2nd years story so obviously there weren't any graphic scenes but I felt like the heat between them was still palpably there. Gahh this fic is so gorgeous!

Amazingly lovely job :)

xx Ariana

Author's Response: Ariana-I'm so glad that you enjoyed this, and were kind enough to review it. As you know, I'm allergic to fluff, and think that its realistic that James anger at being cooped up would have caused a lot of tension in their relationship, and its stupid to ignore that.

I'd been listening to this song back to back, couldn't sleep, and thought of this story at three in the morning. And I'm pleased the second person gave it an intimacy-I don't think I've ever written a fic genuinely in the second person, but lots of stories in the first person addressed to a specific 'you' and I'm glad that worked here.

Hehe thank you so much for saying there's sexual attraction between them, without they're actually being sex. Since this was mainly self-relective, it didn't really fit in here, but I'm so pleased that it was present nevertheless. Thank you so much for you lovely review and I am delighted you enjoyed it! Alex

Misperception by Equinox Chick

Rated: 3rd-5th Years •
Summary: Because Angelina Weasley had an irritating tendency to match-make, Oliver Wood had made excuses the last few times he'd been invited to to one of her parties. But after the revelations in the Daily Prophet about his personal life, he rather hoped he'd be safe this year.

But he'd reckoned without her determination that everyone needs some festive joy at Christmas.

Disclaimer: I am not JK Rowling, despite the spaghetti bologneise.

Thank you very much to Natalie (hestiajones) for beta'ing this and for being supportive. Thanks also to my flist who have put up with a lot of wangst from me recently. Thanks also to Maple for an interesting point she made in an SBBC discussion about Oliver ...

This is Equinox Chick from Hufflepuff , writing for the Great Hall-iday Challenge - prompt 3 Operation:Mistletoe.

IT WON!!!!!!!!!!

Due to an extremely prudish glitch affecting the boards, stories rated 6th-7th or Professors cannot be read, at the moment. For this reason I have temporarily lowered the rating, although this is really 6th-7th. You have been warned.
Reviewer: lucca4 Signed
Date: 12/21/11 Title: Chapter 1: Misperception.

I have to admit I was pretty attached to your first choice of title - but this one is nice anyway :).

I didn't plan to read this entire thing today; I'm supposed to be helping my mother stamp Christmas cards and bake Italian wedding cookies. But once you threw Daphne in there…well it's Daphne, so I had to keep reading (plus it's YOU, so I probably would have kept reading regardless of the characters).

This was such a gorgeous story, Carole, and without sounding rude to other entries I think this story will do fabulously. I thought at first that Oliver and Jerome would be leaving together but thank god that fell through because I never warmed up to Jerome (and I don't think I was supposed to either :P).

The scene by the graveyard was so sweet - I loved it. I also really liked how you mentioned the red rose was probably from Cho who probably never really moved on…but I don't know why. That part stuck with me for some reason.

What I love most about your stories is that I can trust them to blow me away and they never fail to do so. This was so sweet, and I hope you write more about these two in the future if only in a brief mention :).

xx Ariana

Author's Response: Awwww, thank you. I have to admit I teared up a bit when I wrote the red rose from Cho. Ha - no you weren;t supposed to warm to Jerome; I nearly camped him up rather extravagantly, but decided to go with the fact that Oliver just didn't warm to him. I'd like to write more about Daphne because she's fast becoming my favourite Slyth (apart from Blaise). She seemed to fit here with Oliver ... I wonder if I can keep it up ... I think my problem is that I can't think of another man that Oliver could possibly be happy with after losing Cedric :(.

OOOH Italian wedding cookies - they sound yummy.

Thank youuuuuu ~Carole~

A Splendid Fate by hestiajones

Rated: 6th-7th Years • Past Featured Story
Summary: One failed photograph, two halved souls, and the numerous, marvellous machinations of destiny.

This story is a multi-functional product of four days' continuous typing and lack of sleep. It serves an entry for the Inaugural Great Hall Cotillion and a standby Birthday Present for Julia/the opaleye. More importantly, it marks my return to fanfiction after two months' hiatus, because that is kind of inhumanly long.

