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There’s something for everyone, unless you like reading Snape romances, which I don’t write. Or Voldemort’s children. Or Snape’s children. You will, however, find two Snape/Lily and one Voldemort/Minerva poems. Other than these, I’ve written:

Completed Fics:

Alternate Universe: Going against Salazar’s Grain, Winner of 2011 QSQ for Best AU.

Dark/Angst: To Follow the Dark Lord, For I Am a Mother, Killing Meda’s Daughter, Him Alice and Me, Carousel, The Receding, Becoming Rita, On No One’s Side and Lacuna Mentis, Winner of 2011 QSQ for Best D/A.

Draco/Astoria: Because You Came, Winner of 2011 QSQ Best Canon Romance.

Femmeslash: Cut, Bleed, Susan, Hands That Fit, Desire And a Half.

Humour: I Like a Healthy Breeze Round My Privates, Bit of a Nasty Shock. Mmm. These are exactly about what you’re thinking.

Harry/Hermione: Over a Mug of Tea, Harmony. I have delusional friends whom I love.

Historical: Waiting, An Act of Love

James/Lily: Ain’t Love the Sweetest Thing, Always Come Back to You

Maleslash: In the Back of the Shack, At the End of It, Anchored, Something Strange

Marauder Era: A Tale of Six Perspectives, Wish You Were Here, Common Cold Won’t Keep Me Down, Always … But Not Who You Think

Non-pairing: Sunday Lunch with the Malfoys
Scorpius/Rose: Breaking Rules, Of Weasleys And Malfoys
Scorpius/Hugo: In the Back of the Shack, At the End of It, Anchored
Dominique/OC: Cut, Bleed
Lucy/Lorcan: Whirlwind

Post-Hogwarts: Seamus’ Break with a Banshee, Mirrors, A Splendid Fate, and The Substitute, Winner of 2011 Best Non-Canon Romance

Ted/Andromeda: Eternal Flight, Five Christmases, Soul Sister

Crack Pairings:
Ron/Mary Cattermole: The Substitute
James/Severus: Always … But Not Who You Think

Character Studies:
Rita Skeeter: Becoming Rita
Merope Gaunt: The Receding
Florean Fortescue: Florean Fortescue - An Unsung Hero
Albus Dumbledore: Going against Salazar’s Grain
Bill Weasley: Never too Late
Andrew Carlton, OC: Being Muggle with Rooney
Tom Riddle: Commencement
Mrs Zabini: Rendezvous with Mrs Zabini, Desire And a Half
Pansy Parkinson: Carousel
Molly Weasley: Knowing Who She Was, The Solitary Prewett


Snape/Lily: The Silver Doe, In Winter in My Head
Tom/Minerva: Spiral
Draco/Harry: Dreams Made of Green
Remus/Tonks: it might not be, but still
Hogwarts: The Battle of Hogwarts, May 2nd and The Clarion Call, Winner of 2010 QSQ Best Poetry
Lily Potter: The Gathering Storm and the Crib
Harry/Ginny: A Night of Love
Harry Potter: Memories Are Not Enough
Draco Malfoy: I Am Shame
Regulus Black: My Black Brother
Bellatrix and Narcissa: The Black Sisters
Bloody Baron/Grey Lady: Murder for Love
Hestia Jones (oh): Drive Your Car On
Draco/Hermione: The Other Woman


A Marriage Made at Hogwarts: I’m afraid I won’t be continuing this. :/ I had completed it ages ago, but I lost the draft twice and I don’t have the heart or the motivation to finish it. Or delete it.
Before I Forget: A Maleslash featuring Regulus/Rabastan. I will definitely complete it next year.
One Day in the Life of: A Next-Gen fic featuring all the - well - Next-Gen kids. This too will be finished in the coming year.

Upcoming Fics:

As of now, I’m severely blocked. D: However, I am working on the following projects and both will be posted before 31st January of next year:

Songs, Lovers and Everything in Between: A string of post-Hogwarts romances featuring rarepairs.

Bill Weasley and the Temple of Lsulaph: An Alternate Universe as well as Parallel Universe crack!fic-cum-adventure featuring the most dashing Weasley to grace your consciousness along with twelve daredevil and powerful sisters. Together, they must defeat the evil sorcerer/non-Egyptian pharaoh Lsulaph, who has taken over the Incaff sisters’ kingdom.

UPDATE: If you're looking for Fireworks Inside, here's a link: http://clickysmut.livejournal.com/2930.html

That’s pretty much it. Hope you enjoy the stay!

