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There’s something for everyone, unless you like reading Snape romances, which I don’t write. Or Voldemort’s children. Or Snape’s children. You will, however, find two Snape/Lily and one Voldemort/Minerva poems. Other than these, I’ve written:

Completed Fics:

Alternate Universe: Going against Salazar’s Grain, Winner of 2011 QSQ for Best AU.

Dark/Angst: To Follow the Dark Lord, For I Am a Mother, Killing Meda’s Daughter, Him Alice and Me, Carousel, The Receding, Becoming Rita, On No One’s Side and Lacuna Mentis, Winner of 2011 QSQ for Best D/A.

Draco/Astoria: Because You Came, Winner of 2011 QSQ Best Canon Romance.

Femmeslash: Cut, Bleed, Susan, Hands That Fit, Desire And a Half.

Humour: I Like a Healthy Breeze Round My Privates, Bit of a Nasty Shock. Mmm. These are exactly about what you’re thinking.

Harry/Hermione: Over a Mug of Tea, Harmony. I have delusional friends whom I love.

Historical: Waiting, An Act of Love

James/Lily: Ain’t Love the Sweetest Thing, Always Come Back to You

Maleslash: In the Back of the Shack, At the End of It, Anchored, Something Strange

Marauder Era: A Tale of Six Perspectives, Wish You Were Here, Common Cold Won’t Keep Me Down, Always … But Not Who You Think

Non-pairing: Sunday Lunch with the Malfoys
Scorpius/Rose: Breaking Rules, Of Weasleys And Malfoys
Scorpius/Hugo: In the Back of the Shack, At the End of It, Anchored
Dominique/OC: Cut, Bleed
Lucy/Lorcan: Whirlwind

Post-Hogwarts: Seamus’ Break with a Banshee, Mirrors, A Splendid Fate, and The Substitute, Winner of 2011 Best Non-Canon Romance

Ted/Andromeda: Eternal Flight, Five Christmases, Soul Sister

Crack Pairings:
Ron/Mary Cattermole: The Substitute
James/Severus: Always … But Not Who You Think

Character Studies:
Rita Skeeter: Becoming Rita
Merope Gaunt: The Receding
Florean Fortescue: Florean Fortescue - An Unsung Hero
Albus Dumbledore: Going against Salazar’s Grain
Bill Weasley: Never too Late
Andrew Carlton, OC: Being Muggle with Rooney
Tom Riddle: Commencement
Mrs Zabini: Rendezvous with Mrs Zabini, Desire And a Half
Pansy Parkinson: Carousel
Molly Weasley: Knowing Who She Was, The Solitary Prewett


Snape/Lily: The Silver Doe, In Winter in My Head
Tom/Minerva: Spiral
Draco/Harry: Dreams Made of Green
Remus/Tonks: it might not be, but still
Hogwarts: The Battle of Hogwarts, May 2nd and The Clarion Call, Winner of 2010 QSQ Best Poetry
Lily Potter: The Gathering Storm and the Crib
Harry/Ginny: A Night of Love
Harry Potter: Memories Are Not Enough
Draco Malfoy: I Am Shame
Regulus Black: My Black Brother
Bellatrix and Narcissa: The Black Sisters
Bloody Baron/Grey Lady: Murder for Love
Hestia Jones (oh): Drive Your Car On
Draco/Hermione: The Other Woman


A Marriage Made at Hogwarts: I’m afraid I won’t be continuing this. :/ I had completed it ages ago, but I lost the draft twice and I don’t have the heart or the motivation to finish it. Or delete it.
Before I Forget: A Maleslash featuring Regulus/Rabastan. I will definitely complete it next year.
One Day in the Life of: A Next-Gen fic featuring all the - well - Next-Gen kids. This too will be finished in the coming year.

Upcoming Fics:

As of now, I’m severely blocked. D: However, I am working on the following projects and both will be posted before 31st January of next year:

Songs, Lovers and Everything in Between: A string of post-Hogwarts romances featuring rarepairs.

Bill Weasley and the Temple of Lsulaph: An Alternate Universe as well as Parallel Universe crack!fic-cum-adventure featuring the most dashing Weasley to grace your consciousness along with twelve daredevil and powerful sisters. Together, they must defeat the evil sorcerer/non-Egyptian pharaoh Lsulaph, who has taken over the Incaff sisters’ kingdom.

UPDATE: If you're looking for Fireworks Inside, here's a link: http://clickysmut.livejournal.com/2930.html

That’s pretty much it. Hope you enjoy the stay!

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Home by ron lover

Rated: 3rd-5th Years •
Summary: After the Battle, Harry finds Ginny by the Black Lake.
Reviewer: hestiajones Signed
Date: 01/15/10 Title: Chapter 1: After the Battle


Well, I am amazed that this was the first one-shot you’d ever written; in fact, one you’d forgotten about. It was so well-written. I like how you showed a bit more vulnerable side to Ginny – her mourning of her brother and her fear about Harry’s feelings were done nicely. Harry, of course, was his usual burdened self. Nothing on you, lol, but poor Harry…he must learn to see the bright side of things. So, I was happy with how you ended the story – with a bit of sunshine. :)

Great job!

