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Hi there! I’m Soraya. I’m seventeen years old and am a proud Muslim British Bangladeshi. I live in East London and have loved reading and writing from a young age. I’m rather obsessed with Harry Potter (aren’t we all?), tea (not a surprise considering I’m a Brit) and good grammar. Recently, I've also got into the Supernatural fandom. After watching the first episode, I had already fallen head over heels in love with Sam Winchester, so it's no surprise that I am now a huge SPN fangirl as well as a Potterhead.

My writing has changed quite a bit over the years, and I think you'll probably notice that, the further down my author page you go, the more the quality seems to drop :P I started posting stories on here at the age of fourteen, and at nearly eighteen, I can see how much my writing has improved since those Dark Ages. So, for that reason, I would advise you stick to the more recent stuff, if you choose to read anything of mine.

My Stories

Just so you know, these are posted firstly according to what kind of pairing, if any, is in the story, and then in chronological order in accordance to my own canon, not necessarily the order in which they were posted.

Canon Pairings

Checkmate (James/Lily)

My first chaptered fic. It’s terribly written, but I still have a place in my heart for it because of how much fun it was to write. This story has now been deleted on MNFF, but if you really, really want to read it, you can still find it on FF.net and HPFF. (I advise you don't, though :P)

Second Childishness and Mere Oblivion (James/Lily)

Written for Round One (Major Characters) of Madam Pomfrey’s Character Clinic Triathlon, this one-shot is about James and Lily’s relationship getting rockier and rockier after they left Hogwarts, especially when Lily is faced with the trials of being a wife and motherhood. A little smutty.

My Love is Always Here (James/Lily)

This was a belated birthday present for the wonderful Gina/Gmariam, aka the queen of James/Lily. This is mostly about Lily dealing with becoming a mother for the first time and the problems (as well as the joys) that come with that.

There's an Answer (Remus/Tonks)

Written for Sophie/The owl for SPEW Summer Swap IV. Tonks is sent on an interesting baby Auror assignment to do with werewolves. Remus and a dangerous Muggle are thrown into the mix, with interesting results.

Left Behind (Remus/Tonks)

An expanded version of one of my LoveNotes, written for SPEW. It's a missing moment set between OOTP and HBP, where in my head canon Remus and Tonks have been together, in secret, for a few weeks already and Remus is then told to go on his werewolf mission. Slightly smutty.

One and Only (Remus/Tonks)

Written for the lovely Alex/Ithinkrabis2people in the Ravenclaw Christmas Drabble Exchange. This is a missing moment set just after Tonks’s outburst to Remus in the hospital wing at the end of HBP.

Out of My Life (Harry/Ginny)

My only AU (kind of). I tweaked a small part of canon in this -- basically, Harry actually said goodbye to Ginny properly when he broke up with her. Very angsty, and this is only up for sentimental reasons, as I wrote it during The Dark Ages (aka when I was fourteen).

A Different Kind of Magic (Harry/Ginny)

Written for the You’re Having My Baby challenge at SIYE. Ginny finds out she’s pregnant, but Harry receives the news before her and therefore has to tell his wife. This was my first ever story at MNFF. It was written when I was thirteen, and it definitely shows.

A Different Kind of Magic 2: Parenthood (Harry/Ginny)

A sequel, obviously, to A Different Kind of Magic. Ginny goes into labour, and both Harry and Ginny realise what it means to be parents. Again, this was written from Back in the Days.

Same-Sex Pairings

The Caustic Ticking of the Clock (Rowena/Helga)

Written for the Great Hall Cotillion, this story is my only Founders story so far, and it’s about Rowena and Helga’s secret relationship. I am proud of this one, which doesn’t usually happen :)

Catching Fire (James/Sirius)

This was written for SPEW 007. My prompt was “Embers”, and it’s set just after Remus’s second transformation with the Marauders. James is badly injured, and he and Sirius realise, inadvertently, that they might just have feelings for each other. I like the pairing but still think the story needs work. One day I will go back and edit.