Thanks to Kara for reading the Prologue and motivating me, and Carole for Chipping-on-the-Wye.

DISCLAIMER: J.K.Rowling, I love you for giving me the HP universe, but you are not me and you definitely did not write this.

Reviewer: lucca4 Signed
Date: 01/29/12 Title: Chapter 5: April 2008

Yay Eloise! I'm happy with her decision and I love how you've transformed her from tentative and shy to a self-confident young woman. Your writing here is gorgeous (especially the end - haha). And I love the style; the flashbacks just fit so seamlessly into the rest of the story. Brilliantly brilliant :)

I'm not quite ready to say goodbye to Eloise and Dennis yet, but at the same time I'm anxious to see what the epilogue has to say. I hope you write about them more, even if it's just in passing. The dynamics of their relationship are to die for.

xx Ariana

Author's Response: I am glad you liked the transformation. In my mind, I originally had this drawn out, but the word limit had me shortening and culling a lot of things. I was really worried D: What if it was rushed? What if it didn't make any sense? But the reviews from you and Julia are making me sigh in relief :D Thank you, once again!

Reviewer: lucca4 Signed
Date: 01/29/12 Title: Chapter 6: May 2008 - Epilogue

This was beautifully beautiful.

Gorgeously gorgeous.

I love how everything is resolved, but it isn't entirely. Dennis's father at the grave made me want to cry, the scene with Mr Midgen made me smile. And the scene with Eloise and Dennis gave me hope, because Eloise has transformed so much as a character and it was lovely to see her enter the Leaky Cauldron confidently.

Amazing story. I am so proud of you, my mistress ;).

xx Ariana

Author's Response: YAYAYAY. My mistress loves it to the end :D :D :D Thanks for reviewing and being amazing! :)

Reviewer: lucca4 Signed
Date: 01/21/12 Title: Chapter 2: February 2008

I think…

It's possible…



I'm in love with Dennis :O

This is a seriously lovely story, Natalie. The set-up is so exciting and Eloise is so intriguing and I can't wait until they meet up. God your writing is so gorgeous. I'm sorry, this review isn't coherent and doesn't adequately express - at all - how much I love this story and how painful it was to wait until the weekend to read the next chapters :).

I feel like this story has real chemistry, not just between the characters per se, but between the reader and the story…it has a real attractiveness to it that makes readers want to read it and soak up the words because it's just so beautiful.

Off to read the next chapter [and review, because you are an amazing author and you deserve to hear it over and over].

xx Ariana

Author's Response: yayaya! Although, you might not like him later on. D: I mean, I do hope you'll love him to the end. :) Thanks for the lovely words!

Reviewer: lucca4 Signed
Date: 01/21/12 Title: Chapter 3: March 2008


WHAT THE HELL, WOMAN. YOU CANNOT END THE CHAPTER THERE. No no no no no. They were just getting together…

I am so curious about that photograph it's not even funny. This will be me the next few hours: opening and closing this site to see if the fic is updated because GAHH THIS IS AMAZING.

And they're finally in the same town :). It was cleverly done and the anticipation was up to here by the time Dennis took Eloise to the beach. I loved that scene on the beach by the way. Eloise was like we've never seen her, so free and happy…I hope Dennis brings that back out from her in the next chapter (or two or three :D).

I thought I couldn't like this story any more than I already did. It turns out I was wrong.

xx Ariana

Author's Response: eeeep! Now I'm scared it won't meet expectations D: The next chapter will be a blunt change of scene. Hope it will clear some things up!!

Reviewer: lucca4 Signed
Date: 01/21/12 Title: Chapter 4: The Lost Years

Aw, I still do love Dennis. He's such a sweetie, even if I do wish he hadn't shown Eloise that photograph so soon. I also wanted to hug Dennis's father when he gave Dennis the watch for his seventeenth birthday.

I've favorited and am thoroughly addicted to this story. I'm glad I could get my fix in for the day before homework :).

xx Ariana

Author's Response: YAY!

