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Real name: Lori
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I am an obsessed Harry Potter fan who, according to one friend, "needs rehab." Hehe. I like canon-compliant stories and pairings, especially Romione, which is probably evident from my stories.

You will notice I don't use British spellings. I always strive to accurately portray British culture in my fics and have my characters (and JK's) behaving in culturally appropriate ways. But spelling and punctuation are tools of the writer, and I'm an American writer. :) I always feel incredibly pretentious when I use British spellings (if it's required for a challenge)--LOL.

Right, just wanted to let you know where I'm coming from in case you are annoyed that I spell it color instead of colour. Hehe.
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Honestly by Gmariam
Rated: 3rd-5th Years [Reviews - 38]

Summary: Seven months after leaving Hogwarts, James Potter is fighting for the Order of the Phoenix. When Lily Evans joins the resistance, his life is turned upside down. He'd proposed, after all, and she had said no. How could they work together now, after so much history together? Or could they find another chance amidst the war?

Categories: James/Lily Genre: Warnings: Sexual Situations, Substance Abuse, Violence

Word count: 38840 Chapters: 9 Completed: Yes
Published:
09/23/12 Updated: 11/08/12


Reviewer: WeasleyMom Signed
Date: 10/12/12 Title: Chapter 4: Chapter Four - Teamwork

Ooh, a diagram--I was wondering how in the world you keep such excellent track of all your battles. You are just so good at it. Nice action, with lots of emotion as well. I especially liked the inclusion of Dorcas's reaction and Orsino trying to save his staff. Well done, as always.

 
Reviewer: WeasleyMom Signed
Date: 10/02/12 Title: Chapter 2: Chapter Two - Uncomfortable

Ooh, look what I found on the most recents? With QSQ responsibilities taking up all my reading time and energy, I'm so behind on what my favorite authors have been doing. So this is me getting caught up.

This is a great read so far! The awkwardness between them in the first chapter is just painful, and I'm glad its resolving a bit here at the end of the second chapter. Still, why did she say nooooo?? Clearly, she isn't sure that was the right call. Am I right? Well? ;)

I adore your James, you know that, and this is no exception. I clicked on this knowing it was J/L, and was even more thrilled to see it was from his POV, because you are the master.

Can't wait to see where this is going! Well done!

~Lori

Author's Response: Thank youuuuuu, Lori! I'm glad you're free to go read what you want, and so glad you came to read my latest bit of insanity, lol. Thank you so much for the compliments! Why did she say no? Because he asked her straight out of school and 18 was too young, too much, too soon. I wrote it in The Poppy Field for one of Alex's challenges over the summer. I've wanted to write this story for ages, so it's fun to finally get to it with no pressure. It's nothing like I had planned, though. My usual coming up, lol. Thanks again and I hope you enjoy it anyway! ~Gina :)

 
Reviewer: WeasleyMom Signed
Date: 11/08/12 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter One - Awkward

Did I not review after chapter eight? Strange. I really loved the charmed ring--nice touch, and perfectly Sirius. This was a fitting end. I enjoyed the bit with the portkey and the fact that the other three didn't get to see the proposal. Get your own lives, people! Haha!

Well done, as always, Gina. I've enjoyed reading! ~Lori

 

Summary:

'This is it, boys, this is war... what are we waiting for?
Why don't we break the rules already?'


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As Michael Corner enters his seventh year at Hogwarts, he knows the world around him is changing, and not for the better. He also knows that when the time comes he will fight, but until then the most important thing is keeping himself and those who mean the most to him alive.

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'Funny, isn't it, how for a Ravenclaw you're awfully fond of self-preservation.'
'I prefer to think of it as using my head rather than relying on a foolhardy sense of bravery.'


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A companion piece to The Fire I Yearn For . It's not strictly necessary to read that first, though it may help you understand the events that unfold.


Categories: General Fics Genre: Warnings: Mental Disorders, Self Injury, Sexual Situations, Strong Profanity, Violence

Word count: 1551 Chapters: 1 Completed: No
Published:
10/01/12 Updated: 10/06/12


Reviewer: WeasleyMom Signed
Date: 10/28/13 Title: Chapter 1: A New Year

I enjoy stories like this, in which the seventh year is experienced through the eyes of a character other than Harry. Your Michael is interesting, and I liked being in his head, particularly on the platform and as he entered the train.

