I am a serious Harry Potter fan who, according to one friend, "needs rehab." I like canon-compliant stories and pairings, especially Romione, which is probably evident from my stories.
You will notice I don't use British spellings. I strive to accurately portray British culture in my fics and have my characters (and JK's) behaving in culturally appropriate ways. But spelling and punctuation are tools of the writer, and I'm an American writer. I would feel incredibly pretentious using British spellings.
I'm so glad you mentioned this was for the Puff drabble thing... I thought I was having deja vu or something. ;) I liked the drabble a lot, Carole, but this expanded version is just wonderful. I love all the magic... the gnomes and Teddy's antics at the table.
It was consistently funny but I was seriously pulling for them as well. Yes, Teddy was rude, but it was believable. People do rude things when they are hurt and angry.
Lovely one-shot. Probably the first that has made me want to read more T/V (though I do like the pairing).
One small crit... at the end there is a line about McGlaggan... "More fool him." I didn't understand this. Did you mean "more to fool him"? Again, this was such a small thing, and it is probably some cool Brit speak that just confused my American ears. ;) Hehe.
Lovely, lovely read.
Author's Response: Hi Lori. Thanks for the review. 'More fool him.' must be a Brit expression. It means that McLaggan is more of a fool because of certain actions/words so he's more of a fool. I think it's a Shakespearianism that's made its way into the common language, but don't quote me on that. I liked Teddy being rude because a) he is hurt and b) I get sick of reading stories where he's all gentle and even-tempered because I doubt Andromeda was placid and Tonks certainly wasn't (although she was sweet she was tempestuous). Thanks again ~Carole~
This is extremely well done. Your Hermione is right on the money, and I also appreciated her assessment of the boys, that Ron would not want to leave her and only Harry might possibly be wise enough to do it if necessary. You write the trio very well--I've recently become a fan of yours. :)
Author's Response: hI WeasleyMom,
I know it's incredibly belated (a temporary baby hiatus turned into a crashed laptop and other disasters), but Thank You! I love the trio. They are, by far, my favorite subject.
Thank you so much for reading and reviewing!
Nearly eighty years have passed since the Battle of Hogwarts, yet Padma Patil cannot banish the string of tragic memories from her mind. A part of her still holds onto them as a way to see the faces of those she has lost once more.
Her memories tell the story of a young woman too afraid to fight against Voldemort’s regime. Throughout her final year at Hogwarts, Padma had been forced to choose between defying the Death Eaters and keeping her loved ones safe. Her decision is one that will ultimately haunt her for the rest of her life.
Nominated for a 2011 QSQ - Best Dark/Angsty Story
I am lucca4 of Gryffindor and this is my final for the Missing Moments class on the MNFF Beta Boards.
** indicates a line taken directly from Harry Potter and the Deathly Hallows pages 659-660
Whoa. Ariana, this was flat amazing! If these finals were in competition with each other, I believe I would go delete mine right now. LOL. What a fantastic story! I tend to think of Padma and Pavarti in the same mold, but what a wonderful job you have done here of giving them each a distinct personality with strengths and weaknesses of their own... and yet their connection as sisters was always present as well.
Your Terry was just wonderful, there is no other way to say it. I love the disappointment he had in her, and the fact that something in him would not give up on her either. What a great scene in the common room by the fire. I like that he just blurted out the apology about what had happened before. Conversations really do happen that way, and it felt very believable to me, all of that.
Nice magic in the RoR, with the wall of privacy popping up... cool touch. ;)
I blanced a bit a the easy use of the Cruciatus Curse by Padma, instead of, say, another immobilizing curse. But times are extreme and she has been pushed to the limit.
I had to read the last line twice to realize she did not kill herself. I'm glad you left it at more of a desire/temptation instead of having her do it. Her old-age perspective is so painful that to have her do that would almost be too much for me to take as a reader.
Loved this so much. I will now go and add it to my favorites. It was fun being in class with you... I loved reading your drabbles and discussing with you.
Author's Response: Oh dear, I can't believe I haven't responded to this yet, considering this review probably made my entire week :). Thank you so, so much for reviewing this! I'm incredibly happy that you liked reading it (and I'm glad they're not in competition, too, because there's no way this would stand against your kick-butt characterization of Ginny…I still can't get over how well you know her!). And I'm glad you liked Terry too, yay! I really loved writing him, which made it all the more sad when the ending came along. Haha, and I'm thrilled that you liked the RoR scene…I didn't want it to be *too* awkward with Padma and Ernie in the same room. You know, I never really imagined Padma using a different curse (probably because I wrote it with 'Crucio' in the original drabble) but I see your point now. I do think it was a little dramatic. And I'm sorry the ending was a little confusing, but I would definitely not have her kill herself. I imagine her with no will to do much of anything except for relive her memories, and await the day she will naturally join those she has lost. You don't have to add this to your favorites, but I'm so glad that you did! I really enjoyed being in this class with you--your comments were always so wonderful to read. Hope to see you next term! xx Ariana
Ooh, CA, I really enjoyed this. Hasn't this class been so much fun? It's turned this bit of time that is so much a mystery into a big question mark for me, and is becoming one of my favorite things to read.
