I am a serious Harry Potter fan who, according to one friend, "needs rehab." I like canon-compliant stories and pairings, especially Romione, which is probably evident from my stories.
You will notice I don't use British spellings. I strive to accurately portray British culture in my fics and have my characters (and JK's) behaving in culturally appropriate ways. But spelling and punctuation are tools of the writer, and I'm an American writer. I would feel incredibly pretentious using British spellings.
I'm surprised that you only have two reviews for this story... I really enjoyed it. I was biting off my fingernails during most of the prologue. Even when Ron's line came and indicated she would be rescued, I was crossing my fingers that it would, in fact, be Ron doing the rescuing. Good idea to not mention who said that line.
I will agree with the previous reviewer that I was confused by the "couple of miles" reference and didn't really understand why the trip was taking so long. But that was sort of a minor distraction only. Nice job keeping them both in character throughout, too.
Author's Response: Thanks for the great review! I'm glad you liked the story. And well, maybe Jay dragged the journey out to lure Hermione and Ron into believing they're safe with him.
I really liked this, and I'm not usually a huge fan of Harry/Ginny fics. I like the idea of exploring how Rowling's characters might behave in the everyday details and phases of married life, struggles and whatnot... bit of an empty nest thing going on with Ginny here. I liked it. Nice resolution with the kids getting involved.
I liked the use of present tense, though I'm usually resistant to it as a writer. When reading though, it makes me feel immediately connected to your narrative.
Just one more thing... with Ron and Hermione... it was that morning wasn't it? ;) C'mon, you can tell me! Please?
Hehe... nice job with this! :)
Author's Response: Thanks so much! I love the whole world J.K. Rowling's created, but I also love the characters, and its fun to imagine the characters in OUR world! I'm glad you liked it. Present tense can be a little unsettling, I think, and sometimes it takes me a little while to "get into it" but I always think when used well it can add to a story. I'm glad you liked it and the story overall! And Ron and Hermione . . . ;)
In times of peace, tales of strife and angst tend to fall out of favor with the masses, but stories of happy endings and the concept of everything turning out all right don’t often make for good reading. There are rare occasions, though, when both can be met with equal accord and form a bond in the written word.
The first sentence in the Charles Dickens classic, A Tale of Two Cities, simply states that ‘It was the best of times; it was the worst of times.’ An anonymous writer sent in a letter to Roxanne Weasley’s weekly featurette in the Daily Prophet, telling the story of his father’s murder and his journey to recovery, which seemed to be the incarnation of that very line. Sometimes, it takes a loss for one to truly appreciate what one has in life and even in death.
This is a lot different than anything else I've read from you, Jess, but I really like it. Nice job capturing the grief of a child for his parent. I knew it was Scorpious, obviously, and I liked the things we learned about Draco here. I liked the use of the word "mark" to mean both the mark Draco had on the world and on Scorpious' life, as well as the one he had to live with on his own flesh. Nice.I was a bit obsessed with who his wife was... I see you had Rose in mind, which is a nice fit. I think the cantankerous uncle sounded like he knew an awful lot about the subject at hand. And while all the Weasleys would have known grief, none would have known it like George would. Is that who you had in mind? I really like the idea. Do you think I could use the words "really" and "like" a few more times in this review? Haha, you deserve better, but you know how my reviews go. You are so versatile, Jess, and this is only one example. I liked the letter format, and the irony that he was actually sending the letter in to Roxanne, a family member. (And the daughter of the man who gave him the useful advice? If so, extra cool irony, my friend.) May the birthday shenanigans continue!
Holy crap, this fic is old. It got audio-ficced a while back, which reminded me that it even existed. Julia had nominated it ages ago.
Yes, it's Scorpius, and the wife is Rose, and the uncle is certainly George. I hadn't intended to be irony so much as an 'anonymous' letter that Scorpius knew would reach a limited audience (his family and in-laws) and maybe let them know that he was all right, even if those around him didn't go about it quite the right way.
Anyway, this response is about as good as it will get, as I've nearly forgotten what this fic is about, lol. I'm glad you liked it, and that it is still something of quality despite being one of my very first one-shots that took about four tries to get validated. >.< ~Jess
This is a really interesting exploration of Fleur's character, and I was hoping you would lead into an idea of how she and Bill began to get together. Very nice piece!
