Penname: ToBeOrNotToBeAGryffindor [Contact]
Real name: Jessica
Member Since: 08/29/09
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I am a recent member of the Harry Potter fandom, but I have always had a passion for the written word, and I hope to fulfill it here. I live in a relatively boring corner of Idaho, and I like Kokanee and a good book!

So, I suppose you're wondering what's up with my username. Even if you're not, this is how that happened. No, I was not aspiring to be a Gryffindor. I can't think of any house to which I would belong less than Gryffindor, in fact. It was a moment of clarity that I got while I was battling with myself about whether I should want to be Sorted into Gryffindor to be like Harry or to be Sorted elsewhere and follow my own path. I thought it to be much like the contemplative scene in Hamlet when he weighed taking his own life. I'm not trying to be melodramatic. That's simply is what popped into my head when I was trying to sign up to leave a review. :D

Any questions or comments about my work? Please shoot me an email at: tobeornottobeagryffindor@mugglenet.com — I'd love to hear from you!


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Inch of Dust by the opaleye
Rated: 6th-7th Years [Reviews - 17]

Summary: When George thinks of her, he thinks of Fred.

So, he tries not to think at all.

Nominated for a 2011 Quicksilver Quill Award in Best Dark/Angsty, Best Canon Romance, and Best Post Hogwarts.

Categories: Other Pairing Genre: Warnings: Sexual Situations, Strong Profanity

Word count: 2636 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
07/03/11 Updated: 07/05/11


Reviewer: ToBeOrNotToBeAGryffindor Signed
Date: 07/07/11 Title: Chapter 1: Inch of Dust.

At this point, it's almost ridiculous for me to review, as I have nothing coherent to say that hasn't already been said. Suffice it to say that you make my monitor weep for joy every time something you've written comes on it. Simply gorgeous.

~Jess



Author's Response: Thanks, Jess :) Well, if you're lost for words then I'll take it as a good sign, eh? - Julia xD

 

Monochrome by Equinox Chick
Rated: 3rd-5th Years [Reviews - 9]

Summary: Remus Lupin is an outsider by the very nature of his condition. But whilst his friends dream in colour, his nights are monochrome. It doesn't disturb him much, it's just the way he is.

Then a late night conversation changes his mindset in a way that scares him and makes him wonder what he actually 'is'. He cannot feel that way - not about Sirius Black.

OMM&P This jointly won BEST SSP QSQ at the 2011 awards. Thank you. And yay for Ariana who wrote Two to Tango - the other winner.

I am not JK Rowling, in fact I'm not even sure I'm Equinox Chick at this moment ...

This story is for Gina (Gmariam) who is celebrating her 21st birthday. :) It is a measure of how much I adore her that I'm writing this pairing for her.

Thank you very much, Kara (Karaley Dargen) for beta'ing this story for me.

Thanks also for teh flist for sticking by me when I was haranguing them. I owe you.

Due to an MNFF glitch, I have lowered the rating on this to 3rd-5th so people can read it. However this is normally a Professors rating. You click at your own risk.



Categories: Remus/Sirius Genre: Warnings: Sexual Situations, Strong Profanity

Word count: 6278 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
07/19/11 Updated: 07/19/11


Reviewer: ToBeOrNotToBeAGryffindor Signed
Date: 07/22/11 Title: Chapter 1: Dreams

I should really be working on my SPEW Swap story, but I couldn't resist anymore. Riding along while you plotted and shaped this story, not to mention a rather colourful chat about the logistics of aquatic activities, there was no way I could miss this.

Honestly, this is pretty much the way I'd always pictured the Remus/Sirius dynamic. There was always a sort of tension between them, even after Remus knew that Sirius hadn't caused James and Lily's deaths, which was likely just hard-to-displace seeds of mistrust and that one of them had grown up a bit more than the other. But a girl can dream, eh? 

Honestly, I was expecting a nice round of hearty smut, but again, you managed to far exceed expectations (pun not intended but giggly nonetheless). The story fits into canon well and still manages to keep the characters so wonderfully them. Even when they're younger, they're distinct. And the way you used their already-present fears and desires to fuel their trysts was well done, as well.

Shame on Sirius for taking advantage of Remus! But I can see that happening. :/ He was just that needy boy who took more than he gave, and Remus was just so willing to give and give, just for a taste of what Sirius had to offer.

I do wonder if their final sexual encounter would've happened if they hadn't stumbled upon Lily and James getting it on. My theory is that Sirius was a bit jealous but also turned on by the sight of James getting off. Poor Remus. But you managed to fix that by having the true Miss Outstanding give him what he'd truly needed: someone who gave more than they took.

I really enjoyed the understated presence of the grading scale. It seems more youthful and child-like than the X-out-of-10 that tends to be the norm. It adds a bit of magical interest into otherwise typical thoughts of teenage boys. Plus, the let-down about Grace's jugs was quite symbolic of Sirius's newfound lack of interest/attraction to them. 

I had a feeling when Sirius mentioned that he and James had went off in fourth-year and messed about with Grace that the ending was going to be what it was. But it was no less heartbreaking when it happened, though. I wanted to hug Remus and punch Sirius, though it wasn't his fault. Gah, I love how screwed up people are, hehe.

Lovely story, Carole, and I'm happy that, if I am to shirk my duties, that it was with you. :)

~Jess



Author's Response: I do wonder if their final sexual encounter would've happened if they hadn't stumbled upon Lily and James getting it on. My theory is that Sirius was a bit jealous but also turned on by the sight of James getting off. That's exactly right. Whilst I think Sirius would have wanted to take things further anyway, there was a kind of desperation in him that wanted to feel what James had with Lily. If it had happened later, when he'd considered it more, rather than leaping on Remus to assuage his own needs, then perhaps he could have stopped desiring James so much and been happy with Remus. And he was happy, I think, until he saw the real evidence that James was wholly hetrosexual.

