I am a serious Harry Potter fan who, according to one friend, "needs rehab." I like canon-compliant stories and pairings, especially Romione, which is probably evident from my stories.
You will notice I don't use British spellings. I strive to accurately portray British culture in my fics and have my characters (and JK's) behaving in culturally appropriate ways. But spelling and punctuation are tools of the writer, and I'm an American writer. I would feel incredibly pretentious using British spellings.
Oh, I like this pairing a lot. I've never considered that the timing would be about right, age-wise, because I always think of her as being older, and unfortunately, he died young. As sad as this is, I think it very believable that even relationships as serious as this one were made casualties of the war.I like your inclusion of the McKinnons death here. I so often see that portrayed as a couple, Marlene and husband, maybe children. But like you, I imagine it her parents and siblings. Nice connection there with both Poppy and Fabian to bring home the impact of that grief. I have no crit. :) My favorite part was the beginning, the language you used to describe the moment of his proposal, how she held up her hand and that halo of light... I could see it all so vividly. Lovely writing. ~Lori
Hello there. :) I'm so glad I didn't remember what pairing you'd chosen, as I probably would not have read this. Haha. But I'm so glad I did because it is just so clever and fun! You captured her tone beautifully and handled the language with such ease.Really nice writing! I liked it! ~Lori
As Ron arrived at Shell Cottage, he soon came to realise that the things that drove him away were not nearly as important as that which made him want to go back.
You know I love this, but it bears repeating. Your Ron is love, and I really think the bit you added after "save going back" is just wonderful. You've captured this moment brilliantly.
I'm glad you liked it. It was remarkably easy to write, oddly enough. :D
Thanks for the visit/review. *hugs*
Dude, that was a bit too close for comfort. I was seriously afraid you were going to go way A/U and let James die for her. (You have to admit, you put him through a lot--haha!) I was so relieved to found a happy ending in all that angst. Love the Marauders, and even loved Snape in this. I think you handled him just right.Happy 100th fic! Well done!
I'm enjoying this Gina... just read the first three chapters at once when I really should be sleeping. Hehe. I liked your description of Voldy here, with the hair... I seem to remember references to his progression into a snakelike form as being gradual, so we really don't know what he would have looked like back then. I like that you chose to mix it up. Excellent characterization and action as usual. :) Looking forward to the next chapter....
Author's Response: Thank you so much for reading this, Lori!! I really appreciate it. I'm glad you enjoyed it, as I'm starting to see that darker James/Lily stories don't always go over as well as the fluffier ones I write. But I had to do a J/L for my 100th. :) Thanks for the compliment on the action, it took me a while to work out. The characters are like old friends, though. I hope you enjoy the rest! Thanks again! ~Gina :)
All that matters is the face you show to the world.
Hard-faced, but in love.
What’s a girl to do?
This is LollyLovesick of Hufflepuff submitting my entry for Rosmerta's Mini-Gauntlet being held in The Three Broomsticks over at the MNFF beta boards.Nominated for Best General Story in the 2012 Quicksilver Quills. Thank you!
This fic is very well written. I think one of the hardest things is to take a character who is almost wholly unlikable in canon, and write a fic of some length from their perspective. Because you've got to be true to all the negative stuff we have in canon, and yet, to keep a reader interest, there's got to be something relatable there, something to make the reader care enough to keep on with the story. You have certainly succeeded with that difficult task here. Pansy is such a little b**** here, claiming the bed and marking Draco as the one whose arm she will reside on, and just the whole ringleader act. But you give us glimpses of the tragedy at home, of her mum's advice to her, of her growing feelings for Draco in spite of her desire to not let him in. Very compelling character you've built up in her, and I was hooked throughout.I loved the section dealing with 6th year Draco, and the scene in the common room. We know how distraught he is, so there is some sympathy there, but the way he manipulates her... only to desert her... it's tragic in that it only confirms the things her mother has been telling her for years. I felt awful for her in that moment, because she was telling him the truth, and then he used her. But she was a user, too, wasn't she? I'm glad she didn't go through with the plot for revenge. It was evil to be sure, but I'm glad she took her way out when it came along. My only critique would be that this section seemed a bit rushed to me, from when she left them in the cafe, to the bit with her mother. It was just abrupt or something, not sure. I almost wish we'd seen a bit of foreshadowing that she might relent in her plan, only because I was very surprised when she didn't go through with it. (Pleasantly, though.) But I truly enjoyed this glimpse into Pansy's psyche. You did a fabulous job fleshing her out, particularly in relation to Draco. Good story! ~Lori
Oh, I can't wait! You are the master plotter, aren't you? Poor Lav and Blaise in the wardrobe... how will they ever amuse themselves? Hehe.Really enjoying this, Carole... you've grown these characters up just right, and they are so much fun to read. I don't suppose I have any right to demand a quick update, do I? No? ;) Then I guess I'll just wait patiently. Well done, you.