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Night Terrors by Karaley Dargen

Rated: 3rd-5th Years •
Summary: In their seventh year at Hogwarts, every student has only one thing on their mind: NEWTs. And Quidditch. And bickering friends. And people who are mysteriously locked away in the hospital wing... Or maybe Nymphadora Tonks and Charlie Weasley are just having a particularly unusual term.

Anything that you recognise, including names, spells, potions, and Quidditch moves, belongs to either JKR or the copyright holders of various HP games and other media.

A million thanks must be sent to Carole/Equinox Chick, whithout whom I'm not sure I'd have a story. She's a fabulous beta and one of the best people that I have ever known.

Also lots of thanks to Natalie/hestiajones for reading the first chapters and especially for making me see that they needed work!

Aaaand many many thanks and hugs to Hannah/coolh5000 for being a really fantastic friend and always encouraging me.

Reviewer: hestiajones Signed
Date: 12/28/12 Title: Chapter 1: Slightly Drowsy

Oh my Kara!

This is such a fantastic story. UGH! I don't know if I can explain my feels properly in this box :x

The characterisation is just so spot-on, and I don't just mean the main characters of the plot, but the house qualities and even the minor ones, including the gargoyles guarding Dumby's office. The banter was absolutely entertaining to read, too. It just had a ... Tonks vibe to it. I can't describe it exactly; it just fit so well. The only thing I doubted at the beginning was Oliver being the captain of his team. He's in fourth year here, right? But then, it dawned on me that apart from Charlie, the other players are also rather young, and he might have wanted to concentrate on his NEWTs instead. Actually, the more I think of it, the more it made sense not to make Charlie captain. This way, it's clear he loved Quidditch but his top priority was not it.

The details, though. That is something that I admired - nay, envied - endlessly about the Unbreakable Curse, and it was no different here. The way you planned classes and curriculum is awe-inspiring. I've said it before and I'll say it again: if there's anyone I know in our friend circle who will make it in the fantasy literature world, it's you. You have the kind of expansive imagination and attention to detail required. Seriously, I'm a sucker for the "magic" part of the Potterverse, and there's been plenty of times when I wondered what NEWTS would be like, and this satisfied my cravings!

And the plot! GAH. Perfectly paced, my darling, and how well-executed. l like how easily I was fooled into thinking Martha was going to be a possible victim. Hahaha! The dream realm was an endlessly intriguing character in itself. Quite scary, actually.

My only crit is that a few of the chapters suffered from minor technical issues: missing punctuation, capitalisation issues (in naming), and spelling errors. I saw a Venomous Tentacular somewhere - it was the second chapter in which it was mentioned - and Laura Byrd became as Myra in a later chapter, and Lisa in the final one. :O

These are things that can be easily fixed when you read the chapters again. The core content remains wonderful and exciting.

My haircape is off to you, Fraulein Dargen!


Author's Response: Nataliiiiiee! Wow, you read quickly!

I could kick myself especially for these name issues! I fixed everything you pointed out now - thanks! I changed almost everyone's name two times at least and thought I'd caught everything, but then I had different versions of chapters floating around between betaing and editing etc. -- anyway, thanks for pointing it out, and if there's anything else I'd appreciate if you'd let me know!

Thank you so so much for all your kind words. I don't quite know what to say, but you have to know that I'm feeling very fuzzy inside right now.

Oliver being Quidditch Captain that year is actually canon (because Fred and George knew his speech, and Tonks and Charlie graduated the year before Harry got there), as is his age. I tried to show him as a slightly less secure Captain. And yeah, Charlie used to be Captain but gave it up (in my opinion) to focus on NEWTs, in an uncharacteristically sensible move ;)

Again, thank you so much. wow.

Jumper by HalfASlug

Rated: 1st-2nd Years •
Summary: All these years, Hermione has been waiting for this and there is only one person who really understands why.
Reviewer: hestiajones Signed
Date: 11/03/12 Title: Chapter 1: one-shot

Oh this made me all fuzzy :) Since SSS is the first fic of yours that I've read, I haven't seen much of your Harry yet. Now that we've been properly acquainted, let me say that he's as well-written as the other two. Thanks for writing something that warms my heart this foggy November evening! - Natalie

Author's Response: Thanks for reading and reviewing :) Yeah, Harry makes the odd cameo there but that's it really. Thank you! Of the three, Harry is the one I struggle with the most so it's nice that you think I've done all right there! When better for a Christmas fic than... er... November?

