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There’s something for everyone, unless you like reading Snape romances, which I don’t write. Or Voldemort’s children. Or Snape’s children. You will, however, find two Snape/Lily and one Voldemort/Minerva poems. Other than these, I’ve written:

Completed Fics:

Alternate Universe: Going against Salazar’s Grain, Winner of 2011 QSQ for Best AU.

Dark/Angst: To Follow the Dark Lord, For I Am a Mother, Killing Meda’s Daughter, Him Alice and Me, Carousel, The Receding, Becoming Rita, On No One’s Side and Lacuna Mentis, Winner of 2011 QSQ for Best D/A.

Draco/Astoria: Because You Came, Winner of 2011 QSQ Best Canon Romance.

Femmeslash: Cut, Bleed, Susan, Hands That Fit, Desire And a Half.

Humour: I Like a Healthy Breeze Round My Privates, Bit of a Nasty Shock. Mmm. These are exactly about what you’re thinking.

Harry/Hermione: Over a Mug of Tea, Harmony. I have delusional friends whom I love.

Historical: Waiting, An Act of Love

James/Lily: Ain’t Love the Sweetest Thing, Always Come Back to You

Maleslash: In the Back of the Shack, At the End of It, Anchored, Something Strange

Marauder Era: A Tale of Six Perspectives, Wish You Were Here, Common Cold Won’t Keep Me Down, Always … But Not Who You Think

Non-pairing: Sunday Lunch with the Malfoys
Scorpius/Rose: Breaking Rules, Of Weasleys And Malfoys
Scorpius/Hugo: In the Back of the Shack, At the End of It, Anchored
Dominique/OC: Cut, Bleed
Lucy/Lorcan: Whirlwind

Post-Hogwarts: Seamus’ Break with a Banshee, Mirrors, A Splendid Fate, and The Substitute, Winner of 2011 Best Non-Canon Romance

Ted/Andromeda: Eternal Flight, Five Christmases, Soul Sister

Crack Pairings:
Ron/Mary Cattermole: The Substitute
James/Severus: Always … But Not Who You Think

Character Studies:
Rita Skeeter: Becoming Rita
Merope Gaunt: The Receding
Florean Fortescue: Florean Fortescue - An Unsung Hero
Albus Dumbledore: Going against Salazar’s Grain
Bill Weasley: Never too Late
Andrew Carlton, OC: Being Muggle with Rooney
Tom Riddle: Commencement
Mrs Zabini: Rendezvous with Mrs Zabini, Desire And a Half
Pansy Parkinson: Carousel
Molly Weasley: Knowing Who She Was, The Solitary Prewett


Snape/Lily: The Silver Doe, In Winter in My Head
Tom/Minerva: Spiral
Draco/Harry: Dreams Made of Green
Remus/Tonks: it might not be, but still
Hogwarts: The Battle of Hogwarts, May 2nd and The Clarion Call, Winner of 2010 QSQ Best Poetry
Lily Potter: The Gathering Storm and the Crib
Harry/Ginny: A Night of Love
Harry Potter: Memories Are Not Enough
Draco Malfoy: I Am Shame
Regulus Black: My Black Brother
Bellatrix and Narcissa: The Black Sisters
Bloody Baron/Grey Lady: Murder for Love
Hestia Jones (oh): Drive Your Car On
Draco/Hermione: The Other Woman


A Marriage Made at Hogwarts: I’m afraid I won’t be continuing this. :/ I had completed it ages ago, but I lost the draft twice and I don’t have the heart or the motivation to finish it. Or delete it.
Before I Forget: A Maleslash featuring Regulus/Rabastan. I will definitely complete it next year.
One Day in the Life of: A Next-Gen fic featuring all the - well - Next-Gen kids. This too will be finished in the coming year.

Upcoming Fics:

As of now, I’m severely blocked. D: However, I am working on the following projects and both will be posted before 31st January of next year:

Songs, Lovers and Everything in Between: A string of post-Hogwarts romances featuring rarepairs.

Bill Weasley and the Temple of Lsulaph: An Alternate Universe as well as Parallel Universe crack!fic-cum-adventure featuring the most dashing Weasley to grace your consciousness along with twelve daredevil and powerful sisters. Together, they must defeat the evil sorcerer/non-Egyptian pharaoh Lsulaph, who has taken over the Incaff sisters’ kingdom.

UPDATE: If you're looking for Fireworks Inside, here's a link: http://clickysmut.livejournal.com/2930.html

That’s pretty much it. Hope you enjoy the stay!

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Staring into the Fire by Equinox Chick

Rated: 3rd-5th Years •
Summary: When Harry broke into Dolores Umbridge's office to demand answers from Sirius and Remus, he little knew this would be the last proper conversation he would have with his godfather.

But what of the two that were left staring into the fire?

For Moony and Padfoot, it is a chance to re-live old times -- a chance to answer those questions long put aside.

This is Equinox Chick of Hufflepuff and this is my entry for the Bookbasilisk Summer Challenge - Gift of the Gab.

Many thanks to Afifa and MorganRay for beta'ing this story. I would also like to thank Miss K for some constructive comments she made about an earlier draft.

Disclaimer You know the drill. I am not JK Rowling. I doubt that's come as a huge surprise, but I thought I should let you know.
Reviewer: hestiajones Signed
Date: 07/24/09 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

carole, carole, carole...

you never fail to make me laugh, you know. these were my favorite bits:

"Vanity, thy name is Black. Your earlobe is fine."

“Padfoot, you old romantic.”
“I have my moments.”

“What do you mean? Oh, the werewolf thing!”

There were many things I liked about this one-shot. First, it gave the readers a glimpse of Sirius and Remus having one of their Marauder moments post-James' death. The general trend in Marauder fanfic tend to focus on their school days.

Secondly, i also like how you managed to weave different issues into a single conversation. Peter's betrayal, the fact that Padfoot and Moony had lost their faith in each other at one time, the impossible love between Prongs and Lily and, of course, the reference to the soon-to-happen Moony and Tonks. and, of course, Umbridge the Hag and Harry's predicaments.

Third, I love how Sirius was being Sirius- protective and reckless and funny. And how Lupin was being Moony and not the usually grave and logical Professor Lupin that Harry knew.

The only thing I didn't like about this fic was this: it's making me miss "Lions of G" more and more!!!

EDIT: I would like to comment on Padfoot Returns’ review. I just read it now.

