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Hi there! I’m Soraya. I’m seventeen years old and am a proud Muslim British Bangladeshi. I live in East London and have loved reading and writing from a young age. I’m rather obsessed with Harry Potter (aren’t we all?), tea (not a surprise considering I’m a Brit) and good grammar. Recently, I've also got into the Supernatural fandom. After watching the first episode, I had already fallen head over heels in love with Sam Winchester, so it's no surprise that I am now a huge SPN fangirl as well as a Potterhead.

My writing has changed quite a bit over the years, and I think you'll probably notice that, the further down my author page you go, the more the quality seems to drop :P I started posting stories on here at the age of fourteen, and at nearly eighteen, I can see how much my writing has improved since those Dark Ages. So, for that reason, I would advise you stick to the more recent stuff, if you choose to read anything of mine.

My Stories

Just so you know, these are posted firstly according to what kind of pairing, if any, is in the story, and then in chronological order in accordance to my own canon, not necessarily the order in which they were posted.

Canon Pairings

Checkmate (James/Lily)

My first chaptered fic. It’s terribly written, but I still have a place in my heart for it because of how much fun it was to write. This story has now been deleted on MNFF, but if you really, really want to read it, you can still find it on FF.net and HPFF. (I advise you don't, though :P)

Second Childishness and Mere Oblivion (James/Lily)

Written for Round One (Major Characters) of Madam Pomfrey’s Character Clinic Triathlon, this one-shot is about James and Lily’s relationship getting rockier and rockier after they left Hogwarts, especially when Lily is faced with the trials of being a wife and motherhood. A little smutty.

My Love is Always Here (James/Lily)

This was a belated birthday present for the wonderful Gina/Gmariam, aka the queen of James/Lily. This is mostly about Lily dealing with becoming a mother for the first time and the problems (as well as the joys) that come with that.

There's an Answer (Remus/Tonks)

Written for Sophie/The owl for SPEW Summer Swap IV. Tonks is sent on an interesting baby Auror assignment to do with werewolves. Remus and a dangerous Muggle are thrown into the mix, with interesting results.

Left Behind (Remus/Tonks)

An expanded version of one of my LoveNotes, written for SPEW. It's a missing moment set between OOTP and HBP, where in my head canon Remus and Tonks have been together, in secret, for a few weeks already and Remus is then told to go on his werewolf mission. Slightly smutty.

One and Only (Remus/Tonks)

Written for the lovely Alex/Ithinkrabis2people in the Ravenclaw Christmas Drabble Exchange. This is a missing moment set just after Tonks’s outburst to Remus in the hospital wing at the end of HBP.

Out of My Life (Harry/Ginny)

My only AU (kind of). I tweaked a small part of canon in this -- basically, Harry actually said goodbye to Ginny properly when he broke up with her. Very angsty, and this is only up for sentimental reasons, as I wrote it during The Dark Ages (aka when I was fourteen).

A Different Kind of Magic (Harry/Ginny)

Written for the You’re Having My Baby challenge at SIYE. Ginny finds out she’s pregnant, but Harry receives the news before her and therefore has to tell his wife. This was my first ever story at MNFF. It was written when I was thirteen, and it definitely shows.

A Different Kind of Magic 2: Parenthood (Harry/Ginny)

A sequel, obviously, to A Different Kind of Magic. Ginny goes into labour, and both Harry and Ginny realise what it means to be parents. Again, this was written from Back in the Days.

Same-Sex Pairings

The Caustic Ticking of the Clock (Rowena/Helga)

Written for the Great Hall Cotillion, this story is my only Founders story so far, and it’s about Rowena and Helga’s secret relationship. I am proud of this one, which doesn’t usually happen :)

Catching Fire (James/Sirius)

This was written for SPEW 007. My prompt was “Embers”, and it’s set just after Remus’s second transformation with the Marauders. James is badly injured, and he and Sirius realise, inadvertently, that they might just have feelings for each other. I like the pairing but still think the story needs work. One day I will go back and edit.

Flicker and Fail (Katie/Leanne)

This was written forSecret SPEW, and my recipient was the absolutely fabulous Alex/welshdevondragon. It’s my take on Leanne and Katie’s relationship from way before they were even at Hogwarts as well as what eventually happens to Katie in HBP, when she was cursed.

Next Generation

Skinny Love (Louis/Lily)

Written for the 2013 Great Hall Cotillion. Set during Teddy and Victoire's wedding, Louis helps Lily come to terms with her bulimia. This one was pretty difficult to write.

Blood and Roses (Scorpius/Rose, Scorpius/Dominique, Dominique/OC)

Written for the Great Hall Mysterious Maychallenge, this was my first Next Generation fic about Scorpius, mostly, and the trials he faces after his daughter is murdered.

