Penname: ToBeOrNotToBeAGryffindor [Contact]
Real name: Jessica
Member Since: 08/29/09
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I am a recent member of the Harry Potter fandom, but I have always had a passion for the written word, and I hope to fulfill it here. I live in a relatively boring corner of Idaho, and I like Kokanee and a good book!

So, I suppose you're wondering what's up with my username. Even if you're not, this is how that happened. No, I was not aspiring to be a Gryffindor. I can't think of any house to which I would belong less than Gryffindor, in fact. It was a moment of clarity that I got while I was battling with myself about whether I should want to be Sorted into Gryffindor to be like Harry or to be Sorted elsewhere and follow my own path. I thought it to be much like the contemplative scene in Hamlet when he weighed taking his own life. I'm not trying to be melodramatic. That's simply is what popped into my head when I was trying to sign up to leave a review. :D

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I Am Shame by hestiajones
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 8]

Summary: The war is over and people are rebuilding their life, happy and sad and grateful. But what about Draco?

Written for the End of an Era Challenge at PA (WON FIRST PLACE! YIPPIE!), and nominated for a QSQ for Best Poetry. :D Thanks!

Categories: Poetry Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 184 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
07/25/10 Updated: 07/30/10

Reviewer: ToBeOrNotToBeAGryffindor Signed
Date: 07/30/10 Title: Chapter 1: I Am Shame

Oh, lordy, I love this poem. I think I told you that, but I'll gush again, just because this was your first read/review. :D

I think that this bit is my favourite:

You and he and she and I
Will always remember
I was His servant.

It just expounds the finality of what he had done and that there was no taking back that tattoo on his arm. The last stanza, in general, was wonderful, but those lines were ultra-fantastic.

I really like how you rehashed all of the horrible things that he had seen while under Voldemort's thumb, plus what had come from that. 

In the first stanza, when you say 'A mask
Blown asunder.' it just makes me think of how Draco's life had been such a delicately crafted ruse of making others think that he was in control, that he was strong and well-connected. Of course, it was nearly all lies, especially considering the toll that the war and servitude to the Dark Lord took on the entire Malfoy family. Then again, I shall not weep for Lucius, as he did steal Legolas's hair. That's just not right. :D

Anyway, lovely poem, and I'm excited to review first. I heart you, milady, and I hope your weekend without internet isn't too long a wait. I shall miss you!

Hearts and stuff,


Author's Response: "Then again, I shall not weep for Lucius, as he did steal Legolas's hair. That's just not right. :D"

*lapses into a fit of the cackles*

Thank you for such a detailed, delicious review, Jess. Whatever you said was what I intended to convey, and hoped for the reader to grasp. :) As you know, I didn't go away during the weekend. >.> But yay for the R&R again.



Pay Back by h_vic
Rated: Professors [Reviews - 4]

Summary: The first time Bellatrix appeared at Spinner’s End that day cemented the course of his future, and the second time forced him to address the past.

Categories: Other Pairing Genre: Warnings: Dubious Consent, Sexual Situations

Word count: 1539 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
07/26/10 Updated: 07/27/10

Reviewer: ToBeOrNotToBeAGryffindor Signed
Date: 09/28/10 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Lolz. What a b!tch.:D

And here I thought I was in for some angsty smut, albeit squicky smut, and you went and made me giggle at a lamenably turgid Severus in an even more lamentably exposed state. XD

I'm not sure exactly if I can believe in the story in terms of feasability, but I definitely appreciate its entertainment value. 

And that's it. Full circle. I've read every single one of your fics on the archives. I shall return when you have deemed it a good time to bless us with a new story. 

Until we AIM again!


Author's Response: Hmmm, angsty smut - I may have to try that sometime (although preferably not with this pairing O.o). Like I said the other day, I had to go slightly crack-y with this - my recipient in the fest wanted Severus/Bella, non-con and bondage - crack was that only way I could write that with my sanity intact! So I fully take your point on feasibility, but this really was the best I could do with the prompt, I think. Severus did not take kindly to this story though (I couldn't write him for ages afterwards because he was sulking). I am tempted to write a second chapter where Wormtail finds him, but I'm not sure I dare really. I think I'm going to have to write some new stuff now, just to get more Jess reviews! ;)


Fever Dreams by h_vic
Rated: 6th-7th Years [Reviews - 2]

Summary: Severus makes his choice.

Searing darkness.


Echoing pain.

Categories: Dark/Angsty Fics Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 859 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
07/26/10 Updated: 07/27/10

Reviewer: ToBeOrNotToBeAGryffindor Signed
Date: 09/28/10 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Ooh, bleeding candles soooo kick ass! I really hope it was the actual candle bleeding and not blood that just happened to be around the candle.

I'm assuming that the majority of this story is delusion in Severus's pain-crippled mind. If the Dark Mark summoning the Death Eaters was painful, I can only assume how much it would have truly sucked to get the Mark in the first place. 

I love the horror element of it, which subsequently makes me hope like hell that you're my SSS writer, though the odds of that are ridiculously astronomical. Well, not really, but they might as well be. :D

Hmm, and the end. I want to know, and I'm willing to throw a tantrum until I do. What did Narcissa mean by being Marked 'for us'? I'm sure you have a bunch of fabulous back story for this, and I would be ridiculously happy if you told me what it was at some point. Or I could just harrass you until you do, lol.

Very interesting story, dear. I now have only not read two of your fics. I be ninja, especially during judging season. >.<



Author's Response: Yep, the idea was that the branding with the dark produces feverish hallucinations, which of course for Severus had to be symbolic and meaningful. This was written for a Severus/Narcissa prompt table, so my hazy backstory is that post-Hogwarts Severus and Narcissa are having an affair - he doesn't really love her as he's still hung up on Lily of course but Narcissa is in love him and hates the way she feels like she is always competing with a the ghost of a woman who's out of his life (I've actually got another drabble to that effect, 'See Me', but I can't post it anywhere on here as it's too short for the archives and too smutty for the boards, so it has to remain on LJ sadly). So to Narcissa, she sees Severus taking the Mark as a final choice of her over Lily even though of course Severus' motives are, as ever, far more oblique than that. I'm glad you liked the horror, because it's really the only thing like this that I've written but it was so much fun that I might have to try something like it again. You really are ninja, dear. I was totally overwhelmed by all these reviews (but in good way of course!).


Purely a Business Arrangement by h_vic
Rated: 3rd-5th Years [Reviews - 3]

Summary: Percy finds that he has more in common with his infuriating colleague, Daphne Greengrass, than just overbearing mothers.