Flicker and Fail (Katie/Leanne)

This was written forSecret SPEW, and my recipient was the absolutely fabulous Alex/welshdevondragon. It’s my take on Leanne and Katie’s relationship from way before they were even at Hogwarts as well as what eventually happens to Katie in HBP, when she was cursed.

Next Generation

Skinny Love (Louis/Lily)

Written for the 2013 Great Hall Cotillion. Set during Teddy and Victoire's wedding, Louis helps Lily come to terms with her bulimia. This one was pretty difficult to write.

Blood and Roses (Scorpius/Rose, Scorpius/Dominique, Dominique/OC)

Written for the Great Hall Mysterious Maychallenge, this was my first Next Generation fic about Scorpius, mostly, and the trials he faces after his daughter is murdered.

Broken Glass (Louis/Lily)

This is the story of when Loulily really began. After the deaths of his immediate family, Louis is finding it hard to cope, even six months later. Lily somehow helps. It’s a little smutty. I’m proud of this one, too :)

The Highway of Regret (Scorpius/Lily, Scorpius/Rose, Louis/Lily)

Also written for the Great Hall Cotillion. It’s my one and only Scily. This is all about secret relationships and mistakes people make. Lily’s angry at Louis, and Scorpius has just broken up with Rose; when Lily gets drunk in the pub, things... happen. :P

I Will Lay Down My Heart (Albus/Rose, Scorpius/Rose)

Written for Round Two (Minor Characters) of Madam Pomfrey’s Character Clinic Triathlon. Albus has been in love with Rose for years, but what happened with them when they were younger has put a dent in their relationship. It doesn’t help that Rose is actually in love with Scorpius, either. This is smutty too.

One More Night (Albus/Rose, Rose/Scorpius)

Companion piece to I Will Lay Down My Heart. This goes into more detail about Rose and Albus's changing relationship as well as the aftermath of the events in said companion story. Probably the smuttiest thing on my page. :D Written for the Great Hall Cotillion 2013.

Glass (Louis/Lily)

This was written for the Great Hall-iday challenge for the Operation: Mistletoe prompt, and this was where my love for Loulily began.


Excruciatingly Painful

This is about how five men in Potterverse dealt with remorse in different ways.


This poem is about how Remus feels about Sirius (not slashy, btw).


Written for the Magic in Music challenge over inPoetry, Anyone? This was set to the track “Obliviate” in DH1 and is about Hermione modifying her parents’ memories.


Written for the Goodbyechallenge in Poetry, Anyone? This was about saying goodbye, and how difficult it could be.

After All This Time

Written for the Deathly Hallows challenge inPoetry, Anyone?. I ship unrequited Snape/Lily, and this is probably the only time Snape will be on my author page, lol.

Hush, Dominique

Written for the MC Kreacher challenge inPoetry, Anyone? This was written from the POV of Bill Weasley after his wife’s death.



Written for the Great Bannermakers’ Hallchallenge. The banner I picked had Merope Gaunt on it, and it’s probably my darkest story; it’s definitely the only one to have a dubious consent warning. It’s about, as you might guess, the abuse Merope suffered from her father and brother.

In Care (Marlene/OC)

Marlene McKinnon, as a care kid, eventually falls in love with another care kid, Jamal Olawumi. But he's a Muggle, and keeping her world secret proves difficult. This is definitely a story I would like to revisit and tidy up.

Just Across the Bar (Sirius/Rosmerta)

Sirius is just about of age, but obviously Rosmerta has misgivings about having feelings for Sirius, who is still a student. Written for the 2013 Great Hall Cotillion and also smutty.

Butterbeer Bottles

Written for SPEW 007. My prompt was “Juggling”, and it’s just a silly piece of dialogue-only banter between Remus and Sirius. Sirius realises Remus likes Tonks, and he tries to persuade Remus to act on his feelings.

Hanging by a Thread (Katie/Oliver)

Written for the lovely Jess/ToBeOrNotToBeAGryffindor for Secret SPEW VII. Katie is grieving and drowning her sorrows in alcohol and Oliver is trying his best to save Muggles, while trying also to bury feelings for Katie that he thought he had long since forgotten about. There is also, surprise surprise, some smut in this.