Author's Response: Thank you so much, Natalie! I like Ginny too. She was easier to write. I liked the ending too. A little. Thanks for reading and reviewing! *hugs*

Matthew Seven by DeadManSeven

Rated: Professors •
Summary: If asked, Yvonne would have admitted that she was caught in-between two worlds. She was a witch - a Healer working at St. Mungo's, in fact - who used Muggle methods to help her patients. She had no connection to the Department of Mysteries, and could not have thought she was trapped between the present and the past, reality and nightmare, truth and lie, the living and the dead...

Not yet, anyway.
Reviewer: hestiajones Signed
Date: 09/22/10 Title: Chapter 1: The Strait Gate

Hello Derek!

Well, well, well. This was certainly something new; I’m not sure if I’ve read anything like this in fanfiction before.

No, I haven’t, actually.

OCs are definitely a hard sell, but I feel that they are so much more challenging to write. How do you begin? Where do you begin? You’re entrusted with creating a believable human character, and to make that person interesting enough to read about. Too often, people think it is easy to do this, thereby producing scores of…well, Mary Sues and Gary Stus. OCs take time to build, mainly because an individual is a complex thing to build.

You crossed that hurdle smoothly, and believe me, if I had read this story a little earlier, I’d definitely have nominated it for a QSQ in two categories, at least. That was the one thought which kept playing in my mind the whole time I was reading it: why haven’t many people noticed this before? Perhaps, it is the fact that it is an OC-based story; perhaps, the disturbing horrors contained in the story put them off. Which is sad, really, because it deserves a chance.

I wouldn’t say I related to Yvonne, and that is neither a good thing nor a bad thing. The most important thing is, I found her real. I found her believable. She had her own quirks, her own idiosyncrasies. Her reflections on music, novels – pop culture in general were amusing to read. The thing that I enjoyed the most is her balance between the Muggle world and the magical world. I’ve always been somewhat disappointed at how this area has never been explored in fanfiction, so I was pretty much excited to see you portraying that. And it wasn’t just there for decoration; her being a Muggle-born and still in tune with that part of her life play a vital role in the story.

The second thing I loved about this story was the horror aspect. I don’t mind reading/watching horror – well, I don’t like obvious mindless bloodbaths like the Wrong Turn or Hostel movies, but I like my ‘scary’ things to have a bit of a soul, a bit of a meaning, and a bit of a purpose. The girl in the bus, the experience of the extracted memory, the witnessing of Archer’s death – every instance was written well without being overdone. I suppose it might make people queasy if I said that I enjoyed a big bowl of pasta while reading all of that. *shrug*

The third aspect which lent substance to this story was the theme of religion. Now, I’m not Christian, so I was somewhat unfamiliar with most of the Biblical references, but thankfully, I got the gist behind them. I actually expected this right from the start, this inclusion of religious elements mainly because you start each chapter with a quote from the Book of Matthew; the title was pretty much telling as well. But I like how you left it open-ended, and not didactical or self-explanatory. Omniscience as an idea has always made me feel uncomfortable, and it was jarring to see some of my fears coming alive in this story.

Fourth…ahhh! You used the wizarding world so well in this fic, and presented it from a completely different angle. I like how everything was written so matter-of-factly. The Department of Mysteries, which sounded creepy before, became even more bizarre here. There are so many details to talk about here, to be honest – the arrest of the Muggle-borns, the Longbottoms, etc. I shall say that they were cleverly worked into the overall plot of the story, and let that suffice!

Last, but certainly not the least, your prose is rather good. It is fluid, fluent and effortless. I think that alone can make a story in many cases, and added a lot of quality to this particular story.

The only thing which I thought of as a tad anomalistic was a change in track in the fourth chapter. Yvonne undergoes a series of hallucinations after she wakes up, through the bus ride, and up to her arrival at her apartment. Although things aren’t yet normal, I was surprised by her level-headed, undisturbed conversation with Christine. That changes soon, of course, when she goes into the kitchen, and things take a turn in the shower. But that period in between seemed a little too normal. Or was the presence of somebody who had some idea of her situation causing the apparent normalcy? I wonder.

I am glad Gina directed me towards this story. I must confess that I am myself guilty of ignoring OC-based fics most of the time, and I don’t think I’d ever have read it if it hadn’t been for her recommendation. I seriously had a great time reading it, and it deserves a lot more than six reviews.

Well, seven, counting mine.

See you around the boards!


Author's Response: It's a narrow line to walk when creating an original character. On the one hand, you spend all this time coming up with who they are and all the things that make them unique and interesting, so naturally you want to show all that off. On the other, for the character to not be an overwhelming force in the story they need to be well-integrated into the universe, which means showing a lot of respect for the source material and letting your original creation take a back seat once in a while. That's a tough thing to do – downplay something you created that is obviously awesome – and I think it's one of the big reasons that 'Original Character' is almost synonymous with 'Mary Sue' in many people's eyes.

