I am an obsessed Harry Potter fan who, according to one friend, "needs rehab." Hehe. I like canon-compliant stories and pairings, especially Romione, which is probably evident from my stories.
You will notice I don't use British spellings. I always strive to accurately portray British culture in my fics and have my characters (and JK's) behaving in culturally appropriate ways. But spelling and punctuation are tools of the writer, and I'm an American writer. :) I always feel incredibly pretentious when I use British spellings (if it's required for a challenge)--LOL.
Right, just wanted to let you know where I'm coming from in case you are annoyed that I spell it color instead of colour. Hehe.
Summary: It's been eight years since the Battle of Hogwarts. Neville Longbottom has gone on to become a successful herbologist, but he is still struggling. However, there could be hope waiting for him at a party at the Potters'...
This is a nice read. I like the idea of the DA getting together for a reunion of sorts. I have to confess, it's hard to imagine such good friends falling so seriously out of touch for such a long time (esp Neville with all of the others, when we know he was an auror), but still, we don't really know, do we? So it could have happened this way.Loved that it was Ginny who went after him and not Hannah. It was a nice, satisfying surprise, and the proposal at the end was very sweet. :) Good luck for the competition! ~Lori
Summary: On the fifth anniversary of the Battle of Hogwarts, Minerva McGonagall worries about the fate of the boy who saved them all.
Oh, Gina, this is so lovely! It's likely this sort of commemoration did happen among the staff, and I do think the whole scenario very believable. Your characterization is spot-on in every case. I love Minerva here, and even Abderforth, gruff but caring -- I like that description very much.The memory of Harry screaming at Dumbledore's portrait while Minerva looked on was just heartbreaking, but it does seem like the sort of thing Harry does when he is at his lowest. Really a beautiful piece you have here, friend. I fitting tribute... good luck with the competition!
Not sure I've ever left two reviews before, but wanted to comment on the other reviews now that I've read them. I understand the point that this may be very dark for Harry, and honestly, my head canon doesn't go this dark for him. But the truth is that we don't know. And it's impossible to think Harry would have gone through as much as he did, lost SO many people he loved, and not crash at some point. I think you have written this crash very well, and very believably.And it's not hopeless at all. There is much talk of his resiliance among the staff, and that is what will pull him through this. You can't be resiliant without first having some major, major setbacks (such as the "rock bottom" scenario here). So while this is a dark take on post-war Harry, I do think it believable. And I'm so glad you left it very hopeful, too. He will get up again, eventually, and be okay. Because it's Harry. :) Well done, Gina. (Sorry to leave two reviews. Well, I'm a little sorry. Hehe.)
Summary: The Hogwarts teachers are facing the first school year after the Battle of Hogwarts. How can they help the students, and the whole community, heal? What will it take to feel as if the world is back to normal?
This was a nice read. It's a good idea to find something to celebrate in such a dark time of rebuilding and recovery... I can't imagine how difficult it would have been for professors to gear up for a new term under those conditions.The analogy of the twins was effective, put me in mind of Fred and George... *sniff* Good luck with the competition! ~ Lori
Summary: Remus and Dora have only just got into this strange and stupid and perfect routine of playing lovers. They shouldn't have to give it up now.
Set between OOTP and HBP.
Eeeeep! This story has been nominated for a 2013 Quicksilver Quill Award: Best Canon Romance. Thank you.
Why does this fic have so few reviews? It's just wonderful!You can thank Julia and Carole for making this recommended reading for this week's discussion in the Romance class, and I will thank them as well. ;) You've really managed to capture a lot in very few words here... the assignment for Remus, the story of how they got together, the first time they said they loved one another, sex, and a completely domestic (and contrasting, to their situation) setting. Their characterization is so, so right. I really liked that Remus didn't end up telling her, but that he had intended to. It's another layer of the Remus angst that makes him such a wonderful character, and I do think its just what he would have done in this situation. As for Dora, she's strong and funny and yet vulnerable, too. I love when she admitted that she was scared before he told her how he felt. That's the kind of declaration that can come off being pretty cheesy or whiny, but it fit just perfectly on her. My favorite part--when her hair changed and grew at his touch. Romantic and sexy. Great stuff, Soraya!
