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Real name: Lori
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I am an obsessed Harry Potter fan who, according to one friend, "needs rehab." Hehe. I like canon-compliant stories and pairings, especially Romione, which is probably evident from my stories.

You will notice I don't use British spellings. I always strive to accurately portray British culture in my fics and have my characters (and JK's) behaving in culturally appropriate ways. But spelling and punctuation are tools of the writer, and I'm an American writer. :) I always feel incredibly pretentious when I use British spellings (if it's required for a challenge)--LOL.

Right, just wanted to let you know where I'm coming from in case you are annoyed that I spell it color instead of colour. Hehe.
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Growth by teh tarik
Rated: 6th-7th Years [Reviews - 6]

Summary: Past Featured Story

Something has changed in Merope Gaunt, a thrumming of insect wings, a pulse kickstarting to life.

Merope is alone. Penniless, undernourished and pregnant - these are the last three trimesters of her life.

Categories: Dark/Angsty Fics Genre: Warnings: Abuse, Character Death, Mental Disorders, Sexual Situations, Substance Abuse, Violence

Word count: 3910 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
02/14/13 Updated: 02/15/13


Reviewer: WeasleyMom Signed
Date: 10/01/13 Title: Chapter 1: dull as dirt

I have been anxious for the results to be posted so I could tell you how completely and utterly blown away I was by this fic. I think I read most of it with my mouth open and my face about half an inch from my monitor. The language and style of it is just so beautiful (in a twisted way) and evocative. The pregnancy and Merope's mental state throughout was done so brilliantly. I'm vaguely familiar with PICA as a pregnancy disorder, but only because I read all the books when I was pregnant. The way you brought it to life here was so, so good.

This review is useless, really, except to say that your writing is truly on a level of its own, and I sincerely loved reading it in this piece. I'm looking forward to your final for the Romance class, and to trolling your author page at my earliest convenience.

Congratulations! It's well deserved!

Lori

Author's Response: Hello Lori!

I think I might have just broken my jaw when it fell off my face and onto the ground and I accidentally stepped on it...

Thank you SO MUCH for this amazing review! I'm flailing a little here, because I don't know what to do with such compliments and also I never expected this story to do so well. I'm absolutely flattered that you love the language and the style ♥♥ Yeah, pica was something that really intrigued me, and so I read a little about it, and pretty much chose to depict it in a darker manner that would suit the nature and the themes of the fic.

Ooh, the Romance class final. I'm working on it, although I'm a bit slow at the moment. I'll definitely swing by and read some of your stuff, too! I haven't done a lot of reading lately, ugh ugh. Thanks so much again for this brilliant review, Lori! ♥

 

Humbling Prejudice by iLuna17
Rated: 6th-7th Years [Reviews - 6]

Summary: There were a few short moments that taught Cormac to love, truly. And it was all Eloise's fault.

This was written for the 2013 Great Hall Cotillion. It is also for Jess, or ToBeOrNotToBeAGryffindor. Not only did she dare me to write this, the lovely SPEW monarch deserves a present after all of the LoveNotes she's been writing.

Categories: Other Pairing Genre: Warnings: Sexual Situations, Strong Profanity, Violence

Word count: 3851 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
02/17/13 Updated: 02/20/13


Reviewer: WeasleyMom Signed
Date: 06/25/13 Title: Chapter 1: The girl at the back of the library.

This was a really nice read, Ellie. Cormac and Eloise--who would have imagined it? But it worked here because of the transformation we saw in Cormac over the span of the piece. He's such an ass in canon, really, there's just no other word for it. ;) And after the scene you wrote at the beginning, when he treated so horribly I wanted to stangle him, I thought, how is she going to get them together NOW? But you managed it well by doing it slowly, and an inch at a time in terms of the way his character changes.

Your characterization of Eloise is lovely and very believable. She handles herself well, and I like that she doesn't take his abuse like a wimp, but dishes it right back out to him.

My favorite part was the battle, which you wrote SO incredibly well. Great action in just a few words, really, and I find that so difficult to achieve.

I'm glad Cormac was the one to get badly injured. Not sure why, but I just think it was fitting, rather than him realizing his feelings while sitting by her bedside, he realized them when he woke and found her sitting by his. Nice stuff.

Really nice job making this rarest of pairs believable and enjoyable! I need to read more of your stuff! ~Lori

Author's Response: Lori!!! Thank you so much for the amazing review! I'm sorry it took so long to respond - I was out of town last week and didn't see it until now.