In making Yvonne, my main goal was to have her come across as a real person, who had to have enough depth and weight to carry the whole story. I wanted her to have the same believability as a person as the whole Harry Potter setting has a its own little universe. I'm not sure she's completely relatable – her motivations are pretty closed-off, for most of the story – but I was doing a bit of experimenting with bait-and-switch in reader expectation: Yvonne's first set up to be the archetype of the headstrong intelligent girl that falls for the older damaged man, and then the regular person who gets in too deep into something she doesn't understand but has to keep pressing on, but she's really neither of those things in the end. I aimed to let people make their own judgements about her, I think, and I tried my best to distract readers into thinking down the wrong path, like. I hate reading anything where I've got the main character figured out from the first five pages, you know?

Horror is an interesting thing, as a genre. When people say 'horror', they're usually talking about a class of films filled with gore, jump-scares, and little else. This obviously transfers terribly to writing, for the simple fact that you have to take time to describe the horrible beastie about to leap from the shadows, where a film can do it all in a handful of frames. There's this other class of horror films, though, that's usually very tame by comparison in terms of content, but are filled with such a constant tension that you almost wish something bad would just happen so the tension would break – stuff like Psycho, The Shining, The Ring, anything David Lynch directed – and that's just perfect for text. The growing dread, the creeping sense that everything is going horribly, horribly wrong, and the ability to describe unsettling concepts and not have them dampened by a poor special effects budget... it's why Lovecraft is still popular today and why so many writers borrow liberally from his ideas, I think.

It's a shame people shy away from religion in general in the HP fandom (possibly out of fear of offending people?), especially since the last book is so obviously full of Christian allusions. However, just because Harry, the saviour of the wizarding world, going through a sacrificial death and rebirth, does that mean that DH is pushing its readers to accept the word of Jesus Christ? Of course not. Religious symbolism, like any symbolism, can just an element of telling a good story. I purposely took quotes from the Sermon on the Mount as far out of context as I possibly could, just to show that although a story can talk about religion, that doesn't automatically make the content religious.

The fandom doesn't like to stray too far from Hogwarts, it seems. Understandable, since the majority of the books are set there, but the thing that makes the Harry Potter series stand out from other modern fantasy stuff is how fully-realised the world is, how complete and real it seems. It's more than just the magic school, it feels like there's a whole magic community out there, and I like the stories that focus on different parts of it. We know about life at Hogwarts – what's life like at St. Mungo's, or the Ministry, or Diagon Alley, or any one of a dozen other places? I like writing where I can explore parts of the canon we don't see that much of, and Yvonne became a nice cross-section of some of the aspects that interested me – magical professionals, Muggle-borns, students slightly removed from the Trio's era at Hogwarts, the Department of Mysteries (which I am perpetually fascinated by and will always write into a story, given the opportunity)... things like that.

Thanks for taking the time to review, glad you liked it. I seem to get a lot of reviews that have sentences beginning with things like 'I don't normally like/read X, but...' and I consider that the highest of praise.

Snow-Hushed by Magical Maeve

Rated: 1st-2nd Years •
Summary: Hogwarts has always been a place of snow and magic, but after the final battle the snow doesn't lie so quietly.
Reviewer: hestiajones Signed
Date: 04/04/10 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

I have no idea about meters or rhymes; when it comes to technical matters of poetry, I utterly fail. But I do love what this poem is about, and how it has been written.

Snow is something I have mixed feelings towards. On the one hand, it inspires feelings of romance (probably because I have seen far too many Bollywood movies where the "heroes" and "heroines" prance about in snow-clad places and sing love songs). And yet, it is so cold and impersonal and quietening. Therefore, the adjective "snow-hushed" instantly makes me gloomy and sad.

I like how the next para subtly changes from the world of the living to the dead, while still keeping the connection of snow. Here is impersonality and quiet of a different sort.

Even though the word is absent in the last para, the mood is still there. Heavy and cold and quiet is the grief which the living contain for the dead. I particularly love the last two lines:

But if their lives were not in vain why is it then We feel their weight still heavy?

Mmmm... I am not a good critic for poetry, and I may have interpreted the whole thing incorrectly. But I think it is poignant without being maudline, and very beautifully written.


Aberforth Dumbledore: A Love that Dare not Bleat its Name by Equinox Chick

Rated: 3rd-5th Years •
Summary: Aberforth Dumbledore was once infamous throughout the land for casting Inappropriate Charms on goats. He never responded to the claims, never gave his side of the story and lived with an odd reputation for decades.

But now he wants to set the record straight before Rita Skeeter has a chance to twist things furthur awry.

This is Equinox Chick from Hufflepuff and this is my entry in the Stirring category for the Winter Snows 09 competition on the MNFF Beta Boards.

