Hi there! I’m Soraya. I’m seventeen years old and am a proud Muslim British Bangladeshi. I live in East London and have loved reading and writing from a young age. I’m rather obsessed with Harry Potter (aren’t we all?), tea (not a surprise considering I’m a Brit) and good grammar. Recently, I've also got into the Supernatural fandom. After watching the first episode, I had already fallen head over heels in love with Sam Winchester, so it's no surprise that I am now a huge SPN fangirl as well as a Potterhead.
My writing has changed quite a bit over the years, and I think you'll probably notice that, the further down my author page you go, the more the quality seems to drop :P I started posting stories on here at the age of fourteen, and at nearly eighteen, I can see how much my writing has improved since those Dark Ages. So, for that reason, I would advise you stick to the more recent stuff, if you choose to read anything of mine.
Just so you know, these are posted firstly according to what kind of pairing, if any, is in the story, and then in chronological order in accordance to my own canon, not necessarily the order in which they were posted.
My first chaptered fic. It’s terribly written, but I still have a place in my heart for it because of how much fun it was to write. This story has now been deleted on MNFF, but if you really, really want to read it, you can still find it on FF.net and HPFF. (I advise you don't, though :P)
Second Childishness and Mere Oblivion (James/Lily)
Written for Round One (Major Characters) of Madam Pomfrey’s Character Clinic Triathlon, this one-shot is about James and Lily’s relationship getting rockier and rockier after they left Hogwarts, especially when Lily is faced with the trials of being a wife and motherhood. A little smutty.
My Love is Always Here (James/Lily)
This was a belated birthday present for the wonderful Gina/Gmariam, aka the queen of James/Lily. This is mostly about Lily dealing with becoming a mother for the first time and the problems (as well as the joys) that come with that.
There's an Answer (Remus/Tonks)
Written for Sophie/The owl for SPEW Summer Swap IV. Tonks is sent on an interesting baby Auror assignment to do with werewolves. Remus and a dangerous Muggle are thrown into the mix, with interesting results.
Left Behind (Remus/Tonks)
An expanded version of one of my LoveNotes, written for SPEW. It's a missing moment set between OOTP and HBP, where in my head canon Remus and Tonks have been together, in secret, for a few weeks already and Remus is then told to go on his werewolf mission. Slightly smutty.
One and Only (Remus/Tonks)
Written for the lovely Alex/Ithinkrabis2people in the Ravenclaw Christmas Drabble Exchange. This is a missing moment set just after Tonks’s outburst to Remus in the hospital wing at the end of HBP.
Out of My Life (Harry/Ginny)
My only AU (kind of). I tweaked a small part of canon in this -- basically, Harry actually said goodbye to Ginny properly when he broke up with her. Very angsty, and this is only up for sentimental reasons, as I wrote it during The Dark Ages (aka when I was fourteen).
A Different Kind of Magic (Harry/Ginny)
Written for the You’re Having My Baby challenge at SIYE. Ginny finds out she’s pregnant, but Harry receives the news before her and therefore has to tell his wife. This was my first ever story at MNFF. It was written when I was thirteen, and it definitely shows.
A Different Kind of Magic 2: Parenthood (Harry/Ginny)
A sequel, obviously, to A Different Kind of Magic. Ginny goes into labour, and both Harry and Ginny realise what it means to be parents. Again, this was written from Back in the Days.
The Caustic Ticking of the Clock (Rowena/Helga)
Written for the Great Hall Cotillion, this story is my only Founders story so far, and it’s about Rowena and Helga’s secret relationship. I am proud of this one, which doesn’t usually happen :)
Catching Fire (James/Sirius)
This was written for SPEW 007. My prompt was “Embers”, and it’s set just after Remus’s second transformation with the Marauders. James is badly injured, and he and Sirius realise, inadvertently, that they might just have feelings for each other. I like the pairing but still think the story needs work. One day I will go back and edit.
Flicker and Fail (Katie/Leanne)
This was written forSecret SPEW, and my recipient was the absolutely fabulous Alex/welshdevondragon. It’s my take on Leanne and Katie’s relationship from way before they were even at Hogwarts as well as what eventually happens to Katie in HBP, when she was cursed.