I can't tell you how thrilled I am that you liked this piece. I totally agree that in canon Cormac's a complete ass, and that made it so hard for me to write him. (Don't worry, after the first bit I was contemplating actually having Eloise strangle him. Or just hex the magic out of him.) I'm glad that you like Eloise, and the battle. I was worried that the whole 'go!' 'No!' thing was cliched, so I'm glad that you liked it. :) I think injuring Cormac was the karma from his horrible-ness in canon, and also like you said, the fact that Eloise was the one there made Cormac realize just how he felt.

Thank you so much for the review!
Ellie

 

Stop and Stare by ToBeOrNotToBeAGryffindor
Rated: 6th-7th Years [Reviews - 3]

Summary: Victoire Weasley was his muse, his love, his everything, so when Teddy Lupin found himself alone with nothing but a goodbye and an insult of a Dear John letter, he was lost. Songs didn't sound like they used to, and nothing but getting that back mattered.

Would Teddy find his beat again, either in the strings of his guitar or inside himself?


This story has been nominated for a 2013 Quicksilver Quill Award: Best Next Generation Story.


Categories: Other Pairing Genre: Warnings: Mild Profanity, Sexual Situations

Word count: 2432 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
02/24/13 Updated: 02/24/13


Reviewer: WeasleyMom Signed
Date: 02/24/13 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

I enjoyed this, Jess. I like Teddy/Victoire but haven't read much of it -- not sure why. So it was an easy choice to click when I saw you'd written this. They have good chemistry, and it worked that he was a musician, though I've never considered that before.

I'm glad you chose to make her emotional upon their reunion, as I was a little skeptical and fearing she was not as invested in him as he was in her. But you handled that well, and I'm glad she returned.

One little thing: when Teddy is playing the song with the band, he references her departure as being two months prior. But then when she returns, he says, "It took you two years to figure that out?" I'm assuming it was two years that she had been gone, but I was a little confused at first.

As always, I love your stuff. Thanks for not killing him off.

Author's Response:

And I have snared another canon shipper. :DDD

I suppose there isn't too terribly many Teddy/Vic fics around these days, so that might account for the lack of reading it. It certainly wasn't a pairing I envisioned writing at any point. However, as you said, they do have chemistry.

In my head, Victoire is one of those people who is the last to admit she's wrong. I think she knew almost right away that allowing her internship to take her away from the people she cares about was a mistake, but as the story showed, it took her two years to figure this out AND do something about it. Teddy, on the other hand, has a true songwriter's soul. He could've chased after her, but he felt like he had to suffer being away from her because he wasn't enough for her or whatever his imagination used to validate being alone and miserable.

And as for the timeline, when the song was being worked on, it was to show the evolution of what the song started out as (a love song) to it being a song of heartbreak and of that heartbreak ending, despite what it really was in real life. There is a jump between two months and two years, mainly to show that Teddy, even after all this time, is still playing the same crappy song (the last one he wrote for Victoire) at every gig for months and months because he loved her and missed her, and he even wrote a happy ending to give himself some sort of hope. However, I can see where confusion could come in, so I'll try to delineate the time changes a little bit better with captions.

Thank you for the review. It's not often I can coax you onto my author page. Usually, I have to write canon fluff or destroy everything you love in a fireball of angst, so it's nice to find a happy medium. <3

~Jess

 

Finally by Gmariam
Rated: 3rd-5th Years [Reviews - 8]

Summary: Frank Longbottom is trying to propose to his partner and girlfriend, Alice Hamilton, but his attempts at romance are constantly being interrupted. If he ever manages to give her the ring, will she say yes?
This is Gmariam of Ravenclaw writing for the Great Hall Cotillion 2013.

Categories: Other Pairing Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 6768 Chapters: 2 Completed: Yes
Published:
02/26/13 Updated: 02/26/13


Reviewer: WeasleyMom Signed
Date: 10/08/13 Title: Chapter 1: Part One - Will He?

