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Hi there! I’m Soraya. I’m seventeen years old and am a proud Muslim British Bangladeshi. I live in East London and have loved reading and writing from a young age. I’m rather obsessed with Harry Potter (aren’t we all?), tea (not a surprise considering I’m a Brit) and good grammar. Recently, I've also got into the Supernatural fandom. After watching the first episode, I had already fallen head over heels in love with Sam Winchester, so it's no surprise that I am now a huge SPN fangirl as well as a Potterhead.

My writing has changed quite a bit over the years, and I think you'll probably notice that, the further down my author page you go, the more the quality seems to drop :P I started posting stories on here at the age of fourteen, and at nearly eighteen, I can see how much my writing has improved since those Dark Ages. So, for that reason, I would advise you stick to the more recent stuff, if you choose to read anything of mine.

My Stories

Just so you know, these are posted firstly according to what kind of pairing, if any, is in the story, and then in chronological order in accordance to my own canon, not necessarily the order in which they were posted.

Canon Pairings

Checkmate (James/Lily)

My first chaptered fic. It’s terribly written, but I still have a place in my heart for it because of how much fun it was to write. This story has now been deleted on MNFF, but if you really, really want to read it, you can still find it on FF.net and HPFF. (I advise you don't, though :P)

Second Childishness and Mere Oblivion (James/Lily)

Written for Round One (Major Characters) of Madam Pomfrey’s Character Clinic Triathlon, this one-shot is about James and Lily’s relationship getting rockier and rockier after they left Hogwarts, especially when Lily is faced with the trials of being a wife and motherhood. A little smutty.

My Love is Always Here (James/Lily)

This was a belated birthday present for the wonderful Gina/Gmariam, aka the queen of James/Lily. This is mostly about Lily dealing with becoming a mother for the first time and the problems (as well as the joys) that come with that.

There's an Answer (Remus/Tonks)

Written for Sophie/The owl for SPEW Summer Swap IV. Tonks is sent on an interesting baby Auror assignment to do with werewolves. Remus and a dangerous Muggle are thrown into the mix, with interesting results.

Left Behind (Remus/Tonks)

An expanded version of one of my LoveNotes, written for SPEW. It's a missing moment set between OOTP and HBP, where in my head canon Remus and Tonks have been together, in secret, for a few weeks already and Remus is then told to go on his werewolf mission. Slightly smutty.

One and Only (Remus/Tonks)

Written for the lovely Alex/Ithinkrabis2people in the Ravenclaw Christmas Drabble Exchange. This is a missing moment set just after Tonks’s outburst to Remus in the hospital wing at the end of HBP.

Out of My Life (Harry/Ginny)

My only AU (kind of). I tweaked a small part of canon in this -- basically, Harry actually said goodbye to Ginny properly when he broke up with her. Very angsty, and this is only up for sentimental reasons, as I wrote it during The Dark Ages (aka when I was fourteen).

A Different Kind of Magic (Harry/Ginny)

Written for the You’re Having My Baby challenge at SIYE. Ginny finds out she’s pregnant, but Harry receives the news before her and therefore has to tell his wife. This was my first ever story at MNFF. It was written when I was thirteen, and it definitely shows.

A Different Kind of Magic 2: Parenthood (Harry/Ginny)

A sequel, obviously, to A Different Kind of Magic. Ginny goes into labour, and both Harry and Ginny realise what it means to be parents. Again, this was written from Back in the Days.

Same-Sex Pairings

The Caustic Ticking of the Clock (Rowena/Helga)

Written for the Great Hall Cotillion, this story is my only Founders story so far, and it’s about Rowena and Helga’s secret relationship. I am proud of this one, which doesn’t usually happen :)

Catching Fire (James/Sirius)

This was written for SPEW 007. My prompt was “Embers”, and it’s set just after Remus’s second transformation with the Marauders. James is badly injured, and he and Sirius realise, inadvertently, that they might just have feelings for each other. I like the pairing but still think the story needs work. One day I will go back and edit.

Flicker and Fail (Katie/Leanne)

This was written forSecret SPEW, and my recipient was the absolutely fabulous Alex/welshdevondragon. It’s my take on Leanne and Katie’s relationship from way before they were even at Hogwarts as well as what eventually happens to Katie in HBP, when she was cursed.