Okay, the part about the “using the first name means we are serious” thing. I think Padfoot Returns claimed that this was inconsistent with their age and that both Sirius and Remus should be moving on while “James as Prongs is reserved in time.” I beg to differ. This conversation takes place right after Harry has reminded them about a Marauder prank which may have one which they would rather forget but which was done in the Marauder spirit (read: Prongs and Padfoot spirit). I think Harry’s reminder resurrected the boys in the men. They have both been robbed of their one source of happiness for a long time- their friendship. And I am sure that both were glad to have a reason to go back to their old selves. Moreover, I don’t think Sirius ever moved on. Sure, he acted like an adult as much as possible but inside, I think he still longed to run around with James. This point also goes well with how quickly he defends James in your fic. Remus is probably aware of this and wants to let Sirius enjoy anything that bears a semblance of the life he once had.

Again, Sirius may have gone to Azkaban but he turns into Padfoot ever so often. For instance, he still jokes whenever he has the chance. This incident takes place nearly two years after he has broken out of prison and a year after he has been proven innocent to the most important people of his life. I think it would therefore be safe that he lightened up enough to be a little carefree when Remus was around. His going back to “Moony, Wormtail, Padfoot and Prongs” would not only be a sign of his nostalgia but his struggle to give an appearance of normalcy to his sad life.

Lastly, Padfoot_Returns also mention the part about how easily the two men talked about the affair. I feel that they have both been looking for a chance to discuss this uncomfortable topic but have been unwilling to be the one to initiate the discussion. A little like how Harry and the Weasleys avoid each other in OOTP during Christmas break but then when Hermione acts as the catalyst, they open up easily (albeit a little hotly). So, when Wormtail’s name comes up with Harry acting as the catalyst this time, they sort of plunge into it just to get rid of the guilt of having doubted each other. This is what I feel. : )

Author's Response: Wowzers! Thanks, I've never had an edited review in response to someone elses *grins inanely*. I am pleased you enjoyed this fic. I originally wrote it as a challenge in response to a prompt from Terri about the two men talking about why they didn't trust each other. It got forgotten about until the Gift of the Gab reared it's head so I dusted it off and re-wrote.

That's the history of it. Anyhoo, I really do appreciate any reviews I get because I know how easy it is to just not respond, so *bows low*. I think half my trouble is that I desperately want Moony and Padfoot to have some carefree moments because I know they're not long for this world. And at this time, they didn't know that Sirius would be dead in a matter of months so they wouldn't just have serious conversations all the time.

Lions of Gryffindor - Noooo, I haven't abandoned it at all, there is another chapter on its way very, very soon.

*giggling at Umbridge the Hag*

Thanks again. Carole xxx

To Dwell In Dreams by sorrow_of_severus

Rated: 6th-7th Years •
Summary: One simple incantation and you will enter a top-quality, highly realistic, thirty-minute daydream, easy to fit into the average school lesson and virtually undetectable (side effects include vacant expression and minor drooling). Not for sale to under-sixteens.
-from p. 117 of Harry Potter and the Half Blood Prince, American Editioin

When Headmaster Severus Snape discovers an abandoned box of Patented Daydream Charms while patrolling the corridors of Hogwarts one night, he’s about to discover magical, melancholy daydreams of Lily…

…and the reasons why Patented Daydream Charms aren’t sold to younger wizards and witches.
Reviewer: hestiajones Signed
Date: 07/30/09 Title: Chapter 1: To Dwell In Dreams

Wow! I couldn’t stop laughing. This was a really amazing and original idea for a story. However, I wasn’t just laughing; I honestly felt sad for Severus. I don’t think he would have been that weak to actually depend on the Daydreams, but your story was once again reminded me of his “great love.” I also love the way you brought in Dumbledore and his stern advice.

I think there were a few errors, though. One was, you spelt “breach” as “breech.” The other thing was that I think the male Carrow sibling was Amycus, not Alecto. :)

Author's Response: I'm glad I managed to make you feel both happy and sad. I've achieved my goal!

A Difficult Conversation by DracoGurlFurever

Rated: 3rd-5th Years •
Summary: Draco Malfoy has asked Harry Potter for a meeting. When Harry arrives, curious to see what he might want, the revelations Draco makes are astounding. Will this very difficult conversation change the way the two men see each other? Will Harry be willing to help Draco?
Reviewer: hestiajones Signed
Date: 08/04/09 Title: Chapter 1: A Difficult Conversation

Ha ha! That was indeed an enjoyable conversation. I liked it, even though I am not a Dramione or Harmione fan. :D Why? Because you gave them rather delightful dialogues. Draco Malfoy does seem quite in character here. I know you know how I envision him is quite different from this version, but I still think yours is more…realistic.

The only thing that I found a little bumpy was your characterization of Harry. There were parts when he seemed too loquacious. Or, maybe, it’s just how I have always imagined him – a person of not many words, especially when things get serious. And, oh yes, Draco Malfoy revealing romantic feelings for a Weasley is indeed something to be serious about. Lol! But, going by the way you have envisioned your Post-Hogwarts world – Harry marrying Hermione and Draco marrying Ginny and going strong with the Witch Weekly as well, I suppose you needed to bring some changes.

The funny thing is, my favorite lines from your fic were Harry’s:

“Okay, it’s been thirty seconds, and while it’s very reassuring to hear you mumble words to yourself and thus inform me that you’re not asleep, I’d really like to know what’s going on.”

“You stole the words from my mouth, Malfoy.”


Author's Response: Thanks so much for the wonderful review! I really appreciate it :) I'm very glad you liked my Draco - as for Harry, the thought process behind his dialogue was that I felt like he would want to reciprocate all of Draco's sarcasm. Harry's never been the "just let it go and ignore it" type (although he's more that way than Ron is) and I couldn't imagine him just staying silent when Draco was making all these sarcastic remarks - rather, I felt, he would want to respond in kind. Also, I'm so happy you found it at least a little funny! :) Thanks again for the review! *hug* Apurva.

Thank you for your time, Professor by Equinox Chick

Rated: 1st-2nd Years • Past Featured Story
Summary: It is April 1976, and Minerva McGonagall sits in her office, arranging biscuits on a plate. She knows she faces a stormy afternoon because today is the day she has to advise her four most troublesome students on their future. They call themselves the Marauders; they think they want the same thing, but Minerva knows that the differences between them will not work in everyone's favour. And so, she steels herself for a very difficult day.

This is Equinox Chick submitting her final for the MWPP class.

Disclaimer: I am not JK Rowling, but I doubt that shocks you.

This story is very much a prequel to The Lions of Gryffindor, but either can be read without knowledge of the other.

In shock at the nomination for a 2009 QSQ award.
Reviewer: hestiajones Signed
Date: 09/25/09 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Hello Carole!

I'm still wondering why I overlooked this one-shot. After reading it, I'm even more convinced about the MWPP classes.

On to the serious part. So, I can't really say which one I liked best. Each of them was written superbly. You set different tones for them, seeing as they are such different individuals.

