Penname: ToBeOrNotToBeAGryffindor [Contact]
Real name: Jessica
Member Since: 08/29/09
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I am a recent member of the Harry Potter fandom, but I have always had a passion for the written word, and I hope to fulfill it here. I live in a relatively boring corner of Idaho, and I like Kokanee and a good book!

So, I suppose you're wondering what's up with my username. Even if you're not, this is how that happened. No, I was not aspiring to be a Gryffindor. I can't think of any house to which I would belong less than Gryffindor, in fact. It was a moment of clarity that I got while I was battling with myself about whether I should want to be Sorted into Gryffindor to be like Harry or to be Sorted elsewhere and follow my own path. I thought it to be much like the contemplative scene in Hamlet when he weighed taking his own life. I'm not trying to be melodramatic. That's simply is what popped into my head when I was trying to sign up to leave a review. :D

Any questions or comments about my work? Please shoot me an email at: tobeornottobeagryffindor@mugglenet.com — I'd love to hear from you!


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Stars or Carousels by Equinox Chick
Rated: Professors [Reviews - 10]

Summary: If you’re smart and funny, you’re popular. Add some undeniable good looks, and you become very popular.

A hero who will always get the girl.

But for James Sirius Potter, the girl he wants is unobtainable.

This is a present for Natalie (hestiajones) because not only is it her birthday, but she’s a fantabulous friend and an all round amazing person. (and I hope she doesn’t mind what I’ve done ... eeeep)

It’s possible that this pairing may squick you out. I appreciate people have different thoughts on this but advise you to keep an open mind until the end of the story.

Due to a VERY annoying glitch in the archives that won;t let readers access stories above 3rd-5th, I have TEMPORARILY lowered the rating. This story is STILL a PROFESSORS story. You click at your own risk.

Disclaimer: I am not JK Rowling, but if I were, then I’d be living in a huge house in London, with a basement, for teh flist, and buying Alex Turner especially for Natalie.

Winner of the Best Chaptered Next Generation Story in the 2012 QSQ awards. Thank you :D

Categories: Other Pairing Genre: Warnings: Sexual Situations, Strong Profanity

Word count: 10383 Chapters: 2 Completed: Yes
Published:
10/30/11 Updated: 11/01/11


Reviewer: ToBeOrNotToBeAGryffindor Signed
Date: 11/13/11 Title: Chapter 2: Chapter 2 - Carousels

Cryyyyyyy! I was so rooting for James. He'd grown up and found himself but still loved her. And she loved him. And they almost had some fabulous young people sex. *sniff*

Interesting twists with Myles and with the other girl. I was more surprised by the latter, although in retrospect I probably shouldn't have been (as this is a gift for Natalie). It added an entirely different dimension to Dom's crisis in figuring out what she wanted, never mind who. 

Shower scene = smouldering yet bittersweet.  In retrospect, it really gave me the sense that Dom hated her physical needs, as they were a primary source of her personal drama and angst (though in the fic we didn't know to what extent).

I think James is a true triumph in this story. He's so...different than I've ever seen him. Making him a writer isn't something that would've ever crossed my mind. Quidditch player? Yeah. Ministry employee? Still yeah. But a writer...and it suits his personality so well. He was the sole person to look past Dom's rather blatant inference about Myles to see that there was something far deeper than that. 

Anyway, my thoughts are winding dangerously into stupid and undefined territory, so I will leave you with a 'well done' and a squeeeeeeeee. Love the pairing. :)

~Jess



Author's Response: Thank you! Oh, James as a writer. Well, he fell into it almost by accident in High because having failed to get taken on by the Arrows (he thought he'd fly straight into the first team), Ginny wasn't going to let him sit on his arse all day, so she dragged him to the Prophet. He wrote a few Quidditch reporst with her based on the school matches, and then it took off from there. I have this Mystery bunny nibbling at my brain now, which would feature him and Scorpy. hee hee

Glad you liked the shower scene. Yeah, I think you're right that Dominique has this problem with being led by her desires. She's quite selfish in some ways and manipulative, but at the heart of it she just can't forget the mysterious 'M' and wants to be with her. I feel quite sorry for James though. I wanted some beautiful people sex too - hee hee. I need to find him some hot chick so he can move on from his cousin. *plot bunny expands*

Thank you very much for reviewing, Jess. It is very much appreciated. ~Carole~

 
Reviewer: ToBeOrNotToBeAGryffindor Signed
Date: 10/30/11 Title: Chapter 1: Stars

Aww, I was so rooting for James. You tricked me with a Prof rating. Cheeky woman!