About Dennis showing her the photograph so soon, I wrote it like that because of his obsession. He's never expected to meet her, and suddenly she's there, which scares and excites him. And there is this urgency in him to show her her real self; it's something that he doesn't even think about twice. I'd say Dennis was a little out of his mind on this day, and whether it was the right thing to do or not is open to debate. I agree with you and think that ideally he shouldn't have - it's a jerk move in the end lol - but that is how I intended to build his character. Although EEEP I may have been unable to portray his character that clearly.

Thank you for the reviews! They're making my day :D

Reviewer: lucca4 Signed
Date: 01/16/12 Title: Chapter 1: Prologue

Ooooh interesting! I'm excited to read the next chapters already (and pleasantly so since I know you've already finished it :D).

I love the style in the prologue. I can't describe it really, only that's beautiful and sad - although reading about Dennis Creevey after the war is always sad for me. This is an extremely intriguing ship and I can't wait to see how Eloise and Dennis interact with each other ;).

xx Ariana

Author's Response: THANK YOU! :D I hope the whole thing will be plausible/enjoyable in the end.

Something Strange by hestiajones

Rated: 6th-7th Years •
Summary: Louis hadn't quite expected to fall in love with him, but he did.

A gift for my mistress, lucca4. Also, an entry for the Inaugural GH Cotillion Challenge.

Disclaimer: This is not J.K.Rowling. It'd be cool if she shipped Luna's son with Fleur's, though.
Reviewer: lucca4 Signed
Date: 01/16/12 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Oh, lovely mistress of mine, this was absolutely perfectly wonderfully amazing! I'm in love with the format almost as much as the entire story. Everything - the chemistry between them, the progression of Louis's feelings - was so gorgeously written. And the ending was to die for.

Thank you so much for giving this beautifulness to MEEEE :). It's possible I'll have to join the challenge just to write a thank-you fic for you.

xx Ariana

Author's Response: " It's possible I'll have to join the challenge just to write a thank-you fic for you. "

And you'll slaughter the rest of us :D I am happppppy to know you liked it, and the format tooo!

Swans by Equinox Chick

Rated: 3rd-5th Years •
Summary: I’m twenty-seven years old, so why can’t I just say no, or plead a headache and stay in my room?

Molly (jnr) was a Weasley with a difference. Not sparkling, not brave, not reckless. She was diligent and loyal, and usually overlooked.

For who notices ducklings when swans are gliding by?

I am not JK Rowling. You all know that. I am Equinox Chick and this is one of my entries for the Great Hall Inaugural Cotillion.

IT WONNNNN!!!!!!!!!!! (joint first with A Splendid Fate by hestiajones - you should all go and read that - it's very fab)Thank you judges for being amazing

Many thanks to Natalie (hestiajones) and Kara (Karaley Dargen) for their help with beta'ing this story.

The line about 'porridge' is a tip someone told me photographers use.

Due to the infuriating prissy glitch infecting the archives, I have downgraded this story's rating to 3rd-5th. However, this is actually a PROFESSORS story, so please do not click if sexual situations are likely to offend.
Reviewer: lucca4 Signed
Date: 01/22/12 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1 - Ducks

Oh Molly…I want to hug her right now. And I am absolutely outraged on her behalf at what that disgusting Barnabas decided to do. He's a horrible excuse for a man and I hated him so much during that scene. Thank god for Aaron who - in about 6 or 7k - you've made me fall in love with. I love that he's a Slytherin and I love that he's not in the family business. Also the fact that he has stubble is slightly amazing ;).

My favorite, though, is Molly. I could probably count on one hand the number of stories about her on this site. You managed to take a character I've barely ever thought about and make me care so much about her. She's absolutely lovely - from her caring for the ducks to her empathetic acceptance of her cousin's sexuality.

This story is beautiful. Incredibly so.

xx Ariana

Author's Response: Thank you so much, Ariana. If there's one regret I have about this story, it's that the word count meant I had to cut certain scenes I'd planned in my mind. One of them was Molly talking to Dominique and another would have been more build up in the second chapter because it's rather fast moving. Thing is, whilst I had about 1k left to play with, I knew that by including these other scenes, I'd write far more than I could. What I'm trying to say is that I'm pleased you liked the concern for Dominique. I have them as same school year, with Victoire the year above. Poor Molly is always going to get overlooked with a pair of Veela cousins in tow. :(

I hope you like the rest of the story. :) ~Carole~

Forever Dancing by Equinox Chick

Rated: 1st-2nd Years •
Summary: Sitting in my room watching raindrops dancing on the window pane, I try to catch the attention of the passers by, but no one can see.