And that’s it! Along with being a moderator, I’m also a member of SPEWand SBBC. I hope to see you around on the forums; feel free to contact me via PM or review if you have any questions or comments about my stories!

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Ice Cream Man by HalfASlug

Rated: 3rd-5th Years • 3 Reviews
Summary: Draco Malfoy, still desperately trying to find a way to carry out the Dark Lord’s wishes, discovers his family’s involvement in the recent disappearances from up and down the country.
Reviewer: xxbabewithbrainsxx Signed
Date: 06/07/13 Title: Chapter 1: One-shot

Hi there!

What a great setup you have here. I've been out of the HP loop lately, and this was a fabulous way back in. I loved your characterisation of Draco and the moment you chose to illustrate in this story. I could really feel the pressure Draco was under to kill Dumbledore, and I was really glad to see Draco having clear conscientious objections to what was going on in his own household.

I wasn't sure how the title fit in, at first but I really liked how your title tied in with the whole story, as I think you expanded on the whole Fortescue storyline really well.

Anyway, this is my first review in a loooong time, so apologies if it's not particularly in-depth D: I'm slowly getting back into the HP fandom after what felt like a long hiatus (really just a few months, but it felt like forever!), so like I said, this was a great start at getting back into it :)

Soraya x

Author's Response: Hello! Your review is fine and very much appreciated! Any kind of feedback is nice in fanfic so thank you very much. For all their faults the Malfoys always looked after their own so I figured Draco wouldn't really want those kind of things affecting his family. It's too soon for him to he having any kind of doubts over his plans with Dumbledore but he was never a terrible person deep, deep down. Anyway thank you again for the review and welcome back to the fandom!

Glass over the Flame by the opaleye

Rated: 3rd-5th Years • 6 Reviews Past Featured Story
Summary: Harry, Hermione, and the moments in between.

He doesn’t say that this is his last winter. He doesn’t say that this could be her last winter. Instead he feels his heart swell with the bruising grip of her hand and the sound of Ron’s snoring in the tent.

Reviewer: xxbabewithbrainsxx Signed
Date: 07/14/13 Title: Chapter 1: I will call you by name, I will share your road.

Gaaaaaaaaaaaah. Julia, I really don't understand why this story doesn't have more reviews, because it is gorgeous! I remember reading the drabble about the broken glasses and loving it to bits, and reading more of that really understated Harmony vibe was just so lovely. I loved those moments in the tent, and my heart totally went out for Hermione when she saw Harry struggle with her wand because she clearly felt guilty for breaking Harry's. And that bit when Hermione asked Harry what had happened when Ron came back -- argh, the way Harry just changed the subject and that moment of understanding between them... it was so tangible and real to me.

But I was also glad to see Harry tell Hermione the truth about the Horcrux, and I loved how Hermione kept going back to that moment in the tent. And the ending line was perfect.

Sorry, incoherent review here, but fabulous, fabulous story, Julia! Honestly, you deserve far more reviews than this. Definitely one of my favourite stories by you. :)

Soraya xxx

Author's Response: Soraya! I'm so sorry it's taken me this long to reply. I absolutely squeed when I read this review so thank you, thank you, thank you! Even though this doesn't have many reviews on MNFF, I have received some amazing comments from the Harmony community on LJ, so I don't despair too much. What's lovely, though, is the feedback from you and Carole because you aren't Harmony shippers, and yet you enjoyed this fic. I love writing about them, even in a more subtle, almost-platonic way like in this fic, and it's so great to hear when the feelings I experienced while writing something came across to the readers, too. While your review was NOT incoherent, this reply definitely is, so I apologise for my rambling! Thank you so much for this review, Soraya. It's made me grin like an idiot! -Julia xxx

A Light in the Gap by WeasleyMom

Rated: 3rd-5th Years • 10 Reviews Past Featured Story
Summary: When Harry woke that first morning in Grimmauld Place, he wondered if Ron and Hermione had fallen asleep holding hands. This fic provides a possible answer to that question. A missing moment from Deathly Hallows.