Anyway, I really liked the characterisation; they really seemed like normal teenagers, up to no good and doing stuff they shouldn't behind their parents' backs. It reminded me of being that age, even if the time since that was the case is becoming alarmingly longer and longer, hehe. 

Great fic. Sizzling pairing. Heart heart heart you, and Natalie, too!

~Jess



Author's Response: Patience is virtue .... There shall be smut ... Croll hath spoken. I'm glad you like the pairing. I had this image of the pair of them dancing in High and thought UNF - because my James is so dark and she's so blonde (but not Veela blonde if that makes sense). Sometimes I like writing about beautiful people - hee hee. Thank you so much for the review, and I hoped you liked the Disclaimer ... ~Croll~

 

Betrayal/Regret by Gmariam
Rated: 3rd-5th Years [Reviews - 4]

Summary: A pair of sonnets that explore the betrayal and regret of the Marauders.

Categories: Poetry Genre: Warnings: Character Death

Word count: 234 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
11/06/11 Updated: 11/06/11


Reviewer: ToBeOrNotToBeAGryffindor Signed
Date: 11/06/11 Title: Chapter 1: Two sonnets

Gah, I already told you how much I love this, but I will do so again because I must. The motifs and characterisation are fabulous, despite having so few words to portray them. The rhymes are well done and read so easily. And the idea of reading about the same thing from different sides of the fence is fascination in term of character exploration, but they still match up so well in terms of language and style parallels.

So well done. I heart youuuuuuuuu!

~Jess



Author's Response: Thank you so much for the review, twin. And thank you for encouraging me to write this and then looking it over. Hopefully the tweaks worked, although there are things in that second one I still want to change, lol. We do love our sonnets, don't we? I just came across a sonnet I wrote about Lord of the Rings, even! Who knows, maybe I'll write more, it's a fabulous form and I can see why Shakespeare used it so much. ;) Thanks again for everything! *hugs* ~Gina :)

 

Somewhere Only We Know by Gmariam
Rated: 6th-7th Years [Reviews - 9]

Summary: Remus Lupin reflects on his past as he faces an uncertain future after the death of a close mentor.

Categories: Remus/Tonks Genre: Warnings: Character Death, Strong Profanity

Word count: 4732 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
11/13/11 Updated: 11/13/11


Reviewer: ToBeOrNotToBeAGryffindor Signed
Date: 11/13/11 Title: Chapter 1: Simple Things

Awww! This story is the perfect blend of sentiment, pensiveness, and reflection, but not too much of any one of them. I don't think I've ever come across a story where Remus would punch one of his mates, but it makes so much sense, considering their age at the time.

The camaraderie between the Marauders was brilliant, but what was even better was the bouts of tension and, most importantly, how they moved past them. It is obvious from every word that you know these guys just so very well. 

Well done, Twin! Boo to bad coding, but the story was excellent. 

~Jess



Author's Response: Thanks so much for the first and lovely review, twin! I really appreciate it. I'm glad it came off well, even Remus punching his best friend. I write what I see and believe about these characters so when someone agrees with it, that means I've done a convincing job, I suppose. I really enjoyed writing the tension between them--sometimes its more fun than the pranks. Hopefully my -- didn't distract you too much, lol. Thanks again for the review!! ~Gina :)

 

Christmas Alone by armagod679
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 1]

Summary: Tonks is spending Christmas alone.

Categories: Poetry Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 285 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
12/11/11 Updated: 12/12/11


Reviewer: ToBeOrNotToBeAGryffindor Signed
Date: 02/19/12 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Hi, Julie!

I remember this poem when it was brand new, and I've decided to pay you a visit and discuss it a little bit. The mousy-brown, sad Tonks is an interesting subject, one I'm surprised hasn't been broached in fanfic or poetry much before. There was just such a potent sense of melancholy in HBP when Tonks summons her Patronus and it was not 'hers'. It was probably the first emotion I'd felt toward Tonks in the whole series to that point, so basing poetry off of it is like an instant connection for me to that melancholy Tonks.