You've really got me interested in Mandy. She's nearly an unknown character and yet she obviously trusts Michael. I wondered if they were a couple, or if they were just especially good friends, that she was comfortable grabbing his hand and crying into his chest. I'm interested in what she had to go through over the summer, and look forward to learning more about her in upcoming chapters.

I thought your characterization of Ginny was interesting. I agree that she would have considered that first day back a very difficult one. But she does bounce back from those days, I think, as she was a leader in the D.A. that year. I look forward to seeing where you take her in upcoming chapters.

I was going to niggle you about the "golden trio" bit, but I see Carole has already mentioned it. I certainly don't want to pile on, but the phrase has become such a joke in fanon that it really did startle me to see it coming out of Anthony's mouth. But it's your story, of course.

I'm glad to see you plan to continue this, and look forward to seeing what these characters get up to next. Happy writing! ~Lori

 

Night Terrors by Karaley Dargen
Rated: 3rd-5th Years [Reviews - 41]

Summary: In their seventh year at Hogwarts, every student has only one thing on their mind: NEWTs. And Quidditch. And bickering friends. And people who are mysteriously locked away in the hospital wing... Or maybe Nymphadora Tonks and Charlie Weasley are just having a particularly unusual term.

Anything that you recognise, including names, spells, potions, and Quidditch moves, belongs to either JKR or the copyright holders of various HP games and other media.




A million thanks must be sent to Carole/Equinox Chick, whithout whom I'm not sure I'd have a story. She's a fabulous beta and one of the best people that I have ever known.

Also lots of thanks to Natalie/hestiajones for reading the first chapters and especially for making me see that they needed work!

Aaaand many many thanks and hugs to Hannah/coolh5000 for being a really fantastic friend and always encouraging me.




Categories: Mystery Genre: Warnings: Mild Profanity, Pottermore Spoilers, Violence

Word count: 33786 Chapters: 12 Completed: Yes
Published:
10/16/12 Updated: 12/19/12


Reviewer: WeasleyMom Signed
Date: 11/03/12 Title: Chapter 5: Off Your Game

Ooh, Kara, I'm really enjoying this! Planned to read a chapter or two and had to finish everything you've posted.

Really nice voice you've created for a young Tonks, and I find myself really connecting with her. I like that you've included some of the character traits we know of her from canon, and yet, she's not knocking over suits of armor constantly. Good balance there.

I'm working on a next gen that has tons of OC's, and I find it really difficult dealing with so many of them at once and yet keeping them distinct. You've managed that so well in this, Kara. Really well done--I felt so bad for Laura in the end of this chapter. :(

Charlie... oh, he's just lovely. Not much more to say about that.

You know I'm a fan of your drabbling, but I'm wondering now if I've really read much of your full stories. This is so, so well done, and I'm certainly hooked. Will be following your updates--glad to see they are coming more quickly than mine do. Haha.

Well done, you!

~Lori

Author's Response: Loriiii - I can't believe I didn't replied to your review sooner. I could have sworn I had... Anyway, thank you so so much for reading and reviewing. It really does mean a lot.

YAY for liking young Tonks! I was really concerned about not having got her voice right, so obviously I'm very pleased that it seems to be working! :D

I know about Charlie - I don't think he could be anything but lovely.

Again, thank you so much!

 
Reviewer: WeasleyMom Signed
Date: 11/05/12 Title: Chapter 6: A Moment of Calm

Ohhhh, so good! Ed? ED?? You really are a master at mystery, aren't you? I can't figure out what's going on, but want him to be okay and get together with Martha. They have a little Ron/Hermione vibe, if you ask me, which of course, you didn't. :D

I love that Charlie was in the kitchens, and Fred and George get the credit. How fitting that even the older boys had to use the twins to figure stuff out. Nice touch there.

I wish I were more involved on Pottermore, as I saw your reference to that in the notes... I'm wondering how much of this is from there and how much you've cooked up? Love the magical details... you've really grounded it all so well in Hogwarts.

Can't wait for more!

Author's Response: I'll always want your opinion, so assume the asking is implied! :D I'm glad you're liking them!

