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Hi there! I’m Soraya. I’m seventeen years old and am a proud Muslim British Bangladeshi. I live in East London and have loved reading and writing from a young age. I’m rather obsessed with Harry Potter (aren’t we all?), tea (not a surprise considering I’m a Brit) and good grammar. Recently, I've also got into the Supernatural fandom. After watching the first episode, I had already fallen head over heels in love with Sam Winchester, so it's no surprise that I am now a huge SPN fangirl as well as a Potterhead.

My writing has changed quite a bit over the years, and I think you'll probably notice that, the further down my author page you go, the more the quality seems to drop :P I started posting stories on here at the age of fourteen, and at nearly eighteen, I can see how much my writing has improved since those Dark Ages. So, for that reason, I would advise you stick to the more recent stuff, if you choose to read anything of mine.

My Stories

Just so you know, these are posted firstly according to what kind of pairing, if any, is in the story, and then in chronological order in accordance to my own canon, not necessarily the order in which they were posted.

Canon Pairings

Checkmate (James/Lily)

My first chaptered fic. It’s terribly written, but I still have a place in my heart for it because of how much fun it was to write. This story has now been deleted on MNFF, but if you really, really want to read it, you can still find it on FF.net and HPFF. (I advise you don't, though :P)

Second Childishness and Mere Oblivion (James/Lily)

Written for Round One (Major Characters) of Madam Pomfrey’s Character Clinic Triathlon, this one-shot is about James and Lily’s relationship getting rockier and rockier after they left Hogwarts, especially when Lily is faced with the trials of being a wife and motherhood. A little smutty.

My Love is Always Here (James/Lily)

This was a belated birthday present for the wonderful Gina/Gmariam, aka the queen of James/Lily. This is mostly about Lily dealing with becoming a mother for the first time and the problems (as well as the joys) that come with that.

There's an Answer (Remus/Tonks)

Written for Sophie/The owl for SPEW Summer Swap IV. Tonks is sent on an interesting baby Auror assignment to do with werewolves. Remus and a dangerous Muggle are thrown into the mix, with interesting results.

Left Behind (Remus/Tonks)

An expanded version of one of my LoveNotes, written for SPEW. It's a missing moment set between OOTP and HBP, where in my head canon Remus and Tonks have been together, in secret, for a few weeks already and Remus is then told to go on his werewolf mission. Slightly smutty.

One and Only (Remus/Tonks)

Written for the lovely Alex/Ithinkrabis2people in the Ravenclaw Christmas Drabble Exchange. This is a missing moment set just after Tonks’s outburst to Remus in the hospital wing at the end of HBP.

Out of My Life (Harry/Ginny)

My only AU (kind of). I tweaked a small part of canon in this -- basically, Harry actually said goodbye to Ginny properly when he broke up with her. Very angsty, and this is only up for sentimental reasons, as I wrote it during The Dark Ages (aka when I was fourteen).

A Different Kind of Magic (Harry/Ginny)

Written for the You’re Having My Baby challenge at SIYE. Ginny finds out she’s pregnant, but Harry receives the news before her and therefore has to tell his wife. This was my first ever story at MNFF. It was written when I was thirteen, and it definitely shows.

A Different Kind of Magic 2: Parenthood (Harry/Ginny)

A sequel, obviously, to A Different Kind of Magic. Ginny goes into labour, and both Harry and Ginny realise what it means to be parents. Again, this was written from Back in the Days.

Same-Sex Pairings

The Caustic Ticking of the Clock (Rowena/Helga)

Written for the Great Hall Cotillion, this story is my only Founders story so far, and it’s about Rowena and Helga’s secret relationship. I am proud of this one, which doesn’t usually happen :)

Catching Fire (James/Sirius)

This was written for SPEW 007. My prompt was “Embers”, and it’s set just after Remus’s second transformation with the Marauders. James is badly injured, and he and Sirius realise, inadvertently, that they might just have feelings for each other. I like the pairing but still think the story needs work. One day I will go back and edit.

Flicker and Fail (Katie/Leanne)

This was written forSecret SPEW, and my recipient was the absolutely fabulous Alex/welshdevondragon. It’s my take on Leanne and Katie’s relationship from way before they were even at Hogwarts as well as what eventually happens to Katie in HBP, when she was cursed.

Next Generation

Skinny Love (Louis/Lily)

Written for the 2013 Great Hall Cotillion. Set during Teddy and Victoire's wedding, Louis helps Lily come to terms with her bulimia. This one was pretty difficult to write.

Blood and Roses (Scorpius/Rose, Scorpius/Dominique, Dominique/OC)

Written for the Great Hall Mysterious Maychallenge, this was my first Next Generation fic about Scorpius, mostly, and the trials he faces after his daughter is murdered.

Broken Glass (Louis/Lily)

This is the story of when Loulily really began. After the deaths of his immediate family, Louis is finding it hard to cope, even six months later. Lily somehow helps. It’s a little smutty. I’m proud of this one, too :)

The Highway of Regret (Scorpius/Lily, Scorpius/Rose, Louis/Lily)

Also written for the Great Hall Cotillion. It’s my one and only Scily. This is all about secret relationships and mistakes people make. Lily’s angry at Louis, and Scorpius has just broken up with Rose; when Lily gets drunk in the pub, things... happen. :P

I Will Lay Down My Heart (Albus/Rose, Scorpius/Rose)

Written for Round Two (Minor Characters) of Madam Pomfrey’s Character Clinic Triathlon. Albus has been in love with Rose for years, but what happened with them when they were younger has put a dent in their relationship. It doesn’t help that Rose is actually in love with Scorpius, either. This is smutty too.

One More Night (Albus/Rose, Rose/Scorpius)

Companion piece to I Will Lay Down My Heart. This goes into more detail about Rose and Albus's changing relationship as well as the aftermath of the events in said companion story. Probably the smuttiest thing on my page. :D Written for the Great Hall Cotillion 2013.

Glass (Louis/Lily)

This was written for the Great Hall-iday challenge for the Operation: Mistletoe prompt, and this was where my love for Loulily began.

Poetry

Excruciatingly Painful

This is about how five men in Potterverse dealt with remorse in different ways.

Always

This poem is about how Remus feels about Sirius (not slashy, btw).

Regret

Written for the Magic in Music challenge over inPoetry, Anyone? This was set to the track “Obliviate” in DH1 and is about Hermione modifying her parents’ memories.

Farewell

Written for the Goodbyechallenge in Poetry, Anyone? This was about saying goodbye, and how difficult it could be.