Next Generation

Skinny Love (Louis/Lily)

Written for the 2013 Great Hall Cotillion. Set during Teddy and Victoire's wedding, Louis helps Lily come to terms with her bulimia. This one was pretty difficult to write.

Blood and Roses (Scorpius/Rose, Scorpius/Dominique, Dominique/OC)

Written for the Great Hall Mysterious Maychallenge, this was my first Next Generation fic about Scorpius, mostly, and the trials he faces after his daughter is murdered.

Broken Glass (Louis/Lily)

This is the story of when Loulily really began. After the deaths of his immediate family, Louis is finding it hard to cope, even six months later. Lily somehow helps. It’s a little smutty. I’m proud of this one, too :)

The Highway of Regret (Scorpius/Lily, Scorpius/Rose, Louis/Lily)

Also written for the Great Hall Cotillion. It’s my one and only Scily. This is all about secret relationships and mistakes people make. Lily’s angry at Louis, and Scorpius has just broken up with Rose; when Lily gets drunk in the pub, things... happen. :P

I Will Lay Down My Heart (Albus/Rose, Scorpius/Rose)

Written for Round Two (Minor Characters) of Madam Pomfrey’s Character Clinic Triathlon. Albus has been in love with Rose for years, but what happened with them when they were younger has put a dent in their relationship. It doesn’t help that Rose is actually in love with Scorpius, either. This is smutty too.

One More Night (Albus/Rose, Rose/Scorpius)

Companion piece to I Will Lay Down My Heart. This goes into more detail about Rose and Albus's changing relationship as well as the aftermath of the events in said companion story. Probably the smuttiest thing on my page. :D Written for the Great Hall Cotillion 2013.

Glass (Louis/Lily)

This was written for the Great Hall-iday challenge for the Operation: Mistletoe prompt, and this was where my love for Loulily began.


Excruciatingly Painful

This is about how five men in Potterverse dealt with remorse in different ways.


This poem is about how Remus feels about Sirius (not slashy, btw).


Written for the Magic in Music challenge over inPoetry, Anyone? This was set to the track “Obliviate” in DH1 and is about Hermione modifying her parents’ memories.


Written for the Goodbyechallenge in Poetry, Anyone? This was about saying goodbye, and how difficult it could be.

After All This Time

Written for the Deathly Hallows challenge inPoetry, Anyone?. I ship unrequited Snape/Lily, and this is probably the only time Snape will be on my author page, lol.

Hush, Dominique

Written for the MC Kreacher challenge inPoetry, Anyone? This was written from the POV of Bill Weasley after his wife’s death.



Written for the Great Bannermakers’ Hallchallenge. The banner I picked had Merope Gaunt on it, and it’s probably my darkest story; it’s definitely the only one to have a dubious consent warning. It’s about, as you might guess, the abuse Merope suffered from her father and brother.

In Care (Marlene/OC)

Marlene McKinnon, as a care kid, eventually falls in love with another care kid, Jamal Olawumi. But he's a Muggle, and keeping her world secret proves difficult. This is definitely a story I would like to revisit and tidy up.

Just Across the Bar (Sirius/Rosmerta)

Sirius is just about of age, but obviously Rosmerta has misgivings about having feelings for Sirius, who is still a student. Written for the 2013 Great Hall Cotillion and also smutty.

Butterbeer Bottles

Written for SPEW 007. My prompt was “Juggling”, and it’s just a silly piece of dialogue-only banter between Remus and Sirius. Sirius realises Remus likes Tonks, and he tries to persuade Remus to act on his feelings.

Hanging by a Thread (Katie/Oliver)

Written for the lovely Jess/ToBeOrNotToBeAGryffindor for Secret SPEW VII. Katie is grieving and drowning her sorrows in alcohol and Oliver is trying his best to save Muggles, while trying also to bury feelings for Katie that he thought he had long since forgotten about. There is also, surprise surprise, some smut in this.

And that’s it! Along with being a moderator, I’m also a member of SPEWand SBBC. I hope to see you around on the forums; feel free to contact me via PM or review if you have any questions or comments about my stories!

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High by Equinox Chick

Rated: 3rd-5th Years • 236 Reviews Past Featured Story
Summary: Scorpius Malfoy is the Seeker for Slytherin. Not only that, he's the best Seeker at Hogwarts, and it's his catches that win matches. But this year things are different; Albus Potter has switched to Chaser and the new Gryffindor Seeker is his annoying little sister.