Well, Fred and George are the masters of mischief... And Charlie is a cool older brother, so they'd be willing to share the info with him. Or maybe he ran into them when they had just nicked food and they told him so that he wouldn't tell... which he never would, of course!

There's really good info on Pottermore. I didn't directly take a lot from there, but it's just really inspiring, especially when it comes to the common room! That's basically the only part where I used Pottermore info, but there it was so so helpful. The CR sounded so welcoming already, so I tried to pick up that atmosphere.

And yes, Ed! EEEP!

Thanks for the review, Lori :)

 
Reviewer: WeasleyMom Signed
Date: 12/12/12 Title: Chapter 10: Sweet Dreams

Oh. My. Word.

You are killing me, here. And seriously, Kara, you are a master plotter. I mean, I knew you were good, but I'm really blown away by this story. This chapter was worth the wait, but I totally miss Charlie.

So incredibly addicted to this fic.

Author's Response: THANK YOUUUU for the review! I don't know how to handle your praise! I hope the last two chapters aren't a letdown :x

 
Reviewer: WeasleyMom Signed
Date: 11/26/12 Title: Chapter 9: One Last Drink

You wicked, wicked girl, leaving us that cliffhanger! And just when I was saying all these lovely things about your writing on aim. Hehe.

Only kidding... this is your most brilliant chapter yet. Not only is the plot getting thicker, but your characterization of Tonks is simply brilliant. I love how proud she is of her injuries, with her intent to show off the damage. LOL. And just the way you write her thought processes... maybe this or maybe that, but it doesn't matter because the main thing is fine. You're true to canon, but you're developing her even more, and in such a consistent, entertaining way. I love her. I want to hang out with her.

Finally, how are you writing a romance without writing any romance? Seriously, I keep looking at what you are doing here, and I still don't get it. It's like they are falling for each other, but neither of them knows it. You write it like it's an aside to everything else, which it is, but it's looming larger and larger with every chapter. I'm shipping them hard, and probably permanenty. (Well, at least until Charlie moves away -- sniff.)

Great stuff, Kara. Just really, really good.

Author's Response: You were saying lovely things about my writing? Damn, can't believe I missed that! hahaha.

I think the main thing about the romance being an aside is that it wasn't planned originally at all, but then I felt like it fitted... I'm really just writing what makes sense to me at that point, honestly! But romance or not, I do love the two of them as a team, so that helps ;)

Thank you so so much for all the praise. You know it means a lot!

 
Reviewer: WeasleyMom Signed
Date: 11/26/12 Title: Chapter 1: Slightly Drowsy

Oh, and in response to Dad's comment... because she's Tonks! She said it herself: you don't have to be a Gryff to be reckless! Please bring the next chapter soon!

Author's Response: exactly - she's Tonks! Couldn't have put it better ;) I'll try to hurry!

 
Reviewer: WeasleyMom Signed
Date: 11/10/12 Title: Chapter 7: Give It Your All

Kara, this was such a good chapter. Will you think less of me if I admit that I sometimes skim over the Quidditch details in fics? It's just gets tedious sometimes, but this was really good. I never lost interest, and didn't skim once. Haha!

Cedric's presence was a fab surprise! And I'm glad you gave him a great first game, too! Go Puffs!

Fabulous ending, and I truly am pining away for the next installment. Bring it soon, okay? :)

Author's Response: Oooh that is a huge compliment about the Quidditch - especially as it was giving me some pains. Thank you so much! Cedric needs setting up as the golden boy, of course. He can't become school famous over night!

I'm doing my best to get something new up soon, but I don't want to run out of chapters - eep! Time to write write write.

 
Reviewer: WeasleyMom Signed
Date: 12/23/12 Title: Chapter 1: Slightly Drowsy

I've enjoyed this so much, and the end did not disappoint. Such fabulous imagery in the dream world, and I love Dumbledore's analysis of it as well. You really nailed him, and I think that is an incredibly difficult thing to do that not a lot of authors can do well.

Love the magic. Tonks' realization that she could use her abilities as a metamorphagus were perfect, and the way she tested the world by teasing the monster.. so great and hard to predict as a reader. (Or maybe I'm just dim--haha.) Another bit of magic that was just so Harry Potter was when the gargoyles commented about the password... lol! I loved that bit, and her saying Shut Up.