After All This Time

Written for the Deathly Hallows challenge inPoetry, Anyone?. I ship unrequited Snape/Lily, and this is probably the only time Snape will be on my author page, lol.

Hush, Dominique

Written for the MC Kreacher challenge inPoetry, Anyone? This was written from the POV of Bill Weasley after his wife’s death.

Miscellaneous

Bruises

Written for the Great Bannermakers’ Hallchallenge. The banner I picked had Merope Gaunt on it, and it’s probably my darkest story; it’s definitely the only one to have a dubious consent warning. It’s about, as you might guess, the abuse Merope suffered from her father and brother.

In Care (Marlene/OC)

Marlene McKinnon, as a care kid, eventually falls in love with another care kid, Jamal Olawumi. But he's a Muggle, and keeping her world secret proves difficult. This is definitely a story I would like to revisit and tidy up.

Just Across the Bar (Sirius/Rosmerta)

Sirius is just about of age, but obviously Rosmerta has misgivings about having feelings for Sirius, who is still a student. Written for the 2013 Great Hall Cotillion and also smutty.

Butterbeer Bottles

Written for SPEW 007. My prompt was “Juggling”, and it’s just a silly piece of dialogue-only banter between Remus and Sirius. Sirius realises Remus likes Tonks, and he tries to persuade Remus to act on his feelings.

Hanging by a Thread (Katie/Oliver)

Written for the lovely Jess/ToBeOrNotToBeAGryffindor for Secret SPEW VII. Katie is grieving and drowning her sorrows in alcohol and Oliver is trying his best to save Muggles, while trying also to bury feelings for Katie that he thought he had long since forgotten about. There is also, surprise surprise, some smut in this.


And that’s it! Along with being a moderator, I’m also a member of SPEWand SBBC. I hope to see you around on the forums; feel free to contact me via PM or review if you have any questions or comments about my stories!
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Of Babbling and Balls by Acacia Carter
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 4]

Summary: When he sees her, Colin's heart starts to race. And now he's got her all to himself for an evening - or at least he did.

This is Acacia Carter of Hufflepuff writing (again) for the Inaugural Great Hall Cotillion of 2012.

Categories: General Fics Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 1964 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
02/29/12 Updated: 02/29/12


Reviewer: xxbabewithbrainsxx Signed
Date: 03/01/12 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Aww, Jamie, this was sweet :) I feel sorry for Colin, and I get what you mean when you angsted about being in a thirteen-year-old's brain, lol. You had nothing to worry about, though, because you pulled off Colin's voice (in third person but still) and mindset so well in this story.

And I felt so sorry for Colin. Poor him :( First he works up the courage to ask Ginny out, and then Ginny says yes, then Neville asks Ginny and Colin has to face the heartbreak of that too :'( It's sad on him, and it's even sadder that he died in the battle of Hogwarts.

One thing I was wondering about -- I think it would be interesting to expand on Ginny's feelings by the end. Because Ginny's the one who snogs him, and it is a little... out of the blue, because all this time, she doesn't really seem to like him in that way. So yeah, that was something I was a little unsure about.

But still, this was a great story, so well done! :D

 

Passion Among the Primroses by Equinox Chick
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 7]

Summary: Mafalda Hopkirk is only too pleased when her transfer to the Misuse of Muggle Artefacts Department come through. For one thing it means she won't have to work with the bumbling Cornelius Fudge anymore.

And for another, there's a new and rather shy clerk working alongside her.

Confiding in her diary, she tells her tale of passion and primroses.

Disclaimer: I have no idea who I am, but I'm certainly not JK Rowling.

Another entry for the Inaugral Great Hall Cotillion. Thank you Jess and Viv for such an amazing competition. Let's leave it a while for the next one, eh?

Categories: Humor Fics Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 2662 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
02/29/12 Updated: 02/29/12


Reviewer: xxbabewithbrainsxx Signed
Date: 03/02/12 Title: Chapter 1: Passion Among the Primroses

Hehehe. Carole, this story just made me LOL so much. You got into Mafalda's head so well here, and I loved the voice you gave her. It's a little daft, but in a nice way hehe.

And I felt sorry for Mafalda -- after all of Arthur's blunders, she still liked him, only to find out that he and Molly eloped :( It's sad on her, though there's no way they would have worked really. I thought it was interesting how Mafalda viewed Molly as well, how she thought Molly was "simpering" (and the Molly I remember from canon is anything but). Just shows how jealous Mafalda is I suppose.

Anyway, this story just made me laugh so much, Carole, and I really enjoyed it :D

Author's Response: Thank yoiuuuu. I'm glad you picked up on the Molly simpering bit because you're quite right. Molly wouldn't simper at all, but in Mafalda's eyes she not only simpers, but she's 'fast' - hahahahahahahah.

Yes, poor Mafalda, but we all know Arthur only loves one woman. ~Carole~

 

If Only You Knew by hestiajones
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 4]

Summary: Their greatest gain was the existence of hope; their biggest loss was the pain of ignorance.

This is hestiajones ... yeah. Her millionth entry for the GH Cotillion Challenge.

Thanks, Kara, for the pairing! And I'm not J.K.Rowling
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Categories: Other Pairing Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 542 Chapters: 1 Completed: No
Published:
02/29/12 Updated: 02/29/12


Reviewer: xxbabewithbrainsxx Signed
Date: 03/02/12 Title: Chapter 1: Prologue

OOooooh, Natalie, I'd like to see where this goes! I think you've set up the scene really well here, and you've established Eileen's character excellently.

And, awww, the boy she used to babysit sounds so sweet. And cute. :D I can't say much more because there isn't a lot to comment on, but, as I said, I'd like to see where this goes. I hope you can update soooooooon :)

Author's Response: :D I can't wait to write more, honestly! Thank you for reviewing. :) It's a huge motivation.

 

The Flowering by hestiajones
Rated: 6th-7th Years [Reviews - 6]

Summary: On his way out, when she makes the mistake of glancing up, he looks at her directly and grins. She immediately returns to her parchment. Stupid, stupid Cissy.

After a while, she’s forgotten him.

He hasn’t forgotten her.

Pretty, pretty Narcissa, he thinks with a smile.

This is hestiajones'... lol. Yes, this is another entry for the GH Cotillion. Please blame Kara/Karaley Dargen, whom I love. I am not J.K.Rowling.