This is the story of how one match and one missed catch can change your life.

This story was accidentally deleted, so is being resubmitted ... very very quickly.

SQUEEEEE! High won the Best Next Generation QSQ award. Thank you so much for the everyone who has helped, either by beta'ing or encouraging me.

Disclaimer: I am not JK Rowling. I'm not sure who I am at the moment, but there must be some Arthur Weasley blood in me.

Thank you Natalie (hestiajones) for doing the vast majority of the beta work on this, and Apurva for work on the early chapters

Squish for Natalie, Jess, Kara and Bob for helping me sort this out.

Due to an archive hissy fit regarding any story with a rating about 3rd-5th, I have temporarily lowered the rating on this story. However, I have NOT changed the content. This story is still a 6th-7th. You click at your own risk.
Reviewer: xxbabewithbrainsxx Signed
Date: 09/28/11 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1 -Flying High

Soooo. I've finally decided to bite the bullet and read a Scily. (Which is a miracle in itself LOL.)

I must say, I love your Scorpius. He's just so adorable and I felt quite sorry for him when he lost that match. It's probably my inner Pottermore!Slytherin coming out, hehe. And your Lily's just fabulous. I thought the touch with the apple was iconic and quite funny at times, and she's like Ginny, but not to the extent where she's a carbon copy of her, either.

The only sort-of nitpick I have is that a lot seemed to go on in this chapter so it did seem, if not a little rushed, then it glossed over parts at times. But I *believe* this was meant to be a oneshot originally, so I'm not really surprised at that.

But yes, you definitely have me intrigued, and I shall read on ASAP. See you on the next chapter!

Author's Response: Thank you for the review, Soraya. Yes, this was a oneshot written for a challenge (Forbidden Love, I think) and so the first chapter does have an air of resolution about it. But I sort of knew this would be expanded. I hope you like the rest of it, anyway.

Oh, I see you've met Teddy Lupin - heh heh heh. He's become the stud in this fic - ha ha ha. ~Carole~

Reviewer: xxbabewithbrainsxx Signed
Date: 09/28/11 Title: Chapter 2: Chapter 2 - Sticky as Lips

Oooh. Interesting chapter, Carole. I liked the details about the owls and stuff. This actually sounded kind of familiar, which gives me the feeling I've read it before when I was half-asleep and then I couldn't find it again... yes, it's all coming back to me LOL. I can definitely remember reading about Teddy interrupting Scorpius and *someone* so it must have been this.

By the way, I'm so in love with Teddy it's not even funny. I hope he appears a lot in this story. You've made him a really interesting (my mind is filled with fluff at the moment so I can't think of a better word) character and I'm glad you addressed the fact that Scorpius and Teddy are cousins.

And I so LOL'd when Scorpius pretended to be Harry Cootes. Too funny.

Author's Response: Teddy reappears just when Scorpius needs him - hee hee. There's one scene that's a favourite of mine. I'll let you know when you get to it. Thank you for reading (possibly re-reading) ~Carole~

Reviewer: xxbabewithbrainsxx Signed
Date: 09/28/11 Title: Chapter 3: Chapter 3 -Smitten as That

I LOVED the Scugo references in there. LOL.

And despite being a Scorose shipper, I must say that even I laughed at the fact that you pretty much kicked that ship out of the window.


Author's Response: Yes, my Rose isn't very nice - ha ha. Of course this is all from Scorpius' POV, so you get to see a biased side of the Potters and Weasleys. ~Carole~

Reviewer: xxbabewithbrainsxx Signed
Date: 01/14/12 Title: Chapter 22: Chapter 22 -The Same Sweet Steps

Carole! How do you do it? Seriously, I was fully prepared for something that would make me cry or make me smile or sigh or laugh, but this final chapter made me do all of the above. I honestly do not know how I'm feeling atm. On the one hand, I feel really, really sad that it's over, and that there was not more, even though this chapter had that wonderful sense of finality to it. But then I feel happy, too, that Scorpius found somewhere to live and his dad seems to have forgiven him and Scorpius and Lily got their happy ending (and yes, this is Soraya, not an imposter. I really did use the words "happy ending" in the same sentence as Scorpius and Lily) and Scorpius realises that while his dream was to play Quidditch, he's more suited to being an Auror, which made me happy that he's realised what he wants to do.