They never see.

In her room at St Mungo's, Alice sits and waits.

Disclaimer: I am not JK Rowling. She wrote in so few words a scene between Neville and Alice that never fails to make me cry.

This story was inspired by the song Shadows in the Rain, by The Police. It was originally a drabble written for the lovely Ariana (lucca4) in the SBBC Musical Drabble Exchange.

Thank you, Natalie (hestiajones) for beta'ing the original drabble.
Reviewer: lucca4 Signed
Date: 02/09/12 Title: Chapter 1: Forever Dancing

This is a phenomenal story - beautifully poignant and tragic. Everything you've added (or maybe had to cut down because of word limits) fits in so seamlessly, and I love the expanded version, especially the part about Hannah standing up to Neville's Gran. So very in-character for both of them, and it was a detail that made me smile.

What I love most about this story is that it isn't fluffy, but it doesn't suck the life out of me with angst, either. It's a depressing story, but we can't be too sad because Alice isn't. The writing at the end is so gorgeous it makes me want to cry. This is easily one of the best one-shots on the site.

When I read this drabble on Christmas Day, I went a little loopy with happiness and was going to type a gushing, incoherent mess in the SBBC thread and then thought better of it. I had my suspicions it might be you, but I wasn't sure and I'm a terrible guesser. The guessing didn't matter to me as much as letting the writer know how much this - even in its drabble form - touched me and how lucky I felt to be the recipient.

I feel like I won't be able to say/stress my absolute love of this piece enough in this review, but I want to thank you for writing me something so perfect. Please never ever stop writing - you are brimming with talent and everything you write seems to turn to gold :).

xx Ariana

Author's Response: Thank you so much for this lovely review. When it came to it, the parts I had cut from this originally, didn't make it into this final version because they no longer seemed necessary. I had wanted to expand the mention of Hannah, and bring in Augusta because both are two women important in Neville's life and I like to think Alice and Hannah would have got on very well.

Due to the discussion in SBBC, I then added the part about Frank because I thought it would add something about Neville that he does have this connection to his dad, too, which is based - largely - on constantly repairing his glasses. Another fruitless gesture because Frank continually crushes them out of frustration, but Neville is still trying to make things better.

Thank you for introducing me to the song. I have to admit that when I read your squeee posts on LJ and LS, I was glowing inside. I liked my drabble, but really wasn;t sure you'd like it at all.

Thanks again. ~Carole~

Susan by hestiajones

Rated: 3rd-5th Years •
Summary: The fireworks are imprinted on her features with such clarity that she’s all but glimpses of sunlight.

This is hestiajones' bazillionth entry for the GH Cotillion Challenge. To be honest, she's more bewildered than you, and what's more, she's not J.K.Rowling.
Reviewer: lucca4 Signed
Date: 02/10/12 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

This was so poetic and lovely and gorgeous and gahhhhh you are so talented! The Susan/Alicia drabble you wrote a while ago was just delicious, and this fic surpassed my already sky-high expectations for this story.

I love your writing style here. I really need to go listen to the Andrew Belle song because I feel like this story would just flow so nicely to the music.

Just so. So. So. So. beautiful. If this is your 70th fic, then brava, dear. What a fantastic BAM to an already powerful, beautiful array of fics (and I mean array not Array).


Author's Response: Thank youuuuu! :D I was so worried because I wasn't sure I'd tied it well to the original drabble. :) Still LOLing at Array.

Truth or Dare by Equinox Chick

Rated: 6th-7th Years •
Summary: Cormac McLaggen, a sports journalist for The Daily Prophet is looking for a scoop to make his name.

Zacharias Smith, Chaser for the Falmouth Falcons is looking for acceptance and respect.