This story received a QSQ in 2014 for Best Canon Romance ~ Thank you!
Reviewer: xxbabewithbrainsxx Signed
Date: 07/16/14 Title: Chapter 1: A Light in the Gap

Hi Lori :)

So as I was trawling through the QSQ nominations, I found this beautiful story was nominated by Jess, and I have to say, I was blown away when I read it. When I first started out in fanfiction, I read heaps of missing moments, and I distinctly remember reading several versions of why Ron and Hermione had fallen asleep that night holding hands. Your version, though, blew all those stories out of the water, honestly. I loved Ron’s characterisation and also how poignant his conversation with Hermione was, especially the promise he made at the end.

One of the best things about this story is its subtlety. So much of Ron’s character is conveyed just through the description of Grimmauld Place, of his unease at how “creepy” it was. I loved the atmosphere of intimacy, created by the fact that they were sleeping in the same room, combined Ron’s unfamiliarity with Hermione’s sleeping patterns and her being so close to him. It added to tension of the scene, especially when Hermione didn’t immediately respond to him. As you are the queen of all things Romione, I was not surprised at all by how effortlessly you conveyed the imperfections and rough edges of their relationship, especially at this point in DH. I think that is so much more realistic and close to canon that way.

Hermione was portrayed so well, too. Her dialogue was spot on, and despite the tension in the fic at the beginning, I laughed too when Ron made that crack about Kreacher. And, of course, typical of Hermione, the way she jumped to defend Kreacher in spite of everything he said to her was so in-character. It was nice to see Ron’s appreciation of that. :) On another note, Hermione’s vulnerability and moment of emotion about her parents was so heartbreaking to read. One thing I wished I saw in the books was the moment when Hermione Obliviated her parents (although I was kind of compensated by the fact that the scene was in the movie), and seeing how much it upset her was definitely the most touching part in the fic.

Ron’s promise was so sweet, as was the line when he thinks, “Let Harry pry their hands apart in the morning”. It made me smile to see that side of Ron that was lost a bit later on in DH when they were in the tent. It also made for a wonderful ending to your story, which for me slotted perfectly into canon in a way none of the other twenty-odd versions of this story did, because of how in-character they both were, and of the conversation they had which just made so much sense for later events.

That’s it from me. I really enjoyed this and I hope it wins the QSQ, because you certainly deserve it. ♥

Soraya xxx

Author's Response: I never know how to thank someone for taking the time to leave such a thoughtful, incredible review. I've been stewing on it for a while now. I don't know why I wait to respond; I'm sure my reply is no more insightful for the time I've let slip by. But please know how much I really do appreciate it, Soraya, despite my tardiness in responding.

I know this moment has been written a lot, which is something different for me. I write a lot of missing moments, and some of them have been done before, certainly. But I was distinctly aware when writing A Light in the Gap that this particular moment has been... well, done to death. The world doesn't really need another version of it, and yet, it's something I've imagined so much that I knew I wanted to write it down, even if I never submitted it.

I think there is mention in canon of those curtains not quite coming together at the top, and I have always seen that light filtering in as they talked in the quiet. There's something so intimate about talking to someone late at night, in the dark, when you are trying to sleep. I'm so glad you thought it worked here, especially the characterization, and that you found the fic worthy of the nomination. Most of all, I'm relieved that at least one reader doesn't think it will blend too much into the crowd. Hehe. :) Thanks, as always, Soraya. ~ Lori

Crocus by Equinox Chick

Rated: 3rd-5th Years • 15 Reviews
Summary: Four years after the Battle of Hogwarts, Andromeda Tonks exists only for her grandson. Like an unearthed bulb, through an ever-long winter she waits not to bloom, but to decompose to mulch.

But when Kingsley Shacklebolt approaches her with a proposition, she realises that perhaps there is more to life than the necessity of living only for another.

This is Equinox Chick and this is my second entry in the Third Great Hall Cotillion.