Broken Glass (Louis/Lily)

This is the story of when Loulily really began. After the deaths of his immediate family, Louis is finding it hard to cope, even six months later. Lily somehow helps. It’s a little smutty. I’m proud of this one, too :)

The Highway of Regret (Scorpius/Lily, Scorpius/Rose, Louis/Lily)

Also written for the Great Hall Cotillion. It’s my one and only Scily. This is all about secret relationships and mistakes people make. Lily’s angry at Louis, and Scorpius has just broken up with Rose; when Lily gets drunk in the pub, things... happen. :P

I Will Lay Down My Heart (Albus/Rose, Scorpius/Rose)

Written for Round Two (Minor Characters) of Madam Pomfrey’s Character Clinic Triathlon. Albus has been in love with Rose for years, but what happened with them when they were younger has put a dent in their relationship. It doesn’t help that Rose is actually in love with Scorpius, either. This is smutty too.

One More Night (Albus/Rose, Rose/Scorpius)

Companion piece to I Will Lay Down My Heart. This goes into more detail about Rose and Albus's changing relationship as well as the aftermath of the events in said companion story. Probably the smuttiest thing on my page. :D Written for the Great Hall Cotillion 2013.

Glass (Louis/Lily)

This was written for the Great Hall-iday challenge for the Operation: Mistletoe prompt, and this was where my love for Loulily began.

Poetry

Excruciatingly Painful

This is about how five men in Potterverse dealt with remorse in different ways.

Always

This poem is about how Remus feels about Sirius (not slashy, btw).

Regret

Written for the Magic in Music challenge over inPoetry, Anyone? This was set to the track “Obliviate” in DH1 and is about Hermione modifying her parents’ memories.

Farewell

Written for the Goodbyechallenge in Poetry, Anyone? This was about saying goodbye, and how difficult it could be.

After All This Time

Written for the Deathly Hallows challenge inPoetry, Anyone?. I ship unrequited Snape/Lily, and this is probably the only time Snape will be on my author page, lol.

Hush, Dominique

Written for the MC Kreacher challenge inPoetry, Anyone? This was written from the POV of Bill Weasley after his wife’s death.

Miscellaneous

Bruises

Written for the Great Bannermakers’ Hallchallenge. The banner I picked had Merope Gaunt on it, and it’s probably my darkest story; it’s definitely the only one to have a dubious consent warning. It’s about, as you might guess, the abuse Merope suffered from her father and brother.

In Care (Marlene/OC)

Marlene McKinnon, as a care kid, eventually falls in love with another care kid, Jamal Olawumi. But he's a Muggle, and keeping her world secret proves difficult. This is definitely a story I would like to revisit and tidy up.

Just Across the Bar (Sirius/Rosmerta)

Sirius is just about of age, but obviously Rosmerta has misgivings about having feelings for Sirius, who is still a student. Written for the 2013 Great Hall Cotillion and also smutty.

Butterbeer Bottles

Written for SPEW 007. My prompt was “Juggling”, and it’s just a silly piece of dialogue-only banter between Remus and Sirius. Sirius realises Remus likes Tonks, and he tries to persuade Remus to act on his feelings.

Hanging by a Thread (Katie/Oliver)

Written for the lovely Jess/ToBeOrNotToBeAGryffindor for Secret SPEW VII. Katie is grieving and drowning her sorrows in alcohol and Oliver is trying his best to save Muggles, while trying also to bury feelings for Katie that he thought he had long since forgotten about. There is also, surprise surprise, some smut in this.


And that’s it! Along with being a moderator, I’m also a member of SPEWand SBBC. I hope to see you around on the forums; feel free to contact me via PM or review if you have any questions or comments about my stories!


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Monochrome by Equinox Chick

Rated: 3rd-5th Years • 9 Reviews Past Featured Story
Summary: Remus Lupin is an outsider by the very nature of his condition. But whilst his friends dream in colour, his nights are monochrome. It doesn't disturb him much, it's just the way he is.

Then a late night conversation changes his mindset in a way that scares him and makes him wonder what he actually 'is'. He cannot feel that way - not about Sirius Black.

OMM&P This jointly won BEST SSP QSQ at the 2011 awards. Thank you. And yay for Ariana who wrote Two to Tango - the other winner.

I am not JK Rowling, in fact I'm not even sure I'm Equinox Chick at this moment ...

This story is for Gina (Gmariam) who is celebrating her 21st birthday. :) It is a measure of how much I adore her that I'm writing this pairing for her.

Thank you very much, Kara (Karaley Dargen) for beta'ing this story for me.

Thanks also for teh flist for sticking by me when I was haranguing them. I owe you.

Due to an MNFF glitch, I have lowered the rating on this to 3rd-5th so people can read it. However this is normally a Professors rating. You click at your own risk.


Reviewer: xxbabewithbrainsxx Signed
Date: 11/19/11 Title: Chapter 1: Dreams

Hello, Carole :)

 

First of all, I’d like to congratulate you on winning that QSQ. This story was an amazing one and it thoroughly deserved that award.

 

I thought the poetic style of this piece was very unlike your other stories, and the descriptions really were beautifully written. While I have always enjoyed your stories, Carole, it’s nice to read something in a different style, because you pulled it off so well. The lyricism in it was so honest and real, and I think the same could be said about the entire story. The style also worked because the poetic-ness made it such an intense read, and it emphasised the emotions too.

