Hello! *waves* I'm a poor uni student finding ways to amuse herself when I should be writing up my Physics notes (ugh!). I am also the leader of two groups over on the Beta Boards.
Poetry Anyone? I am the resident Poet Laureate over on the Beta Boards as leader of this fun little group. We have monthly challenges all with a Harry Potter twist. You can also find solid and comprehensive critique for any poems and help for all your archive-based concerns.
Susan Bones Book Club. I am the co-leader of this group along with hestiajones. Each month the SBBC chooses two to three fics from the archives to discuss. We also have monthly drabble activities and an incredibly lively chat thread. We accept new members at all times so if your interested go and take a look. If you have any questions or concerns then don't hesitate to PM me or hestiajones.
Summary: With Hannah, things always go to yellow.
Lori, how did I miss this beautiful, beautiful fic? In so few words you've built up an entire character. I feel like I know Hannah. You expose her with every new word - she unfolds with each new paragraph until we have this whole human being who feels so very familiar and yet new at the same time. I love the way you developed the Hannah/Neville relationship, too. Again, in so few words you made their story fully formed and... beautiful. I can't think of any other way to describe it.
Author's Response: Thanks so much, Julia. I honestly thought it would be longer, and in the end, it wasn't even long enough to be considered for the challenge that prompted it. But even though its more like an extended drabble, the length felt right to me. I'm so glad you were able to enjoy/appreciate it. Thanks, as always for the review, friend. :)
Summary: A series of vignettes taken from Sirius' mind when he is in Azkaban, and the threads that hold them together.Expanded from a drabble written for an SBBC Challenge.
OH! I am so glad you've expanded this! I remember loving the original drabble, which so conveyed the melancholy of the song. You've definitely kept that same tone, here. The phrase, the kind of long time where you forget to count the number of nights and days that have died, really jumps out at me and you mirror that throughout the fic because you've caught that endlessness and despair those kept in Azkaban must feel. And the memories interspersed make my heart ache so much... gah. I don't know why you made that ridiculous LS status about this fic. It's excellent. Stop being a silly billy.
Author's Response: Oh that ridiculous status! I was quite in a foul mood and being my ruthlessly ridiculous self and was also certain this wouldn't be received well by many as it is plotless lol. I'm thrilled you read and liked this, as I knew you adored the original and I was wondering what you'd think of the expanded version :) ThankE lots for the review!
Summary: Seven months after leaving Hogwarts, James Potter is fighting for the Order of the Phoenix. When Lily Evans joins the resistance, his life is turned upside down. He'd proposed, after all, and she had said no. How could they work together now, after so much history together? Or could they find another chance amidst the war?
Oh I love this first chapter, Gina! The premise is interesting and different, and I do always love the way you write J/L. I'm not sure how you do it but it always feels refreshing and new! I can't wait to read the other two chapters you've got up. My eyes are drooping and it's 3am so sorry for this short and possibly incoherent review but I really enjoyed this and will read the next two chapters tomorrow.
Author's Response: Julia! Omg, thank you so much! I'm thrilled you came by-J/L fix? ;) I'm also glad you're finding it interesting and different because, well, I do write these two a lot, lol. I hope you enjoy the rest. Thank you so much for the review!! ~Gina :)
Your writing is beautiful. You have such a command over words and characters. Like you captured Merope in 'Growth' I feel like you have truly captured George in this. I have a lot of trouble reading fics which deal with death and grief because while I find them compelling for various reasons (and write them myself) I find myself disappointed half the time because they can be so trite and forced. This fic made my heart ache with its authenticity. This line in particular made me pause at its succinct description of the guilt that comes to those who are left behind: I might have clapped my palm over his mouth â€“ I might have forced that last breath back in.
Author's Response: Julia, that's such an amazing compliment I don't even T_T (I'm not really sad, just a little teary at all the praise :P ) It really means a lot, coming from you; I really love /your/ writing, especially since coming across that zombie fic of yours :)
And I know what you mean about reading grief and character death fics. Things like these are not always handled sensitively enough and there's always the potential for things to get a bit overly sentimental and dramatic. I'm so glad you enjoyed this and did not find it trite, forced, or sentimental :D Thanks again *hugs*
Wow. I love Fred's voice in this. The detached beginning is a perfect way to start before going back to his earthly experiences. As I said, I love Fred's voice because it feels so right. There is something quite matter of fact about it but light, which is odd because we know what is coming, we know he is already dead - the whole chapter is weighted by this knowledge and yet we have Fred talking about one of his and George's many rebellious moments as if he's still there and as if there is the possibility for more mischief.
