I am an obsessed Harry Potter fan who, according to one friend, "needs rehab." Hehe. I like canon-compliant stories and pairings, especially Romione, which is probably evident from my stories.
You will notice I don't use British spellings. I always strive to accurately portray British culture in my fics and have my characters (and JK's) behaving in culturally appropriate ways. But spelling and punctuation are tools of the writer, and I'm an American writer. :) I always feel incredibly pretentious when I use British spellings (if it's required for a challenge)--LOL.
Right, just wanted to let you know where I'm coming from in case you are annoyed that I spell it color instead of colour. Hehe.
Summary: '...Benjy Fenwick, he copped it too, we only ever found bits of him ...'
At school Sirius knew Fenwick didn't like him. Following him around, or docking points, he was always in his face and trying to piss him off. Years later they are paired up on a mission for the Order. Can they overcome their mutual loathing and work together?
This is Equinox Chick from the Badger Sett writing her ... um ... seventh entry for the Inaugural Great Hall Cotillion. One more may kill me, but I shall give it a go.
Disclaimer: I am not JK Rowling. That should be obvious.
Thank you, Nat, for setting the pace and Alex for joining in. Our padded cells await us on March 1st.
Um, I think its shocking that this hasn't received any new reviews since the QSQs. What the heck?Well, I'm here now, so all is well. Hehe. Carole, I really, really liked this. And to be honest, I wouldn't have clicked on it because the idea of a story that ends in a massacre is not so much my normal cup of tea, as you already know. And yet, this surprised me, and I was so glad I read. Your Sirius is always a gem, but you also brought Benjy to life very vividly in this. I kept thinking, a Benjy Fenwick centered fic? Really? ;) But yes, really! And it's brilliant! How did you think of the structure? Organizing by section with the pieces of Benjy was a stroke of genius and really a stength in the fic. As a story of friendship and trust and love unfolded, you never let the reader forget how brutally this was all going to end. It contributed to the darkness... very effective. Thanks, too, for the lovely scene between Sirius and Lily. I get so tired of them not seeming like real friends after James and Lily are married. I think that so unlikely, and even erroneous in terms of canon, since we have Lily's warm letter to Sirius in DH. They were obviously close, and you've brought that friendship and the familiarity out here. I like the idea of Sirius as a book Lily has struggled to understand and eventually succeeded. This whole bit really bore the ring of truth. But my favorite part was the almost-end. It was so nice to have the friendship survive, have that conversation between them at the end. And Sirius, in particular... so self-aware! “I’ll be honest with you,” he says as he sips his drink. “I think it is me. I don’t feel things, Benjy, not the way other people do. I see James and Lily wrap themselves around each other physically as well as mentally, and that’s never happened to me. If I want sex, I sleep with a girl, but that’s all I need from them.” “It sounds -” Benjy grasps for the word. “Empty.” Sirius shrugs. “I have James. And Remus and Peter,” he adds. It's really sad, but so Sirius. And because of that, it is somehow less sad. Does that even make sense? I really enjoyed this. Your writing continues to reach new depths, Carole. And it never disappoints. ~ Lori
Summary: In 1993, Bill Weasley is working on a tomb in Egypt with a team of Magiarchaeologists and Curse-Breakers. It is a job like any other ... or so it seems, until members of the expedition start dying, and Bill has to race against time to figure out what exactly it is that they awakened in the tomb of Mentuhotep, and how it can be stopped before it reaches him.
The following are characters from JKR’s creations: Bill Weasley, Ragnok, Agatha Chubb (QttA), and the last names of Deverill and Pilliwickle. I don’t own them and never will!
I owe a large debt to Hannah (coolh5000), Carole (EquinoxChick), and Natalie (hestiajones) for their constant encouragement and help at various stages of this story.
Fair Warning: Some of the reviews (naturally) contain spoilers, especially those towards the end. So if you want to be safe, don't read those before you read the story.
This story just WON a 2012 QSQ Award in the General category, as best chaptered story. THANK YOU!!!
Karaaaaaaa. :) Hello there. Seems I've been sucked into the vortex that is your author page, but I don't mind it a bit. I'm enjoying this a lot, halfway through now, and so impressed with the curse-breaking world you've imagined here. Such attention to detail and layers of mystery and questions... it's fab! I love your Bill almost as much as your Charlie, and there are still six chapters for me to read!Just really hooked on your storytelling, Kara. Good stuff. I hope to finish in the next day or so.