Author's Response: Thank you very much for reading and reviewing. I'm glad you enjoyed the piece. I find Fleur fascinating.
Hi Natalie. I found this little gem of a story hiding on the second page of your author page, and I could not resist. It claimed to feature Bill Weasley, after all, whom I love and adore.
What a wonderful look into his younger life. It was strange to see the twins at such a young age and Bill & Charlie at Hogwarts, but in a good way. I love this family so much, and all the interaction was really pleasing and believable.
I love what you said about Bill seeming to understand Ron especially, and I agree so much. It works beautifully to imagine them struggling in similar ways regarding the family's financial struggles. Ron hated this, but adored his parents... and your Bill did as well. Nice connection.
But the best thing you did here was to give Molly a reason for being so mistrusting of Fleur once she came onto the scene. I must say in the books, the only reason I could ever come up with for MOlly not liking her is just pure old-fashioned jealousy. Or maybe a milder form of it... but she feels somehow threatened by Fleur. And Molly is so strong and independent that it's hard for me to think she would be easily intimidated, even by someone as beautfiul as Fleur was. Anyway. I like that she has this past negative experience with a foreign woman who seemed to have broken Bill's heart. This was just a brilliant addition, and just the sort of thing to make me feel like this could be canon.
I liked it so much. Bill Weasley, second only to his baby brother in my books. :)
Author's Response: Lori!
This story is something I worked so hard on, but you know how it gets here. Lol. I'm glad you liked it enough to leave a review. :)
It was interesting to write about the Weasleys, who are my favourite family. I was happy to see that you caught on both the parallel between Bill and Ron, and Molly disliking Fleur for reasons other than just the old-fashioned jealousy. Molly is so much more than that!
Thanks for this present, Lori! It made my day to see you reviewing my less-read fics. :D
What a fun read! I was nervous as first, as I have a hard time picturing things going down as it seemed they had... so glad you had a sensible solution for poor Hermione. That was good fun!
Author's Response: Thank you, Lori. I'm glad you enjoyed the story. Mmm, I couldn't make Hermione too out of character - she's still hermione after all. Mind you, will she be quite so enthusiastic about books ever again .... (Yes, probably) ~Carole~
Neil, I really love this! I knew it was Neville pretty early on because the characterization was so spot-on. What a great voice you gave him. I loved the memory sections and all his thoughts regarding the different girls and even his reaction to the guys as well.
This is my second favorite story of yours, as nothing could top After Breakfast for me. :)
Good luck with the challenge. I started something for that prompt, but... I'm not the best with deadlines.
Author's Response: Thanks. The summary gave me a lot of trouble (and itís only a couple of sentences). How do I pique the readers interest without telling them who the narrator is? I was a little surprised how easy it was to write Neville. I may even get a second challenge story in within the deadline (thanks to some fast and excellent Beta work) but it may not be accepted as I think Iíve broken the rules. )-: I find writing to order harder than meeting a deadline. -N-
Natalie, this is wonderful! I enjoyed it so much, and this is not a pairing I've even read before (in fanfic, obviously) that I can recall. I like the structure, that you bookended the backstory with the present... really nice.
I think my favorite parts are the scene at the train station where he sees through her and knows how upset she is. Even though I knew he was going to stay, it was still a great moment when he showed up in the Great Hall.
I also loved this line: He understood me before I had become clear to myself.
I enjoyed reading this very much. Thanks!
Author's Response: LORI!
Sigh. I'm sorry for the confusion, but I think you're talking about the scene at Hogwarts grounds. My fault. That said, that is my favourite part of the fic too! I'm seriously happy you liked my Ted/Andromeda. I love that pair and I really wanted to do justice to their infamous elopement!
Thank you so much for the review. It really cheered me up .
I really enjoyed this Carole... totally believable and canon-compliant. Loved it, especially the surprise ending. It's nice to think you could end up with such a substantial friendship from first love. Great job!