Thank you, by the way, for such a lovely and well thought out review. It warms the cockles of me 'eart, luv! (Nice cockney expression for you, although I'm not a cockney - ha ha)

I <3 you. ~Carole~

 

Lacuna Mentis by hestiajones
Rated: 3rd-5th Years [Reviews - 29]

Summary: Past Featured StoryThere were blind spots in his mind. They said he might recover the lost memories; they also said there was a high possibility he might not. Along came a girl, and everything changed.

Warning: This story is originally rated Professors, for the bunch of warning tags applicable to it. The rating has been changed temporarily only because we're having some technical problem with stories that have higher ratings. So, please click at your own discretion.

This story is written for ToBeOrNot..../Jess, my close friend and one of the most gifted writers I know. O Believer of Rarepairs, this is my fluff-free, dark and angsty present for you.

Winner of this year's QSQ Best Dark/Angsty and nominated for Best General!

DISCLAIMER: I am not J.K.Rowling. I highly doubt she ships this ship.

PLEASE DO NOT READ THE REVIEWS before reading the fic.

Categories: Dark/Angsty Fics Genre: Warnings: Character Death, Mental Disorders, Sexual Situations, Strong Profanity, Suicide, Violence

Word count: 10460 Chapters: 3 Completed: Yes
Published:
07/19/11 Updated: 07/19/11


Reviewer: ToBeOrNotToBeAGryffindor Signed
Date: 07/19/11 Title: Chapter 3: Chapter 3

At the best of times, one may rely on words to nurse one’s way through periods of incoherence, despite not having a single orderly thought. I’m going to go out on a limb and say this is one of those times.

Theo. Parvati. Padma. Death. Could this be any more sickeningly gorgeous? I don’t think so, because my mind = kablooey! I’m not sure how you’ve done it, but you managed to take everything I thought I knew about post-battle minor characters and topple it. Just the way it was written and formed with such certainty, it had to have happened. There couldn’t be any other possible outcome.

I think what struck me right away about the story was that, save for the memory lapses, Theo reminded me a lot of myself. He was quiet, didn’t talk to many people, and worked a job generally considered a waste of his talent. Whether you did so intentionally or not, it immediately wrapped me up in the story and made me care about Theo. I felt the need to know what he was missing in his memory just as much as he did, and I was trying to work out who both the ‘Healer’ and the dark-haired mystery girl were from the get-go.

The kicker for me about Theo is when his St Mungo’s record was shown. I couldn’t help but think that someone like him couldn’t possibly be capable of stuff like this. He just seemed so level-headed and mellow. Ironically, the only part of his ‘rap sheet’ I found plausible as you portrayed him was the killing in self-defence, since he was considered on the side of bad by many and could easily have been attacked. It also ended up being the worst thing he’d ever done in his life, which ends up a giant plot twist in the end. How fabulous. :D

What you did with Parvati-come-Padma was so subtle. I was so sure that she was the mystery girl. So sure! And Padma had to be the ‘Healer’, who was studying her sister’s supposedly unbalanced boyfriend. Normally, when I have an inkling of plot lines, I end up being right, so I can’t tell you how refreshing it is that I was completely wrong. It was a mystery of different proportions, unlike the gumchew stories typically associated with the genre. This mystery was about people and about loss and about wondering whether certain things are better left unexplored.

I think one of the most interesting parts about this story is the lack of other surrounding characters. There were a couple here and there, but the story was strictly focused on Theo and Padma/Parvati and their points of view. It really adds to the myopia of both of them. Theo really isn’t bothered to know or care about other people until he meets this girl he feels like he should know, and Padma is so attuned to her mission of getting back at him for what he ‘did’. Without the distraction of a supporting cast, I could really get into the main characters’ points of view and what they were feeling.

But the most victorious part of the story is the end. I mean… I am gobsmacked. I knew from the end of the second chapter that the Healer character was plotting to kill Theo, likely over the events that he can’t remember, but holy hell, what it was and how it happened was breath-taking. By then, I just KNEW that Theo couldn’t have done anything so terrible, despite what his medical history said. It didn’t feel right at all, but when I saw what all those things actually meant, I wanted to hex Padma. She never bothered asking him what happened, at the very least to see if he was willing to lie to her. Being a Ravenclaw doesn’t in the slightest mean that she is either fair-minded or into justice in the sense of the law. However, being distraught as she was, I can forgive her for not wanting to know more about what happened in favour of making him as miserable as she was until it was time to strike.

And then she killed him! Oh my ever-loving Prongs, she killed him! I almost thought he’d get through to her, explain to her what happened, but he didn’t. He just dared her to kill him and be done with it. It seemed like he was so sickened by what he remembered that he didn’t want to remember anymore, and her bloodlust was a quick means to that end. But then how will she know what she’s done? Gah, this will drive me mad, I swear. I feel this intense need to find her, shake her violently, and tell her what she’s done to an innocent man. You rob me of my sanity, Natalie, you really do! I love how I can be so worked up over the end of a story.

Overall, I have concluded that you are positively genius and that I will love you even more than I already do forever. I know how hard you slaved on this (in hindsight), so that you did it for me will always be a monument of the sort of person you are: genius writer, master plotter, rarepair aficionado, and above all, stellar friend.

I heart you so much!