Nice use of the required elements. You wove them in seamlessly; I never would have known they were part of the assignment.
I like your Nott here. He is kind of an enigma of a Slytherin, and I like that you continued that ambiguity here. He is one of the torturers and doesn't seem to mind it, and yet, he doesn't rat out Seamus when he clearlly knows what is going on there. Well played.
I like the idea of Neville and Seamus becoming better friends, and Seamus being thankful for it, and yet not for the reason it happened. There must be a lot of that going on during this year... people missing, and therefore others draw closer without them.
Really nice one-shot. I've enjoyed reading all your drabbles in class and chatting in the discussions, CA. Nice writing. :)
I am ron lover of Gryffindor and this is my final for the Missing Moments class on the MNFF Beta Boards.
Hey, Alyssa. ;) Good for you, choosing to use original characters for this. So many students in this story whose stories would never be known. I like that you actually did have them leave, and then return. At first, I thought he wouldn't go with her, and she would still go alone, and then would die. Not so happy.
I'm glad you let him man-up and return to the battle as well. Did they make it? Or aren't you telling? Hehe.
I like the Lavender connection, though it made me very curious.
Nice job, and always good to read a different take (OC's).
I enjoyed being in class with you!
I like this fic. I think James is a very interesting original character, and I like the back story you gave him with his brother and their relationship. It's easy to think there were the ones who stayed and the ones who left, with not much in the middle... but it really couldn't have been so. I like that James doesn't have the courage until the moment he DOES. Life so often feels that way to me. You are right up on making the decision you always knew you'd make, and then, in the moment, BAM, it's the other thing. Very nice.
I was a little confused by the reference to Crabbe, as I believe he was in Harry's year, and you specifically mentioned that James recognized his torturer as being in his own year... ?? Perhaps I misread this.
Very nice story, though. I especially like the character Tom, how unsavory he seems to be, and then, in the end, he has no qualms about standing to fight. You've blurred the lines between the good guys and the bad, which always keeps things interesting.
Author's Response: Thank you Lori :] I really appreciate what you said. And thanks for pointing out that thing about Crabbe - I originally wrote James as a seventh year and I must have missed that little detail in thta part when I was fixing it.
Natalie, I liked this so much. Mandy is such a likeable, and well-developed character. I liked the reveal with her scars but also the strength we see in her: she has been though much, and even weeps, but she is tough and somehow, not weepy, if that makes sense.
Your Ernie is different than mine, but he is still just wonderful. I love the darkness and the uncertainty and even the apathy... but that these things can be redeemed.
Really nice one-shot. I enjoyed the read.
Author's Response: My Ernie went a bit dark D: I thought it would be a nice twist as what we see of him in the books is neither at dark or apathetic. I wanted to see how that would play out. The only thing I was worried about was OOC-ness, which is why I left a few things in the fic which would still make him sound like the pompous Puff he really is in canon.
This is shaping up to be one of my favorites of your stories, Gina. It's taking a serious turn now that I didn't anticipate, but it feels right for the story. I hated James' poor chart, but thought his reaction to it very good. Loved the line about him not knowing which was scarier--early death or becoming a father. LOL.
You created an entire classroom of people! Ugh, I so envy this... all the names were good and a couple of the OCs stood out even in that little bit they had (the teacher, Diggory, and the girl who liked James). I am currently struggling over creating OCs for a next gen fic, and it is just murder thinking of names and fleshing them out even a little. You did really well with that here.
Poor James. He is trying so hard. I don't always like first person over an extended story like this, but I find his head a very comfortable place to be.
Really well done, and I can't wait for the next chapter!
Author's Response: Thanks so much, Lori! A favorite, really? Wow! I had not really planned on it going this far when I set out, but it's growing bit by bit. Yes, it did get a bit serious. I like to be able to add that to the mix of humour and banter, I think. I'm glad you're okay in James's head, hee hee. Actually, that comment makes me feel good because writing his first person is more challenging than writing Lily's, so I'm glad I'm succeeding. I've already emailed you about the OC business, but thank you for the compliments! I hope your OCs are coming along. Thanks for the reply and the lovely review, and I hope you like the next chapter! ~Gina :)
What a fun read, Gina! This is just wonderful! I love the detail you provide with the potions--I felt like I could really visualize everything as it was happening.
Having read and loved your love potion fic, I feel Sirius deserves whatever he gets. Though I'm starting to suspect Remus could be involved with the sabatoge...??? Hmm?