Will a game of 'Truth or Dare' get both of them what they want? Or will this collision of two colossal egos leave both licking their wounds?

This is Equinox Chick writing for The Inaugural Great Hall Cotillion Challenge.
This story is dedicated to Ariana (lucca4) because she dared me.
Thanks to Natalie (hestiajones) for betaing this story and also to ma flist for encouraging the impossible.

Disclaimer: I am not JK Rowling. I hope she doesn't mind what I've done to two of her 'most-loved' characters.

Completely and utterly overjoyed that this won the award for the Best SSP One-shot in the 2012 QSQ's. I suspect my pairing will grab the glory, which is as it should be ;)
Reviewer: lucca4 Signed
Date: 02/25/12 Title: Chapter 1: Truth or Dare

Only you, Carole, could make this pairing and these people so gorgeously redeemable. I love the set up, I love the Truth or Dare, and the ending made me smile.

I especially liked that what McLaggen assumed was Smith's secret (being gay) really wasn't what he was hiding because in the grand scheme of things that really wasn't too big of a deal. I loved the lines you said about the Battle …how Smith was scared (like any rational person would be) and how he was being judged for that his whole life.

Beautiful job! I've had to wait a few days to read this story and it was well-worth the wait - I love what you did with these characters, and I don't hate them quite as much as I used to (at least in your story).

I bow at your feet ;).

xx Ariana

Author's Response: YAYYY! Thank you so much for the prompt. I have to admit, though, that I would have ignored it had it not been for the memory of Cormac doing things for a dare. That kicked off the whole scenario whereby he could kiss Zach and then .... well, yes, you know the rest.

Thank you, also, for reviewing. I had so much fun writing this and am really pleased with the reaction from everyone. ~Carole~

Author's Response: YAYYY! Thank you so much for the prompt. I have to admit, though, that I would have ignored it had it not been for the memory of Cormac doing things for a dare. That kicked off the whole scenario whereby he could kiss Zach and then .... well, yes, you know the rest.

Thank you, also, for reviewing. I had so much fun writing this and am really pleased with the reaction from everyone. ~Carole~

The Sum of the Whole by Equinox Chick

Rated: 6th-7th Years •
Summary: '...Benjy Fenwick, he copped it too, we only ever found bits of him ...'

At school Sirius knew Fenwick didn't like him. Following him around, or docking points, he was always in his face and trying to piss him off. Years later they are paired up on a mission for the Order. Can they overcome their mutual loathing and work together?

This is Equinox Chick from the Badger Sett writing her ... um ... seventh entry for the Inaugural Great Hall Cotillion. One more may kill me, but I shall give it a go.
Disclaimer: I am not JK Rowling. That should be obvious.

Thank you, Nat, for setting the pace and Alex for joining in. Our padded cells await us on March 1st.
Reviewer: lucca4 Signed
Date: 02/26/12 Title: Chapter 1: Bits of Him

How can I read something like this and not leave a review?

This is one of my favorite stories you have written, hands-down (maybe it's the present tense…kidding). I love the way you've broken it up into different sections, it makes the story seem so much more poetic and artsy. It really is a beautiful story, and I like how it kind of (but not completely) tags onto the Monochrome-theme of Sirius. Sirius is gorgeous in this, by the way. So is Benjy…and his death at the end was absolutely heartbreaking and I wonder if it would have been as heartbreaking if he and Sirius had actually been together. I think not, really, the way you've put it is so sad because they had a real friendship beneath anything that could have happened between them.

So, so lovely, Carole, in so, so many ways. You are a brilliant beyond brilliant writer.

xx Ariana

Author's Response: Wow... thank you. You know, i wasn;t sure about this story. I had the idea of Sirius and Benjy on a mission and um ... getting together - ha - but when I set down to write it, it really wasn't working. The fact that we know nothing about Benjy, except the manner of his death, gave me a great deal of free rein with his character, but I knew the one fact we did have, had to play an important part in the story. So Sirius either crying with grief or not knowing what to do played a huge part when the story was taking shape.