To Dwell On Dreams by Equinox Chick

Rated: 6th-7th Years •
Summary: 'Sometimes I catch a glimpse of myself in a mirror or a window, and I do not recognise the face staring back. Even the eyes, which never truly change, seem dulled in comparison to what they once were.

It is not age that dulled them but you, and him, and her, and the myriad of dreams that came to nothing.'

Albus Dumbledore dwells on his life, and love, and the Hogwarts' students he shaped.

This story is for Natalie (hestiajones) because it is her birthday and she is a fantastic friend. Have a good one, my love.

Disclaimer: I'm not JK Rowling. I think that's obvious.

Thank you very much, Kara (Karaley Dargen) for beta'ing this story and helping me rethink bits. :)

Reviewer: hestiajones Signed
Date: 10/31/12 Title: Chapter 1: ~*~

I am crying. Yeah, this is what I meant on AIM lol. This is just one of the most amazing things I have ever read, not only because it was written for me (hehehe), but because it is utterly brilliant in its execution! There were so many lines that literally made me shiver, and I think my brain had multiple nerdgasms as each student was assessed.

Interlacing their entrances with his internal monologue about Gellert was brilliant! I always think Albus/Gellert is a ship that cannot be written on its own merit; it is much deeper, sadder and more meaningful when we fully understand the impact it left on the rest of Albus' life.

I don't know what to say more, except that it was spectacularly done! Thank you so much, my darling ho.

Author's Response: PHEW! *wipes brow* The decision to delete three attempted Luna/Rolfs is vindicated. :)

So pleased you liked it, Natatat. I was struggling for an idea, but once I thought of Dumbledore, I knew what I wanted to do. (and then just prayed it didn't clash too much with your thoughts about the man.

I agree about Gellert and the impact on Dumbledore. It shaped him in so many ways, not least the fact that he appeared too awed to ever form a love relationship again, although he doubtless loved many people. *sigh* I'm all sad for Dumbles now.

Thank you for reading and reviewing. So glad you liked it. ~Carole~

Master of the Inner Eye by Equinox Chick

Rated: 3rd-5th Years •
Summary: Tiresias Trelawney makes his living conning Muggles into believing he can commune with the dead. With his side-kick, Mundungus Fletcher, they fleece the gullible with magic tricks and a few sad laments.

But one stormy Halloween night, everything changes.

A spooky Halloween story for all the lovely readers on MNFF.

Disclaimer: I am not JK Rowling. Boy, did she know how to weave a spooky tale!

Reviewer: hestiajones Signed
Date: 10/31/12 Title: Chapter 1: Master of the Inner Eye

I went from :D to :( Happy Halloween to you too, and thanks for this lovely present :D (Yes, I am going to claim it as mine.)

Author's Response: Yes, it is a bit of a turnaround, but I couldn't find the 'conflicting emotions' or 'sting in the tail/tale' warning - heh heh.

Thank you for reviewing, and as you're the first then you may claim it - you ho!


One Fateful Night by Gmariam

Rated: 3rd-5th Years •
Summary: Remus Lupin’s life is changed forever in one dark moment on Halloween night. Shock prompts bitter laughter, but reality brings sorrowful tears, as Remus struggles with the devastating loss of his best friends one fateful night.
Reviewer: hestiajones Signed
Date: 11/02/12 Title: Chapter 1: Bitter Laughter, Sorrowful Tears

:( this was rather ... Heavy stuff, gina. The tension, anger and confusion were all so thick and palpable. I'm now registering what it must have been like for remus that night. The only thing nagging me is that in POA, sirius and remus reveal they had suspected each other of being the spy; or was that all sirius at first? But this is a nitpick that doesn't cause damage to the overall great quality of the fic. Nicely done! -Natalie

Author's Response: Natalie! Thank you so much for the review! You know, I really did think about those lines from PoA, I did. Well, I don't know why I didn't include it the first time around, but as I was editing out Snape I thought about trying to include it in the rewrite. Dumbledore does mention something. We do know that Sirius didn't tell Remus the location because he suspected Remus. I think Remus says something then in return about suspecting Sirius. I guess I just saw Remus *at this moment* as simply not believing Sirius could do such a thing. I think I've been influenced by too much fanfic, lol - esp. Remus/Sirius. WHICH is not going on in this story, but maybe, just maybe, Remus didn't really believe it was possible until after it all happened. Plus, I just wasn't sure where to add it. I focused Remus's anger more on the fact that the charm failed, the Potters were dead - even a bit on Snape (the original had him punching Snape in the face, lol) So yes - hope that answers your question a bit. I hope it wasn't too distracting. I bet someone else will call me on it too, lol. But I do (as always) think there is room for interpretation when it comes to this...at least until PoA comes out on Pottermore. Then I'll have to delete half my author's page, I'm sure, lol. Thanks again for reading!! I really appreciate the review. :) ~Gina :)