And then the ending. The way you retell the scene that we see in the book from Harry's perspective is just so so poignant. You retain that same voice while tying it back to the otherworldly beginning of the chapter. I love the way you structured it and I love the final two lines.
I am being very inarticulate tonight, sorry.
This fic is amazing.
Author's Response: Aww...thanks so much for another absolutely lovely review! aljsdhljafshll I'm probably going to get all silly and teary again kjfa;slkjgphoi[ogjm/....Fred is giving me a bit of grief to write, and I'm so so glad you thought his voice was consistent throughout all the structural mayhem of this chapter :) I'm actually planning to rewrite this chapter to make it a little more consistent (stylistically and in terms of narrative voice) with Chapter 4, which is now in the queue :D
But thank you once again for your two utterly wonderful and completely unexpected reviews!
Summary: 'Sometimes I catch a glimpse of myself in a mirror or a window, and I do not recognise the face staring back. Even the eyes, which never truly change, seem dulled in comparison to what they once were.
It is not age that dulled them but you, and him, and her, and the myriad of dreams that came to nothing.'
Albus Dumbledore dwells on his life, and love, and the Hogwarts' students he shaped.
This story is for Natalie (hestiajones) because it is her birthday and she is a fantastic friend. Have a good one, my love.
Disclaimer: I'm not JK Rowling. I think that's obvious.
Thank you very much, Kara (Karaley Dargen) for beta'ing this story and helping me rethink bits. :)
I don't know how to review this. Um, well, this is brilliant, Carole. Dumbledore is one of the hardest characters to write - he's up there with Luna ha! But this is just brilliant. I think you caught his voice so well. I believed I was reading his thoughts, I could hear his voice so clearly in my mind, so I think that means you were on point. The way you structured this was also very creative. I loved the way you wove his thoughts directed at Gellert with the Sorting of various characters.
There were so many breath-catching moments. The way you had him use Gellert's line on Snape made me shiver. And the scene where the Marauder's demand to join the Order gave me chills. Minerva approaching him to become an Animagus... and, of course, the ending was also striking in such a gentle way: But in essence he is Lily. It made me tear up, I must admit.
Gah. I'm just sitting her staring at the screen because I'm in complete awe. Carole, you are an amazing writer. Never stop.
Author's Response: Thank you so much for the lovely review; it means a lot.
I have to give credit to Kara because she suggested that I add a Snape scene (I think she's obsessed with him - hee hee) and once I picked the one, I then went back and added the Gellert line, and also tried to reinforce the parallels between Dumbledore and Snape.
The last line had me tearing up a little as well. I so wanted it to end positively, but that's also a little sad because she's not there to see her son enjoying Hogwarts :( - Oh I'm all sad now.
Thank you, once again ~Carole~
Summary: It was true that Daphne and Lee had met at a most inappropriate time, but they had found love, lust and the glimmerings of a life together.
But the power of persuasion should never be underestimated. When they meet again, years later, his indifference cuts to her core. Can the past ever truly be recaptured?
This story is a present for Julia (the opaleye) because she is amazingly talented and has inspired me in so many ways. It is also her brthday.
Disclaimer: I am not JK Rowling.
I am not Jane Austen.
I am not Sporty, Scary, Baby, Ginger or Posh.
I LOVE this version of the Cobb, and the twist on Daphne's character in that she isn't the one to care for Demelza after she falls like Anne but the one to save her from falling. I'm not trying to diminish Anne's role but I thought this fit Daphne so much better than if you followed the book. So basically, yeah, I loved it!
I know I've mentioned this in my previous reviews but I am still so enthralled by your portrayal of life during Deathly Hallows, both outside of Hogwarts before Daphne goes back to school and now that she is back. Tracey is interesting, and I am glad that Daphne is not the only Slytherin here who is uncomfortable with the Carrow regime. The bitchiness between Pansy and Daphne and Tracey is great, as is the way they cannot trust Millicent. It is all very Slytherin with the distrust and everyone out for themselves. Draco's little appearance is also intriguing and I loved reading some interaction between him and Daphne given that they're going to end up siblings-in-law.