~Jess

 



Author's Response: I haven't responded yet because I couldn't think how to do it. This review is absolutely gorgeous and I feel like all the efforts were worth it.

I knew I was going to write Theo for you from the start, although I hadn't decided on his lover. Quite a few have written Theo/Susan so well, so I thought I'd try something different. Perhaps, if I had been writing this for someone else, it would have been a romantic story, above all. But it was for you, someone who can off Teddy. Someone who has no problem reading gore. I decided I could just go no-holds-barred.

When I finally got round to starting it, I had no plot on my hands. All I knew was that it had to be dark, demanding and tragic. It began with Theo as an amnesiac. Then Padma entered. Then it was Padma taking revenge for Parvati's death. But as I continued, the original story changed by about 90%. (Julia will attest to this ;) ). It got complex, and for such a complex plot, I had to do the best research I could. Sleepless nights were involved, and even my train rides to office were spent mulling over possible plotholes. All that while, I thought of you, too. Whatever happened, it had to be something realistic, something plausible.

Without Kara, of course, this story would not be possible. She also stayed up, reading over the drafts, pointing out errors, and I am eternally grateful to her. By the time I was done, I knew I had written what could possibly be one of the best things I've ever come up with. :D Not sure it would have been possible if the - er - ghost of you weren't hovering around me. So, thank you for inspiring me, too!

I am extremely thrilled that you liked it! That, and this fabtastic review were worth all the trouble!

~Natalie

 

In the End by Writ Encore
Rated: 3rd-5th Years [Reviews - 1]

Summary: Two gentlemen, close friends, stayed with each other through happiness and hell. Until one of them fell and left everything in pieces.



For Jessica.

Categories: General Fics Genre: Warnings: Character Death, Mild Profanity, Violence

Word count: 4868 Chapters: 2 Completed: No
Published:
07/19/11 Updated: 08/13/11


Reviewer: ToBeOrNotToBeAGryffindor Signed
Date: 07/30/11 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1: The Cat and the Eye

Hi, Jenn!

Here I am on a late night reading session, and your summary was an excellent one and drew me in quickly. I was really intrigued by Gawain's thought processes and his views on the people he worked with, or rather, his low opinion of them. 

I confessed to being a bit taken aback by, in the course of a single paragraph, Gawain musing on Moody, their prey, screaming, and smoking. It felt like a bit of an information overload for a single paragraph. I would've loved to hear more about Gawain's new on Moody, considering the latter is a featured part of the story. 

There is a sort of appreciation on my part that you were able to include such grievous injuries in the story and not make them tragic — for the lack of a better term. It was suitably horrid, as being burned alive should be, but it was approached in a non-frenzied fashion, as I would've expected from someone like Gawain — cool under pressure.

Admittedly, I was a bit baffled by Minerva's appearance. Is she an Auror or Ministry official? Since, considering Moody's relative age, this mission would've predated the existence of the Order. I'm not sure if this information is in one of your other stories or not, but it seems highly irregular that she would stumble in on official baddie-chasing business. I'd be curious to hear your thoughts on that.

I found the walk to St Mungo's to be one of the more powerful moments in the story. Gawain referring to the stench of charred flesh gave a tangible note of horror to Moody's injuries, as well as the amount of guilt the man bore for his role in a young Auror's nearly-fatal incident. Also, it showed that he wasn't just some gruff, bastard old man who hated everyone who wasn't as good as he was (which I find ironic, since Moody became almost his clone in that respect), but that he really did carry a conscience around with him concerning the young men he trained.

Benjy is an interesting character, but I'm not entirely certain what his role is in the story. Yes, he seems to be Gawain's mate and has some sort of relationship with Minerva, but I don't think I as of yet know what that is. My leading theory is a bizarre love triangle where something is going on between Minerva and Bengy, yet Minerva and Gawain have a spark. Not sure. Again, if you care to share in a non-spoilery fashion...

There's a bit of a typo in this line:

 
“Oh, I just said we’d make a detour to Tower Bridge on the way.” Benjy laughed. “I bet she’s ripping the ribbon out of my typewriter, the wrench.”

 

Not sure if you were going for 'wench' or 'wretch', buuuuuuuut you ended up in the hardware store, hehe. Just thought you might want to change it. :D

Overall, this is an interesting start to a story here. I'm intrigued to find out the nature of the relationships between Gawain, Benjy, and Minerva. There are a couple spots that lost me a bit, but otherwise, it was a nice read. Take care.

~Jess

 



Author's Response: thank you

 

Rebound by Maple_and_PheonixFeather
Rated: 3rd-5th Years [Reviews - 5]

Summary: She was suffering from the change in a relationship, he from a broken heart. In a moment of weakness, with the pangs of lonliness, the two find their relationship take a turn from friendship into something with the potential for more.

Categories: Harry/Hermione Genre: Warnings: Epilogue? What Epilogue?

Word count: 1976 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
07/20/11 Updated: 07/30/11


Reviewer: ToBeOrNotToBeAGryffindor Signed
Date: 07/30/11 Title: Chapter 1: Rebound

Awww, thank you. :)

This story is so warm and fuzzy. Well, to me it is, since this is my cup of tea. I adore Hermione's voice, the one that chatters on in her head and occasionally out loud, trying to reason everything, as Harry mentioned. You just put so much of what we know about her into this, even the part where she decides that she wants to go out right away and test the dating waters. Not because she's desperate for contact, but because she needs to prove to herself that the end of her relationship with Ron wasn't just her not having enough to offer someone else.