So. Very. Good.Kara, this story was great--the presence of a curse after all was a great touch, and I love the surprise (at least for me) that Natasha was a thief! I was beginning to think Marcus was involved in some way, but you really got me with Natasha. One of the real strengths here is the detail you've created in this world of curse-breaking, and the overwhelming presence of magic in the story. Loved how much the characters relied upon it... though far from Hogwarts, this was just so very magical and so very Harry Potter. LOVE. The canon tie-in at the end is perhaps my favorite of all the fabulous small touches... what a brilliant way to ground this fic and this curse-breaking universe you've created into Harry's known world. Really, really enjoyed this, Kara.
Oh my, oh my. Slytherin love, what on earth? Hahaha! This was delightfully treacherous, as are both Marcus and Millicent. Julia got it right, what a vile pair! And yet you made them... well, not likable, exactly, but engaging and certainly well-suited enough for one another that I wanted it to work out for them. Millicent, though, is freaking scary! If only Pansy could see her now!Love all the characterization, the small sections in the first chapter did so much to show who they were, and really, how alike they are at the core. You wrote their parents well, and I think they were the real tragedy of their children. It's hard to imagine either of them being better people with these wretches for parents. (I feel like a parenting hero, next to them. Hehe.) LOVED the falling out of the window bit. Perfect place to break the chapters, and even though I suspected it might be a low window, I was still wholly entertained by your telling of that discovery at the beginning of chapter two. Poor Marcus... Millicent held all the cards, didn't she? Though I would like to see that reunion scene between the two of them after he went to Azkaban, I agree with you that it didn't really suit the flow of the story. It's really something that they both sank into such violence at the same time without having ever discussed such a thing with the other, and then still got together. Really, really clever plotting, Natalie. I enjoyed this. In a sick, twisted, squicky kind of way. I wanted to read it ever since you asked me to, but got sidetracked... so since its your birthday, I thought a review might be (extra) suitable. Happy, happy birthday to my first MNFF friend. Without you, I wouldn't have an flist. *hugs* ~Lori
As You-Know-Who slowly conquers the world, Poppy Pomfrey waits from the wings of Hogwarts as her loved ones fight against the Dark Arts. She doesn't quite believe that she could lose them, though....
This is inspirations of Hufflepuff writing for the Inaugural Great Hall Cotillion. :)
Oh, I like this pairing a lot. I've never considered that the timing would be about right, age-wise, because I always think of her as being older, and unfortunately, he died young. As sad as this is, I think it very believable that even relationships as serious as this one were made casualties of the war.I like your inclusion of the McKinnons death here. I so often see that portrayed as a couple, Marlene and husband, maybe children. But like you, I imagine it her parents and siblings. Nice connection there with both Poppy and Fabian to bring home the impact of that grief. I have no crit. :) My favorite part was the beginning, the language you used to describe the moment of his proposal, how she held up her hand and that halo of light... I could see it all so vividly. Lovely writing. ~Lori
Summary: Really, must I endure the nauseating burden of owing the tinned twit a favour?
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Written, hurriedly and frantically, for the Inaugural Great Hall Cotillion by Acacia Carter of Hufflepuff.
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As always, the Harry Potter world and everything in it is property of JKR.
Hello there. :) I'm so glad I didn't remember what pairing you'd chosen, as I probably would not have read this. Haha. But I'm so glad I did because it is just so clever and fun! You captured her tone beautifully and handled the language with such ease.Really nice writing! I liked it! ~Lori
As Ron arrived at Shell Cottage, he soon came to realise that the things that drove him away were not nearly as important as that which made him want to go back.
You know I love this, but it bears repeating. Your Ron is love, and I really think the bit you added after "save going back" is just wonderful. You've captured this moment brilliantly.
I'm glad you liked it. It was remarkably easy to write, oddly enough. :D
Thanks for the visit/review. *hugs*
Summary: Spring, 1979: When both their love and their lives are tested by Dark magic, James Potter and Lily Evans must defy Voldemort for the first of more confrontations to come during the first Wizarding War.