The format you used is interesting, with the three-lined, shorter verse, followed by the four-lined one. There are a couple things I found a bit puzzling about it, however. In the beginning, there seems to be a rhyme scheme, but after a few stanzas, it sort of trickles away. I think the rhyming *might* have been unintentional, but I would be interested in your input about it. Also, the formula seems to stumble a bit toward the end in places where the stanza format doesn't alternate in its regular fashion. A steady form probably would've helped the poem out a bit in terms of flow and visual aesthetics.

Anyway, on to more fun things! The phrase 'Is there anything lonelier than Christmas when you don't want anyone else there?' is so potent for me, because Christmas seems like a holiday that a boisterous person like Tonks would love, but her feelings for Remus and his refusal to act on them are taking that away from her. In my head, it's very much like someone stealing a child's lollipop. It makes me a bit cross with Remus, but having written him lately, I can't stay mad at him (especially after what I did :/ ).

A diary is such a Remus gift. I have him pegged as a diary-keeper, so it fits in my head as something he might try to do to help Tonks without risking comforting her in person.

Overall, this is a nice poem with a few things that could be tweaked to make it a great poem. I liked this when I modded it, and I still do now. Thanks for listening, and well done. I look forward to further poems from you. :)

~Jess

Author's Response: Thank you. I wasn't thinking in terms of poetry when I wrote it to tell the truth. I was just putting it down and at the end it was just more poetry than anything else. I'll look into tweaking it when I'm less busy. I'm really glad you enjoyed the subject. Julie

 

Dying Remnants of Halcyon Days by h_vic
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 3]

Summary: Katie's feelings for Oliver were written on her heart long ago in one perfect summer, but to him all they ever were was friends.

Now, Katie has to find to strength to face that's all they'll ever be and accept that he is engaged to someone else.

Categories: Other Pairing Genre: Warnings: Character Death, Substance Abuse

Word count: 1796 Chapters: 1 Completed: No
Published:
01/12/12 Updated: 01/21/12


Reviewer: ToBeOrNotToBeAGryffindor Signed
Date: 01/26/12 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

And finally, I am back on your review page. It’s been far too long, both since I’ve read something not queue-related and since you’ve graced MNFF with more of your gorgeous writing. I’m glad we’ve both amended such poor practices. For shame.

I remember telling you this on AIM, but I think the most stunning aspect of this story is its sheer simplicity. It has minor plot and a minor timeline, but both in just the right quantity to fit both the length and the almost sad nostalgia that the story was putting forth. It rather reminds me of the song Seasons in the Sun by Terry Jacks (and beautifully covered by Westlife :D ). Of course, this connection didn’t really click until I looked up the word halcyon (if I do say so myself, it isn’t often that I need to look up a word). The definition just fit the story so beautifully that I cried little fiction tears of joy at its splendour.

Never will stop marvelling at the plethora of ways you can portray Katie and Oliver yet make them all feel right. Every nuance of the characterisation, from Katie’s omnipresent ability to identify Oliver from the briefest of glances across a crowded room to Oliver’s ability to bark commands on the pitch but not even know what to say in an interpersonal relationship - they all feel so murky and perfect for how I picture them in my head. Of course, I don’t know if you could possibly get your OTP wrong, or that I believe you ever could (hence why you’ve made them my OTP, as well).

Katie makes me so sad. Not because she never got Oliver, but because she spent so much effort making up for the fact that she never really got over him. Hence trussing herself up in that dress that she never would’ve been caught dead in otherwise, wearing those monstrous shoes, and pasting a plastic smile on to smile fly in the face of this farce. I’m afraid that your Katie and mine have one more black mark on their character in common, though, and that’s a small streak of cowardice, running away from things that hurt instead of facing them down and rectifying them. In a way, she never really grew up in that fashion, pawning off her problems on distance and the passage of time, hoping they wouldn’t still be there when she got back. If only life worked that way.

I’d like to say Oliver was a fool for not choosing Katie, but in the end, the choice was made for him. If she had stuck around, something could’ve come of their relationship. They had the golden things that many couples never achieve between them: they were in ‘like’ with one another before the relationship progressed. Sure, it didn’t in the story, but I don’t entirely buy that Oliver say no flat out. Poor love, he’s quite inarticulate, so perhaps (maybe this is me being hopeful), he simply couldn’t find the words to convey what he wanted to convey to her. Even “I don’t know what to say” says volumes about what one means.