I'm sorry, I'm probably not making much sense here. I just-- I'm honestly just in awe of this story, Carole. It was amazingly written and fully deserved its QSQ and it kind of converted me to liking Scily which I never thought would happen. And all the inclusions and hints of other ships, like Jominique (lol), Scugo (coughNataliecough), Charlie/Penelope, Lavender/Blaise and others just made me smile so much.

I read this with my mouth wide open, Carole. GUHHH. I'm sad it's over, but I'm so glad they got the ending they deserved, and that it ended on such an optimistic note. Congrats on such a wonderful story, and may there be many more spin-offs of this (*coughsplutterJominiqueprettypleasecoughsplutter*).

Author's Response: Thank youuuuuuuu ♥. Hmm, not sure I can write Jominique now. She seems entwined with a certain witch called Mags De-Vine ... but I might well split them up - ha ha. Oh, the power!

Thank you so much for the review, Soraya, and all your support as I strove to complete this. It really means a lot to me. Charlie/Penelop - I really need to write that sequel. Thanks again and again and again. ~Carole~

Reviewer: xxbabewithbrainsxx Signed
Date: 09/28/11 Title: Chapter 4: Chapter 4 -Kitten as a Cat

Carole! You are so evil, I swear! First, you're starting to make me ship Scily, and then you do *this*???? This isn't faaaaiiir. There has got to be a reasonable explanation for this.

It's got to be a horrible coincidence or something. I'm sure of it. I hope Lily forgives Scorpius soon, though. And I am glad that you didn't have chapters and chapters of Scorpius and Lily having this secret relationship before anyone found out. It's more realistic the way you wrote it.

I'll have to continue reading tomorrow, so you won't get any more rambly, silly reviews from me til then. Night!

Author's Response: heh heh. It couldn't all be plain sailing. There is an explanation- Scorpius is an evil manipulative Slytherin!. Thank you for getting this far. ~Carole~

Reviewer: xxbabewithbrainsxx Signed
Date: 10/29/11 Title: Chapter 21: Chapter 21 -Relative Values

Yay, you updated! But I'm sad there's only one chapter left. I've become really attached to Scorpius lately and I thought the matches were written very well.

I also liked that Draco sort of redeemed himself for me. Yeah, he did the emotional blackmail and everything, but he seemed to have seen sense at the end. Which I think is more in character.

I can't believe this is the penultimate chapter. I don't want it to end either :( But I'm glad you're doing spin-offs.

Well done as usual :)

Author's Response: Thankieeeees. Yes, I really should click that new document open and start writing it. It was the same with Lavender, I seem to remember. Draco makes me laugh - well my version does - book Draco is a git! Thanks again for the review and I'm glad you liked the Quidditch. ~Carole~

Reviewer: xxbabewithbrainsxx Signed
Date: 09/29/11 Title: Chapter 5: Chapter 5 - Burst the Clouds

I knew there was more to it! And I loved Teddy in this -- Blaise too. They're both so,,,, mmmm.

I liked that Scorpius was being realistic and honest about Lily. The last thing I wanted to hear was that he loved her because I don't think at this point, he knows that. And I liked the fact that Scorpius was honest :)

Onto the next chapter!

Author's Response: He doesn;t love her at this point. I don't think that's possible for him, but at least he admits it. Blaise *sigh* I love him too much. hee hee

Reviewer: xxbabewithbrainsxx Signed
Date: 09/29/11 Title: Chapter 6: Chapter 6 - Sky as a Kite

Yayyyyy... they're back together! Well, I hope they are. Harry Cootes sounds like a b@stard, though.

You write Quidditch matches really well! I think that's one of the most difficult scenes to write but somehow, you write them effortlessly. I am so jealous. >.>

I really love this story. It's fast-paced and with brilliant dialogue and everything about it is just fantabulous. I particularly liked the Blaise/Lavender in this :D

I'll be back!

Author's Response: Harry was drunk and although that doesn't excuse his behaviour towards her, he wasn't behaving as he normally would. I keep putting Lavender and Blaise in everything. It's not self insertion. I think lavender is inserting herself in me - ha ha ha. rambling again. Thank youuuuu ~Carole~

Reviewer: xxbabewithbrainsxx Signed
Date: 09/29/11 Title: Chapter 7: Chapter 7 - A Magic Show

Oh no!!! Carole, you really are too evil for your own good. It's no wonder you're a Slytherpuff.