A Palisade of Persuasion by Equinox Chick

Rated: 6th-7th Years •
Summary: It was true that Daphne and Lee had met at a most inappropriate time, but they had found love, lust and the glimmerings of a life together.

But the power of persuasion should never be underestimated. When they meet again, years later, his indifference cuts to her core. Can the past ever truly be recaptured?

This story is a present for Julia (the opaleye) because she is amazingly talented and has inspired me in so many ways. It is also her brthday.

Disclaimer: I am not JK Rowling.

I am not Jane Austen.

I am not Sporty, Scary, Baby, Ginger or Posh.

Winner of the 2013 QSQ Best Chaptered Non-Canon Romance ~ I am gobsmacked and grateful to everyone especially JK Rowling, Jane Austen and the Spice Girls.

Reviewer: hestiajones Signed
Date: 06/10/13 Title: Chapter 5: Chapter 4 - Impulse

how dare you make fun of terry boot?





Author's Response: Uhm ....



Reviewer: hestiajones Signed
Date: 06/19/13 Title: Chapter 11: Chapter 10 ~ Friendship

for a minute there, i thought you had hooked tracey up with susan. oop. see, caron still stuck in my head :P

Author's Response: I know, it all gets very confusing in my head, but Tracey was with Demelza in one story, and Susan hooked up with Lisa. It's when i still have them doing the same jobs that I get very confuzzled. This story isn;t caron, though. Well, it doesn;t fit with High or Sabrage or ... whatever else I'm joining together to make one huge fic that JK will never take down. Mwahahahahahahahahahahahaa.

Thank you - tee hee. ~Croll

A Lightness by teh tarik

Rated: 6th-7th Years •

My fingers on her face, in her hair, scraping on that rough patch of skin pulled over her knee. We lay in the grass, a tangle of legs. The way she spoke, slow, quiet. I whirled through classes. Fluctuated. I breathed brightness. I spoke laughter. I wouldn’t change a thing.

Lavender Brown is alive.
Reviewer: hestiajones Signed
Date: 03/03/13 Title: Chapter 1: not quite her name

Woooooow. Never before have 9000 words been so quick to read. You have fleshed out Lavender really well, especially her relationship with Ron ha ha ha. And the bit with Padma was nicely done. Love affairs usually have a nasty habit of taking over the narrative, but you've maintained a perfect balance between everything. Honestly, you're very a very inspiring writer!

Author's Response: Ooh, glad to hear that it didn't feel like 9000 words to you! Whenever I reread this fic, it feels like 190000 words, maybe because I know this story rather well and all. And yes, I LOVE the Won-won bit in HBP, so I just had to include it in my fic! It's just one of those things that are so characteristic of Lav-Lav. Love affairs usually don't take over too much of my stories because I'm really awkward at writing them :D But ah, sososo happy that you found balance in this fic and that the Padma bit wasn't too contrived! Honestly, thanks so much for all your lovely favulous amazing wonderful awesomesauce reviews. They mean so much to me. And I will definitely have to swing by your page and read some of your writing! I don't read enough on this site! - Nicole

Consolation by Gmariam

Rated: 3rd-5th Years • Past Featured Story
Summary: For years, Remus Lupin found comfort in the arms of Rosmerta Richardson...until the day he no longer needed her consolation.

This is Gmariam writing for the Great Hall Cotillion Challenge of 2013.
Reviewer: hestiajones Signed
Date: 02/26/13 Title: Chapter 1: One-shot

Great work gingin!i just typed out a longish review and my phn lost the text.will review properly again tomorrow :x

Author's Response: As per Croll's orders, I am finally responding! That you for the review and especially for calling me gingin as I haven't heard that in a long time! Is this enough? I will respond properly to the next one. Thanks again! ~Gina :)

Reviewer: hestiajones Signed
Date: 02/26/13 Title: Chapter 1: One-shot

I'm back!