I think it is easy to mix up James and Sirius at times, but here, you showed the very distinct line which separates them. Sirius was reckless, James had a bit more self-control. Sirius did not really know himself, James was a little more aware of who he was.

Peter has always been a mystery to me. However, your portrayal of him has cleared things a little for me. I am thinking - would he have been better off if he hadn't been their friends? It is easy to see how inadequate he feels when he is with them. I don't think Sirius and James were always making fun of him, but Peter's need to impress them, to be like them, must have been hard on him - especially because he fell far short of achieving it.

As for Remus, it's just the way you write about him. Less melodrama, less angst - but the pain is so much more tangible. I think his section was the one which really made me love the fic, simply because you handled him so well.

I loved McGonagall here. Lol! I loved her scathing remark to Sirius: "Mr. Black, when you have the time..." lol! There is that soft side to her - which threatens to break into the surface at times. I loved how that came out here in your fic.

Lastly, I want to say - well, you did a great job! You picked a great moment to write about the Marauders. And, I must not forget to add, I like how Sirius and Remus end up being the ones who comfort each other.


Author's Response: Thank you so much, Natalie, for reviewing. I'm glad you enjoyed the story (and apologies for not responding sooner). I'm pleased you liked McGonagall in this, because I wanted to show different sides to her. I giggled when writing James - he is such a bad boy at times. Thanks again ~Carole~

Dean by armagod679

Rated: 1st-2nd Years •
Summary: Dean Thomas knows he has to leave his family, and the warmth of home... but can he face saying goodbye to them?
Reviewer: hestiajones Signed
Date: 09/21/10 Title: Chapter 1: Dean

That was a good moment to write about. You have a knack of writing compact one shots, and this was again, another short but pleasant read. Dean is one of my favourite characters, and I can't wait to read his bio in The Scottish Book. You really did justice to him, and the ending was perfect!


Author's Response: Thank you again! I really think that Dean is an under served character. I will now admit that it is my goal to write a one-shot like these for every letter of the alphabet. Look for the "R" soon!

Twilit Confessions by ahattab33

Rated: 3rd-5th Years • Past Featured Story

After returning from Australia with the Grangers, Ron realises the moment to make some important confessions to Hermione has come.

Inspired by the Ludo song, "Streetlights." A part of the "Moments" series.
Reviewer: hestiajones Signed
Date: 08/26/09 Title: Chapter 1: Streetlights

WOWIES!!! It was an amazing one-shot, Amanda. Ha ha! Wow, it was great to have Ron being sensitive just for once. Or maybe, he got some tips from that book he gave Harry on his birthday? *sniggers*

I think you portrayed both character IC. I wouldn't have believed it if Ron had said all those things before DH, but post-DH, post all that horrible fight in the tent, and losing Fred, I do believe he attained a new level of maturity. The good thing is, you had him struggling with himself, and with words, which was apt for his character as well as for the moment.

Hermione was great too. Who would have thought the girl would turn out to be so romantic and sexy? lol! But , of course, she was always the braver one when it came to emotions.

I like the fact that you brought in Lavender. Hermione was right in accusing Ron of being unfair to her;the girl did love her after all. And, no matter how much she had hated Lavender, it is not like Hermione not to be fair.

Hmmm...and the song is amazing. Have to check it out now. ;)

Author's Response:

NATALIE! You came and reviewed my story!

Thank you for your words about Ron. I just adore Ron, and I dislike stories where he is a bumbling idiot, or horribly rude, or basically has nothing to contribute. And I think there was a significant shift in his maturity level, and therefore their relationship, during DH, especially after their kiss in the RoR. I'm pretty sure that would have shocked part of his brain into sensibility, and then everything after that...

As for Hermione...I literally just answered a TQ about how I feel about her. :) Basically, I think there is much more to her character than we have seen due to viewing all of the story through Harry's eyes. And the fact that she has such an image about her she wants to maintain as a Prefect, etc. But that's just my take on her. And just from experience, being in love and being attracted to someone who loves you back can bring out whole new sides of you that you never knew existed.

*Sigh* And not only is the song amazing, LUDO is amazing.

Thank you so much for the read and the review!!

Who Wants Fudge? by sorrow_of_severus, Raffles

Rated: 1st-2nd Years •
Summary: Ever wonder how a buffoon like Cornelius Fudge got into office? It had a little to do with Dumbledore's reluctance to accept to job, and a lot to do with Lucius Malfoy's fears.
Reviewer: hestiajones Signed
Date: 08/18/09 Title: Chapter 1: Who Wants Fudge?

This was a brilliant idea for a fic. Honestly, I have always wondered how Fudge became Minister. And now, you tow have given me a credible answer. However, there were a lot of errors – spelling and capitalization mainly, in the draft. Some instances are:

“Mr. Malfoy, do you know why I have asked you here today?” Amelia Bones glanced threw her monocle at the wizard sitting across from her. I think you meant “through”, not “threw”. Also, I think “to come” is missing.

Of course he knew that the Department of Magical Law Enforcement was not swallowing his faade of being under the imperious curse and not having meant to serve the Dark Lord. “Imperius Curse”, not “imperius curse.”

“Fudge also shook his head, still deep in though. “thought”, not “though.”

“She remembered clearly how, only threw the withdrawal of Dumbledore, had she gotten the Minister rank. “through”, not “threw.”

“On the way out, Dumbledore met upon none other than Lucius Malfoy, who was just entering the room as Dumbledore was leaving. “met upon” is incorrect. I think you can just do with “met.”

“There’s letters from some very prominent families, including the Notts, the Crabbes, the Goyles, and many others, including mine. “There are letters”, not “there’s letters.”

“The day of the voting, Cornelius Fudge walked gloomily down the hallway to the Wizengamot Conference Room, just to bump into none other than his feared opponent, Albus Dumbledore. I think “On the day of the voting, Fudge walked gloomily down the hallway to the Wizengamot Conference Room, and bumped into none other than his feared opponent, Albus Dumbledore” sounds better. :)

I think there are a few more instances in the fic. Other than that, I really liked your fic. :D

Author's Response: Wow! Thank you so much for catching all of those mistakes we made. I'll make sure that they are corrected. Oh, and I'm glad you otherwise enjoyed our story. -SoS

Spes Vernus by luinrina

Rated: 1st-2nd Years •
Summary: It’s been a year since the Battle of Hogwarts, and she is still mourning the loss of loved ones. Will the hope ever return? And if so, will she ever heal?
Reviewer: hestiajones Signed
Date: 12/28/09 Title: Chapter 1: Return


This was a beautiful fic. I loved the way it oscillated between optimism and grief, mirroring life in its entirety. There were so many lines I loved in the story. These are some of my favorites:

“‘Ted,’ his name slips from your lips, a lone whisper in the early morning breeze that accompanies your path up the hill.”