Summary: Treasures are found where others might not seek to look. Bill/Fleur.
Nominated for Best Poem in the 2013 Quicksilver Quill Awards
Beautiful, Minna. Really beautiful.
Author's Response: Aw, thanks. <3
Summary: Fifteen years after the Battle, Ron and Hermione reminisce.
Disclaimer: I am not JK Rowling, but I hope she'd like this.
This story was inspired by a reminder from halfaslug on tumblr - thank you. I dedicate this to her, and Lori (Weasley Mom) because they love Romione so much. (Well, what's not to love?)
This is so lovely, Carole. I thought I'd already reviewed, but I must have only mentioned it to you on ls. Tonight I was in the mood for Ron/Hermione and decided to read it again. Scratched my itch nicely.I like that he isn't thinking about the deaths, at first. That's what's so incredibly complicated about the Battle, and everything post-Hogwarts really, because they got what they wanted in that Voldy is dead and life is good. But it cost so much that that life is tainted for so very many. You handled that so well, allowing Ron to find the good memory and to remind her. Completely true that Molly will never completely heal and that many of them will slip and speak of Fred as if he is still there. Loved Hermione's explanation on that. You've captured a beautiful moment here, and I suspect I will reread this one many times, to scratch that itch of mine. Hehe. I noticed the dedication on this read... thanks so much! Oh, and this may be just a coincidence, but I admit to smiling when you described Ron's face as SHROUDed. Hahaha! ~ Lori
Summary: Being poisoned has its advantages - Hermione is talking to Ron again. Unfortunately so is Lavender. Ron hopes to sort this out once and for all if only he could work out how.
I really, really, really, really like this. Very nice touch including that change in Hermione's schedule that occurred while they were on the outs. Good way to emphasize that loss for Ron.Spot-on characterization, as usual. Enjoyed it!
It is Christmas Eve 2014 and instead of playing games with his nieces and nephews, Charlie Weasley is drinking. Stuck in Romania watching the dragon preserve over the holidays, Charlie decides a night at the pub is just what he needs. After a few ruckus hours exchanging stories with the bartender, Charlie is about to head out.
Then, the door opens ...
Disclaimer: I am most certainly not JK Rowling
Oh, I liked this very much. First, it's Charlie, who is adorable. I have to admit though, that sometimes fics set at the dragon reserve are a bit of a disappointment to me. Perhaps its because nearly everyone is an OC, or because lonliness is so often a player in Charlie's existence, but here, you've made it all very engaging.I was so sad in the first part, not only because he decides not to go home but because he doesnt' really know why. I kept waiting for you to reveal the true reason later in the fic, but then you didn't, and I think now that it was very wise. Sometimes we don't know why we do the things we do. Charlie loves his family, but all the activity and family and marriages and kids could be difficult to take for many reasons... anyway, nice choice to leave the the root of his decision a mystery. It added depth to the fic, and a nice dose of reality. Thanks for not leaving him in the uncertainty and the sadness. I liked Emma. She had a fiestiness about her that I think would appeal to a Weasley man (haha!), and the Quidditch connection worked well. Unlike Vicki, I thought the grope in the doorway was actually very believable, considering the holiday and conversation and the alcohol. They had connected, for sure, and I thought that bit worked. I feel dim not realizing she was an apprentice, but that was a nice surprise. While a relationship may be inappropriate, I rather think Charlie has some intention of pursuing her, given his thoughts about being glad he's not going home for the holiday. After all, they aren't in an office situation. They live and work on the reserve, so I wonder if there is more relationship potential than there might be in other work situtations? Great little Charlie fic... and let's face it, we all need more of those in our lives. ~ Lori
Summary: The Yule Ball is on the horizon and Neville knows only one girl that he wants to go with. GoF missing moment.