You made Harry very huggable, in that he was so sad. But also, I could feel him deflect and keep the focus on Hermione's issues instead of bringing his own to the forefront. It felt in-character that he only admitted it when he would've had to lie to Hermione directly to keep it out of the open. Both of them together felt right for me.

And yayyyyyyy, they kissed! I have to admit that I was a bit giddy when they did. I sort of felt the 'we can't' moment coming, but part of the enjoyment was the waiting to see if things might be different and the borderline enjoyment of sadness when it doesn't work. It's probably sadistic of me to enjoy being saddened by what I read, yet I do. 

Thank you so, so much for this story. I know how hard you worked on it, and I feel not only rewarded as the recipient, but on your behalf as well for the pleasure of a job completed. You are lovely, and I'm glad that I've got the chance to get to know you. Thank you so very much.

~Jess



Author's Response: Jess, you have no idea how much this review means to me. I honestly just smiled and like, inwardly squeed :p I honestly am so happy you liked the characterisation, I was a little worried about that :p Just thanks so much for the lovely review, you have no idea how much it means to me :) ~Maple

 

Mr Ted's Picnic by pookha
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 5]

Summary: Little Rosie has lost her Teddy bear. Whatever shall we do about it?

Categories: General Fics Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 1162 Chapters: 1 Completed: No
Published:
07/31/11 Updated: 08/13/11


Reviewer: ToBeOrNotToBeAGryffindor Signed
Date: 08/13/11 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

This was a really sweet story. Hermione was really well-characterised in this, as well. It is quite her to treat her daughter's concerns with respect and not to just roll over and tell her to go back to bed.

The actual events in the story were lovely. It had a Toy Story feel to it, and I like that each of the dolls had a distinct mannerism. Mr Ted was a bit gluttonous, while Maggie was a giver and the Harpy doll a problem solver.

I really like the overall concept, and your writing really lent it a bedtime story. It's nice to find little bits like this, tucked into the Potterverse, giving us a picture of how magical little girls go about a late night snack. Very charming. :)

~Jess 



Author's Response: Thank you so much for the very kind words; I appreciate them. I'm glad you enjoyed the sweet nature of this and I'm especially glad that you thought that Hermione was IC. I picture my own Teddy for Mr Ted, a long, tall white bear with the oreo cookie eyes that I described in the story. Glad you enjoyed this and thank you so much for the review.

 

The Four by Equinox Chick
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 4]

Summary: For me, the start of my grand love affair with the Potterverse didn't begin with Harry Potter and the Philosopher's Stone. No, it started with Prisoner of Azkaban because of the Marauders. This poem is about them and my attempt at a goodbye to four people who inspired me. (Well, Peter - not so much)

Thank you, Julia, for the challenge and for teaching me about villanelles.

Disclaimer: I am not JKR, or Julia, or anyone with talent.




Categories: Poetry Genre: Warnings: Character Death

Word count: 124 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
08/01/11 Updated: 08/01/11


Reviewer: ToBeOrNotToBeAGryffindor Signed
Date: 08/01/11 Title: Chapter 1: The Four

Hahahaha, now who's writing villanelles without being required to do so?

At any rate, mickey-taking aside, this really is a gorgeous poem. Not only is the villainous villanelle most suited to the subject matter — four boys-come-men who all met their end one by one — it also aptly shows that each man died in different ways. 

The way you captured the essence of each Marauder's death was so good. James stood up to an impossible enemy unarmed because he couldn't NOT. Sirius just kind of... poof. Peter died like a traitorous coward who realised that he had erred on several accounts. And Remus died like a BAMF in battle. Worf would be proud.

Really, though, the last stanza is melt-worthy, and the imagery of an unravelling knot is so apt and perfect. I get the mental visual of a plait that first gets a few flyaways, the a few larger chunks fall out, and then it's just a ball of frizz/no more. That probably sounds ridiculous, but it fits in my head. 

Great poem, Croll, and congrats on doing well in the challenge!

~StormRose98



Author's Response: OOOOH, thank you, especially for the observation about 'unravelling' because I was literally seconds away from changing that to 'unstitched' but it didn't scan as well. The unravelling makes more sense, as well, when you put it like that.

I'm still mourning my Marauders (not Peter, so much), but yeah, Worf would have been proud. 'Today is a good day to die.' *sob* Thank you, StormRose.

 

The Stars As My Witness by Gmariam
Rated: 3rd-5th Years [Reviews - 9]

Summary: Past Featured StoryI cannot see their bodies, buried beneath the ruins of their life together, but I know they are there. I can imagine their green and hazel eyes, staring into the dark emptiness. It is all I can do to stay upright, filled with equal parts rage and grief as I gaze unseeing at the heartbreaking scene.

How did it come to this?

Categories: Marauder Era Genre: Warnings: Character Death

Word count: 883 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
08/04/11 Updated: 08/04/11


Reviewer: ToBeOrNotToBeAGryffindor Signed
Date: 08/04/11 Title: Chapter 1: One-Shot

OMP, Twin, this is so powerful. In a way, I'm glad it was so short, because it is strong and emotive as it, and Sirius's feelings are so well-drawn and potent. The way he goes from devastation, to joy at Harry's survival ,to grief over parting with his godson and at the loss of good friend, and finally to rage at Peter, it is such a perfect sequence. 

And the last line is just a giant exclamation on the whole piece. Such a wonderful piece! Thanks for sharing.