I thought this story captured so many terrible losses of the war even though it restricted the action to a series of conversation between two characters. So, that was genius on your part. Remus was heartbreaking, as usual, but you also wrote his anger well. The thing is, in the books, we see hints of it but don't see it. He's bitter, and it's only in that scene in DH where we see the extent of his bitterness, isn't it? I remember being shocked because I'd mostly thought of Remus as someone who's usually calm and in control. This fic, however, does show that the anger has been building up so long.

I loved how the balance shifted in the end, with Rosmerta in need of consolation, not Remus. Her tryst with the Imperius Curse and its consequences are things I've wanted to read about, and I thought you did justice to hit.

But what I most liked about your story is the relationship between the two. It's almost platonic, isn't it? Kind of sacred, actually. I'm so pleased you didn't focus on the sexual side of their extended affair, but on the emotional. Refreshing and subtle ;)

So, this was what my original review was all about before the phone decided to lose it >.< I shall gradually attack your other fics!

Author's Response: Thank you so much for the lovely review - for taking time to type it again, too! I'm so glad you liked it. You're word 'sacred' is really a perfect word for what they have. It's special and unique, open and important - sacred. Yes. And you know me - I don't tend to focus on a lot on the sexual sides of things, so I'm glad you didn't miss that, haha. I really love Remus, and felt bad for him sometimes here. But he had Rosmerta, even to the end. And then he was able to console her. Oh sigh. But in my mind she finds someone over the course of DH, so she's all right. It would be sad to write a story about her reaction to Remus's death, although now that I've said it, I'm sort of interested. Hm. Anyway - thank you so much! ~Gina :)

Deceptions by Equinox Chick

Rated: 6th-7th Years •
Summary: Beautiful and headstrong, with Veela blood running through her veins, Fleur Delacour understands the importance of looks, but as she seeks to ensnare the intriguing young Auror standing guard at Hogwarts, she forgets the most important truth of all: appearances are often deceptive.

This is Equinox Chick and this is my first entry into the Great Hall 2013 Cotillion (yes, I did say first!)

Disclaimer; I am not JK Rowling. I'm also not very good at French.

Thank you Sophie (the owl) for fabulous beta job, and Natalie (hestiajones) for giving me some pointers.
Reviewer: hestiajones Signed
Date: 02/28/13 Title: Chapter 3: Chapter 3 - Distractions


But hahaha let me first laugh at Ron blundering into a pivotal moment, It made me giggle, as did that momentary lapse of Snape's solid demeanour. I wonder if I should write Severus/Fleur. Fleverus. YES!

Ahem. Wow. As I said, this pair has chemistry that - er - showered down on my biology, after a fashion. Their relationship is amazingly sensual, but I also love how they show their vulnerability to each other. I never did think about Fleur being that lonely, with her girl friends unwilling to be not biased, and boys preferring to droll rather than lend an honest ear. That was startling.

Tonks. Oh dear. I now have the hottest hots for her. I've always adored Tonks, but never felt so much attraction towards her. Her characterisation was fabulous as well!

But Bill and Fleur... that's like a sacred pairing ... so sorry, Tonks. You do get Remus in the end.

~ Natalie

Author's Response: FLAPE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

You must write it.

I demand FLAPERY!

So pleased you liked this. I had horrible issues with it, having started initially for the Rainbow Challenge then stopping when I decided I hated it. But then I liked the peaches bit at the beginning, and after rereading decided to rewrite and add (and add a lot lot more - ooops)

Mmm, for some reason Fleur didn't come over as that hot, but I think that's because I was writing from her POV and so while we were experiencing her thoughts and reactions, it was her reactions to Tonks that we were reading. I've never written smutty Tonks ... not sure I can believe that - ha ha.

Yeah, I had to split them up because Bill and Fleur are just too hot not to meet. If I dared do a Tarentino and Kill Bill (geddit) then I'd reunite them, but alas, I believe half teh flist would rewrite the scenario and Kill Croll.

Thank youuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuu ~Carole~

You Can Write The Book by teh tarik

Rated: 6th-7th Years • Past Featured Story

That's what Colin's pictures do to you - they make strange folks out of the people you know.

Colin has an eye for detail. So does Dennis.
Reviewer: hestiajones Signed
Date: 03/03/13 Title: Chapter 1: it's all in the details

Oh, Nicole. You are clearly a witch. Your writing is so bloody refined that, honestly, I'm seething with envy :) (The smile is supposed to tell you not to be scared.) I've written Dennis after Colin's death, and though the relationship between the two brothers was an important theme of that story, I have to see I'd never been able to look it with such clarity. I just love the way you made those photographs so, so vivid. I can easily picture all of them in my head. And the ending? Unexpected, and all the more beautiful for that. I must go and read the other stories. Thank you for such amazing writing!