My, my, aren't we plotty? ;) I love it. I suck at plotting ,which is why I'm so able to appreciate it in others. I love that Blaise was flashing back to a nightmare punishment--that was a nice addition to his character and his past. I will say the numbers distracted me, but perhaps I just don't remember how old Romilda is? I thought she was the same year as Harry and friends, but it seems Blaise is only 17 in this piece? Ah well, a momentary distraction.Nice use of the polyjuice potion. I suspected he was going to use it to get by the old man, but a switcheroo... very nice, and a dangerous cup of tea in play as well? You are the master plotter, my friend. Loving this!
Carole, you are the master plotter and rather evil with this cliffhanger! Methinks I should have waited until it was complete to read! Love your Seamus and all the characters from Lavender, Blue... especially your Blaise. *sigh*Can't wait to see what Romilda is up to... hurry and update, please!
Daphne Greengrass had until her twenty-first birthday to pick a husband, or her parents would choose one for her. With only months to go before the deadline, she found herself with a perfect suitor in Theodore Nott.
But when a freak pregnancy landed her in the care of cranky Healer-in-Training Michael Corner, Daphne started to realise that things she thought she knew were slowly being turned upside-down. And what she thought she knew about Michael Corner began to dissolve into something different entirely.
This story has been nominated for two 2012 Quicksilver Quill Awards: Best Non-Canon Romance and Best Post-Hogwarts Story.
This story has also been nominated for a 2013 Quicksilver Quill Award: Best Post-Hogwarts Story.
Jess, I love your writing. And I'm anxiously awaiting the next installment. Well done.
I'm glad you're still into the story. These characters were so fun to work with that it almost doesn't surprise me that I wrote this whole thing in like two weeks. :)
Should be an update tomorrow. <3
I love that she stood up to Michael and made him deal with the truth in the end. NIce characterization of Kingsley, too. I was a bit nervous when he was hanging out with Darius, but it all worked out very well. Nice idea to resolve the Auror thing, Jess. It's not something that was really hanging in my mind as unresolved, but it must heal so much in Michael to understand what really happened there, and hear what Flitwick and Harry had thought of him. I like getting that back story a LOT. Poor Anthony's Mom, though. Wow.So bummed this is almost over. It's been such a fun read. And as I've mentioned recently, these two have become canon for me now. Well done.
I think this chapter, more than anything, gives Daphne both the push she needed to assure her that she's doing the right thing with her life, as well as to start the healing process for Michael, who had been broken and inflicting hurt upon himself psychologically at every turn.
Funny enough, had Michael observed his own behaviour in someone else, he would've spotted the problem and the latent issues straight away, but I suppose doctors really do make the worst patients. But Michael's aunt is as sharp as he is, I believe, and I think she knew immediately that Michael needed Daphne far more than she needed him, but they still needed each other.
I don't think Kingsley was quite in office long enough to know Darius well, only that he was influential, a noted businessman, and Daphne's father. However, it didn't take long for him to pick up on the reasons why Daphne was speaking out, as well as that Darius, despite his reputation, was cold and calculating, even with his own family. Kingsley isn't a BAMF for nothing; he won't let Darius get away with it, hehe. <3 that man. I really do need to sort out who his wife is, lol.