Categories: Other Pairing Genre: Warnings: Mild Profanity

Word count: 3656 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
07/27/10 Updated: 08/02/10

Reviewer: ToBeOrNotToBeAGryffindor Signed
Date: 09/27/10 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Hehe, I started this, expecting some lurid Percy sex, which I assure you would have scarred me. I am so happy the story ended the way it did.

I love the character you built for Daphne. She's sharp as a tack and the details are never lost on her. I rather agree that she is like Percy, only regarding different aspects of her personality.The fact that he was practically bullied into swapping escort services for hated family functions was wonderful. 

I think the biggest win for this fic was that each moment I spent wiht them, the more I believed in their canon-ness (in which Jess makes up a word). Percy was perfect, and I like your version of Daphne.

Anywho, ta for now. We'll meet again. I have a funny feeling that it'll happen. Odd, n'est-ce pas?


Author's Response: O.o Yeah, I think writing that would have scarred me! You've reminded me how much fun I had with Daphne though - I think I need to write her again. I wanted her to be definably Slytherin, but yet not unlikeable, and so she turned into this sparky little whirlwind, who speaks her mind and gets her own way, but hopefully endearingly so, and who is just a little morally ambiguous rather than in any way dark. I rather thought she'd be good for Percy too in the way she lightened him up and ran rings around him. I'm kind of fond of the lightheartedness of this fic, because I don't go there often so it was a nice little break to write what really boils down to being in the direction of a romcom. Thanks, of course, love.


Offerings in the Darkness by h_vic
Rated: 3rd-5th Years [Reviews - 5]

Summary: Christmas Eve brings candles, guilt and memories for Severus Snape.

He had been little more than a boy when his mother had died. At a loss for how to comfort the grieving child he barely knew, and seeking perhaps the familiar routines of his own childhood in solace, his father had taken him to church. Severus, however, had found no comfort in the austere, hallowed stone of the chapel, but he found something in the warm candlelight of the offerings to the souls of the departed. If it was not exactly comfort, at least it was more than emptiness. Religion had never permeated his soul, but the candlelight had.

Categories: Dark/Angsty Fics Genre: Warnings: Character Death, Self Injury, Substance Abuse

Word count: 2559 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
07/27/10 Updated: 07/28/10

Reviewer: ToBeOrNotToBeAGryffindor Signed
Date: 09/27/10 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Ah, Hannah, why must you do this to me, make me feel for Snape? How could I hate the man in this story, this broken, lonely, self-hating man? You've gone and done it. You've made me want him to be happy -- or at the least, less miserable.

I really like the voice of this story. What I suppose that means is that you told the story, but it was still seen and felt through his point of view. And what a miserable place that was, I should say.

The flow, as well, was wonderful. Each flashback was put in just the right spot, and they were sequential as well, which lends itself to his story, his descent from a boy who loved his best friend and watched her play in the snow to the man who drank alone in his office and everyone around him that mattered to him was dead.

Charity was an interesting addition. I guess I never considered the idea that he had known her on anything more than a professional level or had purposely interacted with her outside of that. Just the simple act of turning a page for her gave her the idea that he was not quite what he seemed, and even as she was murdered, he was still that different man. Having him keep the chain with him always really touched me on a deep level. It made me think of him as someone incapable of murder who was capable of pretending that he was. 

I've been meaning to ask and should probably look it up, but is Mary MacDonald as Severus's first kill canon or your own canon? Either way, it's brilliant, because it signified that Severus had truly been lost. He seemed to genuinely care for Mary on some level, at least enough to seek her help in buying a gift for Lily. That it still haunted him and he thought of her often, both as she was before he became a Death Eater and how she begged for her life before he took it from her.

It's always fascinating to see that stray thead of humanity in him, because sometimes I have a hard time reconciling myself to the fact that the man that we met in the books was really good enough to sustain such a ruse for so long, that he was capable of loving Lily that deeply when he was scarcely old enough to understand what love is. Somehow, fan fiction givs him that where it did not previously exist for me. Your story is really on the top of that list right now in that regard. 

I am curious about the church service and its inplications in regard to religion in the Potterverse. I know it's a heavy subject and not something best brought up in a review, but I would like to hear your thoughts and ideas on the subject. I do, however, like that magical elements managed to blend their way in, but certain Muggle things remained, such as lighting the candles manually, yet the stained glass people could move around amongst themselves. Very nice detail and very nice touch.

I shall stop now, but before I go, I would love to re-iterate that this is a fantastic fic and I wish I had read it before QSQ deadline, or I would have nominated this in D/A. I love it that much, even if it does deal with a character that I cardinally don't like and almost can't. A testament to you and your abilities, my dear.

Until we meet again, 


Author's Response: This review put the biggest smile on my face, Jess, because this story has always been a little ignored, but I have a serious fondness for it - it was the first thing I'd written that I ever really and truly loved (I think it's probably one of my best stories to be honest). I think that's why I'm so fond of Severus, because I see him more as pitiable than contemptible. Yes, he has serious flaws but I actually think that no one is more brutally aware of his failings than he is, and by DH he is an utterly broken man (I rather think he probably welcomed death when it came), and compassion is exactly what I wanted the reader to feel for him (because warmth is probably asking a little too much). I really love the idea of a friendship (or even something more) between him and Charity because I figure at the absolute least they were colleagues and watching someone he knew be killed can't have been easy for Severus and it's just one extra weight of guilt for him. It made me think of him as someone incapable of murder who was capable of pretending that he was. You've summed up how I view him perfectly there, at least by this point in his life (there's the comment to Dumbledore in The Prince's Tale of "Lately, only those I couldn't save," when Dumbledore asks how many people he's seen die that rather suggests to me that he's come to regret a lot of his earlier actions as a Death Eater). Mary as his first kill is just my canon (I don't think in canon there's anything to conclusively prove one way or another whether he'd killed before Dumbledore or not, but it's always seemed like a total cop out to me to have him not given he was a Death Eater wholeheartedly at first, and no matter how manipulative Dumbledore is, I don't think he'd make a ma whose soul was previously unblemished rend his soul by killing him). I got into a discussion with someone once that got me to settle on the idea that a DE was forced to kill to prove their allegiance to the Dark Lord as part of taking the Mark. I liked the added conflict of making Severus' first kill someone he knew, and in fact I think that would probably appeal to the Dark lord too. I actually do have a story about Severus killing Mary but it needs a bit of a rewrite before it goes back up. As for the church service, part of my person canon for Severus is that, as this story mentions, he encountered religion in his childhood because of his father (it's Catholicism in my mind actually, because I rather think the Catholic guilt suits him), and originally I didn't have the wizarding elements in the church in this story, but one of my betas pointed out that there wouldn't be a Muggle church in Hogsmead and suggested I give it some magical elements to make it a wizarding church. It makes sense to me that there should be religion in the wizarding world, because there is such an overlap with the Muggle world in terms of Muggleborns coming into the wizarding world and Muggles like Seamus' dad marrying into it that plenty of them would be likely to have a faith and wouldn't give it up simply because they entered the wizarding world. I just think that there's no real reason for wizarding society to lack religion. Anyway that's a fairly brief comment on it, but like you said, a review's not the easiest place to discuss it. Thank you so much, my dear, for such an utterly awesome review!