Because they are my new OTP, :D, and because this line is just so real. Sometimes, we just can’t stop ourselves from uttering the names of those whom we have lost.

“He needs your love, and you are determined to give him all the colours in the world to see the beauty of life.”

Because this ties in so nicely with Tonks’s hair, and the greyness which has now enveloped Andromeda’s life.

“You will never forget the day life and hope returned. As you will never forget that death is inevitable, but still sad for those that are left behind.”

Because this is a great ending. Andromeda had the hardest time of it, didn’t she? Ted, then Dora and Remus…I can’t imagine anyone going through so much pain. It is impossible to think she’d be fully cured of it, and I was impressed with how you left that in instead of going for traditional optimism.

Great work, darling.


Author's Response: Thank you so much, Natalie, dear. Your nice words painted a smile on my face.

To Win his Heart by mudbloodproud

Rated: 3rd-5th Years •
Summary: What happened between Remus Lupin and Nymphadora Tonks after they left Bill’s bedside after he was attacked by Greyback? What made Remus see the light in his relationship with Tonks?

They went down by the lake and Tonks wouldn’t take no for an answer. This is their conversation.

I am mudbloodproud of Hufflepuff writing for the Gift of Gab competition on the beta forums.
Reviewer: hestiajones Signed
Date: 08/23/09 Title: Chapter 1: A War of Words

Wow! I really liked this conversation and I think you stuck to all the competition rules very nicely. And, WHAT? You can't win because you are a mod? You should, really. I think it's one of the very best in the competition.

Hermione's Christmas Gift by DivineQuill

Rated: 1st-2nd Years •
Summary: It’s almost Christmas time and a certain Ronald Weasley is having trouble finding his other half the perfect Christmas present. Even with some help from his best friend, can Ron find a gift that’s right for Hermione? Set during the Christmas after the Epilogue takes place in the seventh book.
Reviewer: hestiajones Signed
Date: 09/03/09 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Wowies! I absolutely loved your story.

I confess I was a little unsure at first, but as I read on, I started enjoying it. By the end of the story, I even felt all teary. Lol!

Seriously. The best part about your story was that your characterization was spot-on. Ron, especially. His jabs was very much IC, as also his nervousness and irritability. I also loved Harry and Hermione. I knew Harry would solve the puzzle, and he rose to the occasion. ;) Hermione was great, too. Wow! She actually got Ron a flying car? I wonder how she managed to convince the Ministry, though.

Here are the parts which I loved:

“It was Christmas time and that was a good of a time as any to show some neighborly affection. Harry and Ron waved back, but when the Muggle turned to do a double take, they were gone.

“Damn eggnog,” muttered the Muggle and he continued to walk down the street.”


“But I don’t know which ones she’s read and which ones she hasn’t! You should see how many books she has, Harry – well you have seen…”


“But I can’t ask her stuff like that!” complained Ron angrily. “She would just say – ” he changed his voice at this point, giving an uncannily good impression of Hermione, “Ron, you’re not being a supportive enough husband. I searched and put in a lot of time and effort to get you your present and you can’t even try to get me a decent gift?”

“Wow, that was good,” complimented Harry.

“Yeah.” Ron shrugged. “That’s what she said to me last year.”


“So you bought a license for it and registered it and everything?” asked Ron.

“Of course,” said Hermione brightly.

“What’d you go ahead and do that for?” Ron asked in mock horror.

And finally,

“We’re naming the owl Modwen,” Ron told Hugo, his tone borderline threatening, “and you’re right, she isn’t your owl. When you get an owl next year, you can name it whatever you want to. Just make sure your sister doesn’t call it something stupid until that’s all it will answer to.”

Classic Ron! Great job for a first fic.

Author's Response: Wow! Thank you for your very detailed response! Im glad that you thought everyone was in character. Though I love humor in stories, Im not that great at writing it myself and since Rons character is based largely upon his humor and jabs as you so aptly put it, I was nervous that he hadnt come out quite right. So I am very pleased that you thought he was spot-on! Eventually I want to do a more detailed next generation fic with the kids, but first I have to get familiar with their parents traits (and quirks!) so that it will sound more realistic. Hopefully this helped me out a little! I dont know when Ill get around to writing that with school just starting and everything, but Ill try to get working on that soon. In answer to how Hermione was able to legally give Ron the flying car, as I had said in the Authors Note, JKR mentioned in an interview that Hermione had worked in Magical Law, so Im sure she found some sort of loophole! *grins* Thanks again!!

Nobody's Knight by sorrow_of_severus

Rated: 1st-2nd Years •
Summary: As he flees the scene of yet another of his parents' fights, young Severus Snape reflects briefly on his instincts of self-preservation. He isn't ashamed. He's always known he'd be a Slytherin, and Slytherins put themselves first. It's simply practical, common sense. He doesn't know everything will change in just a few hours.
Reviewer: hestiajones Signed
Date: 01/24/10 Title: Chapter 1: Nobody's Knight

It is hard to distinguish what is clich and what is not when it comes to Severus, because his character traits are such – you can’t help but use those traits, and then write it so without ending up feeling, “Hasn’t someone else done this before?”

This story, however, showed the reader us a credible portrayal of Severus, the child. The approach is fresh and unbiased. We see a child who has been deprived of the very innocence of childhood. He is already cunning, coldly logical – but there is no malice as yet. He just knows who he is, and he’s going to live according to that.

He sometimes wishes he could rescue his mother from his father’s wrath, but he is realistic about his size, his abilities and his personality. He is a stringy, underfed child, with no physical way of fighting back and no wand. He is no selfless, chivalrous Gryffindor, either. He knows he will be a Slytherin. Slytherins watch out for themselves first, others second. He knows when to flee, and he knows he must leave his mother to fend for herself. Besides, she never stands up for him, either.

No wonder the Sorting Hat out him in Slytherin, and I don’t mean this as a rebuke.

And yet, there are moments when his maturity is interwoven with childlike honesty:

He hangs back, unsure. His gaunt appearance and worn clothes have never encouraged others to befriend him before. Besides, he has no idea of how to start a conversation with her. Even with his lack of social skills, he suspects that saying “I’m in awe of you,” isn’t the right thing to say.

And the ending is of the best I have ever come across:

The younger girl obviously looked up to her sister, and had apologised whenever she exercised her powers. He wanted her to know that her magic was amazing and breathtaking, not despicable. He needs to rescue her from the tyranny of her mundane older sister, he decides, and expose her to the wonders of the magical world to which she so clearly belongs.

Hours earlier, he had thought he’d never be anyone’s knight in shining armour. Now, he’s seen a different kind of damsel in distress, he desperately wants to be.