Hellloooooo Gina. :) Had to pop in and let you know how much I enjoyed this one. Love and Order is easily my favorite of all your fics, so it was no surprise that I adored every moment of this one too. Love that Frank ended up proposing right in the middle of the meeting rather than put it off due to yet another interruption. Great stuff as always. ~Lori

 

Seven by Gmariam
Rated: 6th-7th Years [Reviews - 5]

Summary: Past Featured StoryPeter Pettigrew is far more complex than anyone gives him credit for. And that's all he wants, from anyone and especially from her: acknowledgement. Love. Respect. Yet unlike them, he was willing to do anything for it, including sacrificing it all.
This is Gmariam of Ravenclaw writing for the Great Hall Cotillion of 2013.

Categories: Marauder Era Genre: Warnings: Character Death, Sexual Situations, Strong Profanity, Substance Abuse

Word count: 2934 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
02/28/13 Updated: 02/28/13


Reviewer: WeasleyMom Signed
Date: 04/30/13 Title: Chapter 1: Seven

Duuuuuuude. He is so freaking scary.

Gina, this is very, very good. I don't know how many times I've wondered how Peter got there, into Voldemort's hands, loyal to him and handing over those he once loved. I always imagine him weak and cowardly, but this version is different. He isn't weak, he is out to prove something, to get something he thinks he deserves, something he needs but will never gain. Excellent writing as always, on all counts. :) I like the relationship with Dorcas and the progression of things in his mind, especially when she cheats. Interesting that disloyalty is the one thing he can't tolerate in her, and his own is glaring.

Peter's presence at her murder is unbelievably chilling. At this point, he is at the height of evil. She would have known what he was, died knowing he gave her over to be hunted down and murdered. Poor, poor Dorcas. She didn't deserve it.

My favorite bit in this was in the first section, when Sirius calls him Wormy, and he mutters, "I hate that name." Whoa. The hatred is simmering underneath the surface and has been for some time, if the names they all use as evidence of their secrets and their bond of friendship has become something he despises. And why not? Wormy is not the same kind of name as the others. I thought this was a great choice on your part... just that little grumble over the name shows so much of how far gone Peter already is at this point.

Great, great stuff here, Gina. But then, I always enjoy your writing, so no suprise on that front. Take care.

~Lori

 

A Letter for Hugo by ToBeOrNotToBeAGryffindor
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 6]

Summary:

Hugo Weasley waited for a Hogwarts letter that never came.




Categories: Next Generation Genre: Warnings: Mild Profanity

Word count: 1002 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
02/28/13 Updated: 02/28/13


Reviewer: WeasleyMom Signed
Date: 03/04/13 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Whoa. No magic. Now I get what you meant about a depressing Romione. This is so interesting, Jess. I don't know anything about how Love Notes work in SPEW, so I don't know if this was some kind of prompt or what, but it's very well done and very sad. I felt choked up when Hugo was trying to read the letter aloud to them.... great stuff.

Congrats on the 10000th fic, girl! (Even though I don't think this is it, is it?) Depressing or not, it's always a good day for me when Jess writes Romione.

Author's Response:

Loriiiii! Long time, no see, lol.

Yeah, no magic. Pobrecito Hugo. :( But really, is it too much of a stretch that one of the Weasley cousins could be a Squib? Personally, in my head canon, it's Lucy (Percy's daughter), but I needed a Romione moment for LoveNotes (the prompt was a pairing and a list of words, of which I chose 'letter'). I think Ron's anger over what he thought was a cruel joke reflects on how often he was picked on for being poor in school, and Hermione was upset because she knew exactly what Hugo was missing. Ron could never fathom what it's like to have no magic, but Hermione lived years of her life oblivious to its existence, and it'd be damned near impossible to give up.

Anyway, thank youuuuu for the review, and I'm glad you could enjoy some Romione, albeit a depressing one.

~Jess

 

A Year Tomorrow by Ithinkrabis2people
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 6]

Summary: Molly wants to throw a party, but Arthur doesn't feel like celebrating.

Categories: Milestone Celebrations Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 2341 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
03/16/13 Updated: 03/17/13


Reviewer: WeasleyMom Signed
Date: 05/12/14 Title: Chapter 1: Something Worth Celebrating

I enjoyed this story very much. You mentioned in your notes a concern that some things may be underdeveloped, but I didn't get that feeling at all. We may have only got bits of information about each family member, but I think the characterization is still very good. Harry is described as thin, but not as much as he was before. Ron is anxious about the party. Charlie's trying to help. And George is leaning on Ginny (while making it look like it's the other way around). It all seems right. George in particular, was well done. He's working and functioning, but we can see he isn't good. Arhur mentions that George's intention to attend the party at all "is enough," and that made me wonder how he was really doing. I wanted more of him, but that's more to do with my own interest in the character than in anything to do with the writing.

