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Hi there! I’m Soraya. I’m seventeen years old and am a proud Muslim British Bangladeshi. I live in East London and have loved reading and writing from a young age. I’m rather obsessed with Harry Potter (aren’t we all?), tea (not a surprise considering I’m a Brit) and good grammar. Recently, I've also got into the Supernatural fandom. After watching the first episode, I had already fallen head over heels in love with Sam Winchester, so it's no surprise that I am now a huge SPN fangirl as well as a Potterhead.

My writing has changed quite a bit over the years, and I think you'll probably notice that, the further down my author page you go, the more the quality seems to drop :P I started posting stories on here at the age of fourteen, and at nearly eighteen, I can see how much my writing has improved since those Dark Ages. So, for that reason, I would advise you stick to the more recent stuff, if you choose to read anything of mine.

My Stories

Just so you know, these are posted firstly according to what kind of pairing, if any, is in the story, and then in chronological order in accordance to my own canon, not necessarily the order in which they were posted.

Canon Pairings

Checkmate (James/Lily)

My first chaptered fic. It’s terribly written, but I still have a place in my heart for it because of how much fun it was to write. This story has now been deleted on MNFF, but if you really, really want to read it, you can still find it on FF.net and HPFF. (I advise you don't, though :P)

Second Childishness and Mere Oblivion (James/Lily)

Written for Round One (Major Characters) of Madam Pomfrey’s Character Clinic Triathlon, this one-shot is about James and Lily’s relationship getting rockier and rockier after they left Hogwarts, especially when Lily is faced with the trials of being a wife and motherhood. A little smutty.

My Love is Always Here (James/Lily)

This was a belated birthday present for the wonderful Gina/Gmariam, aka the queen of James/Lily. This is mostly about Lily dealing with becoming a mother for the first time and the problems (as well as the joys) that come with that.

There's an Answer (Remus/Tonks)

Written for Sophie/The owl for SPEW Summer Swap IV. Tonks is sent on an interesting baby Auror assignment to do with werewolves. Remus and a dangerous Muggle are thrown into the mix, with interesting results.

Left Behind (Remus/Tonks)

An expanded version of one of my LoveNotes, written for SPEW. It's a missing moment set between OOTP and HBP, where in my head canon Remus and Tonks have been together, in secret, for a few weeks already and Remus is then told to go on his werewolf mission. Slightly smutty.

One and Only (Remus/Tonks)

Written for the lovely Alex/Ithinkrabis2people in the Ravenclaw Christmas Drabble Exchange. This is a missing moment set just after Tonks’s outburst to Remus in the hospital wing at the end of HBP.

Out of My Life (Harry/Ginny)

My only AU (kind of). I tweaked a small part of canon in this -- basically, Harry actually said goodbye to Ginny properly when he broke up with her. Very angsty, and this is only up for sentimental reasons, as I wrote it during The Dark Ages (aka when I was fourteen).

A Different Kind of Magic (Harry/Ginny)

Written for the You’re Having My Baby challenge at SIYE. Ginny finds out she’s pregnant, but Harry receives the news before her and therefore has to tell his wife. This was my first ever story at MNFF. It was written when I was thirteen, and it definitely shows.

A Different Kind of Magic 2: Parenthood (Harry/Ginny)

A sequel, obviously, to A Different Kind of Magic. Ginny goes into labour, and both Harry and Ginny realise what it means to be parents. Again, this was written from Back in the Days.

Same-Sex Pairings

The Caustic Ticking of the Clock (Rowena/Helga)

Written for the Great Hall Cotillion, this story is my only Founders story so far, and it’s about Rowena and Helga’s secret relationship. I am proud of this one, which doesn’t usually happen :)

Catching Fire (James/Sirius)

This was written for SPEW 007. My prompt was “Embers”, and it’s set just after Remus’s second transformation with the Marauders. James is badly injured, and he and Sirius realise, inadvertently, that they might just have feelings for each other. I like the pairing but still think the story needs work. One day I will go back and edit.

Flicker and Fail (Katie/Leanne)

This was written forSecret SPEW, and my recipient was the absolutely fabulous Alex/welshdevondragon. It’s my take on Leanne and Katie’s relationship from way before they were even at Hogwarts as well as what eventually happens to Katie in HBP, when she was cursed.

Next Generation

Skinny Love (Louis/Lily)

Written for the 2013 Great Hall Cotillion. Set during Teddy and Victoire's wedding, Louis helps Lily come to terms with her bulimia. This one was pretty difficult to write.

Blood and Roses (Scorpius/Rose, Scorpius/Dominique, Dominique/OC)

Written for the Great Hall Mysterious Maychallenge, this was my first Next Generation fic about Scorpius, mostly, and the trials he faces after his daughter is murdered.

Broken Glass (Louis/Lily)

This is the story of when Loulily really began. After the deaths of his immediate family, Louis is finding it hard to cope, even six months later. Lily somehow helps. It’s a little smutty. I’m proud of this one, too :)

The Highway of Regret (Scorpius/Lily, Scorpius/Rose, Louis/Lily)

Also written for the Great Hall Cotillion. It’s my one and only Scily. This is all about secret relationships and mistakes people make. Lily’s angry at Louis, and Scorpius has just broken up with Rose; when Lily gets drunk in the pub, things... happen. :P

I Will Lay Down My Heart (Albus/Rose, Scorpius/Rose)

Written for Round Two (Minor Characters) of Madam Pomfrey’s Character Clinic Triathlon. Albus has been in love with Rose for years, but what happened with them when they were younger has put a dent in their relationship. It doesn’t help that Rose is actually in love with Scorpius, either. This is smutty too.

One More Night (Albus/Rose, Rose/Scorpius)

Companion piece to I Will Lay Down My Heart. This goes into more detail about Rose and Albus's changing relationship as well as the aftermath of the events in said companion story. Probably the smuttiest thing on my page. :D Written for the Great Hall Cotillion 2013.