Wonderful, wonderful read. I'm sad it's over, and can't wait to troll your author page on my nearest opportunity and find something else to enjoy. Bravo, friend! :)

One more thing... hope you don't mind, but in my active imagination, there's a bit of snogging going on in the kitchens after lunch. Hehe. Love the pairing! ~Lori

Author's Response: I didn't get around to replying to this over the holidays, but thank you so so much for the review, Lori. I'm very glad that you enjoyed the ending as well, and that Dumbledore works here. Thank you very much for being such a faithful reader and reviewer! I appreciate it endlessly, honestly. It means the world!

 

Jumper by HalfASlug
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 12]

Summary: All these years, Hermione has been waiting for this and there is only one person who really understands why.

Categories: Post-Hogwarts Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 1565 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
10/17/12 Updated: 10/20/12


Reviewer: WeasleyMom Signed
Date: 10/21/12 Title: Chapter 1: one-shot

Gahhhh! This piece is just LOVE. It's perfect. The characterization is just right, even of Ron, who is only discussed rather than seen.

Harry and Hermione have such a lovely relationship in canon, and it's so refreshing to see it explored here without it going where Rowling never intended.

Favorite parts: "Last Christmas, she had been almost catatonic at times, never truly smiling and barely unrecognisable under the cloud the horcrux placed them both under. Even after the locket had been destroyed, there was always something that wasn't there anymore, an empty space that had once been filled."

and... "Hermione laughed softly and the two of them fell into a comfortable silence while their eyes traced the flames flickering in front of them, both remembering last year, when protecting them from the cold was all a jumper could do."

Brilliant.

Author's Response: Thank you so much! Yeah, I love their friendship so much in the books so it's always fun to write, even if I really struggle with Harry. Anyway, thank you again for reviewing :)

 

More Than Just You by opti
Rated: 3rd-5th Years [Reviews - 8]

Summary: Some things are worse than losing someone, like never having them at all. A short Shell Cottage missing moment.

Warning is for implication, just to be safe.

Categories: Ron/Hermione Genre: Warnings: Mental Disorders

Word count: 1792 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
10/25/12 Updated: 10/28/12


Reviewer: WeasleyMom Signed
Date: 04/10/13 Title: Chapter 1: oneshot

I really enjoyed this. I think Hermione would be plagued with nightmares for a very long time, possibly forever. And whenever I imagine them, he is always there. :) Or else, it wouldn't be any fun, would it? Hehe. Nice job with this, especially using second person, which I confess isn't usually my favorite. It worked very well here though.

I was completely shocked to click on this and see a recommendation for my own story in your chapter notes. That is just really cool of you. It kind of made my night, so thank you very much for the kind words. Take care, and happy writing! ~Lori

Author's Response: You and I share a mind on that one. It's definitely not something that would just vanish after this was all over, and I *hate* when it's glossed over. Especially when I do it T_T

That story was actually the very first fanfiction I ever read. I haven't read it in a good while, so I might need to remind myself why that one in particular drew me in to this... but yeah. Had to name-drop so people could go and find more awesome R/Hr stories.

 

A Palisade of Persuasion by Equinox Chick
Rated: 6th-7th Years [Reviews - 69]

Summary: It was true that Daphne and Lee had met at a most inappropriate time, but they had found love, lust and the glimmerings of a life together.

But the power of persuasion should never be underestimated. When they meet again, years later, his indifference cuts to her core. Can the past ever truly be recaptured?

This story is a present for Julia (the opaleye) because she is amazingly talented and has inspired me in so many ways. It is also her brthday.

Disclaimer: I am not JK Rowling.

I am not Jane Austen.

I am not Sporty, Scary, Baby, Ginger or Posh.


Winner of the 2013 QSQ Best Chaptered Non-Canon Romance ~ I am gobsmacked and grateful to everyone especially JK Rowling, Jane Austen and the Spice Girls.