Can't wait for more. :)
Author's Response: Thanks, Lori! I'm so glad you enjoyed it. I'm glad you liked the other one, too, it's one of my favorites and I only hope this one lives up to it. Yes, Sirius deserves a bit more. As for Remus...well, I can't give anything away, can I? Only it's not that big a deal, to be honest, lol. The focus is all J/L here, and I hope you enjoy the rest even if you don't find out who planted the sneezewort! Thanks again! ~Gina :)
Oh yes, he just told her! And then she told him back, and now they are going off to Hogsmeade... and just... *swoon*
Author's Response: Thanks, Lori! I just finished the next chapter today. Thanks so much for your encouragement and help! I'm so glad you are still enjoying it. Hopefully I'll post the next bit soon! ~Gina :)
Still loving this, Gina. :) It's such a fun ride, and I'm glad you decided to go with the lighter vibe this time. I love how James has had enough and is ready to just give it up for the night. That seems like the right way to go for him, after all... it's been a LOT of disappointment. And of course, as in life, that's just about when the girl begins to see how irresistible he is. Hehe. I can't wait for chapter seven, except I suppose I have no choice.
I will be sad when this one is over.
Author's Response: Thank you so much, Lori! Poor James, yes, he's quite tired of it all. I've only got one more thing planned for him, though. ;) I love your point about how that's when the girl comes around, lol. I'm so glad you came by to read more. I've finished the last chapter so it won't be long...and then I have something new ready to go. Oh, and that bloody R/H that got stuck four chapters in. >.< I hope you like the end, thanks so much for the review! ~Gina :)
Oh, Gina, this has been wonderful! And the last chapter was the best of them all! I loved so many things: the RoR appearing here at James' wish, complete with the fat lady and the fire... so perfect! And Lily's ironic comment about the Chamber of Secrets being a myth... talk of the map, all of it was just wonderful. Great idea to have him miss the kiss--lol! And best of all... the serious conversation while they were going at it. Hehe. I loved Lily's determination to prove the predictions wrong, and the bittersweet knowledge the reader possesses that they do not. :(
This is probably my favorite of all your J/L stuff to date, and that is saying something. About halfway through this chapter, however, I had a sudden rush of sadness for myself: where, oh WHERE can I find some R/Hr that is this much fun? Love it, love it, love it!
Well done, friend.
Author's Response: LORI! Wow, thank you so much for the amazing review! Your favorite, really? Wow. Thanks for picking up on the details, I love throwing them in but love it even more when someone gets them, lol. It is sort of bittersweet, isn't it? But then, I think everything about them is so I sort of can't help it creeping into their stories. R/Hr that is fun, huh? Well shoot, don't go challenging me again. I'm still stuck on your first R/Hr challenge. ;) Thanks again for the review. It made my day after a long morning!! ~Gina :)
Ah, Carole, this was a fun romp. I think Romilda is well-suited for this... you've convinced me Lavender is too smart for this. And I loved your Seamus, too.
Laughing about poor Draco. I hope he's sober enough to know what's going on when he wakes up in the morning. LOL.
Author's Response: Should I save Draco, or should I have a very ugly, very blonde kid attebding Hogwarts in 12 years time?
Heh heh heh
Thank you for the review. ~Carole~
Nominated for a 2011 Quicksilver Quill Award in Best General Story.
So here's something: getting equally glowing reviews from Jess and me on a maybe-kinda Harmony fic. ;) I will not even try to be as eloquent as she was, but I do think this was just lovely. As always, your lyrical, poetic prose just draws me right in. And though I feared where you were going to take this, I thought your version was a hundred times better than that of the movie. As hardcore as I am about R/Hr, the crime against canon that happens in the movie is that Harry seems to think nothing of Ginny at all. I love that you've developed the lonliness and abandonment Harry and Hermione are surely feeling, and allow them to take momentary comfort in each other without selling out the ones they actually have romantic feelings for.
I just loved it. From beginning to end. You truly are one of the most gifted writers on this site, in my opinion, Julia. Well done.
Author's Response: Thank you so much, Lori. You know how much I love your canon fics so I'm really glad you enjoyed this. I never set out to write this as a romance. In my mind, it's more of a missing moment in canon more than anything else. I love any tender moment between Harry and Hermione, and this was meant to be platonic which is why I couldn't bring myself to put it in the Harry/Hermione category. For me, it's a moment of friendship and nothing more. Again, thank you so much for the lovely review. It made me smile from ear to ear :)
I have to admit I was a little hesitant when I saw the "mental disorders" warning on this one, but I'm glad I read it anyway. Your James is the only James there is to me at this point, and I like him here as much as ever. Lily is odd, but there is a reason... she is hardly even the same person as she has had to start over.
I see there is talk about the tense. I only stumbled over it one time: the first sentence of the section where they spend every day together "after that" read a little strange to me. But otherwise, the tense worked I think.