I really was rooting for Scorpius and Lily in this chapter! But now, it's obviously going to be delayed for a bit, dammit. I hope Lucius is okay, even though he's far from my favourite character in this -- though I would like to see how you write him. My memory seems to be failing me but I can't remember the last time I read something with Lucius in it by you, so the next chapter should be interesting.

See you next time!

Author's Response: I wrote a Narcissa story that had Lucius in it, and he's been in AA for one chapter, but no, I don;t write him much. This is my canon for him. OOOOH, he is in some of my Draco fics like Shrouds (briefly) and um ... Till Death Eaters Do Us Part ... which is a bit of a prequel to High. Very rambly response - thank youuuuuu Carole

Reviewer: xxbabewithbrainsxx Signed
Date: 09/29/11 Title: Chapter 8: Chapter 8 - Our Own World

Oooh. I was wondering why Lavender had moved into Hogwarts suddenly. That makes perfect sense.

That reminds me -- aw, Lavender's having a baby! That's nice to know, considering I just read The Only One. I'm hoping this one doesn't end unhappily like the last two :(

Awww, and I feel sorry for Lily, but also Scorpius. I can imagine the pressures on Lily to have sex with him just to make sure he stays with her, as well as Scorpius who doesn't know how far he can go. I want to hug him :)

Onto the next chapter!

Author's Response: In one of the reviews I had before I deleted everything *sigh* someone asked me if I were a teenage boy - ha ha - because I seemed to write the boyish mind so well. Hmm, I'm not a teenage boy or at all male, but I remember them very well - LOL. Lavender and Blaise are my OTP, so they keep popping up everywhere - heh heh. Thank youuuuu

Reviewer: xxbabewithbrainsxx Signed
Date: 09/29/11 Title: Chapter 9: Chapter 9 - The Family Name

Scorpius got rejected? Nooooo. I have a feeling there was something important in that letter, though, so I'm wondering what it was that Scorpius so conveniently threw into the loo. I'll have to see.

I'm sorry none of these are SPEW reviews, Carole, but I wanted to review every chapter since you accidentally deleted the whole story and all your reviews went with it. Plus your story is far too gripping for me to leave anything remotely substantial and though I know you always reply to reviews, feel free to not reply since they're all in a row.

Author's Response: I usually reply because reviews are my life blood. ha ha.OOOH, good thinking. There could have been something he conveniently didn;t read. Or maybe Harry is the prejudiced git that Scorpius thinks he is ... heh heh. Thank youuuuu ~Carole~

Reviewer: xxbabewithbrainsxx Signed
Date: 09/29/11 Title: Chapter 10: Chapter 10 - The Great Escape

Was that meant to be a Alpius reference? :P

Meh, I can definitely imagine Lucius and Narcissa trying to set Scorpius up. And I liked that Scorpius saw the brighter side to Howler. Hehe.

Out of interest -- why do Lily and Scorpius sign off their letters with their initials?

Excellent chapter, and I'll be back soon!

Author's Response: They sign off with initials to be slightly mysterious. Not many people know Scorpius' middle name is Hyperion. (I DIED when I found that out. It sort of sparked off the story, if I'm honest) Plus .... heh heh. I never use my name is emails to my husband. We have stupid and elaborate initial names ... rambling. Thannks for the review. ~Carole~

Reviewer: xxbabewithbrainsxx Signed
Date: 09/29/11 Title: Chapter 11: Chapter 11 - Incriminating Evidence

YAY! They came out. Now to see Ginny's reaction -- this should be interesting.

And may I just say that Quidditch is most definitely your forte, Carole? You write matches so well.

This is a very short review because my mum is calling me -- but I'm on tenterhooks and I can't wait to read the next chapter. Thank God I don't have to wait for updates!

Author's Response: Thank you. The first Quidditch match I wrote was Tonks in Apparently Asleep (The Potter 100) and I struggled. The chapter got rejected twice, but I discovered through it all that I rather liked writing Quidditch, so I'm pleased you liked it. Thank you ~Carole~

Whispers in the Night by lucca4

Rated: 6th-7th Years • 10 Reviews Past Featured Story

"Swear to me, Cissy. Swear you won't tell."

It's a secret, and it haunts you but you won't tell.

You promised.

This is lucca4 of Gryffindor writing for The Great Bannermakers' Hall Challenge.

It won …and I am still shocked!