A beautiful, poignant fic. Thank you.

Author's Response: I've been meaning to respond to your review for ages, but I've procrastinated. The review itself is so lovely, I know my response won't be anywhere near adequate. I just reread it now, and I'm grinning from ear to ear. I worked really hard on trying to get my characterization of Severus right. I tried to combine the tiny glimpses we get from the HP books at Snape's childhood with his behavior as an adult throughout the series into a logical characterization of him a couple of years pre-Hogwarts. I'm so happy you think I got it right. Your praise of the ending almost means more to me, though, as endings are not usually my strong point. In sum, I'm so incredibly glad to know that this story touched you, and I want to know that your review may have touched me more.

A True Weasley by ahattab33

Rated: 1st-2nd Years •

All summer, Percy has been anxiously awaiting that moment he knows with change his life: the day he arrives at Hogwarts. But with all his expectations, will he be prepared for what the Sorting Hat has to tell him?

I am ahattab33 of Hufflepuff, and this is my entry for the Hufflepuff Back to School Challenge.
Reviewer: hestiajones Signed
Date: 10/02/09 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

When I saw the chosen character in the first drabble, I knew then and there that it was going to be an interesting read. (That’s why I was volunteered to be your cheerleader. Lol!) Who would have thought of Percy? Pompous and cocksure in the books, many people simply take it for granted that he was confident of himself all the time. I think your examination of that assumption was what made the story great for me.

However, you still kept a nervous Percy IC.

“He would be free to make new friends, to gain more knowledge…but as this moment was now upon him, he suddenly realized how terrified he was. And how much he was going to miss everyone. He almost snorted at the thought. Well, almost everyone. He was sure he could get used to living without fear of what Fred and George were dreaming up.”

“Need any help from us, little brother?" Bill asked, looking down at Percy, whose right hand was still gripping his trunk firmly.

Percy shook his head. "No, thank you, Bill. I'm sure I'll manage."

“Your greatest journey is about to begin, he reminded himself firmly.

If he could just stop being so nervous. “

Of course, Percy would think he was headed for the Olympics; he would be so sure that he would shine above the rest at Hogwarts. But there was that Weasley in him – he still loves his brother though in spite of the differences.

“Throughout all of this, Percy stared. His brothers were sitting with him on the way to Hogwarts? Didn’t…didn't they have friends they'd rather sit with? And he'd already had a friendly conversation with a stranger who didn't seem to find him odd or pompous. His heart swelled as he listened to Charlie's familiar voice and watched his two brothers settle into their compartment. They were letting him branch out…but they were not leaving him. He suddenly grinned. “

This was probably my favorite part of the story. I love the Weasleys because they always come back to each other in the end. And Percy may have acted like a prat, but he is still a Weasley. You didn’t show him being a snooty git – he still has that innocence. Hmm…maybe it was the Prefect Badge that corrupted him. Lol! Kidding.

“He felt a silly grin spreading over his face again, but for once he did not care. There was no Ron, no Ginny, and thank heavens no twins. He did not have to be the responsible one, for once - at least, not tonight. He felt like running up and down the halls of the train with his arms stretched wide, laughing -”

I loved this part too. This is definitely the Percy who hexed Thicknesse. ;) It actually made me take Percy seriously (because, seriously, I never took him seriously before). I am sure Molly’s high expectations and demands from her children had to take their toll on at least one child – and it was Percy. He had to fulfill those dreams for her; he had to be the responsible one. Bill was cooler about this – he took things in his stride. But Percy must have felt that he had to live up to that Head Boy thing too.

The Sorting was great to read. If the Hat had not thought of putting Percy in Slytherin, I would have raised my eye-brows. He certainly seems to possess a few qualities of that house (no offence to Slytherins!). But you gave convincing reasons why the Hat chose Gryffindor. The Weasley thing comes into play again, but Percy’s sense of righteousness also contributes to his being selected for that very house.

So, what I am trying to say in a roundabout fashion is that, you wrote a well-rounded Percy (ha ha – what an odd choice of words. Well rounded Percy!) I mean to say, you saved him from being a one-dimensional character.

Charlie, Bill and Oliver were nicely written. Charlie and Bill always had a camaraderie going on them – remember the mid-air table fight in GOF? Here, you managed to capture that spirit. :) Poor Oliver, on the other hand, is already obsessed with Quidditch. :D

On a side note, I was a little confused at Molly’s absence at first. But then, I remembered someone has to look after Ron, Ginny and the twins (always a handful). Is that why she wasn’t there to see her sons off?

All in all, I thought this was the best entry for the competition, because you took a risk with your choice of character yet did it so well in the end.


Author's Response:

Natalie! Twin sister! I squeed at work when I saw this amazing review! Even if it was so long because it was telling me how bad my story was, it shows you took the time to tell me why. >.<.

I'm getting more and more plot bunnies for Percy, I dont know why. But he was the first character that popped into my head, and I suddenly realized I wasn't sure I agreed with his sorting into Gryffindor. And I never believed Percy was also sure of himself. I identified with Percy a lot - I am an older sister who studies a lot and reads a lot and says a lot of statements that gets myself made fun of a lot by my family who thinks I'm completely uncool and nerdy. And I therefore pretend it doesn't bother me and that I'm confident but really, it bothers me and I used to think about it - should I just fade into the background and not say what I want? Or be myself? And I had a lot of expectations for myself with college as well. I used all of these experiences to write about what I imagined Percy would feel entering his first day of Hogwarts. The only difference would be that he had older brothers encouraging him, whereas I was the older sister, venturing out alone.

At the same time, I always felt that Percy would have some idea of how others perceived him, no matter what he said or how he acted. And he was only 11, so he hasn't quite perfected "Percy the Prefect" yet. :)

I don't know if any of that makes sense. I have this very clear picture of Percy in my head, lol. I tried to make it clear that Ginny was a newborn (her birthday is over the summer sometime, I think) so that Molly had chosen to stay home with the new baby rather than have Arthur stay home. Don't know how clear I was able to make that - I was trying to have it be soley from Percy's thoughts, and I thought it would be weird to go into a full explanation of why Molly wasn't there, as obviously Percy would know. >.<

Thank you so so so much for this review. I am so flattered you enjoyed the story, and that you really took the time to point out what you liked about it.

~Amanda, aka, your long-lost twin sister.

Changed by laurajane81

Rated: 1st-2nd Years •
Summary: Andromeda reflects on her sister Bella, and how she is not who she thought she was, but the person she was afraid she would become.
Reviewer: hestiajones Signed
Date: 10/16/09 Title: Chapter 1: Changed

Well, hello there!