Glass (Louis/Lily)

This was written for the Great Hall-iday challenge for the Operation: Mistletoe prompt, and this was where my love for Loulily began.

Poetry

Excruciatingly Painful

This is about how five men in Potterverse dealt with remorse in different ways.

Always

This poem is about how Remus feels about Sirius (not slashy, btw).

Regret

Written for the Magic in Music challenge over inPoetry, Anyone? This was set to the track “Obliviate” in DH1 and is about Hermione modifying her parents’ memories.

Farewell

Written for the Goodbyechallenge in Poetry, Anyone? This was about saying goodbye, and how difficult it could be.

After All This Time

Written for the Deathly Hallows challenge inPoetry, Anyone?. I ship unrequited Snape/Lily, and this is probably the only time Snape will be on my author page, lol.

Hush, Dominique

Written for the MC Kreacher challenge inPoetry, Anyone? This was written from the POV of Bill Weasley after his wife’s death.

Miscellaneous

Bruises

Written for the Great Bannermakers’ Hallchallenge. The banner I picked had Merope Gaunt on it, and it’s probably my darkest story; it’s definitely the only one to have a dubious consent warning. It’s about, as you might guess, the abuse Merope suffered from her father and brother.

In Care (Marlene/OC)

Marlene McKinnon, as a care kid, eventually falls in love with another care kid, Jamal Olawumi. But he's a Muggle, and keeping her world secret proves difficult. This is definitely a story I would like to revisit and tidy up.

Just Across the Bar (Sirius/Rosmerta)

Sirius is just about of age, but obviously Rosmerta has misgivings about having feelings for Sirius, who is still a student. Written for the 2013 Great Hall Cotillion and also smutty.

Butterbeer Bottles

Written for SPEW 007. My prompt was “Juggling”, and it’s just a silly piece of dialogue-only banter between Remus and Sirius. Sirius realises Remus likes Tonks, and he tries to persuade Remus to act on his feelings.

Hanging by a Thread (Katie/Oliver)

Written for the lovely Jess/ToBeOrNotToBeAGryffindor for Secret SPEW VII. Katie is grieving and drowning her sorrows in alcohol and Oliver is trying his best to save Muggles, while trying also to bury feelings for Katie that he thought he had long since forgotten about. There is also, surprise surprise, some smut in this.


And that’s it! Along with being a moderator, I’m also a member of SPEWand SBBC. I hope to see you around on the forums; feel free to contact me via PM or review if you have any questions or comments about my stories!


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Apple-bobbing by Equinox Chick

Rated: 6th-7th Years • 11 Reviews Past Featured Story
Summary: Lisa Turpin - new recruit to Dumbledore's Army - is determined to prove her worth to the team. But when Ginny Weasley informs her that her patrol partner has changed, she isn't at all happy. Susan Bones is not a girl she's had much to do with, for the Hufflepuff girl has never excelled at anything.

But can an hour on patrol, and an accident with a foul smelling egg change things between them?

This story was an emergency fic for Natalie's birthday (in case I pulled the other one), but is also a Halloween tale about life under Snape and the Carrows. I have to thank Alex (welshdevondragon) for beta'ing and being AIM available for a chat.

Disclaimer: I'm not JK Rowling. You know that, don't you?


Reviewer: xxbabewithbrainsxx Signed
Date: 11/12/11 Title: Chapter 3: Consequences

Carole, I think I tried reviewing this about three times and it still wouldn't let me. *stabs archives*

Anyway, I really enjoyed reading this. Lisa/Susan is a wicked ship as I said, and you made it believable in this story. This chapter wrapped up the story nicely and I thought you did a brilliant job with Snape -- you didn't make him overly forgiving, but you also didn't make him completely evil. Snape in fanfic can drive me up the wall at times, but you always write him well.

I'm glad Lisa and Susan have their happy ending ... sort of, anyway. I loved the end bit about the apples -- it tied perfectly with the title and the artisty stuff was a lovely touch to Susan too.

Excellent story, Carole :) And I hope you write something else with Lisa and Susan, especially if it's Lavender compliant :D

~Soraya~

Author's Response: Thank youuuuuuuu. I'm glad you liked the story. It was just supposed to be a typical (if there is one) femmeslash story, but the darn plot got in the way - ha ha. Glad you liked Snape. There was a last minute addition with him, which my beta doesn't know about - ha ha - sorry, Alex. Basically i added the part about him staring at the parchment, so I hope you realised what that was about. Snape trod such a fine line in that last book. He had to be seen to be punishing the students, but he also had to protect them. I find that fascinating. And, I always thought he must have hated Halloween since Lily died which was why I had him ban it. I shall see about writing some more, but at the moment, I think I need to take a small break from further chaptereds and possibly from writing. Only a small break, though - ha ha.

Thank you again for the review. It is much appreciated. ~Carole~



All That's Left by iLuna17

Rated: 6th-7th Years • 8 Reviews
Summary: Then I saw Mum and Dad’s faces. It was the first time I had ever seen our father cry. And just like that, my already shattered heart split again. You broke our father, Al. Even Voldemort couldn’t do that. Dad looked like someone had stabbed him in the stomach, then twisted the knife for good measure. He and mum, they raised you, raised you to be strong, and you let them down. You failed them. You were a coward. A coward who broke our father.



Reviewer: xxbabewithbrainsxx Signed
Date: 02/12/12 Title: Chapter 1: All That's Left

Hi Ellie :)

I’ve seen a lot on your poetry thread and your drabbles that you have a somewhat “dark” head canon for Albus Severus, so I thought it was about time I read this story. I thought the summary was rather intriguing, told in second person and, it seems, addressing Albus. Just in the summary, you established James’s voice, and I think that was one of the main strengths in the story: a bitter James, and a harsh person at that. Had the story been written in any other viewpoint except James’s, I don't think it would have worked as well, so that was a good decision on your part. The emotions felt by James, Albus and the rest of the family in this piece are really intense, and second person really brought that out. I also think that the choice in POV made it seem like James was almost accusing Albus, in a way, and it generally just had a good effect on the story in terms of narrative.