I am not JK Rowling. Sorry.
Reviewer: xxbabewithbrainsxx Signed
Date: 07/13/14 Title: Chapter 5: Chapter 5

Eeeep! What a great story, Croll. I really enjoyed reading this, despite some hesitation at the pairing, mostly because I ship Ted/Andromeda so much and maybe also because I don’t think I've ever read a story with Kingsley in the main pairing. But I needn’t have worried, because this little fic was so enjoyable, so refreshing to read. It’s lovely to see romance between people who aren’t teenagers, for once, because that definitely makes up the bulk of the romance fics that I've read on MNFF.

The way you wrote Teddy was so adorable, and I have to say, the whole idea of Andromeda kind of living only for me resonated pretty strongly with me. I think you really captured Andromeda’s emotions and how torn she was between wanting to stay with the voices of Ted and Dora in her head, and wanting to move on and be happy. I also loved how Ted’s voice came across so characteristically despite not actually being there “ that was one reason my hesitation at the pairing kind of went away, because it was nice to see that Andromeda wasn’t disregarding Ted in any way. Same with Dora. I love how distinct her voice is, the few times she pops up in the fic.

It was good to see how Andromeda felt remorse for treating Remus more coldly than she had wanted. But at the same time, I get why she did “ he did leave her, after all, so I can understand why she wasn’t always too friendly towards him. Still, the cause she decides to donate to is a great one, and it was nice to see that put in. On that note, I really liked how this story is plotty as well as a romance. I've always thought that was a strength of yours in writing and reading a fic of yours after a while made me remember that. :)

This was a wonderful story for me to read after being out of the fanfic loop for so long. Well done!

~Soraya xxx

Author's Response: Oh Soraya, my lovely Babe with the BEST Brains, I'm so sorry I haven't replied to this sooner. This is such a great review and I won;t be able to do it justice with this response. I remember very clearly the impetus for writing this story which happened just after I moved house and I was walking around the local park admiring the crocuses, so it means a lot to me that the story was appreciated. I think Andromeda probably always felt guilty about how she treated Remes - not necessarily when he left Tonks, but before because I doubt she approved (she was worried, I guess) But they'd have come to an agreement and rubbed along nicely had he lived - sob sob. I am pleased you liked the fact it was a story not about teenagers. Andromeda is ... um ... 45/46 I think in the last book, so she's not exactly old - especially in magical terms. Far too young to closet herself away - sigh. Thanks again ~Croll

Catch Me If You Can by ToBeOrNotToBeAGryffindor

Rated: 3rd-5th Years • 5 Reviews
Summary: They were friends, then teammates, then . . . well, she honestly couldn't tell you.

After a Quidditch accident landed Lily Potter in the hospital wing, she came to rely on the steady company of her friend, cousin, and team Captain, Louis Weasley. But just when she thought something more might be brewing between them, he shut her out.

Can Lily figure out this enigmatic, frustrating boy, or will she always wonder what could've been?

This story has been nominated for a 2014 Quicksilver Quill Award: Best Next Generation Story.
Reviewer: xxbabewithbrainsxx Signed
Date: 07/11/14 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Hey Jess,

So I finally got a chance to sit down and review this :) It is such an injustice that a Loulily story on MNFF doesn't have any reviews, because I loved reading this when you first posted, and upon rereading, I noticed things I previously hadn't seen and appreciated.

There's so much of this story that I love. The fact that the stigma usually associated with cousin relationships is basically dismissed by Louis early on was interesting, something I'm glad you did because I've seen it come up so often in cousin pairing stories. I had to smile when you also threw in Fred/Dominique, haha. The fact that Ginny and Harry were betting on when Loulily was going to happen made me laugh too. It explained Harry's frosty attitude towards Louis in the tent earlier on.

On that note, I also thought the Harry/Ginny going on in the background was so funny. I know you're not a big fan of the pairing, and seeing them be so vanilla next to Louis and Lily kind of brought out how dynamic and well-suited they are as a pair. The way Louis sometimes lapsed into French and Lily then followed suit and also spoke French was a really nice touch. I feel like that's something I do in Bengali sometimes when I go off on a tirade about something, hehe, so I can totally relate.