Skinny Love (Louis/Lily)
Written for the 2013 Great Hall Cotillion. Set during Teddy and Victoire's wedding, Louis helps Lily come to terms with her bulimia. This one was pretty difficult to write.
Blood and Roses (Scorpius/Rose, Scorpius/Dominique, Dominique/OC)
Written for the Great Hall Mysterious Maychallenge, this was my first Next Generation fic about Scorpius, mostly, and the trials he faces after his daughter is murdered.
Broken Glass (Louis/Lily)
This is the story of when Loulily really began. After the deaths of his immediate family, Louis is finding it hard to cope, even six months later. Lily somehow helps. It’s a little smutty. I’m proud of this one, too :)
The Highway of Regret (Scorpius/Lily, Scorpius/Rose, Louis/Lily)
Also written for the Great Hall Cotillion. It’s my one and only Scily. This is all about secret relationships and mistakes people make. Lily’s angry at Louis, and Scorpius has just broken up with Rose; when Lily gets drunk in the pub, things... happen. :P
I Will Lay Down My Heart (Albus/Rose, Scorpius/Rose)
Written for Round Two (Minor Characters) of Madam Pomfrey’s Character Clinic Triathlon. Albus has been in love with Rose for years, but what happened with them when they were younger has put a dent in their relationship. It doesn’t help that Rose is actually in love with Scorpius, either. This is smutty too.
One More Night (Albus/Rose, Rose/Scorpius)
Companion piece to I Will Lay Down My Heart. This goes into more detail about Rose and Albus's changing relationship as well as the aftermath of the events in said companion story. Probably the smuttiest thing on my page. :D Written for the Great Hall Cotillion 2013.
This was written for the Great Hall-iday challenge for the Operation: Mistletoe prompt, and this was where my love for Loulily began.
This is about how five men in Potterverse dealt with remorse in different ways.
This poem is about how Remus feels about Sirius (not slashy, btw).
Written for the Magic in Music challenge over inPoetry, Anyone? This was set to the track “Obliviate” in DH1 and is about Hermione modifying her parents’ memories.
Written for the Goodbyechallenge in Poetry, Anyone? This was about saying goodbye, and how difficult it could be.
After All This Time
Written for the Deathly Hallows challenge inPoetry, Anyone?. I ship unrequited Snape/Lily, and this is probably the only time Snape will be on my author page, lol.
Written for the MC Kreacher challenge inPoetry, Anyone? This was written from the POV of Bill Weasley after his wife’s death.
Written for the Great Bannermakers’ Hallchallenge. The banner I picked had Merope Gaunt on it, and it’s probably my darkest story; it’s definitely the only one to have a dubious consent warning. It’s about, as you might guess, the abuse Merope suffered from her father and brother.
In Care (Marlene/OC)
Marlene McKinnon, as a care kid, eventually falls in love with another care kid, Jamal Olawumi. But he's a Muggle, and keeping her world secret proves difficult. This is definitely a story I would like to revisit and tidy up.
Just Across the Bar (Sirius/Rosmerta)
Sirius is just about of age, but obviously Rosmerta has misgivings about having feelings for Sirius, who is still a student. Written for the 2013 Great Hall Cotillion and also smutty.
Written for SPEW 007. My prompt was “Juggling”, and it’s just a silly piece of dialogue-only banter between Remus and Sirius. Sirius realises Remus likes Tonks, and he tries to persuade Remus to act on his feelings.
Hanging by a Thread (Katie/Oliver)
Written for the lovely Jess/ToBeOrNotToBeAGryffindor for Secret SPEW VII. Katie is grieving and drowning her sorrows in alcohol and Oliver is trying his best to save Muggles, while trying also to bury feelings for Katie that he thought he had long since forgotten about. There is also, surprise surprise, some smut in this.
And that’s it! Along with being a moderator, I’m also a member of SPEWand SBBC. I hope to see you around on the forums; feel free to contact me via PM or review if you have any questions or comments about my stories!