I noticed some of your reviews mention wanting more of Molly, particularly at the end of the piece. I am a huge fan of the character, so more is always better, and yet, I felt completely satisfied with the way you wrote her here. We see her doing her daily routine as best she can (the eggs), planning the party, serving breakfast, having a cry out, and finally, straightening herself and moving forward with the party. And then we see her through Arthur's eyes, enjoying her new grandchild so much that she's smiling and enjoying herself, and the message to the reader in that image is that she is okay. At least right now, with that baby in her arms, she is finding joy and healing, and I was quite satisfied with that being my last glimpse of her in this fic. Because the point is... she isn't the only one who is struggling. Arthur has been bearing it in silence, having not wanted the party at all, and at this point, I think the focus of the story moves to finding resolution for him.

By way of constructive criticism, I do think the fic could do with a quick edit. There were some errors, one right up front that made me stumble... all easily fixed, I think. And there were a couple of things that struck me as a little odd. For example, why would Arthur have intended to hide Percy's letter from Molly? Things are presumably much better between him and the family and I can't imagine Molly would be anything but thrilled to meet the girl he's seeing. I did wonder about that. Also, why would Hermione be concerned about drinking Butterbeer before her finals? They drank it on Hogsmeade weekends, and I think the alcohol content is little to none. Again, just something that gave me pause. These are niggly little things, and they certainly didn't hamper my enjoyment of the fic.

The real beauty in what you've created here is the portrayal of grief, in so many characters, but particularly in Molly and Arthur. Grief doesn't make a lot of sense, and people trying to move under its weight do contradictory things... like Molly planning the party, then having a cry over her second thoughts, and then buckling down to go on and have it. She likely didn't think it through before she planned it, but in the end, I think it was probably a big help to her. I have to wonder, though, in true pessimist fashion, if the quiet that settled in on her after everyone went back to where they'd come from was even more brutal than what she had known before. Grief really defies explanation, and I think you captured that beautifully in this glimpse of the family, particularly Molly.

 

Something Worth Celebrating by Ali Wood
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 4]

Summary: It's been eight years since the Battle of Hogwarts. Neville Longbottom has gone on to become a successful herbologist, but he is still struggling. However, there could be hope waiting for him at a party at the Potters'...

Categories: Milestone Celebrations Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 3776 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
03/18/13 Updated: 03/27/13


Reviewer: WeasleyMom Signed
Date: 04/03/13 Title: Chapter 1: Something Worth Celebrating

This is a nice read. I like the idea of the DA getting together for a reunion of sorts. I have to confess, it's hard to imagine such good friends falling so seriously out of touch for such a long time (esp Neville with all of the others, when we know he was an auror), but still, we don't really know, do we? So it could have happened this way.

Loved that it was Ginny who went after him and not Hannah. It was a nice, satisfying surprise, and the proposal at the end was very sweet. :)

Good luck for the competition!

~Lori

 

To Harry by Gmariam
Rated: 3rd-5th Years [Reviews - 8]

Summary: On the fifth anniversary of the Battle of Hogwarts, Minerva McGonagall worries about the fate of the boy who saved them all.

Categories: Milestone Celebrations Genre: Warnings: Mental Disorders, Mild Profanity, Substance Abuse

Word count: 1684 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
03/18/13 Updated: 03/18/13


Reviewer: WeasleyMom Signed
Date: 04/04/13 Title: Chapter 1: To Harry

Oh, Gina, this is so lovely! It's likely this sort of commemoration did happen among the staff, and I do think the whole scenario very believable. Your characterization is spot-on in every case. I love Minerva here, and even Abderforth, gruff but caring -- I like that description very much.

The memory of Harry screaming at Dumbledore's portrait while Minerva looked on was just heartbreaking, but it does seem like the sort of thing Harry does when he is at his lowest.

Really a beautiful piece you have here, friend. I fitting tribute... good luck with the competition!

 
Reviewer: WeasleyMom Signed
Date: 04/04/13 Title: Chapter 1: To Harry

Not sure I've ever left two reviews before, but wanted to comment on the other reviews now that I've read them. I understand the point that this may be very dark for Harry, and honestly, my head canon doesn't go this dark for him. But the truth is that we don't know. And it's impossible to think Harry would have gone through as much as he did, lost SO many people he loved, and not crash at some point. I think you have written this crash very well, and very believably.