Of course, no review from me to you would be complete without extolling the excellence of your writing style. It’s so simple and clear, but elegantly so. I’m never in doubt as to what the story is about, but peeling back the surface layer, there is a haven of things to be gleaned. For instance, take Morag and Katie’s physical similarity. While it doesn’t seem like a coincidence, it’s not as clear-cut as Oliver liking that type of girl or missing Katie; it tells me that Oliver had just as many unresolved issues about the relationship built during that golden summer. Whether these issues are romantic, or simply hurt that she left without saying goodbye are unclear, but how it’s left up to the reader allows individuals to get from this story what they wish to, rather than what they’re told. Personally, I think Oliver figured out later that he’d had those sorts of feelings for her when she left but simply hadn’t realised it until the pang of absence sent it into stark relief.

There is nothing one cannot love about this story. It is both warm and cold all at once, but it’s got so much packed into it for the word count it has: character, plot, angst, romance, and that desire to know more but not the necessity in order to understand and to gain from it. It is, in short, a perfect snapshot piece. If I could, I’d wrap myself in it. Thank you so, so much for writing it for me. This review falls short of what I really want to say, as it would’ve done had I attempted a review on spewswap, but you know me so well. I sincerely hope that you never get sick of me being like this, because as your writing steadily gets better with age, you will forever find ways to steal my breath with your, dare I say it, halcyon words. And, to think, these were meant all for me.

~Jess

 

The Final Walk by hestiajones
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 2]

Summary: The Snitch is open; the Ring is out.

A poem written for the Anniversary Challenge at Poetry Anyone? in the beta forums.

Categories: Poetry Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 167 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
02/28/12 Updated: 02/28/12


Reviewer: ToBeOrNotToBeAGryffindor Signed
Date: 02/28/12 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Um, flaility flail flail!

This is gorgeous and jealousy-inducing. It's so rich in emotion and gives me the wibblies just like The Forest Again. So very well done, and I'll be damned if you don't win this one, too!

~Jess

Author's Response: YAY! Glad you liked it :D

 

Summary:

Michael Corner muses on his short-lived relationship with Daphne Greengrass.

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Originally a drabble written for the amazing Jess/ToBeOrNotToBe…in the SBBC's Musical Drabble Exchange. It was based off the song "Ain't that a B*tch" by Aerosmith and the title is taken from the lyrics of that song.

A big thank you to Natalie, the impeccably wonderful beta for this in its drabble form.

Winner of the 2012 Quicksilver Quill Award - Best Non-Canon Romance.

Categories: Other Pairing Genre: Warnings: Character Death, Sexual Situations, Suicide

Word count: 1198 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
03/04/12 Updated: 03/04/12


Reviewer: ToBeOrNotToBeAGryffindor Signed
Date: 03/05/12 Title: Chapter 1: love is like a wrong turn on a cold night

Gahhhh, so prettyyyyy!

I really should review this properly, but all I can muster are incoherent flails. This just oozes the song so well, and I think you picked a great pairing to represent it. Michael's dystopia was interweaved nicely throughout the story, giving it a rich sense of foreboding and sickly anticipation for the inevitable knowledge that nothing lasts forever, but some things even less time than they should.

Anyway, I shall stop rambling and commend you for not only having an expert hold on the type of story I like, but also chanelling the essence of a song that I'm sure you'd never heard of until the exchange. Ta, and *squish*!

~Jess

Author's Response: Yay! You have no idea how happy I was to hear that you liked it before the authors were revealed. Thanks so much for leaving a review - and also for introducing me to the song…it's now on one of my 25 most played on my iPod :). xx Ariana

 

No Line On The Horizon by welshdevondragon
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 4]

Summary: Past Featured StoryGinny looks out of her dormitory window, and thinks of the line on the horizon, and the boy beyond.

Originally written for The Random Song Title Challenge at Poetry Anyone on the forums, where to my utter surprise, it came third place.

Categories: Poetry Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 280 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
05/15/12 Updated: 05/15/12


Reviewer: ToBeOrNotToBeAGryffindor Signed
Date: 06/01/12 Title: Chapter 1: No Line On The Horizon

Wow! What a gorgeous, lush poem, Alex! It manages to be romantic and sullen all at once without too much of each. Ginny has the same thoughts as other girls her age should have: does the boy she likes miss her as much as she misses him. It really grounds the poem and gives it a base with which readers can touch and identify. Yet you illustrate the angst over the war and what it means to both of them and their relationship really well. Yes, they both do have bigger things to worry about, yet in the moonlight, she can't help it. It really shows human nature to worry about things that should be far more trivial in times of crisis, which is a great tool to reach an audience, I think. The big things weigh and loom, but in a shadow within a shadow, the small things add up and sometimes affect us more than the Big Thing.