I think you dealt with the subject of suicide delicately and appropriately. It is, as you say in your author’s notes, a sensitive topic, and therefore one that can be mishandled easily. But you handled it very well and realistically so, and the extra details (the evidence given to the Ministry, the mentions of self-harm and the reactions from the Potter and Weasley families) really helped with that. Of course, the main focus is James’s reaction to Albus’s death, but I liked how you explored the backstory and what happened prior to it. It really emphasised how badly James was affected, in a subtle way that I really liked.

Onto characterisation. This, as I said, was a major strength in the story. The fact that James flits from one emotion to the next tells the reader how conflicted he feels, and I think you conveyed his feelings well in this way. I thought it interesting that James was sorted into Gryffindor and Albus in Slytherin. Unfortunately, Slytherin!Albus has become a bit of a cliché, and I think, for it to work in a story, there needs to be a well-argued case for me to believe it. I think you could have developed Albus’s characterisation more, because in the story, you’re only really telling the reader that he was Sorted into Slytherin, not why, and I found it was less convincing for me. I realise it is written from James’s POV, but I still think you could have portrayed some of Albus’s Slytherin-like tendencies in the story.

Something else I wasn’t entirely sure about was the return of a “Voldemort” three decades after the fall of the real Voldemort. Again, like with Slytherin!Albus, I feel that if you wanted to use what I think is an oft-used plot point in the fandom, perhaps you could develop it more. Who is this man? Why is he suddenly killing people? Where did he come from? These are just a few of the questions that arose in my head when reading about Albus’s killer, and I would have liked to know more. That said, I did like the ending. I felt it was necessary because it answered the mystery of Albus’s death, and I thought it was written very well.

Overall, Ellie, this was an interesting story, with an intriguing premise. The style in which it was written, as a monologue, essentially, by James, was one of its strengths, and it was a good read. I can’t really say it was an enjoyable one, because it’s difficult to enjoy something when the subject matter is suicide, but nevertheless, it was well-written. Well done, SPEW buddy :)

~Soraya~

Author's Response: Wow. Thank you for the wonderful review, Soraya. It was a dark subject, but I'm glad you think I handled it well. When I was writing it, I was trying to think of how I would feel if one of my siblings had died, (this idea came after a very disturbing dream) and I realized I would feel confused, especially if they had taken their own life. So I'm glad I did it justice.

As for Albus and his Slytherin-ness . . . I just can't picture Albus in any other house. I probably should go into it more, but I think I mention Albus having his "mask". He doesn't wear his emotions on his face, and he's essentially not brave enough to tell James or anyone he was bullied.

Ah, the new Voldemort. Originally I was actually going to have Al kill himself, but when Alex (Deathlex) and I were going through a month-long betaing process, we decided it didn't feel right with the character we had created for Albus. Also, (and I'm really not trying to advertise) a lot more is explained in the companion piece I just posted. He's not really a new Voldemort, but even in good times there are still bad people. That also, is another dark one.

Thanks again for the amazing review. I never thought of it as a monologue, but now that I am I like it. (I had no idea I was writing in 2nd person until your review) Seriously, thanks. It is definitely way beyond SPEW worthy, Soraya. :)

See ya in SPEW, Ellie



Ribbons and Tangerines by ToBeOrNotToBeAGryffindor

Rated: 3rd-5th Years • 7 Reviews
Summary: A lot of people had found themselves bereft after the war, but Pansy Parkinson had never expected that she would be one of them. But a bizarre encounter and an impromptu dinner date served to change not only her fortunes, but her hopes of earning a little bit of redemption, as well.


This story has also been nominated for a 2012 Quicksilver Quill: Best Non-Canon Romance Story.


Reviewer: xxbabewithbrainsxx Signed
Date: 11/10/11 Title: Chapter 1: ---

Ooooh, it's nice to read something of yours in the middle of doing my statistics courework at school, lol. Depsite being a Harry/Ginny (and the occasional Harmony) shipper, I did enjoy this. In fact, I confess that I didn't think much of Harry/Pansy in the past, but I agree with you -- I think I've got a soft spot for it :D

It wasn't fluffy, per se, but it was a lot lighter than your usual fare, lol. Excellent story, Jess, and it's nice to read your work again :)

~Soraya~



Author's Response:

It's nice to actually be writing again. This was churned out in three days as a pinch hit, so that considering, I'm rather pleased with how it turned out. It isn't what one could call a traditional romance, but it was one that happened because both of them needed a new chapter in their lives and the other just happened to be there to fulfil that.

I have to say, I seriously wanted one of those Tangerine ribbon corsage thingies after coming up with it. How cute would that be, hehe.

Ta for the review. :D

~Jess



What You Wanted by Padfoot11333

Rated: 3rd-5th Years • 6 Reviews
Summary: In Tom Riddle's first Christmas vacation at Hogwarts, he is lonely.
Reviewer: xxbabewithbrainsxx Signed
Date: 01/29/12 Title: Chapter 1: What You Wanted

Hello, Lily!

I’m sorry for taking so long to review this. I must say, I did enjoy this story, and I’m glad to be SPEW buddies with you. It’s meant I get to read another story of yours, which is nice :) I thought the premise of this story was intriguing. I mean, it’s not something I put great thought into at the time, but looking back, when I found out that Tom had used the Room of Requirement, *how* he discovered it would make an interesting story. I certainly thought this was the case here.

I have to say, your summary was what drew me in -- if I hadn’t asked you for a rec, this is probably the story I would have clicked on anyway, because your summary was intriguing, short and to the point. I particularly liked how you didn't really give anything away in the summary, and I liked the fact that it was just one sentence, as well. I do have a minor Britpick, however: in Britain, we refer to the Christmas holiday as precisely that -- a holiday, not a vacation. I noticed that you also used “vacation” in the actual story, and it’s just something I picked up on that you might want to change. But that is quite a small thing, really.