 

I must say, though, that I was surprised when I saw what category this was in. I know you’re a Remus/Tonks shipper, and I think it’s a real achievement, being able to write a ship you don't even ship so well and making a pairing that has become clichéd original and wholly believable. And with your signature Marauder Era banter which meant tangible chemistry between the four boys — not just Sirius and Remus — you made the situations presented plausible in canon. I could really feel the Marauders’ friendship throughout the story, even though the main focus was Remus and Sirius. What was even better, though, was that at the end, you tied it back to canon. Remus ended up with Tonks, and this connection to a canon event made me realise how realistic the story was.

 

The premise of the story is an interesting one, one of dreams, and I think the concept of dreaming in monochrome and in colour is an unusual observation. I also thought that it linked in with how Remus might have had dreams to go a lot further in life, but due to his lycanthropy, he couldn’t, and then he settled for less. It was a really touching thing to mention, and I think the entire concept of Remus’s life being black and white and then in colour with Tonks, was just brilliant.

 

Can I just say, Carole, kudos to you for kicking the chocolate!Remus out of the window? Seriously, I’m so impressed with how you made this pairing and the clichés that come with it your own, in a sense. You did this in several ways — firstly, Remus’s characterisation was spot-on. He wasn’t exactly like he was in PoA; you had him act like a teenager, and a troubled one at that. Yet you didn't make it overly angsty — Remus’s problems were internal and he tried coping with them himself, by “settling” as Sirius pointed out. The only part that I paused at, however, was when Remus labels himself, and effectively, Sirius, as poofs. I just don't know if Remus would refer to himself in such a derogatory term, and while I understand where he’s coming from, I’m not entirely sure he would say that.

 

And speaking of Sirius... well, he is often your best written character. I definitely thought this was the case here. He had the right combination of bitterness and snark and humour. The section in the Shrieking Shack emphasised his cockiness, especially how Sirius led him on in such a way, and I think Sirius displayed his ruthlessness, or perhaps something else, by pushing Remus admit his feelings for him. That showed a different side to Sirius, and it brought out Remus’s feelings when he was at his most vulnerable. I also thought the irony of it all was just heartbreaking — Sirius kept telling Remus not to settle, and yet at the end of it, Sirius was settling for less by being with Remus instead of James.

 

That was the most unexpected, shocking plot twist, Carole. Of all things that could happen in the story, I didn't expect that to happen. But when I thought about it more and more, it made sense. And once again, you made a ship I wasn’t sure about believable, but in a much more subtle way. I thought the plot twist was really clever and gut-wrenching, and I felt so sorry for Remus as a result. Still, at least Tonks brought a bit of colour in his life, and I like that this ends on a canony note, if you know what I mean.

 

Carole, as you know, I read a lot of your work. I was stupefied by this, honestly, and I think this is one of your best pieces (tied with The Dance We Do and The Golden Boy). Well done :)

 

~Soraya~



Author's Response: Wowzers! thank you, Soraya. Um, how do I respond to that?

Uhmmmm, okay, I'll deal with the minor crit first. Whilst I would agree that Remus is a non-judgemental man and wouldn't call someone a poof in this day and age, I deliberately used that word because it was common parlance in the 70's and would have been the sort of word Remus' dad would have used. So, yes, it was derogatory, but Remus is still vaguely ashamed of what he is/was.

Thank you for the compliments on the lyrical quality of this. I was sort of aware that this was different from much of my other stuff, being a lot less dialogue based and think it has a similar feel to Golden Boy and also Stars or Carousels (in parts). I wrote this story for Gina because she once asked me why I didn't think Sirius and Remus were a couple (it's in my duelling thread somewhere). I'd also just deleted about 1k of a dreadful AU I was planning to give her, and was in despair. Then I went to bed. I woke in the night with the line 'At night Remus dreams in monochrome' and that was the basis of the story.

I've always been fascinated by dreams. I dream very vivid dreams where I'm aware I'm dreaming and can alter events (I dreamt up Rich Soule, btw prob not a good thing - ha ha) but I do know that some people dream in black and white and others say they don't dream. Ascribing these traits to the Marauders made the story flow. I was also rather pleased that I gave Peter another way to bed -wet - ha ha ha - I am meaaaaan.

Ah, the chocolate cliche. I've used this a little bit in some other stories. Chocolate is good for pain, apparently, so I thought it likely that Remus od'd on it during his time with Madam Pomfrey.

Ah, the shock twist. Well, they needed a reason to break up. There had to be a reason for the mistrust between them. And the canon note, I don't think I've ever written anything that can't be twisted back into canon shape. Perhaps I should ...

Thank you so much for the review, Soraya. It's much appreciated. ~Carole~



Mum by hogwartsbookworm

Rated: 1st-2nd Years • 27 Reviews
Summary:

There's something Lily's been waiting to hear since Harry said his first word.

Written in anticipation for Deathly Hallows, part two.

Nominated for the 2011 Best Dark/Angsty QSQ. Thank you, Maple!