The motif of distance in comparison with the horizon is a fascinating one. The horizon is a tricky thing, so it really adds to the uncertainty of Ginny's situation. Not only does she have no idea where Harry is location-wise, she doesn't have a clue when he'll get back, and the imagery of the jagged horizon works well with that idea and really works well for your poem in general.

Overall, I think the structure works. I don't remember what it was supposed to look like originally, but the indented sections create an engaging visual effect. And all of this compiles into a fabulous poem. Very well done!

~Jess

 

The Grey Between by Equinox Chick
Rated: 3rd-5th Years [Reviews - 5]

Summary: The note arrived on his desk without fanfare, so when he opened it, Harry had no idea its contents would change his life.

If he had known, would he still have read?

For the note was from Malfoy. Harry had something of his, and he wanted it back.

Disclaimer: I am not JK Rowling. I am not even a pale imitation.

This story is for the marvellously wonderful and kickass Jess (ToBeOrNotToBeAGryffindor) who despite her long username deserves muchos amour today on her birthday. ~ Enjoy!

Rating temporarily lowered because of a prissy glitch. This story is 6th-7th.

Categories: Harry/Draco Genre: Warnings: Sexual Situations, Strong Profanity

Word count: 8067 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
06/02/12 Updated: 06/02/12


Reviewer: ToBeOrNotToBeAGryffindor Signed
Date: 06/02/12 Title: Chapter 1: The Grey Between

*flail*

Seriously, yo. Major flailage to the lushness of this fic, and yay for you writing it for meeeeee!

Author's Response: The fact that I've jolted you from your usual measured reviews means more to me than 10,000 SPEW reviews (well, possibly). Glad you enjoyed it and I'm giggling at the flailing. ~Carole~

 

Safe and Sound by welshdevondragon
Rated: 6th-7th Years [Reviews - 9]

Summary: Past Featured Story

“They locked me up. Told me you weren’t real, told me I’d imagined you, told me you were no better than a voice in my head.”

“I
am real. And if I wasn’t, I wouldn’t let you wake up.”


The Ravenclaw boy and the mad, quiet Slytherin girl.

Inspired by the Taylor Swift and Civil Wars song Safe and Sound.

This is a slightly belated birthday present for the wonderful Jess/ToBeOrNotToBeGryffindor. She is someone I feel very lucky to call a friend, and hope she has a fantastic year.

Nominated for the 2012 Best Non-Canon Romance and Best Dark/Angsty Quicksilver Quills.

Categories: Dark/Angsty Fics Genre: Warnings: Dubious Consent, Mental Disorders, Self Injury, Sexual Situations, Strong Profanity

Word count: 4008 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
06/05/12 Updated: 06/05/12


Reviewer: ToBeOrNotToBeAGryffindor Signed
Date: 06/05/12 Title: Chapter 1: One-shot

I will review properly at some point, but oh my Prongs, this is just amazing. It's dark and uncouth and horrible and ugly and beautiful and just kind of perfect. None of that makes sense, but I don't know what else to say. :3

Thank you so much for this. It was a brilliant drabble, but this is by far richer and darker and so much fuller. You are divine.

Author's Response: I'm so glad you liked it :) I was amazed at how highly you thought of the drabble, and so am delighted you thought the expanded version was a story which brightened (or not, given the content...) your birthday week! Thanks for the review, and your squeeing is lovely- Alex

 

Another Horcrux Down by WeasleyMom
Rated: 3rd-5th Years [Reviews - 19]

Summary: Past Featured StoryThis story is a missing moment from Harry Potter and the Deathly Hallows. We know Ron and Hermione descend into the Chamber of Secrets in search of basilisk fangs, and we know they succeed. But what exactly happened down there? This story provides a possible answer to that question.

This is WeasleyMom of Hufflepuff writing for the Illustration for Inspiration Challenge in the Great Hall.

My inspiration was a drawing done by Carole/EquinoxChick, featuring Hermione's hand stabbing the cup with a basilisk fang. Thanks, Carole! You unknowingly pushed me to write something I've had in my head since DH came out.

Thrilled to announce this story tied for third place in the challenge!