And it's not hopeless at all. There is much talk of his resiliance among the staff, and that is what will pull him through this. You can't be resiliant without first having some major, major setbacks (such as the "rock bottom" scenario here). So while this is a dark take on post-war Harry, I do think it believable. And I'm so glad you left it very hopeful, too. He will get up again, eventually, and be okay. Because it's Harry. :) Well done, Gina. (Sorry to leave two reviews. Well, I'm a little sorry. Hehe.)

 

Renewal by Oregonian
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 8]

Summary: The Hogwarts teachers are facing the first school year after the Battle of Hogwarts. How can they help the students, and the whole community, heal? What will it take to feel as if the world is back to normal?

Categories: Milestone Celebrations Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 2883 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
03/22/13 Updated: 03/27/13


Reviewer: WeasleyMom Signed
Date: 04/03/13 Title: Chapter 1: Renewal

This was a nice read. It's a good idea to find something to celebrate in such a dark time of rebuilding and recovery... I can't imagine how difficult it would have been for professors to gear up for a new term under those conditions.

The analogy of the twins was effective, put me in mind of Fred and George... *sniff*

Good luck with the competition!

~ Lori

Author's Response: Yes, this was a lightweight little piece. (I was lucky to come up with an idea before the deadline.) And the decorated cake was so silly. Perhaps it is unrealistic to depict the staff as being wholeheartedly behind Pomona's idea, so soon after the war, but it seemed in character for her to suggest it. Thanks for the review.

 

Left Behind by xxbabewithbrainsxx
Rated: 6th-7th Years [Reviews - 6]

Summary: Remus and Dora have only just got into this strange and stupid and perfect routine of playing lovers. They shouldn't have to give it up now.

Set between OOTP and HBP.

Eeeeep! This story has been nominated for a 2013 Quicksilver Quill Award: Best Canon Romance. Thank you.

Categories: Remus/Tonks Genre: Warnings: Sexual Situations

Word count: 1539 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
04/12/13 Updated: 04/12/13


Reviewer: WeasleyMom Signed
Date: 07/10/13 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Why does this fic have so few reviews? It's just wonderful!

You can thank Julia and Carole for making this recommended reading for this week's discussion in the Romance class, and I will thank them as well. ;)

You've really managed to capture a lot in very few words here... the assignment for Remus, the story of how they got together, the first time they said they loved one another, sex, and a completely domestic (and contrasting, to their situation) setting.

Their characterization is so, so right. I really liked that Remus didn't end up telling her, but that he had intended to. It's another layer of the Remus angst that makes him such a wonderful character, and I do think its just what he would have done in this situation. As for Dora, she's strong and funny and yet vulnerable, too. I love when she admitted that she was scared before he told her how he felt. That's the kind of declaration that can come off being pretty cheesy or whiny, but it fit just perfectly on her.

My favorite part--when her hair changed and grew at his touch. Romantic and sexy. Great stuff, Soraya!

Author's Response: Eeeee, Lori, thank you so much! :D What a lovely thing to find in my inbox -- and what a pleasant surprise to see a fic of mine recced in the romance class, too. I won't lie, I did squee at that, as I have done every time one of my stories is discussed or recommended in a class nowadays :)

This was originally a drabble for LoveNotes. I can remember being on AIM with Jess and us SPEWers rapidly trying to write LoveNotes for everyone before the deadline, and this one pretty much was word vomit for me. So it means so much that you thought I could capture a lot in few words, because I certainly didn't feel like that at the time -- but I did have a clear idea of Remus and Tonks's backstory (this is actually a kind of prequel to One and Only, my other Remus/Tonks that's set after Tonks's outburst in the hospital wing in HBP). I'm just glad that backstory translated in this story without any knowledge of the other one, so thank you. :)

I LOVE Remus. He is honestly one of my favouritest characters ever, in HPverse or otherwise, just because, as you said, he has so many layers to his angst. I'm glad you thought him not telling Tonks about having to leave, even if he had intended to, was in character.

Yay, I'm so happy you noticed Tonks's vulnerability. Again, that is something I always had in mind for Tonks and wasn't sure it translated onto the page, but I do think that aspect of her character has canonical basis too. Like, even if we disregard how she was in HBP, I think there is definitely a side of her that is vulnerable and even sensitive -- for me, the reason she is jokey and funny all the time could partly be because that's her "happy face" but she could also have moments of insecurity, too. Actually, I wonder now if that's more me than her... LOL.