Winner, Quicksilver Quill Award for Best Marauder Era story
Dude, that was a bit too close for comfort. I was seriously afraid you were going to go way A/U and let James die for her. (You have to admit, you put him through a lot--haha!) I was so relieved to found a happy ending in all that angst. Love the Marauders, and even loved Snape in this. I think you handled him just right.Happy 100th fic! Well done!
I'm enjoying this Gina... just read the first three chapters at once when I really should be sleeping. Hehe. I liked your description of Voldy here, with the hair... I seem to remember references to his progression into a snakelike form as being gradual, so we really don't know what he would have looked like back then. I like that you chose to mix it up. Excellent characterization and action as usual. :) Looking forward to the next chapter....
Author's Response: Thank you so much for reading this, Lori!! I really appreciate it. I'm glad you enjoyed it, as I'm starting to see that darker James/Lily stories don't always go over as well as the fluffier ones I write. But I had to do a J/L for my 100th. :) Thanks for the compliment on the action, it took me a while to work out. The characters are like old friends, though. I hope you enjoy the rest! Thanks again! ~Gina :)
All that matters is the face you show to the world.
Hard-faced, but in love.
What’s a girl to do?
This is LollyLovesick of Hufflepuff submitting my entry for Rosmerta's Mini-Gauntlet being held in The Three Broomsticks over at the MNFF beta boards.Nominated for Best General Story in the 2012 Quicksilver Quills. Thank you!
This fic is very well written. I think one of the hardest things is to take a character who is almost wholly unlikable in canon, and write a fic of some length from their perspective. Because you've got to be true to all the negative stuff we have in canon, and yet, to keep a reader interest, there's got to be something relatable there, something to make the reader care enough to keep on with the story. You have certainly succeeded with that difficult task here. Pansy is such a little b**** here, claiming the bed and marking Draco as the one whose arm she will reside on, and just the whole ringleader act. But you give us glimpses of the tragedy at home, of her mum's advice to her, of her growing feelings for Draco in spite of her desire to not let him in. Very compelling character you've built up in her, and I was hooked throughout.I loved the section dealing with 6th year Draco, and the scene in the common room. We know how distraught he is, so there is some sympathy there, but the way he manipulates her... only to desert her... it's tragic in that it only confirms the things her mother has been telling her for years. I felt awful for her in that moment, because she was telling him the truth, and then he used her. But she was a user, too, wasn't she? I'm glad she didn't go through with the plot for revenge. It was evil to be sure, but I'm glad she took her way out when it came along. My only critique would be that this section seemed a bit rushed to me, from when she left them in the cafe, to the bit with her mother. It was just abrupt or something, not sure. I almost wish we'd seen a bit of foreshadowing that she might relent in her plan, only because I was very surprised when she didn't go through with it. (Pleasantly, though.) But I truly enjoyed this glimpse into Pansy's psyche. You did a fabulous job fleshing her out, particularly in relation to Draco. Good story! ~Lori
Summary: In the space of five months, Seamus Finnigan found himself out of one relationship and home, and safely ensconced with the rapacious Romilda Vane.
About to get married and move to Paris, he couldn't be happier.
But his friends have other ideas.
Disclaimer: I most definitely am not JK Rowling.
Another Disclaimer: All the chapter titles are named after films. I didn't star, write or direct any of them. And there's a good few I haven't even seen.
Oh, I can't wait! You are the master plotter, aren't you? Poor Lav and Blaise in the wardrobe... how will they ever amuse themselves? Hehe.Really enjoying this, Carole... you've grown these characters up just right, and they are so much fun to read. I don't suppose I have any right to demand a quick update, do I? No? ;) Then I guess I'll just wait patiently. Well done, you.
My, my, aren't we plotty? ;) I love it. I suck at plotting ,which is why I'm so able to appreciate it in others. I love that Blaise was flashing back to a nightmare punishment--that was a nice addition to his character and his past. I will say the numbers distracted me, but perhaps I just don't remember how old Romilda is? I thought she was the same year as Harry and friends, but it seems Blaise is only 17 in this piece? Ah well, a momentary distraction.Nice use of the polyjuice potion. I suspected he was going to use it to get by the old man, but a switcheroo... very nice, and a dangerous cup of tea in play as well? You are the master plotter, my friend. Loving this!
Carole, you are the master plotter and rather evil with this cliffhanger! Methinks I should have waited until it was complete to read! Love your Seamus and all the characters from Lavender, Blue... especially your Blaise. *sigh*Can't wait to see what Romilda is up to... hurry and update, please!