The Potterwatch storyline is so good, too. I just love the way you are developing Daphne as a character. She is so fab! Not only does she want to listen to Lee, but she also needs to know what is really happening outside of Hogwarts. Your portrayal of Parvati and Padma, although brief, was quite powerful because we see the distrust and almost hatred on Parvati's part towards Daphne just because she is a Slytherin. It all felt so right. Your missing moments are always spot on, Carole. Guh.
Back to the bowtruckles, you have made me just as frustrated as I get with Wentworth and Anne. GOD LEE THE WOMAN YOU LOVE IS BLEEDING WHAT ARE YOU DOING. Honestly, I cannot WAIT to read more of this story. I am in such an Austen mood at the moment and this is satiating my needs quite nicely. Thank you, thank you, thank you for this perfect birthday gift.
Also, I have to add that I am so glad Astoria is not as grating as Mary. You may be taking inspiration from Persuasion but all your characters are completely their own. It's truly wonderful.
Author's Response: Yay! Glad you like my version of the Cobb. Mmm, I quickly realised that I couldn't write Daphne too similar to Anne, partly because it's a different era, but also Daphne is a Slytherin and I think she has a bit more go about her than Anne did in certain situations. I also desperately wanted Daphne to take to the air and fly - ha!
Thank you so much for this lovely review. I really should get on and finish the rest of the story but keep getting distracted by that dem Cotillion and Scorpius - ooops. ~Carole~
I just realised I never reviewed this chapter.
Guh. This chapter is sizzling. I just love them so much. Awwwwwww.
Okay. Now that I have calmed down, I have to say that I am loving the way you are using the original story but making it your own at the same time. The characters are themselves, and I just love the way you are building the relationship between Daphne and Lee. Are you trying to add a new OTP to my plethora of feels? Because you're succeeding.
Author's Response: sizzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzle
heh heh heh - Glad you liked that bit, alas, true love (and smut) can never run smooth in the Potterverse, Austenverse or Croll land, so there are a few more chapters to go.
This has been a lot of fun to write, but the main difficulty is that no one is quite like Anne, so I've had to change that character quite a bit.
Really happy you're enjoying this. ~Carole~
Oooh the way you are weaving in the time they're living in is great and rings so true. The censorship on the radio, Daphne's naivetĂ©, the attack at the wedding and Lee's hesitation at telling Daphne what he knows... Carole, you really know how to create such a rich and full story. I love it.
Author's Response: Thank youuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuu
What is this perfection? I'm crying with giggles here because this is just fabulous. As soon as I read the opening paragraph I couldn't help but grin. Thank you, thank you, thank you for writing this. I love that you have brought in Thalia as the ghastly older sister, and I cannot wait to see how Lee is introduced at the Malfoy estate.
Also... Bath!!! Squeeeeeee.
This really is the icing on the cake for me after such a wonderful birthday.
Author's Response: Yayayayayayayayayayayay. Oh, I nearly changed Bath to something else, so I'm very pleased I didn't because I suddenly had ideas and more ideas based on my visit last year - mwahahahaha.
I will tell you that my main trouble here has been characterising Daphne and it wasn't working for a while because I was trying to make her the same as Anne. So she's not very Anne like (and Astoria isn't much like Mary or I'd have punched her) .
Thank you for reviewing and I'm glad you're enjoying it so far. eeep ~Croll~
Oh my god I love Lee. And arghhhh I am fangirling this fic already. HOW DO YOU DO IT.
I really loved the scene with the few Slytherins all sitting in a row at Dumbledore's funeral, especially Theo and Daphne being there against their families wishes and the small flashback to Daphne's meeting with Dumbledore *sniffs*
Eeeeeee I cannot wait for the next chapter. This is amazing! Thank you, thank you, thank you!
Author's Response: I love Lee as welllllllllllll !!!!!!! But I think I love Daphne more ... and Scorpius .... mwahahahahah.
I have written 4 chapters, plus the prologue, and anticipate it will be around 8 in all ... I hope ... but I'm hopeless at sticking to plans. I'm rather hoping Jane Austen's book will keep me on track - heh heh. She was a bloody genius!