Author's Response: Hello Natalie:D TELL ME HOW DO I RESPOND TO THIS REVIEW. HOW SERIOUSLY HOW. First, I'm so incredibly flattered that you dropped by my page and read my other stories asljkd;sdfjhklj THANK YOU SO MUCH OMG. Dennis has become one of my favourite characters (but only after I started writing him :P ) I will certainly have to read your Dennis story. I'm glad you liked the ending! I wanted to have a little shift in tone, and end the story on a bit of hope, rather than just stopping at Colin's death. Dennis is going to be fine, honestly :) And thank YOU for your amazing reviews *hugs* - teh/Nicole

Plum Cake by Ginny Weasley Potter

Rated: 6th-7th Years •
Summary: While the trio is camping after escaping the Ministry, Ron decides to do something special for Hermione on her birthday.

This is Ginny Weasley Potter of Hufflepuff house, writing for the 2013 Great Hall Cotillion.

(Rated high for the profanity)
Reviewer: hestiajones Signed
Date: 02/27/13 Title: Chapter 1: Forgetful Ron

Once upon a time... uh well, actually not too long ago, I read another fic by another author on the same situation: Hangman by littlebird. While the two fics are very different in tone and mood, I think both manage to do justice to this phase of their life, and especially to this day.

You wrote Ron's shifting moods very well, how cheery and positive he can be without the locket and how he can immediately go sour once it's back on. But I thought Harry and Hermione was great, too! And the of plum cake? Genius! Hahaha! I may have to try that out someday.

This is a memorable fic, Pooja. I love it for its genius, but also because you wrote it without sugarcoating anything :)

Author's Response: Really? I wanted to read 'Hangman' but it slipped my mind somehow. I must read that, then. Thank you for letting me know!

Ron'd moods were the most difficult to write, to be quite honest. I needed the thought processes to change abruptly, and yet maintain Ron at a bearable level. I also wanted this to be a little fluffy, and to bring a smile to the reader's face without compromising on the situation at this point. So yes, I am very, very happy that you think it worked well! Harry and Hermione were easier because I didn't have to write much of them, ha, but I'm pleased that you liked them too.

As for the plum cake... :D. I might actually try it at some point too, ha! And, well, nothing in life is ever sugar-coated, is it? We have to take it as it comes. ;) Thank you for the review, Natalie! <33333

The Walnut Tree by Equinox Chick

Rated: 6th-7th Years •
Summary: When Charity Burbage became the Muggle Studies professor, she was looking for a new life, safe in the enclave of Hogwarts.

She certainly wasn't looking for love.

Disclaimer: I am not JK Rowling.

This is Equinox Chick of Hufflepuff writing for the Second Great Hall Cotillion.

Thank you, Natalie, (hestiajones) for an on the hoof beta job.
Reviewer: hestiajones Signed
Date: 02/27/13 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1 ~ Proverbs

Fantastic beginning!!! GAHHH! This is what great fanfic is all about. I was completely thrown off by the beginning; I thought you'd begun with her being abducted by Death Eaters O...O But she isn't!

Loving the characters so far, and I should say, loving to hate Dorinda. How do you manage to write this people who are so easy to despise? Hmm? Methinks you're taking inspiration from my company...

I almost wish I betaed this, just so I could leave all the comments at the parts I loved. Ugh I can't type anymore I'm going to continue reading.

Author's Response: I wish you'd beta'd it and then I'd feel a bit more confident with it.

Yeah, that first part was deliberate. I was trying to recapture some of that fear because the thing people associate with Charity is the manner of her death - sigh. Ahhh, Dorindaaaaaaaaa. Yeah, not very sympathetic, is she? (is she? hmmmmmmmm, wait and seeeeee) And she does have dark hair . . . (Croll runs away before she's hexed)

Thank you for the reviewwwwwwwwwwwwww. ~CON

Reviewer: hestiajones Signed
Date: 02/27/13 Title: Chapter 2: Chapter 2 - Laws

I forgot to mention in the first review that I immediately recognised Oliver's hesitance about domestic abuse from your canon.