Waking by the opaleye
Rated: 3rd-5th Years [Reviews - 10]

Summary: Past Featured Story

He cannot bring himself to think the name. There is a glimpse of red. A laugh. A fumbled apology. A friendship.

How a death may change a life or two.

Winner of Best Non-Canon Romance in the Quick Silver Quill Awards 2010

Categories: Dark/Angsty Fics Genre: Warnings: Alternate Universe, Character Death, Epilogue? What Epilogue?, Sexual Situations

Word count: 2380 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
07/27/10 Updated: 07/28/10

Reviewer: ToBeOrNotToBeAGryffindor Signed
Date: 07/28/10 Title: Chapter 1: Waking.

Ooh, I love it when Ron dies, because that means that Hermione is freeeeee. :) (yeah, I'm not morbid or horrible at all)

Seriously, though...luv luv luv. The use of present tense just seems to catapult me into the moment, into what is being felt by Harry. It also gives me a sense of kinship to his situation. It's like I'm there, inside his head, hearing his thoughts, his guilt, and his pain. It's quite an extraordinary experience.

I do have to say that I am a (tiny) bit confused. I'm pretty sure that the girl at first is Hermione, but I'm not certain. She could be Ginny, but I don't know for sure. Perhaps you could enlighten me, or at least point out the obvious so that I may facepalm myself later.

I'm in love with Harmony so very much right now (I've been writing!), so this piece is just a little booster shot to my resolve to get it written and out there.

Completely lovely, as usual. Heart you, Julia Greenleaf. :D

~Jess/Overlord/That Bitch 'Cross the Pond

Author's Response: Thanks, Jess!

The girl is Hermione all the way through - when Ginny is mentioned it is Harry thinking back to their days together during his sixth year. \o/ I hope that isn't too confusing! Her presence all the way through sort of indicates she is the same girl from the beginning. But perhaps I should have made it more clear!

I really love using the present tense. I find it more interesting and more emotive - for my writing style anyway. As you said, it really puts the reader in the moment and when I'm writing I feel like I AM the character - in this case, Harry. Again, thanks so much for the review :)

Julia/Middle Earthling/Elven queen/ummmm, the nerd from the bottom of the world XD


A Good Night’s Sleep by h_vic
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 4]

Summary: When Lily Potter finds herself sitting up for yet another night with her infant son, she decides that it’s about time for her to resort to a little bit of DIY potion-making in order to ensure her family finally gets a good night’s sleep.

It has been a long time though since she last made a potion and for good reason…

Categories: General Fics Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 1697 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
07/28/10 Updated: 07/29/10

Reviewer: ToBeOrNotToBeAGryffindor Signed
Date: 09/28/10 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1


So, yeah...not gonna lie. The idea of Harry being Snape's son is not something that I would ever willingly contemplate, but I do wonder if 'what might have been' give Lily the tears she needed to shed for the potion, for I do want little Harry to feel better, poor love.

It's odd but fitting that making a potion would bring Severus back into her mind so powerfully. I never doubted that Lily loved James, but she was still hurt by what had happened their fifth-year, no matter the fact that it ahd been five years before. It validated the fact that she had truly cared for Severus and that it still had the power to get to her. Had it been some random guy that she hadn't cared for, it would have been long forgotten, and a night of memory-laced potion making would have never existed.

It's cool how you still manage to characterise Severus, even though he was only mentioned. It adds a bit more of what Lily knew of his background that the others who criticised her for befriending him did not.

Blah blah, ramble rambe, you're probably sick of your inbox being full by now. I loved the story in its simplicity and bitter-sweetness. It's poignant and a bit more of Lily's side to the tragedy of their tale.

Hasta la pasta,


Author's Response: I completely agree - I've never bought the whole 'Lily never loved James and just married him to prove some odd point to Severus' nonsense that occasionally gets spouted by the scary, rabid Severus fangirls. Of course she loved James, and she never loved Severus like that really - he loved her but it was clearly unreciprocated. They were however friends for a long time and she definitely cared about him deeply in that way at least, and that doesn't just vanish. No matter how angry she was with him, there's always going to be a certain sense of loss for her of someone who'd been that important too her and an occasional nostalgia, and what better to spark that than something as tied to Severus as Potions. Loads of people seem to have told the story of how Severus feels about the break up of their friendship but Lily's take on it so rarely gets acknowledged, in fact poor Lily rarely ever gets to be anything more than Severus or James' love interest. I just wanted to try and capture just a little bit of Lily as her own woman here and give her a little more depth. Ta as ever, Jess, for the review.


Summary: Rose Weasley and Scorpius Malfoy – a love that could never be, and yet it was.

We never want things to fall apart around us, and we don’t always want the real world to intrude on our lives, but in the end it always will.

Categories: Next Generation Genre: Warnings: Sexual Situations

Word count: 1849 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
07/29/10 Updated: 07/30/10

Reviewer: ToBeOrNotToBeAGryffindor Signed
Date: 07/30/10 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Oh, so very sad!

Most Rose/Scorpius have them overcoming their different backgrounds to be together, but this one is unique in it's portrayal. They aren't so very different, but their worlds and circles are, and wildly so. Scorpius was actually very interesting as a character and as a man. He would rather see Rose with someone else than to see her shunned and ridiculed by her family because she was with him. I don't really think that the Weasleys would disown any of their ranks, even for being with a Malfoy, but Scorpius comes from a different background where that would be an inevitibility for him. It almost makes me sad for him that he doesn't have those types of strong family bonds. 

All in all, this was a very neatly-packaged portrait at the death of something beautiful.

It's odd, watching things like this, because one thing about seeing the end of someone's happiness is that it feels sort of dirty to watch it, like you shouldn't be witnessing such a private moment, but you can't look away. It's a remarkable talent to paint such a vivid occurence, so bravo for that. :)

Very lovely, and welcome back to SPEW!


Author's Response: Yay, I love that you liked this, and thought Scorpius was interesting, given how much time you've put in to next-gen characters! And I know exactly what you mean about that slightly guilty voyeuristic edge; I think it's something that a scene like this has to have to really work, and so I'm glad you picked up on it. Thank you, as ever, dear, for another such lovely review.