Reviewer: xxbabewithbrainsxx Signed
Date: 10/24/11 Title: Chapter 1: One-shot

Lisa, I must say that I wasn’t sure what to expect with this story. I must say, the summary was an excellent one. Sometimes all you need is a one-liner to draw readers in, and you certainly managed that. Congratulations on both the QSQ nomination and the number of reviews you’ve already received for this - you really deserve it :) Initially, though, I thought it would perhaps be fluffy, or overly angsty, as many James/Lily, Marauder Era and Dark/Angsty stories tend to be, but it was neither. It was a beautifully written story that reduced me to tears.

I’m probably in the minority in that I enjoy second person. It’s so very personal, by addressing someone as “you”, and it makes me as a reader understand that character’s emotions so much more. And this was such an emotional piece that I could not possibly imagine it in any other POV. You really brought out Lily’s character in this story, without making it seem like a formulaic character study as such. I particularly liked the fact that you tied the story in with the title so well - you painted the picture of Lily as a mother figure but also, you never let us forget the war. For example, the part when James is calling Lily and she reaches for her wand - this is a really good instance of letting us remember the war in a subtle way, and this is better than shoving it in the reader’s face.

I think the whole premise of this story is such an ingenious one in its simplicity. A baby’s first word is always a really excitable thing, and I think you did an excellent job of portraying that in both James and Lily, especially in their competition against each other. I thought it was nice that Lily got one over on James too. I thought James’s characterisation was spot on, with his signature arrogance - something that is really easy to overdo but you did it perfectly :) And in doing so, you really showed James and Lily’s love for Harry as parents, which is the main theme of Harry Potter anyway.

There was just one point where I questioned your wording. It’s been more than a month since her death, but you still cringe at the thought of Marlene. I wasn’t sure about the use of the word “cringe”. It just sounded a little awkward. But that was the only thing that really stuck out for me; as a whole, the story was worded beautifully.

I think the scene with Harry in the room with James was the saddest, the most bittersweet. The fact that we saw this moment in canon but not what James and Lily were doing has always made me curious about what actually went on inside. I can definitely see this happening in the book, and I thought it was so heart-breaking that Harry only said the magic word when Lily and James were about to die. I loved the way the story was written - snapshots of James and Lily’s lives with Harry until they died.

The end scenes were painful to read. Not because it wasn’t written well (it definitely was!) but because I felt so bad for Harry having to be fed by Petunia instead of his own mum, just after he had learned to say the word. The use of short, sharp, almost choppy dialogue worked really well there. I can imagine Petunia acting like that and I think you had characterisation down perfectly for her. But even more painful for me was Lily’s reaction. I thought it was really interesting that you had Lily watching over him the whole time he was suffering at the hands of the Dursleys. You really conveyed Lily’s and Harry’s emotions so very well throughout but particularly at the end, especially the part with the Mirror of Erised.

Lisa, I really think this is your best story yet. It was emotional, touching, personal and so very unlike any other James/Lily story I’ve ever read. I can’t wait to read what you write next. Excellent job.

~Soraya~



The Four by Equinox Chick

Rated: 1st-2nd Years • 4 Reviews
Summary: For me, the start of my grand love affair with the Potterverse didn't begin with Harry Potter and the Philosopher's Stone. No, it started with Prisoner of Azkaban because of the Marauders. This poem is about them and my attempt at a goodbye to four people who inspired me. (Well, Peter - not so much)

Thank you, Julia, for the challenge and for teaching me about villanelles.

Disclaimer: I am not JKR, or Julia, or anyone with talent.



Reviewer: xxbabewithbrainsxx Signed
Date: 08/14/11 Title: Chapter 1: The Four

I've commented on this already on Poetry Anyone, but I wanted to squee about it again :) This is an amazing poem, just gorgeous. I honestly felt rather teary rereading it, Carole, and I can see how hard it was to say goodbye to the Marauders.

And I loved that you had one stanza for each Marauder... and that last stanza -- *sniff*

Well done :)

~Soraya~

Author's Response: Thanks Soraya. I enjoyed writing this even though I struggled with it so really appreciate the review. ~Carole~



The Stars As My Witness by Gmariam

Rated: 3rd-5th Years • 9 Reviews Past Featured Story
Summary: I cannot see their bodies, buried beneath the ruins of their life together, but I know they are there. I can imagine their green and hazel eyes, staring into the dark emptiness. It is all I can do to stay upright, filled with equal parts rage and grief as I gaze unseeing at the heartbreaking scene.

How did it come to this?
Reviewer: xxbabewithbrainsxx Signed
Date: 09/02/11 Title: Chapter 1: One-Shot

Gina — that was amazing!

Honestly, I wasn’t quite sure what to expect with this piece, considering its length. I didn't think it would be possible to create such a moving story (and nearly reduce me to tears in the process) within 883 words! But I clicked on this for several reasons: firstly, because I know you are a wonderful author. Also because the summary intrigued me; I always think it’s a good idea to have an extract of the bigger picture in your summary, and I adored your title too. I thought that how the title fitted in with the story (and vice versa) was ingenious on your part. Well done there.