Hahahahaa. Croll, I loved this! You've discussed your Zacmac before so it was nice actually reading it and seeing for myself how fabulously funny and well-written it was :D
I loved the banter between the boys, and the drunken dialogue (I bet you can understand why I like that :P). I really liked Cormac's characterisation, and I think it ties in perfectly with canon -- I mean, only an idiot, and a daring one at that, would be stupid enough to eat a pound of Doxy eggs for a bet. So yes. Very well done there. I loved how Cormac was determined to snog whoever went through the door even if it was to a bloke, and as much as I don't like Zach as a character, I think you did a great job of his characterisation too.
I really liked how their relationship progressed, and the jobs they both had -- Cormac as a journaist and Zach as a player. I think that worked really well. great choice there.
Great story, Carole, and one that made me laugh lotsly :D
Author's Response: Okay, when Ariana suggested this, I immediately dismissed it because it seemed too ludicrous and I was after something deep and meaningful. But then I went to sleep and when I woke up I remembered Cormac and the Doxy eggs. That was my hook into the story and how their first encounter would go because there is no way in merry hell that Cormac Mclaggen would ever admit he was gay or make the first move on someone without a dare or copious amounts of alcohol. He's too aggressively male for that. Then the story took hold and obsessed me for a while. I remembered Zach was the Captain of Hufflepuff and stepping into Cedric's Quidditch boots must have been incredibly hard.
Not sure you wanted all that background, but hahahahahhahahahah - you have it now :D
Thank you again ~Carole~
Alex, this was beautiful. Ahhhhhh. The Grangers' relationship is definitely one I find intriguing, and I think you wrote it excellently. I liked the idea of them meeting at uni, and how Bea stopped swearing because of Stephen (if only that could happen for me, lol).
And I never would have guessed that you haven't been to Melbourne before. The description of the scenery was very nicely done, and I liked the reaction Bea had to Australia's beaches and so on -- especially comparing it with Cornwall's. And I loved the ending, and how you brought out their emotions and how lost they both felt so well.
The only thing I can pull you up on, really, is that Hermione cast a charm convincing her parents that they would become Wendell and Monica Wilkins, so either those were their real first names or they were called something completely different and Hermione changed their names. I think the latter is more likely, for security purposes. Just something I thought I'd point out -- obviously you don;t have to change it.
Lovely story, Alex :D
Author's Response: Sorayaa!!! Thank you :) I was rather pleased with this story, and am so glad that you liked it. Ha, meet someone as sweet as Stephen or stop swearing :p
Hannah and Bob and google streetview helped :) I love embedding the setting into the story, so am glad you appreciated it/ enjoyed it.
I've already told you about Monica and Wendell--I made up an excuse, and put it in the AN, but thank you for pointing it out. This is one of my favourites of the stories I wrote, so I'm glad you liked it and thank you for your lovely review :) Alex
This is AcaciaCarter of Hufflepuff, writing for the Great Hall Cotillion of 2012.
Oooooooooh, Jamie, this was fab! I've only ever read one other Percy/Audrey (by Alex, if you're interested -- When The Weather Turned Fine) so this is still fairly new territory for me in terms of the pairing anyway. But you did a really good job with it. I liked your characterisation of Percy, how he was still uptight and too rule-abiding for his own good, and that Audrey loosened him up a bit.
One thing I wasn't entirely sure about was the use of italics for the flashbacks. I mean, it's okay using them when it's only a relatively small part of the story, but I think as long as you have dates/times plus line breaks, I don't see why you need to use italics on top of that. It does kind of wreak my eyesight a little, lol. It's just because you italicised rather large chunks of the text, that's all. So that's something worth thinking about, though it's entirely up to you.
I liked how it ended. I really liked Audrey as a character, how she was rather business-like but not as bound by rules as Percy was. They complement each other very well, I think.
Anyway, great story, Jamie :D
ZOMG. That was AMAZINGGGGGGGGGGG.
Just... gahhh, I don't even know what to say! Carole, I've missed reading your Marauder Era stories, and I think this was a beautiful one. I just loved your characterisation of Sirius and Benjy -- especially with how snarky Benjy was, lol, and how hot Sirius was, hahahaha.
Also, I think you packed a lot of emotion into this story. There was humour, with Benjy putting Sirius in his place, and romance, and angst, too, not just on Benjy's part but on Sirius's as well. Octavia is a bit of a byotch, imo, leading poor Sirius on like that :-/
I loved your choice of POV and tense. Present tense is rather subjective, but it worked perfectly here, really made me feel in the moment. And I thought the way it was structured was so very clever and logical. It's different from what I usually read from you in that respect, and it worked perfectly.