As far as characterisation goes, I did find the idea of Tom being bullied an interesting one as well. I mean, all we have to go on in canon about the boy Tom Riddle is what Dumbledore said about him, really, so I liked that you drew on that, especially the fact that he was a loner. I know how easily that could trigger bullying, and I think you dealt with that topic well. Your characterisation of Tom is even more impressive given how complex a character Tom is. For example, the reason behind Tom’s bullying is rather ironic, as well, and subtly so -- the fact that he was teased and mocked for heritage, or lack thereof, made me see Tom’s actions in later Hogwarts life in a different light. As in, he didn't hate Muggleborns just because he was a Slytherin, but also, the fact that he himself was classed as one until he found out about his witch mother.

That said, still on the characterisation front, I do think that you could have fleshed out the Slytherin(s) chasing Tom more. I noticed that none of them were given names, and this did lessen their presence slightly. Even if you didn't want to name them, I think it would be more effective if their dialogue was more than simply "Where did you go, Tom?" and perhaps a little more insulting. After all, he *is* being bullied, and I thought that the characterisation was a bit too played down for my liking. I think their emphasis is especially important because of their role in making Tom into the person he becomes.

Plot-wise, as I said, I liked the premise of this story. I also thought that Tom’s change of mind, or, rather, his decision -- to make allies rather than friends -- was a realistic one that kept to canon characterisation. His reasoning made sense, and I think the choice he made was a good ending to the story, as was the friendship he struck up with Avery. I do, however, have a slight qualm about the final paragraph (beginning with “So even though Tom Riddle never really had a friend...”). I felt that you ventured too far into the future, as if it was a commentary to the story, both which seemed out of place to me.

However, that even though that sudden jump to the future wasn’t really expected, I also think that, on the whole, despite my other qualms (which were quite minor anyway), this story was well-written and foreshadowed Tom’s later life really well. It was a fascinating character study, and an interesting delve into Tom Riddle’s mind. Well done :)

Author's Response: Helloo SPEW buddy! (I'm literally writing your review right now, don't worry). Thank you for such a lovely review--I'm glad you liked it. Somehow I do think I'm better at characterising minor characters rather than major ones because you know less about them and therefore you can really go anywhere with them. I love doing that. Thank you for the Britpick, I'm fairly good with spelling but awful with words like those. Thanks agaiin for such a lovely review! Lily xxx



Somewhere Only We Know by Gmariam

Rated: 6th-7th Years • 9 Reviews
Summary: Remus Lupin reflects on his past as he faces an uncertain future after the death of a close mentor.
Reviewer: xxbabewithbrainsxx Signed
Date: 11/13/11 Title: Chapter 1: Simple Things

Gina, I loved this! Nothing like a good dose of Remus/Tonks to start my day :D

I thought your characterisation of Remus was spot on, and I loved your Tonks as well. I thought the way you structured the story was great, but not confusing or anything.


"Mourn for the lives that have been lost, Remus, not for your own. Remember them, but do not forget yourself. You would do them an injustice were you to simply give in to your grief. There is still much to live for."

That was my favourite part! You had Dumbledore down to a tee -- well done ;) Lovely story, Gina, and boooo to bad formatting.

~Soraya~



Author's Response: Thanks so much Soraya! Ooh, I'm glad the structure wasn't confusing--looking at it on the archive I did worry about that and about about adding *** for the breaks or even a horizontal line, but that would just seem to crowd it up. I'm glad you were able to follow it and enjoyed it. Thank you for the compliment on Remus. And that last bit of Dumbledore took me some heavy thinking so yay for it working! Thanks again for the lovely review!! ~Gina :)



Safe House by ToBeOrNotToBeAGryffindor

Rated: 6th-7th Years • 19 Reviews
Summary: Pansy Parkinson’s carefree world was toppled when she overheard her father’s murder and caught a glimpse of the killer. Forced into hiding by the Ministry, she is compelled to co-habitate with, of all the bloody people on the planet, Harry Potter. Can these two live together in cramped quarters without there being another murder, or can they find common ground that had eluded them since they last encountered one another?
Reviewer: xxbabewithbrainsxx Signed
Date: 12/08/11 Title: Chapter 4: Chapter 4

Oooh, Jess, what a fab story! I'm sorry I couldn't review earlier, but things have been really busy for me with exams and stuff :(

Anyway, yay to Harry/Pansy again :D It is a ship I have a soft spot for, hehe. But what I think you accomplished in this story is that you retained their respective characters, especially the fact that they are so different from each other. And the chemistry between them is so tangible and real, and by doing that, you made the pairing believable.

But I also liked the actiony bits in this too. You write action really well, and I liked how the story was a mystery as well as a romance.

Anyway, useless review, but great story. Ooh, and I loved the open ending -- though if you wanted to keep it canon (and I'm assuming you are, since there aren't any AU/EWE warnings) then Harry/Pansy wouldn't last, would it?

Enough rambling. Nice to read your work again, Jess :)

~Soraya~



Author's Response:

Alas, I don't think Harry and Pansy could ever last, but I do believe that Harry after the war would need a kick in the butt to bring him back to real life and learn to live for himself rather than for the greater good. It's a bit different from my normal universe, but in the end it's the same.

I have a habit of leaving shippy stories that I don't think will end well with an open ending. For instance, Ribbons and Tangerines: open end. Wild Card: open end. This story: open end. Other stories of mine (which shall remain nameless and without specified pairings): open ending.

Anyway...useless author response. Thanks for reading, and I'm glad you liked it. I wasn't too sure about it after I sent it to the exchange mod, but it went over well in the fic exchange. Whatever. My brain hurts. *hugs*

~Jess



The Untrodden Path by Equinox Chick

Rated: 6th-7th Years • 16 Reviews Past Featured Story
Summary: Draco Malfoy -avid Death Eater, proud and eager to be of use to the Dark Lord. Or desperate boy willing to do anything to save his family from dishonour and his father from death? Perhaps both.