Perhaps it’s because I read a lot of your James/Lily fics (I promise I will get started on Raindrops soon!) but I am really glad I chose to read this. I know this is in the Marauder Era cat, but the mood in this piece was very dark, whereas your James/Lilys are more focused on the romance aspect of it, and the use of the present tense made the atmosphere very urgent. I really liked your use of first person, too; you pulled off Sirius’s voice flawlessly here.

There is a real frankness in your writing style here, Gina. Nothing is overdone; it’s so easy to slip into melodrama when writing a fic that is angsty, but you sidestepped well away from that. There is rawness in your writing that I really loved — the absence of dialogue really worked here. I didn't even notice it at first, actually. It was as if I was in Sirius’s head, and the lack of dialogue was because of how Sirius wasn’t really paying attention to what was going on around him, only about James and Lily’s deaths.

Which brings me to the plot. The story of James and Lily’s deaths is an oft-explored event, and almost always, it is written from James and Lily’s point of view. I really liked your fresh take on that, and that you picked the aftermath rather than the actual thing. It is almost as if this is a prequel to Harry Potter and the Philosopher’s Stone, and if I didn't know that this was fanfiction, I would have been thoroughly convinced that this was canon. I loved the part when Sirius kissed Harry’s forehead, too; so very Sirius, and very sweet. Enough to make a girl swoon, I tell you.

I love your poetic use of language in this piece, as well; and from Sirius’s point of view, no less. The description was artistically and tastefully executed, and was simply beautiful. I wasn’t entirely sure about the over formalness of Sirius’s words, at times. I know that it was written from his point of view, so it technically counts as narrative, but occasionally, the absence of an apostrophe made the dialogue slightly stilted. One example of this is the use of the word “cannot”. However, I don't think it sounds right or appropriate to use “can’t”, yet “cannot” sounds very formal and a little un-Sirius. I’m assuming that this was your intention, since the mood of the fic is sombre. So in that respect, I suppose it is fitting to use formal words. Never mind, I just answered my own question :)

As such a short piece, I thought it flowed very well. It was neither fast-paced nor did it drag, and you covered the events seamlessly. You put a lot in those few words, and I think that gave the piece a wonderful quality. The ending was particularly powerful, and overall, Gina, I think this fic’s greatest strength is that you answered a lot of questions in canon. You added to certain aspects of canon, too, and made them more believable.

So all in all, Gina, an absolutely magnificent fic, and definitely going on my favourites list. Well done.

~Soraya~

Author's Response: Wow, thank you so much for the amazing review! Squeeeeee! I'm so glad you read it. I'm so glad you liked it. I'm so speechless at your lovely comments I don't even know what to say. I wrote this for a TTB drabble challenge, which is why it's so short. When I decided to submit it, I really wanted to expand it, but there just wasn't anything else to say. It says what it needs to say. I think a lot of what you commented on flowed first from the very strong visual I had of this happening, and then second from the decision to write it first person present tense - which wasn't really a decision, it just happened naturally. So I'm glad it all worked, lol. And since I have been known to whine about getting Sirius right, I'm glad *he* worked, although those darn contractions and the formality/informality they lend a piece are always tricky! Really, I think I just lucked out on this one, lol. Having said that, I am suddenly curious to see if I could try for another...hm...like I need more plot bunnies...:D Thanks again Soraya!! ~Gina :)



I Always Knew by Dragon_Lily

Rated: 1st-2nd Years • 3 Reviews
Summary: Snape reflects on losing his one true love.
Reviewer: xxbabewithbrainsxx Signed
Date: 11/05/11 Title: Chapter 1: I Always Knew

Hello! Carole/Equinox Chick just recommended this poem to me, and I have to say, I loved it :) I'm a huge fan of Adele and rhyming poems, so I really enjoyed reading this. I loved the structure of it as well, and I think my favourite line was Slowly but surely their love grew.

You did very well in conveying the feel of Someone Like You. Well done :)

~Soraya~



Author's Response: Haha yes I am an Adele fan through and through as well. Thanks for the review! -Emma



High by Equinox Chick

Rated: 3rd-5th Years • 237 Reviews Past Featured Story
Summary: Scorpius Malfoy is the Seeker for Slytherin. Not only that, he's the best Seeker at Hogwarts, and it's his catches that win matches. But this year things are different; Albus Potter has switched to Chaser and the new Gryffindor Seeker is his annoying little sister.

This is the story of how one match and one missed catch can change your life.

This story was accidentally deleted, so is being resubmitted ... very very quickly.

SQUEEEEE! High won the Best Next Generation QSQ award. Thank you so much for the everyone who has helped, either by beta'ing or encouraging me.

Disclaimer: I am not JK Rowling. I'm not sure who I am at the moment, but there must be some Arthur Weasley blood in me.

Thank you Natalie (hestiajones) for doing the vast majority of the beta work on this, and Apurva for work on the early chapters

Squish for Natalie, Jess, Kara and Bob for helping me sort this out.

Due to an archive hissy fit regarding any story with a rating about 3rd-5th, I have temporarily lowered the rating on this story. However, I have NOT changed the content. This story is still a 6th-7th. You click at your own risk.
Reviewer: xxbabewithbrainsxx Signed
Date: 09/30/11 Title: Chapter 12: Chapter 12 - Meet The Potters

Ooooh, things are getting exciting. I hope her baby's okay, and I'm glad I don't have to wait for updates, LOL.