I don't know what to say, except ... this is painfully realistic, isn't it? The denial. The cycle of abuse. I hadn't expected the story to move to this direction, and I can't say I'm glad it's did. However, it has, and you have done the topic justice so far.

I am going to read on!

Author's Response: I hope the domestic violence issue works in this because it was something I'd had in mind for a while (well, you know my canon for Oliver) - Ascribing it to Charity came about because I've long had an idea surrounding that proverb. It did feel a very difficult topic to tackle, which was one of the reasons the fic went over the word count, but also I didn't want a neatly tied up 'happy-ever-after' solution to the issue because in RL that doesn't always happen. Jonah did get away with it, sadly, and maybe Marcus isn't as bad as him. Hmmm, basically I hope I haven't tied myself in knots here. I did have to move the story on in the end, so hope it doesn't end up as trite.

Thank you for all the fabulousness that are your reviews :) ~Crollllalalalalalalalalalalanza

Reviewer: hestiajones Signed
Date: 02/27/13 Title: Chapter 3: Chapter 3 - Careers


Okay, first of all, glad Dorinda saw sense in the end. Secondly, holy fricking Prongs! This was a fantastic chapter! You're developing these characters really well against the backdrop of familiar canon event.

And the kiss. Do you remember something I said about chemistry and biology? (well, it should have been bio, not physics ha ha ha)

Author's Response: Thank you very much. I'm glad you don't dislike Dorinda anymore. I did want to show that she had the option that Charity didn't feel she had, basically because I think Dorinda has a much tougher streak in her, and had Charity's advice in her head.

Ah, the kiss - mwahahahahahah. Mind you, Oliver is physic(al).

ta very much, o light of my life. ~Crolllllllll

Reviewer: hestiajones Signed
Date: 02/27/13 Title: Chapter 4: Chapter 4 -Tea and Sympathy

Oh no.

I enjoyed this chapter but goddammit there's only one left and they haven't shagged yet what is the world coming to, eh? EH?

Author's Response: I have recently discovered shame, that's what the world is coming to (as no one else seems to be ;p) Thank youuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuu. ~Crololololololol

Reviewer: hestiajones Signed
Date: 02/27/13 Title: Chapter 5: Chapter 5 - Chasing Dreams

The smut was so hot it killed my internet.


Oh, but the tension building up to it!What can I say? I was about to post this status on the LS "please shag please shag please shag" and then AIM logged off. >.<

This is a really, really great fic, Croll! Yes, it's sad that it is way over the word count limit and you might be taking it off the running, but honestly, you should be proud you wrote this. (I know you are :D Just saying!) I just love the characters, how you presented the Muggle Studies classes and curriculum, the smut, and of course, how these two reach there. It ties in well with your general canon of that era, but it's also a wonderful fic in its own right.

Great work! I shall be reading Lucibeth and Sean soon.


Author's Response: they did shag. You got your wish! Hahahahahahah - still dying at this review after two days. Thank you so much for all your help, reviews and giggling smexiness - hee hee.

I won't take this out of the running, I don;t think, because the sixth story I wrote wouldn't make it out of the starting blocks. (MY PRONGS I'M ON FIRE WITH MY ANALOGIES!). I don;t want Charity to die. I'm wondering if I can write Oliver rushing in at the crucial moment to rescue her from Voldypants and that fricking snake. Just .... how can someone be eaten? NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO!

sigh. Life sucks, as Goyle would say. :( ~Carole~

Just the Two of Us by lucca4

Rated: 6th-7th Years •

Anthony Goldstein doesn't like sex.

When he meets someone desperate to change this, both lives are altered irrevocably.

**A million thank-yous to my beta Soraya, without whom I would have floundered horribly.

This is lucca4 of Gryffindor writing for the 2013 Great Hall Cotillion.
Reviewer: hestiajones Signed
Date: 03/01/13 Title: Chapter 1: Out of Nothing


You always bring refreshing ideas to the table, Ariana! Both characters were dealing with some really serious issues here. I've never pictured either of them in situations such as these, but now I'm leaving with strong impressions. What will happen to them? Will Anthony be cured?

The writing was as lucid and lovely as can be expected from you :) I loved that part where her buttons fall to the ground and Anthony pictures them as eyes. His reluctance versus her appeal were also captured in some truly haunting words.

My only crit is that, when I finished the story, I was left wanting so much more. It was a little rushed for me; the part about Anthony's non-sexuality could have been developed further. I'm sure this has more to do with time constraints and your mounting responsibilities than anything else. I've also grown to expect so much from you, since you're one of the strongest writers here.