Holy Hufflepuff! This won a 2012 QSQ Award for Best Canon Romance, one-shot! I am thrilled and so, so grateful!



Categories: Ron/Hermione Genre: Warnings: Mild Profanity

Word count: 5132 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
07/01/12 Updated: 07/01/12


Reviewer: ToBeOrNotToBeAGryffindor Signed
Date: 10/25/12 Title: Chapter 1: one-shot

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In canon, this is oft a Gryffindor realm,
But several times, the Slyths took the helm.
Here, on the boards, the Badgers win tidily,
But methinks the rest could come roaring back mightily!



Author's Response: I feel so used. ;)

 

Wind's Nocturne by Acacia Carter
Rated: 3rd-5th Years [Reviews - 14]

Summary: Past Featured StoryThere is magic the likes of which humans can barely remember and seldom experience. There is, however, a handful of men privileged enough to experience a part of it: the Dryad's Consorts.

Written for the last third of Madame Alex's Character Triathalon!

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Many thanks to Maple for the beta; I couldn't see myself sending this one to anyone else.

Anything you recognise is JKR's. Anything you don't recognise is possibly mine, but probably JKR's.

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Wood-nymphs, more commonly known as Dryads, are first and last mentioned in the Potterverse by Fleur in Goblet of Fire. In Greek mythology, these cunning magical creatures are entirely female, and must capture and seduce human men in order to bear daughters and heirs to their forests. In other works of literature they are described as bold and highly territorial, with voracious, er, "appetite" for particular intimate activities. So, basically a shy Herbologist's every fantasy...



Categories: Other Pairing Genre: Warnings: Character Death, Sexual Situations

Word count: 7649 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
08/19/12 Updated: 08/19/12


Reviewer: ToBeOrNotToBeAGryffindor Signed
Date: 09/04/12 Title: Chapter 1: Wind's Nocturne - One-Shot

This story is so. Freaking. Cool.

I suppose I vaguely had an idea what a dryad/wood nymph was before I read this, but you really brought her purpose, her existence, the essence of her soul to life. Now I can't imagine a wood nymph being anything else but what you've shown here.

Merlin, the research you would've had to do! But I think it's worth it, as this story is a feat in itself. Had I know that this is what you were writing, I would've answered your CCT question right away instead of wibbling over it. Not only is this indelibly an original character fic, it's unique and incredible.

Naturally, you don't write much fic without Neville, but he is, of course, the only choice for this role. Who else but he is worthy of the gift of a dryad's love? And Melea does love him in whatever way she can, I think.

Now, on to Melea. You have imbued her with a splendid role, as both a mother and protector of the forest, but as a being with a measure of free will, one that allows Neville to live his life in the human world and trusts him to come back to her. I think she realises that he is a man in a million who would actually keep his promise to do so.

As I read your descriptions of the wind's nocturne, the song of the forest, I think I felt a little of what Neville did. There is just a deep level of understanding forged into those words, the words neither Melea nor Neville could ever find, that allowed me, a mere human, a glimpse into that world and understand its unfaltering power. It's a powerful bit of writing and completely unfair that I will never be able to do that. Kudos for that little shudder of delight.

Perhaps, though, the most heady of triumphs in this story is how you managed to encapsulate the important parts of the relationship between Melea and Neville. Watching him grow older in bounds was not sudden, but an intuitive glimpse into Melea's perception of his much more fragile life cycle, but while her own dwindles, as well. Staying alive while feeling the call of death to introduce her daughter to her inheritance and her paternity was an amazing gift from Melea to Althaea. I feel honoured almost that I got to witness it, like one marvels at once-in-a-lifetime natural events or a monumental turn in history. That was a incredible piece of writing.

All in all, I am ridiculously happy that you wrote this story and that you shared it with us. Whatever reads/reviews this has currently, it isn't enough, and I'm very put out that I have to wait a year to nominate it for a QSQ. So very excellent. Thank you. Just...thank you.

~Jess

 

Footprints in the Sand by Equinox Chick
Rated: 6th-7th Years [Reviews - 8]

Summary: It was a summer like any other for Danny. He worked at his parents' Bed and Breakfast during the day and partied hard on the beach at night. He played the game, and played it well. But then he met Oliver Wood, and his life was irrevocably changed.

This is Equinox Chick and this is my entry for the OC challenge in the Character Clinic. This is the Shipping Prompt. (and has nothing to do with ships - hee hee.)