Oh, and the "I love you" conversation is something, I'm embarrassed to admit, I've read and written so many times over that I had no idea how I was supposed to make it non-cheesy. I'm so pleased you thought it fit well for her characterisation -- I certainly think that Tonks is unabashedly honest and always wears her heart on her sleeve, and so would definitely say if she felt scared about telling Remus she loved him. And yayyyyy about the hair moment :D There is so much to play with when it comes to Tonks and her Metamorphmagus abilities -- I have a story in my head about her morphing a tattoo on herself but that would probably be better off untold, haha.

THANK YOU SO MUCH for the fabulous review, Lori! My day has been made. <3

 

Ebb Tide by minnabird
Rated: 6th-7th Years [Reviews - 2]

Summary: Treasures are found where others might not seek to look. Bill/Fleur.

Nominated for Best Poem in the 2013 Quicksilver Quill Awards

Categories: Poetry Genre: Warnings: Sexual Situations

Word count: 102 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
05/02/13 Updated: 05/02/13


Reviewer: WeasleyMom Signed
Date: 05/02/13 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Beautiful, Minna. Really beautiful.

Author's Response: Aw, thanks. <3

 

Another Anniversary by Equinox Chick
Rated: 3rd-5th Years [Reviews - 10]

Summary: Fifteen years after the Battle, Ron and Hermione reminisce.

Disclaimer: I am not JK Rowling, but I hope she'd like this.

This story was inspired by a reminder from halfaslug on tumblr - thank you. I dedicate this to her, and Lori (Weasley Mom) because they love Romione so much. (Well, what's not to love?)



Categories: Ron/Hermione Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 1212 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
05/03/13 Updated: 05/03/13


Reviewer: WeasleyMom Signed
Date: 05/29/13 Title: Chapter 1: Oneshot

This is so lovely, Carole. I thought I'd already reviewed, but I must have only mentioned it to you on ls. Tonight I was in the mood for Ron/Hermione and decided to read it again. Scratched my itch nicely.

I like that he isn't thinking about the deaths, at first. That's what's so incredibly complicated about the Battle, and everything post-Hogwarts really, because they got what they wanted in that Voldy is dead and life is good. But it cost so much that that life is tainted for so very many. You handled that so well, allowing Ron to find the good memory and to remind her.

Completely true that Molly will never completely heal and that many of them will slip and speak of Fred as if he is still there. Loved Hermione's explanation on that.

You've captured a beautiful moment here, and I suspect I will reread this one many times, to scratch that itch of mine. Hehe.

I noticed the dedication on this read... thanks so much!

Oh, and this may be just a coincidence, but I admit to smiling when you described Ron's face as SHROUDed. Hahaha! ~ Lori

Author's Response: It was a coincidence - hahahaha. I donl;t really think Shrouds is my canon at all, although I thought about mentioning it when I wrote High and now Uncovered by Death - ha ha. Glad you enjoyed this story,. Lori, as it was written with you in mind. :) I don;t think Molly will ever quite recover. How could she (oh, I've gone very sad now) Thanks again :) :) ~Carole~

 

Summary: Being poisoned has its advantages - Hermione is talking to Ron again. Unfortunately so is Lavender. Ron hopes to sort this out once and for all if only he could work out how.

Categories: Ron/Hermione Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 2725 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
05/22/13 Updated: 05/28/13


Reviewer: WeasleyMom Signed
Date: 05/28/13 Title: Chapter 1: one-shot

I really, really, really, really like this. Very nice touch including that change in Hermione's schedule that occurred while they were on the outs. Good way to emphasize that loss for Ron.

Spot-on characterization, as usual. Enjoyed it!

Author's Response: Thank you so much for reviewing! A lot can change in four months and I guess when you go from being with each other all the time to not at all, you realise how much. And we all know that Ron and Hermione were paying a bit too much attention to each other by this point... Anyway, thanks again! I'm glad you enjoyed it :)

 

Holiday Spirits by abovelevel
Rated: 6th-7th Years [Reviews - 3]

Summary:

It is Christmas Eve 2014 and instead of playing games with his nieces and nephews, Charlie Weasley is drinking. Stuck in Romania watching the dragon preserve over the holidays, Charlie decides a night at the pub is just what he needs. After a few ruckus hours exchanging stories with the bartender, Charlie is about to head out.