Categories: Other Pairing Genre: Warnings: Character Death, Sexual Situations

Word count: 2203 Chapters: 2 Completed: No
Published:
02/29/12 Updated: 04/16/12


Reviewer: xxbabewithbrainsxx Signed
Date: 03/01/12 Title: Chapter 1: Prologue

Natalieeeeeeeeeeee. First off, congrats on writing like a madwoman for the GH challenge XD Seriously, I don't know how you do it, lol.

Anyway, though this is only the prologue, I'm already intrigued :) Like Kara, I can definitely relate to Narcissa's social life/behaviour, and I like how, in only about 500 words, you still managed to flesh Narcissa out as a character. Florean is less clear-cut at the moment, but I'm hoping I'll find out a lot more about him in the next chapter.

Anywho, I can't wait for the next update :D

Author's Response: YES. THAT CHALLENGE MADE ME LOOPY lol. I shall finish it soon and I hope you'll like Florean when I do write more of him :D

 

Summary: In April 2011, Justin Finch-Fletchley is attending a very important event in the Muggle social calender. Usually he loathes the formality of these occasions, but now he has someone to share them with, he starts to relax and have fun.

Ten months ago, a plucky band of flisters from all over the world logged onto AIM to watch and discuss a certain event. This story is dedicated to all of you. ♥ forever.

Disclaimer: I am not JK Rowling and I don't expect any garden party invitations in the near future. A spell in the Tower might well be in order.

This is Equinox Chick and this is positively my last entry into the Inaugural Great Hall Challenge. So long and thanks for all the flist!

Categories: Post-Hogwarts Genre: Warnings: Mild Profanity, Slash

Word count: 1557 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
02/29/12 Updated: 02/29/12


Reviewer: xxbabewithbrainsxx Signed
Date: 03/01/12 Title: Chapter 1: That Darned Hat

Awwww, Carole, this was so sweet. I read your Thrustin (lmaoooo) a while ago but I don't know if I got round to leaving a review D: Will do if I remember -- just let me get through all the GH stories first :D

I liked this. I think it showed an interesting look into Justin's life both before and after he found out he was a wizard and how things didn't really change for him. Also -- I find it fascinating that you made Justin a lord. But then I remember that he was going to go to Eton, so I suppose his family must have been rich. Figures. :)

Theo is adorable in this too. I especially liked how it was Justin holding back and being the one who didn't want to make their relationship public, not Theo. Normally, it would be the other way round because Theo's a Slyth and all, so I liked that you flipped things a bit there.

Lovely, sweet story, Croll :D

Author's Response: Thank you. Mmm, I always have Justin as a lord. The back story being that he's not the heir until his brother's killed - although I killed him off differently in Fracture, I've just remembered. If he is aristocracy then he faces a lot more pressure to a) not be gay and b) not be a wizard. I might rewrite this and add a lot more backstory, but my list is huuuuuge at the moment. I hope you liked the Royal Wedding references. Thanks again. ~Carole~

 

George, Please Sit Down. by welshdevondragon
Rated: 3rd-5th Years [Reviews - 6]

Summary:

WAR HEROES TO DIVORCE


George and Angelina Weasley, after twenty-five years of marriage, today filed for a divorce, citing irreconcilable differences--


George couldn’t read any more, scrunching up the paper, and throwing it towards the bin. It bounced off the wall behind the bin, and instead fell, straight into the kitchen sink.

This is, shockingly, my tenth entry to the Inaugural Great Hall Cotillon.

This story was heavily inspired by the song Slipping Husband by The National.

Categories: General Fics Genre: Warnings: Mild Profanity, Substance Abuse, Violence

Word count: 2522 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
02/29/12 Updated: 02/29/12


Reviewer: xxbabewithbrainsxx Signed
Date: 03/11/12 Title: Chapter 1: One-shot

Ooooooh, I really liked this, Alex! I think you mentioned this in another story, Persuasion, if I remember correctly, so it was interesting to see George's perspective. And you definitely captured a feeling of sadness and regret in this, really well done.

I think the most intriguing thing is George's characterisation. Okay, I know George turning to alcohol after his twin died is definitely something I've seen before, but I like what you've done with it. But most of all, I liked how you gave a really good insight into George and Angelina's relationship right up until their marriage broke apart. You covered a large period of time in only a few thousand words, and not once did it seem rushed or anyhthing. Which is nice :)

Anyway, I really enjoyed this. And, lol, it's weird that I'm IMing you while I'm reviewing you :P

Author's Response: I'm glad you liked this :) Yes, in Persuasion George and Angelina's divorce is mentioned, and this is the build up to it. You know me and word limits don't get on, so I'm so glad you think I gave a good idea of their relationship and how it ended within such a short (for me) number of words, and that this didn't seem rushed. Thanks a lot for reviewing--and yes, that is a bit weird :) Alex

 

Summary: Past Featured StoryReally, must I endure the nauseating burden of owing the tinned twit a favour?
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Written, hurriedly and frantically, for the Inaugural Great Hall Cotillion by Acacia Carter of Hufflepuff.
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As always, the Harry Potter world and everything in it is property of JKR.

Categories: Humor Fics Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 1605 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
03/01/12 Updated: 03/01/12


Reviewer: xxbabewithbrainsxx Signed
Date: 03/01/12 Title: Chapter 1: One-Shot

Hehehehe, Jamie, this was rather funny. I think you captured the Fat Lady's voice so well, and even though it was set in relatively modern times, you retained the oldness of it, if you know what I mean ;)

Ngl, I totally rate you for picking such a cool pairing -- this is one that I would never have thought of, and even better is the fact that you actually made it really believable.

So, Jamie, you're one brave Puff. Well done on a good, solid story which was well-written and which made me laugh :)

~Soraya~

 

Summary: Past Featured StoryTo die by your side, well the pleasure; the privilege is mine - The Smiths

War is not a place for children. But then, is it a place for anyone?

Colin Creevey may be a child and not the most threatening weapon the Light has to offer. But he has weapons of his own; bravery; heart; loyalty; spirit, enthusiasm; love - he has them all in abundance and doesn't know if they're enough but it doesn't matter.

Because he needs this - to be a part of something. To help take back what was taken from them. And if he doesn't make it, he leaves them without regret. Because he was right where he needed to be; next to the people he needed to be with.

This story has been nominated for a 2012 Quicksilver Quill Award in the category Best General Story



Categories: General Fics Genre: Warnings: Character Death

Word count: 10001 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
03/23/12 Updated: 04/02/12


Reviewer: xxbabewithbrainsxx Signed
Date: 04/04/12 Title: Chapter 1: The Privilege is Mine

Hi there :)

Oh wow, this was an excellent story. It's such an injustice that it has no reviews, though I suppose it's also nice that it's been featured :)

Anyway, I was completely blown away by this story. Colin Creevey's not one of the most popular characters in the fandom, but you gave him a wonderful character here. I think there's just enough of the indecisiveness and eagerness to please in there from canon to make it believable, but you've also added your own dimension to his character in this. I think you really brought out the Gryffindor in Colin, which is a real achievement in my opinion.