I am not JK Rowling. Does that honestly surprise anyone!

This story won the 2010 QSQ Best Humour Fic - I'm still in shock.

Thank you to Hannah (coolh5000) for beta'ing this fic.
Reviewer: hestiajones Signed
Date: 02/08/10 Title: Chapter 1: Aberforth Dumbledore and the Enchanted Goat

Carole, I really loved this one. You do know how I have always itched to know what was up with Aberforth and goats, and I am so glad someone at least decided to get to the bottom of it.

I loved how you wrote Aberforth and Dumbledore here. Aberforth with his raw humour and recklessness, and Albus with his dry humour and...ability to set things right - they were done very nicely.

Apart from those two, I also loved the invisible editor who kept appearing via his/her notes. Haha! I really loved that line:

[Editors Note: Keep that in. I don’t think any ‘flibberty-gibbet girls’ read Stirring, anyway.]

That was plain funny.

Well, great entry and good luck!


Author's Response: Thank you, Natalie. Well, it's a daft one, but was fun to write, so we'll see.

The Bacchus Book by Equinox Chick

Rated: 3rd-5th Years • Past Featured Story
Summary: On the morning of Christmas Day, 2000, Hermione Granger (soon-to-be-Weasley) wakes up from a delightful dream to find herself in a bathroom at Grimmauld Place.

As various Weasleys queue up to tell her all about her behaviour the night before at Aunt Muriel's birthday party, Hermione is in a state of shock.

She knows she didn't drink anything stronger than Butterbeer. So why was she wearing a toga and teaching everyone how to perform Greek dancing?

And what, in the name of Merlin, was she doing with George?

This is Equinox Chick and this is my entry for the extra credit challenge 'In Vino Veritas' for the Winter Snows 09 competition over at the MNFF beta boards.

Thank you to Apurva for beta'ing this tale in time. Thanks also to various people on AIM for telling me to get on with this (Jess, Natalie, Hannah, Russia, Kara, BB)

Disclaimer: I'm not JK Rowling. She would never have written anything quite so daft.

Claimer: I have disgraced myself wearing a toga before now.

Reviewer: hestiajones Signed
Date: 02/08/10 Title: Chapter 1: The Bacchus Book


Oh, how I laughed when I read this the first time. And it was no less hilarious when I gave it another read. It's wonderful how you managed to use the prompt so well, and yet keep the characters IC in spite of the craziness. And the letter to Caramac Cloggan was priceless!

BTW, I love your Kappas.

Thanks for such a wild and funny story.


Author's Response: Thank you. It was a bit daft, but then that's what listening to magic books and dressing in toga's does to a girl ... *ahem* ~Carole~

The Weekend We Were In Love by paperrose

Rated: 6th-7th Years •
Summary: “Victoire …?” The realization that has popped into his head is not a welcome one. Sure he is mistaken, he rubs his tired eyes, but the naked angel on his bed doesn’t go away. “Oh, shit.”

After a drunken night of intimacy together, Teddy and Victoire have some decisions to make regarding their relationship.

Reviewer: hestiajones Signed
Date: 02/14/10 Title: Chapter 1: The Weekend We Were In Love

That was really good. I like how you kept both Teddy and Victoire acting according to their age, and like one of the reviewers below, I liked the suspense of the earlier parts.

This was a really good start. I would love to read more Teddy/Victoire from you. :)


Author's Response: Thanks! I've been wanting to do a Teddy/Victoire story for a long time, and finally, the time was right. I love Teddy more than is probably healthy, so I'm sure there will be more of him in the future!

Friends and Family by Karaley Dargen

Rated: 3rd-5th Years •
Summary: A snippet taken from a Sunday Prophet of December 2000.

The aftermath of the Battle marked some of the darkest hours for Charlie Weasley and his family. But just when he can't possibly think of how to find happiness again, a chance encounter might light the way.

This is Karaley Dargen from Gryffindor, writing for the Winter Snows ’09 prompt Stirring.

From the prompt: “Stirring (a column with a self-stirring cauldron as an icon) is the Sunday edition’s main feature. In it, readers can contribute their own inspiring anecdotes.”

Thank you, Emma (Amortentia x), for betaing this story for me :)

Also, I'm not JKR. GASP!

Reviewer: hestiajones Signed
Date: 02/17/10 Title: Chapter 1: On A Saturday


I shall begin at the beginning. :D

The first thing that got my attention was how you paid homage to the column. I don’t know if any of the rest of us did that. It was different and it had a great association with the prompt: The Stirring column used to be popular at one time.

Then, you took us to the Weasleys, my favourite family in the world of fiction. Normally, we don’t get to read much of the Weasleys before Harry entered their lives, and I was happy to grab this opportunity to experience that. Charlie being close to Bill is something we see in canon, but added a dimension to it: Charlie’s too humble to think he was as important to his older brother as it was the other way round. I found that interesting.