Your dialogue is delightful and real and I particularly liked the last sentence.

I've got to read on so this will be a very short review. Oh, you mentioned Apparently Asleep in your last response -- when are you getting back to that? *wags finger*

Author's Response: EEEP! Apparently Asleep. Um, I need to finish this, write two shortish things, and get cracking on Lions and Dean Thomas. Then ... back to AA. Sorry. Of course the baby is okay, I had to give Lavender and Blaise some joy. Thank you. ~Carole~



Reviewer: xxbabewithbrainsxx Signed
Date: 09/30/11 Title: Chapter 13: Chapter 13 - Legacies

Carole! That was a brilliant chapter (but hey, what's new?). I'm glad Lavender and Blaise got the happiness they deserved. I'm really happy for them :)

And I can finally understand why Ginny had such a problem with Scorpius. Tbh, I forgot about that connection they had, and I can definitely sympathise with Scorpius for wanting to deny it. I would want to deny it too -- no matter what Lucius was, he's still family for Scorpius so I totally see where he was coming from.

And I *knew* there was more to that letter! Haha.

Anyway, excellent chapter, Madam, and I shall see you on the next one! I'm hoping to finish all of High by this weekend. We'll see how things go...

Author's Response: Yay! Everyone thought Ginny was acting unfairly, and she was a bit, but there was a reason nand she realised she was being unfair. This was the reason I wanted to write Scily. I think the history betweenGinny and Lucius is far more interesting than Ron and Draco. That can get boorish and comical - this, imo, has more edge. Thanks again ~Carole~



Reviewer: xxbabewithbrainsxx Signed
Date: 09/30/11 Title: Chapter 14: Chapter 14 -Confrontation

That was a really emotional chapter, Carole. I love that you have the angst and the seriousness and the fun of their relationship and yet there's a really good balance, never too much of one thing. This, I think, is what makes a good story.

I did think they were going to guess eventually -- though, now I come to mention it, I knew the charm would wear off eventually or someone would recognise Lily's freckles, for example.

But then Lucius died! I'm not sure what to think. Part of me thinks good riddance because he was never the best of people, but another part of me feels sorry for him for having to go through that -- plus, I feel really sorry for Scorpius having to go through all of that. Especially the fact that Scorpius was actually there when Lucius died, only for him to be kicked out... so sad :(

Onto the next chapter!



Author's Response: I debated in my head the deathbed scene for a long time. I always knew I wanted something with Lily there, because Lucius had been the problem for Ginny accepting Scorpius, so I wanted Lucius' POV. I still hum and haww about whether he should have been remorseful, but I also think by this age and after his strokes, that he had become more malevolent, so I kept this in. I feel sorrier for Scorpius, Draco and Lily, than I do Lucius. Lily, because she saw someone die and she's still very young. ~Carole~



Reviewer: xxbabewithbrainsxx Signed
Date: 09/30/11 Title: Chapter 15: Chapter 15 - Breaking In

This was a really moving chapter, Carole. Having lost a grandparent myself recently, I can really understand what Scorpius was going through.

And aww, I felt sorry for Lily. First breaking her ankle, tearing her ligaments (my best friend recently tore her ligaments -- ouch) and then being told Scorpius is tired everyday, as if he's ignoring her. Poor her :(

Again, I really love your Teddy? He's just so lovely. I particularly liked him Metarmorphosing into Albus -- for a second, I was a bit weirded out by the thought of Al being friendly to Scorpius, but then I got it, LOL.

Aww, I hope Scorpius and Lily stick this time! (I highly doubt it.)



Author's Response: you doubted they'd stick? Oh ye of little faith! ha ha. Thanks for the review. I couldn;t keep splitting them up; that's when it gets boring *sigh*



Reviewer: xxbabewithbrainsxx Signed
Date: 09/30/11 Title: Chapter 16: Chapter 16 - Widows' Weeds

Oh, for a moment there, I thought Scorpius was actually going to go and retract everything and say that he wasn't seeing Lily! Good on him, is what I can say. And I'm glad Scorpius's speech wasn't cliched or anything -- you know, the normal "procedure" in stories and movies and stuff, when the speaker has something prepared and somehow comes out with this amazing speech that they've come up with off the top of their head. >.>

I also really liked your Andromeda here, and I really wanted to slap Narcissa, dammit. Well, enough rambling from me! I've nearly caught up so I shall continue tomorrow. Night!



Author's Response: Thanks for the compliments on the funeral speech. It was a bit of a tough one to write because Scorpius does still have some fond memories and love for his granddad, but it's being submerged by the horror he feels. *sigh*. At least Andromeda can show him not all Slyths are bad. ~Carole~



Reviewer: xxbabewithbrainsxx Signed
Date: 10/01/11 Title: Chapter 17: Chapter 17 - A Testing Time

Awwwwww. (Both for you and Scorpius -- you for losing all those reviews and Scorpius for going through that in the middle of a paper -- poor boy.)