A couple of things -- Mathilda couldn't have been in the DA, at least not during Harry's fifth year. That's because we were told in OOTP exactly who was in the DA, and there were only twenty-five people there. Unless you meant Mathilda was in the DA during DH -- but I'm wondering how Colin would have known that given he didn't attend Hogwarts in that year.

Also -- and this is purely an aesthetic thing, and definitely not your fault -- occasionally, you have boxes with question marks instead of dashes. It's because of a glitch in the coding, I know, but it did distract me a little from the story seeing them, so maybe you could go through and remove them manually.

With all of that said, I think this story was a wonderful picture of what happened to Colin before he died (*sobs*). I liked that there were moments of humour and even romance as well as the angstiness and the deaths of the war. The conflicting emotions felt by Colin were brought out beautifully here.

So yeah. Well done!

~Soraya~

Author's Response: Hey Soraya :) Thank you so much for being the first reviewer - you're right, it was nice - and completely unexpected - that it was featured! I know Colin's not a particularly popular character in fandom and that's partly why I wanted to write about him. When I read that he died in DH I did get a bit teary. Although slightly annoying to Harry in CoS, I always found him a rather endearing and innocent character and I wanted to expand on his story a bit. All we hear in DH is that he is 'tiny in death' (or words to that effect) and, though that made me sad when I read it in DH, I kind of found myself wanting to know how he snuck back in and what happened to him. I'm glad you thought the characterisation was good! Since CoS we haven't seen as much of him and I thought that, given a few years, Colin at 16 might be slightly more grown up than the over-eager Colin who plagued Harry with his camera! Thanks for saying I brought out the Gryffindor in him - I thought that was going to be quite difficult, because I don't think we saw much evidence of his Gryffindor qualities in the books. Ah, yes, it was only after I wrote about Matilda being in the DA that I realised it couldn't have been possible, but by that time I had become quite attached to her, so I didn't really want to write her out or change her - I hope you can forgive me that canon error? I've changed the dashes thing - my computer does the long ones automatically so I always try and go through my fics and change them all manually but I do end up missing some! Thank you so much again for your kind words - I'm glad you enjoyed it and could find the lighter bits amongst the sad parts. - Alice

 

The Fire I Yearn For by silverlining95
Rated: 3rd-5th Years [Reviews - 3]

Summary: 'Her eyes were ablaze with a passion that I had previously believed to have died out. Somehow this defiance, this tiniest hint of uprising, had lit a spark within her, and it was a welcome sight.'

The day Harry Potter didn't board the Hogwarts Express changed everything for me, for suddenly Ginny Weasley wasn't the same.

Categories: General Fics Genre: Warnings: Mental Disorders

Word count: 2181 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
04/03/12 Updated: 04/12/12


Reviewer: xxbabewithbrainsxx Signed
Date: 07/03/12 Title: Chapter 1: Helpless

Hi Fenella :)

You've reviewed so much of my work that I thought it was about time I returned the favour! :) I think this is a great first fic, definitely better than my first one (please don't read it, lol). I've always wondered how Ginny would have coped during DH without Harry, and I think you showed how crippled she was emotionally because of his absence, and because she had no idea where he was or if he was even alive. It's a horrible situation to be in, and her feelings just sing through this piece.

I also thought it was interesting that Neville was narrating this -- at first, it was a little difficult getting into it because of the first person and everything, but I soon was sucked in. And I loved the title :)

Finally, I felt so sorry for poor Neville when it was revealed at the end that he fancied Ginny :( I mean, I kind of guessed it, because of how he described Ginny's body and her curves and whatever, but still, it was sad.

Anyway, this was a great first fic! I enjoyed it, and it deserves more than just one review (or two, once I've reviewed it). But reviews are becoming harder to receive nowadays because the fandom's dwindling >.< I'll be keeping my eye out for any new stories by you, though, Fenella! Well done. :)

Author's Response: Hi Soraya, Thank you so much! It's lovely to here some feedback on this as the more I look back on it the more faults I find with it! I played around with the first person a lot, originally it was third person but I didn't think it quite captured the importance of Neville's role in this, especially not his feelings towards her. I've always suspected Neville had a bit of a crush on Ginny, he did ask her to the Yule ball after all, however I don't think it's something he'd have ever acted on, and I really wanted to portray the fact he was putting her first, that he would rather she was happy than him, which I think is a big part of his personality. They must have all suffered so much whilst the trio were on the run, I think this is often forgotten. Thank you so much for your lovely review :) Fenella x

 

Shadows Deep by Equinox Chick
Rated: Professors [Reviews - 17]

Summary: Behind the walls of Hogwarts, deep in the shadows, lurk the secrets of the Founders. Of one mind, at first, their legacy came close to crashing down when two locked horns.

With Helga Hufflepuff determined to disband the Houses and admit anyone, Salazar knows he has to keep the other two on side. But Godric is distracted ... and soon Salazar is, too.

Disclaimer: I am not JK Rowling and I'm not as old as the Founders.

I am, however, Equinox Chick and this is my entry into the School of Mischief Challenge for the Great Hall.

Thank you Natatatatatatatattatatattatatat (hestiajones) for beta'ing this and to Karador (Karaley Dargen) for letting me moan when it collapsed on me.

Winner of the Best Chaptered SSP award in the 2012 QSQ's. Yippeeeee!

Categories: Historical Genre: Warnings: Sexual Situations, Slash

Word count: 12235 Chapters: 4 Completed: Yes
Published:
04/06/12 Updated: 04/16/12


Reviewer: xxbabewithbrainsxx Signed
Date: 04/23/12 Title: Chapter 4: Vengeance

:O

This was so fab! I'm sorry I didn't review every chapter, but I was far too intrigued to pause in between. Firstly, yay to Founders slash :D I don't think I've ever come across Godric/Salazar, but I can definitely see it happening, especially after reading this fic.

And I love Aodhan. I think his name is wonderful, but more than that, his character is so very interesting and well-done. I can see how Salazar is attracted to him (he's rather sexy :P) and I think the ending was so sad for him, and it really highlighted how cruel Salazar was.