That was beautifully written. There are parts which I know will stay with me for a long time, such as:

“Whether it was her shining ebony curls, or the dark dramatic eyes, every eye was always drawn to her, as if the authority she thrived on was a necessity which was not negotiable. Now, she was standing, towering above everyone, glaring that evil, murderous glare that I had always convinced myself, as an ignorant, innocent child, I was imagining. I had become, however, over these few years, more enlightened, and gradually more disgusted at Bella's sanguinary, detrimental deeds; her dark, destructive manner.”

I thought this was a precise description of Bella.

Now, I rather found your characterization of Bellatrix interesting. It was good to show that there was something “not quite right” with her, and you used certain instances from her childhood to prove that. At eight years old, she is depicted as malicious; at thirteen, she has committed her first murder, so to speak.

I confess I have a strange fascination with her although I hate her. Writing about her has become a satisfying exercise for me. Therefore, I have an admiration for how you handled her personality.

As for Andromeda, I initially thought your portrayal of her was a little short of the mark– I imagine her to be a little more rebellious than that. That was my general impression, at least. But, now I’m thinking, your characterization of her was quite balanced. I gave it a second read and the whole thing made sense. Her denial, her hesitation, her stepping back – they made sense and lent a more original feel to the story.

I have some minor nitpicks, though. One, in the first part, where you have used caps for the words “EIGHT” and “WHOLE” – italicized would have been a better option. If you weren’t sure how to do that, you just have to put the words between the html tags. Just saying, in case you didn’t know. : )

Also, “robin” was misspelled somewhere.

Just that. Lol!

All in all, a very impressive first story.

Author's Response: Thank you very much for your amazing response to my story! I have been trying for about two months to get this up here, and it is actually double the length it was originally. At first, it was only the very first bit, and then Bella and Andromeda's argument, but I am more peased with it now. You were right, I didn't know how to get the italics, thank you very much for telling me! As for the portrayal of Andromeda, I had always wondered about her. I assumed she was a Slytherin, as were most of the Blacks, so I think she would have some Slytherin - ness about her. Saying this, the story, in my mind, works better with her being, for want of a better word, weaker than Bella. However, in my head, she is slightly more gutsy - otherwise, I don't think she would have ran of with Ted. Finally, thank you very much again for your very informative and amazing review, you're one of the only ones who have reviewed my story! Thank you.

The Balancing Act by coolh5000

Rated: 1st-2nd Years •
Summary: Eleven-year-old Teddy always finds himself stuck in the middle of his Grandma and Godfather. While he knows they both love him and only want what's best for him, he can never seem to please them both. Can a trip to Diagon Alley for school supplies finally get them to see that he loves them both equally?

This was originally written as part of SPEW 007 (though not posted in time) with the prompt 'feather'
Reviewer: hestiajones Signed
Date: 10/15/10 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1


What a pleasant thing to read right now. The flat is quiet and peaceful, I’m all cuddled up on my bed, the weather is warm and cool at the same time, and – guess what – my tummy is full and content. Yes, this fic is perfect.

The competition between Andromeda and Harry is something to be expected, isn’t it? Teddy was luckier than Harry, but having two guardians would be a blessing and curse at the same time. Yet, he deals with that so well, even for a child. Guess it’s the Lupin in him.

The title couldn’t have been more fitting. I was wondering how you were going to resolve your story because the second part seemed to meander away a little, but then it tied up so well at the end. A balancing act indeed! That was certainly a clever little twist there. Like Teddy, I was under the impression that Andromeda resented the Phoenix feather core. When Andromeda revealed it was because Tonks had used a mahogany wand, it was, therefore, both relieving and saddening.

What do I say about the characterisation? It was nicely done for all three characters. My favourite, of course, was Teddy. You wrote the eleven-year-old rather convincingly.

Great work, Hannah!


Wicked Witches by ahattab33

Rated: 1st-2nd Years • Past Featured Story

Luna Lovegood takes a trip into the village near her home with her mother, expecting only to enjoy the afternoon and a pleasant walk. Instead, she sees a Frankenstiln, stumbles upon a potential egging, and learns the grave truth about wicked witches.

On October 31, 1989, Luna Lovegood learns the truth about the strange Muggle holiday called Halloween.

This is ahattab33 of Hufflepuff writing for the Halloween Challenge, Halloween Explained prompt.

Reviewer: hestiajones Signed
Date: 11/12/09 Title: Chapter 1: On Wicked Witches and Bowtruckle Spirits

I hate Competition rules. I really do, as they have a tendency of putting restrictions on your narrative. I faced the same problem while writing my fic on Rita – it had to be a one-shot. And you had to stop yourself from exploring Judy’s character more – it has to be a one-shot, and it doesn’t have much to do with the prompt.

That said, I really loved your story, and I knew I had to write a good review the minute I finished reading it.

Your characterization of the Lovegoods intrigued me. When I first saw Luna, when I saw her doing something as childlike and “normal” as playing with leaves, I was instantly interested. This was a new Luna – or should I say, a “lost Luna”? Her innocence here was refreshing; she wasn’t spouting unexpected words of wisdom, she was just being a child who was scared to see her parents disagreeing. She was just being a witch who didn’t like Muggles’ interpretation of the “Green Witch with Warts.”

Xeno surprised me as well. Although he has started talking about Nargles, we know he hasn’t really lost it. Here, he isn’t the Xeno who Auntie Muriel would describe as “looking like an omelette.” Instead, he’s the one who kept Harry and Co deep into a discussion about Deathly Hallows if only to get his daughter back safely. We see him as not being cranky or stubborn, but as vulnerable and normal as any of us.

Judy was presented well. I liked her sense of determination – she’s bent on conducting that experiment, if not now, then later. Moreover, she is shown as the backbone of the family – the glue that keeps them strong together. Her wisdom, her sense of fun, her tact – she is an admirable woman, and it’s really no wonder how her death affected both Xeno and Luna. She is also strong, and now I know where Luna’s own grit comes from.

You really worked the story well into the prompt. You could have chosen an easy way of doing it, but you chose the hard way. You wove in the Lovegood’s tragic history in it. Amidst the laughter, the fun, the discovery of so many truths, there is that underlying sense of intimate loss. We know that whatever Judy is planning, it is going to cost her a heavy price. We feel for Xeno as he tries to stop her, but even our hopes are futile. That made the story much more poignant. It wasn’t just a story on Muggle’s Halloween and the various traditions associated with it, it is one which gives us a rare insight into how happy and complete the Lovegoods used to be.

And now, I beseech you to write something on Judy and her experiment.