What if there'd been another way? What if the road he's taking could diverge and lead him on a different journey? His path is set, he thinks... but then he collides with an insignificant girl and his world changes.

This story is for Julia (the opaleye) whose poetical skill with words leaves me breathless. It is also her 21st birthday. Apologies that I didn't use your fabulous alternate title 'An Act of Selecting or Making A Decision When Faced With Two or More Possibilities?'

Disclaimer: Much as I'd love to be JK Rowling, I'm not :(

Thank you Kara for beta'ing this and minna for mentioning the Robert Frost poem 'The Road Not Taken,' from which I've taken some lines.

** indicates lines taken from Harry Potter and The Goblet of Fire.
Reviewer: xxbabewithbrainsxx Signed
Date: 11/23/11 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1 ~ Choices

Carole, this is really interesting! I <3 rarepairs, and this one is possibly unique. You made Pansy such a b!tch in this (and it so worked -- I probably hate her as much as Malfoy does), and I also thought Draco's characterisation had just enough snark in it, but also you could see the decency in him. And I just love Hannah -- she's really self-righteous and loyal to her house.

And I love that quote by Dumbledore. It's one of my favourites. Anyway, interesting beginning, Carole, and I'd like to see where this goes. Happy birthday to Julia :)



Author's Response: Thank you, very much. I hope you like Hannah in the next chapters. She is rather self-righteous here, I can see that, although perhaps it's idealism. I love that quote =, too. Makes me tear up whenever I read it. Pansy is a right biyothc - I agree. ha ha ha. Thanks again ~Carole~



Reviewer: xxbabewithbrainsxx Signed
Date: 11/24/11 Title: Chapter 2: Chapter 2 ~Divergence

Carole, I enjoyed this! (I always do, lol.) Seriously, you have Draco to a tee here -- he's characterised perfectly without making him smirk too much, hehe. And I think what is often your greatest strength, and certainly this is the case in this story, you can take any two random characters and write them with so much chemistry, even though they don't even know each other. And I think this shows just how much talent you have with words <3

Your version of Hannah is also really interesting, and still compliant to the fact that she is a Hufflepuff.

I'm interested to see where this goes, and how much you've stretched canon to write it...

~Soraya~



Author's Response: Thank you. I don't think I've stretched canon too much with this. It's still compliant with the books and what we actually know of the characters. people's perceptions of the characters are, of course, a different matter. I don;t, for instance, think Hannah is always going to be the flustered girl from the exams, not if she later ends up owning and running a pub - that takes guts and strength of character.

I'm glad you enjoyed the story. I'm tweaking the end a little, but it's basically done. Thanks again - much appreciated ~Carole~



Reviewer: xxbabewithbrainsxx Signed
Date: 11/29/11 Title: Chapter 3: Chapter 3 ~ Decisions

Carole, that was a lovely end to teh story :)

What I liked the most was that you had that chemistry between Hannah and Draco, so much so that I'm close to becoming a Drannah shipper (that sounds like such a classy ship, lol) and yet you kept it canon. And what frustrates me a lot is when people stick the AU tag to fit a ship -- this, on the other hand, fit seamlessly into canon. I think this was my favourite line:

“I didn’t like you much at Hogwarts, Draco, even when we were together, but I think I could have loved you.

I think that really summed up their relationship and what it could have been like.

I thought you wrote Hannah really welll, particularly when she found out her mum was dead. That was a terrible moment in the sixth book and I thought you illustrated it so, so well.

Oh, and I laughed so hard at the end notes. Reading the whole of High -- done that already, hehe. And definitely agreed on Julia being a truly amazing writer. And so are you, Carole, because this story was an excellent one!

~Soraya~



Author's Response: Thank youuuuu, so so much for reviewing. Mmm, I'm not fond of AU so if I ever write one it'll have to be for a better reason than sticking an un canon ship together. I actually like working with canon, although I have to admit this was hard given the tiny time frame Draco and Hannah had together.

I found that scene where Hannah found out about her mum very hard to write. I don;t like sad things to happen. Snark and smut I can do. Anger I can take. Sadness upsets me :(

Thank you very much again. ~Carole~



Merry-Go-Round by LoonyLupin

Rated: 6th-7th Years • 3 Reviews
Summary: When you love someone, they stay with you until your last day on earth. And nothing can kill you faster.

Some secrets are so full of confusion and agony that they leave your mind and heart spinning for days, even years. Deanne Jenkins knows this feeling all too well, thanks to one girl: Nymphadora Tonks.

New chapter is up! The italicized quote is from the last chapter.
Reviewer: xxbabewithbrainsxx Signed
Date: 03/22/12 Title: Chapter 2: Tumbling Backwards

Hiya :) Sorry I've taken an age to get back to this. RL and writing my own work has kept me super-busy until now, nearly four months later, lol.

Anyway, I did enjoy this, though perhaps a little less than the previous chapter. I think part of the reason was because you had a lot of time shifts, and the transitions between past and present came across as abrupt. As in, Deanne would receive a letter, and she'd go straight to her Pensieve. I wanted to see more of her daily life, for you to develop her character more. Besides which, she didn't *have* to use her Pensieve every time she wanted to relive a memory. I think it could have worked perfectly well with her just remembering it, and it would appear more natural, too.

However, despite my qualms, I did like this. Deanne is a lovely character, and I think you did a nice job of fleshing her out and showing her feelings for Tonks increasing. I think an issue I had in the first chapter was that there weren't many scenes of their friendship developing, but in this chapter, this wasn't a problem at all, and the memories you chose were well-selected.

Onto the next chapter! Apologies again for being a bit rubbish with this, especially given your story only has one review :( It deserves more, in my opinion. I hope I haven't been too harsh.

~Soraya~



Reviewer: xxbabewithbrainsxx Signed
Date: 03/22/12 Title: Chapter 3: Ghosts and Memories

Oh, I liked how this ended :)

Initially, I was rather curious as to how you would keep this canon compliant, especially given the fact that you're a Remus/Tonks shipper yourself. So yes, the ending pleasantly surprised me. I love happy endings, but I also have a thing for sad endings, or open ones, at least.