Your characterization of the mysterious Weasley brother was impressive; I think Charlie is the only one who the readers don’t know much about, who we don’t even meet that often. But your words breathed life into him. He always came across as an outdoor-type in the books, and it made sense to have him suffering with a desk-job. C’mon! A dragon-keeper would never be able to connect with a book-keeper’s life; and yet, there he was, because he was a Weasley, and for a Weasley, family comes first.

I’d have loved to see more of his relationship with Oliver, because I think that was the core theme of this fic. (Please correct me if I am wrong.) As a standalone, I am not sure how much justice it did to Charlie/Oliver, but as an introduction, you can count me as a fan who’s waiting for more.

Happy writing!


Author's Response: I'm very relieved that you liked Charlie; he has always been one of the Weasleys who fascinated me most, because (as you said) we hardly know anything about him at all... he was a brilliant Seeker and a Dragon Keeper (and I'm a rhymer, apparently), and JKR never had him marry - but that's it. I've been a fan for a while now, and I thought it was time I wrote a story about him myself. I'm very very anxious to get everything right...

You're right - the first chapter is more of an introduction really. The relationship fluff and society angst are yet to come, but they will. I didn't want to make this first chapter too long though, for several reasons (one of them being that I still have something to write about in later chapters :D)

Thank you very much for your great review :)

Dust in the Wind by ToBeOrNotToBeAGryffindor

Rated: 3rd-5th Years •

Dominique Weasley took a summer job at Weasleys Wizarding Wheezes with the hope to stake her first claim of independence. All she really wanted was to be able to pay for her Yule Ball gown on her own, but one fateful day, someone strolled into the shop and turned her world upside down.

Scorpius Malfoy was sweet, confident, and completely gorgeous, but Dominique knew that he was off-limits as her cousin’s ex-boyfriend. The more she tried to push him away, though, the more she questioned her resolve to do the right thing.

This is ToBeOrNotToBeAGryffindor of Ravenclaw House, and this is my submission for the Fiction Junction ‘I Challenge Thee’ prompt

Reviewer: hestiajones Signed
Date: 02/14/10 Title: Chapter 1: Dust in the Wind


So, here I am. I liked the sound of Scorpius/Dom. It is a fresh take on Next Gen Pairings. (Although, of course, nothing beats Rose/Scorpius.):P

Anway, I enjoyed the sexual tensions in this fic; there's always something attractive about guys who are confident about their charm. Scorpius was, therefore, quite nice to read.

I did tell you about my reservations about Dom in this fic; I think I'd love to have another one-shot (maybe, a prequel?) that would show me a more detailed side of her. Like Carole below, I found her relationship with her sister interesting, and I think the insecurity gives a new dimension to her overall personality.

But - I still loved the fic. It was sexy in many parts, and...well, sexiness is always a plus point. The ending was great, too.

Write more of these two.


Author's Response:

I don't know about a prequel, but I do plan a sequel with more details about her in general, not just her in the current line of the story. Honestly, to do everything I wanted to do with the story would have taken at least four chapters the size of the entire one-shot, so I had to sacrifice in the name of keeping it shorter.

However, now that it's out there, the Scorpius/Dominique ship is officially floating through my head, and they're definitely going to be coming out to say hello. :D


The Mind of Arthur Weasley by Northumbrian

Rated: 3rd-5th Years •
The kitchen at the Burrow has six occupants, Harry, Ginny, Ron, Hermione, Molly and Arthur. The youngsters look nervous. Arthur suspects that they are up to something. What is going on inside…

The Mind of Arthur Weasley

Reviewer: hestiajones Signed
Date: 02/14/10 Title: Chapter 1: The Mind of Arthur Weasley


That was a very good character study of one of my favourite fictional fathers of all time. All the others were kept in character, and you even managed to dwell upon their quirks in a compact one-shot.

There were a few punctuation errors (missing commas, and then missing semi-colons), but apart from that, I loved this one-shot. It's going straight to my favourites. :D


Author's Response: Punctuation is my major weakness (as the many rejections this story had will testify). It would be a lot worse if it werent for my wonderful betas. -N-

Hey there, Ginevra by Russia Snow

Rated: 1st-2nd Years •
Summary: A Hogwarts-fied version of "Hey there, Delilah" by the Plain White T's.


Anything you recognise does not belong to me, but to JKR or 'Plain White T's'

Reviewer: hestiajones Signed
Date: 02/26/10 Title: Chapter 1: What's it like in Hogwarts castle?


That was a great combination of warm-fuzzies and laughter. :D I'm so glad you did it the canon way because I love the song and the emotions it portrays.

Another thing I liked was that you didn't overdo it. You selected the best parts to slip in Potterism while keeping the rest of the song intact.

I think my favourite part was:

"One more year and you'll be done with school,
And I'll be making history."

Lol. I know that it is originally from the lyrics, but when I read it with conjunction with Harry, it holds a bigger meaning. It seriously couldn't get any more true than that. And, oh!

"Lumos can't shine as bright as you."


Well done!