I'm probably missing things, but a couple of other aspects of the story that I loved were the creation of the Sorting Hat -- genius :D -- and the whole thing with the Basilisk. They were just excellently plotted, so well done there.

I never would have thought this was your first Founders fic, Carole, because you made it look effortless. Seriously, great story. I really enjoyed it. :)

Author's Response: Thank youuuuuuuu! I was rather pleased with the end result and may try other Founders fics in the future because although they're scary, I liked the challenge.

I did research the Sorting hat and the Basilisk as much as I could and then filled in some bits of my own. The hat, for instance, had to be able to use Legilimancy, and I figured that was quite a Slytherin type of skill (although I know Dumbles mastered it as well). The Basilisk is odd, though. It seems kind of arbitary how it's created *sigh*, but never mind. I suppose a lot of them die when they hear the cockeral's crowing.

Thank you, again. ~Carole~

 

Maps by the opaleye
Rated: Professors [Reviews - 7]

Summary:

Tell me, is the rose naked
Or is that her only dress?
-Pablo Neruda

Four vignettes exploring what it means to fight, to survive, to make love, and everything that comes after.

Ted/Andromeda, Neville/Hannah, Parvati/Daphne, and Scorpius/Hugo.

Joint winner of the 2012 Quicksilver Quill Award for Best General Fic.

Categories: Various Pairings Genre: Warnings: Mild Profanity, Sexual Situations, Slash

Word count: 1060 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
04/18/12 Updated: 04/24/12


Reviewer: xxbabewithbrainsxx Signed
Date: 11/29/12 Title: Chapter 1: Falling. Blush. Distance. Blood.

Hi Julia,

Congratulations on the QSQ win! I remember reading this story for judging, and as usual, your signature exquisite style completely took my breath away and even more so when Carole read it for Audiofics. I thought the sensuality this fic exudes is amazing, especially given the diversity of the four pairings -- even though each pairing was so different, I could see what tied all the vignettes together. And for what is quite a short one-shot, every character is incredibly well-defined and beautifully characterised.

To me, each vignette was a thoughtful character study. I found the first one explored Andromeda’s character so thoroughly; it’s interesting that you’ve never written her or Ted before, because I actually think this section was the strongest one out of the four. I think you really put across how much of an outsider Andromeda was, and I completely agree that her being with Ted is probably the first time she has ever felt truly loved. I really connected with Andromeda on a personal level here, because having family issues is never easy, and I can see how Ted would have helped her get through that and forget about the prejudices the Blacks held.

I also thought their physical relationship was brought out here really well -- the way you wrote it was sexy but never over the top or explicit.

She smiles as that word slips from his mouth, teeth pressed into his bottom lip, the assonant hiss of an ‘f’. It’s a glorious sound, a luxurious sound that in the day seems cold and hard and unfeeling but now, in the dead of night, it’s beautiful because she has done this to him.

I thought that was far more effective than writing the moment out in dialogue; there was something really heady and raw about the phrase, “the assonant hiss of an ‘f’”, and I think you described their sexual experiences beautifully without it seeming crass at any point. Throughout the story, I thought it was as ever really poetic and, at times, quite conversational, but never losing its lyricism.

Subtlety is definitely one of your major talents in writing, Julia, and in the Neville/Hannah vignette, Neville’s development in character was excellently done. After the battle, I think there’s always been a bit of a preconception that, just because Neville chopped off Nagini’s head, he’s suddenly brimful of confidence, so it was great to see his characterisation remain intact, in that Neville does not consider himself to be as impressive as everyone thinks he is. And that makes him even more endearing to read, for me. Also, I could see the similarity between how Neville is with Hannah -- unsure, quite insecure -- and how Andromeda is with Ted, because I felt Hannah understood Neville and saw through what everyone else thought of him, just like Ted understood Andromeda. So even though the two pairings are from different eras, I loved how there was such a clear link between the two of them.

The other two pairings intrigued me the most, I have to admit. I can remember reading a Parvati/Daphne drabble by you once, so I knew a bit of the backstory (assuming it’s the same?) from before. And even though I knew it didn't end well in the drabble, I was nevertheless saddened to read that section, because I really felt for Daphne there, with her unrequited love for Parvati. And the inclusion of Lavender/Parvati was interesting, too, because I have always thought that pairing was likely considering how close Lavender and Parvati were in canon. But what I think made that vignette all the more poignant was how accepting Daphne was of Parvati not loving her back; i can see why Parvati would use Daphne like that, and the bitterness from both of them was evident, especially as Daphne actually watched Parvati say Lavender’s name instead of Daphne’s.

The Scorpius/Hugo section at the end, meanwhile, was lovely in its optimism, which was definitely welcome after the saddest vignette of the four. Hugo was delightfully quirky, and you conveyed his slightly different mindset really well -- in that his perspective of a body as a map meant the title was incorporated without making it seem shoehorned in. The last line about how unimportant straight answers are is brilliant, because it really sums up the rich essence of the whole story: that love is not easy or straightforward, and I could see that so clearly in every single vignette.

Even though each vignette was short, I still got a really clear idea about the backstories of all the characters. A few reviewers said it would have been better with more, but I disagree, because each section works beautifully on its own, and I think each vignette had such a natural beginning and ending that I didn't need more backstory. In fact, they could have easily been four drabbles, but they also work together really well.

What I liked the most about this story, though, was just the sheer realness of it. There was something so raw and rudimentary about each section, and I think that was because of the imperfections in every relationship presented. This was a stunning story, Julia, all in all; you never fail to astound me with your flawless way with words, and it’s definitely my favourite story of yours (along with The Colour of Distance). Well done, and a belated happy birthday!

Soraya xxx

Author's Response: OH I completely missed this review, Soraya! I'm so sorry! I don't seem to get notifications anymore :(

Anyway. THANK YOU. What an amazing review :D Ted and Andromeda are one of those pairings that I don't write or read often but really should because I really, really, really like them. I enjoyed writing them a lot so maybe I will try and expand this headcanon I have for them :) Neville is always such a joy to write and I have written a few drabbles with him and Hannah so I'm glad you thought he was in character. And I did put that drabble after Ted and Andromeda because I thought the parallels between them complimented each other well so it's cool you picked that up, too. I have written a Parvati/Daphne drabble before but I never really intended this vignette to fit in with that. I started writing an expansion for that earlier drabble for the mystery challenge and never finished it. However, now that you mention it, I think the drabbles could fit together, especially since I didn't really take the aftermath of the battle into account when I wrote the original one... hmmm you have given me ideas! Hugo and Scorpius were A LOT of fun to write and I am actually expanding their story right now :D Thank you so much, Soraya. This was such a gem of a review to discover and I am sorry for not responding sooner!