I think one of the things I kind of forgot was how difficult a time Tonks was going through during DH. First, Remus left her, and then they used the Cruciatus Curse on her mum and then her dad had to go on the run and then he died. You reminded me of all of that through Tonks's letters, and it worked well.

Anyway, I've got to go, so sorry to cut this quite short, but I did enjoy this. I hope you don't think I was being too harsh or anything -- I think all the areas of improvement that I mentioned could easily be remedied by a bit of tweaking, so yeah. Good story, well done :)



Reviewer: xxbabewithbrainsxx Signed
Date: 12/26/11 Title: Chapter 1: Merry-Go-Round

Hello! I must say that despite being an avid Remus/Tonks shipper, especially having written one myself, I still love it when Remus and/or Tonks are shipped with other people, too. I liked this -- Deanne is an interesting OC, and I liked the way you showed her feelings for Tonks increase during their years together in Hogwarts. I thought the mirror scene was rather powerful as well.

However, I do think that in order to make their romance a little more convincing (and it's probably rich coming from me, lol, since I had the same problem myself with a recent story of mine), I think you needed more scenes of Tonks and Deanne's friendship after their first year, It would add more weight to the story and it would also flesh out Deanne more, because so far, we don't really know much about her.

But anyway, you have an intriguing start, and I'd like to know where this goes, so I shall be keeping an eye out for updates! :)

~Soraya~



Author's Response: When you mentioned the large chunk of their friendship that I left out, I guess I meant to start at the second section. I'm going to label "First Impressions" as a prologue. I ship Tonks with Remus, too, by the way :) Thanks for the kind words!



Set Fire by LittleJM

Rated: 3rd-5th Years • 2 Reviews
Summary: She had a way of falling for him in every way, including his blatant lies. Ten years later, she may not be able to recognise him, but outward appearances don't always prove a change inside.
Susan Bones/Theodore Nott
A drabble-turned-oneshot written for Soraya/babewithbrains for the Ravenclaw Christmas Drabble Exchange!
Reviewer: xxbabewithbrainsxx Signed
Date: 12/23/11 Title: Chapter 1: Set Fire

Hi Joy!

This is Soraya :) I enjoyed this! I must admit that when I set the prompts, I honestly had no idea what to expect, but I love Theo/Susan to pieces, so this was a lovely surprise :)

Rarepairs are great fun, aren't they? I really liked the set up of the story, starting with Susan waking up to find Theo next to her, and then going backwards. The scene in the pub was great, and I liked Theo's characterisation and his description. I thought the chemistry between Theo and Susan was written nicely, too :)

Anyway, I can't seem to think straight today, so I shall stop rambling. I hope you have a good Christmas, and thank you again for writing such a lovely story!

~Soraya~



Author's Response: Thank you! I'm glad that you liked it! When I got the prompts, your song prompts are what really gave me ideas. So I listened to all of them (some of which, I must admit, have been played countless times on my computer). The one that really got me thinking was Set Fire to the Rain, and from then on, this story just stuck. It's a great song to write to! Once again, I'm so glad you liked it and I hope your holidays are great as well! :]



Misperception by Equinox Chick

Rated: 3rd-5th Years • 10 Reviews
Summary: Because Angelina Weasley had an irritating tendency to match-make, Oliver Wood had made excuses the last few times he'd been invited to to one of her parties. But after the revelations in the Daily Prophet about his personal life, he rather hoped he'd be safe this year.

But he'd reckoned without her determination that everyone needs some festive joy at Christmas.

Disclaimer: I am not JK Rowling, despite the spaghetti bologneise.

Thank you very much to Natalie (hestiajones) for beta'ing this and for being supportive. Thanks also to my flist who have put up with a lot of wangst from me recently. Thanks also to Maple for an interesting point she made in an SBBC discussion about Oliver ...

This is Equinox Chick from Hufflepuff , writing for the Great Hall-iday Challenge - prompt 3 Operation:Mistletoe.

IT WON!!!!!!!!!!

Due to an extremely prudish glitch affecting the boards, stories rated 6th-7th or Professors cannot be read, at the moment. For this reason I have temporarily lowered the rating, although this is really 6th-7th. You have been warned.
Reviewer: xxbabewithbrainsxx Signed
Date: 12/21/11 Title: Chapter 1: Misperception.

Ooooooooooh. Carole, this was a lovely story! I must admit that when I saw the length of it, it did seem a little daunting, but by the time I reached the end of it, I was actually surprised that it had already finished -- meaning that despite its length, it never dragged or anything.

And wow, what a cool pairing! Oliver/Daphne -- now, that's a rarepair and a half, hehe. And as you always do, this seemingly random pairing was made believable and plausible, while maintaining the Oliver/Cedric pairing at the same time, as in, it was clear Oliver had loved Cedric, but there was still that chemistry between Daphne and Oliver. And that chemistry, along with the excellent dialogue, made the pairing so believable and natural.

I liked the little touches of the French guy, and Roger, and I thought it was interesting that Oliver had basically outed himself in the paper, which was very Gryffindor :) Also, I thought it interesting that you had Oliver almost in Slytherin. It definitely makes sense to me -- though, as I was saying in my SBBC discussion, most people have a bit of every House in them so this isn't surprising.

I loved the interaction with Roxy at the beginning, too, and I couldn't help but be reminded of another story. *coughWildCardcough* LOL. I also liked the fact that Oliver went and confronted his past by going to the grave, and with Daphne. By the way, why was Oliver's licence taken off him?

Anyway, I shall stop rambling now. Terrible review, but this was a wonderful wonderful wonderful story. Congrats on the 101 as well XD

~Soraya~

Author's Response: Helloooo. Thank you for the review. Ummm, answers to questions first. I have it in mind that you have to get your licence renewed, and Oliver never bothered because he hates Apparition. I think I mentioned this in DNW and it just kind of stuck in my head. I have paired these two up before, btw in Zeitgeist, but this isn;t really compliant with that. I like Daphne at the moment, so I want to pair her with people - hee.