Daphne Greengrass had until her twenty-first birthday to pick a husband, or her parents would choose one for her. With only months to go before the deadline, she found herself with a perfect suitor in Theodore Nott.
But when a freak pregnancy landed her in the care of cranky Healer-in-Training Michael Corner, Daphne started to realise that things she thought she knew were slowly being turned upside-down. And what she thought she knew about Michael Corner began to dissolve into something different entirely.
This story has been nominated for two 2012 Quicksilver Quill Awards: Best Non-Canon Romance and Best Post-Hogwarts Story.
This story has also been nominated for a 2013 Quicksilver Quill Award: Best Post-Hogwarts Story.
Jess, I love your writing. And I'm anxiously awaiting the next installment. Well done.
I'm glad you're still into the story. These characters were so fun to work with that it almost doesn't surprise me that I wrote this whole thing in like two weeks. :)
Should be an update tomorrow. <3
I love that she stood up to Michael and made him deal with the truth in the end. NIce characterization of Kingsley, too. I was a bit nervous when he was hanging out with Darius, but it all worked out very well. Nice idea to resolve the Auror thing, Jess. It's not something that was really hanging in my mind as unresolved, but it must heal so much in Michael to understand what really happened there, and hear what Flitwick and Harry had thought of him. I like getting that back story a LOT. Poor Anthony's Mom, though. Wow.So bummed this is almost over. It's been such a fun read. And as I've mentioned recently, these two have become canon for me now. Well done.
I think this chapter, more than anything, gives Daphne both the push she needed to assure her that she's doing the right thing with her life, as well as to start the healing process for Michael, who had been broken and inflicting hurt upon himself psychologically at every turn.
Funny enough, had Michael observed his own behaviour in someone else, he would've spotted the problem and the latent issues straight away, but I suppose doctors really do make the worst patients. But Michael's aunt is as sharp as he is, I believe, and I think she knew immediately that Michael needed Daphne far more than she needed him, but they still needed each other.
I don't think Kingsley was quite in office long enough to know Darius well, only that he was influential, a noted businessman, and Daphne's father. However, it didn't take long for him to pick up on the reasons why Daphne was speaking out, as well as that Darius, despite his reputation, was cold and calculating, even with his own family. Kingsley isn't a BAMF for nothing; he won't let Darius get away with it, hehe. <3 that man. I really do need to sort out who his wife is, lol.
The bit about Anthony's mother broke my heart a bit when I wrote it. There was no rightly good reason why Michael would've been rejected from the Auror department, so it would've always been something like this, some moment of weakness. But in this wrong, it set Michael on the right course and to a career so suited to his capabilities. He would've been a really good Auror, but he is a great Healer, and in a way, I think that alone would give Michael the strength to move on from this knowledge and possibly be able to see things from Mrs Goldstein's point of view.
Anyway, ramble over. I'm glad you enjoy this story so much. It was fun (if agonising) to write, and it's been a pleasure to post it here on MNFF. I really need to send swissmarg an email or something and let her know that her prompt elicited an amazing writing experience for me. ♥
Ooohhh... I knew something bad was going to happen, but I thought it was going to be a complication from the medication causing her to pass out up there. This is way better.Anxiously waiting for the next bit!
You know, I hadn't remotely considered medical complications. Considering the odds against it and Daphne's health, I knew that the Big Plot Thing would have to come from left field. Enjoy that twist. :)
Thanks for following. I don't seldom get to write things that fall into your 'yay let's read' list, so I'm glad we get to go through this together. <3
Now would you look that lovely happy ending Jess just dealt out? ;) I loved it.I'm not sure what else to say about this fic, but wanted to review since you have posted the end now. Thanks so much for this lovely story, and for characterization that you have given to these two ~ they have honestly become canon to me. And while there are many, many rarepair fics I have enjoyed reading, this is only the second one I could really say that about, after Carole's Lavender/Blaise. But it would be hard for me to accept either of these two with anyone else after this. Well done, you. :) ~ Lori
Squeeing with you over this story has honestly been one of the highlights of my year. You probably know how much it means to have someone you consider to be a friend as well as an accomplished author appreciate something you slaved over. It's a feeling of validation that makes all of this worth it.