Thank you, thank you, to my beta Alex/welshdevondragon, who has beta-ed this in the blink of an eye. She is amazing.

Also, thank you to Julia/the opaleye for the gorgeous, eye-dropping banner that inspired the story.

Nominated for a 2012 Quicksilver Quill Award - Best Dark/Angsty Story.
Reviewer: xxbabewithbrainsxx Signed
Date: 09/15/11 Title: Chapter 1: (Whispers)


*gasps again*

*regains composure*

Ariana, that was amazing! It was so chillingly well-written and so scary. And that was the beauty of it. I love Andromeda and Narcissa as characters, and you really did them justice in this story.

I must admit that I thought the secret she was keeping was about Ted, not Rodolphus raping Andromeda. That was a very unexpected plot twist. I think what I liked the best about this was that it was written non-linearly, yet the flashbacks were never abrupt or anything -- they all flowed smoothly.

This story was disturbing (perhaps more so because I'm the same age as Andromeda in this story) and it's not your usual style, but it definitely paid off. You are an extremely talented writer, if I haven't already told you. A beautifully written story to match a beautiful banner -- well done ;)


Author's Response: Wow, thank you! This story definitely deviated from the usual thing I write and it was disturbing (Andromeda would be a year younger than me, and I can't imagine someone that age going through something like this). Thanks again! xx Ariana

The Only One by Equinox Chick

Rated: 6th-7th Years • 16 Reviews
Summary: Victoire Weasley is in her third year studying to be a Healer. She is beautiful. She is bright. But she's alone. Since splitting up with Teddy Lupin, only one person has come close to disturbing her dreams.

Unfortunately, he happens to be the professor standing in front of her. She knows he has a partner, but she also knows that he's distracted.

This story is a prequel to my Next Gen fic High. It is not necessary to read that to understand this, but reading Lavender, blue - A Gryffindor True might help, although you should get the gist.

Happy Birthday. Ariana (lucca4) You are an incredible writer. (She also left me a shedload of reviews when I deleted the whole of High.)

Thank you, Natalie. You are a stellar beta and a wonderful friend.

Disclaimer: I am not JKR, but I make fab spag bol.
Reviewer: xxbabewithbrainsxx Signed
Date: 09/25/11 Title: Chapter 2: Chapter 2 - Run Like a Day with Destiny

You'd better keep Teddy and Victoire together. Just sayin'.

Aww, it was so sad about Lavender's baby. But I suppose it wasn't meant to be. I would have told you my favourite bits of it but that would be the whole thing LOL.

I really loved your Teddy in this. He was so sweet and I thought his job was an interesting one. Then again, if Kingsley got to protect the British PM, it's no wonder someone has to protect the American President. (I loved that you made her a woman!)

Another excellent chapter, Carole :) How long will it be? I'm sooo adding this to my favourites.

Author's Response: OH! Poo, I knew there was something I needed to do. It's actually complete. This is the prequel to High, you see. Sorry!. Um, and I'm wondering if anyone will pick up the reference as to who the President actually is - heh heh heh. Thankies ~Carole~

Reviewer: xxbabewithbrainsxx Signed
Date: 09/20/11 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1 - Just a Little Crush

Carole! It's nice to read a bit more Lavender/Blaise by you :) I loved Victoire in this, and Blaise too. He's just sooooo... mmmm.

And I was really sad when I read the part about what Lavender's baby could have been. When you put it in that perspective, the time that's elapsed since seems a lot bigger.

This is the most useless review ever so I shall sign off now. Oh, I did think this could have had a sexual situations warning (possibly). Your choice, though :)


Author's Response: Thank you, Soraya. I was thinking about the warning but this is quite mild compared to my usual fare, so I dismissed it. However, I think you're right and I'm going to add it now, so ta lots. I love Blaise here as well, and Lavender. (I want to be Lavender - that's not self-insertion. It's the reverse *sigh*). Thanks for the review. ~Carole~

Doubts by WeasleyMom

Rated: 3rd-5th Years • 10 Reviews


I've never felt this way before.


Fleur struggles with life and war. A missing moment from Harry Potter and the Deathly Hallows.


This is WeasleyMom of Hufflepuff writing for the Great Hall Bannermaker's Challenge. The banner used was Doubts by TM_WandStick. I chose this banner immediately Toni--so gorgeous!