~Jess



Author's Response: Thanks so much for the amazing review, twin! I'm glad you liked it. I'm glad I had it ready for the recents list. ;) I sort of wish there were more, but that's all: just a short glimpse of how horrible that night must have been for Sirius. So sad. Thanks for reading so quickly and again for the review! ~Gina :)

 

Her Tomorrows by Equinox Chick
Rated: 6th-7th Years [Reviews - 7]

Summary: Since the Battle, Parvati struggles to feel.

Since the Battle, Harry feels too much.

Can a chance meeting help them heal?

Disclaimer: I am not JK Rowling, so don't bug me about Pottermore!

This story is for Ariana (lucca4) because she set the prompt in SBBC and she's one of the most talented writers on the site.

Categories: Harry/Other Character Genre: Warnings: Character Death, Sexual Situations

Word count: 1594 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
08/10/11 Updated: 08/10/11


Reviewer: ToBeOrNotToBeAGryffindor Signed
Date: 08/10/11 Title: Chapter 1: Her Tomorrows

I so needed a bit of smut at the moment, since I can't seem to find my own writing mojo. Croll fic always hits the spot. :D

I think this is brilliant. I know you had your doubts and angsty moments about its standalone qualities, but I really don't think you have anything to worry about. The story itself is reflected in its structure and its length, like a snapshot into two tortured souls and the day their universes happened to collide. They both so obviously needed someone and got so lucky — if one could call it that — to find one another.

I wanted to hug Parvati for her pain. I can't imagine what it's like to, wherever you go, remind everyone else of someone who was brutally killed and disfigured. That look in their eye, like they were looking at Padma and not Parvati, would've been devastating beyond measure. And the recollection of taunting her sister for being slow to the draw in DADA... *sniff* The guilt!

Harry's segment is brief, and at first, I thought it was a bit too brief, but once the third, combined portion was underway, most of it being in his perspective, I was far more happy with the balance of it. In that bit, I was really happy that it gave glimpses of both of them. Yeah, I know it is supposed to be a no-no, but we will do what we please, lol. It works really well here, and I'm glad to get into both their heads as this romp in the grass happens. It's far more poignant and meaningful in a meaningless way (if that makes any damned sense at all).

The end is just... perfect. Parvati crying for Padma in the form of sexual release is rather unique, yet it works just right. She had to lose herself in order to find herself, and Harry needed it to get away from himself. The perfect synergy.

So well done, even if you may not have thought so. I'm not sure I have a favourite bit, but I really do love the whole thing.

Ta for the good read!

~Jess 



Author's Response: I agree about Harry, actually. His segment was too short, but the only way I could think of expanding was by adding dialogue with Ron, Hermione, Ginny and other Weasleys, which I didn't want to do because that would have given them more of a presence in the story. I'm sort of warming to Harry/Parvati despite my canon that she's in a menage a trois - ha ha. Hmm, child same age as James starting at Hogwarts .... interesting ....

Thank you for the review, Jess. ~Carole~

 

High by Equinox Chick
Rated: 3rd-5th Years [Reviews - 233]

Summary: Past Featured StoryScorpius Malfoy is the Seeker for Slytherin. Not only that, he's the best Seeker at Hogwarts, and it's his catches that win matches. But this year things are different; Albus Potter has switched to Chaser and the new Gryffindor Seeker is his annoying little sister.

This is the story of how one match and one missed catch can change your life.

This story was accidentally deleted, so is being resubmitted ... very very quickly.

SQUEEEEE! High won the Best Next Generation QSQ award. Thank you so much for the everyone who has helped, either by beta'ing or encouraging me.

Disclaimer: I am not JK Rowling. I'm not sure who I am at the moment, but there must be some Arthur Weasley blood in me.

Thank you Natalie (hestiajones) for doing the vast majority of the beta work on this, and Apurva for work on the early chapters

Squish for Natalie, Jess, Kara and Bob for helping me sort this out.

Due to an archive hissy fit regarding any story with a rating about 3rd-5th, I have temporarily lowered the rating on this story. However, I have NOT changed the content. This story is still a 6th-7th. You click at your own risk.

Categories: Next Generation Genre: Warnings: Sexual Situations, Strong Profanity

Word count: 135569 Chapters: 22 Completed: Yes
Published:
09/04/11 Updated: 01/14/12


Reviewer: ToBeOrNotToBeAGryffindor Signed
Date: 01/18/12 Title: Chapter 16: Chapter 16 - Widows' Weeds

I am enjoying the ongoing baby-naming debate. I do wonder whether it was borne of naming blockage come side plot or if it was a strike of ebil genius. I eagerly await their decision.

The funeral was, for lack of a better word, intense. There was simply no way that could've NOT ended badly with his family. And to expect him to make a speech on top of that was just dastardly. I am honestly surprised and finding myself respecting Scorpius's tenacity to make it through that. I am a bit disappointed in Narcissa, as family is supposed to mean the most to her (judging by her actions in DH), but I suppose in the end, Lucius was her family far longer than Scorpius. And she never caught Lucius with a blood traitor chick. :/

I seriously am in love with Teddy. I could totally get into slashing those two up, hehe. He's the confidant that Scorpius needed, with a side of Big Brother.

I really want to know more about Genister. I'm not sure if you've written more about her, but I may harass you at some point to do so. She's sassy and far more interesting than Ariadne.

On to review the next chapter. Didn't get a chance to review these ones after I read them earlier.