Author's Response: YAY! Thanks Natalie! ^_^ The line about history is one of the things that drew me to the song in the first place, and then In worked out the Lumos bit, and I couldn't NOT write it! =D *hugs* ~Russia xxxxx

Mistletoe Kisses by Northumbrian

Rated: 3rd-5th Years •
Five years separate two kisses and two girls, a redhead, and a blonde. A lot can change in five years.
I am Northumbrian from Ravenclaw House, and this is my entry for the February Love challenge in the Great Hall - category First Love - at the MNFF beta boards.
Reviewer: hestiajones Signed
Date: 02/24/10 Title: Chapter 1: Mistletoe Kisses

Hey, Neil!

I thoroughly enjoyed reading this one-shot. I thought you wrote Neville really well, and you made good use of the first-person narrative to portray his character - the hesitations, the sense of humour, the unadulterated honesty, all of them trademark Longbottom.

Moreover, your approach to the prompt was a pleasant surprise. Instead of telling an exclusive story of his first love (Ginny), you tied that part of his life with his present. The contrast could be seen.

I am also happy that there were no shortcomings on the writing side of things - a very clean read without many punctuation errors, except for one:

Meanwhile, Ginny and her Harpies teammates have joined the fray; Ginny never liked Romilda she made that very clear to me last year.

Perhaps, you could make it:

Meanwhile, Ginny and her Harpies teammates have joined the fray. Ginny never liked Romilda; she made that very clear to me last year.

as the last two parts are independent clauses.

Except for that nitpick, I think the story made a fantastic entry. (Though, I'm sure you were trying to credit Apurva, not Elene, in your End Notes. :p)


Author's Response: Natalie I've had two punctuation errors pointed out to me. I've hastily corrected them both, but I may take yet another look at this. Alas, I was trying to credit Elene (sorry Elene) she betaed this for me. Apurva is providing me with feedback on "Fred and George's Busy Day." So I was half right. No, actually, I was completely wrong. oops. My approach to another of the prompts probably breaks the submission rules. We'll see. Thasnks for the review. Neil

The Dance We Do by Equinox Chick

Rated: Professors •
Summary: Amelia Bones is a diligent student. Head Girl, with a handsome and well-connected boyfriend, she has her whole future mapped out for her.

She does not expect to fall in love quite so hard, and quite so fast with someone totally unsuitable.

I am Equinox Chick from Hufflepuff and this is my entry fot the February Love Challenge - category Forbidden Love - in the Great Hall on the MNFF beta boards.

I am indebted to Natalie (hestiajones) for beta'ing this fic and for all her support whilst I was writing it.

Disclaimer: I am not JK Rowling. I doubt that surprises anyone.

The Dance We Do won the QSQ in 2010 for Best Same Sex Pairing. Thank you.

Reviewer: hestiajones Signed
Date: 02/28/10 Title: Chapter 1: The Dance We Do

So, I've already praised this so much in that draft I sent you, but I just to reiterate what I said.

The pairing made so much sense. Bella seems to be a very sensual person by nature, while Amelia Bones as a lesbian...I have suspected that before, and it sort of fits. In any case, I thought the portrayal of Bellatrix in your fic was excellent! And, of course, you wrote a good/tragic history for Amelia Bones.

I especially loved the ending. I think this is something which we usually see in your fics. For that Back To Hogwarts entry, for the Seamus/Lavender one, and for this one, you write the story in a linear progression and at the end, what went before was more like an extended flashback. The ending always show a form of irony, and it never fails to touch me the contrast of what was and what .

All in all, a great entry for the challenge. Good luck!


Author's Response: Thank you, Natalie. Hmm, I'm wondering whether I do this flash forward thing a bit too much, but I'd already worked out that I needed to do it with this story long before I wrote the Molly one |(and Seamus/Lavender too). Thank you for all your help with this; it meant a great deal. Amazing beta, Natalie. ~Carole~

Masque by Gmariam

Rated: 6th-7th Years •
Summary: The Masque was her chance to get over a broken relationship and move on, her appearance magically charmed for a night of escapist pleasure. She had no expectations, least of all that she might fall for a fellow masked player. And yet she did, their identities a secret as their relationship blossomed. When they take off the masks and reveal their true selves, can they move beyond their past and try to build something for the future?

This is Gmariam of Ravenclaw writing for the February Month of Love Challenge: Surprise Love.
Reviewer: hestiajones Signed
Date: 03/03/10 Title: Chapter 1: Masked/Unmasked


Even though I am not a Ginny/Draco fan, I still loved this little one-shot. It was good to see such an impossible love story being developed in ways other than, "Oh didn't you know? They always had the hots for each other?" /snark.

Seriously, though, that conversation at the end was great - it showed the two characters' insecurities nicely. And both Draco and Ginny were written well.

Good luck!