How did I miss this when it hit the archives? Hello, again. I love your story, again. Big shocker! Haha!Seriously, this is a lovely little snapshot of a wonderful missing moment. JKR could have just had Neville ask Ginny from the start, but I've always thought it such a complement to his character (and Hermione's, for that matter) that he asked Hermione first. I actually have head-canon that Neville had a very real crush on Hermione briefly leading up to this, but that is neither here nor there. As always, your characterization is so good, and just right tone for their ages, too. I think it's so hard to get that right, but you've captured the awkwardness that was there for both of them. Even that crease in her forehead... I could see Emma doing it, though I've never paid attention to it in the films. In fact, the writing was so vivid that I could picture the scene at every point--the boring lecture, the stumbling, the conversation in the hall. Really nice description without bogging down the dialogue with a ton of wordage. There's a strength in the style, too, that is very akin to the style of the books. Perhaps it's the humor or the way you've so firmly grounded the scene in the classroom, but it felt as if it could have been lifted straight from canon. I found this story on the review drive and hit it up first because I knew it would be good and it's NEVILLE, for crying out loud. But my review falls short because I have no crit to offer. I don't think this sweet missing moment could be improved upon by changing a single thing. Nice work. I enjoyed reading, as always. ~ Lori
Summary: Harry, Hermione, and the moments in between.
He doesn’t say that this is his last winter. He doesn’t say that this could be her last winter. Instead he feels his heart swell with the bruising grip of her hand and the sound of Ron’s snoring in the tent.
This is utterly gorgeous, Julia. I love the trio friendship more than anything in the books, and this is a beautiful picture of all the facets of that between Harry and Hermione. (And Ron too, really)
Author's Response: Ah the case of the disappearing review ;)
What the heck? Where's the rest of my review???I especially love the part where Harry and Hermione in the cold, with the tea and the blanket and Ron snoring. You captured something special with Harry in that moment, the gratitude he feels, his concern that things are okay with Ron. I like that Hermione asked him what happened with the Horcrux. I don't think she would be able to let it go, not without trying to find out from one of them, and Harry is the best choice at that time. I think its so interesting that you had him choose Ron first (by keeping the secret), and then choose her over Ron (by telling her anyway). Ah, the problem with three. :) Your characterization is perfect, and particularly with Harry, as his emotions are hard to capture and hard to write sometimes. But this was so, so him. Beautiful, beautiful stuff, but then I wouldn't expect anything less from you.
Summary: George Weasley is turning twenty-one, but he isn't sure he can do it alone.
Warning is due to mentions of CD.
Oh, I really enjoyed this! I love post-war George-centric fics when the characters and circumstances are handled as honestly as they were here. Well done.Molly is pitch perfect. The atmosphere in the house, even down to where everyone was situated in the room, was heavy and just so, so sad. Molly's defeat in deciding to let Teddy have some cake rather than wait any longer for George was painful to read but a perfect look into a real life moment. If a birthday cake is eaten before the guest of honor arrives, something has indeed gone very wrong. And Molly's line at the end of the first section describes her so well post-Fred. Her statement that she will not lose another son beautifully shows both the sorrrow and the fight in her, the battle between mourning and living that is such a hard thing in grieving. You continued to develop her character in the conversation between George and Angelina. We see the mistake she made at Christmas and what George thinks about it, and then, finally, Angelina's pronouncement that Molly would probably wait for him forever. Very true. Beautiful portrayal of Molly in this fic, especially considering she was only present in the beginning. My only question in that first section had to do with POV. To be in both Bill's and Molly's heads in such a short section was a little confusing for me. I loved Bill's thoughts, but I think this section might have been stronger if you'd kept only to Molly's POV. Just a suggestion. Another reviewer mentioned your "nothing-but-brave daughter" line as problematic, but I actually thought it was good and provided an accurate look at how Molly would have seen Ginny during that time. Just goes to show how subjective every reader's experience is. The George/Angelina relationship here was lovely. I liked that you wrote Angelina getting choked up when realizing he'd read each and every letter but chosen not to respond. A girl could take it as a compliment that he knew the exact number, but she had so desperately needed to hear from him that this news was upsetting. Really nice character development there. At the same time, I completely believed that he was just not able to respond. Grief often defies explanation and sense, and this section really showed that for George. And yet, his humor is still there. The conversation at times was gut-wrenching, and yet you ended with a smile. Poor George and his failure to look surprised! Loved this, and the glimpse back at his school antics with Fred. In terms of formatting, you might take a look at paragraph breaks. I sometimes noticed a new character's action appearing without a new paragraph. This fic is so well done in every other way that one good edit would (in my opinion) result in a QSQ-quality story. "The sun had been so bright that day she'd had to squint through the duration of the funeral. She remembered the surrealness of it all vividly. A war hero, Fred had been called. And Angelina had realized, with a heart-jolting shock, that it was true." Those lines were my very favorite, closely followed by the section explaining how George could much more easily find his brother back at The Burrow, in the faces of all his immediate family members. A beautiful insight, and a beatiful story. Lovely writing. ~Lori
Loving it. You've caught the language so perfectly, Natalie, and it really adds that extra layer of authenticity. These people have too much money and too much time on their hands. Can't wait to see what they get up to next.