Disclaimer: I am not JK Rowling. Sadly Oliver Wood belongs to her, but Danny is mine.

My protagonist, Danny, was briefly mentioned in my story Drowning, not Waving. This is his story and has been written nearly a year after Jess (ToBeOrNotToBeAGryffindor) asked me to write it.

This story won the 2013 QSQ for Best SSP and Danny won the 2013 QSQ for Best Original Character. I thank the judges, very much.

Categories: Same-Sex Pairings Genre: Warnings: Sexual Situations, Strong Profanity, Violence

Word count: 9481 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
08/31/12 Updated: 08/31/12


Reviewer: ToBeOrNotToBeAGryffindor Signed
Date: 08/31/12 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Gahhhhhhhhhhh! *flailflailflail*

Even knowing what happens in this story, I was entranced. Danny is just so lush. I love his cool confidence and put-on nonchalance about his dalliances. I think the fleeting nature of them affects him more than he wanted to or allowed anyone else to believe.

Oliver was very reminiscent of the withdrawn bloke we saw in DNW, but his excellence in sports and laser-like focus when it comes to it were very much canon. However, the way he most stood out is how you made him your own. The young man who stood in front of a prone Danny and took a lashing from Robert was the man who went back to Hogwarts and fought in the battle. You brought that full circle subtly, and it was greatly appreciated.

I loved the minor characters in this, like Mike the Twat Cricket Player, Kay the Slutty Sister Who Enjoyed Her Conquests, Robert the Bastard Git Dad Who Needs to Rot in Fiendfyre, and Mum the One Who Knows What Needs to Be Done To Protect Her Boy and Her Family. And that was obnoxious to type. Anyway, I just thought the cast was well-played in roles that make sense and intermixed well to help set up the story.

Gah. My lovely boys. I was grinning like an idiot while they were messing around, and I actually thought Oliver's lovemaking was in character, if that makes sense. The boy is good with his hands, but he was firm and focused on what he wanted to do. And Danny, the dear, he definitely cared about Oliver enough to help him into it. I know most girls shrink off at the thought of oral, so that Danny wanted Oliver to be comfortable spoke volumes about the difference between his thing with this 'grockle' and the others who had come before.

And yayyyy, the book signing! I'm glad Oliver had that chance to be confident in who he was (both as a wizard amongst Muggles and as a gay man) to shout it to the whole bookstore that he was the one Danny wrote about. And then the note. Unf. Say YES to the hut, my loves. If only to be a leering fly on the wall...

This was a gorgeous fic, Carole, and I have brought you nothing but flailage. However, it is all I have to offer in turn for this stunning character portrait. Thank you for writing this, and thank you for giving Oliver the chance to meet Danny and learn to be what he is and not what is expected.

~Jess

Author's Response: Thank yooooooooooo *flaiiiiiiils* at the review. I did, in the end, ebjopy writing this. there were parts when i wanted it to die in fiendfyre - ha ha - especially when I knew I had to write the violence because I really didn't want Danny to get hurt, but it had to be done :( because I'd already written it in DNW. Why do I do such foolish things without thinking of the consequences?!! Silly Croll!

Ah, Mike-the Twat - ha ha. I dk why he became such a twat. Originally he was going to be Dan's best friend, but that didn't work very well, so he became a prat. Kay I rather liked. i now imagine her getting knocked up by one of her conquests and living forever in the fading seasdie town ... unless she marries Mike the Twat.

Glad you spotted Danny's insecurity. I think he's so used to holiday flings not working out that he had more or less given up, but then Oliver wasn;t his usual pretty boy. Hmm, I wonder if it would have worked out. I think the fact that he was a Muggle was a barrier, but also Oliver is so focused on Quidditch and winning, would he really find time for Danny. When he's older, however ... But *sigh* Cedric will always be in the way.
,br> So pleased I made you flail. I got so much satisfaction finally getting this written, so anything else is a bonus, but flailage is wonderful! Thanks again ~Carole~

 

Summary: Past Featured StoryShe wasn't ready, he had always known that. She pushed herself too hard, too fast, and when it all began to get too much, Katie didn't know how to handle it.

And Oliver knew that he didn't have the power to help.