All in all, though, this is one of the most intriguing entries of this challenge. Good luck, my goddess, and keep writing!

Author's Response: Natalie! Thank you so much for reviewing :). I am so glad that you liked this story. The premise was a little strange for me to figure out how to write at first, especially Anthony's characterization. I do wish that I had developed that further; I was pushed for time on the first chapter, but not so much on the second chapter…I think I often times know the fully-fleshed out story in my head and forget that readers don't know it. Thank you again for the review! It was positively lovely to hear from you :) xx Ariana

A Stolen Kiss by Ginny Weasley Potter

Rated: 3rd-5th Years •
Summary: Cedric Diggory is dead.

After the tragic end of the Triwizard Tournament, Penelope Clearwater reminisces on a few hidden moments with Cedric, that no-one knew they'd shared.

This is Ginny Weasley Potter of Hufflepuff house, writing Penelope and Cedric for the Great Hall Cotillion.
Reviewer: hestiajones Signed
Date: 02/27/13 Title: Chapter 1: Cedric and Penelope

Namaste ji!

Now that my little confusion about Clearwater's years at Hogwarts has been cleared up, I can review!

I was intrigued by the pairing, which is why I chose this one over the Romione. I'll be reading that next. There are so many moments about this fic I liked: Cedric's obvious embarrassment at entering an already occupied bathroom (with a girl inside it!); Myrtle's anticipation of watching Cedric bathe (a nice little nod to canon ;)). The gradual demise of her relationship with Percy was also properly dealt with. I've always wondered how it went wrong, although it's not very difficult to imagine, is it? Percy went a bit power hungry post-Hogwarts, and it's easy to believe the distance you've created her.

What I liked was that you chose Penelope to break it off, not Percy. I'd always imagined it'd be Percy. But I like this much better. He was detaching himself without being aware of it, taking her for granted, and she chose to cut the tie altogether. NICE!

I felt bad for her, though. Although it's obvious that she rushed into it - in a way - from her POV, I can understand why she did it. She didn't choose the best moment, but it had been building up for long, what with the lack of love and with Cedric being a nice gentleman, as always. And now, I feel sad he had to die :( I mean, reading what you said about his ambitions for the future just made it all the more heartbreaking. All those dreams just vanishing. -sob- I adored the part about Muggle Studies, though. I can easily picture him taking up the subject :D

I think of this fic not as a romance one, but a sort of character study; what I carried away is Penelope's angst, and Cedric's loveliness. Would they have made a good couple? Yes. Your portrayal of them shows their relationship could have been healthy. Alas! Cho just had to butt in.

Keep writing, and good luck with the challenge, behn.


Author's Response: Nat! Namastey! :D

Haha, yes, personally, this ship was harder to write than the Ronmione because Ronmione is established, with canon support, while here, according to canon, both Cedric and Penelope were with different people and it was an actual challenge to cook up a plot for this and actually make it plausible. The Ronmione, on the other hand, was like a missing moment, and it was enjoyable, more than anything (which is why I chose that in the middle of my exams).

I quite enjoyed writing Cedric. He's a fun fellow to write, and carving out faults in him was awesome, ha! Tbh, I enjoyed writing the bathroom scene. :) As for the Percy/Penelope problem, I've been the unfortunate witness to a lot of gradual relationship deaths, and this just felt like the right way that they would have broken up (I have written a story where the reason for the split is that Percy fell in love with Audrey while Penelope was on the run from the Ministry, but this was more plausible).

I needed Penelope to break off the relationship in this, ha, because I was in a hurry to get her to Cedric. That part was a product of my frustration while writing this. I wanted so badly for the fic to move quicker, that I just got Penelope to split with Percy :D.

She rushed into it because I rushed her into it :p. I'm glad that it took a natural shape, though, ha! It would be incredible awkward otherwise. I think the credit goes to my beta, Ari, for her wonderful way with helping me sort all of this out. :) Cedric is annoying when he's a gentleman, but I felt terrible that he died too. I figured he'd have been ambitious, though, he seemed like quite a person. I wish JKR hadn't killed him now. Sigh.

I find that I churn out a lot of angst and unrequited love these days. Probably because I've looked at too many people too closely. But I am really pleased that the fic resembled something -- a character study, if not a romance. And I wish Cho hadn't come at all. She ALWAYS ruins things for everyone.

I am so honoured that you liked the fic. Thank you for stopping by, behna! :) <3