Thank you for reviewing. Hope you like the rest of it. ~Croll~
So somehow I missed this chapter! Anyway, I'm here now.
First, Byron is so horrifically accurate! I already love to loathe him haha. The scene with the balloon made me cackle with glee and twiddle my fingers maliciously. I hope he gets his comeuppance for being such a sleazy snob. Muahahaha!
I think one of my favourite parts of this chapter was the breakfast scene. I really enjoyed Draco's presence and the stiff dislike between him and Daphne is great. I like that you've diverged from Persuasion in that instance because it feels more natural than having them pally like Charles and Anne. I had to snigger at the final few lines in that scene, too. You know.
Anthony is lovely. I love the way you had him staying at home to keep Demelza company... great planning :D The fair was also a wonderful idea and so enjoyable to read - it was a good catalyst for events to come, I think. I also kind of adore Wilfred and Nicola. Actually, there is nothing 'kind of' about that. I love them.
Oh sparks are flying again with Lee and Daphne! I loved Wilfred's remark about the House rivalry being alive and well in the Potter generation. There was a certain bitterness in that exchange that was such a contrast to the otherwise magic of the fair. It played out so well. You really are a master at weaving a story, Carole. And your characters just jump off the screen and into my head. The tension and awkwardness between Lee and Daphne is utterly gripping.
Every chapter of this fic is delightful, Carole, but I had so much fun reading this.
Author's Response: PUNCHES AIR! Yes! You liked my favourite exchange of the whole story. I've been giggling to myself over Draco's line - hahahahaha and haven't shared it with anyone. Draco just rocks! Mmm, I had to deviate from the book with the antipathy, partly because I do like Astoria far too much, but also because Draco was at H/W with Daphne so it seemed far more likely that they'd dislike each other given 'my' canon of Daphne not being involved in the detentions etc.
Glad you liked Wilfred's remark. I do think rivalries at H/W were more intense when Harry and Draco were at Hogwarts, but several years above them, it could well have been easier, once the first war was over. Wilfred hates to see it carrying on. he's very much a pacifier, in my mind.
Thank you for the reviewwwwww ~Crolalalanza
Ahhhh I absolutely love this backstory with Tracey. But now I am worried about Kevin because... I shan't put a spoiler in here since it seems many people haven't read the magnificence of Persuasion.
Also, Horace at the beginning was deliciously hideous. I love the way you have transferred Mary's ridiculous hypochondria onto him.
Author's Response: EEEP - just realised that I put the wrong name there. It's HECTOR, not Horace - hahahahah (I have altered now). Glad you like the back story with Tracey because she's going to feature a lot more as you can probably deduce as you know the book so well. :D Thank you for the reviewwwwwww. ~Carole~
Summary: For years, Remus Lupin found comfort in the arms of Rosmerta Richardson...until the day he no longer needed her consolation.
This is Gmariam writing for the Great Hall Cotillion Challenge of 2013.
This is lovely, Gina. Sad, of course, and a little bit heartbreaking, but lovely. The way you built up their friendship (or their relationship, rather) was really well done. I believed in them. It's like a series of missing moments that could fit right into canon.
And ending on that hopeful note at the end made it even more poignant.
Author's Response: Thank you so much for reading this, Julia! And for the lovely review. I'm so glad you believed in them, that means I wrote something right, at least, lol. Yes, it's sad, but there is that bit of hope at the end. Rosmerta really is happy for him, and she does find someone. Maybe I'll make a claim on it, lol. I'm thrilled it fit into canon so well. Thank you so much, I really appreciate it!! ~Gina :)
Something has changed in Merope Gaunt, a thrumming of insect wings, a pulse kickstarting to life.
Merope is alone. Penniless, undernourished and pregnant - these are the last three trimesters of her life.
This is amazing. I cannot believe you only had one other review. It is dark, of course, but the voice you captured, the structure, the way it is both compelling and disturbing at the same time - these all add up to something brilliant. I particularly loved the structure, the way you separated it into the stages of pregnancy. I've read a number of Merope fics, all fantastic and moving, but there is something different about yours. Perhaps it is the way you built up Merope's character. I pity her but unlike other fics, I don't like her. I think you gave a new take on her and I really enjoyed that. Or perhaps it is because you didn't focus on the relationship between Tom and Merope but only showed the end. I just really think the way you chose to structure the fic, the narrative voice you chose, and the characterisation are all brilliant. Sorry to repeat myself.