Julia x

 

Vendetta by lucca4
Rated: 6th-7th Years [Reviews - 7]

Summary: Past Featured Story

A story of one of Voldemort's most prized Death Eaters, and the three kills that changed her.

This is lucca4 of Gryffindor submitting my entry for Rosmerta's Mini-Gauntlet being held in The Three Broomsticks over at the MNFF beta boards.

Thank you and hugs to the lovely Jess for reading this over, and to Alex, for everything ♥.

Winner of the 2012 Quicksilver Quill Award - Best Marauder-era Story.

Categories: Marauder Era Genre: Warnings: Abuse, Character Death, Non-Consensual Sex, Sexual Situations, Slash, Strong Profanity, Violence

Word count: 2524 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
05/15/12 Updated: 05/20/12


Reviewer: xxbabewithbrainsxx Signed
Date: 08/18/12 Title: Chapter 1: mercy. revenge. lust.

Arianaaaaaaaaa

THAT WAS FAB and beautifully messed up and fantabulous. I mean, haha, I read it already, a while before, but I didn't have enough time to leave a review. Silly me. Anyway, did you know that you're amazing? Because you aaaaaare! Your imagery is so fabulous and vivid and pretty scary and disturbing at times, and that all fits brilliantly with Bella's character. Your writing style is so gorgeous, and I think you did such a fantastic job characterising Bellatrix in this. I remember reading your initial drabbles for the gauntlet, and I wasn't sure how you would connect them together, but you managed to seamlessly. I shall attempt to write something vaguely coherent in SBBC, but know, my dear, that you are ah-mazing. :D

Author's Response: Soraya! I heart you so much for leaving a review - thank you thank you thank you :)! I am so glad that you thought the imagery and the characterization was okay. I had so much trouble with the drabbles that I almost didn't post a one-shot, and even writing it out I was worried it would be clunky, so it really makes me so happy to hear that they worked well together. You are the best :). xx Ariana

 

Half-life by welshdevondragon
Rated: 3rd-5th Years [Reviews - 5]

Summary:

Neville has the rest of his life ahead of him, but all he can do is look back. Molly feels as though she has already lived, and will spend the rest of her life sifting through her memories and regrets and never living in the moment.



AU in that Arthur Weasley dies in Harry Potter and the Order of the Phoenix. This is Jamie/AcaciaCarter’s and Soraya/babewithbrains’ fault, and therefore I present it to them.

Categories: Alternate Universe Genre: Warnings: Alternate Universe, Character Death, Mental Disorders, Sexual Situations, Strong Profanity

Word count: 3450 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
06/15/12 Updated: 06/15/12


Reviewer: xxbabewithbrainsxx Signed
Date: 06/15/12 Title: Chapter 1: One-shot

Oh hahahahahaaaaaa. For some reason, I actually thought you were going to ship them lolol.

THIS WAS FAB. I don't usually like AU, as I'm sure you know, but I did think it would be interesting if Arthur died. You did a great job showing how Molly would've reacted if he had died, and I LOVE YOUR NEVILLE. He's adorable :)

I would've left a longer review, but I have to get back to biology/statistics/maths. D: Heart youuuuu for writing it, though! I love it when I can infect people's minds with my weird ideas *giggles madly*

 

Strong Enough to Break by Acacia Carter
Rated: 3rd-5th Years [Reviews - 12]

Summary: Past Featured StoryIt had been three years since his wife's death, but the first woman to make him feel something is the last woman he'd have thought. The fact that he's closer in age to her father than to her does not help matters.

Otherwise known as All Soraya's Fault.

Important note: I used the Student/Teacher warning as a precaution; the relationship in this story is between a teacher and his former student, for whom he had no feelings while she was under his tutelage. Just to be clear.

Another important note: I'm not JKR. She has a much nicer house.

Categories: Other Pairing Genre: Warnings: Sexual Situations, Student/Teacher Romance

Word count: 13583 Chapters: 3 Completed: No
Published:
06/16/12 Updated: 07/19/12


Reviewer: xxbabewithbrainsxx Signed
Date: 06/17/12 Title: Chapter 1: One

OH EM SQUEEE I LOVE THIS. Jamieeeeeeeee, this is so wonderful, every bit as wonderful as I thought it would be. Nevlly ftw, man!

Anyway, this will be a very short and useless review, but I just wanted to say how much I loved dark!Neville here. And Molly is lovely -- slightly forward, but still quite shy, and I like how she still thought of him as Professor Longbottom :D

I might leave you a proper review after my exams are over... until then, I can't wait for the next chapter! (Oh, and I am honoured to be in your summary, lolol.)

 
Reviewer: xxbabewithbrainsxx Signed
Date: 07/06/12 Title: Chapter 2: Two

Hi Jamie!

Well, I thought I’d leave you a (rather belated) birthday review for your Nevlly, given I planted the idea in your head in the first place :)

I think you’ve done an excellent job giving Neville a backstory in this story. It’s easy to make it an infodump, but here, I loved how you presented Neville as such a broken and hollow man. We could see how formulaic and lonely his life was, with him going to the same pub every Friday, and it’s even sadder seeing it through Molly’s eyes, especially as Neville was Molly’s teacher. But also, the fact that this is a few years on from when Hannah and her baby died makes me feel even more sympathetic towards Neville, even when it’s from Molly’s POV. Her seeing him suffer and drown his sorrows in whisky made me feel so sorry for him, so well done there. And I loved how, in the next chapter, we got to see Neville’s side to things too -- the monotonousness of his drinking, especially He sat. Just sat. Neville is often your best-written character (given that he’s your favourite character, that’s not a surprise), and what I liked the most was that he wasn’t filled with angst or anything. He had a tragic story, yes, but I liked that you didn’t over-dramatise it.

But I think your other victory here is Molly. The thing that makes this cross-generational pairing convincing is the characterisation of both characters, but especially Molly -- her attention to detail, the fact that she knew exactly how Neville liked his drink, and even the way in which she read too much into Neville offering her a drink, all these aspects of her character were excellently chosen and really made me understand, as a reader, why Molly was attracted to Neville -- possibly before Molly understood that herself, come to think of it. Also, I'm glad the whole issue of student/teacher was addressed, because even though Molly had left school, I think it still is something which could potentially affect their relationship. I’d definitely like to see Percy’s reaction to it :)

I also thought you did a great job with the two settings -- in the first chapter, the Leaky Cauldron, and in the second, Harry and Ginny’s party. I liked the contrast between them, with the pub being quiet and the party being a lot louder. The humour in Harry and Ginny’s note to Neville was welcomed as a moment of light relief compared to the far darker parts of the story, and even though it wasn’t a major part of the story, I loved the mentions of Teddy/Victoire in there too. Teddy in particular was adorable, the way he was drunk and how he forgot his speech while proposing to Victoire -- it was a very sweet scene, and I felt even sadder for Neville because I knew that it would bring back memories of Hannah and his proposal to her.