Wonderful, wonderful story, Carole, and sorry for gushing. Just... wow. :D
Author's Response: Thank youuuuuuu
,br> You know, I was so unsure about this story. I knew I liked it, but wasn;t sure how it would go down so I am incredibly pleased with the reception it's received. Also, it turned out VERY differently from my initial plan which was to be a brief encounter after a mission and some hot m/m action. Sirius, however, wasn't playing ball and I thought it needed to be a touch deeper. So, he might be gay or straight, but really he's not attached to anyone except James and to a lesser extent Lily, Remus and Peter. However, he does get close to Benjy. Ihated killing Benjy - darn canon!
Present tense. Yes, it's sadly addictive. I hated it and then loved it and then cursed it again when I was writing Dean/Ginny and it kept appearing - ha!
Thank you again for this review and all the others. Much appreciated. ~Carole~
Sorry it’s taken so long to review D: I’ve been so busy with schoolwork and such. Apologies.
Anyway, this is an interesting story! I’ve seen Draco redeemed in quite a few fics, and I agree that he wasn’t evil as such. After all, there were many moments in canon when he was a better person than I thought he would. And the fact that Harry saved Draco’s life more than once and Draco saved his, too, definitely convinced me that Draco was worthy of redemption. I think you drew on that very well, humanising him. I love the title, how it’s basically Draco looking back on his life. The piece is very reflective in nature, which is different from what I’m used to, but I think you did a good job of it :)
I thought the use of first person was appropriate -- it made the story a lot more personal, as his recollections are pretty personal and emotional, too. I felt a lot closer to Draco and could feel what he was feeling. Okay, I’ll admit I’m not a fan of Dramione at all, but I felt it was quite convincing because of the first person. I do think that you could have had more of a physical attraction to her -- as in, if you actually described Hermione in terms of looks, it might have been more believable, because then at least we could see why he liked her. Another way in which I find romance more convincing is by dialogue. The whole story was told rather than shown, and I would have liked to see some actual dialogue between Draco and Hermione for me to think Draco being in love with her was really believable. I also would have liked to see Draco’s reasoning for being so horrible to Hermione in canon; surely if he fancied her, he would have been nicer to her? And wouldn’t he have considered the fact that she was a Muggleborn and could therefore never really be welcome in Malfoy Manor? In other words, that could have done with some expansion.
However, I did like the connection with the dragons. I thought it was fitting that he would be fascinated by them given his own name, and it makes sense that he then snitched on Harry, Ron and Hermione about Norbert. I liked that you mentioned the dragons at the end, too -- it really brought the story full circle, which I think is really important in reflective pieces like this one. On the whole, I really liked Draco’s characterisation throughout, particularly at the beginning when his mother told him stories -- there was something lovely and childlike about him that was great to read. And, as another reviewer said, you made him likable but not quite someone I would admire. The ending was also wonderful -- again, it was very much introspective, and it really made it clear that Draco wanted redemption and that he was a better person than others perceived him to be.
So overall, BP, this was a great fic. :) Ooh, one thing I think is worth mentioning -- I liked the use of first person, but I would love to see some other POVs from you, too. I may be wrong, but it does seem to be the POV you use the most, and it seems to be the one you’re most comfortable with. It would be great to see third person by you, too, as I think it would really benefit you as a writer to try things that may be out of your comfort zone. This isn’t criticism, as such, since I think this story worked best in first person, but maybe if you experimented a bit with styles, it could help your growth as a writer.
Author's Response: Soraya, I am ridiculously sorry: I should’ve replied to this yonks ago. I got caught up in school and completely forgot that this existed. The first person thing is completely true - all of my fics on MMNF are in first person – and I completely agree that it would be lovely to see me write in third person (or even second person if that would even be feasible for me) and I will hopefully finish a couple of third person WIPs soon (after I finish another first person WIP…). Thank you for your comment on the Dramione bit. I’m really glad you didn’t think that it was completely thrown in, as this fic was originally rejected because the moderator felt that the whole Dramione thing was thrown in. I completely agree that it needed more thinking through. I’m also glad the dragon connection appealed: that was something I added after the fic was rejected. :) Thank you for leaving me such a lovely review; I'm glad you enjoyed the fic and I’m sorry that it’s taken me so long to write you such a measly reply, BP
Ooooooh, Spire, this was lovely! It's so unfair that this hasn't got any reviews yet, because I thought it was fab and bittersweet and beautiful.
