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Dream Come True by rupertgrintlover13

Rated: 3rd-5th Years •
Summary: This is the story that every good Harry Potter fan wants to come true. I hope that I do it justice. Harry has Ginny. Ron has Hermione. Life is sweet…no catch. It’s the perfect dream come true.

It's all full of fluff and pixie dust!

All review get a response!
Reviewer: BJ Allen Signed
Date: 02/13/11 Title: Chapter 1: Home Sweet Home

"It's so FLUFFY!!"

Killer Instincts by Ginny Weasley Potter

Rated: 3rd-5th Years •
Summary: London: Four murders have taken place under bizarre circumstances, for what seems to be an equally bizarre reason.

Harry, a happily wedded man with a wonderful wife and a cute daughter, is an Auror at the Ministry of Magic and is now given a new case to solve with Ron and four other Aurors. Incidentally, the four Aurors include Ginny, Harry’s ‘schoolboy crush’; and it turns out to be much more than a crush when Harry sees her again. What’s more is that Harry is working upon a case that seems to connect to him directly. And once again, it opens up old fears: fears of losing loved ones.

Ron, on the other hand, seems to be tired of Hermione. Tempers are running high and fights are breaking out more often than usual. Are they really falling apart? Or can they sort this out before it is too late?

Then there is the case itself. Who is trustworthy, and who is not? Who is deadly enough to murder four people in cold blood?

Indulge into the gut-wrenching action, combined with warm romance and tingling suspense; while I tell you a story of love, ambition and obsession… a story of what those killer instincts can do. EDIT: MAJOR revamping going on, with regard to plot, characterisation, and general style of writing. I would urge you not to read this until I've removed this notice because I wasn't very good six years ago, and this is as bad as I was. *Places traffic cones*
Reviewer: BJ Allen Signed
Date: 11/08/09 Title: Chapter 20: Believe Me

... what?!? I thought she did it, then I thought she didn't, then I thought she did, and now I think she didn't! *grumbles incoherantly* Anyway, great story! I'll be waiting with bated breath for the next chapter!
PS Cliffies are evil. Amazing, but evil.

A Marriage Made at Hogwarts by hestiajones

Rated: 1st-2nd Years •
Summary: Draco Malfoy and Ronald Weasley loathed each other at Hogwarts, and little has changed over the years. No one in their right wand would have ever expected them to become in-laws. But Hogwarts is a funny place where many things become possible. And now, everyone has to accept it – Scorpius Malfoy and Rose Weasley are getting married today…
Reviewer: BJ Allen Signed
Date: 02/14/11 Title: Chapter 2: The Best Man

Eek! I love this story! You should update... soon. XD

The Dragon Does the Tickling by jenniferes

Rated: Professors •
Summary: After the war, Hermione returns to Hogwarts to complete her seventh year of studies as Head Girl, only to find Draco Malfoy has been appointed Head Boy. Her life is further complicated by the fact that Headmistress McGonagall is strongly encouraging Malfoy and her to attend one of the three wizarding universities in Europe after they graduate from Hogwarts. The story starts HG/RW, but the focus is on the development of HG/DM.
Reviewer: BJ Allen Signed
Date: 03/06/11 Title: Chapter 19: Chapter 19: Painful Dark Mark

Well, your story now has he hooked. I didn't care for the intimate scenes in the beginning, but you got better with them as the story continued. Either way, I'm addicted. Please update soon. XD

Author's Response: I'm glad you are enjoying the story more now. The next chapter is in the queue. --Jenny

Reviewer: BJ Allen Signed
Date: 03/26/11 Title: Chapter 23: Chapter 23: Preparing for Confrontation

Harry and Ron... Draco and Hermione... all in the same suite. This should go just /great/.
I love how Draco, the player, is the one pursuing an actual relationship and Hermione is still undecided. XD Funny.
I still love your story. It makes me all warm and fuzzy inside when I see you've updated... so you should update again. Soon. XD

Author's Response: I hope you like the way I handle all the relationships in the next couple chapters. You'll have to let me know. Thanks, Jenny

Reviewer: BJ Allen Signed
Date: 03/10/11 Title: Chapter 20: Chapter 20: Third Hogsmeade Weekend

All right, as an avid R/Hr shipper, I feel a bit guilty saying this, but FINALLY! Progress! I loved this chapter. Please update soon!