Categories: Other Pairing Genre: Warnings: Sexual Situations

Word count: 89290 Chapters: 18 Completed: Yes
Published:
11/22/12 Updated: 09/21/13


Reviewer: WeasleyMom Signed
Date: 10/08/13 Title: Chapter 18: Epilogue

Clearly, I should read Persuasion. Or maybe just go back to chapter one and read this again. :) Carole, I had the absolute pleasure of reading this for the QSQs and don't mind telling you I was blown away. And that is saying something, because when your name is listed as the author, my expectations are already quite high. Love the characters and the pairing, and all the little subplots with the family and whatnot. I thought the house characteristics of all involved were especially well-done and yet the characters were unexpected, too, in a good way.

Brilliant, brilliant, brilliant, and so deserving of this win! Enjoy! ~ Lori

Author's Response: LORRIIIIIII So sorry I haven't read and responded to this review earlier (I got deluged with them with this story - hee hee). Thank you so much for the review and I'm so glad you liked the story. Oh, read Persuasion, it's lovely. OR try to get hold of the film with Rupert penry-Jones as Captain Wentworth (Lee Jordan - ha ha). That just has the most wonderful scene in Bath that makes me cry whenever I see it. Thank you again for reviewing. It's really appreciated. ~Carole~

 

Love and Order by Gmariam
Rated: 3rd-5th Years [Reviews - 41]

Summary: Past Featured StoryWhen impulsive new Auror Alice Hamilton is partnered with the more serious and experienced Frank Longbottom, neither is quite sure what to expect. They have a history, after all, and a different way of approaching the job. Yet in a world where dark forces continue to threaten the safety and security of the magical community, they must work together in spite of their feelings--especially when it becomes clear that You-Know-Who is planning a major offensive that will threaten both their relationship and their lives.

Categories: Other Pairing Genre: Warnings: Character Death, Mild Profanity, Sexual Situations, Violence

Word count: 40721 Chapters: 11 Completed: No
Published:
11/22/12 Updated: 02/09/13


Reviewer: WeasleyMom Signed
Date: 01/08/13 Title: Chapter 7: Chapter Seven

Okay, I wasn't planning to stop and review until I'm completely caught up, but holy crap, that was a great chapter. Honestly, Gina, I've joked about you being the queen of action, but in all seriousness, you deserve the title. And this wasn't even action really, but just the pace is so good, so... actiony. (See how great I am with the words?)

The development of their relationship has been perfectly paced as well, and I am really pulling for them. Not to mention completely devastated when I consider how this ultimately ends for them, and the fact that Neville will never have the pleasure of knowing them properly. Sigh.

You've done a good job, too, of including a lot of physical locations in this, and it feels completely grounded both in England and in Rowling's world... it's so easy to picture absolutely everything, which is not always the case with fanfiction.

How much of the potion stuff is known and how much is your imagination? I'm really impressed, as I've researched belladonna before and not come up with nearly this amount of info... so wondering if you've invented a lot of this. If so, well done, as it bears the ring of truth and adds a lot to the story because of the detail.

Wonderful work here, Gina. One of your best, in my humble opinion. Reading on....

Author's Response: Lorrrii! Thank you so much!! Oh yay, I'm so glad you're liking this, since it's different (yet not, lol) for me. A different couple, at least. ;) Yes, action. It kills me. Just wait. I'm glad the pacing is working out, I was worried this chapter might seem out of the blue even with some set up. Impulsive man. ;) Laughing about the England bit - you know how many questions I ask online, since I'm like the most un-British fanficcer out there, lol. As for the potions - well, most of it I made up. I ran it by Jamie to make sure it was plausible and made sense, but lunar belladonna is my own. And since it's my own plant and it's all magic, I feel like I can stretch things a bit and create these powders and side effects and poisons and such. Heh heh. So glad it was believable! Squee! Thank you so much for the amazing review! I'm so glad you are enjoying it so far!! ~Gina :)

 
Reviewer: WeasleyMom Signed
Date: 01/08/13 Title: Chapter 8: Chapter Eight

Noooo.... now I have to wait like everyone else! Hehe. Well done with the Veritasserum and even more well down with Dawlish throwing off the curse. Can't wait for the next chapter!