~Jess

Author's Response: Ha ha ha - yes there was name blockage on behalf of the author for a while. Then I found a name I liked and it really suited the baby's parentage, but was too blooming similar to Lucius, so ... *shakes head* No. In the end, I liked Alexander because it's a warrior type of name and also pretty normal. (And has nothing to do with Blaise lookielikey I met called Alexander .,....)Slashing up Teddy and Scorps. Nooooo, ha ha - they would be hot together, but I think they just need to have a brother in their lives. Uhm, Genister isn;t in this much more, but Natalie kept saying the same thing as she beta's the chapters and she does interest me, so when/if I ever write the follow-up, then I think she'll be in it. I already have her, in my head, as one corner of a fairly benign love triangle. Hmm, I wonder if you can work out the two boys after her. (ONe should be easy, the other is a very oblique reference) Thanks again ~Crolllllll~

 
Reviewer: ToBeOrNotToBeAGryffindor Signed
Date: 01/18/12 Title: Chapter 17: Chapter 17 - A Testing Time

What is this? Scorpius, bonding with a Weasley? Who would've thought? I like it, though I shudder to think of what sort of sneakery he and Fred could've got up to had they been in the same house and even mates.

Must Teddy persist on being BAMF? I love the good luck letters. Even the Tonks/Lupin owl fits the owners, hehe. And I never thought I'd say this, but Draco's owl being douchey is SO him. XD

NEWTSSSSSSSSSSSSSSS!!!! OMP! Poor Scorpius. Will his family ever stop haunting him every time he tries to make something of himself without them? That seems like something Lucius would do, influence a small child to think the Unforgivables are okay and even something to be exalted. Dirty mofo. I'm even more glad he's dead than I was before. Lucius, I piss upon you from a great height!

Noooooooo, don't run out! Your future is woven into those essay questions! You need NEWTs to be an Auror! Fie! Must. Move. On... Need. To. Know.

~Jess

Author's Response: Sorry, Teddy will always be a BAMF. I should write something where he's a bit awful, though, or I'll end up hating him for being perfect. *sigh*

Oh Fred and Scorpius would be a fabulous double act. Once I'd written that first scene I really wished he'd been in it from the start. I can just see so much of the wheeler-dealer of the Twins in both him and Roxy. Hmm, and they might both want to play the same position in Quidditch. Now, where could I have got that from .....? *snigger*

Yup, Lucius Malfoy still causing grief after he's dead. Nice revenge, mate!
,br> He does need NEWTS. Let's hope he comes good in the practical ...

Thankieeees ~Carole~

 
Reviewer: ToBeOrNotToBeAGryffindor Signed
Date: 01/18/12 Title: Chapter 18: Chapter 18 -Slytherin Spirit

Yay, a baby name! Long-winded, but it seems to fit both Lav and Blaise.

I feel a little bubble of pride toward Scorpius for making it through the practical with flying colours. And yay to producing a Patronus like a BAMF. Almost makes me forget about, er, earlier. :/

Awwwwwww, Vaisey came crawling back, hat in hand (figuratively speaking). It was only a matter of time before he figured out what an opportunistic slag Ariadne was and that he was better off. He seemed a decent sort until she sunk her talons into his testicular region. It's nice that Scorpius can finish up with Hogwarts without burning all of his bridges.

Sexytiemmmmmmmmmmmm! It was sweet how concerned he was about hurting her. I doubt he gave a crap less had Ariadne been a virgin (*coughgutterskankcough*) when they were first together. And then it was lubbbb.

Forward march!

~Jess

Author's Response: Oh, Thaddeus is Lavender's dad's name. 'Opportunist slag' - gods I wish I'd used that - ha ha ha. OHHH, ans seyytimeeee. Yeah, he was a bit concerned. And um ... Ariadne probably wasn't a virgin, although she'd have faked it - ha ha. I'm guessing Scorp doesn;t want to put her off for life. Fortunately he hasn't and they're at it like rabbits whenever they get the chance. The Prefect's bathroom seems to be my go to place for first times. Hmmmmm, must try something else. Thankies ~Carole~

 
Reviewer: ToBeOrNotToBeAGryffindor Signed
Date: 01/18/12 Title: Chapter 19: Chapter 19 -Where There's A Will

So muuuuuuuuuuuch has happened!

The will was a very interesting bit. As you know, cop/who-dun-it shows fascinate me, so legal mumbo jumbo always provides some delicious twists and turns in several scenarios. And, of course, with Hermione involved, anything that could be found behind the scenes didn't stand a chance in hell of staying hidden. HA! Suck on that, you old dirtbag! In his effort to stick it to his grandson, Lucius instead shot himself in the foot. Not gonna lie, I punched the air.

What. The. Ever-loving. Balls. Not only do I feel like giving Draco a testectomy with a rusty pair of garden shears, Astoria has really demeaned herself with her actions. She is better than that, but her part in Scorpius's de facto capture is despicable. Not because she minimalised Scorpius's feelings toward Lily, but more because she abused his trust in her. I don't know if I could ever find it in myself to forgive someone for that, so if he does, Scorpius is a better person than me.

I want to punch something every time I think about Scorpius being essentially tortured by means of starvation. It's a low, base thing to do, even for dirty, rotten, Malfoy extortionists. Again, I want to punch something. Thank Merlin he got a little of his own.

TEDDYYYYYYYYYYY! I may have to cut a bitch and steal him for myself. Two more years, and he'll be of age for me, lolol. I love the fact that Scorpius can have a proper guy friend with no strings or agenda attached.

Must carry on or the old noggin will implode. See you next chapter!