I deliberated about whether this was a requited love. If you look at my ls, you might see certain statuses that show what I initially intended, but it didn't work that way. (plus I'd just written Zacmac and I wasn't sure if it was going to be a bit samey). Like you I think it's more heartbreaking that they didn;t get together because Sirius is left feeling guilty and now will never know if he could have had anything meaningful with Benjy. He's not repulsed at all by Benjy, just indifferent - which is sadder, I think.

Ariana, thank you so much for this review. Means a lot ~Carole~

But Not a Passing Fancy by expecto_patronuts

Rated: 3rd-5th Years •
Summary: There was somebody Scorpius liked hard, even though he couldn't do anything about it. Years after, when they meet again by accident, will he work up the courage to finish what never started?

For the lovely lucca4, because she added me to her favourite authors!
Reviewer: lucca4 Signed
Date: 04/26/12 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Dear expectopatronuts,

I think I am in love with you. This may seem quite sudden, but in fact it is not. I think we have a mind connection, because how else could I have known to add you to my favorites without reading any of your brilliant, eye-popping jaw-dropping fics before?

And how else could you have known that I love stories that keep me guessing? I had no idea who it was that Scorpius was in love with. For some reason Hugo popped into my mind and I wondered why you gave him blonde hair. At one point I even thought it was Narcissa, until I remembered that the narrator was Scorpius and MNFF does not allow incest fics.

Anyways, back to the reasons why you and I have a mind connection: you knew that I was permanently, absolutely, completely, irrevocably in love with Teddy Lupin, and now he and I can get together without Victoire interrupting! It was getting a little awkward. But don't worry - I still have room in my heart for you :).

Thank you (in all seriousness) for this story. The way you write is just fantastic and you say so much in so few words. The descriptions were WOW, the lyricism was OMG!FAB, and I loved it. Never mind the fact that it's amazing in itself just because it ships Scorpius with someone who probably hasn't had a taste of him yet ;).

Much love,

lucca4 - but please, dear, call me Ariana.

'i' before 'e' by Equinox Chick

Rated: 1st-2nd Years • Past Featured Story
Summary: Ms A Cadwallader wishes to improve herself and apply for a better job. Unfortunately, despite her impeccable qualifications, she is thwarted by a certain Junior Under Secretary for the Minister of Magic, who has let it be known that basic spelling errors can never be over looked.

This story, written in the style of a series of letters, first appeared in The Battle of the Genres over at the SBBC forum.

I am not JK Rowling. She would probably have been more amusing.

This story is for Minna because it was her birthday and she likes this pairing.

Thank you Natalie for liking the drabble and encouraging me to expand.

Winner of the Best Humour QSQ in 2012 - GOBSMACKED!!!
Reviewer: lucca4 Signed
Date: 04/21/12 Title: Chapter 1: Letters

I love this.

I smile every time I read it and the parts you've added are pure perfection :). I love how Audrey is a Ravenclaw and still can't spell - one of the things I remember from the original that stood out to me - and I especially liked the addition of the 'Unrobed by a Passionate Flame' :D.

Great story, Carole! :)

Author's Response: Awwww, Ariana, thank youuuu. Yeah I liked the Unrobed book. I think Audrey is exactly the type of person who would refuse to admit she read rubbish, whereas I embrace my need for badfic smut - ha ha. I'm not sure any of the Ravenclaws agree with me about the spelling, though. They've yet to comment - eeeep.

Well done you on winning the comp. Your drabble was gorgeous! ~Carole~

Sweet Transvestite by welshdevondragon

Rated: 3rd-5th Years •
How else would he ever be able to stand in front of his father in fishnets, six inch heels, a short black dress and make up?

Hugo Weasley has a secret, and he doesn’t want his father to find out. However, he may have no say in the matter.

This story is written for lucca4/Ariana who is a wonderful writer and was lovely and enthusiastic about the December Drabble that prompted this idea. This story does, surprisingly, contain discussion of and mention of transvestism. Since that’s not an official warning, I thought it worth mentioning.

This is welshdevondragon of Gryffindor writing for the Fiendish Firsties Great Hall School of Mischief challenge. The title is from the song Tim Curry sings in The Rocky Horror Picture Show.