Yes, the length daunted me a little - ha. I nearly split it, but I thought it worked better as a oneshot because there was no convenient break point.

You've just reminded me that I wanted to thank someone (I think it's Maple) who mentioned in that SBBC convo about Oliver being a Slyth because that prompted that bit of dialogue. Must go and ferret that out.

Oh and yeah, the bit with Roxy was ... ha ha ... either a tribute to my birthday fic, or a very unsubtle attempt to suck up to one of the GH judges.

Thank you again :D ~Carole~



Just a Boy by ToBeOrNotToBeAGryffindor

Rated: 3rd-5th Years • 3 Reviews
Summary:

Who we are is seldom who we were or who we will be, sometimes for the better and sometimes for the worse. Sometimes, in special circumstances, we choose one and hold onto it because the alternative simply is not an option.

And so it was for Adam Mulciber and Mary MacDonald.


Reviewer: xxbabewithbrainsxx Signed
Date: 08/26/12 Title: Chapter 1: Just a Girl

Oooooh, I liked that :) I think it was a good insight into what Mulciber actually did to Mary Macdonald -- though I was surprised when it tunred out they were best friends. That was certainly unexpected. But I can so see that happening! it's a bit like Lily and Severus, only Mary is richer and half-blood, presumably, rather than Muggleborn like Lily. And, ha, Mary actually seems to have returned Mulciber's feelings here.

The only criticism I have is that I think it was too short. It could have been expnaded in places, particularly the end -- I would have liked to see what happened after their kiss, if Mary went on the run in teh end, etc.

But other than that, I don';t know why you thought this was meh. I didn't think it was. It was a nice read :)

Author's Response:

Hellooooo!

I reread this myself, just to get a feel for it, and I suppose it's not so much meh as it is average. Nothing spectacular, but not bad, either. It was written in a hurry (um, three hours or so, lol) and slapdash edited, so that it's readable is nice.

I did worry that this was a bit too much like Lily/Snape, but the difference was that Mary had the ability within her to forgive Adam for what he did and what he became. Lily would never have forgiven Severus. Mary really did care about Adam, despite all of it, even if a small part of her hated him for making her feel the way he did.

The story was short for a reason: because it was how Mary wanted to remember Adam. What happened afterward were events she would have far preferred to forget. So the story doesn't include them, but instead stops just before he tears her heart to shreds and stamps on the pieces.

Anyway, thank youuuuuu for the review! I'm glad you liked the story and have slaked your curiosity as to its contents. <3

~Jess



D by ToBeOrNotToBeAGryffindor

Rated: 6th-7th Years • 12 Reviews
Summary:

 

Over fifty brave souls perished during the fight that took down You-Know-Who’s regime. However, not all of the victims of the clash that ended just this morning set foot on the grounds of Hogwarts last night. Numerous family members and friends will be spending these next weeks not celebrating, but planning funerals while raking up the pieces of their lives and wondering where they are supposed to go from here.
 

One boy was lost and alone -- looking for a lifeline, crying for help. But is anyone listening?


This story was nominated for two 2012 Quicksilver Quill Awards: Best Dark/Angst Story and Best General Story.



Reviewer: xxbabewithbrainsxx Signed
Date: 12/27/11 Title: Chapter 1: Dear Harry

Jessssss! (Or should I say Jessaclaw, or Your Awesomeness... lol.)

I have already squeed about this on LJ and AIM but I thought I would make it official :) Just wow. Seriously, this is brilliant. Stan is a wonderful song, a great character study, and of all people to choose to be Stan, what an interesting choice with Dennis Creevey. Colin's death was one that was quite upsetting in DH, and I find Dennis's reaction to that is so rarely explored in fanfic. I loved the format of the story, how the entire thing was written purely using letters and articles, and then that killer "Oh" at the end. Wooooow. So much emotion packed into what is actually quite a short story, enough to move me to tears.

I also loved the fact that Harry was the person Dennis was writing to -- I definitely think that he would have got a lot of letters after the war, so it's only inevitable that he wouldn't be able to reply to them all. But what's even sadder is that Dennis never signed off with his actual name. If he did, I'm sure Harry could have helped him -- hmm, actually I don't know.

Anyway, this is in no way a SPEW review, but this was a lovely story, and written for me, as well!

Author's Response:

Honestly, I'm glad you didn't hate this. When I finished it, I was a bit worried, as I'd ignored your prompts for the most part and delved into a subject I wasn't even sure you cared about. Lucky me, hehe.

Killing Dennis wasn't something I relished or even planned in my brainiverse; actually, in my 'universe', he becomes a writer who takes on the challenge of interviewing all of the survivors of the battle and the victims' families to complete not so much a historical representation, but a 'you had to be there to understand, but this is the next best thing' chronicle of events. As you can see, he's rather articulate.

Harry was the natural choice for Dennish to write to. Who else would one look to when one has lost everything and needs assurance that everything will turn out okay? Harry's been kicked around by life so much and managed to get through the war not only alive, but standing tall. And that Colin had painted this almost super-human image of Harry to his little brother, it's almost like a kid writing to God or Santa Claus, looking for answers or inspiration or even something to believe in. 

I do believe that one letter from Harry could've changed everything. Just as one text or letter from Eminem could've kept Stan from going completely over the edge, but the price of casting one's lot in with celebrities is that you end up being one of many and have to wait your turn. :/

Anyway, thanks for the second review, and I'm so glad you didn't hate this. :D 

~Jess



Beyond The Sea by Gmariam

Rated: 3rd-5th Years • 3 Reviews
Summary: Escaping the overwhelming revelry of another miserable New Year's Eve, Draco Malfoy finds himself drawn to an old seaside resort from his childhood. He meets an unexpected ally there, and the shore soon becomes his escape from life, a place where he can be free of his past. Little did he know that it would also hold the key to his future.