~Jess

Author's Response: Yes, this was an action packed chapter. I was aware I was reaching nearing the home strait and needed it to be fast paced. And, mmm, Astoria isn;t quite as wonderful. I think she;s pretty cynical about love - for other people - thinking her and Draco have made it despite everything (which could be true). Plus she was knocked up at 16 and didn't finish school. Meh, I never really went into this (another story, my friend) but Astoria is a clever girl and had to leave without Newts (and OWLs if I remember rightly) So, in a way Draco ruined her life - althougth she does love him. It also explains Vectors luke warm attitude towards Scorpius 'cause Astoria was her favourite pupil. ~Carole~

 
Reviewer: ToBeOrNotToBeAGryffindor Signed
Date: 01/18/12 Title: Chapter 20: Chapter 20 -Fantastic Days

Hmm, Scorpius getting on with Andromeda...I can so see it. He is an intelligent boy with a healthy respect for thinking. I think he's probably the first person in her extended family not named Tonks or Lupin who she could've ever connected with. It was also nice of her to give him temporary employment (even if I do think it was out of sympathy toward his newfound poverty).

Haha, I so get the perils and pitfalls of living with a newlywed/soon-to-be-wed couple. The accidental bathroom run-ins, the embarrassing intimacies foiled by the roommate - SO TRUE! OMP! But at least Scorpius has Truckle to keep him in good graces. Which makes me wonder where Truckle will go. I hope Scorpius keeps her, since he seems a right failure at household spells, hehe.

Hugo and Al, warming to a Malfoy? Your world building is stupendous, because fifteen chapters ago, I would've laughed out loud. Now, though, it doesn't seem all that mad. They aren't treating him like Lily's boyfriend or as a Slytherin; he's just Scorpius. I'm glad they've come around, because he's never been a bad guy.

Molly's seal of approval just settles it. If Nana Weasley is happy with him, or at least treats him like one of the brood, then he has truly been accepted into the Weasley clan. Thank goodness for that, else that could get mighty awful later. But moreover, it just does a lovely job of showing Scorpius what was so intrinsically wrong with the way he was brought up. Families shouldn't be cold, proper, and rigid; they should be loud, embarrassing, and ready to cross the Rubicon for each other any day of the week. After this, I don't think Scorpius could even force himself to return to that, even if his mum's status in the family was becoming increasingly rocky.

Anyway, time to carry on. The story is almost over, which I steadfastly refuse to believe. However, I must know what happens to Astoria. And I am hoping mightily that Genister pops up again soon, even if it's some random walk-on. She's a story within a story, and I want to know it.

~Jess

Author's Response: I always think Andromeda would be quite uneasy amongst the big boisterous Weasley family. Teddy seems to slide into it, but she'd be more reserved - bit like Scorp. I liked my cricket playing here. Not sure where the inspiration came from except I could see Arthur thinking it amazing despite not understanding any of it.

Oh, um, Genister. She's not in it again, but I have plans for her ...

Thank youuuuuu ~Croll~

 
Reviewer: ToBeOrNotToBeAGryffindor Signed
Date: 01/18/12 Title: Chapter 21: Chapter 21 -Relative Values

Ron being the scariest relative makes me giggle, but I can so see how this could be the case for Scorpius. His aura can be...daunting. It makes an interesting contrast to Hermione, who seems to be the most openly accepting. Of course, though, the whole family seems to have included him, or at the very least acclimated.

I openly fangirl the family Quidditch matches. In truth, I think I was more riveted and excited by these than the House matches. I think this is because it's truly about skill and love of the game. They don't have to truly worry about twig-pulling and any of the other 700-something fouls. Harry vs Scorpius had me on the edge! The EDGE! I kind of wish there was a bit more of Harry's reaction to losing (hey, he's competitive and probably hates losing, lol). However, I will simply fill in the blanks myself

Draco has a pair, no matter how he acts. He's still a supreme git for being so scornful of Scorpius's life choices, but I am so glad he has found it in himself to at least tolerate them for the sake of his son, who he apparently does love enough to balk a few dusty old formalities and endow his son with his rightful inheritance.

Neville, eh? I wonder how far he'd have to trawl up the family tree to actually find Neville as a viable relation. Oh, the horror, hehe!

Last chapter! Noooooooooooooooooo! I refuse to believe that this story will ever end. It goes on and on, my friend. At least in your head. As long as that keeps on, life is good.

~Jess

Author's Response: Oh poo, I missed a trick with Harry's reaction. URK, that's going to bug me now, although I have to say I'm not sure what he'd do. He'd want to be all fair and responsible and grown up - but losing to a Malfoy - wow that must sting! At the time of writing I was more interested in James and Al's pleasure in beating their dad - ha!

I liked writing Draco, and did alter the Neville Longbottom line a tad. I don't think there's any real danger they're related, but the Longbottom's are a pureblood family, so you never know! Ha! Actually, you might know now, if you've read the last chapter *sob*.

Heh heh - I can totally see Ron being intimidating in a Weasley thug type of way. Of course he's a pu**y cat really, but he does follow the punch first ask questions later type of life rule.

Anyway ... I've reached the last of your reviews .... only took me around a week or so to reply. Thank you, my love. Take a well earned rest and have a Butterbeer on me. :) ~CrolloftheBoards~

 
Reviewer: ToBeOrNotToBeAGryffindor Signed
Date: 01/16/12 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1 -Flying High

Sigh...you write Quidditch divinely, Madam Croll de Dungeon. There is just the right mix of detail, action, and thought process to put me in the match but still see the story at large. Very well done. And I will never NOT love the sparring between Lily and Scorpius. So fun and intriguing. On to Chapter 2 in the Great Re-Read!

~Jess

Author's Response: YAY! The mighty Jessica DiStrange appears (damn, I want to do my tiger smilies now). I dreaded writing Quidditch when I first started writing, but - rather like you - I enjoy it now. It can be whatever I want it to be, and gives Scorpius a good chance to swear - ha ha ha.