Make This Go On Forever by h_vic
Rated: 3rd-5th Years [Reviews - 3]

Summary: When Draco Malfoy fled from Hogwarts on that fateful night at the end of his sixth year, he left behind a piece of his soul in more ways than one. Not only did plotting murder steal his innocence, but it forced him to leave behind the girl he loved, and surely a Gryffindor like Lavender Brown could never understand why he had to do it?

Categories: Draco/Other Character Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 1607 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
07/30/10 Updated: 08/01/10

Reviewer: ToBeOrNotToBeAGryffindor Signed
Date: 09/27/10 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Incredulity did not begin to scratch the surface of my thoughts on Draco/Lavender. I terms of sheer 'wtf' power, this one was up there. But you did it. It was freaking fantastic that you did, too.

I suppose this made sense. Looking back on it, Draco and Lavender found themselves extrememly alone and bereft at the same time. Whether she actually loved him or if it was a rebound sort of thing, I don't suppose I know for sure, but the pair seemed to be filling a mutual need for release and to forget who they were for just a little while. I guess I like that sort of thing, considering I'm reading a story that is basically all about that, hehe.

I'm glad he didn't write the note. He's far too much of a chicken sh!t for that, and had he done it, it would've been OOC.  Well done on that.

I'm not sure how much of Lavender I can glean from this story, but it's almost not important. She never did strike me as the kind of girl who held any ideals, let alone one whose greatest thought was what shade of lip gloss to wear. The idea that she held equality is such high regard is a bit questionable, but we never really saw much of what Lavender really was in any of the books, so I digress. There may be a secret decent human being in there for all I know. I shall simply assume that she is thus and not just an empty headed bint with more frizz than common sense.

Wonderful story. I shall return, etc. You know the drill...


Author's Response: Yeah they are a random little pairing (but perhaps no more so than Draco/Katie ;) ), but they have this one perfect little pocket in time where it can just work. I'm not sure if they'd work in any other scenario, but like you said, they are both adrift at the same moment and that's always struck me as a very exploitable little moment as far as making them work is concerned. As for Lavender, you've hit one of my little crusades there - I think she's much maligned in fandom and that there's a hell of a lot more to her than just an empty headed bint with more frizz than common sense. I mean she's a Gryff for a start and there's nothing to suggest that she doesn't belong there - in fact, when they are trying to round up the Skrewts at some point in a lesson, she's one of the ones mentioned as helping when a lot of the class are cowering in Hagrid's hut, she's in the DA both times around, even when it's considerably more of a dangerous undertaking in DH, and her comment on the bathrooms in the Room of Requirement always implied to me that she was at least one of the first if not the first girl to turn up, so she must have been pretty active in irritating the Carrows. So, she was a bit silly over a boy at the age of sixteen, who hasn't been, really - I don't think that has to mean that there's not more to her than that. I have a bit of thing, which you've probably noticed by now, for trying to give a bit of depth to some of the more maligned ladies of HP - Lavender, Pansy, Narcissa and even Lily. I think they all deserve a little more credit than they normally get. Seriously, you've opened a can of worms now - I could ramble on all morning. ;) Thanks for yet again for another lovely review, and I'm glad I persuaded you that despite being a 'wtf' pairing it doesn't have to make you reach for the spork! :p


Viridis by h_vic
Rated: 3rd-5th Years [Reviews - 11]

Summary: Past Featured StoryMany difficult things have been asked of Severus Snape over the years, and perhaps this latest one ought not to have been the hardest. But yet, he knew that, just beyond the gargoyle, he would be forced to confront the most difficult test he'd ever known: facing the man he killed.

Categories: General Fics Genre: Warnings: Character Death

Word count: 1882 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
08/03/10 Updated: 08/04/10

Reviewer: ToBeOrNotToBeAGryffindor Signed
Date: 09/27/10 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

I've had this one on my list for a while, and may I just say...WOW.

I mean...~insert stupid, meaningless gibberish here~. I so very much adore this story. The voice of both Severus and Albus were so great. They were the right balance of what they were in the memories that Harry had seen and who they were throughout the rest of canon. Now, to me, this is it. I'll never read another Snape/Dumbledore-first-encounter-after the murder fic; I don't have to. This story is it to me. It could not have been any other way. 

I also happen to think this is one of your best pieces. I've read...a lot (and I'm not bored enough to count) of your stories, but this one is just pure awesome incarnate. 

I also like how Snape does seem to care about Harry....juuuuuuuust a little bit, and not in the way that his hard work was going to waste. I like to think he had that in him.

Pure love, my dear. Heart.


Author's Response: This was pretty much my first response to DH - I wrote it within a day or two of reading it. Having seen the interaction between them in the Prince's Tale, I just had to find out how this scene played out. I'm so glad you liked it so much. :) I suppose probably the main reason it's not one of my favourite fics I've written is because it's probably the closest to canon. I like to think it's a fairly plausible missing moment (and in fact having written it so soon after DH, it's caused me problems in the past because I get blurred sometimes between what's canon and what's just in here O.o). The thing is though, to me, that makes it feel a little less original than some off my other stuff where I'm playing at the grey edges of canon, and this is I think more of a truly canon Severus than it is my Severus. That's not to say that I think I normally write OOC Severus (because I sincerely hope I don't!), but that there are, as you've picked up on my other stories, bits of my own personal canon that I've built up for Severus like Mary and his lapsed Catholic background and stuff, that aren't present here, so even though this Severus works for anyone else, he feels incomplete to me, if that makes any sense at all? I'm so glad you liked Dumbledore too though because, like I said, writing him drove me to distraction - and in fact the fact that he was portrait!Dumbledore somehow made it even harder. Thank you, dear, as ever.


Veracity by h_vic
Rated: 3rd-5th Years [Reviews - 3]

Summary: “Bit of a nasty shock when he found out.”

Seamus Finnigan’s mother didn’t tell his father that she was a witch until after they were married, but why would a woman would guard her secret so closely, and how does a man accept that his wife is far more than just the local girl he grew up with?

With time, a truth left unspoken slowly becomes a lie …

Categories: Other Pairing Genre: Warnings: Mild Profanity, Sexual Situations

Word count: 2081 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
08/03/10 Updated: 08/08/10

Reviewer: ToBeOrNotToBeAGryffindor Signed
Date: 09/27/10 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Aww, now this is just cute. I love the idea of being slapped in the face with something this huge and him still being able to move on from it, albeit a bit slowly. He is a dear. I thought he took it quite well.

I really like the dialogue. Just the overt Irish-ness of the way Liam spoke was lovely, not to mention lol-worthy. The way he said 'Jesus' had me cracking up. :D

Lovely story, dear. Until next time!