Author's Response: Oh, Kara had to work hard on the Veritaserum questioning, so thank her. But Dawlish throwing it off was my own, so I'll take that one, lol. I really liked writing this chapter for some reason. It felt new and interesting to me. Plus it was good to write Frank's inner conflict and I felt so bad for John Dawlish the entire time I feel like I need to write him his own story now to redeem him! Thank you so much for the reviews, I really appreciate it! ~Gina :)

 

Uncovered by Death by Equinox Chick
Rated: 6th-7th Years [Reviews - 113]

Summary: All Scorpius Malfoy had wanted on the Saturday before Halloween was to spend some time in Hogsmeade alone with his girlfriend, Lily Potter. But Fate appeared to have other plans. Not only is her annoying cousin Hugo Weasley tagging along, but in the aftermath of a violent storm, a body is uncovered.

Working with his boss, Head Auror Harry Potter, to discover the identity of the victim, and the truth of her death, Scorpius quickly learns that not all skeletons are buried underground.

This is a the sequel to High. It is not necessary to read that to understand this, but what the heck, you might just enjoy it!

Many, many thanks to Kara (Karaley Dargen) for not only beta'ing this story, but putting up with the tortuous search for a title.

Disclaimer: I am not JK Rowling, but I think you know that.

Uncovered by Death won the 2013 QSQ for Best Chaptered Next Generation Story. Thank you very much.

NOW COMPLETE

Categories: Mystery Genre: Warnings: Character Death, Mild Profanity, Sexual Situations, Violence

Word count: 125984 Chapters: 22 Completed: Yes
Published:
11/26/12 Updated: 02/11/14


Reviewer: WeasleyMom Signed
Date: 04/24/13 Title: Chapter 11: Chapter 11 - Confrontation

Why, oh why, did I start reading this before the entire story is posted? The wait now will be painful, because this is so delightfully GOOD.

Carole, how do you manage to outdo even yourself? You've always been one of the best around, but the plotting and characterization here are just perfect. I love the pace and the cliffhangers between chapters and the "threads" you keep weaving with every subplot! I honestly don't think of myself as generally liking mystery stories, but I do love cop/FBI investigation shows and books, so maybe I do. Several times while reading this, I completely forgot I was even reading fanfic, as it felt more like a David Baldacci novel. Because with those books, I always think "one more chapter," but then the end of that chapter makes me read just one more. Great stuff.

Your Harry is so, so right. Really, it's hard for me to imagine him all grown up with teenagers, but you've really done it well. At first, I didn't like how aggravated he seemed when Hermione's name came up, but then when she showed up, I realized how well-pitched that actually was, with them being in opposition so often due to work. LOVED when you broke the tension there by having them crack up over the smart kids slumming it with the idiots. That was very sweet, and reminded readers that this professional look at their relationship is only the tip of the iceberg where Harry and Hermione are concerned.

Every time a new, known character turns up, I smile. Hannah's bit was very good, and I'm enjoying Lavender and Teddy and Neville and everyone else... your version of Draco is about my favorite to read in fanfic, as he's still a complete ass, and yet, I'm always pulling for him. He clearly is good at what he does, and he loves his family, however grumbly and nasty he can be.

But this is Scorpius' fic, isn't it? You've created such a brilliant character here, Carole. I like how he struggles to keep silent when no one would blame him for retorting to a lot of the derogatory comments he's been thrown. It would be hard to be him, that's for sure. And yet, the relationship with Draco is so complicated and interesting, and a nice sketch to compare with his growing relationship with Harry. I really need to go back and read High. I started it, got several chapters in, then got sidetracked by something in RL, and never made it back around to finish. But I was so enjoying it, and being reconnected with Scorpius in this makes me want to go back and finish more than ever.

So sorry this is so long-winded. I had intended to stop every couple of chapters and review, but then I was too hooked to take the time when I wanted to see what was going to happen next. All according to your plan, I presume?

Before I go, I shall posit my theories as others have done. I think McClaggen is gay. He covers it well, but the fact that he didn't sleep with Sally-Anne is a clue there, I think. I suspect he chose the location of his apartment for something other than the view? ;) Anyway, I shall keep my other theories to myself for now.

I'm loving this. Never more than now do I think you should write OF. This is as good or better than many suspence/crime novels I've read, and I mean that seriously. And when you get down to it, Scorpius is essentially an OC. His parentage might be known, but he could have been anything. Love your version of him.