Categories: Other Pairing Genre: Warnings: Self Injury, Sexual Situations, Strong Profanity

Word count: 3898 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
08/13/13 Updated: 08/13/13


Reviewer: ToBeOrNotToBeAGryffindor Signed
Date: 08/13/13 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

This is a stunning story, and so much different than your regular style. If I didn't know beforehand that you'd written it, I never would've figured it out by guessing. The pure tactile, physical nature of it, along with the sensuality, make it gritty, passionate, and so very much up my alley!

Oliver, to me, was a refreshing departure from the man-child we left off with in Prisoner of Azkaban. Yes, he's got the drive, the competitive nature, and the drive to not only succeed but to propel those around him, as well; however, he is also the kind of man who would come back, risking life and limb, to fight in the Battle of Hogwarts. There is a tempered sense of humanity about him that might've been lacking in the third book, where he was willing to let Harry ride the Firebolt without a full inspection.

I think this is a good change from his younger self because it shows that he recognises that Katie matters more than her ability to contribute to the team, that her state of mind isn't defined by her will or her refusal to acknowledge weakness in herself. But also, it allows him to see her for her, not as a cog in the team machine, but as someone he cares about and eventually falls in love with.

As for Katie, I think you built a really important set of variables in her attitude to set up the self-harm scenario. First off, she was defensive and refused help; second, she was abnormally driven and unwilling to consider her own health; finally, she cut out Oliver from her life -- not, I suspect, because she was angry with him so much as his potential role in ending her cutting, which she used like a security blanket when she announced that it was her body to do with as she pleased.

Their romance was built gradually, which really emphasised Oliver's desire not to push her too far. But more than that, I think it allowed Oliver, as the narrator, to open up the door to the critical issues in the story by showing the signs to me as the reader that she was in trouble but make them subtle enough that it takes him some time to figure it out. Coupling that with the romantic tension that evolved into a more sexual relationship makes it feel like a train wreck waiting to happen between them.

One theme in this story that I felt was important was agency -- free will. It was woven so tightly into the story that one cannot help but think about it. Did Oliver violate Katie's right to her own body by thwarting her spot on the team (which is what I assumed happened after he found out she was cutting, though it wasn't directly stated), since he probably never would've found out about it had they not been in an intimate relationship? It's a great question to pose in a story, and the answer could mean several things to several people.

With what I see, I think Oliver did the right thing, because when Katie invited him into her heart and her life, she did grant him a place of prominence in her life and her decision-making. Not noticing a stranger or casual acquaintance's self-harm issue is one thing; no moral onus is put on passers-by for not intervening. But when someone is entwined into a person's daily life and has a vested interest in the other's emotional/physical/spiritual health, one does whatever is necessary to preserve their loved one, as well as their own peace of mind. A man like Oliver, especially as portrayed in the story, doesn't seem the type to be able to sleep at night knowing he could help and didn't.

Your writing style is so clean and bare here, which allows the story to speak for itself. There are a lot of powerful aspects of the fic, ones that are raw and aching; allowing them to shine rather than utilising copious metaphor, simile, parallelism, or what have you really gives it a chance to connect to readers on all levels. Where I think it's particularly sharp is when Oliver first confronts Katie about her cutting. The narrative voice isn't romantic or condemning or tragic, but rather it steps aside to let me feel Oliver's aching for her along with him without couching it in hidden meaning. That honesty is one of the story's biggest strengths for that reason.

Overall, this is a great fic. The characterisation was rich, well-considered, and raw. Coupled with crisp storytelling and careful themes, it is by far my favourite story of yours I've ever read. I am not just saying this because it was a gift for me, but rather because I genuinely feel like you hit so many homeruns with this that it can't help but float to the top. Very, very well done, and thank you very much for this beautiful gift.

*hugs*

Jess

 

Voices of the Brethren by minnabird
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 1]

Summary: Past Featured StoryAn aisling on the state of wizards' relations with the so-called "magical brethren" depicted in the Ministry Atrium.

Categories: Poetry Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 213 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
02/05/14 Updated: 02/06/14


Reviewer: ToBeOrNotToBeAGryffindor Signed
Date: 03/13/14 Title: Chapter 1: Poem

I would keysmash, but autocorrect doesn't do well with that. Your poetry takes my breath away, as usual. I think the best part is how you captured the various cast of the fountain, but colored by their respective views on not only their place on the fountain, but in the world.

Short but sweet, this poem has no less of your brand of magic than usual, but with an unexpectedly captivating subject. Well done!

-Jess

 
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