Yay! Those lovely SBBC people have added this story to the SBBC Hall of Fame! I knew there was a reason I joined that group. Hehe. Thanks, you guys!


Thanks so much to Natalie/hestiajones for beta reading this so close to the submission deadline. She is everything she is cracked up to be.


I'm not JK Rowling.
Reviewer: xxbabewithbrainsxx Signed
Date: 11/05/11 Title: Chapter 1: one-shot

Hello, Lori :)

I’ve been meaning to read this story for a while, especially after seeing Toni’s lovely banner for it. And I was just completely blown away by it. It’s such an injustice that this hasn’t received as many reviews as some of your other pieces, because it is just as good, if not better. I really like missing moments such as this one; when written well, as yours was, it actually seems like it was written by JKR herself, and that makes it all the more enjoyable. I’ve always wondered what went through Fleur’s head when Remus arrived with the news of Teddy’s birth, and you really did this moment justice.

Fleur is a character who I think has often been abused in the fandom. She has been made over-girly or stupid or in some other way OOC. But you took her character and maintained her characterisation steadily throughout the story, despite it being a situation which we never saw Fleur in during canon. Despite it being written in third person, there was still a very personal feel to the story, and I think that was effective in making us understand Fleur as a character more, especially her emotions during such a difficult period of her life. You also maintained the darkness of it, without it appearing overly angsty. I was constantly reminded of the war, of Voldemort and how he had ruined so many lives, and this, I think, made it so raw emotionally.

I particularly liked the imagery used. I love me some good description, but also when something is described, not necessarily in a poetic way but vividly, bringing out the emotions of the story. For example, She imagined his tiny fist clutching one of his mum’s fingers. There’s just something so touching about this sentence because you painted such a clear picture of baby Teddy with Tonks. And I could just tell that Fleur was... if not jealous, then certainly broody :) Then, in the flashback to the second Triwizard Tournament task, I thought it was really well-written and again, it was described, this time very poetically. This, once again, was a missing moment in GoF I’ve always wondered about so reading it was really interesting.

Another moment that I thought was well-done was the interaction between Fleur and Madame Maxime. I’ve always been curious about their relationship as student and headteacher, something which was only touched upon in the books, so I really liked that you expanded on that too. Possibly something I wasn’t entirely sure of was Madame Maxime greeting Fleur with “’Ello” instead of “Salut” or “Bonjour”. I know that Fleur would normally revert to French when around French speakers, particularly those she is close to (like her sister Gabrielle in DH) so I thought it might be better to have the conversation in French. After all, they only exchange a few words anyway.

Apart from this minor qualm (and I think you wrote Fleur’s accent very, very well) I thoroughly enjoyed the Bill/Fleur aspect in the story. Bill was fully in character and so was Fleur. I can definitely see him underestimating Fleur, just like most of the Weasley family probably did. I thought the Gryffindor comments were very funny, too, and I think the way you wrote dialogue was very natural-sounding and definitely a strength of yours. And yet somehow, you managed to have a solid, dark tone throughout the fic - right until the end when it is a little more optimistic - and yet still include laughing and teasing and even romance. This, I think, is the mark of a truly talented writer, which you most certainly are, Lori.

Well done on an excellent story which I thoroughly enjoyed, and I hope to read/review more of your work in the future!


P.S. Apologies if you got multiple notifications for this review, Lori. The formatting messed up several times.

Author's Response: Soraya. Wow, wow, wow. I am always overwhelmed (in a wonderful way) when I get an incredible spewly review like this one, and a little intimidated about responding. This is why it has taken me so long to get around to replying, but don't feel bad: I owe Jess a response from a review she left me months ago. LOL.

I'm so pleased you liked this. I had never considered writing a Fleur POV story, but Toni's banner really inspired me. I do imagine that before she came to the tournament, she was successful at most everything she touched. I imagine the same would have been true for both Cedric and Krum, to a degree. But Fleur was not the strongest in the tournament, and as the only girl, I think it would have really affected her. I do see that as teh time when her confidence may have begun to be stretched, at least. It was challenging and rewarding to explore that here.

Thanks for your suggestion about changing that line to Salut. I actually went in to do just that, but realized I posted this before the Nargles messed up the quotes and stuff, and now if I change it... it turns to those icky boxes. So I think I will hold off until the Nargles are subdued. But thanks for that suggestion--I quite agree with you and will change it as soon as I can.