Can't wait for more! Happy writing!

~Lori

Author's Response: Lori, I have taken my time responding because I was truly blown away with how wonderful this review is. I really appreciate you reading and reviewing the story which is something I've loved writing, so far. I am about to get back to this, so I hope the next few chapters will be ready soon. That darn cotillion distracted me - YET AGAIN!

I love that you love Scorpius because writing a story from his VP again was a little daunting. On the one hand it was easy because I knew the way his mind worked from High but on the other I was placing him in a different situation and the love interest isn't as apparent. There's also a lot less conflict with his family now that he's out of that situation, but as you've discovered, Draco decided to invade my story - ha ha ha.

I obviously am not going to comment on your theories because I don;t want to ruin the rest of the story, but I find them interesting - mwahahahahahahaha.

Okay, this is a poor response to such a fabulous review, but it's all i got!

Thank you very much ~Carole~

 

Consolation by Gmariam
Rated: 3rd-5th Years [Reviews - 7]

Summary: For years, Remus Lupin found comfort in the arms of Rosmerta Richardson...until the day he no longer needed her consolation.

This is Gmariam writing for the Great Hall Cotillion Challenge of 2013.

Categories: Other Pairing Genre: Warnings: Character Death, Sexual Situations, Substance Abuse

Word count: 6754 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
01/11/13 Updated: 01/11/13


Reviewer: WeasleyMom Signed
Date: 01/11/13 Title: Chapter 1: One-shot

Wow, I really did... enjoy this pairing, I mean. It makes so much sense, Remus being the wanderer that he was and her always being in the same place. Like an anchor or something. Nice balance here in the end with her reaction to the funeral and him being the one to comfor her for once. I never think of her as being responsible, but of course she would have seen it that way and dealt with that guilt.

This is lovely, and when I think how quickly you turn out this kind of work, it makes me green with envy. Well done! ~Lori

Author's Response: Thank youuu, Lori! I love the tone of surprise in your ellipsis there, lol. I'm so glad it made sense. I totally ship them now after writing this, lol. I'm really glad you enjoyed it and appreciate you reading it, as well as the lovely review! Thank you!! ~Gina :)

 

Dangerous Liaisons by eternalangel
Rated: 6th-7th Years [Reviews - 4]

Summary: It was a dangerous game she was playing; Dorcas Meadowes knew it, but the exhilaration of it all was a tantalizing addiction.

This is eternalangel of Ravenclaw wriitng for the Valentine Cotillion.

Categories: Dark/Angsty Fics Genre: Warnings: Character Death, Mental Disorders, Sexual Situations, Substance Abuse, Suicide, Violence

Word count: 9451 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
01/22/13 Updated: 01/22/13


Reviewer: WeasleyMom Signed
Date: 04/01/14 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

I read this fic because it was chosen for discussion in SBBC this month, but I was happy to do it, as I always enjoy your drabbles in TTB. This piece is significantly longer than a drabble, but didn't feel at all long in the reading. It's very well done in terms of story and pacing, and I didn't notice the length at all.

I like the structure you chose. The (flash forward) Amelia Bones POV worked nicely as bookends for the story of Evan and Dorcas. You tell us the end at the beginning and still manage to keep the reader invested and I think that is quite a feat.

Both characters are fleshed out well. I like how conflicted Dorcas was about what she was doing, and yet she couldn't seem to resist Evan. I was particularly pleased to see Dorcas running the more dangerous part of the mission as opposed to Sirius, which would have been the more obvious choice. I may be biased, but it was refreshing to see the girl handling the bulk of the action in that section. Loved her cat-like escape off the balcony. Good stuff.

Evan is always an interesting character to read in fanfic because every view of him is a bit different. (Except he's always quite a sexy thing, haha. Hey, it works!) The conflict you created in him was interesting. Perhaps conflict is not even the word for it, because he really was pretty disgusted with Voldemort and his ways at the point Dorcus runs into him at the ball. I liked how disconnected he was from his own identity as a Death Eater; it set things up nicely for him to become a spy for the Order. Very original take there, from what I've read of Evan Rosier.