Keep up the great writing. I can't wait to read more from you.
Author's Response: Hello Julia :) Gah! What an amazing surprise review! I certainly wasn't expecting any more reviews for this story; perhaps the subject matter wasn't too appealing to many readers. Oh, I'm so glad you liked the structure and characterisation! This is indeed supposed to be a very character-focused fic; I did have some trouble portraying Merope, and I sort of felt like wasn't writing her with sufficient empathy and all. And I wanted to write Merope without all the trauma and unrequited love and her failed marriage - just as herself, alone and pregnant in the world. I'm glad this turned out well! Gah, you've just heaped ALL THE LOVELY COMPLIMENTS on me :DDDD Thank you so much for your wonderful review again! - teh
Summary: Remus Lupin had no expectations when he came to Hogwarts to teach. He did not expect to stay on staff past the first full moon yet alone the entire school year. He certainly did not expect to fall for the Muggle Studies professorâ€¦nor did he anticipate how much one student, one prisoner, and one night would change the life he had almost had with her.
This is Gmariam of Ravenclaw writing for EquinoxChick's birthday. HAPPY BIRTHDAY, CAROLE!
Finally I am able to start this fic. Sorry for taking so long, Gina!
This is a wonderful start. I love how warm Charity is. She feels so fleshed out already, especially for someone we don't get to know too well in canon. It comes across particularly well during her brief conversation with Snape - the contrast between his coldness and bitterness and her kind concern. Also, the drinking scene at the end was really lovely. It made me smile. I know that this story cannot have a wholly happy ending in canon but it is compelling all the same and doesn't feel all doom and gloom. It's very... warm.
I loved this first chapter, Gina. I look forward to reading the rest. What a wonderful gift for Carole, too!
Author's Response: Julia! Zomg! Thank you so much for reading this! And thank you for the oh-so-lovely review! Wow! I'm so glad you enjoyed the beginning. It's not much but it's been fun exploring Remus's life during PoA and creating my own Charity to get on with. I hope you enjoy the rest. Thank you again!!! ~Gina :)
Fall??? What on earth would Carole say... Ah hahaha just read her review ;) In all seriousness, I love the way you are building up their relationship with lovely interactions such as this. Also, Rosmerta heheheh.
Author's Response: Yes, Rosmerta - hee hee. And I was trying to build things so I'm glad that came across. I left fall in there just to get a rise from Carole, of course. ;) Thank you so much for the review! I hope you enjoy the rest! ~Gina :)
Oh that was intense! I thought you portrayed Remus's sense of anger, guilt and betrayal so well! My heart ached for him. Poor Remus. Charity was great too. I was cheering her on as she talked Remus back into his rooms ( and bed muahaha). Her firmness was perfect to calm Remus. And oh la la what an ending ;) Can't wait to read more. This is a great holiday read for the Easter break!
Author's Response: Thank you so much Julia! I thought it was fairly intense at times too so I'm glad it came through. Glad you liked how it ended as well. ;) I do feel so bad for Remus because being at Hogwarts at the same time Sirius was breaking must have really brought so many things to the surface that we don't see in the book - we literally just get looks and twitches. So it's been interesting to explore his reactions. Thanks again for reading, I really appreciate the reviews! ~Gina :)
On the day that Teddy Lupin begins his new life with Victoire Weasley, his bride, Lily Potter's heart breaks.
Oh I think you captured the tragedy of unrequited love so well, Jess. My heart went out to both Lily and Teddy. I'm curious if this fits into the canon of any of your other fics.
I really loved this, Jess :3
I think we've all been there, and we've all known how much it sucks to love someone who is in like with you. :/ It was an impossible situation for both of them. As for other canon, no this doesn't particularly fit with any other story canon of mine, as Teddy is 28 in this and not dead. (yay) Thanks for stopping in. :DDDD
Summary: â€śWelcome,â€ť said the woman with the wild pink hair, â€śto your first Magical Cookery class at Hogwarts.â€ťTeddy Lupin has signed up for the mysterious new teacher's cooking classes. But soon, he finds out this woman is no stranger to his life.This fic is a birthday present for the absolutely awe-mazing Equinox Chick/Croll.
Hahahahaha sounds like someone we know...