Hmm. I noticed something and I'll have to pick your brain, I'm afraid. I don't know if it's a typo or something, but you said that Fred's mum was Angelina Johnson. Is she... dead?

But anyway, I really felt for Scorpius in this chapter. I knew that something would go wrong with Scorpius in his exam. But anyway, I loved Fred II in this, and I thought it very nice of Scorpius to wish Albus good luck despite their problems with each other. Good. (:P)

Anyway, I've nearly caught up! Only a few left to go.



Author's Response: Um, no she's not dead. I meant that she was Angeline Johnso in the sense that Angelkina Joihnson was a famous Quidditch player and is now Angelina Weasley. I will write that story some day, Thanks or the review. ~Carole~



Reviewer: xxbabewithbrainsxx Signed
Date: 10/01/11 Title: Chapter 18: Chapter 18 -Slytherin Spirit

They did it! (By that, of course I mean the "I love you" bit -- hehe.) Aw, it's sad that Scorpius ran out of that exam, but I hope he at least gets Acceptable in that. Though perhaps the DADA practical might push his marks up.

Sorry, I'm kind of in an exam mood right now. >.> Anyway, I thought you led up to that scene very well, and you did a lovely job on leaving out enough details to not make the reader uncomfortable. I definitely think less is more, etc., etc.

And I'm glad Scorpius is sort-of apologising and improving his relations with people he previously disliked. I think leaving school has that kind of feel to it anyway. So yes, there were parts of this chapter that were really relatable for me, and I'm really enjoying it. Though that's pretty obvious anyway. :D

Onto the next chapter -- I've nearly caught up! And I'm still in denial that I've read 100K (or more) in the space of a few days. XD



Author's Response: Thank you. I was so worried 'that scene' would end up anti-climatic because there had been such a build up. I was also very mindful of the rating on this story. The original version was Profs rated - ha - but I didn't want to up the rating and risk losing readers. Plus, I agree, sometimes less is so much more. Thanks again ~Carole~



Reviewer: xxbabewithbrainsxx Signed
Date: 10/01/11 Title: Chapter 19: Chapter 19 -Where There's A Will

Yaaaaaaaaay. Teddy and Victoire!! <3 them so much. And I so feel sorry for Scorpius. Astoria was so horrible helping Draco and Narcissa set Draco up like that. But at least she helped Scorpius later.

I think the funniest thing about this whole story is that you really shoot down a lot of NG ships, even Scominique (grrrrr).

The idea of Teddy in a towel is somehow very appealing, but I wouldn't dare fight Ariana. :O I'm intrigued as to what's happening next; see you on the next chapter!



Author's Response: eeeep, next chapter - godhdarnit, I knew I had something to finish. Okay, I will admit that I have taken great joy is poking fun at other peoples' ships - gently, of course. But I see this couple in my mind so very clearly and want it to work. It's become as real to me as Lavender/Blaise - *sigh*

Thank you for all your reviews. I will get to them soon. ~Carole~



Reviewer: xxbabewithbrainsxx Signed
Date: 10/01/11 Title: Chapter 20: Chapter 20 -Fantastic Days

I am nodding fervently in agreement with your chapter notes. LOL.

Carole, I think you know how much I <3 this story. It's everything everyone said it would be, and the fact that I read 119-odd K in four days should tell you that this is one of your best stories so far. I'm favouriting it and (although this may sound selfish) I'm kind of glad I started reading it now because if I didn't, I'd have to wait for updates. And that kills me already with AA and Lions *hint hint*

I still don't ship Scily, but this story has brought me close to that. Basically, the story's wonderful, so are you, and you'd better update soon. Or else... I'll cry.

 ~Soraya~



Author's Response: ch 21 will soon be winging its way to Natalie, worry not. And then after the last chapter and 2 other things I have a plan for Lions which involves November! ha ha - thank you so much for all the reviews. Much appreciated. ~Carole~ Oh, and there could well be a spin off or two with this.



Reviewer: xxbabewithbrainsxx Signed
Date: 09/28/11 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1 -Flying High

Soooo. I've finally decided to bite the bullet and read a Scily. (Which is a miracle in itself LOL.)

I must say, I love your Scorpius. He's just so adorable and I felt quite sorry for him when he lost that match. It's probably my inner Pottermore!Slytherin coming out, hehe. And your Lily's just fabulous. I thought the touch with the apple was iconic and quite funny at times, and she's like Ginny, but not to the extent where she's a carbon copy of her, either.

The only sort-of nitpick I have is that a lot seemed to go on in this chapter so it did seem, if not a little rushed, then it glossed over parts at times. But I *believe* this was meant to be a oneshot originally, so I'm not really surprised at that.

But yes, you definitely have me intrigued, and I shall read on ASAP. See you on the next chapter!

Author's Response: Thank you for the review, Soraya. Yes, this was a oneshot written for a challenge (Forbidden Love, I think) and so the first chapter does have an air of resolution about it. But I sort of knew this would be expanded. I hope you like the rest of it, anyway.