Author's Response: Natalie! My belated thanks for the review! I'm not a Ginny/Draco fan either, I still can't believe I wrote a non-canon pair, lol. But hopefully I found a unique way to bring them together. And really, in my mind, it doesn't work out and they both end up with their respective spouses, so it could still be canon. ;) I'm glad you enjoyed the conversation at the end, I was worried it was a bit too vulnerable for Draco especially. Thank you for reading this story, I really appreciate the review! ~Gina :)

Letters of a Love Past by Karaley Dargen

Rated: 1st-2nd Years •
Summary: Even as a grown woman, Parvati Patil still has a small box that holds her memories. A fraction of the countless letters she received from her best friend (and copies of the letters she sent her) and notes passed between them at school are in there too - and even a page of the diary she hardly ever used.

One part of those old letters are the only reminder of Parvati's first love; a love never openly admitted to, and a love never requited.

This is Karaley Dargen of Gryffindor writing for the Great Hall February Month of Love Challenge, First Love Prompt

Reviewer: hestiajones Signed
Date: 03/11/10 Title: Chapter 1: Letters of a Love Past


I really enjoyed reading this. You have written that girly pair very well. :D (And how come my eyes have been skipping over this before? Weird. I just saw it now.) In any case, I thought this was a great entry for the prompt, because it really does show what "puppy love" is like. And I am glad that Parvati got over Harry quickly.

Although, I was kind of hoping to see how the gossiping would turn out when they got to sixth year. *sigh*

Short, simplistic and sweet. A bit scathing as well. Haha!


Author's Response: Thank youuu for reviewing! Yes, I think she would have taken a BIT longer to get over him than she'd admit to Lavender (I somehow see her as a tiny bit less open than Lavender), but the handsome French boy would help I think :D Now that you mention gossiping, I should have written more about Hermione and Krum... hm.. Ah well. And oooh sixth year... Attack of the plot bunnies! Thank you for your review *hugs* Kara

Flying, Fair Play and the Need for a Firm Hand by Equinox Chick

Rated: 1st-2nd Years •
Summary: Rolanda Hooch thought her first year teaching (when she had to control Bellatrix Black) would always be her worst year. But then she'd hadn't met a messy-haired Gryffindor, his equally cocksure friend, and a red-haired witch with a penchant for revenge.

Sometimes she wished she'd never taken the job at Hogwarts.

This is Equinox Chick of Hufflepuff and this is my entry for the I Challenge Thee Challenge held in Fiction Junction over at the MNFF beta boards.

I accepted a challenge by Karaley Dargen which was

Write about James I. first flying lesson. It does not go well.

Thank you to Lexi (Harry Rulz) for beta'ing this fic for me.

Disclaimer: I'm not JK Rowling. If that honestly surprises you then perhaps you should check into the Priory.
Reviewer: hestiajones Signed
Date: 03/04/10 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Ahhh...Carole, I honestly enjoyed reading it. It was nice to see something of Rolanda, and James, of course, is a darling as usual.

-Short and unhelpful review, but I got a few laughs out of it. :D And well, you know how much I needed it.

More James!

Author's Response: I'm glad the long title didn't put you off *gigglesnort*. Mmm, well you know how hard I found this to write and had several stabs from James' POV before discovering Rolanda. He's a cheeky swine at times, isn't he? Thanks for the review, always appreciated ~Carole~

How Much a Heart Can Hold by MagEd

Rated: 3rd-5th Years •
Summary: The seven men who loved Hermione Granger.
Reviewer: hestiajones Signed
Date: 03/10/10 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Wow! That was such an emotional fic. I loved every single one of them. :) Sorry about this short review, but really - it actually made me tear up a bit. I am so, so happy you made such a wonderful contribution to canon. :)


Author's Response: Thanks very much! I'm glad you liked it -- and a review of any length is appreciated :)

Small Amounts of Welcome by OliveOil_Med

Rated: 1st-2nd Years •
Summary: Filius Flitwick combs his new office as he prepares to take on his new roles as Headmaster of Hogwarts. While he is there,, the Headmasters of Hogwarts Past offer him some much welcome advice.

I am OliveOil_Med of Ravenclaw, and this is my entry for the 'I Challange Thee' Contest.
Reviewer: hestiajones Signed
Date: 03/19/10 Title: Chapter 1: Small Amounts of Welcome

This was an interesting one-shot, and Flitwick felt very real. Although, I am not sure that even for such a tiny man, whether a glorified broom closet would be big enough a place to be called a “comfortable” office. Wouldn’t he have to meet students there? :D

I do have a question about the portraits, though. Wouldn’t a person have to be dead in order to get that portrait? Dumbledore was kicked out twice – in COS, and then in OOTP, yet there is no mention of his portrait being hung on the wall. Mmm…we don’t get to see the office during those episodes, so we may not know. What do you think?

I was also wondering about the selection of the Headmaster. Which era is this set in? Who was the DADA teacher? What about Muggle Studies? And Professor Vector? And Potions? Even though they must have been completely new and younger ones, I still feel that you could have mentioned them at least in a line or two.