I like it. And I'm very interested to see where you take it.
You are a writing machine, Gina. I envy the speed at which you turn new stories out. And brilliant stories, at that.
Author's Response: Hi Lori! Thanks so much for the review! Oh, I hate it when warnings throw people off. >.< But I figured I needed it since she had lost her memory. I'm glad you read it anyway, too. And I'm glad you liked it, even if it is different than some of my other stuff. What's life without changing things up a little, even my OTP? ;) I hope you enjoy where it goes. Thanks so much for the other compliments as well. *blushes* ~Gina :)
Carole, this is just wonderful! What inspired choices for your character POVs, particularly Seamus and Theo. Theo's was just heartbreaking, not just because of how much he loved Cedric, but because no one notices him at all, and his own concern that he will choose safety over bravery. When reading this bit, I thought he was hung up on Cho, and I thought, are you kidding? Is every boy in school really after that girl? ;) I'm glad it was not the case, as I would have found it supremely unlikely.
I think Hagrid's guilt over feeling relief that it was not Harry is absolutely appropriate. My heart just broke for him as he was tearing up the maze, and I love the Flitwick showed up with a similar need to do something helpful. The two of them working together through this is a nice image.
Sorry my reviews are not spew-worthy... no crit from me as I just loved this completely. It was heartbreaking and beautiful. Well done.
Author's Response: Thank you so much, Lori. This fic tore me up for a while because I get so sad thinking about Cedric's death, so I'm really pleased you appreciated it. I always had it in mind to write Seamus (this is the other side of one of my Lavender fics) and wanted Pomona because no one writes her. Then Theo decided to make an appearance. Hagrid was purely inspired by the prompt in the Great Hall, and I struggled with him 9as well as the blooming tense shifts) but I'm pleased with how he turned out. Thanks again ~Carole~
Natalie, I loved this little one-shot. You know I agree with you about all things Molly, and I was so pleased to read her as the intelligent, capable witch that she is. I do think she would be vulnerable, and I like how you made her lonely on her own... it makes sense that she would choose for herself a family life that would render lonliness nearly impossible.
Your Arthur was wonderful as well--I do hope you decide to write more of these two at this age. I haven't seen a lot of it around, and you really do the pairing justice.
It was so sad when she was imagining her own inability to care for her own brothers in the same situation she had overheard at the hospital... what a painful foreshadowing of what is to come for her. At least she will be free to grieve as a sister, and not the healer.
Really well done.
Author's Response: Hello!
This was the year. This was the year that Puddlemere United and Keeper Roxanne Weasley were going all the way.
One problem: her brother Fred might have something to say about that... while playing for the opposition.
I really enjoyed this, Jess. I've only read a couple of the entries, but I'm quite glad I'm not judging this thing. Roxanne and Fred were both well-drawn, and I liked their relationship very much, particularly the end, when she denied meaning the words she'd obviously meant. I believe my brother and I would have behaved in a similar manner.
Good luck in the challenge!
I suppose I took what I know about being competitive and what I know about sports and meshed them together with my fave fan fic genre. :D It's not anything like Wild Card, but it has a different sort of appeal, I guess, lol.
Thank you for reading and reviewing.:)
GAHHHHH! You are killing me! :D Why, oh, why do most of my favorite writers so rarely write Romione--WHY!?
This is utter LOVE. Your Ron is just how I imagine him at this time--you've found the perfect balance between his hard-won maturity and the one who rarely says the right thing and is nervous about messing things up.
I loved their first time being after a funeral, and especially this funeral, after what Hermione said about how Colin was like her... perfect. And doing those same protective spells, but not because of fear. I love it! I even love that you capitalized the word Fallen. It adds to its importance, and I think that worked really well.
Totally nonsensical review, but you must have GOT that I completely adored this. Right into my favorites it goes. (Happy Birthday, Amanda!!)
Author's Response: Thank you, Lori. I don;t write Romione very often (if at all) so I'm staggered by the response to this fic. I'm glad that you, as Ron's lawyer, thought his portrayal was good - that meansd a lot. Thanks again ~Carole~
Bachelor life suited Zach Smith just fine, and the lack of expectations on his time and attention suited him even more.
But his life changed in an instant with a knock on the door and an unexpected delivery.
What a fun and interesting premise, Jess. I usually sympathize with people who are struggling to gain the upper hand over their unruly toddler, but with Smith... I'm sort of cheering for Cameron to make him miserable, at least for a couple of chapters. ;)
Can't wait to see where you take this. I liked it!
Well, it's always good to give guys like him their comeuppance in a manner where they can't weasel out of it. And yeah, I cheered when my plot bunny farm concocted this idea. It's nice to twist some antagonist knickers. :D
Thanks for reading and reviewing one of my, er... not many family friendly fics, hehe.