Reviewer: lucca4 Signed
Date: 05/01/12 Title: Chapter 1: One-Shot

YAY YAY YAY YAY! Oh my goodness that was fantastic! :)

Okay, this review isn't going to be anything structured or fab and basically it will be far less than you deserve because I'm squeeing. Basically, your drabble was shocking (because I'd never read a transvestite fic before then) and there was something about the shockingness of the drabble that made it so addictive (which is a difficult feat for a 100 word drabble!). This fic retained all of that - and more. I love Angel (and not just because he's American :D). I love the fact that he knows more than Hugo how burdensome the secret is. And I love the way you've written their romance - it's still heart-stopping and touching, but it's edgy. I love that :).

Surprisingly (because she didn't feature much in the original drabble, or if she did I don't remember her because I was too focused on the glory that is Hugo), I liked Lucy a lot in this - especially after the ending few paragraphs. She's not often written about and I love how you've characterized her - so compassionate and sweet and fun (and so unlike Percy - thank god). She might be my favorite character in this and if I was being cheeky I would suggest you write more about her in the future ;).

Also, following your LS posts, if this was the Ron you were worried about then don't worry at all. I can't even fathom trying to write him in this situation (or any situation for that matter, but this one is exceedingly difficult) but when I read this I knew that you nailed it. He's still that awkward guy who says all the wrong things, but he's a father now and his emotional capacity (to use Hermione's phrase) has expounded significantly, and you can really see that here.

Thank you for writing this, and for writing it for me! I am a definite fan if you can't tell yet :). This fic left me smiling.

xx Ariana

Snap by Eleanor Lupin

Rated: 3rd-5th Years •


that's such a pretty name

I'm gonna smile when

you say goodbye...

Narcissa Malfoy is a balanced person. She does not fly off the handle, she does not overreact.

But sometimes things happen. And sometimes people snap.

The song lyrics in this are from Miriam by Norah Jones. Big thank you to Alice/theblacksister, my awesome beta!

Reviewer: lucca4 Signed
Date: 05/26/12 Title: Chapter 1: Miriam

I am on a Norah Jones kick right now, so when I saw the song lyrics in the summary I had to click on this story. And I am so, so glad that I did.

In the books Narcissa isn't really given a dark side (and I know this sounds off because she was married to a Death Eater, but apart from her nastiness in GoF we don't really see her doing anything horrible herself). I think that's part of the reason I fell in love with this fic so quickly. It's so easy to paint Narcissa as a delicate flower, obsessed with being safe and secure. This story completely counteracted that notion. You gave Narcissa a sort of strength and vindictiveness I haven't seen yet, and it worked brilliantly.

Your writing itself took my breath away. I had kind of guessed what would happen at the end, as I've listened to the song a fair amount of times, but the way you wrote it was just….I don't' even have words to describe it. I absolutely love the final two lines - they are absolute perfection.

Beautiful job with this story. I hope to read more of your fics in the future :).

xx Ariana

Author's Response: I love Norah Jones music too, it's awesome - her new album is practically begging for songfics. :) I'm glad you liked my characterization, I loathe that delicate flower thing as well so it's very nice to hear that my version of Narcissa worked. Thanks for such a lovely review! :)

I Will Lay Down My Heart by xxbabewithbrainsxx

Rated: 6th-7th Years • Past Featured Story

Here in the dark
In these lonely hours
I will lay down my heart
And I’ll feel the power
That you won’t

--I Can’t Make You Love Me by Bonnie Raitt

Albus realises just how much Rose means to him -- and how much he doesn’t mean to her.

This is babewithbrains of Ravenclaw writing for Round Two of Madam Alex’s Character Clinic Triathlon.

:) This story has been nominated for a 2012 Quicksilver Quill Award: Best Next Generation.

This story has also been nominated for a 2013 Quicksilver Quill Award: Best Next Generation. Thank you again! ♥

Reviewer: lucca4 Signed
Date: 02/11/13 Title: Chapter 1: I Will Lay Down My Heart

This is one of my favorite cousin!fics ever. I think it really comes down to the way you write Albus and Rose - their relationship as cousins is so perfect, they understand each other so well it's almost like they're best friends. Albus's hopelessness over Rose and his living with the knowledge that she will always love Scorpius more than she loves him is heartbreaking, and it makes his night with her at the end all the more bittersweet.