Firstly, what a wonderful rarepair! I never would have thought that Poppy would be Marauder Era age, but because it's never really mentioned how old she is in canon (I don't think so anyway) I suppose you have free reign in that respect. And though the characters in this pairing are rather random, I think you created lovely chemistry between them right from the very beginning when he proposes to her. That was so sweet, and a great way of starting the story, with dialogue.
And I thought the way they were slowly pushed apart by war was so sad and beautifully done. I couldn't help but wince every time a death was mentioned, especially the McKinnons. The fact that Maria was pregnant at the time only makes it more heart-wrenching for me.
Anyway, I hope you get more reviews for this, Spire, because it truly is a fantastic story. See you in, RAC, and good luck in the challenge!
Author's Response: Ahhh, thank you for the review! I really enjoyed writing this (I haven't written ff in ages and this is a bit different to my norm) so I'm pleased you liked it :) xx
Ooooooh, Carole, I enjoyed this :) Mind you, I'm not usually into Dean/Ginny, and in fact, I don't think I've ever read one before, so this was a first :D And I think, as ever with your writing, you wrote it very well. I liked the initial set-up of the story, and the Quidditchness of it all.
Ugh, I hate Gloria. What a pervy cow, man. I don't blame Dean for trying to stay away from her, lol. Though I am wondering why she'd give him such good tickets for the game -- unless it's her attempt to win him over or something? In that case, it's pretty pathetic >.< She is rather creepy, but I liked how you didn't make things completely rosy for Dean either.
I'd like to see where this goes. Next chapterrrrrrrrr!
Author's Response: II think Gloria just likes scaring him - hahahahahahahhahaha. She gave him tickets because she couldn't use them and she was pleased he'd pushed the application through. I think she'd like to get closer to Dean, but she's not going to force herself on anyone.
It's odd how many fics there are where Harry is with Hermione or someone else, and yet no one pairs Ginny up with anyone - except in vague Luna femmeslash which never quite works for me.
,br> Thank you for reviewing. ~Carole~
Carole, you are killing me here. WHYYYYY?
For about two years, Harry/Ginny was my OTP. And now you've killed it completely because this is just so convincing for me and it makes Harry/Ginny look so unconvincing, especially the bit about Ginny being fifteen and harbouring the crush since she was ten. You're right, or rather, she's right.
You wrote drunk!Ginny so well (well, you would, given it's... you :D) and I think you managed to create wonderful chemistry between Ginny and Dean with her loosening up because of the drink and all. I do love Grace too -- I think she sounds really sweet, and I so agree with her about footie. Just sayin'.
Anyway, final chapter now!
Author's Response: I loved writing the drunk bits - heheheheh - I can get away with repeating things like 'lovely' which is a lovely word. Grace I've used before and Gary they're my canon for Dean. Grace was about 17 when she had Dean *sigh*.
I do still ship Harry/Ginny but there has always been a part of me that is uneasy about her having this crush on him for so long and it all working out happily ever after (although I love the NG kids) but that wouldn;t necessarily mean she'd end up back with Dean. (Actually I have a femmeslash in mind for her - heheheheheheheheheh)
Thank you for the review (I have altered a bit in the last chapter, btw, thanks to your advice.) ~Carole~
Ooooooh, Carole, I loved how this ended :D It was just so... awwww. And that's coming from someone who just an hour ago despised this ship, so that's a huge achievement imo.
One thing I wasn't entirely sure about -- it was a bit rushed, how quickly they had sex and were suddenly together. I mean, it just happened a bit too quickly, and I'd have liked to know what Harry's reaction to it was and everything. I know it's from Dean's POV but still, I would have liked to know what Harry thought of it all. Maybe it's just the Harry/Ginny in me, lol. But I think the story would have worked better if you slowed things down a notch, although I completely understand that the word limit probably held you back a bit.