Author's Response: I really should get Emma to Irish-pick this for me at some stage, because all though I did quite a lot of research for it, it's probably still a bit ropey on that front to be honest. I really quite enjoyed these two, and I'm rather fond of Liam. Maybe I should find an excuse to write them again sometime. Thanks as ever, Jess.


Before I Forget by hestiajones
Rated: 6th-7th Years [Reviews - 9]

Summary: Sometimes, the visions are mere flickers – hazy and muddled. Sometimes, their clarity shakes me out of the limbo. But I’m always sure it is him I see.

I’d have loved to tell you the whole story, but you see, I cannot remember much of it.

Thanks to Kara (Karaley Dargen) for her wonderful beta-ness. :) And Carole (Equinox Chick) for 'Warwick'. ;)

DISCLAIMER: Everyone/everything you recognise immediately belongs to J.K.Rowling. However, the first names of the Death Eaters (except the main characters) aren't canon. The pairing, of course, is mine.

Categories: Same-Sex Pairings Genre: Warnings: Abuse, Character Death, Mental Disorders, Sexual Situations, Strong Profanity, Substance Abuse, Violence

Word count: 6754 Chapters: 2 Completed: No
08/05/10 Updated: 04/27/11

Reviewer: ToBeOrNotToBeAGryffindor Signed
Date: 08/08/10 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1: Love

Yay, the Slash of Doom is finally here!

First off, I will admit that I may or may not have raised a brow at the pairing. It just seemed so very random. However, after reading the story and the scenarios and circumstances that you put forth, it just makes so much sense to me.

Now, I’m guessing that these ruminations of a love past are taking place during Rabastan’s stint in Azkaban. Do correct me if I’m wrong. That would explain to me why he’s having trouble remembering—because of the Dementors.

Your characterisation of Rabastan is phenomenal. You have taken a character that I didn’t give a crap about a half an hour ago and brought him to life. Now, he’s a clear picture of darkness, calculation, and a prototypical Death Eater. Just the way you portray his thoughts and emotions was very vivid and poignant. I felt like I was going on this journey of self-discovery and uncertainty about things along with him.

Regulus is different than I had always imagined. I normally had pictured him as a boy so eager to distance himself from Sirius that he was sucked into a life that he didn’t fully know until it swallowed him. This is quite different. You show him as cunning, cold, and brooding. He knew exactly what he was getting into. He wanted it. It will be interesting to see how you deal with that aspect of him once you get to the Horcrux part. I’m sure you have something deliciously ebil planned.

Snape is an interesting character here. He’s a very minor character so far, but you have him nonchalantly breaking up fights. He does have that air of being like that, which might come into play later in the story. I do wonder if he’s going to play a larger role down the line.  

One part in particular did fascinate me, and that was this:

“Very. I expect Evan would be jealous if he heard.”

“Why so?”

“Are you seriously asking me?”

“No. I’m rather thankful he is too inebriated to come after us. Over-eager and a terrible conversationalist.”

So, did Rosier have a thing for Rabastan, or am I reading this wrong? If this is the case, then it just adds that much more to the differences between Rabastan and Regulus. Rabastan had no idea, but Regulus, ever sharp-witted, was surprised that Rabastan was so clueless. If there is a bit of unrequited Evan/Rabastan, I would be interested in seeing a bit more on it, or at least hear your side of the story at some point. I’m sure it all has a backstory in your head.

The meeting in the locker room was astounding. Regulus was just so calm and collected, whereas Rabastan was addled and on fire within. They make the perfect match of opposites. Just the way that Regulus listed all the things that Rabastan had thought no one else had known was great, and it was even a bit charming to watch Rabastan’s reaction. He was confused, hurt, and alarmed all at once, which lent him the aura of a little boy who got caught with his hand in the cookie jar and was not doing very well in denying it.

Rabastan’s feeling of dominance and comeuppance during the kiss was interesting. It wasn’t a kiss of love and lighter emotions at first; it was payback and passion and subjugation. This is what Regulus meant about the real Rabastan, and this was him. From there, Rabastan got to discover a new part of himself that he probably would never have met otherwise. He became familiar with what it was like to show tenderness and affection, and it was profound to him. That is one of the things that I adore when I read any kind of stories, and that is the feeling of awe and wonder when one has learnt of some sort of personal truth.

All in all, this is a great start to your epic chaptered fic. It’s a story of love, of hate, of longing, of anger, and of all sorts of passions. You captured your characters well, and both they and their stories really came to life. I can’t wait to read more, and I do hope you plan on updating regularly.

/update monster moment

Take care, O Hestia the Bestia, and I look forward to chatting with you later!


P.S.—I have a minor thing to point out that you might want to fix. In this part:

It wasn’t long before I realised how much I had begun looking forward to those rendezvous.

The word ‘rendezvous’ is French, and it would properly be pluralised as ‘rendezvoux’. That’s it. :D

Author's Response: Is that what I think it is? A SPREVIEW? *flails*

Ha! I am so happy I managed to convince you. :) Yes, it does seem random, doesn’t it? But that’s what I like about it. It’s a challenge trying to pull it off, and I’m happy you think it is working. As for when this story is written…ahhh…I can’t dwell much on that now. : (

Writing Rabastan is fun, but tricky. I want him to be cunning, ruthless, and yet naïve and vulnerable, too. I didn’t want to create a sad hero because he is a Death Eater, and a Lestrange, and he was part of the group who tortured the Longbottoms. He also took part in both wars. Writing him as a tragic hero would take absolute brilliance, but would that be cliché as well? I think that is one of the common fanon trends. What I wanted to write was a realistic, unapologetically Slytherin Rabastan, and to hear that you thought I’d achieved that made me glow. Not dazzle. ;)

As for Regulus, I believe him to be a confused personality. In my version, there is a part of him which is exactly like what you described: the boy who rebelled against his rebelling brother. There is another part of him which is not so reckless: he must have been pretty intelligent, cunning and daring himself to do what he did as his final act of redemption. Also, I feel his relationship with his older brother is very complicated, and that’s how I want to portray it.

Snape – ahh! What a fun character to write. Hehe! I think Voldemort always valued Snape; Voldemort doesn’t seem the kind of person to forgive any random Death Eater who pined after a ‘Mudblood’. We see Snape as a petty bully when confronted by the Marauders, and Harry’s mates and Gryffindors. But I think he was different with the Death Eaters. They seem to admire and respect him, and they do it grudgingly. I do have a few plans for him. *rubs palms*

You’re right. Rosier did have a thing for Rabastan, but Rabastan being the generally apathetic person he was, he tended to ignore the other boy. And this love triangle will have a huge part to play in the coming chapters.