Author's Response: I keep leaving this wonderful review to respond to later because of your last request - to write something of Judy - sort of like a to-do note? "I'll respond to this review when I get a chance to write something down about Judy..." and that's never going to happen, at least any time soon, we both know that. As I started really getting into this story, I realized I didn't care two cents about THIS particular story - I wanted to write about the LOVEGOODS and how they interacted and were changed by Judy's death - Judy, whom I purposefully gave a very common name. Judy, who I wanted to make down to earth - she had a shopping list in the original, even. Sort of like...maybe Luna would still be Luna, but...not so LOONY had her mom survived. And Xeno wouldn't be quite so freaking batty. Like, her death is the catalyst. But while she might be practical and down to earth, I think there were also characteristics about her that would be individual to women...spirits and magic that only women could touch. Or at least, that's what she would believe in. And I could talk for ages about this, so I'm going to wrap it up by saying Emma (my beta) politely suggested I was wondering away from the prompt and was just going to confuse everyone because I wasn't going to have room for all that -- as was the problem with this particular contest, the first thing you pointed out. But it seems, if you are pointing out that you understood what I was still trying to convey, that I might still have gotten some of the point across? Anyhoo...just as I have this strangely cystal clear idea of post DH Draco/Astoria...I have this strangely clear picture of the Lovegood family, pre-Judy's death. Perhaps for the next TTB mini=Nano challenge I'll write about them. :) This review was soooo much appreciated. And I'm sorry for taking so long. *blushes* Thanks, my twin!! Loves, hugs, kisses. ~Amanda

I Get By by ron lover

Rated: 3rd-5th Years • Past Featured Story

This story has been nominated in the 2010 QSQ for best Same-Sex Pairing story.

After time, Goyle deals with Crabbe’s death.

Reviewer: hestiajones Signed
Date: 11/25/09 Title: Chapter 1: I Get By

Hi there Alyssa!

I read this fic some days ago, and I was planning to leave a review, but I didn’t want it to be a “OMG that was totally awesome!!1” kind of review, so I waited. ;)

I loved this fic, and ended up surprising myself because, now, who really likes Crabbe and Goyle? So, I guess that’s where I’ll start my review. Your choice of characters had a refreshing novelty about it. I think us fanfiction authors need to explore more, give the minor characters their share of the limelight. And, actually, that’s where the bigger challenge lies. You have these two characters whose history we know almost nothing of – apart from being Malfoy’s sidekicks, and Voldemort’s hounds, who are Crabbe and Goyle? We tend to see them as twin human gargoyles, while forgetting that they are humans, hence, they are unique in their own way.

And you succeeded. You showed the basic difference between Crabbe and Goyle. Crabbe relished cruelty, he was prepared for murder – Goyle, not so much. While almost all readers are aware of that fact, how many of us are willing to write a story on that? Very, very few of us. But you took the theme in your stride, and wrote a really great one-shot. There was nothing over-the-top or far-fetched about it. In fact, the blunt honesty with which Goyle expresses his feelings and uncertainties lent it credibility. I can very much picture Goyle liking Crabbe that way. I’m convinced.

I like to think that the secret of your success here is how you handled the characters. They are so much in character, yet you added another dimension to them, and that addition was done with so much tact:

“When I was serving my time in Azkaban, the only thing that kept me sane was the thought that I could have it worse. I could be dead. Like Vincent. I had to stay strong so I wouldn’t ruin my life. Since he was dead, I needed to do the living for the both of us. I couldn’t do that if I was insane.”

I really liked that part. Goyle was not such a fool, after all. And I loved the ending, I did. It’s a terse four lines, but the bitterness, the disillusionment, the regret, even the optimism – everything has been blended so well.

My only nitpick is that it’s “Fiendfyre,” not “Fiend Fire.” But since it’s dear ol’ Gregory Goyle, I’m willing to let it slip.


Author's Response: Oh my gosh, Natalie, thank you so much! I'm glad that you think I succeeded with the characterization of them. I was so scared that it was going to be off. I'm so happy that you said that. It took a big weight off of my shoulders. I'm glad that you liked the ending. I always try to have a good ending to my stories, so I'm glad that it worked. On the nitpick - how could I miss that?!? I had the book open the whole time I write this! Thank you so much for pointing it out. I'll have to change it sometime soon. Thanks again for reading and reviewing!

Cauchemar by the opaleye

Rated: 3rd-5th Years •
After the defeat of Lord Voldemort, Harry is haunted by the ghosts of his past.


This is a sonnet from Ginny as she comes to terms with her husbands inability to move on.

Nominated for the 2010 QSQ Awards for Best Poetry!

Reviewer: hestiajones Signed
Date: 12/14/09 Title: Chapter 1: Cauchemar

Here I come, as promised.

Julia, Julia, Julia! I am sorry, but this will not be one of the better reviews you have received for your poetic skills. This is because I know next to nothing about meters and consistencies and @#$@#%$3 about poetry. Lol! However, I can write about an author’s portrayal of emotions and her subject matter, and that is exactly what I will do.

I think one could write one-shots on Harry’s demons post-Hogwarts Battle. And one could certainly tell tales of Ginny helping him recover, acting as the balm that soothes the pains that have gone deeper beyond the skin. But you achieved that in a compact, beautifully written sonnet.

Yet he refuses to see and spurns my hope

Harry and his heroic sufferings actually don’t tire me. I know many fans call him names for his hero-complex, but I honestly admire Harry in spite of it. The thing is, he doesn’t see it as glorious – he is just so damn mechanical about the whole thing, so detached despite the fact that his identity will never be separate from it. Even more admirable to me is his vulnerability – one that springs from love. And this vulnerability is so intimately connected with his strength, and that, perhaps, is the thing which fascinates me most about Harry.

I noticed you put a “Mental Disorder” warning, but actually I didn’t notice that in the poem. This may be partly due to my FAILNESS at poetry, but I don’t see any reason why it can’t be read as Harry struggling with the memories of the war. Anyway, this is how I interpreted it:

In your poem, we hear nothing from Harry. We are told of his nightmares and fears. Yet, it doesn’t misrepresent him, and neither does it grasp at straws to salvage it. It tells me of Harry as he is, and I love it.

I am here, I tell him, Ginny, your wife
Do not dwell on death, accept our new life!

Light. That is what Ginny is. But not a ray, nor a torch – a blinding force of light that spreads around the vicinity. These lines effectively sum up her character. Her optimism, her strength, and her loyalty are clearly visible.

Apart from your good grasp of Rowling’s character, and canon sensibilities, there were some other things I really liked. The title itself was not only intriguing, but quite fitting. I also loved the “Titian locks,” even though they made me think of a different Ginny. The one in my mind has long, and rather straight red hair. But there is a sensuality, a certain softness about Titian’s women that I find engaging, and to put Ginny in such a mould is refreshing.

All in all, great job!