But I still thoroughly enjoyed this, and I think it was a wonderful story. Well done, Carole :D
Author's Response: I agree that it was a tad rushed towards the end. There's supposed to be a line somewhere marking the passage of time between their time at his house and then going to Hogsmeade - so I should probably edit something in - which I shall get on to ... very soon. I don;t think i'm going to write about Harry's reaction, though. I think the fact that he's attending the leaving party and that they can clearly talk about him shows he's okay with it. It could have made a good moment, but I fear it would have made me spiral with the word count, so that was a deliberate decision.
I'm not sure how serious I am about the ship because if I throw myself behind it, then High dies :(
Thank you so much for the reviewwwwww ~Carole~
Oooooh, Natalie, this was lovely :) What a wonderful pairing to pick in the first place. Nicholas Flamel has always been a character who has fascinated me immensely, and I think you did a wonderful job of fleshing him and Perenelle out in this story, despite its shortness.
I think you explored their characters really well, particularly Perenelle at the beginning. It was a really interesting comparison to use, with numbers, and it's so true as well. (Obviously I would say that -- I am, after all, a maths geek :P)
Finally, I liked how Nicholas was poor and Perenelle was rich, and how they still stayed together despite all that. I think that's what made this story really original, with details like that.
Excellently written, Natalie :)
Author's Response: Nicholas and Perenelle fascinate me too! Actually, eternal life as a concept is a vastly interesting subject. Ha! I'm glad you liked the math-ness. :D And also the characterisation! Thanks for reading and reviewing! Really made my day.
This is Acacia Carter of Hufflepuff writing (again) for the Inaugural Great Hall Cotillion of 2012.
Aww, Jamie, this was sweet :) I feel sorry for Colin, and I get what you mean when you angsted about being in a thirteen-year-old's brain, lol. You had nothing to worry about, though, because you pulled off Colin's voice (in third person but still) and mindset so well in this story.
And I felt so sorry for Colin. Poor him :( First he works up the courage to ask Ginny out, and then Ginny says yes, then Neville asks Ginny and Colin has to face the heartbreak of that too :'( It's sad on him, and it's even sadder that he died in the battle of Hogwarts.
One thing I was wondering about -- I think it would be interesting to expand on Ginny's feelings by the end. Because Ginny's the one who snogs him, and it is a little... out of the blue, because all this time, she doesn't really seem to like him in that way. So yeah, that was something I was a little unsure about.
But still, this was a great story, so well done! :D
Hehehe. Carole, this story just made me LOL so much. You got into Mafalda's head so well here, and I loved the voice you gave her. It's a little daft, but in a nice way hehe.
And I felt sorry for Mafalda -- after all of Arthur's blunders, she still liked him, only to find out that he and Molly eloped :( It's sad on her, though there's no way they would have worked really. I thought it was interesting how Mafalda viewed Molly as well, how she thought Molly was "simpering" (and the Molly I remember from canon is anything but). Just shows how jealous Mafalda is I suppose.
Anyway, this story just made me laugh so much, Carole, and I really enjoyed it :D
Author's Response: Thank yoiuuuu. I'm glad you picked up on the Molly simpering bit because you're quite right. Molly wouldn't simper at all, but in Mafalda's eyes she not only simpers, but she's 'fast' - hahahahahahahah.
Yes, poor Mafalda, but we all know Arthur only loves one woman. ~Carole~
OOooooh, Natalie, I'd like to see where this goes! I think you've set up the scene really well here, and you've established Eileen's character excellently.
And, awww, the boy she used to babysit sounds so sweet. And cute. :D I can't say much more because there isn't a lot to comment on, but, as I said, I'd like to see where this goes. I hope you can update soooooooon :)
Author's Response: :D I can't wait to write more, honestly! Thank you for reviewing. :) It's a huge motivation.
Natalieeeeeeeeeeee. First off, congrats on writing like a madwoman for the GH challenge XD Seriously, I don't know how you do it, lol.
Anyway, though this is only the prologue, I'm already intrigued :) Like Kara, I can definitely relate to Narcissa's social life/behaviour, and I like how, in only about 500 words, you still managed to flesh Narcissa out as a character. Florean is less clear-cut at the moment, but I'm hoping I'll find out a lot more about him in the next chapter.