The bit about Anthony's mother broke my heart a bit when I wrote it. There was no rightly good reason why Michael would've been rejected from the Auror department, so it would've always been something like this, some moment of weakness. But in this wrong, it set Michael on the right course and to a career so suited to his capabilities. He would've been a really good Auror, but he is a great Healer, and in a way, I think that alone would give Michael the strength to move on from this knowledge and possibly be able to see things from Mrs Goldstein's point of view.
Anyway, ramble over. I'm glad you enjoy this story so much. It was fun (if agonising) to write, and it's been a pleasure to post it here on MNFF. I really need to send swissmarg an email or something and let her know that her prompt elicited an amazing writing experience for me. ♥
Ooohhh... I knew something bad was going to happen, but I thought it was going to be a complication from the medication causing her to pass out up there. This is way better.Anxiously waiting for the next bit!
You know, I hadn't remotely considered medical complications. Considering the odds against it and Daphne's health, I knew that the Big Plot Thing would have to come from left field. Enjoy that twist. :)
Thanks for following. I don't seldom get to write things that fall into your 'yay let's read' list, so I'm glad we get to go through this together. <3
Now would you look that lovely happy ending Jess just dealt out? ;) I loved it.I'm not sure what else to say about this fic, but wanted to review since you have posted the end now. Thanks so much for this lovely story, and for characterization that you have given to these two ~ they have honestly become canon to me. And while there are many, many rarepair fics I have enjoyed reading, this is only the second one I could really say that about, after Carole's Lavender/Blaise. But it would be hard for me to accept either of these two with anyone else after this. Well done, you. :) ~ Lori
Squeeing with you over this story has honestly been one of the highlights of my year. You probably know how much it means to have someone you consider to be a friend as well as an accomplished author appreciate something you slaved over. It's a feeling of validation that makes all of this worth it.
It makes me smile most unbecomingly that Michael and Daphne have earned a place in your heart. They definitely shoe-horned their way into mine. Previously, I had both of them married off to other people and a lot different than they were in this story, but all of that is erased. And while there will never be an epic ship name for these two (GreenCorn?!), they will always have an epic story where they both learned to live and to love and to be part of something amazing.
Thank you so much for being a great reader and just a great friend in general. For a story I thought no one would bother reading, THH has received an epic welcome for a minor character fic, and it holds the honour of being the very first nomination of this year's QSQs. <3
Anyway, feel free to poke on AIM if you'd like some more back story or outtakes. I don't think I'll ever get tired of this story. I'm sad it's all over. D:
I seriously cannot stand these chapter endings... waiting is agony, even if it isn't long. This fic continues to deliver, in every way. What a great twist that both her mum and her sister support her to a degree. Considering how terribly things went with her father, I'm sure she needed to know there were still family relationships there that would survive this, somehow. I also really liked how resourceful she was, with the Disillusionment charm and getting out on the ledge, then figuring out to try the bathroom for Apparition... glad you didn't just have Michael come rescue her. ;) (Though that is probably what I would have done--lol.)I think it goes without saying that this is my favorite of all the stories I've read of yours. And its a pairing you have truly sold me on. Well done.
Muahahahaha! I have a mania for cliffhangers, I won't lie. Didn't think this was much of a cliffie, but apparently, both you and Gina vehemently disagree, lol.
I think this chapter was important for Daphne in that she started to question what was left of her old beliefs, namely those regarding her family and the relationships she had always relied on. It's hard to turn your back on the life you've known for ages, burn all those bridges, but seeing what her father really was made the choice a lot clearer for Daphne. Also, I think knowing that Astoria and their mother were capable of fending for themselves heartened her and sent her off with the knowledge that her family was still her family, even if her father was a git-faced sleazoid.
I actually had toyed with the idea of having Michael rescue her, but the idea of him actually getting into the house felt ludicrous. There is a story behind the portkey. Remind me to tell you sometime. :)
Anyway, I'm glad you are enjoying the story so much, and it will be with pride and immense pleasure that I will add 'Nominated for a 2012 Quicksilver Quill Award' to the summary. <3 you, and stay tuned.