Author's Response: I'm an avid R/Hr shipper too, so imagine how I feel!?! But I'm having so much fun writing Draco/Hermione that I can't help myself. Thanks, Jenny

Reviewer: BJ Allen Signed
Date: 03/21/11 Title: Chapter 21: Chapter 21: Third Assault

Yay, they caught him! I'll admit, I thought Hermione might end up being his last victim, but, however romantic it might have been for Draco to save her, I'm still very glad I was wrong.
Hermione is being silly, though. She wants things with Draco to be /casual/?? I understand her reasoning, but still... a little sad.
Waiting with bated breath for your next chapter!

Author's Response: Thank you for the positive feedback! I guess I think of Hermione as the invincible one in the story... The next chapter is in the queue already, so you shouldn't have to wait long. --Jenny

The Darkness and the Light by ToBeOrNotToBeAGryffindor

Rated: 6th-7th Years • Past Featured Story

Harry Potter had seen death - a lot of death. Friends had passed in his lifetime, more so than any one person should ever experience, but how much is too much, even for the Chosen One?

Ron Weasley is dead, leaving behind his wife and his best mate. How can these two cope with their Trio being cut down to two? And when danger lurks in the shadows, can they find the strength to fight for one another?


Reviewer: BJ Allen Signed
Date: 02/26/11 Title: Chapter 13: Chapter 12 - Gambit

Okay, first off, please please /please/ tell me that there's some chance that Hope is really Ron's. I mean, I know it's more than a little unlikely, but I'm begging here.
This story is amazing, of course. You're writing style is, as always, engaging and intense; I've already cried more than once.
This is why I usually wait for stories to be finished before I start reading them, though. Now I have to wait for the next chapter! By the way, cliffies are evil. Amazing, but evil.
I'm trying to think up some constructive criticism, but I'm drawing a blank at the moment. All I've got for you right now are barrels and carts full of praise on a great story.
Please update soon!
PS Quick questions... do you have any relation whatsoever to Joss Whedon and/or do you believe in Murphy's Law?

Author's Response:

Hehe, I'm so not telling whose baby it is until it's the right time, and while Harry's trapped in a trunk and buried underground probably isn't it. :D

I live and die by the cliffie, I can't lie. Each successive chapter is meant to rachet up the tension and drive the story along, and considering the nature of the plot, it's almost necessary. I have, however, been trying to update faster as to not drive the readers batty with the cliffies. 

I have no idea how Joss Whedon is, but I definitely believe in Murphy's Law. Well, at any rate, I agree that the science of statistics and probability substantiate it, since for the most part, most actions have more negative outcomes than positive. That's what separates fluffy stories from dark/angst stories; one focuses on the nice things that come from the characters' decisions, and the other on the not so nice aspects.

Lovely review! Thanks for reading and stopping in to say hello, and as always, it is much appreciated.


In the Ashes by ToBeOrNotToBeAGryffindor

Rated: 6th-7th Years • Past Featured Story

In her seventh year, Katie Bell knew what it was like to fear death. A year later, she learnt what it was like to see it in front of her. Nothing she had ever experienced had prepared her to deal with the aftermath of that. And then he came.

Caught in a whirlwind of Quidditch, heartbreak, and a rivalry, Katie struggled with her jumbled mess of feelings, one of which she hadn't expected but was growing certain that she could never live without.




Oh my freaking Salazar! This story WON TWO 2011 Quicksilver Quill Awards: Best Post-Hogwarts Story and Best Non-Canon Romance Story. *flail*



This (late) update was brought to you by the (belated) birthday of the ever-lovely Hannah / h_vic. She is a star and an excellent friend!

Reviewer: BJ Allen Signed
Date: 02/23/11 Title: Chapter 10: Chapter 10

... all right, I love Katie, but she's a idiot sometimes!
I absolutely love this story so far! At first, I thought you might be going too fast, but now that I see where you were taking the story, I understand. I also love your portrayal of post-war Harry. A lot of stories paint him as happy and moving on with life, but it really seems in character for him to run himself out trying to do more for everybody. All in all, great fic! I can't wait for the next chapter.