Anywho, I can't wait for the next update :D
Author's Response: YES. THAT CHALLENGE MADE ME LOOPY lol. I shall finish it soon and I hope you'll like Florean when I do write more of him :D
Awwww, Carole, this was so sweet. I read your Thrustin (lmaoooo) a while ago but I don't know if I got round to leaving a review D: Will do if I remember -- just let me get through all the GH stories first :D
I liked this. I think it showed an interesting look into Justin's life both before and after he found out he was a wizard and how things didn't really change for him. Also -- I find it fascinating that you made Justin a lord. But then I remember that he was going to go to Eton, so I suppose his family must have been rich. Figures. :)
Theo is adorable in this too. I especially liked how it was Justin holding back and being the one who didn't want to make their relationship public, not Theo. Normally, it would be the other way round because Theo's a Slyth and all, so I liked that you flipped things a bit there.
Lovely, sweet story, Croll :D
Author's Response: Thank you. Mmm, I always have Justin as a lord. The back story being that he's not the heir until his brother's killed - although I killed him off differently in Fracture, I've just remembered. If he is aristocracy then he faces a lot more pressure to a) not be gay and b) not be a wizard. I might rewrite this and add a lot more backstory, but my list is huuuuuge at the moment. I hope you liked the Royal Wedding references. Thanks again. ~Carole~
Ooooooh, I really liked this, Alex! I think you mentioned this in another story, Persuasion, if I remember correctly, so it was interesting to see George's perspective. And you definitely captured a feeling of sadness and regret in this, really well done.
I think the most intriguing thing is George's characterisation. Okay, I know George turning to alcohol after his twin died is definitely something I've seen before, but I like what you've done with it. But most of all, I liked how you gave a really good insight into George and Angelina's relationship right up until their marriage broke apart. You covered a large period of time in only a few thousand words, and not once did it seem rushed or anyhthing. Which is nice :)
Anyway, I really enjoyed this. And, lol, it's weird that I'm IMing you while I'm reviewing you :P
Author's Response: I'm glad you liked this :) Yes, in Persuasion George and Angelina's divorce is mentioned, and this is the build up to it. You know me and word limits don't get on, so I'm so glad you think I gave a good idea of their relationship and how it ended within such a short (for me) number of words, and that this didn't seem rushed. Thanks a lot for reviewing--and yes, that is a bit weird :) Alex
Hehehehe, Jamie, this was rather funny. I think you captured the Fat Lady's voice so well, and even though it was set in relatively modern times, you retained the oldness of it, if you know what I mean ;)
Ngl, I totally rate you for picking such a cool pairing -- this is one that I would never have thought of, and even better is the fact that you actually made it really believable.
So, Jamie, you're one brave Puff. Well done on a good, solid story which was well-written and which made me laugh :)
Hi there :)
Oh wow, this was an excellent story. It's such an injustice that it has no reviews, though I suppose it's also nice that it's been featured :)
Anyway, I was completely blown away by this story. Colin Creevey's not one of the most popular characters in the fandom, but you gave him a wonderful character here. I think there's just enough of the indecisiveness and eagerness to please in there from canon to make it believable, but you've also added your own dimension to his character in this. I think you really brought out the Gryffindor in Colin, which is a real achievement in my opinion.
A couple of things -- Mathilda couldn't have been in the DA, at least not during Harry's fifth year. That's because we were told in OOTP exactly who was in the DA, and there were only twenty-five people there. Unless you meant Mathilda was in the DA during DH -- but I'm wondering how Colin would have known that given he didn't attend Hogwarts in that year.
Also -- and this is purely an aesthetic thing, and definitely not your fault -- occasionally, you have boxes with question marks instead of dashes. It's because of a glitch in the coding, I know, but it did distract me a little from the story seeing them, so maybe you could go through and remove them manually.
With all of that said, I think this story was a wonderful picture of what happened to Colin before he died (*sobs*). I liked that there were moments of humour and even romance as well as the angstiness and the deaths of the war. The conflicting emotions felt by Colin were brought out beautifully here.
So yeah. Well done!