I have to say, Soraya, that you are a very good reviewer. You've left a couple on the archives now I think, and in TTB, and I find them always encouraging and--at the same time--helpful. Thanks for reading this and for taking the time to leave me such a thoughtful review. I appreciate it so much.


A Game of Fire by lucca4

Rated: Professors • 7 Reviews

There is no love between them; there is only passion and burning desire.

But for Susan, this is enough. She has loved and lost before, and she can’t handle losing again.

The lust is much easier to deal with.

* Originally written for the What a Pair SPEW Drabble Challenge.

Nominated for a 2012 Quicksilver Quill Award - Best Same Sex Pairing.
Reviewer: xxbabewithbrainsxx Signed
Date: 09/28/11 Title: Chapter 1: A Game of Fire

Ariana! It is so, so wrong that this only has one review because it was a wicked story. It was the one I voted for and I knew it was going to win.

Susan/Daphne is such a brilliant pairing, so kudos to you for writing it. Plus, I loved the twist at the end. Got to go, bye!

Author's Response: Oh yay! Thanks for voting for it :). I'm so happy you liked Susan/Daphne, and the minor twist which made me realize that the Femmeslash cat might not be the best place for it oh well! Thank you for taking the time to review! xx Ariana

Brother Mine by ToBeOrNotToBeAGryffindor

Rated: 3rd-5th Years • 12 Reviews

When Regulus steps into the cave by the sea, he knows it is a mission that could very well be the end of him, but it is in something he has lost that he finds the strength to do what is right and not what is easy.

This story was nominated for a 2012 Quicksilver Quill Award: Best Dark/Angst.

Reviewer: xxbabewithbrainsxx Signed
Date: 10/18/11 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Oh, Jess, I adore :D

Well, this is *you* we're talking about here, so there's no surprise that this one rendered me speechless. And written in first person present tense, no less. LOL.

This is one event I have always wondered about in canon, and I think you just nailed Regulus's characterisation here. And my heart just went out to Kreacher! Seriously, I actually wanted to hug him, which is no mean feat, I can tell you.

Oh, and by the way, I voted for this drabble in the Brawl :D I can't remember if you won or not, though.

Author's Response:

Woot, first review!

This is actually the Brawl drabble I've liked the most thus far. I remember distinctly despairing of the prompt, because, in my head, Marauder Era is a pack of poncey pranksters, not the dark and twisted. Then, while I was busy feeling sorry for myself, I decided to peruse the list of Slytherins on the Lexicon for some inspiration and out this came. Yay dark and twisted stuff. Even if it does technically have none of the warnings I usually employ (Sexual Situations, Profanity, Violence, Character Death). 

Alas, I didn't win that round, but I did have the distinction of being the only drabbler with no negative votes for that week. That's something, I suppose. :)

Thanks for the review!!!


You Are Perfect to Me by GinnyPotter711

Rated: 6th-7th Years • 4 Reviews
Summary: "You are perfect to me, yeah, you're perfect, you're perfect..."

Remus says he too old and too dangerous. Tonks doesn't care. How will she convince him that he's nothing short of freaking perfect?

This is a Remus/Tonks Missing Moment from Harry Potter and the Half-Blood Prince between chapters 29 and 30.
Reviewer: xxbabewithbrainsxx Signed
Date: 10/25/11 Title: Chapter 1: F**kin' Perfect

Hi there. I really liked this -- there aren't enough decent Remus/Tonks stories out there. I've always wondered about what went on with Remus and Tonks and I thought this was a really sweet missing moment.

My only criticism, really, is the use of the f-word. It just seemed unnecessary, to me. I'm not a prude in any way -- I could swear for Britain, lol -- but I thought in this context, it just seemed a bit gratuitous and unnecessary.

Well done on a first fic, though :)

Author's Response: Thank you so much for reviewing! I also wondered what happened. They went from arguing about having a relationship to married within a month or two. About the f-word, I pretty much only used it when I was referencing the song this fanfic is based on, "F**kin' Perfect" by Pink. For example, the song says, "Pretty, pretty please, don't you ever, ever feel like you're less than f**king perfect," and Tonks tells Remus, "So, don't you ever, ever feel like you're less than f**king perfect." Then, after that part, Remus is quoting her. I really appreciate your review. I love reviews. They make me smile so brightly the sun shields its eyes! Happy Reading, GinnyPotter711