Oh! Your praise of my locker room incident makes me do a “He got off! He got off!” dance. That scene was so difficult for me to write, not necessarily because of the sex (you know how easily those scenes come to me *cackle*) but how their interaction builds up to the moment. You also felt exactly what I wanted the readers to feel, so YAY for me.

I intend to finish this story, Jess, I do! Lol. Seriously. : ) Thanks for the FANTASTIC review and encouragement and the Frenchpick!



Unforgiven by h_vic
Rated: 3rd-5th Years [Reviews - 7]

Summary: Can an Unforgivable Curse ever be forgiven … even if it is cast by a saviour?

A dark one-shot charting the wizarding world’s reaction when Harry is forced to play Voldemort at his own game to defeat him.

“Harry James Potter, you are charged with casting the three most heinous curses any wizard could perform.”

Categories: Dark/Angsty Fics Genre: Warnings: Alternate Universe, Book 7 Disregarded, Character Death, Self Injury

Word count: 2084 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
08/05/10 Updated: 08/08/10

Reviewer: ToBeOrNotToBeAGryffindor Signed
Date: 08/08/10 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Holy freaking Prongs, I’m starting to warm up to a bit of AU. This really hit the spot. :D

I would first like to preface by saying that before I read DH, what I thought would happen was much more like this. The wizarding world had been turned upside-down, and they were looking for someone to blame. They were hurt, scared, and directionless, and they needed that scapegoat.

It’s funny how, when they all need someone like that, it always ends up being Harry. When the Chamber was opened and the students were speculating about who opened it, one of the first on the list was Harry. After GoF, when Voldy Shorts returned, no one believed either him or Dumbledore, insisting that he just wanted his name in print and was fishing for attention.

It is all of this that really makes me a believer in how you crafted this story. If I know anything about people, it is that they are, however unintentionally, ungrateful wretches when they’re scared and confused.

Your characterisation of Harry, to me, was superb. He seemed very spot on, from the way he defended himself to his barbs toward Bagshot. This part in particular was very good for me:

“You are charging me with killing Voldemort?” he demanded, incredulous, as the crowd gasped. Harry scowled. “HE’S DEAD – his name won’t hurt you!” He shouted at them. Turning back to Bagshot, he continued his interrupted tirade. “Would you rather I’d left him alone? Maybe you didn’t want to see him fall?”

To me, that’s just so very Harry. He’s always been a proponent that Voldemort’s name is just a name. It was made to inspire fear, but Harry knew that there was no fear in a name. Small details like this are what separate this fic to me. I know we’ve already chatted about writing styles and so forth, but yours is very well-suited to characterisation such as what is in this story, and the way Harry’s voice comes through is very telling of that.

The person that is Edmund Bagshot is quite vile. He smacks of someone who carries his own agenda while charged with carrying out the will of the people. He is the ultimate corrupt politician. At times, he is almost too corrupt, and he starts to sound like Umbridge. That does work against him in terms of characterisation and believability in this story. It’s not that he sounds like her or talks like her; it just seems that, at times, they’re nearly the same person. I’m not going to say that it changes how I feel about this story and its strengths, but it does jump out at me as Dolores Redux.

I love how you incorporated Mad-Eye into the story. He randomly interjected his opinion out loud, just as he did in Dumbledore’s memory of Barty Junior’s trial, and it just seemed so very, very Moody to me. I think that Mad-Eye had always had Harry pegged as an Auror, when the ridiculous number of incidents in which he was involved is considered. That may be me imprinting my personal impressions of a character in someone else’s work, but it’s always rewarding when I can have my own picture of what someone should be like and it’s fulfilled by another author. Moody is a hard character to get right, because he always ends up sounding like an overly-paranoid wingnut with more conspiracy theories than actual thoughts. Here, you have him as gruff and opinionated, and that, to me, suits him well.

I would like to bring up something that could be considered as a bit of a plot hole. While it’s true that Harry knew the prophesy, he knew it because Dumbledore showed him the memory in the Pensieve. Where is this memory to be found? If you had some bit about the Pensieve and Dumbledore’s cache of recollections being destroyed somehow, then that would patch it right up. But, as is, the first thing that popped into my mind is, “Well, what about the memory?” Even though, as was obvious in Slughorn’s memory of Tom Riddle, memories can be altered, it would at least cast a shadow of a doubt as to Harry’s true guilt in the matter. I do think that, with knowledge of the prophesy, the Wizengamot might not have been so quickly inclined to damn Harry, who did save them all with those supposedly unforgivable actions.

The end of the court scene is brilliant. The wave of hands started with one person. Had that one person not raised her hand, maybe none of them would have. Not many people would have the [insert rude terminology for body part] to condemn the man (yes, Bagshot, he’s a man, not a boy!) who killed the most evil wizard in history, but all it took was one person who wasn’t so impressed.

The counting was fantastic. I could easily see Harry remembering every hand and every corresponding face. Each one of those hands meant that he was that much closer to Azkaban. The way you formatted it, with Harry’s thoughts interlaced in the count, was brilliant. It showed how he was realising more and more that he was going to go to prison and how that affected him at the time. It was a wonderful way to show both how it affected Harry and how his conviction was carried out. It is very classic dark/angst, and it’s one of the reasons why I love this category so much. It takes something horrible and highlights the vividness of that horror.

The end, where you revisited the same part as the beginning, was also very well done. Some may think that it is OOC for Harry to injure himself to mark the passing of his days on the wall of his cell, but I disagree. He did cast the Killing Curse, which rips one’s soul. I don’t think it’s a stretch at all that someone with a torn soul—in prison, even after saving the world—would mark his sentence in such a fashion. It would be more OOC if he didn’t do something of the sort. Plus, the number thirty holds a new significance to him now, so it would not be a stretch if this flashback hit him right before he put that thirty-first notch up, almost commemorating the hideousness of it all.

All in all, I think this story really does well in outlining the disparity between law and justice. The law doesn’t always serve justice; it just does the best it can under the circumstances. There are times when it fails epically, but it is in that failure that newer, better laws are formed. I have no doubt that, later on, when the Wizengamot had time to ponder what they had just done to their saviour, their actions toward ‘offenders’ from the war effort would be changed greatly.

I’m glad you posted this story, because it was a lovely read. It just makes me remember why D/A is one of my very favourite categories. It takes something dark and makes me think about it. We don’t always think about those dark places in our minds and hearts, but in a good angst story, we’re sent into places we don’t often tread, even within ourselves. Wonderful work!

Take care and happy writing!