Oh, I see you've met Teddy Lupin - heh heh heh. He's become the stud in this fic - ha ha ha. ~Carole~



Reviewer: xxbabewithbrainsxx Signed
Date: 09/28/11 Title: Chapter 2: Chapter 2 - Sticky as Lips

Oooh. Interesting chapter, Carole. I liked the details about the owls and stuff. This actually sounded kind of familiar, which gives me the feeling I've read it before when I was half-asleep and then I couldn't find it again... yes, it's all coming back to me LOL. I can definitely remember reading about Teddy interrupting Scorpius and *someone* so it must have been this.

By the way, I'm so in love with Teddy it's not even funny. I hope he appears a lot in this story. You've made him a really interesting (my mind is filled with fluff at the moment so I can't think of a better word) character and I'm glad you addressed the fact that Scorpius and Teddy are cousins.

And I so LOL'd when Scorpius pretended to be Harry Cootes. Too funny.

Author's Response: Teddy reappears just when Scorpius needs him - hee hee. There's one scene that's a favourite of mine. I'll let you know when you get to it. Thank you for reading (possibly re-reading) ~Carole~



Reviewer: xxbabewithbrainsxx Signed
Date: 09/28/11 Title: Chapter 3: Chapter 3 -Smitten as That

I LOVED the Scugo references in there. LOL.

And despite being a Scorose shipper, I must say that even I laughed at the fact that you pretty much kicked that ship out of the window.

I

Author's Response: Yes, my Rose isn't very nice - ha ha. Of course this is all from Scorpius' POV, so you get to see a biased side of the Potters and Weasleys. ~Carole~



Reviewer: xxbabewithbrainsxx Signed
Date: 01/14/12 Title: Chapter 22: Chapter 22 -The Same Sweet Steps

Carole! How do you do it? Seriously, I was fully prepared for something that would make me cry or make me smile or sigh or laugh, but this final chapter made me do all of the above. I honestly do not know how I'm feeling atm. On the one hand, I feel really, really sad that it's over, and that there was not more, even though this chapter had that wonderful sense of finality to it. But then I feel happy, too, that Scorpius found somewhere to live and his dad seems to have forgiven him and Scorpius and Lily got their happy ending (and yes, this is Soraya, not an imposter. I really did use the words "happy ending" in the same sentence as Scorpius and Lily) and Scorpius realises that while his dream was to play Quidditch, he's more suited to being an Auror, which made me happy that he's realised what he wants to do.

I'm sorry, I'm probably not making much sense here. I just-- I'm honestly just in awe of this story, Carole. It was amazingly written and fully deserved its QSQ and it kind of converted me to liking Scily which I never thought would happen. And all the inclusions and hints of other ships, like Jominique (lol), Scugo (coughNataliecough), Charlie/Penelope, Lavender/Blaise and others just made me smile so much.

I read this with my mouth wide open, Carole. GUHHH. I'm sad it's over, but I'm so glad they got the ending they deserved, and that it ended on such an optimistic note. Congrats on such a wonderful story, and may there be many more spin-offs of this (*coughsplutterJominiqueprettypleasecoughsplutter*).

Author's Response: Thank youuuuuuuu ♥. Hmm, not sure I can write Jominique now. She seems entwined with a certain witch called Mags De-Vine ... but I might well split them up - ha ha. Oh, the power!

Thank you so much for the review, Soraya, and all your support as I strove to complete this. It really means a lot to me. Charlie/Penelop - I really need to write that sequel. Thanks again and again and again. ~Carole~



Reviewer: xxbabewithbrainsxx Signed
Date: 09/28/11 Title: Chapter 4: Chapter 4 -Kitten as a Cat

Carole! You are so evil, I swear! First, you're starting to make me ship Scily, and then you do *this*???? This isn't faaaaiiir. There has got to be a reasonable explanation for this.

It's got to be a horrible coincidence or something. I'm sure of it. I hope Lily forgives Scorpius soon, though. And I am glad that you didn't have chapters and chapters of Scorpius and Lily having this secret relationship before anyone found out. It's more realistic the way you wrote it.

I'll have to continue reading tomorrow, so you won't get any more rambly, silly reviews from me til then. Night!

Author's Response: heh heh. It couldn't all be plain sailing. There is an explanation- Scorpius is an evil manipulative Slytherin!. Thank you for getting this far. ~Carole~



Reviewer: xxbabewithbrainsxx Signed
Date: 10/29/11 Title: Chapter 21: Chapter 21 -Relative Values

Yay, you updated! But I'm sad there's only one chapter left. I've become really attached to Scorpius lately and I thought the matches were written very well.

I also liked that Draco sort of redeemed himself for me. Yeah, he did the emotional blackmail and everything, but he seemed to have seen sense at the end. Which I think is more in character.

I can't believe this is the penultimate chapter. I don't want it to end either :( But I'm glad you're doing spin-offs.

Well done as usual :)



Author's Response: Thankieeeees. Yes, I really should click that new document open and start writing it. It was the same with Lavender, I seem to remember. Draco makes me laugh - well my version does - book Draco is a git! Thanks again for the review and I'm glad you liked the Quidditch. ~Carole~