The end was sad, as it had to be, but you sank the blow that much deeper by having him promise Dorcas it would all be all right. What a tragedy, and even more of one because he died so well, so honorably, and no one will ever know. Even Amelia, who seemed to trust her friend's good opinion of Evan in the end, could not have imagined that he had not been attacking the ministry at all.

If I were going to offer anything constructive, I would just mention that several consecutive paragraphs begin with the same word -- a character's name, if I remember correctly. I only noticed because it's something I do in my own writing and am trying to correct after a beta pointed it out to me recently. It didn't hamper my enjoyment of the fic though.

Lovely writing. I enjoyed reading.

Author's Response: Thank you so much for your wonderful review. I'm really glad you liked the character development because it was the first time I have ever attempted either character. I love rare characters and putting rare characters together. I also want to thank you for your constructive critique. I do tend to unintentionally start my paragraphs with the same world, and I will be on the look out for that for now on.

 

The Last Casualty by trinsy
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 6]

Summary: Past Featured StoryNobody really wins in a war. Scenes from Teddy Lupin’s complicated childhood. The story of the last two casualties of the war against Voldemort.

Categories: Next Generation Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 2098 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
02/02/13 Updated: 02/05/13


Reviewer: WeasleyMom Signed
Date: 05/15/14 Title: Chapter 1: one-shot

I had the pleasure of reading this fic a couple of times last year during judging for the QSQs, and I'm sorry I was negligent in leaving a review when the whole thing was over. I meant to do so, to tell you how much I enjoyed your writing in this.

Next Generation is not my favorite category because so many of the characters function as (essentially) original characters, or are written as carbon-copy versions of their canon parents. But here, you grabbed me from the start; I think you accomplished this primarily by creating such a wonderful voice for Teddy. There's a matter-of-fact tone that shows us how quickly he learns how things work in life, or don't work. It starts when he upsets Andromeda by changing his hair to look like Tonks, but it goes on from there with his hard-core conclusions about things (true or not). I'm thinking particularly of his thought that Harry's words are a lie, but a pretty one. He's grown cynical, and who could blame him? Speaking of that cynicism, you communicated it brilliantly with so few words! One of my favorite moments was Teddy thinking there was going to be another anniversary memorial "because of course there was." Lines like that read so simply, and yet make him so very real.

Another thing I really admire is how -- in a relatively short fic -- you handled a whole lot of big insight. I was interested in Teddy's thought that he doesn't miss his parents and he doesn't feel he's lacked anything because of how wonderful his grandmother and Harry have been to him as he's grown up. And yet there's an anger simmering there -- an appropriate one, in my opinion -- at the circumstances and the unfairness of it all. He's complaining about his lot, but it's a different kind of complaining and he doesn't really feel sorry for himself.

Aside from his parents, the insight you give Teddy about the war is apt. I particuarly like the idea that no one really wins, but that one side rather loses a bit less than the other. Not an entirely new idea, but one that fits Teddy's POV very well at this point in his life.

The highlight of the story, for me, was his conversation with Harry at the graves, and I see other reviewers have expressed the same feeling. Wow, what beautiful writing in that scene. Harry is absolutely wonderful. His comment about how young he really was when it all happened and how he didn't really even know it at the time was very moving, and I choked up a bit. (Poor Harry.) It's fitting that it's here, in this moment and this conversation and in the spot where his parents are buried, that Teddy finally gets what it was all about and comes to terms with it. And even better, the depth of that understanding urges him to find the one that he's always loved and tell her. Beautiful, beautiful ending scene.

I probably shouldn't admit this lest I be stoned by the masses, but I have to confess one little niggle with the premise: I couldn't help wondering if the Weasleys would really forget Victoire's birthday entirely, even on those big anniversaries. When I think how desperate they must have been for something good, and how Victoire was this tiny new life, the first grandchild, a symbol of hope and love... it's just a little hard (for me) to accept that she would be completely ignored or forgotten even by her parents. Rather, I imagine the two events (the anniversary and her birthday) irrevocably tied up together in the life of this family. That said, I do really like your version of things because I'm a sucker for romance, and it's just lovely that Teddy is the one who always remembers and who truly sees her. So in the end, it's all good.

Lovely, lovely work. Your story is beautiful and touching, and totally deserving of the QSQ win. Please accept my much-belated congratulations.

 
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