Author's Response: Wow, thanks for such an amazing indepth review, Jess. I'm so glad you got the point of this story so that it was believable. People so often seem to have trouble accepting this story because they don't think Harry could ever cast the Unforgivables (and I can see their point), but that was never the point of the story whether he could or not. The point was in the Wizarding world's reaction to what he'd done and the effect that had on him, and that was what I wanted to make believable, so I'm really glad you thought it was. Good spot on the plot hole with the Pensieve - I'd never even thought of that. I'll have to tweak it one day, when I find a moment, to have Dumbledore's memories destroyed somehow. It's interesting that you found a similarity with Bagshot and Umbridge because I didn't have her in mind when I wrote him at all - I was actually aiming more towards Barty Crouch Sr (I didn't necessarily intend for him to be evil, just cynical misguidedly overzealous), perhaps I need to rein him in a little. I sort of saw the wave of hands as an inverse 'I am Spartacus' moment, and it seemed like it would be something that would really haunt Harry, so I'm glad it worked. I love that you picked up on the disparity between law and justice because that was utterly the point of this. In some ways, because of that this probably is one of the darkest things I've written at least in terms of being the most dystopic. Thanks so much again, dear.


Promises by Nitwit Blubber Oddment Tweak x
Rated: 3rd-5th Years [Reviews - 16]

Summary: Past Featured StoryPromises.

In the Battle of Hogwarts, Tonks has nothing left but promises to keep.

I'll be back. I promise.

Categories: Dark/Angsty Fics Genre: Warnings: Character Death

Word count: 2431 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
08/07/10 Updated: 08/08/10

Reviewer: ToBeOrNotToBeAGryffindor Signed
Date: 08/09/10 Title: Chapter 1: Promises

Lol @ your chapter notes. :D

This was an interesting portrait of a hidden moment in time. I really like how her mind beats that solid tattoo of 'don't die, don't die'. It really lends desperation to the story. You know how I feel about second person PPOV, and I'm still not sure about it here, but you at least have the gift of being able to remove the repetitiveness from it that makes it intolerable in lesser hands. 

Very sweet story, my dear, and a very good return to the Most Recent list. 

Love you bunches!


Author's Response: Jessssss *squeeshes*

Thanks so much for the review! I do see what you mean about the POV, but you know me, I can't help but write things in 2nd person these days :P

Glad you enjoyed it! Loves you too :)



The Seven Potters by Gmariam
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 21]

Summary: Past Featured StoryHarry is about to leave the Burrow for the final time when his six doppelgangers give him something to think about. Set during book seven and based on the chapter of the same name, but having little to do with it, really.
Winner, Quicksilver Quill award for Best Humour story.

Categories: General Fics Genre: Warnings: Mild Profanity, Substance Abuse

Word count: 1888 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
08/09/10 Updated: 08/09/10

Reviewer: ToBeOrNotToBeAGryffindor Signed
Date: 08/10/10 Title: Chapter 1: The Seven Potters


This was so freaking funny. I don't think I have words for just how funny. I think my favourite part was when they were trying to figure out who RAB was, and AngstyHarry misspelt. It was truly a beverage-thru-nose moment. I think I probably spent the entire story laughing. Maybe, even if the Audiofics are on hiatus for a few months, perhaps Madam Caroledemort could record it for you just because. It would be so freaking funny to listen to this madness.

A+++, Twin!!!



Author's Response: Triple A-plus - wow, thanks! I'm glad you found it so funny! Thanks for helping me decide on the Harrys to use. I had fun with this and am really glad it turned out as well as it did. It would be sort of amusing to hear read aloud, I think. We shall see. Thanks for reading it, I really appreciate the review! ~Gina :)


A Forever Kind of Thing by h_vic
Rated: 3rd-5th Years [Reviews - 4]

Summary: A woman contemplates the psychological scars of the Final Battle and how they took her husband away from her.

Categories: Dark/Angsty Fics Genre: Warnings: Alternate Universe, Book 7 Disregarded, Character Death, Mental Disorders, Substance Abuse

Word count: 1897 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
08/10/10 Updated: 08/12/10

Reviewer: ToBeOrNotToBeAGryffindor Signed
Date: 09/27/10 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Ooh, mega angstry Ron/Hermione.

I always did theorise how screwed up Ron would have been if Harry had somehow died (you know, like I thought he would've). Every time he was a selfish wank, like in GoF, it would all crash in on him. 

You know, I really like reading pre-DH pieces to see how some of us thought it would turn out. I personally had always pegged Ron as the one who would snuff it. First off, I wanted Harry with Hermione, or at least Hermione not with Ron. Second, he annoys the sh!t out of me.

Anyway, after miles of digression, I know you claim to not like how this fic was written overly much, but I really like the feel of it. It's not wildly introspective, especially for a first-person. It fills in gaps without being an information dump.The style also happpens to fit the mood rather well. 

You will be seeing me again soon. Ta!


Author's Response: You know, I actually agree with you - I figured Ron would be the one to die (well and Ginny for that matter, but that's because I'm evil and I figured that everything had to be stripped away from Harry for him to be able to bring himself to kill - I thought there'd be a PS parallel with Ron sacrificing himself and Hermione being forced to bow out gracefully to leave Harry alone at the end, with Ginny as the final push over the cliff edge - I've got a feeling we've discussed that before?), but that aside, I wanted to explore the idea of Harry being the one to die because, to be honest, I figured there'd be more angst that way as clearly Ron would cope far worse than Harry as the one left behind. It's not the style or even the feel so much that I'm not happy with; it's just the simple fact that as it's one of the earliest things I wrote it's just not as ... polished, I suppose, as what I've written later, and it just all feels a little clunky and lacking in fluidity to me, but thanks for the lovely comments on it, because it's great to know that I avoided the over-introspective or info dump traps even then. This is admittedly one of the better of my earlier fics, hence why it has seen the light of day again, because a number of fics haven't, and are relegated solely to the depths of my writing LJ! O.o


Hard Loss by h_vic
Rated: 3rd-5th Years [Reviews - 5]

Summary: For Oliver Wood, Quidditch is everything, or almost, and he has never taken to failure well. So, when the biggest game of his career doesn’t go to plan, it takes someone who cares about more than just his skill on a broom to make him see that there is more to life than Quidditch.

Categories: Other Pairing Genre: Warnings: Sexual Situations

Word count: 1807 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
08/10/10 Updated: 08/10/10

Reviewer: ToBeOrNotToBeAGryffindor Signed
Date: 09/27/10 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Ah, and yet again, I troll your author page.