It makes me smile most unbecomingly that Michael and Daphne have earned a place in your heart. They definitely shoe-horned their way into mine. Previously, I had both of them married off to other people and a lot different than they were in this story, but all of that is erased. And while there will never be an epic ship name for these two (GreenCorn?!), they will always have an epic story where they both learned to live and to love and to be part of something amazing.
Thank you so much for being a great reader and just a great friend in general. For a story I thought no one would bother reading, THH has received an epic welcome for a minor character fic, and it holds the honour of being the very first nomination of this year's QSQs. <3
Anyway, feel free to poke on AIM if you'd like some more back story or outtakes. I don't think I'll ever get tired of this story. I'm sad it's all over. D:
I seriously cannot stand these chapter endings... waiting is agony, even if it isn't long. This fic continues to deliver, in every way. What a great twist that both her mum and her sister support her to a degree. Considering how terribly things went with her father, I'm sure she needed to know there were still family relationships there that would survive this, somehow. I also really liked how resourceful she was, with the Disillusionment charm and getting out on the ledge, then figuring out to try the bathroom for Apparition... glad you didn't just have Michael come rescue her. ;) (Though that is probably what I would have done--lol.)I think it goes without saying that this is my favorite of all the stories I've read of yours. And its a pairing you have truly sold me on. Well done.
Muahahahaha! I have a mania for cliffhangers, I won't lie. Didn't think this was much of a cliffie, but apparently, both you and Gina vehemently disagree, lol.
I think this chapter was important for Daphne in that she started to question what was left of her old beliefs, namely those regarding her family and the relationships she had always relied on. It's hard to turn your back on the life you've known for ages, burn all those bridges, but seeing what her father really was made the choice a lot clearer for Daphne. Also, I think knowing that Astoria and their mother were capable of fending for themselves heartened her and sent her off with the knowledge that her family was still her family, even if her father was a git-faced sleazoid.
I actually had toyed with the idea of having Michael rescue her, but the idea of him actually getting into the house felt ludicrous. There is a story behind the portkey. Remind me to tell you sometime. :)
Anyway, I'm glad you are enjoying the story so much, and it will be with pride and immense pleasure that I will add 'Nominated for a 2012 Quicksilver Quill Award' to the summary. <3 you, and stay tuned.
Summary: The story of Ron and Hermione through a series of missing moments. Who said love was simple?
Oh, another great chapter. :)I must admit, I wonder if Ron would really have been so upset about Harry and Ginny. I've not reread HBP in ages, but I thought Ron had just given Harry a look of shock, followed by a look that said, "Well, if you must." That, to me, is more like acceptance, even if he is surprised, which he certainly would be. I do like the scene you've written, there are some great moments there, and the chess game is FAB! Just not sure he would have needed so much talking around over the H/G kiss. Really nice read though. The second scene in this chapter is my favorite thing you've written so far. I've always believed something serious happened in Ron's head with Dumbledore's death, and it materialized there at the funeral with Hermione. Something in those weeks from him being poisoned to the funeral really grew him up. You wrote that transition beautifully, with the added bonus of having Ron thinking through that transition himself. "When did we grow up?" Loved that so much. Their conversation on the platform... just GUSHHHHH. So good! I think it would have been something like this for sure, with the awkwardness, but also the realization that they both knew there was something more there. I think so too. Their apologies for the missed gifts expressed everything, and served as the apologies they really both ought to make for their insane behavior all year. Most heartbreaking moment: "Next year, eh?" So Ron to say that, and yet, we know next Christmas is going to SUUUUUUUUCK!!! Wow, this is long and rambly, sorry. Loving this piece, is what I wanted to say. Also, I may have to skip your next installment, as I'm currently writing Hermione's arrival at the Burrow before they go get Harry. Haha! Great minds think alike, right? I don't want to be influenced by your take, as I know I will like it. So if you write that bit, I'll catch up with the next installment. Thanks for another great read. Happy writing!
Be. Still. My. Heart.Am still loving this. Favorite parts include Ron realizing thinking Hermione was born to be Prefect--that whole paragraph and the lines after are just spot on and brilliant. I also love Hermione's POV, especially when she learns of the poisoning. Ron/Hermione is my favorite, but to be honest, it's not that easy to find stuff that has such good characterization. Which is why your take on these missing moments is such a gem, and why I keep coming back for more. Great stuff--keep it coming! Lori