This is Gmariam of Ravenclaw writing for the Inaugural Great Hall Cotillion Challenge.
Reviewer: xxbabewithbrainsxx Signed
Date: 03/05/12 Title: Chapter 1: Somewhere, waiting for me

Gina, this was lovely :) It was perhaps not my favourite story of yours (though I suspect that's more because of my canon card than anything, lol) but I still liked it. I liked how you brought Draco and Luna together, on New Year's Eve, and how they found common ground through creatures and so on.

I loved their first kiss. I think it was so beautifully written, especially against such a gorgeous backdrop of the beach. That was definitely one of the strongest points in the story -- the description. It was so vivid and really made me feel like I was actually there, which was great :)

Nice one, Gina :D

Author's Response: Thanks so much, Soraya! I'm glad you liked it. I don't expect every story to go in the favorites, category, lol. Especially something like this. It was an idea I was kicking around for a while--I don't write rarepairs much, so this was a great chance for me to finally give it a try! The description comment is funny, because my original idea had nothing to do with the beach, but then it almost became it's own character. I even looked at pictures! Anyway - thanks so much for the lovely review! ~Gina :)



Something Strange by hestiajones

Rated: 6th-7th Years • 6 Reviews
Summary: Louis hadn't quite expected to fall in love with him, but he did.



A gift for my mistress, lucca4. Also, an entry for the Inaugural GH Cotillion Challenge.

Disclaimer: This is not J.K.Rowling. It'd be cool if she shipped Luna's son with Fleur's, though.
Reviewer: xxbabewithbrainsxx Signed
Date: 03/07/12 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Ooooooh, that was really good, Natalie! (Apologies for the continuous r-bombing.)

Despite the fact that Louis is with Lily (hehehehe), I did enjoy this quite a bit. I can't remember ever coming across this pairing before, so kudos to you for writing such a wonderful and believable rarepair.

I think, occasionally with your writing -- and I hope you don't mind me saying so -- the changes in POV/tense can be a tad confusing, but in this story, I really liked the shifts in narrative, from first person to second person. It worked really well, and I think it showed a great insight into Louis's mind.

I think one of the things I liked the most was Lysander's characterisation. So, yeah, he's not quite as weird as his mum, but he's still strange, and I liked how all of that tied in with the title so nicely as well. Oh, and I liked the fact that this "strangeness" is what caused them to get together in the first place.

Anyway, though I don't think I could ever ship this pairing, I still really enjoyed reading this. Well done! :D

Author's Response: I didn't think you'd read this ha ha. I am not really sure I ship them either. I just wrote it for the challenge because no one was using them. :D I am glad that the first person/second person switch worked out. It was necessary to do that for characterisation reasons.

I don't mind you telling me that. It does give me an idea of how my writing is being received by readers. Thank you for saying that. I do try to make the voices distinct and leave markers between the temporal shifts. I suppose I'll just have to be a bit more careful next time. Thanks for the review monsoonnnn!



Swans by Equinox Chick

Rated: 3rd-5th Years • 16 Reviews
Summary: I’m twenty-seven years old, so why can’t I just say no, or plead a headache and stay in my room?

Molly (jnr) was a Weasley with a difference. Not sparkling, not brave, not reckless. She was diligent and loyal, and usually overlooked.

For who notices ducklings when swans are gliding by?

I am not JK Rowling. You all know that. I am Equinox Chick and this is one of my entries for the Great Hall Inaugural Cotillion.


IT WONNNNN!!!!!!!!!!! (joint first with A Splendid Fate by hestiajones - you should all go and read that - it's very fab)Thank you judges for being amazing

Many thanks to Natalie (hestiajones) and Kara (Karaley Dargen) for their help with beta'ing this story.

The line about 'porridge' is a tip someone told me photographers use.

Due to the infuriating prissy glitch infecting the archives, I have downgraded this story's rating to 3rd-5th. However, this is actually a PROFESSORS story, so please do not click if sexual situations are likely to offend.
Reviewer: xxbabewithbrainsxx Signed
Date: 03/05/12 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1 - Ducks

You may or may not have noticed that I'm kind of spamming you today, hehe. But I wanted to get through my TBR list tonight, so yeah.

I loved this! (What's new, eh?) I think you've given Molly a really interesting personality, and Audrey and Lucy too. Ahhhh, NGL, Aaron is rather gorgeous :) But Hebe is such a biatch, and Barney is bloody horrible and mean and thoughtless. Good for Molly for getting rid of him, lol. He didn't deserve her.

I love the swans and everything. They're such graceful creatures, and I think it's so original for you to use that as the premise of your story. Ooooh, and the age difference between them is interesting -- especially with Molly being older, though it's not a significant age gap so it's all good. I'd love to see where this goes, so I shall see you on teh next chapter, Croll!

Author's Response: Thank youuuuuuuu. Oh, age gap age gap age gap - hahahahahahha.

Aaron is in High - very briefly - and I plan on featuring him in another story - post High, but pre-Swans - which will explain his rivalry with Hugo, so I'm pleased you liked him. ~Carole~



Reviewer: xxbabewithbrainsxx Signed
Date: 03/05/12 Title: Chapter 2: Chapter 2 - Pearls

Yayyyyy, they got their happy ending. And Audrey can go rot >.< Seriously, I don't know *who* in their right mind would expect their daughter to overlook something like that.

And I loved the thing about pearls. I never knew that! I really like how, while being entertained, I can also be educated :D

Anyway, I've got to dash, but this was definitely one of my favouritest stories in the challenge :)

Author's Response: I think Percy had the measure of Audrey when he said she hated being wrong and couldn't believe she'd made such a colossal error of judgement with Barnabas. I hope she'll calm down and become more decent if I ever write a follow up, but for some reason I've always seen her as a shrew.

Thank you so much for all the reviews, Soraya. It is much appreciated. ~Carole~