Oh, and Hermione’s perceptiveness with Neville was really well done too. I think it’s more realistic that someone, at least, would pick up on Neville’s and Molly’s changing relationship, so it was fitting as well as quite amusing that Hermione was aware of it. So far, though, this story’s been quite character-driven, so it will be interesting to see where things go from here. I’ve thoroughly enjoyed this so far, Jamie; you’ve really brought this cross-gen rarepair to life (even if I had meant the idea to be a joke). Dark!Neville is so intriguing, and you’ve explored his character excellently. I look forward to the next chapter!

 

Sabrage by Equinox Chick
Rated: Professors [Reviews - 7]

Summary: Dominique Weasley had not wanted to attend the party, but when she saw her, all thoughts of Disapparating vanished as she was wrenched off her axis and capitulated into hitherto unknown feelings.

This is Equinox Chick and this is my entry into the Great Hall Illustration for Inspiration Challenge. I chose a picture drawn by the amazing Natalie (hestiajones) I must also thank her for beta'ing this fic.

Disclaimer: I am not JK Rowling.

Categories: Femmeslash Genre: Warnings: Sexual Situations, Strong Profanity, Violence

Word count: 10363 Chapters: 3 Completed: Yes
Published:
06/24/12 Updated: 06/29/12


Reviewer: xxbabewithbrainsxx Signed
Date: 06/27/12 Title: Chapter 2: Chapter 2 - Methode Champenoise

:O

Myles is one b@stard. UGHHHHHH. How horrible for Dominique :( Especially considering how they work together -- Daphne's right in that it makes things difficult for people. And I hate that Myles tries to justify himself by saying that Dominique likes it rough, because it's just... UGH.

And I do feel sorry for Mags -- she didn't know Dominique was attached, after all, though I do think Mags overreacted a bit. It'll be interesting seeing what happens next :) You've created some great dynamics between Mags and Dominique so far, Croll, and I just love Mags as a character -- and Dominique (I so get what they're saying about editing, since it's virtually the same as betaing and everything).

It's a shame this doesn't have more reviews, because I think it's fab. In fact, I'm off to do some QSQ nomming before prom :)

Author's Response: EEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEP! thank youuuuuu. I do like Mags as well because I think she's a sort of hybrid version of what I am and what i'd like to be. OOOPs, self insertion in a fic - hahahahahah. Nah, she's much more glamorous and has better clothes and make-up - sadly. Myles is a git, but you knew that from Stars or Carousels - sigh. Hmm, she did overreact a little, but the reason for that is explained in the last chapter.

Thank you very much and I hope you have a great time at your Prom!!!! ~Carole~

 
Reviewer: xxbabewithbrainsxx Signed
Date: 06/30/12 Title: Chapter 3: Chapter 3 - Prestige cuvee

Eeeep sorry I took a while getting to this! I kind of decided to have an early night when my sister stole the laptop from me... anyway, YAY to Dominique dumping Myles. He had it coming to him. Though I'm wondering how awkward things would have been at Dominique's work (unless she quit?), but with the constraints of the word limit, you probably didn't have room for that, lol.

And poor Dominique! I can imagine how strange it must have been for her to be told that Mags was leaving and then find out that she's not. By the way, I so loled when Mags said "gotten". Seriously, I had to actually scroll to the top of the page to check the author, lol! But she *is* American, so she would say that.

This is honestly a terrible review, but your story is excellent. I think things were a little rushed at the end (Dominique breaking up with Myles, and then her finding Mags and everything), but like I said, I'm guessing it's more because of word count restraints than anything.

Well done, though! This story deserves far more reviews, imo.

Author's Response: Yes, twas the word constraint that stopped me. I was about 8 words short of 10k in the end *sigh*. Okay, if you read Stars of Carousels (which I know you have ;) ) you might remember Dominiques profession from there. She's working as a chef. I make an oblique reference to her liking cooking in all this, and also references throughout that she could be on the verge of quitting the job, so I sort of thought that was enough, although I did have to cut an entire section in the coffee shop where she explains to Mags about cooking and spending time with both grandmothers in their kitchens :( . Sigh* word counts get me every time. I might re write some bits when the challenge is over ... if I have the energy.

Thank you very much for the review and all your others. It's very much appreciated. ~Carole~

 
Reviewer: xxbabewithbrainsxx Signed
Date: 06/25/12 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1 -Le Vin du Diable

Hellooooooooo

Why this has no reviews is a mystery and a half *sigh* This was fab, Croll. I was hoping for a prequel (that is what this is, right?) of Stars or Carousels, and I think you've given Dominique a really interesting backstory here. I knew about Myles being rough and everything with Dominique, but it was still shocking and horrible to see how he treated her :( Particularly this bit:

But as she peered closer, she could see a faint pattern of blue on her arms and the red marks on her breast. A love bite, he’d said last night, but it was one that broke the skin.


Such a powerful and harsh image.

I also LOVE Mags. Yay to her being a writer :D I liked that Dominique didn't let herself be intimidated by her or anything, and Mags, also, ended up warming to Dominique,

Anyway, this is a rather useless review, but I blame the lack of fanfic during my exam period for that. D: Wonderful start, Carole, and I look forward to the rest :)

Author's Response: May I worship you, O Bebe avec la tete de grand (um, I know that says you have a big head, but I don;t know what brains is en francais). Thank you so much for reviewing and getting this off the zero *sigh*. Yes, it is the prequel to Stars or Carousels (I should probably mention that somewhere) and Swans and whichever one i write post Stars and pre-Swans -( hahahah - ideas whirring now. )

*sigh* originally Mags was going to write poetry as well, but I had to cut them from the story as the word count was excessive, but versions of the poems are on tumblr somewhere :)

Thank you again. ~Carole~xxxxx

 

Haunted by The_Real_Hermione
Rated: 3rd-5th Years [Reviews - 3]

Summary: I realise that Muggles have always been wrong about ghosts. Ghosts don’t haunt the earth, we are haunted by everything that reminds us of those we love, and we will walk here for the rest of time, cold, alone.