Thanks, my love. ♥ ~Croll~

 
Reviewer: ToBeOrNotToBeAGryffindor Signed
Date: 01/16/12 Title: Chapter 2: Chapter 2 - Sticky as Lips

Teddyyyyyyyyyy! He's such a good big brother figure. I really shouldn't have killed him. I suppose it's Reason #233 why you're a nicer person than I am, lol. At any rate, yet another interesting development in the ScoLily dynamic. I can't help but admire her methodology; she is calm, supportive, and slightly insistent - but not pushy or patronising.

I love the astuteness of Teddy. He actually reminds me a bit of Remus, in that he notices things but doesn't really judge as he points them out. They are what they are. But then his big brother instincts kick in, though in a fair way.

On we go, amor mia!

~Jess

Author's Response: I can't kill Teddy. It has nothing to do with niceness but because I fancy him rotten and want to have his babies. Scrap that, Victoire can have the babies, I just want to rip his clothes off.

Uhm ... okay, really, I just still have this hole in me where JKR killed off Remus and Tonks. I just hate that so much and so I need Teddy to be happy and settled and the best bits of his parents combined. It's as idealistic as hell, but I just need that completion. (Wow, that's all deep, and probably the first time I've expressed that opinion.) Thanks, Jess. ~Croll~

 
Reviewer: ToBeOrNotToBeAGryffindor Signed
Date: 01/16/12 Title: Chapter 3: Chapter 3 -Smitten as That

Oh, I'm sure she meant that shaft...not. Brazen hussy. I like her already.

Your Astoria is much nicer than mine, but I think she suits your Scorpius as his mum so well. There is an innate goodness which has softened Draco a bit but has influenced Scorpius in subtle ways, the ones that allow him to so much as contemplate fancying a Potter spawn. And on the platform! Egads, she's so nosy in that perfect Mum-like way, the one who won't mind her own sodding business but you can't hate her for it. Just one of the many reasons why this story feels so relatable.

There are just so many great characters in this story. Every last one of them is mentally implanted in my head as someone I used to know in school. OH! And OMP, Teddy is such a git, lol...making Lily spend time with Harry Cootes for lying to him. Buuuut, that's what she gets. :D

Onward!

~Jess

Author's Response: Heh heh heh - yeah, Teddy is a bit of a tease.

I like Astoria - well in this chapter. There's a bit where I wanted to shake her, too, but in the end, she's okay (I hope). I needed one of his parents to be more reasonable or I couldn;t see Scorpius ever being anything other than a mini-me Malfoy. Plus I like writing bitchy Mum dialogue - heh heh heh. I plan on being as embarrassing with Charlie when he gets to Scorpy's age. (That's my Charlie and not Charlie Weasley).

thank youuuuu ~Carole~

 
Reviewer: ToBeOrNotToBeAGryffindor Signed
Date: 01/16/12 Title: Chapter 4: Chapter 4 -Kitten as a Cat

*headdesk*

Oh, Scorpius, you effing dolt! Could he have possibly phrased that any more badly? I was enraged on Lily's behalf, and I know he hadn't even meant it how it sounded. Oh, if only he didn't have the same male disease the rest of the peen patrol do...talk first, think later. XD

It was nice to see Scorpius properly enthused by the DADA lesson with Harry. I do wonder, though, if Harry hadn't come in as the guest speaker to size up Scorpius rather than to teach the class a spell that Anthony probably could've shown them just as well.

You are rapidly making me dislike my own fave Next Gen character. How dare Al interfere in Scorpius's Patronus practice, lol.

Another lovely chapter from you, and another crappity review from me. Doesn't seem a fair exchange, but I'm greedy. *hugs*

~Jess

Author's Response: Hmm, I hadn;t thought that Harry was coming in to size him up, but that makes sense - ha ha. Yes! Obviously! Actually, Ben is there as well, and ... um ... yeah, won;t say any more although you've probably got that far. I know Al comes off as a total douche, but this is from Scorp's POV, so he reads more into it than is possibly intended. Or maybe he means it all - mwahahahahahahaha. Thankies ~Carole~

 
Reviewer: ToBeOrNotToBeAGryffindor Signed
Date: 01/16/12 Title: Chapter 5: Chapter 5 - Burst the Clouds

Teddy is such a BAMF. He really is. Why is he the only reasonable one?

The confrontation at the match had me in giggles. Gerald was such a crap flyer, and it made my heart glow to witness his failitude and to see Scorpius reassert himself as the true owner of the broom and the one truly deserving of the Seeker position.

I really feel like, deep down, Lily knows that Scorpius hadn't intended to come off as a user. I mean...the story is in his perspective, and I was blindsided by it. Well, as there are a lot of chapters to come, I assume they get past this, but argh! the agony!!! I feel like reading this all night, not going to bed like a sane person should do. Anyway, until we meet again. :D

~Jess

Author's Response: Teddy's reasonable, in my opinion, because he hasn;t been solely brought up by Weasleys - ha! I am mean, but I do find them a prejudiced bunch at times. Obviously they come round, that is what redeems them, but there's a tendency to judge first, don;t you think? (comes from Molly - ha ha)

Lily is confused. She has been brought up as a Gryffindor Weasley, after all, and as much as she wants to believe Scorpy, ther is a part of her that in very insecure (she's not as intelligent as the others). So she can readily believe he's interested only because she's Harry's daughter. :( (and if he'd admitted that was part of the reason to himself then maybe he could have been honest with her) *sigh* teenage boys are prats. ~Carole~

 
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