I like the idea of Katie and Oliver together and happy. I totally fail at writing happy characters. She's so wonderful and supportive and just...her

Very well done, though reading 'Olly' made me giggle. He seems the sort of bloke that would punch a kitten if someone called him that. That might just be me imprinting my own characterisation on yours, so feel free to ignore me. XD


Author's Response: This was my intro to Katie/Oliver, I suppose. I had this bunny after the rugby world cup final, and needed to fit characters to it. Oliver was an obvious choice for my sulking Quidditch star, and initially Katie was just a random pick of someone that would be an easily set up, logical pairing. They just sparked off each other so wonderfully when I wrote them though that I just fell in to love with the pairing. I'm glad that you enjoyed it, despite the fact I will be the first to admit that it is entirely unashamedly meritless fluff! As for Olly, I agreed he'd hate it from anyone else, but Katie's a special case. ;) Thanks for yet another lovely review, dear.


Out Of My Life by xxbabewithbrainsxx
Rated: 3rd-5th Years [Reviews - 7]

Summary: What if Harry didn't break up with Ginny so stoically? My own version of Harry and Ginny's break-up, from Ginny's POV. One-shot.

By the way, I'm not JK Rowling. No surprises there. The only payment I'm getting is reviews! Speaking of which, all reviews will receive a reply!

Categories: Dark/Angsty Fics Genre: Warnings: Alternate Universe

Word count: 1171 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
08/11/10 Updated: 08/13/10

Reviewer: ToBeOrNotToBeAGryffindor Signed
Date: 10/18/10 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Hmm, this is an interesting scenario. Had this particular scene not been cemented into canon as something else, it would be completely believable to me. In fact, I had to peruse HBP just to make sure that it was like I remembered it and not thus, so I'd say that you posited a very nice scenario.

I really like tweaking canon to make it better, because there are points, no matter how much we adore the Potterverse as JKR has created it, that certain moments lack luster and the 'wow' they were meant to have. For instance, I thought Harry/Ginny was a stupid idea becuase it just didn't make sense because Harry spent more time pining for Cho freaking Chang than he did for Ginny, and they were supposed to have this great, forever kind of love from that? That's why, even as a Harmony shipper (only in certain situations, as I do believe in Ron/Hermione), I enjoy reading some Harry/Ginny, because good writers fill in those gaps and make the romance make sense. I'm not biased against any ship, really, save for Dramione and Snamione, because 

Your writing is very good, and your grammar/flow/word choice is well done. It's very easy to read and I didn't find any mistakes at all, which is refreshing (and with the amount of reading I know you do, you already know that). 

That's it for now, so I hope this review brightens yoru day as much as yours did for me. Have a lovely afternoon/evening/whatever would be appropriate for your time zone.


Author's Response: Well, actually it's morning down my end :D I'm really chuffed you read one of my stories, being one of my favourite authors on MNFF and a big name on here too. To be honest, this was just a bit of musing and God knows how it got on paper (or computer screen) because now, when I look back on it, I don't know what to think. I know what you mean about Potterverse. JKR said so herself that she's not all that at writing romance. But I do think that H/G made sense because Ginny spend so much time pining for Harry and he was just too stupid to see it. It was only when he kind of realised that she was a girl that he actually started to ntoice her. The fact that you're not a H/G shipper yet still read my story and didn't find any mistakes at all amazes me, because I'm sure that there are loads of mistakes in there. And I don't mind Dramione, just Snamione because I HATE Snape regardless of what he's done. At least Draco's good looking :) Thank you for your lovely review. It made my day! ~Soraya~


Church Bells by h_vic
Rated: 3rd-5th Years [Reviews - 7]

Summary: Past Featured StoryThe last person that Katie Bell expected to encounter on Christmas Eve was Oliver Wood – the once love of her life; the man who had walked away from her when she had needed him most.

Categories: Other Pairing Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 2307 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
08/11/10 Updated: 08/15/10

Reviewer: ToBeOrNotToBeAGryffindor Signed
Date: 09/27/10 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Ooh, yet another Katie/Oliver. How did I ever miss these coming from the queue? /fail

I think what I like about this story the most is the ambiguity of it, about how we know they split but not why. It is just such a heartbreak when I did find out, and I wanted to un-do it for all of our sakes. Poor loves...I can't bear to see them so upset.

I'm assuming she said yes, and I hope they had a half dozen gorgeous children, because I want that for them.

Anywho, I shall cease rambling and hit up the next story. Until...fifteen minutes from now.


Author's Response: This was heartbreaking to write too (although not as bad as some of my drabbles for an LJ prompt table - Oliver and their four year old son at Katie's graveside, I mean seriously, why would my muse do that too me?). I'm glad you wanted the ending to be really fluffy though, because I've always rather figured it was kind of too fluffy as is, but I just had to after torturing them like that. Thanks, dear.


Too Long Away by h_vic
Rated: 3rd-5th Years [Reviews - 2]

Summary: A man reflects on the dark memories that haunt him and have taken him away from his family.

Categories: Dark/Angsty Fics Genre: Warnings: Book 7 Disregarded, Character Death, Mental Disorders, Substance Abuse

Word count: 1239 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
08/12/10 Updated: 08/13/10

Reviewer: ToBeOrNotToBeAGryffindor Signed
Date: 09/27/10 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Hmm, now this one is different from its companion. Whereas the other one had been perfect for first person, the third person was equally correct for this one. I like the idea that Ron was nameless in the whole thing until basically the end, though I already knew who he was because I had just read the other. There did seem to be a plethora of sentences that started with 'he', which probably detracted a bit from the voice with its repetition.

All in all, though, it was a brilliant snapshot into the mind of someone who did the unthinkable and wished like hell that it truly was unthinkable. Maybe then it wouldn't haunt him so. 

Lovely story, dear. Until next time. :D


Author's Response: I'd love to take credit for careful POV choices but to be honest I was kind of just playing with styles - the other was a case of 'ooh let's try first person' and this was 'ooh let's try present tense'. Although, I guess with this one, it was a bit more deliberate because I wanted an emotional detachment that mirrored Ron's, and present tense seemed to fit best because that's all there is for Ron - the past is too painful and the future's too uncertain. Ron was nameless in the other very deliberately, because I wanted the reader to assume it was Harry/Ginny because I wanted to draw out the side of Ron that is the same as Harry in feeling it's his duty to save people but people don't tend to credit him with. This one, I figured it was less necessary, as a reader may well know from the other story that it's Ron, but I wanted to have some sort of stylistic continuity. Also I've noticed, I have a tendency not to use names much with present tense D/A without even meaning to - I guess it adds a remoteness that reduces the risk of melodrama and makes the emotions a bit more universal and therefore relateable. Maybe though it's less noticeable in later fics as my sentence structure is more varied as my writing improved. A review on another site, commented on it being a good portrayal of someone with PTSD, and I realised that although I never put a label on what was wrong with Ron when I wrote it, that's basically what's going on here. I talk too much! Thank for another great review, love.

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