And there were other things that really defined Lily's character too that I loved reading about. Her love for pranks and anything joke-related was something she shared with Louis, which I again thought was really well done. The prank Louis played on Harper sounded great too, definitely very Weasley-esque.

I do wish there could have been more, though. I would really like to know what happened after this and if, indeed, grandbabies happen :P Know that I would totally read it if you wrote it.

I've kind of become a rookie!reviewer by being out of the MNFF loop for so long, so please forgive the rambly disjointed review. Plus, I'm still on a tea high, hence the emoticons. :D This was a fab fic, Jess, and it's a shame you haven't had any reviews for it on here because Loulily should always always always receive love.

~Soraya xxx

Author's Response:


I think what I really wanted out of this fic, I did it. Sometimes, it's just nice to read a story with some tension, but nothing OTT or heavy-handed. Here and there, a couple doesn't happen because one or more parties involved are just being dumb about it. Like here. Louis is having all of these mental crises about Lily and how he feels about her and why he shouldn't, but when he tells her these things, she makes sure he knows that none of it matters more than that they want to be together.

I don't think I've ever been this nice to Ginny, but I do think she has the make-up to be Teh Cool Mum. You know, the ones who other kids like but isn't nearly as embarrassing as most parents who try to be involved in their kids' lives. But really, I used Harry and Ginny (as well as FreDom) as a foil to show that the Weasley clan is an accepting bunch, and to let the reader know that, in the event these two stop being idiots, their family will love and support them.

The inclusion of French was my way of showing that the cousins are a tight-knit group. Imagine all the shenanigans they can get up to when only like...four of the adults at the most can understand what they're plotting. It's Bill's kids' greatest contribution to their little clique. I head-canon it as Vic taught Teddy, who taught James, who taught Al, who begrudgingly taught Lily, and they plot, only to find that a spur of Weasleys, led by Dominique and Fred, have already been hatching dastardly pranks in the same manner for years.

Anyway, thanks for reviewing. It's barely recognisable from the drabble from which it sprang, but it's the easiest time of writing I've had in a while, so it gave me something, too. *hugs*


The Deathly Children by teh tarik

Rated: 6th-7th Years • 6 Reviews
Summer, 1899. In the village of Godric's Hollow, the Dumbledore family is falling apart. With both their parents dead, Albus finds himself trapped in his role as the reluctant guardian to his younger siblings: Aberforth, the wayward brother, and Ariana, the mad girl in the attic. But everything changes with the arrival of their new neighbour, the charming but enigmatic Gellert Grindelwald, whose obsession with the myth of the fabled Deathly Hallows may just about shatter the fragile balance of the Dumbledore family.

Reviewer: xxbabewithbrainsxx Signed
Date: 07/23/14 Title: Chapter 1: A Funeral

Hi Nicole,

Good lord. I’ve forgotten how beautiful your writing is. I’m only just getting back into fanfic and I have to say, the first chapter of this alone is enough for me to nominate it for at least one QSQ. I'm sure I've said this before, but your style is so stunning. You have this amazing way with words that make me cling on to every sentence, and at the end of the paragraph, I often go back and reread so I can take in that gorgeous phrasing again.

There is so much to love about the characters here. The opening letter from Grindlewald encapsulated his voice - so lyrical and yet arrogant at the same time, with an undercurrent of bitterness and resentment that made me shiver. I generally find time jumps confusing, but because of how grounded these events are in canon (Kendra and Ariana’s deaths), it was very easy to follow.

You’ve got Albus down to a tee, too. It is definitely not an easy thing trying to portray him at such a young age, because you have to have the right combo of how we see him in the books and also the younger, more naïve and dark version of him that we only really got a peek at in canon. But you struck that balance so well. I found it so interesting how Ariana viewed him, as the person who is “unimpressed, bored” and even blind, because it’s so refreshing to see Albus portrayed as something other than perfect, or always kind. That colder side to him is so fascinating, and I am going to enjoy seeing what dark turns his character takes from here.