Then, the door opens ...

Disclaimer: I am most certainly not JK Rowling

Categories: Post-Hogwarts Genre: Warnings: Sexual Situations, Strong Profanity, Substance Abuse

Word count: 3092 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
05/31/13 Updated: 06/04/13


Reviewer: WeasleyMom Signed
Date: 01/28/14 Title: Chapter 1: Holiday Spirits

Oh, I liked this very much. First, it's Charlie, who is adorable. I have to admit though, that sometimes fics set at the dragon reserve are a bit of a disappointment to me. Perhaps its because nearly everyone is an OC, or because lonliness is so often a player in Charlie's existence, but here, you've made it all very engaging.

I was so sad in the first part, not only because he decides not to go home but because he doesnt' really know why. I kept waiting for you to reveal the true reason later in the fic, but then you didn't, and I think now that it was very wise. Sometimes we don't know why we do the things we do. Charlie loves his family, but all the activity and family and marriages and kids could be difficult to take for many reasons... anyway, nice choice to leave the the root of his decision a mystery. It added depth to the fic, and a nice dose of reality.

Thanks for not leaving him in the uncertainty and the sadness. I liked Emma. She had a fiestiness about her that I think would appeal to a Weasley man (haha!), and the Quidditch connection worked well.

Unlike Vicki, I thought the grope in the doorway was actually very believable, considering the holiday and conversation and the alcohol. They had connected, for sure, and I thought that bit worked.

I feel dim not realizing she was an apprentice, but that was a nice surprise. While a relationship may be inappropriate, I rather think Charlie has some intention of pursuing her, given his thoughts about being glad he's not going home for the holiday. After all, they aren't in an office situation. They live and work on the reserve, so I wonder if there is more relationship potential than there might be in other work situtations?

Great little Charlie fic... and let's face it, we all need more of those in our lives. ~ Lori

 

A Passing Fancy by HalfASlug
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 4]

Summary: The Yule Ball is on the horizon and Neville knows only one girl that he wants to go with. GoF missing moment.

Categories: General Fics Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 1388 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
06/18/13 Updated: 06/19/13


Reviewer: WeasleyMom Signed
Date: 01/24/14 Title: Chapter 1: one-shot

How did I miss this when it hit the archives? Hello, again. I love your story, again. Big shocker! Haha!

Seriously, this is a lovely little snapshot of a wonderful missing moment. JKR could have just had Neville ask Ginny from the start, but I've always thought it such a complement to his character (and Hermione's, for that matter) that he asked Hermione first. I actually have head-canon that Neville had a very real crush on Hermione briefly leading up to this, but that is neither here nor there.

As always, your characterization is so good, and just right tone for their ages, too. I think it's so hard to get that right, but you've captured the awkwardness that was there for both of them. Even that crease in her forehead... I could see Emma doing it, though I've never paid attention to it in the films. In fact, the writing was so vivid that I could picture the scene at every point--the boring lecture, the stumbling, the conversation in the hall. Really nice description without bogging down the dialogue with a ton of wordage.

There's a strength in the style, too, that is very akin to the style of the books. Perhaps it's the humor or the way you've so firmly grounded the scene in the classroom, but it felt as if it could have been lifted straight from canon.

I found this story on the review drive and hit it up first because I knew it would be good and it's NEVILLE, for crying out loud. But my review falls short because I have no crit to offer. I don't think this sweet missing moment could be improved upon by changing a single thing. Nice work. I enjoyed reading, as always. ~ Lori

 

Glass over the Flame by the opaleye
Rated: 3rd-5th Years [Reviews - 6]

Summary: FeatureHarry, Hermione, and the moments in between.

He doesn’t say that this is his last winter. He doesn’t say that this could be her last winter. Instead he feels his heart swell with the bruising grip of her hand and the sound of Ron’s snoring in the tent.

Categories: General Fics Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 3054 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
06/22/13 Updated: 06/22/13


Reviewer: WeasleyMom Signed
Date: 07/20/13 Title: Chapter 1: I will call you by name, I will share your road.

This is utterly gorgeous, Julia. I love the trio friendship more than anything in the books, and this is a beautiful picture of all the facets of that between Harry and Hermione. (And Ron too, really)



Author's Response: Ah the case of the disappearing review ;)

 
Reviewer: WeasleyMom Signed
Date: 07/20/13 Title: Chapter 1: I will call you by name, I will share your road.