Categories: Other Pairing Genre: Warnings: Abuse, Character Death, Violence

Word count: 1329 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
06/26/12 Updated: 07/06/12


Reviewer: xxbabewithbrainsxx Signed
Date: 07/07/12 Title: Chapter 1: Haunted

Hello, Katrina!

I must say, this really deserves more reviews :( Anyway, I thought I'd review you since you left all those lovely reviews for my stories a month or so ago. Plus, I know that when I read a Katrina story, chances are you'll do something really interesting with the style and also have some great characterisation (and I definitely was right). It’s great to read more of your work after so long.

The premise of this story is unique, I think: a monologue by Eileen Prince about her relationship with her husband after she has died and become a ghost is really original. I know that the whole issue of life after death in Potterverse is pretty complicated, so kudos to you for carrying it out so well. It would be easy to go over the top with such an issue, but you addressed it thoroughly (such as Eileen’s regrets about not going on and how she was so tied down to life that she didn’t want to go on), which I thought was great, because, like I said, it’s a bit of a murky topic. And yet the clarity of Eileen’s voice helped in making it far less confusing than it could have been.

Eileen and Tobias's story is something that I've always wondered about, ever since Snape said that her parents argued a lot, but also in the whole of HBP, when it became evident that Snape really hated his father for being a Muggle and that he preferred to go by his mother’s name because she was a witch. I liked that you built on that piece of canon information a lot and made the characters three-dimensional while also sticking to the characterisation (or what little there is, anyway) in the books. What was great was that both Eileen and Tobias had their flaws, flaws which were really important in making both their characters unique -- for example, the fact that Severus’s conception was an accident, and that Tobias became abusive. Tobias’s backstory, about his troubled childhood, gave a perfect explanation as to why he did the things he did.

The way you began the story, with the description of how their relationship began, and the details of the brownies and the roses, made the chemistry between them evident. I especially liked how things were once romantic for them as a couple -- it makes their relationship so much more valid and realistic, because I think that spark of attraction would obviously be necessary for them to eventually marry. Also, the idea that Eileen had to cling to those memories is so very sad, and it made me sympathise immensely with her, particularly because Tobias didn’t love her back, and Eileen loved him far too much for there to be any balance in their relationship. And it was even more horrible for Severus, who neither of his parents really cared about, although Eileen referred to him as a “good person”, so perhaps she did love her son to some extent. Despite Severus never appearing directly in the story, I felt so sorry for him for having to live in such a household, where his parents were constantly arguing and everything. The fact that I felt anything for Severus at all is an achievement, Katrina, so well done there!

The style in this was intriguing -- the use of first and second person for the majority of the story and then second person for the section in the middle was, I’ll admit, a little confusing at first, but it didn’t take me long to work out who was speaking when. And the style was certainly effective. There was some really raw emotion in this story, Katrina, and I think this was achieved at least in part by the choice of POV -- the first person made me empathise with Eileen but also understand why she fell for Tobias, and the second person made the tone of the story incredibly regretful and gloomy, because Eileen was addressing the person who she was so in love with despite him not loving her back. The section in the middle which is entirely second person worked well, too, because I think it made the narrative seem more detached, and I got a pretty cold impression of what Tobias was like. Also, in terms of style, the sparse dialogue and short, sharp sentences was really effective here, because I think this is a mostly character-driven story, and it was dependent more on Eileen’s narrative of the story rather than dialogue moving it along.

As you can tell, Katrina, I enjoyed this story a lot. I don’t often read about Eileen and Tobias, so this was a great insight into Eileen’s mind. It’s nice to see you back, and I hope to read more from you soon!

Soraya x

Author's Response: Hi Soraya, Thankyou so so much for this lovely review, and I'm sorry I'm a bit slow in replying, I'vej ust been away, and it was great to come back to this. I'm glad you thought the story was a unique idea... I can't really remember how I came up with it, it was about a year and a half ago, and I started the story and got stuck, so it had been sitting on my computer, half-finished, for a long time. Ghosts in the Potterverse half always interested me, and (as you know), I've addressed this topic in other stories as well. I think a person has to have a really big reason to stay on - at first, perhaps, it sounds good, but like the Resurrection Stone, it's just an imitation of life and ghosts can never fit in. Anyway, I'm glad you thought I handled the topic well. I've also been interested in Snape's parents and upbringing since HBP - while I don't really sympathise with Snape often, it's interesting to know why he's like that - if his parents had loved him and each other, would he have hated Muggles etc. - I think him hating his father is very tied into him hating Muggles. But I also like the idea that his mother didn't love him enough, because I think the reason he fell so hard for Lily was that she was the first person who cared. I think Eileen did love her son deep down, but she pushed it down because she was so desperate for Tobias' approval, and she regrets that later. I thought they must have had a romantic beginning, because a Muggle and a witch would hardly have married for convenience, or because their parents/societies told them to etc... although for Tobias it wasn't really love, just being loved. Which ties in with his childhood, and why he became abusive, but also why he married her (am I making sense? I hope so). I'm glad you didn't find the style too confusing, I know it can be a bit like that, but I liked the combination of first and second, because you sympathise with Eileen and the second person because she's addressing him and it's almost accusatory (not sure that's the right word). I'm glad you also liked the short sentences and little dialogue, I do like writing like that, and I think it works for short character pieces. Anyway, I'm not sure I deserve such praise from you, thanks for this lovely review :). Yep hopefully you'll see more of me soon. ~Katrina

 

Summary: There are many types of secrets. Some you keep for others, some you keep for yourself, and others you keep to avoid them.

When it came to feelings, I, Lily, was the greatest keeper of secrets.

Categories: Next Generation Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 1969 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
07/18/12 Updated: 07/19/12


Reviewer: xxbabewithbrainsxx Signed
Date: 07/19/12 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Awwwww, Maple, this was so sweet! It was lovely of you to write my OTP to begin with, and I think you did a fabulous job of it :D

Louis as a fittieeeeee. YAY. I love the idea that he would basically become a man over the summer, not to mention the whole Unspeakable thing. I mean, his dad is a cursebreaker and his mum is really intelligent too, so it makes sense, imo.

And I loved how they had that intimacy between them (disappearing together, going to the beach, etc) even before they got together. It made Louis's reciprocation believable :)

Lovely story, Mapleeeee! Thank you for writing it for me -- I feel honoured :D

Author's Response: Eep! I'm glad you like you like it! :) Maple

 
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