On Dexter Fortescue’s voice, did you mean to say that his voice was similar to that of Florean? How were they related? Or did you mean that his surname was now associated with ice-cream? The use of the word “voice” seems to stick out a bit.

Apart from these nitpicks, I felt that this was a good portrayal of Flitwick. He does seem the type who would be nervous about the job. And oh! I also liked how you showed his insecurities about his height. :D Good one!


Author's Response: Well, as far as the portrait question goes, I left a fairly long explaination in the previous review. Please refer. And to what year the story is set in...one sec, gotta do math...August of 2010. In my version of the Potterverse, this is when McGonagall retired. And let's see...Muggle studies: too young (and haven't figured out the character yet), Professor Vector: not interesting enough to mention and probably less experience, Potions: Professor Vhartan, and still holding that job in Arcane ScoRA (all my stories (except for AU) follow the same universe). And for Fortescue, oops! I meant to say name, and I will change that right away.

Reviewer: hestiajones Signed
Date: 03/25/10 Title: Chapter 1: Small Amounts of Welcome


I am sorry about the late reply, but there were some things I wanted to put across.

About the portraits issue, canon evidence suggests that magical portraits exist only for dead people, so that had me confused. In HBP, when Harry and McGonagall enters Dumbledore's office, Rowling writes, "And a new portrait had joined the ranks of the dead headmasters and headmistresses of Hogwarts." This seems to suggest that only dead headmasters/headmistresses got their portraits there. (An issue could be raised about Severus Snape, but then he voluntarily left the post.) And, also, I am sorry but when I raised that issue in my review, I hadn't read the other reviews, and I'm sure no response had been published from the author's side.

I have no issue about when Professor McGonagall retires as long as it is before the next generation of Potters and Weasleys come to Hogwarts. And I haven't read your other fic, Arcane Scora, apart from the first chapter, so I do not know who holds the other positions in the school. Neither do I see any statement which claims that this follows an another fiction of yours. However, the earlier point I raised was this:

"Even though they must have been completely new and younger ones, I still feel that you could have mentioned them at least in a line or two."

As you were summing up a lot of members of the staff, I merely felt you could have mentioned the others briefly. In any case, I liked the story, and these are points which I am raising as a reader.


Author's Response: Wow, someone up on their arguing hat today, and I'm too lazy to bother arguing back. I don't know if that means you won or what, though.

Lord Voldemort and the Perils of Parenting by AidaLuthien

Rated: 6th-7th Years •
Summary: Lord Voldemort won the Battle of Hogwarts but victory isn't all it's cracked up to be. Maybe training/raising some children/minions will make him happy...

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Reviewer: hestiajones Signed
Date: 03/11/10 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1: In Which the Dark Lord Hates Bureaucracy and Finds that Sometimes the Old is Simply More Convenient than the New

Hey there!

Haha! I laughed so hard while reading this. It's good to read something as crazy as this once in a while. :D I think my favourite part was where Voldy was reading a report on cauldron thickness. I felt so sorry for him.

There are a few glaring punctuation errors in your fic. Apart from them, this made an enjoyable read.

Waiting for updates,

How To Be Dead by MagEd

Rated: 1st-2nd Years •
Summary: James and Lily Potter have died, but that doesn't mean Harry is alone. They're still watching over him, and they don't intend on stopping any time soon. *one-shot*
Reviewer: hestiajones Signed
Date: 03/11/10 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

This is the second time in two days that you’ve got me teary-eyed. : ( : )

Ah…Lily/James has been my all-time favourite OTP, and the way you’ve written this story is the exact reason why. I simply love the chemistry between them. Their reactions had me laughing and tearing up alternately. And although there were parts I would have liked to see, like Harry seeing them in the Mirror of Erised, I still think this was perfect in terms of story-telling. I did see a few typos and errors.

"And then, then, he pushed the broom just a little bit faster — the perfect amount, really, not too much or to little, and —"

It should be “too”.

"Jamie," she finally says, her voice so soft and sweet it makes him ache, "Do you think he can handle this? Can he face what's waiting for him? The pain and the danger and . . . and all of it?"

“Do” should start in the lower case.

"And it did wonders for my self-esteen," he says matter-of-factly, not fazed by the look on her face. "And it made me a more considerate lover when you did finally succumb to my charms."


“Oh, shut-up," Lily huffs. "I'm trying to —"

Why is “shut-up” hyphenated?

“Ginny is talking animately now, Harry raptly listening, and then they both start laughing.

Do you mean “animatedly”?

“And then he survives the killing curse, and hides his survival, and now he's facing Voldemort again, and this time, there is no fear or hesitance in his step or gaze or words. It's all come down to this single moment.”

I think “killing curse” should begin with caps.

All in all, another great one-shot! Keep them coming.


Author's Response: Thank you for pointing out all those typos! I've fixed them. I'm glad you liked this and enjoyed the chemsitry between Lily and James -- they're one of my favourite pairings in all fandoms, so it's good to know when I do them justice :)