OK, so, my dream is to be a writer, so I'm thinking this is a good start. If you've actually taken the time out to visit this page, I should probably let you know a few things about myself. Favourite books: Harry Potter (PoA), Twilight, House of Night, Jane Austen, Artemis Fowl, Noughts & Crosses and North & South. Favourite films: Chocolat, Blow, Sweeney Todd, Harry Potter (HBP), Moulin Rouge, Shakespeare In Love, Pirates of the Carribbean and LOTR. I love Sirius Black and the Marauders.
Summary: James gives Lily a letter on the last day of sixth year:
I’m going to be perfectly honest with you—I’m not that good with feelings. I usually just ask Remus; he’s pretty good with that sort of thing. But I can’t ask Remus to write this letter for me, so you’re just going to have to bear with me while I set the record straight before the school year ends and I forget how to describe my feelings about things between us. [2000 reads! thanks guys!]
I love this! I think you've captured James' feelings brilliantly. Can't wait to go and read One Way Street!
Generally, I read Marauderer Era fics. I don't tend to like Next Gen fics at all. But when I spotted your story, the summary intruiged me, so I thought I would give it a go. It's now one of my favourite stories.
I must admit, some of the sentences did throw me off a bit, but these have been pointed out in previous reviews, and there was a bit of an issue with formal/informal.
Apart from these minor things, your characterization was excellent, so real and the PoV only strengthened the connection with Lily.
Summary: "He has feared it all along - for longer than she has, he has feared this day, this argument, this goodbye. In the past months she has come to fear it too, and all summer they have merely been waiting." Andromeda leaves the only life and love she knows behind.
Wow. I'm wiping tears away from mx eyes. You should be proud of that.
It gets a bit confusing towards the end, though. I can't be certain how many people there are or who they are. Are there four or six altogether?
Overall, the language is brilliant and you give just enough away of their past together. Brilliant.