Author's Response: Hey Soraya :) Thank you so much for being the first reviewer - you're right, it was nice - and completely unexpected - that it was featured! I know Colin's not a particularly popular character in fandom and that's partly why I wanted to write about him. When I read that he died in DH I did get a bit teary. Although slightly annoying to Harry in CoS, I always found him a rather endearing and innocent character and I wanted to expand on his story a bit. All we hear in DH is that he is 'tiny in death' (or words to that effect) and, though that made me sad when I read it in DH, I kind of found myself wanting to know how he snuck back in and what happened to him. I'm glad you thought the characterisation was good! Since CoS we haven't seen as much of him and I thought that, given a few years, Colin at 16 might be slightly more grown up than the over-eager Colin who plagued Harry with his camera! Thanks for saying I brought out the Gryffindor in him - I thought that was going to be quite difficult, because I don't think we saw much evidence of his Gryffindor qualities in the books. Ah, yes, it was only after I wrote about Matilda being in the DA that I realised it couldn't have been possible, but by that time I had become quite attached to her, so I didn't really want to write her out or change her - I hope you can forgive me that canon error? I've changed the dashes thing - my computer does the long ones automatically so I always try and go through my fics and change them all manually but I do end up missing some! Thank you so much again for your kind words - I'm glad you enjoyed it and could find the lighter bits amongst the sad parts. - Alice
Hi Fenella :)
You've reviewed so much of my work that I thought it was about time I returned the favour! :) I think this is a great first fic, definitely better than my first one (please don't read it, lol). I've always wondered how Ginny would have coped during DH without Harry, and I think you showed how crippled she was emotionally because of his absence, and because she had no idea where he was or if he was even alive. It's a horrible situation to be in, and her feelings just sing through this piece.
I also thought it was interesting that Neville was narrating this -- at first, it was a little difficult getting into it because of the first person and everything, but I soon was sucked in. And I loved the title :)
Finally, I felt so sorry for poor Neville when it was revealed at the end that he fancied Ginny :( I mean, I kind of guessed it, because of how he described Ginny's body and her curves and whatever, but still, it was sad.
Anyway, this was a great first fic! I enjoyed it, and it deserves more than just one review (or two, once I've reviewed it). But reviews are becoming harder to receive nowadays because the fandom's dwindling >.< I'll be keeping my eye out for any new stories by you, though, Fenella! Well done. :)
Author's Response: Hi Soraya, Thank you so much! It's lovely to here some feedback on this as the more I look back on it the more faults I find with it! I played around with the first person a lot, originally it was third person but I didn't think it quite captured the importance of Neville's role in this, especially not his feelings towards her. I've always suspected Neville had a bit of a crush on Ginny, he did ask her to the Yule ball after all, however I don't think it's something he'd have ever acted on, and I really wanted to portray the fact he was putting her first, that he would rather she was happy than him, which I think is a big part of his personality. They must have all suffered so much whilst the trio were on the run, I think this is often forgotten. Thank you so much for your lovely review :) Fenella x
This was so fab! I'm sorry I didn't review every chapter, but I was far too intrigued to pause in between. Firstly, yay to Founders slash :D I don't think I've ever come across Godric/Salazar, but I can definitely see it happening, especially after reading this fic.
And I love Aodhan. I think his name is wonderful, but more than that, his character is so very interesting and well-done. I can see how Salazar is attracted to him (he's rather sexy :P) and I think the ending was so sad for him, and it really highlighted how cruel Salazar was.
I'm probably missing things, but a couple of other aspects of the story that I loved were the creation of the Sorting Hat -- genius :D -- and the whole thing with the Basilisk. They were just excellently plotted, so well done there.
I never would have thought this was your first Founders fic, Carole, because you made it look effortless. Seriously, great story. I really enjoyed it. :)
Author's Response: Thank youuuuuuuu! I was rather pleased with the end result and may try other Founders fics in the future because although they're scary, I liked the challenge.
I did research the Sorting hat and the Basilisk as much as I could and then filled in some bits of my own. The hat, for instance, had to be able to use Legilimancy, and I figured that was quite a Slytherin type of skill (although I know Dumbles mastered it as well). The Basilisk is odd, though. It seems kind of arbitary how it's created *sigh*, but never mind. I suppose a lot of them die when they hear the cockeral's crowing.
Thank you, again. ~Carole~