Author's Response:

Well, one thing I wanted to portray in this story is that Katie has problems that she needs to work through, and being with Oliver, while sublime at times, just kept her from directly facing these problems. Her visiting Draco was one of the first steps she took on her own to regaining her mental fortitude. For both their sakes, they do need to get going in the right direction. :)

Thank you for reading and reviewing, and I'm glad you enjoy the story. 


A Mourning to Remember by hermy008

Rated: 3rd-5th Years •
Summary: A revealing tale starring everyone's favorite ginger and brunette pair. It's been a year since the defeat of Voldemort, but things are far from over. After a year of absence, Ron and Hermione are back again at Shell Cottage to help Fleur prepare the house for her baby shower. Needless to say, old memories come to the forefront and painful discoveries are made. Hearts are broken and healed again.
Reviewer: BJ Allen Signed
Date: 02/27/11 Title: Chapter 5: Chapter 5

... aww! This was so adorable, and intense, and... wow. Just wow. I'm crying and grinning all at once! If this had been your hundredth HP fic, this story would be amazing; seeing as it's your first, it's mind boggling. You're style is engaging, your characters are on par, and your emotional connections are... well, see the wow's above. It was a bit confusing at times, but that was a great way to portray their thoughts, since so rarely do people think linearly to begin with. All in all, great story! I hope to see more of your writing in the future.

Author's Response: wow, i can't begin to say my appreciation for that lovely review. its great to hear, it really is encouraging to a budding writer like me. thanks so much, thats just amazing of you to say. :)

A Touch Too Much by MerrryD

Rated: 6th-7th Years •
Hate. Anger. Happiness. Rage. Love. Contentment. Understanding. Emptiness. Loneliness. Jealousy. Despair. Numb. Cheerful.

Every day Lily Evans felt everything. She was on an emotional roller coaster full of heart-plummeting drops, stomach-losing loops, and nerve-racking climbs. How she managed to keep herself together she never quite understood.

One day, it all becomes too much and everything comes undone.
Reviewer: BJ Allen Signed
Date: 03/13/11 Title: Chapter 2: Chapter Two: Crush

So far, your story is great. You've got a good balance between James/Lily drama and angst. Please update soon!

Author's Response: Thank you! I'll try. I've already started chapter three. :) <3Mere

Return by Potters Redhead

Rated: 3rd-5th Years •
Summary: He showed his courage many times throughout his years at Hogwarts, but, when his 7th year comes to a close and Voldemort's power is rising rapidly, Harry Potter's determination collapses. Convinced that the world expects too much from him, he disappears into the muggle world.

Now, five years later, only Ginny, who is now an Auror fighting with the Order, still believes in Harry despite having heard not a word from him since the day he left. And as the war reaches a new level of disaster, she is determined to find him.
Reviewer: BJ Allen Signed
Date: 03/21/11 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

... okay, I'm fairly certain that I've read this before. Still, I liked it just as much this time around! The premise is great. Please update soon!

The Bride's Ballad by ToBeOrNotToBeAGryffindor

Rated: 1st-2nd Years •
Summary: Three brides rise with the sun on their special day, all with different perspectives and feelings about their big day
Reviewer: BJ Allen Signed
Date: 04/09/11 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Happy Birthday, Teh Bookworm!!
Okay, I admit that I cheated. I looked at the other reviews before I wrote my own. ^_^ I'll be honest and admit that I was confused about the first one, though Narcissa was my slight suspicion. The second one was a toss up between Ginny and Molly for me (I thought Ginny might be wearing a dress her mother made, since I couldn't see her making one herself), and I thought the third was Hermione. I'm very impressed with the rhyme scheme you've got going, and I loved the flow. Beautiful piece!

Author's Response:

Thank you so much! I'm glad you liked it, and Miss Bookworm will appreciate the good wishes.

The poem was written as a ballade, which is a convoluted pain in the butt, especially with the rhyme scheme I picked, but I figured that, if Emily Dickinson can cheat on rhymes, I could too, lol.

I wanted a measure of ambiguity wiht the brides, yet still maintain an identity that, once figured out, reconciles with what you know of the character as well as the content of the poem. In fact, all of your suspicions have merit, though I would think that, unless Molly really wanted to hand-make it, Harry would just fork out the Galleons for Ginny's dress.

Anyway, thank you for the visit, and I'm glad you enjoyed the poem. :)