Anyway, I’m off to the next chapter. This is such a lovely and gorgeous fic, Nicole, and I can’t wait to read more! :)

Soraya xxx

Tapestry by Equinox Chick

Rated: 1st-2nd Years • 4 Reviews Past Featured Story
Summary: As Walburga Black stitches, Sirius rebels.

Two poems written about the infamous Black tapestry.

Reviewer: xxbabewithbrainsxx Signed
Date: 07/16/14 Title: Chapter 2: Charred

Whoa. These two poems are so lush, Croll. I think I’ve come to appreciate poetry the more I've studied it, and I loved both of these precisely because they are so extraordinarily rich in meaning and emotion.

I particularly adore the way you’ve used cross-rhyme in the first one. The words “pricked” and “kicked” and “unpick” all just have such a pointy sound to them, which is obviously highly appropriate, and the whole poem just had such a harsh feel to it. The way the imagery of blood and birth, especially the phrase “as surely ripped as the umbilicus” is linked to the sewing of the tapestry is disturbing yet at the same time beautiful. It’s such an interesting and fitting metaphor, portraying the Black family tree in such a way.

And though I don’t always understand unusual, complex or not-very-often used words, particularly in poetry, I thought they worked so well here. The colours, sable and gules, were especially fitting - what came to mind initially was Sirius’s Gryffindor colours rebelling against the black of his name. I'm not sure if that was exactly what you had in mind, but either way, the words you chose were gorgeous. I also loved the words maverick and recalcitrant to describe Sirius, because they are definitely accurate and at the same time so fitting of Walburga’s voice.

The way Walburga’s voice was put across in the second poem was even better, for some reason echoing in my ears, especially that word “recalcitrance”. In fact, the way certain words were repeated in that second poem was done expertly. I'm pretty sure I winced at “needle-pricked blood”, and I could really feel Sirius’s resentment and loathing for his family tree. At the same time, though, I got the feeling from the second stanza that he wished to be part of that family again, in a way. When he says how he wants to press the “charred holes back into existence”, I thought part of him wishes he wasn’t disowned by his mother. Again, though, I'm not sure if that’s exactly what you had in mind so I would love to know if that was your intention.

All in all, you did a fantastic job here. I thoroughly enjoyed reading both of these, and I can’t to read more of your poetry. Thou art fabulous. ♥

Soraya xxx

Astriferous by Padfoot11333

Rated: 6th-7th Years • 5 Reviews Past Featured Story
Summary: Merope Gaunt has never been celestial.

Nominated for a 2014 and a 2015 QSQ - Best Dark/Angst.

I am incredibly pleased to announce that this story WON Best Dark/Angst in the 2015 QSQs!!!!! :D :D :D
Reviewer: xxbabewithbrainsxx Signed
Date: 07/11/14 Title: Chapter 1: stardust

Whooooa, Lily, this is a fab story! :)

I haven't read anything of yours in a while, but what I do remember about your work is that you do really well in writing introspective stories. This, in my opinion, is definitely one of your best. I love the intricacy of the imagery and how you also managed to avoid being heavy-handed with it, as is the case often with character studies like this. The celestial and almost otherworldly descriptions are so beautifully written, and probably my favourite line is that first one about stardust and water. Reading this gave me shivers, honestly.

I also thought the interaction with Tom was so well-characterised. That whole exchange actually had such an empty feeling, which was entirely appropriate given their sham marriage and his complete lack of feelings towards her.

The part where she harms herself was really difficult to read, I will say, but I think you summed up Merope's desperation and emptiness perfectly. Kudos to you for writing it in a way that was realistic yet not gory, sensitive and yet never glorifying. I love how she remembers her son - it reminded me of my own fic when Merope decides to live for Tom, even though all she wants to do is die.

And though I'm usually a fan of dialogue-heavy fics, I think this worked so, so well using speech more sparingly. It added to that feeling of introspection and loneliness on Merope's part, which really resonated strongly with me. Especially that last section when she gives birth and also the fact that she had found an orphanage in advance, as though she knows she won't survive - again, that just added to that feeling of loneliness that grows inside Merope as the story goes on.

Overall, very, very well done. I look forward to reading your next fic! :D

~Soraya xxx