Author's Response: Thank you so much for this review, Natalie! I have to admit when I first started reading it I had this horrible feeling that you hated the poem. But you didn't! I am so relieved that you are like me and admire Harry for his hero-complex and vulnerability. It's sometimes hard to believe that someone can dislike Harry for all his faults and weaknesses and strengths yet remain a fan of the entire series. You are totally correct about Ginny. She is a light. I really wanted to portray that. But she is still human and all this darkness must get to her which is why I wanted that feel of helplessness in the poem. Again, thank you for this review. Now I'll be able to go into work with a smile on my face! -Julia XD

Peace in Heaven by Equinox Chick

Rated: 3rd-5th Years •
Summary: After decades of hatred, a friendship begins...

Severus Snape wakes up after Nagini's bite in a hospital bed. He is dead, of that there is no doubt, but he cannot move on as the others who fell in battle have.


I am Equinox Chick from Hufflepuff and this is my entry in the November in-house banner/story challenge.

Author's Note: For this competiition, the writers in Hufflepuff picked banners designed by other Puffs and wrote a story based on the picture, title and catchphrase. The banner I chose was by Terri (mudbloodproud).

Disclaimer: I am not JK Rowling. I think it's safe to assume that you all know that.

I am indebted to the truly wonderful (and QSQ award winning) Emma (Amortentia x) who has beta'd this fic. Not only did she sort out my punctuation, but she had some extremely good suggestions throughout the story.
Reviewer: hestiajones Signed
Date: 11/22/09 Title: Chapter 1: Peace in Heaven

Hey there!

I loved this fic to pieces. I have a weakness for afterlife fics, where they all get together in heaven and sort up make up for everything. But this one felt different from the rest. Severus feeling the pain because his feelings and conflicts weren't resolved as yet - that was a great idea.

All in all, you made me very happy by reconciling Black and Snivellus. :D

By the way, how are you managing everything? The mind boggles.


Author's Response: I have a time turner, Natalie, and it lets me repeat hours ;p. Thank you for the review, and I'm pleased you enjoyed it because a Smape/Sirius friendship is kinda hard to imagine. ~Carole~

The Dawn by ahattab33

Rated: 3rd-5th Years • Past Featured Story

Ron Weasley is staying at Shell Cottage during the Christmas of 1997. These are the thoughts and feelings that occupy him.

This is ahattab33 of Hufflepuff, and this is for the "Watching the Mirror" class on the MNFF Beta Boards.
Reviewer: hestiajones Signed
Date: 12/08/09 Title: Chapter 1: The Dawn


I mean, you made me *tear* this early in the morning (early for me!), and on a hungry stomach too.

Mmm…where do I start, now? I loved everything about it, even the 2000 that I missed. Lol. No, seriously, I’m amazed you managed to write something so beautiful when you were bogged down by RL. And you sailed right through without beta-ing. Brilliant!

*cough I will soon run out of adjectives if I continue in this vein cough*

I have always wanted to know what Ron was doing at that time in Shell Cottage. Yes, it’s safe to assume that he was repenting, he does say he was, but what was the extent of his remorse? Was he still under the delusion that Hermione preferred Harry? Was he still angry with Harry? How did he cope with all that, considering he had “the emotional range of a teaspoon”?

And you explained and described everything for the reader. He didn’t have an easy time with it, more so because he’s not used to feeling so much. Because he doesn’t want to feel so much. And yet, he’s there, questioning and forcing himself to face his personal demons. It doesn’t help that Bill and Fleur are snuggling in the sofa, reminding Ron that if he hadn’t been so foolhardy, he’d have had his love all to himself.

I like how you made him remember Hermione. The glances, the harmless touching – that is just so typical of them. Lol! They wouldn’t fly into each other and start kissing like Ginny and Harry. And also that he felt guilty about Harry – he should.

My favorite part was:

“Ron had finally understood how a person could feel so many things at once. He could be jealous of his brother for catching the girl of his dreams in domestic bliss…he could be utterly in love with someone whom he was sure now would never speak to him again…he could be guilty beyond words for an action taken in anger…he could be horrified at his own being for his capacity to hurt another person...he could feel a determination like no other to somehow make it right.”


“He allowed himself one Christmas present…to think about Hermione as if she might still look at him like she did before he left. Hints of something, glances when she thought he wasn't looking, brushes of hands when it wasn't necessary. Opportunities he hadn't taken for his own lack of courage and for Harry's sake.

He was convinced now that they were gone because of what he'd done, though he had fleeting moments of hope. He allowed himself those, the daydreams of Hermione throwing herself into his arms and kissing him with passion at their reunion. The other ones involved her vicious birds, or terrible words, or the worst of all…that she had sought comfort and solace through Harry.”

Because they are just so quintessential Ron.

Bravo, my friend. Full marks!


P.S. You are turning me into a fluffball. *glares*

Author's Response:


It still tickles me pink that you like this story so much. I haven't spent enough time with it to decide how I feel about it yet, but everyone seems to really like it and it makes me deliriously happy. Like, my brain can't absorb it. I'll even put up with the 2000 thing, which I don't think you'll ever let me live down...

I feel like...I know inside MY head how Ron feels during this time, but describing it? Without it sounding TEEN!SOB!ANGSTY! or just plain confusing and overwhelming or completely not making any sense seemed really difficult to me at first. But ROXY I learned something after all!! :D Because apparently it was coherent and made some sort of sense.

And I like those parts, too. Everyone keeps saying my favorite part as well, the first quote you mention, which of course obliquely references the "emotional range of a teaspoon" thing.

Oooh full marks from Natalie!!! And I'm Romance!Fluff!Queen, so my twin has to like it some. AND this was my first story in D/A. So you are rubbing off on me.

Love your twin,


The Witching Hour by greennotebook

Rated: 3rd-5th Years •
Summary: "I have always thought that it is at the witching hour in the darkest night that a man reveals himself for who he truly is. So look inside yourself closely and know who you are before you answer me. Are you in this with me, Albus?”

Albus Dumbledore must confront Gellert Grindelwald and the impact of their relationship,

I am greennotebook and this is my entry into the Hufflepuff In-House Banner/Story Contest
Reviewer: hestiajones Signed
Date: 12/28/09 Title: Chapter 1: Nurmengard

Wow, Greenius. That’s what I call a masterpiece.

I don’t even know where to start the review. Everything was done so well – the characterization, the dialogue, the old-fashioned way of speaking which suits the era, the shift in narrative time. They all fit into each other perfectly.

The part I loved most was the one with Ariana in it. It accomplished so many things. It showed Gellert putting on his charm, and the seductiveness of his theory. It shows how Albus utterly failed at really understanding his own sister. It even shows that Gellert couldn’t sell Ariana on his ideas.

I don’t know what else to say, apart from the fact that this is one of the best D/A fics I have ever read. Terrific!