Author's Response: Thank you, Lori. I like them remaining friends, but then I think that particular year group would all remain friends given the DA and life under the Carrows. ~Carole~
One part of those old letters are the only reminder of Parvati's first love; a love never openly admitted to, and a love never requited.
This is Karaley Dargen of Gryffindor writing for the Great Hall February Month of Love Challenge, First Love Prompt
Hahaha, this was a lot of fun. I sort of closed my eyes and picked a Kara fic to check out for your birthday. I like Lavender, and this is nice because you almost NEVER seen anything with her that predates HBP. We know she and Parvati are close, and this is so how it would be... the notes an the letters. I kept getting nervous that a professor was going to confiscate their notes. That happened a lot in my school days, and I would have been terrified to reveal so much in note. Haha. (But I'm not a Gryff either.)I like your choice to make Parvati really like Harry before he asked her. I never had considered that, and it adds something to the whole thing. Glad she isn't too crushed and gets over him quickly. This was a fun read, Kara. Whether it's something light like this or a mystery spanning 15 chapters, you know how to deliver the goods. I enjoyed it. Writing aside, you are easily one of my favorite people I've met online. Thanks for always being so fabulous ~ Happy Birthday!
Hello, banner-sketcher extraordinaire. :) I really enjoyed this. I never thought about how things may have gotten started between these two... but it's interesting since they would have been essentially family. I like your take on it a lot.
Author's Response: Thanks for the review, Lori! I love it when I see familiar faces on MNFF. ;) I'm glad you liked it. I know you're one who appreciates the canon and also the what-could-have-happened. Look for more from me in the future. :)
This was a fun read, Carole. :) And I, too, like it from her point of view... nice snippet of conversation between her and McGonagal. I love the thought of Slughorn not speaking to her since the Sorting. Nice.
Author's Response: Thank you, Lori. I'm glad you liked the McG/Hooch conversation. I'm sure Horace would have been apoplectic when Sirius walked towards the Gryff side - ha ha. ~Carole~
I like this one, Neil, and I think it was a great choice to use parental love for "love at first sight" even if it doesn't work with the challenge. Harry and Ginny were both characterized well and fun to read. Good job!
Author's Response: Thanks. This was fun to write, though itís certainly not a love story in the traditional sense. -N-
At the end of seventh year, Scorpius and Rose anticipate the end of waiting.
I've never reviewed poetry, but like your first reviewer, I just love all your stuff. This is no exception. Enjoyed it!
Author's Response: Poems are just different kinds of stories, and I'm thankful you love my stuff and read this one! I'm feeling the Scorpius and Rose vibe and soon will be able to write. Talk about anticipation. I might have to put on my mom's old Carly Simon album that has the song of the same name. :D
Oh. My. I completely love this. Love, love, LOVE. I found myself getting choked up more than once, and that is saying something for me. I usually think Ron is my favorite character, but lately I've been on a bit of a Hermione kick. I fee like she gets the short end of the stick in so much fanfic, but maybe I've just been stumbling onto the wrong stories lately. You've highlighted everything wonderful about her, all the things that make her such a great heroine in the books. She's got flaws, but they are completely overshadowed by how fiercely she loves and perseveres.
I enjoyed every perspective, but I especially loved Arthur, Hugo, and (of course) Ron. Ron's part was incredibly romantic, and still somehow, believable.
Really, really wonderful read. And I would be all over reading similar fics for other characters.
I am a fan of yours. :) At this point, I think I would read anything if your name was on it.
Author's Response: Thank you so much! I feel like Hermione gets the most attention in fanfiction when it concerns Hermione/Draco, which I have never liked -- I'm Hermione/Ron to the end! I'm glad you liked this and thought it properly captured Hermione :)
I'm running out of adjectives, so I will just say how much I enjoyed this. I haven't read a lot of James/Lily (though I always mean to)... I so loved them in this. What a comforting thought, to know how they watched over him.
Really good title, too. Even before I saw that you wrote this, the title caught my attention.
Author's Response: I'm really attached to that title, so I'm glad you liked it and it caught your attention! Thanks for the review! I love James and Lily, so it's always good to know that I can write something people who don't always go for James/Lily read and enjoy :)
Nominated in the 2010 Quicksilver Quill Awards for Best Canon Romance.