Author's Response: YAY! I will be posting the third chapter soon! :)
Oooh.... this is delicious! I love when you write Slytherins! You've got a great set-up here, and I can't wait to see what's coming next. Great writing, great characterization... no suprises in that area. It was lovely to see your name pop up in the most recents, Natalie. I'm in for the ride!I was relieved to see it wasn't our Harry with McLaggen, but I should have known. I kept thinking, there's something strange because this isn't Harry, and Natalie knows it! Haha! Trickery!
Summary: There is a reason why Vernon Dursley is the way he is, but he hopes no one will ever find out.
This poem took Third Place in the We Are Poets Challenge.
I almost never review poetry because I don't know enough about the art of writing it to say much that is useful. I clicked on this because I have become a fan of your drabbles, and your summary drew me in. I like it a lot. The last stanza really defines the Dursley we know in canon, but it is a sadder picture you draw here... that the height of his goals, everything he is reaching for, is really rather shallow and must be protected lest his past (completely respectable) be exposed. You made a me feel a bit sorry for him, and that is saying something.Nice poem.
Summary: It's a big day for Teddy Lupin and he's all ready to go ahead and pop the question to Victoire. Things, however, don't always go as planned, and Teddy just gets into one of those situations.
This is Ginny Weasley Potter of Hufflepuff House and this is my one-shot for the final of ‘So this is Romance’ class over at the Mugglenet Fanfiction Beta Boards.
Hey there, Pooja. :) I enjoyed this one-shot and the original drabble as well. I find myself shipping Teddy/Victoire more and more all the time, and this is a sweet little fic. I especially appreciated the way you included his relationship with Andromeda, and how she called him "her baby boy." Good stuff.I enjoyed being in the class with you, and now, reading all the stories that emerged from it. Take care! ~Lori
Natalie, you know I don't review much poetry, but this is such a beautiful and heartbreaking image of George... love the idea of the shimmer to his left and Molly's smile "a half slimmer." So glad you included a bit of hope here at the end. Lovely stuff.
Author's Response: Thank you, Lori, for reading and leaving such a lovely review! :) I love, love receiving reviews from those who generally don't do poems - that makes me feel like I was able to establish the right connections!
Summary: Confidence can be misleading.
This is Alex/Ithinkrabis2people of Ravenclaw, and this is my one-shot for the final of ‘So this is Romance’ class over at the Mugglenet Fanfiction Beta Boards.
I liked this, Alex. Bill and Fleur are a couple I love to read in fanfic, and I like your take here -- that she restrained her own charm to make sure he liked her for who she was, not because he was compelled to. The downside of Veela blood: never knowing if the man really wanted you for you. Nicely done. (Though I'm not sure I can ever feel sorry for a Veela -- haha!)Yes, the end is a bit sugary, but it's no problem for me, as I happen to love the occasional dessert! I see the nargles have attacked your submission. You may already know this, but if you put a space on either side of your dashes, those annoying squares will go away. Just FYI. I enjoyed being in class with you and getting to read your drabbles and discussions. Also nice to see your name on the most recents list again. Take care! ~ Lori
Summary: This is how Harry lives with himself, after.
I like this. I don't read much next gen, but I think the kids are interesting here, almost as interesting as Harry. I will definitely be watching for the next installment. Happy writing.
Author's Response: Thank you! I've put this in Post-Hogwarts rather than Next-Gen because the kids aren't really going to be in it much after this chapter and the focus will be on Harry. However, having a chance to play around with their personalities here has made me think about writing a next gen story or two, which I've not been interested in before. The next few chapters should come along fairly swiftly - they are most written, just need a bit of editing and tweaking in places. Thanks for reviewing, I'm glad you enjoyed it. :)