The flying scene is also beautifully written. It's so absolutely sweet of Albus to try to help Rose get over her fear of flying, especially when it's something he loves and is good at. The comfort Rose began to feel with him was also extremely well-written, I love the idea that the only one who can make her feel better is Albus, because that idea is also paralleled in the ending scene. The friendship between them is so real, and i can see why Albus would be the one Rose wanted to turn to when things got 'complicated' (to use Albus's word :D) with Scorpius -- I don't think she fully realizes just how deeply Albus cares for her, and just how much she is going to hurt him when the morning comes.

This is an absolutely fantastic story, Soraya, and I'm kicking myself for not reviewing it when I first read it. However much angst went into this, the end product was mind-glowingly gorgeous, and I hope you know that :).

xx Ariana

Author's Response: Thank youuuuuuu, Ariana! :D :D :D

It means so much to me that you enjoyed this story and left such a fantabulous review for it (you really didn't have to, but I am so glad you did :) ). I think the dynamics of Albus and Rose have always fascinated me because they are, arguably, closer than say Louis and Lily due to their parents being close. So I think the whole forbiddenness is a lot more prominent in this than in my Loulily stories. But anyway, I am so glad you liked how I wrote Albus and Rose -- I will say that writing parts of this was like laying eggs, so it means a lot that you liked how I wrote them as both cousins and lovers.

I have no idea why I decided to make Albus a Quidditch nut! But hehe, I did, and I'm glad you enjoyed that scene because it was one I could envision quite clearly, while others were more difficult/vague. And yeah, ultimately, Rose does depend on Albus -- a lot.

The friendship between them is so real, and i can see why Albus would be the one Rose wanted to turn to when things got 'complicated' (to use Albus's word :D) with Scorpius -- I don't think she fully realizes just how deeply Albus cares for her, and just how much she is going to hurt him when the morning comes. Not that I'm self-pimping in the slightest, but my Cotillion fic (one of them, anyway XD) is a companion piece to this and does actually include a scene (coughshowerscenecough) in the morning, if you're interested ;) I mean, that particular part isn't up yet, but it will be soon, fingers crossed.

I honestly think you are far too kind, Ariana, and it really isn't thaaaat good, but it means SO much to me -- coming from such an amazing writer yourself -- that you enjoyed this story. Thank you again for the loveliness! *heart*

Soraya xxx

Cartoon Heart by Padfoot11333

Rated: 3rd-5th Years •

Adrian didn't know how he'd fallen for her. He didn't want to.

And even though he could not think of leaving her, she acted, every moment, as if she could leave him without thinking twice.

Nominated for a 2013 Quicksilver Quill - Best Post/Hogwarts.

Reviewer: lucca4 Signed
Date: 09/30/12 Title: Chapter 1: be a bright red rose and come bursting the concrete

I think that the unsatisfying ending to this story is one of the best things about it. It's easy to write a story where everything works out all right, or where everything becomes hopeless, but to write an ending that's caught in that kind of purgatory between getting what you want and losing what you have is just beautiful.

The imagery and the style of this piece was incredibly well done. I'm a big believer in parentheses if they're used advantageously, which you did here -- they really help to show Adrian's thoughts in a third-person context. Daphne is one of my favorite characters to write and read about, and I really liked her characterization here…I see her as being kind of ephemeral, as well.

This is beautiful writing, Lily. It's short, but you've been able to sum up so much of their relationship in so few words. I think it's easy for readers to confuse the empathy they feel toward Adrian at the end with disappointment, but I hope you realize that this is far from a disappointing story. I don't usually tell people to discount negative reviews because I think the criticism helps you grow as a writer, but I don't agree with the first two reviews you received whatsoever, and I think the reason they're negative is that some people have certain preferences when reading romances (i.e., they like to see a happy ending) whereas I prefer a more realistic one like this. And it's so realistic. It's bittersweet -- my favorite kind of read -- and the way that you've executed it shows your maturity as a writer :). xx Ariana