The mother ship is definitely calling you home, Julia. Ron/Hermione is where you belong... hehe. (Hey, I couldn't resist, as they are my OTP) I love how you wrote them both, but particularly Hermione in the waiting and the description of all she was feeling and not feeling. Grief is hard to articulate, and you've really found the words here. Your prose gives you up as a poet, for sure. I love the language...
"But there was an insurmountable grief that hung heavy on her chest, as if each breath were full of lead, as if each smile were black and dead. "
I could quote a lot more, but I'd end up cutting and pasting too much.
I will admit it's always hard for me to imagine their first time happening this quickly, just because they are both so awkward. But you've written it beautifully, and I loved it. Please consider writing more with this pairing!
Author's Response: Oh thank you, Lori! That means a lot coming from you since I absolutely adore Scenes from Shell Cottage. To be honest, I'm not really sure that Ron and Hermione would have their first time so soon either. You are right that they are both awkward but I had this plot bunny hopping around and I thought that Ron would be in such an emotional and vulnerable place at that moment that it could happen. Thank you so much for reading and reviewing. I really enjoyed writing this pairing (which surprised me as I tend to write non-canon pairings) so I'm sure you will see more of them from me in the future! Julia XD
Well, I must say I'm shocked to learn I can enjoy a romance story this much without it being about R/Hr... crazy! ;) I loved this so much. There are too many wonderful parts to mention each one, but I especially liked his little speech to her, followed by his reaction in the silence... thinking he might die.
I also loved that it didn't try to go anywhere dramatic after he asked her; that he just couldn't really say anything, so they went to their next class. I really loved it, Natalie. Nice job.
Oh, and if you really wrote this in 2.5 hours... dude, that is seriously impressive. :)
Author's Response: Lori!!!
Your review was a pleasant surprise because I know your love for R/Hr. I can say I should be proud of myself if you enjoyed this that much.
Oh! The ending...yes, my endings are often like that. Here, especially, I wanted to make things sound as normal as possible because in RL, fireworks don't explode when someone tells you they love you. :D Thanks for the review!
I really enjoyed this, Kuri. I think McGonagall is a fascinating character, and have often pondered what kind of relationships she had been involved in. This was a very nice read, and well written. My favorite section:
"Professor McGonagall studied the Headmaster’s face. Although he seemed calm, she felt as though something had happened. She glanced around the room, checking to make sure she had not forgotten anything. She waved her wand over the box of mice and they vanished into thin air. She did not need them until next lesson. The third-years would be covering Animagi. An allusion of a cat and mouse occurred to her, but she could not recall all of the words. Most people considered this rude behaviour in the presence of a powerful wizard, but she found it easier to pass the awkward silences with small tasks until he was ready to speak."
This paragraph hit me as amost eerie... how our minds go on working even when we know the worst news is likely upon us. Great job.
Author's Response: Lori, You read this and liked it? I'm flattered, really. I'm glad that you think McGonagall is more than a strict old bitty. (Yeah, bitty, what that?) You wouldn't believe the whole ime I was writing this I was thinking, "This is not going to work. Are you kidding me? She's OOC." If I even managed to keep to that by a tenth (and again I don't believe I did in many places. I'm glad you thought so,) that's amazing. This paragraph? Now that I read over it, you're right. It does have a creepy feel to it. I wasn't even going there. Cool. How did that happen? I'm glad I was able to make a connection. Thanks for the revuew.
I liked this a lot. It's easy to drop Sirius into the side of the Order and Regulas into the Death Eater camp and be done with it... but things are rarely that simple. I like that there is some ambiguity here about what might happen with Regulus... that Sirius, at least, has not given up hope that he will see the light.
I also loved that Mrs. Potter didn't even know Sirius was moving in... that he was confident enough because of the relationship he already had with that family to know he would be welcome. At least he has that, considering what he is leaving.
I love thinking about the "what ifs" in the back story. Thank you for this!
Author's Response: Thank you so much for your review. I know from RL, things are never black and white (no pun intended). There are always two sides and often the truth is somewhere in the middle. Thanks again. Terri