Oh, another great chapter. :)I must admit, I wonder if Ron would really have been so upset about Harry and Ginny. I've not reread HBP in ages, but I thought Ron had just given Harry a look of shock, followed by a look that said, "Well, if you must." That, to me, is more like acceptance, even if he is surprised, which he certainly would be. I do like the scene you've written, there are some great moments there, and the chess game is FAB! Just not sure he would have needed so much talking around over the H/G kiss. Really nice read though. The second scene in this chapter is my favorite thing you've written so far. I've always believed something serious happened in Ron's head with Dumbledore's death, and it materialized there at the funeral with Hermione. Something in those weeks from him being poisoned to the funeral really grew him up. You wrote that transition beautifully, with the added bonus of having Ron thinking through that transition himself. "When did we grow up?" Loved that so much. Their conversation on the platform... just GUSHHHHH. So good! I think it would have been something like this for sure, with the awkwardness, but also the realization that they both knew there was something more there. I think so too. Their apologies for the missed gifts expressed everything, and served as the apologies they really both ought to make for their insane behavior all year. Most heartbreaking moment: "Next year, eh?" So Ron to say that, and yet, we know next Christmas is going to SUUUUUUUUCK!!! Wow, this is long and rambly, sorry. Loving this piece, is what I wanted to say. Also, I may have to skip your next installment, as I'm currently writing Hermione's arrival at the Burrow before they go get Harry. Haha! Great minds think alike, right? I don't want to be influenced by your take, as I know I will like it. So if you write that bit, I'll catch up with the next installment. Thanks for another great read. Happy writing!
Be. Still. My. Heart.Am still loving this. Favorite parts include Ron realizing thinking Hermione was born to be Prefect--that whole paragraph and the lines after are just spot on and brilliant. I also love Hermione's POV, especially when she learns of the poisoning. Ron/Hermione is my favorite, but to be honest, it's not that easy to find stuff that has such good characterization. Which is why your take on these missing moments is such a gem, and why I keep coming back for more. Great stuff--keep it coming! Lori
Oh, I really like this chapter. I think you've again captured Ron and Hermione's voices extremely well, and Lavender too for that matter. I think Hermione really is the kind of girl who would confide in her mum if pushed to do so. It's not like she is besties with any of the other girls at school.When Ginny showed up to give consolation to Hermione, I did pause at first. I'm not really a fan of fics where these two are bff's because honestly, Ginny is not that nice to Hermione in canon, especially during this time. We know Hermione was advising Ginny about Harry, and that they were good friends. But Ginny sometimes lacks empathy, so I was surprised you were going to use her in that role. But you made it work. I think it was just right that she just put a hand on Hermione's back and encouraged her to not give Ron the satisfaction of seeing how upset she was. Ginny, of course, would know a lot about this. All that to say, I think you did a really good job of letting Ginny be a friend and help, without taking her OOC. Well done! I'm looking forward to the next installment of this!
Just thought I'd let you know I'm still enjoying this. :) I can't help but notice that on many of the missing moments we have both written, we have startlingly similar takes on it. Great minds think alike, huh? Looking forward to the next installment!
Author's Response: Thanks for reading and reviewing! That's good to hear :) Haha, yeah, I remember seeing Another Horcrux Down not long after I'd finished this chapter and wondering why I even bothered. It shouldn't be too far away :)
Alex, this is perfect. Like, seriously, it's perfect. I remember this as a drabble, and it was powerful even then, but now... these two are brilliant, just brilliant, under your characterization. The description is breathtaking, Terry's confusion and love and friendship and sacrifice... just... I'm pretty much blown away by this. Amazing, amazing work. I would nominate it for a QSQ but I believe someone beat me to it.Clearly, I must troll your author page at my earliest convenience.
It's a well known fact that I know nothing of poetry. But this moved me, Carole. You captured both their spirit and their tragedy in only a few words. Well done.Congrats on the win, my friend. :)