What the heck? Where's the rest of my review???

I especially love the part where Harry and Hermione in the cold, with the tea and the blanket and Ron snoring. You captured something special with Harry in that moment, the gratitude he feels, his concern that things are okay with Ron. I like that Hermione asked him what happened with the Horcrux. I don't think she would be able to let it go, not without trying to find out from one of them, and Harry is the best choice at that time. I think its so interesting that you had him choose Ron first (by keeping the secret), and then choose her over Ron (by telling her anyway). Ah, the problem with three. :)

Your characterization is perfect, and particularly with Harry, as his emotions are hard to capture and hard to write sometimes. But this was so, so him. Beautiful, beautiful stuff, but then I wouldn't expect anything less from you.

Author's Response: Thank you so much, Lori! It's so nice to see canon shippers such as yourself enjoying an almost-but-not-quite Harmony fic. I've had this idea about Hermione asking Harry what happened with the Horcrux for a long time, so it was nice to finally get that down on the page. I knew Harry wouldn't divulge the secret right away, and I even felt a bit weird having him admit it at all, but I see that as very much a moment of true friendship and trust between him and Hermione. I'm so glad you like my characterisation of Harry. I do love to write him but I also question my judgement a lot of time so it's so nice to hear your affirmation :) Thank you for this lovely review (or reviews, rather). -Julia xxx

 

Twenty-one by Verita Serum
Rated: 3rd-5th Years [Reviews - 5]

Summary: George Weasley is turning twenty-one, but he isn't sure he can do it alone.

Warning is due to mentions of CD.

Categories: Post-Hogwarts Genre: Warnings: Character Death

Word count: 3036 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
07/08/13 Updated: 07/17/13


Reviewer: WeasleyMom Signed
Date: 03/05/14 Title: Chapter 1: One

Oh, I really enjoyed this! I love post-war George-centric fics when the characters and circumstances are handled as honestly as they were here. Well done.

Molly is pitch perfect. The atmosphere in the house, even down to where everyone was situated in the room, was heavy and just so, so sad. Molly's defeat in deciding to let Teddy have some cake rather than wait any longer for George was painful to read but a perfect look into a real life moment. If a birthday cake is eaten before the guest of honor arrives, something has indeed gone very wrong. And Molly's line at the end of the first section describes her so well post-Fred. Her statement that she will not lose another son beautifully shows both the sorrrow and the fight in her, the battle between mourning and living that is such a hard thing in grieving.

You continued to develop her character in the conversation between George and Angelina. We see the mistake she made at Christmas and what George thinks about it, and then, finally, Angelina's pronouncement that Molly would probably wait for him forever. Very true. Beautiful portrayal of Molly in this fic, especially considering she was only present in the beginning.

My only question in that first section had to do with POV. To be in both Bill's and Molly's heads in such a short section was a little confusing for me. I loved Bill's thoughts, but I think this section might have been stronger if you'd kept only to Molly's POV. Just a suggestion.

Another reviewer mentioned your "nothing-but-brave daughter" line as problematic, but I actually thought it was good and provided an accurate look at how Molly would have seen Ginny during that time. Just goes to show how subjective every reader's experience is.

The George/Angelina relationship here was lovely. I liked that you wrote Angelina getting choked up when realizing he'd read each and every letter but chosen not to respond. A girl could take it as a compliment that he knew the exact number, but she had so desperately needed to hear from him that this news was upsetting. Really nice character development there. At the same time, I completely believed that he was just not able to respond. Grief often defies explanation and sense, and this section really showed that for George. And yet, his humor is still there. The conversation at times was gut-wrenching, and yet you ended with a smile. Poor George and his failure to look surprised! Loved this, and the glimpse back at his school antics with Fred.

In terms of formatting, you might take a look at paragraph breaks. I sometimes noticed a new character's action appearing without a new paragraph. This fic is so well done in every other way that one good edit would (in my opinion) result in a QSQ-quality story.

"The sun had been so bright that day she'd had to squint through the duration of the funeral. She remembered the surrealness of it all vividly. A war hero, Fred had been called. And Angelina had realized, with a heart-jolting shock, that it was true."

Those lines were my very favorite, closely followed by the section explaining how George could much more easily find his brother back at The Burrow, in the faces of all his immediate family members. A beautiful insight, and a beatiful story. Lovely writing. ~Lori

 
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